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Marrilchu's life (Improved)

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SoulGuardian

PICHU ROXORZ!
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Davis the Gamer

Banned
LMAO
Wait, no. This is basicly funny but in the sence that it's crappily done.

Right, we got 3 pokemon sprites. Notice the sprites have only one pose. So a kicking sprite is out of the question. Not only that, but they are boring pokemon mixes. Sorry, but no. That's not how it's done in the real world buddy. Once you get out there on teh internets, everything changes. EXPECIALY spriting. You'll learn that mixing is NOT a form of real spriting.

Moving right along, the backrounds & props. Horible made 2 tone backrounds, with bad eye poppings. And don't even get me started on the vortex. I could write a paragraph on how wrong that is.

and if this was an attept at humor, sorry again, but last time I checked, humor was supposed to be FUNNY. F-U-N-N-Y. Eye popping is not funny, because when a person loses an eye due to eye popping, that's no good.

If any of you think this is "improved" like the title says. Peppy Hare says

Peppy Hare said:
BE CAREFUL, IT'S A TRAP!
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ForeverFlame

ForeverFlame

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Uhhh...
People really need to learn about a spriting trick. It's called EXPRESSIONS. Eye-Popping is an official non-EXPRESSION. A super-dropped jaw isn't an EXPRESSION either. An angry and confused face, or a (?) Bubble is an EXPRESSION.

The speechbubbles are pretty poor, and the ball is a recolored red orb. You can still see some red parts in it, too.
Two-tone backrounds are ONLY good if there's a heck lot of speechbubbles, and sadly the top amount of bubbles in your comic is 3.

I'll give it 5/10.
I took points off because:
Bad speechbubbles.
Badly recolored ball.
Badly-made vortex.
No EXPRESSION.
No humor.
 
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blueguy

used Metronome!
I didn't see the original, so if this has improved it's either that it was REALLY terrible before, or it's better by an insignificant figure (ooh, science is superfun!). In all seriousness, this comic is very unattractive. The colors really hurt my eyes, and the sprites are poorly done. What I reccomend is using a sprited background from a game. I think there's a site called bghq that was good backgrounds... or you could go to Spriter's Resource (though I think it's down...).
 
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SoulGuardian

PICHU ROXORZ!
ForeverFlame said:
Uhhh...
People really need to learn about a spriting trick. It's called EXPRESSIONS. Eye-Popping is an official non-EXPRESSION. A super-dropped jaw isn't an EXPRESSION either. An angry and confused face, or a (?) Bubble is an EXPRESSION.

The speechbubbles are pretty poor, and the ball is a recolored red orb. You can still see some red parts in it, too.
Two-tone backrounds are ONLY good if there's a heck lot of speechbubbles, and sadly the top amount of bubbles in your comic is 3.

I'll give it 5/10.
I took points off because:
Bad speechbubbles.
Badly recolored ball.
Badly-made vortex.
No EXPRESSION.
No humor.
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Thanks for the advice. BTW, It is not a recoloured red orb! It is a Big Pearl! (Sheesh...)
 
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SoulGuardian

PICHU ROXORZ!
Sorry for DP but Episode 2 is up!
 
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SoulGuardian

PICHU ROXORZ!
kinglerking said:
Marrilchu is more of an Idiot then he was in the original

Too bad you changed the race plot though :(
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Heh heh...I know....
Sorry for changing the race plot.....:(
 
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SoulGuardian

PICHU ROXORZ!
I have to DP so you all know episode 3 is up.
 
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Mastercougar

The Infinite Fire
Here's one thing I gotta tell you: A LINE IS NOT A TEXTBOX TAIL!

See, the thing about textbox tails is that to look really natural, they need to be long white triangles, pointing to a character. Thin (or thick) black lines really don't work at all, and on dark backgrounds, it's as if they're not there at all.

And I dunno what FF is talking about. I think the pearl looks just fine.
 
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SoulGuardian

PICHU ROXORZ!
Mastercougar said:
Here's one thing I gotta tell you: A LINE IS NOT A TEXTBOX TAIL!

See, the thing about textbox tails is that to look really natural, they need to be long white triangles, pointing to a character. Thin (or thick) black lines really don't work at all, and on dark backgrounds, it's as if they're not there at all.

And I dunno what FF is talking about. I think the pearl looks just fine.
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Ok....And thanks for agreeing with me about the pearl.
 
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SoulGuardian

PICHU ROXORZ!
Epi 4 is up!
 
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^^Yoshinichi^^

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Your comic is fairly decent when it come's to those little hybrid guy's, but I don't really like how you did the grass. Here, this is some nice sprite grass. No matter what program your using to make this, borrowing some of the colour and outline of it will help:http://sprites.fireball20xl.com/NSA/Sheets/frlg.png

Maybe you could add some nice scenery also to spice it up.
Im sure in do time you will get better though,amigo.
 
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Blueray

Wario = PWN
As usual I'll give my normal depressing advice then leave you be...

IMO I would work on spriting for one month if I were you so you could get better at the basics of making a sprite comic. Then move on to making stories for a while. Then put the two together... read a comic tutorial..
And whalla!
You are much better suited for making comics...

But remember this is just advice to help you...
You don't have to do it but it would help.
 
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