Manaphione123's fakemon

[Manaphione123]

Hi! I've created a whole lot of fakemon and I'm showing you the best, keep in mind that I don't shade very well and I don't always colour so don't crit me about that. Oh and please only give constructive crit. Please check back to this post for any additions as I wont post them anywhere else. Here they are.

This is a Jynx evo, (for my buddy mangaeyes ) sorry about the hair colour, my crayon was a bit wierd.

The one on the left is a tropius prevo and the one on the left is a shroomish alternate evo.

The one on the left is a rival for kangaskhan and the one on the left is a rival for farfetch'd. Sorry that they're a little bad, I did them ages ago and on the back there are some words and stuff.

 

[mangaeyes]

Hhhmmm...can I offer some advice...

Sketch very lightly your idea. Give it some thought and change bits.
Use a thin black pen to outline all pencil lines and rub out the pencil lines. Use a thicker black pen for the outline of the whole picture. When using colours (if your not shading) press as hard as you can with the pencil without breaking it and try to get all the pencil strokes in the same direction.

The Tropius prevo looks like a chibi Tropius like many of my prevos. I suggest trying evos and your own ideas before prevos. The Shroomish evo is a really good idea and has a nice design. I think the Jynx evo is good lol. The heart is a pretty cool touch.

Keep on practicing I can't wait to see more.

 

[Manaphione123]

Thanks for the cc there mangaeyes, yes I think I will do black outlines. Anyways, I'm puttig some more pics so be sure to check them out in a sec.

 

[kirby8933083]

Yay! Art to comment on! ~

First of all, if you will color your picture, I noticed you said you colored with a crayon. ("..my crayon was a bit weird.) May I suggest you invest in a box of colored pencils instead.
Jynx evo, not bad, looks like a taller Jynx to me though. Try to add more details on it to differentiate it from Jynx. Maybe add a more detailed, frilled girly skirt would be nice.
I sort of see where you were going with the Shroomish alternate evo, and may I ask if it was going to be a female alternate evo. B/e this idea might work if it was that way. Sort of like a mushroom fairy. So with that, a girly appearance might be nice.
Tropius pre-evo, the eyes don't look that good to me. If I were you, I'd keep it more like the original Tropius's eyes.
Your fakemon, I like very much. The Koala I love, plus that it will be a Kangaskhan rival, I love it! If you could color it, that would be excellent.
The Kiwi bird idea, adorable picture of a Kiwi bird, just it doesn't look like a pokemon. So work on that idea and evolve it into a more detailed pokemon that had it's specific characteristics.
Hope to see more here, especially if you will put up that colored Koala fakemon, I'd definitely be checking up on this thread. ^_^

 

[SamuraiDragon1]

I like the colored ones morebut I agree with kirby, you should get colored pencils instead of crayons. I can't wait to see more Fakemon from you.

 

[AEROBLASTER]

Personally, I think that the Jynx evo could use quite a bit of change. It looks to plain and similar to Jynx to be an evolution. As for the Tropius prevo, I think it's cute but I don't care for the coloring. The Shroomish Alt. evo looks pretty weird since it's so strangely shaped. It looks too thin an too fat in different places.

 

[The Tail]

The Jynx one is done well. What bothers me about it though is the outlines look blurry, and the arms a WAY too skinny.

 

[Manaphione123]

Yay! Art to comment on! ~

First of all, if you will color your picture, I noticed you said you colored with a crayon. ("..my crayon was a bit weird.) May I suggest you invest in a box of colored pencils instead.
Jynx evo, not bad, looks like a taller Jynx to me though. Try to add more details on it to differentiate it from Jynx. Maybe add a more detailed, frilled girly skirt would be nice.
I sort of see where you were going with the Shroomish alternate evo, and may I ask if it was going to be a female alternate evo. B/e this idea might work if it was that way. Sort of like a mushroom fairy. So with that, a girly appearance might be nice.
Tropius pre-evo, the eyes don't look that good to me. If I were you, I'd keep it more like the original Tropius's eyes.
Your fakemon, I like very much. The Koala I love, plus that it will be a Kangaskhan rival, I love it! If you could color it, that would be excellent.
The Kiwi bird idea, adorable picture of a Kiwi bird, just it doesn't look like a pokemon. So work on that idea and evolve it into a more detailed pokemon that had it's specific characteristics.
Hope to see more here, especially if you will put up that colored Koala fakemon, I'd definitely be checking up on this thread. ^_^

Thanks for that! You were spot on with the shroomish evo, it's exactly that! Also that comment about the crayons, I call coloured pencils crayons. Sorry if that confused you. Sorry I have not posted any pictures in a while but Photobucket isn't letting me! *cries*