Mario and Luigi-bros. attacks

[Lotad]

This is a comic that has bros. attacks I made up
Bros. Attacks
Crash.bros>http://img258.imageshack.us/my.php?image=mlcomic14de.png
*Crash Bros.advance http://img235.imageshack.us/full.php?image=mlcomic40fl.png
Spark-pressure bros. http://img491.imageshack.us/full.php?image=mlcomic23go.png
*Deep fry Bros. http://img368.imageshack.us/full.php?image=mlcomic33ir.png

goomba.Bros.mini shorts
*#1- http://img202.imageshack.us/full.php?image=goombarioandgoombiji10qh.png
*#2- http://img226.imageshack.us/full.php?image=goombarioandgoombiji25tq.png


Plot comics:
*#1http://img361.imageshack.us/my.php?image=mlscomic14rc.png

*:click on picture to make readable
Fan Stuff:
Sadly,none



mario and luigi sprites were made by rogultgot

 

[Flygon]

'Tis normal, not a great comic, but I say your humor needs a bit of work. But the spriting was good, and the quality of the speech bubbles were fairly easy to read. Nice work!

 

[Pikachuboy]

It is close to ultra awesome which I put, LL, it is quite a good comic, like what Flygon says it needs more work on humor!

 

[Lotad]

new bros.attack!
spark-pressure bros>http://img491.imageshack.us/full.php?image=mlcomic23go.png
I made the mini mario hammer sprites from the original mini-mario sprite

 

[Flygon]

Goombas! Get 'ya grilled Goombas! Only 20 of 'ye finest coins!
You think someone would pay for a grilled lotad? Anyway, this comic is better! Improved a notch on your humor, you have! Good luck in your future!

 

[Pikachuboy]

Great! Your comic is improving! Humor needs a bit more practice, wish you the best!

 

[Lotad]

I made a mini short about Goomba versions of mario and luigi.I personally think its pretty funny
http://img202.imageshack.us/full.php?image=goombarioandgoombiji10qh.png
click on the picture to make it readable

 

[Flygon]

That one was MUCH funnier than your earlier works. Nice job!

 

[Pikachuboy]

Yeah! It's funnier now!

 

[Lotad]

new bros attack!
deep fry Bros. http://img368.imageshack.us/full.php?image=mlcomic33ir.png
once again,click to make readable
I made an effort to be humorus in the last 2 panels

 

[Flygon]

Well, you did a good job of being funny!

 

[Lotad]

new goombario and goombiji mini short!
http://img226.imageshack.us/full.php?image=goombarioandgoombiji25tq.png
click to make readable

 

[Lotad]

sorry about the double post,but I have another Bros.attack that I'm dying to post.
CrashBros.Advance: http://img235.imageshack.us/full.php?image=mlcomic40fl.png
once again, click it to make it readable

 

[Flygon]

Advice- Make the text inside first, then make a speech bubble around it. Keep it up, and this could get some stars!

 

[Hydroswirl]

For some reason I'm hooked to this comic, I really like the idea (obsessive Mario fan here). The only criticism would be to make your first post (where you post everything) more organized, it's frankly very sloppy and eye distracting. Try using sentences, capitals, and all the sort. But nontheless, it's very good.

 

[Controller of Flames]

Congrats, none of you fans (except for Flygon and Hydroswirl) have done hardly anything to help improve this comic...

Filling in the textboxes white should help everyone read, sometimes I can't tell what order they go in. The humor is okay, but I can see this becoming a good cmc. However you can't continue to just have Mario and Luigi show off moves, build a good plot as well.

 

[Lotad]

I have diffuculty with plots but I think I might try to think of a plot.Even when I do make a plot I'll still make ocasional Bros.Attacks and goombario and goombiji mini shorts,but right now I don't really want a plot,because I suck at plots and I have diffuculty keeping on track.
But i'll take everyones critizizm and try to make a plot

 

[Eric]

You don't seem to have a plot or point in the comic. All you are doing is showing attacks that they do in the game? What the thing that is supposed to keep my attention? Is there anything? I don't see it.

Also your text boxes need work. Look at Reporterz textboxes, not the best but that's a better way to do it

 

[Lotad]

The attacks I show are ones I made up and made by myself from sprites I have aquired from a website.I am currently working on a plot,cannot do white textboxes because my computer wont let me for some reason.

 

[Flygon]

Advice- Make the text, then make a text box around it. Then make a red (or blue, or some other colour, I just like to use red), box and drag the text box on the square. Turn transparency OFF for now. Next, take that colour you used for the box, and use the bucket tool to fill in the white spots OUTSIDE of the speech bubble. Then set secondary colour to the colour you used, and turn transparency ON. Select the speech bubble and- voila! You've got a white text box!