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Mt. Pokechuppa

Pokechuppa

'Bi-bi!'
;489;Mt. Pokechuppa:;481;
;427;A Home for her...;492;
((BEING REMADE))



Before you start reading: "Hi, i'm richard formally known as Pokechuppa. i think this fanfic was a much better tale than one of my other unsuccesful fanfics about the deoxys. Yeah, anyway. If ive made any errors please comment on them and im sorry for the spelling of wiping i put whipping but i can't find where abouts it was (DUH) oh yes and i wasnt so sure about the whole time thing either so comment on that as well please. so i hope you enjoy readin this fanfic as much as i enjoyed writing it.

Chapter 1: A Rude Awakening;489;


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“Y…you?” Said a voice. “Is that you?” The voice became queasy and hard to understand. “Ho… how.. Di..d.. you…?” The voice faded away.

7:35am
“Oi loser!” A little girl said. “Oi, get up!” She began shacking the person.
“Wha…? What was that? Did I dream it?” The Person questioned himself.
“Mum says you gotta get up.” The girl continued to shake the boy.
“What were they trying to tell me?” The boy awoke, to find his little Sister layed across his stomach, continuing to shake him.

7:45am
“Breakfast!” The female voice echoed up the stairs into the boys bedroom.
“Yummy yum!” The girl let go and rushed down the stairs, tripping on the edge of the carpet.
“Ugh… I feel so rough. Hope my Pokemon had a good nights sleep…” The boy looked across his room for his bag. “Heather! What have you done with my bag!?”

Heather: The Main characters annoying little Sister.
Heather wants to be so much like her older brother. She awaits the day until she can set out on her first journey.

The voice echoed back down the stairs. “Te-hee.” The girl giggled.
“Illy, just get down here and eat you breakfast.” The Mother continued buttering a slice of toast. “Say Heather, what have you done with Illy’s bag?”

Illy: The Main character.
Illy wishes to venture around Mt. Pokechuppa and see if the local town legends are true.

“I’ve hidden it in a reallllly good hiding place.” Heather continued to giggle. “Me and Illy’s Pokemon had a really fun sleepover last night. We stayed up real late and watched films and then we -” Heather was interrupted by her Mother.
“Late nights aren’t good for a little girl like you. Especially since you’re still growing.”
Heather rolled her eyes. “But -” She was interrupted by her Mother again.
“No buts. I don’t understand why you don’t play with our little Skitty that much now.”
“She’s boring. I want to be like Illy, why can’t I go out and catch Pokemon?” Heather continued whining.
“You’re too young. Now where’s Illy gotten to? ILLY!” The paintings on the walls shook.
“Yes Mum, I’m coming! Let me just get dressed!” Illy said, attempting to get his jacket on.

7:50am
Minutes later, Illy came down the stairs. He was wearing all of his new Pokemon Trainer clothes. Brand new, of the highest quality. They needed to be comfy and needed to be able to keep the warmth in, especially since it was now the beginning of winter time.

This wasn’t the first time Illy was going to be setting of on a quest, as he’s done it many times before. Today, Illy would be setting off, with all 6 of his Pokemon, to the top of a mountain, called Mt. Pokechuppa. There’s been recent news across Illy’s town about the legends of Mt. Pokechuppa. For many years, there has been stories of Mt. Pokechuppa, but only one is continually used.

Below Mt. Pokechuppa lies a lake. So beautiful, the sun gleams off of it and lights even the darkest places of the Mountain. So much wildlife is dependant of this lakes nutrients. The story of the legendary mountain goes like this:

‘Once, it is told, a fairy emerged from this lake with a dowry of cattle, for she had come to marry a mere mortal - a shepherd she had fallen in love with. She was allowed to marry him, provided that she gave up her Pokemon Fairy form and never came in contact with Iron. Sadly, as he lifted her onto his horse, she was touched three times by a stirrup and on the third was drawn, dowry and all, back into the waters of the lake. Perhaps she lives there still, potentially awaiting another acceptable suitor.’

Illy, who was intrigued by this tale, was going to be setting out on a quest to see the lake, of which the fair emerged and climb to the top of Mt. Pokechuppa; a place where no human has ventured up before.

7:55am
Illy thought to himself as he sat at the breakfast table. (“Today I’m finally setting off. I’ve come along way, but I don’t know if my Pokemon feel the same way I do about this challenge. We’re going to need every ounce of strength to get to the lake, and even attempt to walk up to the top of the Mountain.”)
“Illy would you like any toast?” His Mother questioned him….. “Illy?” She paused for a while…. “Illy!?”
“Huh….? What?”
“Would you like any toast?” She held up a slice of bread.
“Umm… Na, I’ll get something at the Pokemon centre.”
“I’ve gotten your bag from Heather, I put you in a Sandwich and an apple, so you don’t get hungry.” She began listing a few more items for breakfast.
“Mum I’m not hungry. I need to be going soon, Prof. Lanberis needs to give me back my Pokedex and I need to go into town to get a map of the best route to take for Mt. Pokechuppa.” Illy, walked over to the mirror; placed in the lounge, and made sure his hair was alright.
“Ok. Have you made sure all your Pokemon are fit and healthy for this trip?”
“Yes Mum…” Illy rolled his eyes.
“Are you sure you don’t want to stay another night? Your bed’s already made?”
“No I’ll be fine Mum.”
“I’m going to miss you -” Heather interrupted her Mum.
“We’re going to miss you.” Heather looked up to her Mum and smiled cheekily.; as she let out a little giggle.
“Well I best be off now.” Heather ran to Illy and wrapped her arms around his leg. His Mother, walked over and squeezed him, giving him a kiss on the cheek as well.

8:10am
Illy opened up the front door and began stepping out, but was stopped by the purrs of the Skitty in-between his legs. “Aww, I’ll miss you too Lil’ Skit’.”
“Skit, Skit!” Skitty ran to Heather.
“I’ll see you guys soon. Don’t even be tempted to worry about me, especially you, Mum!”
“I’ll try.” As she whipped a tear off her face.
“Bye, good luck.” Heather added; also whipping a tear from her nose.

It wasn’t long, before Illy was out of sight. He was on his own now. But he did have 6 Pokemon accompanying him. Feeling happy, Illy let all 6 of his Pokemon out of their Pokeballs so they could enjoy the sights and the fresh air of the little town.

Illy has taken a few months to assemble his team. 6 different Pokemon; all of different types. His team consisted of:

Chikorita
Rioru
Charmander
Perap
Aipom
Korinku

Illy never had a Starter Pokemon, as he used his Mothers Skitty to battle wild types. But the Pokemon he caught first was Perap, as his towns famous for the amount of swarms of Perap that live around the trees in the town.

All of his Pokemon got on exceptionally well, especially Aipom and Perap. They worked together as a Team and only a Team. With Perap being able to fly. And Aipom with his large grabbing hand, Perap, was able to fly with Aipom holding onto its feet, and with the use of Aipom’s hand, they were able to grab amounts of fruits from the trees.

Illy’s team was strong for the amount of training that had been done. His team had a impressive speed, dodging most attacks that are sent their way.

8:45am
The Pokemon centre was just up in front, and Illy’s stomach was already rumbling. “How about we stop here and get some food?” Illy said to his Pokemon. They all cheered. They were just about to begin running towards the Pokemon centre, when they were stopped, by another Pokemon Trainer from the town.
“You wanna battle?” The trainer looked at Illy with a sense of anger and stupidity.
“Yeah alright then.” Illy answered as his fire inside began heating up.

9:00am
“Err… I choose… Slowbro.” The trainer paused, and realised he hadn’t got his Pokeball from his belt yet.
Illy yawned… “Korinku, you’ll have a go? Right?”
“Korin!” Korinku cheered and got into position for battle.
“Slowbro! Use… Err.. Frenzy Plant.” The Slowbro sat still in confusion.
“Umm… Ok then. Korinku, lets star off with a Iron Tail attack.”
“Quick Slowbro, use fly!” The Slowbro continued sitting still.
A direct attack from Korinku. But Slowbro continued to sit still.
“Hey! Are you even going to battle? Your Slowbro doesn’t know those sort of attacks.” Illy began to get annoyed.
“Slowbro, Shadow ball!”
Finally the Slowbro stood up and began charging a Shadow ball.
“Korinku, get ready to jump and counter with Shock wave.”
The Korinku sat down and waited patiently, the Shadow ball didn’t seem as if it would be launched. It just kept getting larger and larger.

9:10am
It had been at least a few minutes after Slowbro had begun charging its attack. It was so large now that you couldn’t see Slowbro or the trainer.
“Ok Korinku we’ve waited long enough. Jump and use Shock wave!”
“Koooooorrr…. INKU!”
A ferocious beam of thunder charged and rushed towards Slowbro.
“Now Slowbro! Send your Shadow ball towards Korinku!”
“….Slow?”
The two attacks hit one another, Light and dark surrounded Illy and the trainer. Like an envelope Korinku and Slowbro were sealed in this collision. It was a while before the attack and the smoke faded away.

9:13am
The smoke had faded and revealed who was left standing.
“Kor!” Korinku cried.
“Slow?” Slowbro questioned; in a concerned voice.
“Hey whats going on?” The opposite trainer questioned.
“Aha, ha, ha, ha, haa!”
“Team Pokebase!” The trainer said, trying to run after Slowbro and Korinku.
“Team Pokebase?” Illy was very confused.
“Say Boy…” The Women pointed at Illy. “Where’s your other Pokemon? Hmm?” An evil grin grew apon her pointy face.
“Wha’…? Hey! Give them back!” Illy shouted, catching up with the other trainer.
“Dude, what’s your name?” The other trainer asked Illy.
“It’s Illy and you?”
“Call be Burn for now. We need to get our Pokemon back. Steelix go!” This time Burn actually threw the Pokeball.

Burn: A Trainer known for his tricks.
Burn wants to find out the secrets of Mt. Pokechuppa’s lake.

“Hey Burn, why were you acting so dumb earlier?” Illy asked, hopping on the end of Steelix.
“I’ll explain later.”

9:20am
Team Pokebase were driving a hot air ballon in what seemed to be the shape of a Doomiraa. Illy and burn continued to chase after the Team Pokebase ballon until they came across a well.
“That’s the towns pride.” Burn said before Illy could ask what it was. “It’s said to make wishes come true, as long as the wisher is true hearted.”
Illy jumped off the Steelix, and stood facing the well; head down and leant over.

9:25am
Burn was too far ahead to turn back now, he had to get the Pokemon back by himself. “I can’t get close enough with just Steelix. Time to come out… Glacia!”
“Glai, Glai!” The Glacia cried as you was released from her Pokeball, sending an Icy mist towards the ballon.
“Glacia! Jump from Steelix and use Ice pebble! Full power!”
Glacia leaped into the skies; she found the perfect level to use her Ice pebble attack. Out burst from her, came a beautifully powerful attack, it beamed towards the hot air ballon faster than anything Team Pokebase had seen.
“Doomiraa! Counter with confusion! Send that attack back to that little mut!” Commanded the Women.
“Glacia! NO! Use Protect!”
The move failed. Glacia was hit directly. She fell to the floor with a thump. She did not move. She layed there still, hurt and silent.
“Glacia! Return… Damn it! I forgot! Try this! Medicham, go!”
“…Cham!”
Burn’s Medicham was an unusual size. It was rather round.
“Psychic Medicham! Bring back those Pokeballs!”
It was no mistake, Medicham’s Psychic attack, was able to reach to the altitude Team Pokebase’s air ballon was. Without any fuss, the Pokeballs of which Medicham was aiming for began to glow a mystic blue colour, their colour changed as they began to rise.
“Hey! They’re taking back their Pokeballs! Quick Marron! What do I do?!”

Marron: The Male Member of Team Pokebase.
His dream is to steal the Worlds Strongest Pokemon and sell them off to make a quick fortune. He hasn’t had muck luck.

“Melii, I told you I’m not good in tight situations!”

Melii: The Female Member of Team Pokebase.
Her dreams consist of a fabulous life were Pokemon simply join her team, because she’s so perfect. She also was trained to be a scientist, so she’s good at constructing machines etc.

“Doomiraa, try using your Confusion to reverse Psychic.” Melii said, wiping a tear of sweat from her forehead.
Both Medicham and Doomiraa were struggling to continue using their attacks. Neither one was showing any sign of defeat at this point.

9:32am
Illy remained still, as a tear slid down his nose and splashed into the darkness of the Well. The splash echoed up to the top of the Well. And Illy found himself looking at a mirror image of himself in the waters reflection. The water began to ripple; Illy stood up straight and backed away from the Well; cautious of what would happen next. Spouts of water jumped up and out of the Well. The whole Well began to shake; the vibrations moved across the floor. The spouts of water turned into buckets full; the Well was overflowing.
“What have I done!?” Illy said, moving into a safe position.
“Th…Thank… y…ou.” A voice said. It came from the Well as it sounded tinny and echoed.
“You.. You were in my dream…?” Illy asked the voice.
“Yes, that was I. Your heart is pure and your tears are respectable.”
“What does that mean?” Illy asked the voice once again.
The voice laughed. “You ask too many questions.” It continued laughing. “This is uncomfortable, let me reveal myself.”
Illy stood back and away from the Well.

9:37am
Illy awaited patiently to be greeted by this voice.
“Where are you?” Illy cautiously looked down into the Well, as he did, he received a slight tap on the shoulder. He turned around.
“Boo…”
“AHHH!!!” Illy screamed. “Wh… What are you?”
“Why I’m Fiore. A Breeded version of Manaphy. But I do not evolve into a Manaphy. It’s weird really. I want to join your team. But, you seem to already have 6 Pokemon.” Fiore frowned. “Your heart and tears are pure and trustworthy, is there anything that I can do for you?”
Illy explained to Fiore about his and Burn’s Pokemon. Without any questions, Fiore sat apon Illy’s Head and teleported.

I'll be updating everyones teams at the end of each chapter.

Illy:
Chikorita;152;
Rioru;447;
Charmander;004;
Perap;441;
Aipom;190;
Korinku;403;
Foine;489;

Burn:
Slowbro;080;
Steelix;208;
Medicham;308;
Luvdisc;370;
Glacia;471;


I'll post the next chapter ASAP. C & C

thanks then Pokechuppa x
 
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Yami Ryu

Well-Known Member
“Why I’m Fiore. A Breeded version of Manaphy. But I do not evolve into a Manaphy. It’s weird really. I want to join your team. But, you seem to already have 6 Pokemon.” Fiore frowned. “Your heart and tears are pure and trustworthy, is there anything that I can do for you?”

WOW what a way to give your person SUCH a rare legendary! WITH NO EFFORT.

Not only is this rushed like, well a rushed fic of tackied rushing doom, but it's short, skimpy, description is just abot shot out the window. Go read Advice for Aspiring Authors and realise a fic isn't about 'Time frames' and you skimping description, emotion, and reason/sanity because you don't want to put any effort into a story.

Oh and also- read the rules. AS IT IS AGAINST THE RULES TO HAVE PEOPLE GIVE YOU CHARACTERS in their posts. Make. Your. Own. :/
 

Pokechuppa

'Bi-bi!'
wow, thanks for your door to door friendly serebii member advice, i appreciate the help... without the sarcasm.
Since your comments are very strong, i'll take time to go over the 1st chapter and improve it.
And about the character thing, i have a list of characters, made. By. Me. and i assumed fanfics had the same type of rules as fan comics did, guess i assumed wrong. i'll remove the public bit. Re. Move. D :/

Pokechuppa :$
 
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