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yeh im trying to wait patiently oh who am i kidding im in suspence please hurry up motig
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Thanks for the reviews, and theres some good news and bad news.
The good news is that the first chapter of the sequal to this is almost finished, and i think the style its written in has never been done before on this forum, but a certain author has written in the same style.
The bad news is, well, isn't all thaqt bad as I am writting more of the next chapter, 9 i think, but progress is slow, but speeding up.
Exspect the chapter mid to late August, Earlier if i get past the part with my writers block
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The good news is that the first chapter of the sequal to this is almost finished, and i think the style its written in has never been done before on this forum, but a certain author has written in the same style.
The bad news is, well, isn't all thaqt bad as I am writting more of the next chapter, 9 i think, but progress is slow, but speeding up.
Exspect the chapter mid to late August, Earlier if i get past the part with my writers block
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Just finished The Forest Newbie as well as chapters 1 and 2. Good job so far.
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I just read forest newbie and i loved it
im nto to thrilled with my end i wish there wasnt as much killing it didnt bother me but jeez james left alot of bodies in his wake
im nto to thrilled with my end i wish there wasnt as much killing it didnt bother me but jeez james left alot of bodies in his wake
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Thanks for the replies, and I'm glad you enjoyed FN. I just got a new PC, so i need to transfer the files from it to this PC, good thing i know how to put a PC together. I'll try and get the chapter out by the end of the week. But once again, no promises.
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its all good motig we'll just wait patiently cause thats all we can do.
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ITS FINALLY HERE PEOPLE!!!!!!!
Not to say its any good >.>;
Only kidding guys, Obsidian Blade enjoyed it, and beta'd it, so it can;t be that bad, right? Lest hope not.
So anyway, here's the chapter, i think its a bit rude in parts, but I'm not to sure *blows dust away*
In other news, the first chapter of the final fic of the trilogy, has its first chapter written, or almost written, I haven't decided where i want to leave the chapter at the end.
In other GOOD news, I finally don't have to switch back to my old PC to write, WOOOO!!!!!
Anyway, enough blabbering.
For the first time in over half a year:
Read, review, and try to enjoy
Chapter 9-Dragon Duel
Several days had passed since my encounter in the dark, we’d passed many cities and I’d got my pokemon healed. I’d also received a death threat some how, which told me to give Aerie back, this was good news as Aerie was now free.
“This is boring James!” Mew complained. “I wanna fight something!”
“So do I, but the quicker we get to the Champion of this region, the better.”
“Can I chew you hair while we wait?”
“No.”
“Okay.” Mew sank into a depressed position before she came up with an idea, which only meant trouble. Before I knew it Mew had teleported in front of me and started staring me in the eye.
I stopped walking. A little flicker from my psychic pokemon and I had a small wet mouth latch onto my nose.
“You little…” I screamed, running around swiping frantically at the small cat that was holding onto my nose.
“You never fail to amuse me James.” Bridget laughed.
“He does fail to amuse me, murderer!” A voice murmured.
“And you are?” I twisted around as Mew let go of my nose. In the middle of the path in front of me was a tall, slim lady. I guessed her age was about forty, but I couldn’t be sure, round about my age. She had flowing chocolate coloured hair with a few darker strands here and there. She had blue or green eyes, couldn’t tell for sure. She had a navy jumper and some blue jeans. Her trainers were white, with some light blue stripes here and there.
“Sammy Azure, you killed my friend, Jess Barkley!”
“Oh, you’re that person I saw on the roof top several years ago, you’ve grown up, haven’t you?” I replied.
“Some of us haven’t though!” Her voice was serious and harsh; she didn’t like me that was for sure.
“You know this girl James?” Bridget asked.
“Not particularly Bridg, but I’ve seen her.” I told Bridget. “So what you here for?”
“Revenge, six on six battle, no switches. You’re going to get an *** kicking of a life time.”
“Fine by me, but I’ll be the one kicking ***!” I answered, sounding too cocky for my own good. “Go! Blaziken!”
“Go! Arcanine!”
Out of my ball came my Blaziken, but out of the other ball came an overgrown puppy. It had an orange body that was striped with black. Fluffy beige sprouted around the heels of all four feet and as a tail. Its neck was made of this material too, as was its face. Two small eyes were part of the face, as was a harsh looking mouth with four sharp teeth in. Two orange ears popped out of the topside of the head.
“Be careful of Arcanine James, it may look like an overgrown dog, but its blows are punishing.” Bridget told me.
“Okay, Blaziken, try a double kick!” I ordered.
“Arcanine, counter that with Extreme speed!” Sammy commanded.
Arcanine nodded to confirm its trainer’s orders. Within seconds of this happening, Arcanine charged at my Blaziken and knocked her back several yards. Blaziken jumped up and shrugged off whatever damage she had taken.
“Double kick sooner this time!” I told her.
“You fool, Arcanine, same again.”
Blaziken got ready and stuck her foot up a millisecond before the Arcanine charged. As planned, the dog dived straight into a kicking foot meaning damage was done to it. Pain started to show on the dog’s face when a second kick came crashing down on his forehead.
“Told you dogs are dumb.” I laughed.
“Shut up! Arcanine! Aerial Ace!”
“Blaziken! Brick break!”
Arcanine seemingly vanished and reappeared behind Blaziken, it then smashed into my pokemon with full force, sending her to the ground. However, Blaziken refused to give and got up. She charged at Arcanine, and when there thrust the palm of her hand into the face of Arcanine, sending the intimidated dog back several metres.
“Okay Blaziken, lets try another Double kick to finish it off!”
“Arcanine, don’t let this excuse of a pokemon beat you, get up now!”
Arcanine slowly got up, but was immediately knocked back down when my Blaziken’s two feet came crashing down on its face.
“Get up Arcanine!” Sammy called, but her fire pokemon lay on the ground, knocked out. “Darn, Arcanine, return. This pokemon will blow you away though James! Go! Pidgeot!”
“That’s a flying pokemon James.” Bridg told me. Looking at the bird that had appeared in front of me, I was that it had a creamy brown underbelly and a mud brown top. It was shaped like a large pigeon, but seemed to be more focused on hurting Blaziken than spreading diseases. Its head was small but had a sharp red beak on it. Above this beak were two small eyes that were framed in black. Hair came sprouting out the top of its head and the hairs were coloured red and yellow. These stretched back to about the tail feathers that were short and red. The bird’s talons were brown with silver claws.
“No **** Sherlock!” Mew called out, I couldn’t help but giggle.
“Okay Blaziken, this might be hard, but let’s give it a go! Use Blaze kick!” I commanded.
“Fly Pidgeot!”
Before Blaziken could move an inch, Pidgeot had taken off from its perch on a nearby tree and was now far up in the sky.
“Want me to bring it down James?” Mew asked, as I saw that Blaziken had given up hope to hit the bird.
“That would be cheating Mew.” I replied.
“That’s a yes then.” Mew smiled.
“NO!” I screamed as Mew teleported away.
“You’re funny James.” Mew told me, as she appeared behind me.
“Blaz!” Blaziken screamed in pain, as the Pidgeot slammed into her stomach.
“Darn Mew.” I muttered under my breath, as I saw Blaziken go down onto her right knee, holding her stomach in pain.
“Finish it off with gust Pidgeot!”
“Blaziken, flamethrower the gust!”
“You’re a fool James!” Sammy laughed.
“You’d think so, but Blaziken’s a fire type, meaning less damage will be taken.”
Sammy gritted her teeth in anger, refusing to respond to my tactic.
Sure enough, my Blaziken simply absorbed the fired up gust, meaning next to no damage was taken.
“Okay Pidgeot, just use quick attack to finish this waste off.”
“ Blaziken…” I muttered, knowing that since she was still crouching in pain from the fly, she wouldn’t be able to use a physical attack.
Sammy’s Pidgeot smiled, and flew sharply through air before smacking my Blaziken in the face, sending my humanoid pokemon to the ground.
“No! Blaziken!” I cried out, before returning her to her ball. “Go! Absol!”
“Why not use your famed Jolteon James, it’s strong against Pidgeot?” Sammy asked.
“Saving it to put waste to your other pokemon.” I replied, smiling slyly.
“Whatever James, Pidgeot, Gust!”
“Absol, Feint attack!”
My Absol disappeared, leaving a confused bird to aimlessly fire a tornado into nowhere. I smiled, knowing what was about to happen.
Like expected, Absol appeared behind Pidgeot and slashed at the bird with his head blade. The large pigeon flopped forward in pain, showing the damage my dark pokemon had done.
“Pidgeot, fly!”
“Absol, Aerial Ace!”
Sammy gaped in horror, as she knew this was the end of her pigeon. Her fears were granted as my Absol swiftly sliced Pidgeot before the bird could take off. This attack caused her bird to collapse on the floor while my Absol moved back into safe cover, unwounded.
“No! Pidgeot!” Sammy cried out. “Return…” She sighed.
“We each have four pokemon left, still up for the challenge?” I said, smiling slyly.
“I’m not finished yet James, Go! Sandslash!”
The familiar brown mouse came from out of her red and white ball, memories flooded back from fighting Andy, and I knew that Absol wouldn’t be lasting long.
“Sandslash, Earthquake!”
“Absol, Aerial Ace!”
Our pokemon carried out our orders. My Absol moved first, zipping towards Sandslash with an extreme speed, and then slicing through the mouse’s flesh with ease. Unfortunately, this didn’t seem to bother Sandslash much. Sandslash’s attack however damaged my Absol severely, leaving him with little energy to carry on.
“Quick Attack Sandslash!” Sammy ordered quickly, making sure that Absol couldn’t gasp for breath.
I kept my mouth shut, as I knew this was the end of Absol, and that was sort of good news, as I could now send out Wartortle.
As expected, Absol fell to the ground after Sandslash ran into him.
“Two all James, still up for it?”
“Of course, Absol, return.” I smiled, and then threw Wartortle’s Ball onto the battlefield. “Go! Wartortle.”
Sammy gritted her teeth.
“Sandslash! Earthquake again, and make it quick.”
“Bubblebeam, Wartortle,” I commanded.
Sandslash was already tapping its feet against the ground; making sure that its trainer’s orders were met. Meanwhile, Wartortle was getting his attack ready in his mouth. Sandslash’s feet taps were becoming harder, and I could fell the ground start to shake beneath me. And I could see the effect on Wartortle too, as he was becoming uneasy and starting to lose his balance.
“Hold it in ‘til its attack is over Wartortle.”
“War.” He nodded, understanding my command.
Sandslash released its quake, although my Wartortle stood strong, seeming to be un-affected by the attack.
I smiled. Wartortle released his attack, a stream of quickly moving bubbles travelled towards Sandslash and hit with serious impact, knocking Sandslash to the floor. But it got back up again, to my astonishment and annoyance. It should have been knocked out.
“Wartortle! Water Gun.”
“Sandslash, Quick Attack!”
With all its remaining energy, Sandslash charged at Wartortle, and hit him with force, at the weak spot. Wartortle got back up, and spat its attack at Sandslash, finishing the beast off.
“Well done Sandslash, return.” She pulled a pokeball off her belt. “You haven’t won yet James, you’re not even close! Go Umbreon!”
Sammy threw another red and white ball onto the ground in front of me. It burst open with a flashing white light, and revealed a black puppy- rabbit hybrid. The ball then floated back into its owner’s hand.
What Sammy called Umbreon was a black creature, with a dog’s body. Its legs looked fairly delicate, as they were thin. At the top of each leg was a golden ring. The creatures tail stood almost vertically up in the air, defying gravity; this had a golden line going round the tail, about half way up. The pokemon’s head was almost rabbit like. It was small and had 2 big ears coming out of it. Umbrian’s eyes were large and red, and had a golden ring in between them. The ears were like the tail, with the golden lines.
“Alright Wartortle, use Skull bash!” I ordered - with a body like that it wouldn’t be able to take too much of a beating.
“Umbreon! Faint Attack!” Sammy commanded.
Her pokemon happily obliged and moulded into the shadows.
The fight wasn’t about to get any easier for me, as night was closing in, and I guessed that this was a dark pokemon, and Dark pokemon are especially tough at nighttime.
“James!” Bridget called. “Defeat this pokemon quick, it’s a dark type, dark type pokemon are good at night!”
“Thanks.” I replied, as she had confirmed my guess.
Meanwhile, Wartortle had withdrawn itself into its shell, and was waiting for the right moment to pop out and hammer his opponent. Umbreon momentarily appeared in front of Wartortle, before quickly disappearing again. This fooled my Wartortle into unleashing his attack, into thin air. He launched himself forward, but made no contact with anything apart from the ground. Umbreon used this opportunity to attack with force. It attacked Wartortle in the back, causing him great harm.
“Wartortle! Can you get up?” I asked, concerned about my turtle pokemon.
Wartortle tried to push himself up from the ground, but this only resulted in more pain, and the fact that he was out of the battle now.
“Wartortle, return.” I murmured. I only had 3 pokemon left. Blaziken, Absol and Wartortle were now down and out, meaning I only had Jolteon, Mew and Flygon left.
“Stuck on what to do James, am I that good?” Sammy laughed.
“Pick me James!” Asked Mew.
“No.” I replied quickly, Mew was not the pokemon to use. She frowned and sunk down into a depressed position. “Go! Flygon!”
I threw Flygon’s pokeball out onto the field, and once it had landed, out popped my familiar green dragon.
“Umbreon! Quick Attack!”
“Flygon, Earthquake!”
Umbreon immediately rushed towards my dragon pokemon, while Flygon landed and started tapping the ground with her two feet. Umbreon was the first to attack, as it dived into Flygon, although this caused little too no damage. Flygon was still tapping the ground, and did this for another few seconds, before stopping, then thumping the ground hard with her large tail. This caused an earthquake, which damaged Umbreon severely, and made Bridget fall over.
“Nice one Bridg!” I laughed, before receiving a glare.
“Umbreon, Quick Attack again!”
“Flygon, Dragon Breath!”
Umbreon trotted towards Flygon again. Flygon took in a deep breath, and spat out a fiery blue flame, that scorched the oncoming pokemon. However, Umbreon still emerged, wounded, and finished its attack, this time, causing major damage too Flygon.
“Dammit!” I muttered under my breath. “Flygon! Crunch!”
“Umbreon, Tackle!”
Umbreon once again charged at Flygon. Flygon stood still on the ground. Umbreon galloped nearer and then leapt up into the air. Flygon sidestepped at the last second, catching Umbreon with both claws, before tossing it to the ground, leaving it in a dazed state. She then jumped up and stamped on the poor beast a couple of times, before letting off the attack. This was the opportune moment for me to take this pokemon out for good.
“Flygon! Bite, at the neck.”
“Umbreon! Move!” Sammy screamed.
Umbreon managed to open its eyes, only to witness itself being picked up by two small sharp claws. Sammy gasped in horror, I smiled, this battle looked liked it had been tied up in a neat little package, I mean, what pokemon could she possibly have left? Flygon lifted Umbreon up to its mouth, before sinking her jaw into Umbreon’s tough neck. That was it, as Flygon removed her teeth, Umbreon flopped to the floor in defeat, and pain.
“You monster!” Sammy cried. “Umbreon return.”
“Is that a complement from you?” I smiled.
“Shut up! Dragonite! Go!”
I stared in disbelief, Dragonite were about as rare as a Mew. Maybe that was a bit of an over exaggeration, but they were rare, not many trainers had them.
As Dragonite appeared from the ball, I gasped in amazement, I never thought I’d see one of these, they certainly looked good.
It was human shape, sort of, just a bit plumper down the legs, and the legs themselves were really stumpy. Its chest was beige with horizontal black lines going across it, this continued up the bottom of the tail, this part looked fairly scaly. Its main colour was an orangey-yellow. Its arms were a bit larger and thicker than Flygon’s, and the hands were more hands than claws. The tail was fairly long, and hung down below it as it was flying, like a pendulum. The wings were fairly small, but had orangey-yellow rims and a teal main bit, the bit that actually made it fly. Its head was dog shaped, except the nose bit was a bit more like the of a cartoon dinosaur. Its eyes looked beady and friendly, as did the tassels coming off the top of its head, although these most probably counted as ears.
“Surprised James? Didn’t think I had it in me? Well you were wrong! Dragonite, Hyper Beam!”
Flygon turned to me looking worried, I was shocked; for once I couldn’t issue a move. I shrugged and frowned. Flygon nodded and frowned as well, before turning to brace for impact.
Meanwhile, Dragonite was already preparing its attack, as a bright white light grew around its mouth. As this grey to bigger than the pokemon itself, I was more and more concerned about Flygon’s safety. My fears were confirmed as Dragonite released its attack. A massive bright white beam shot from its fairly small mouth. As this light engulfed Flygon, I covered my eyes. Not only did I not want to see my pokemon get hurt, I also had to shade my eyes, as the beam hit the ground beneath Flygon, and exploded and engulfing all the nearby surroundings, luckily not including Jolteon or me.
Once this light had faded, I saw a knocked out Flygon, which was also slightly sizzled.
“Don’t underestimate me James, or else it leads to that.” Sammy warned me, smiling as she pointed to my Flygon.
I returned my Flygon, the next pokemon choice would most defiantly decide the fight, and I really didn’t think Mew was up to it, which meant it was up to Jolteon.
“Jolteon! You’re up!”
“Ha! Your electric puppy doesn’t stand a chance!”
Jolteon jumped forward, growling at Sammy’s comment.
“Jolteon lets open up with a Thunder!”
He nodded and turned towards Dragonite, who looked worn out from its previous attack. Jolteon lent back, before screaming out a call to the clouds up above. Seconds later a massive lightning shot down from the sky and crashed into Dragonite. Dragonite recoiled a bit, but seemed almost immune to the attack. This was not what I wanted.
“I told you James, I told you didn’t stand a chance!” Sammy laughed. “Dragonite, finish this piece of ****, Hyper Beam!”
“Jolteon, brace for impact!”
I was completely ****ed though, that pokemon and that attack was pure immense, I needed a Miracle of some sort.
Dragonite once again, charged its attack, and shot it directly at my Jolteon. The searing white beam engulfed my pokemon, and exploded. But this time, the explosion was bigger, much bigger.
“****…” I muttered, there was no way Jolteon could have survived that.
And in a way, I guess he didn’t. Because standing in place of Jolteon was a much bigger pokemon, the same shape, just much bigger, I could ride on the thing with ease. It didn’t seem to have taken any damage, though I couldn’t be too sure.
“James?” Bridget called.
“Yeh?”
“Do you know what that is?”
“No…”
“That’s the best electric pokemon ever known about, and rarest. In fact, I think you’re the second person to ever get one. It’s the evolved from of Jolteon, Shockleon.”
I couldn’t say a word, I was so shocked, and amazed.
“No one knows how it evolves, but it’s an electric dragon type, try issuing the move, Thunder Strike.”
I nodded. Sammy was as surprised as I was, and if Dragonite had any pants, they’d be dripping. Shockleon was huge, much bigger than any pokemon I’d ever seen. Its main body was a lightning blue colour, and sparked with the odd electrical current coming off the fur hairs. His legs looked much stronger and more powerful than Jolteon’s, although I guessed they had to be. Its collar, which used to be white, was now a shocking orangey red, these obviously showed the dragon part of Shockleon. He turned around to me as if to question me for an order. His head was now shining silver, and his inner ears were a dull green, obviously a representing the old Jolteon part of the pokemon. He coughed to reveal his dark green inner mouth, with its powerful jaw with gleaming white teeth.
“Shockleon, Thunder Strike!” I ordered, feeling all-powerful and proud.
Unfortunately for Dragonite, it was worn out again from its second all-powerful attack, so it sat there looking sorry for itself, most probably twiddling its thumbs inside. Shockleon was once again screaming upwards, like with Thunder, but this time, dark clouds gathered overhead and a thunderstorm started. Fork lightning bolts struck the ground from all around us, but suddenly, a massive bolt struck Shockleon on the head, causing more sparks than normal going around his body. These disappeared and a huge lightning ball gathered around Shockleon. Seconds later, he began charging towards Dragonite before pulling out from the charge about twenty metres before hitting Dragonite. Shockleon may have pulled out, but the terrifyingly large ball of Lightning shot towards Dragonite before exploding in a hyper beam sized explosion around it. All of us shaded our eyes, and when we looked back, we saw a knocked out Dragonite before us, lying in a scorched crater.
“Owee.” Mew whimpered.
“Nice.” I stated.
“****.” Sammy muttered.
“Wow! So that’s what that attack looks like, I have to note this down.” Bridget exclaimed.
I turned to look at Bridget, so much for us all saying one worders.
“Dragonite! Return.” Sammy called, as if to break the mood of the moment. “Guess it’s up to you ol’ buddy, Go! Wartortle!”
A Wartortle? Was she stupid? She should have used this pokemon a while back, but I guess it is her favourite, and most probably her most powerful pokemon. Oh well, I guess it was time to destroy her beliefs that she could actually battle pokemon.
“Shockleon, Thunder!”
“Wartortle, Hydro Pump!”
This Hydro pump was an attack I can’t remember encountering before, but I couldn’t imagine it would be that bad, either way, it was a water attack obviously, and Shockleon had a double resistance to water, dragon and electric. We’d learnt it in school, ages back. Funny how the small things pop back into your head when you think about it.
Shockleon was the first to unleash his masterful attack. He was most probably the fastest thing in the universe, and it was all under my command, mine!
He screamed up to the heavens, and a bolt of thunder came down and struck Wartortle, striking it down.
“Over already Sammy? Thought your Wartortle was good?”
“Shut up!” She snapped. “Lo… look! He’s getting up!”
I glanced at her Wartortle, to see that in fact it was getting up. Slowly but surely it was getting up.
“Shockleon, finish this waste! Thunder shock!” I ordered.
Shockleon gladly agreed, and just as Wartortle was getting up, he fired a quick ball of bright yellow electricity at the enemy. Wartortle was hit by this and immediately collapsed.
“Tell me when I need to try Sammy, and don’t waste my very precious time.” I said, as Shockleon trotted back to me.
“Shut your ****ing mouth, you ignorant *******!” Sammy screamed, returning her battered Wartortle. She turned, and sprinted into the vast fields that I had come from.
“Eventful day huh?” Bridget said.
“Guess so, think we can ride Shockleon?”
“In my research, it says the sparks patrolling his body are harmless to human passengers, it sure would get us places faster.” She told me. “You can try it first though, to be safe.”
I laughed, before hoping onto an already crouching Shockleon.
“Seems fine to me Bridg, give it a go.”
She nervously poked Shockleon in the side, before hopping up behind me. Mew plopped herself in front of me.
“To Ovrus city I guess. I got some unfinished business there.”
Bridget nodded, as did Shockleon, and we set off into the distance, at an amazing speed.
Not to say its any good >.>;
Only kidding guys, Obsidian Blade enjoyed it, and beta'd it, so it can;t be that bad, right? Lest hope not.
So anyway, here's the chapter, i think its a bit rude in parts, but I'm not to sure *blows dust away*
In other news, the first chapter of the final fic of the trilogy, has its first chapter written, or almost written, I haven't decided where i want to leave the chapter at the end.
In other GOOD news, I finally don't have to switch back to my old PC to write, WOOOO!!!!!
Anyway, enough blabbering.
For the first time in over half a year:
Read, review, and try to enjoy
Chapter 9-Dragon Duel
Several days had passed since my encounter in the dark, we’d passed many cities and I’d got my pokemon healed. I’d also received a death threat some how, which told me to give Aerie back, this was good news as Aerie was now free.
“This is boring James!” Mew complained. “I wanna fight something!”
“So do I, but the quicker we get to the Champion of this region, the better.”
“Can I chew you hair while we wait?”
“No.”
“Okay.” Mew sank into a depressed position before she came up with an idea, which only meant trouble. Before I knew it Mew had teleported in front of me and started staring me in the eye.
I stopped walking. A little flicker from my psychic pokemon and I had a small wet mouth latch onto my nose.
“You little…” I screamed, running around swiping frantically at the small cat that was holding onto my nose.
“You never fail to amuse me James.” Bridget laughed.
“He does fail to amuse me, murderer!” A voice murmured.
“And you are?” I twisted around as Mew let go of my nose. In the middle of the path in front of me was a tall, slim lady. I guessed her age was about forty, but I couldn’t be sure, round about my age. She had flowing chocolate coloured hair with a few darker strands here and there. She had blue or green eyes, couldn’t tell for sure. She had a navy jumper and some blue jeans. Her trainers were white, with some light blue stripes here and there.
“Sammy Azure, you killed my friend, Jess Barkley!”
“Oh, you’re that person I saw on the roof top several years ago, you’ve grown up, haven’t you?” I replied.
“Some of us haven’t though!” Her voice was serious and harsh; she didn’t like me that was for sure.
“You know this girl James?” Bridget asked.
“Not particularly Bridg, but I’ve seen her.” I told Bridget. “So what you here for?”
“Revenge, six on six battle, no switches. You’re going to get an *** kicking of a life time.”
“Fine by me, but I’ll be the one kicking ***!” I answered, sounding too cocky for my own good. “Go! Blaziken!”
“Go! Arcanine!”
Out of my ball came my Blaziken, but out of the other ball came an overgrown puppy. It had an orange body that was striped with black. Fluffy beige sprouted around the heels of all four feet and as a tail. Its neck was made of this material too, as was its face. Two small eyes were part of the face, as was a harsh looking mouth with four sharp teeth in. Two orange ears popped out of the topside of the head.
“Be careful of Arcanine James, it may look like an overgrown dog, but its blows are punishing.” Bridget told me.
“Okay, Blaziken, try a double kick!” I ordered.
“Arcanine, counter that with Extreme speed!” Sammy commanded.
Arcanine nodded to confirm its trainer’s orders. Within seconds of this happening, Arcanine charged at my Blaziken and knocked her back several yards. Blaziken jumped up and shrugged off whatever damage she had taken.
“Double kick sooner this time!” I told her.
“You fool, Arcanine, same again.”
Blaziken got ready and stuck her foot up a millisecond before the Arcanine charged. As planned, the dog dived straight into a kicking foot meaning damage was done to it. Pain started to show on the dog’s face when a second kick came crashing down on his forehead.
“Told you dogs are dumb.” I laughed.
“Shut up! Arcanine! Aerial Ace!”
“Blaziken! Brick break!”
Arcanine seemingly vanished and reappeared behind Blaziken, it then smashed into my pokemon with full force, sending her to the ground. However, Blaziken refused to give and got up. She charged at Arcanine, and when there thrust the palm of her hand into the face of Arcanine, sending the intimidated dog back several metres.
“Okay Blaziken, lets try another Double kick to finish it off!”
“Arcanine, don’t let this excuse of a pokemon beat you, get up now!”
Arcanine slowly got up, but was immediately knocked back down when my Blaziken’s two feet came crashing down on its face.
“Get up Arcanine!” Sammy called, but her fire pokemon lay on the ground, knocked out. “Darn, Arcanine, return. This pokemon will blow you away though James! Go! Pidgeot!”
“That’s a flying pokemon James.” Bridg told me. Looking at the bird that had appeared in front of me, I was that it had a creamy brown underbelly and a mud brown top. It was shaped like a large pigeon, but seemed to be more focused on hurting Blaziken than spreading diseases. Its head was small but had a sharp red beak on it. Above this beak were two small eyes that were framed in black. Hair came sprouting out the top of its head and the hairs were coloured red and yellow. These stretched back to about the tail feathers that were short and red. The bird’s talons were brown with silver claws.
“No **** Sherlock!” Mew called out, I couldn’t help but giggle.
“Okay Blaziken, this might be hard, but let’s give it a go! Use Blaze kick!” I commanded.
“Fly Pidgeot!”
Before Blaziken could move an inch, Pidgeot had taken off from its perch on a nearby tree and was now far up in the sky.
“Want me to bring it down James?” Mew asked, as I saw that Blaziken had given up hope to hit the bird.
“That would be cheating Mew.” I replied.
“That’s a yes then.” Mew smiled.
“NO!” I screamed as Mew teleported away.
“You’re funny James.” Mew told me, as she appeared behind me.
“Blaz!” Blaziken screamed in pain, as the Pidgeot slammed into her stomach.
“Darn Mew.” I muttered under my breath, as I saw Blaziken go down onto her right knee, holding her stomach in pain.
“Finish it off with gust Pidgeot!”
“Blaziken, flamethrower the gust!”
“You’re a fool James!” Sammy laughed.
“You’d think so, but Blaziken’s a fire type, meaning less damage will be taken.”
Sammy gritted her teeth in anger, refusing to respond to my tactic.
Sure enough, my Blaziken simply absorbed the fired up gust, meaning next to no damage was taken.
“Okay Pidgeot, just use quick attack to finish this waste off.”
“ Blaziken…” I muttered, knowing that since she was still crouching in pain from the fly, she wouldn’t be able to use a physical attack.
Sammy’s Pidgeot smiled, and flew sharply through air before smacking my Blaziken in the face, sending my humanoid pokemon to the ground.
“No! Blaziken!” I cried out, before returning her to her ball. “Go! Absol!”
“Why not use your famed Jolteon James, it’s strong against Pidgeot?” Sammy asked.
“Saving it to put waste to your other pokemon.” I replied, smiling slyly.
“Whatever James, Pidgeot, Gust!”
“Absol, Feint attack!”
My Absol disappeared, leaving a confused bird to aimlessly fire a tornado into nowhere. I smiled, knowing what was about to happen.
Like expected, Absol appeared behind Pidgeot and slashed at the bird with his head blade. The large pigeon flopped forward in pain, showing the damage my dark pokemon had done.
“Pidgeot, fly!”
“Absol, Aerial Ace!”
Sammy gaped in horror, as she knew this was the end of her pigeon. Her fears were granted as my Absol swiftly sliced Pidgeot before the bird could take off. This attack caused her bird to collapse on the floor while my Absol moved back into safe cover, unwounded.
“No! Pidgeot!” Sammy cried out. “Return…” She sighed.
“We each have four pokemon left, still up for the challenge?” I said, smiling slyly.
“I’m not finished yet James, Go! Sandslash!”
The familiar brown mouse came from out of her red and white ball, memories flooded back from fighting Andy, and I knew that Absol wouldn’t be lasting long.
“Sandslash, Earthquake!”
“Absol, Aerial Ace!”
Our pokemon carried out our orders. My Absol moved first, zipping towards Sandslash with an extreme speed, and then slicing through the mouse’s flesh with ease. Unfortunately, this didn’t seem to bother Sandslash much. Sandslash’s attack however damaged my Absol severely, leaving him with little energy to carry on.
“Quick Attack Sandslash!” Sammy ordered quickly, making sure that Absol couldn’t gasp for breath.
I kept my mouth shut, as I knew this was the end of Absol, and that was sort of good news, as I could now send out Wartortle.
As expected, Absol fell to the ground after Sandslash ran into him.
“Two all James, still up for it?”
“Of course, Absol, return.” I smiled, and then threw Wartortle’s Ball onto the battlefield. “Go! Wartortle.”
Sammy gritted her teeth.
“Sandslash! Earthquake again, and make it quick.”
“Bubblebeam, Wartortle,” I commanded.
Sandslash was already tapping its feet against the ground; making sure that its trainer’s orders were met. Meanwhile, Wartortle was getting his attack ready in his mouth. Sandslash’s feet taps were becoming harder, and I could fell the ground start to shake beneath me. And I could see the effect on Wartortle too, as he was becoming uneasy and starting to lose his balance.
“Hold it in ‘til its attack is over Wartortle.”
“War.” He nodded, understanding my command.
Sandslash released its quake, although my Wartortle stood strong, seeming to be un-affected by the attack.
I smiled. Wartortle released his attack, a stream of quickly moving bubbles travelled towards Sandslash and hit with serious impact, knocking Sandslash to the floor. But it got back up again, to my astonishment and annoyance. It should have been knocked out.
“Wartortle! Water Gun.”
“Sandslash, Quick Attack!”
With all its remaining energy, Sandslash charged at Wartortle, and hit him with force, at the weak spot. Wartortle got back up, and spat its attack at Sandslash, finishing the beast off.
“Well done Sandslash, return.” She pulled a pokeball off her belt. “You haven’t won yet James, you’re not even close! Go Umbreon!”
Sammy threw another red and white ball onto the ground in front of me. It burst open with a flashing white light, and revealed a black puppy- rabbit hybrid. The ball then floated back into its owner’s hand.
What Sammy called Umbreon was a black creature, with a dog’s body. Its legs looked fairly delicate, as they were thin. At the top of each leg was a golden ring. The creatures tail stood almost vertically up in the air, defying gravity; this had a golden line going round the tail, about half way up. The pokemon’s head was almost rabbit like. It was small and had 2 big ears coming out of it. Umbrian’s eyes were large and red, and had a golden ring in between them. The ears were like the tail, with the golden lines.
“Alright Wartortle, use Skull bash!” I ordered - with a body like that it wouldn’t be able to take too much of a beating.
“Umbreon! Faint Attack!” Sammy commanded.
Her pokemon happily obliged and moulded into the shadows.
The fight wasn’t about to get any easier for me, as night was closing in, and I guessed that this was a dark pokemon, and Dark pokemon are especially tough at nighttime.
“James!” Bridget called. “Defeat this pokemon quick, it’s a dark type, dark type pokemon are good at night!”
“Thanks.” I replied, as she had confirmed my guess.
Meanwhile, Wartortle had withdrawn itself into its shell, and was waiting for the right moment to pop out and hammer his opponent. Umbreon momentarily appeared in front of Wartortle, before quickly disappearing again. This fooled my Wartortle into unleashing his attack, into thin air. He launched himself forward, but made no contact with anything apart from the ground. Umbreon used this opportunity to attack with force. It attacked Wartortle in the back, causing him great harm.
“Wartortle! Can you get up?” I asked, concerned about my turtle pokemon.
Wartortle tried to push himself up from the ground, but this only resulted in more pain, and the fact that he was out of the battle now.
“Wartortle, return.” I murmured. I only had 3 pokemon left. Blaziken, Absol and Wartortle were now down and out, meaning I only had Jolteon, Mew and Flygon left.
“Stuck on what to do James, am I that good?” Sammy laughed.
“Pick me James!” Asked Mew.
“No.” I replied quickly, Mew was not the pokemon to use. She frowned and sunk down into a depressed position. “Go! Flygon!”
I threw Flygon’s pokeball out onto the field, and once it had landed, out popped my familiar green dragon.
“Umbreon! Quick Attack!”
“Flygon, Earthquake!”
Umbreon immediately rushed towards my dragon pokemon, while Flygon landed and started tapping the ground with her two feet. Umbreon was the first to attack, as it dived into Flygon, although this caused little too no damage. Flygon was still tapping the ground, and did this for another few seconds, before stopping, then thumping the ground hard with her large tail. This caused an earthquake, which damaged Umbreon severely, and made Bridget fall over.
“Nice one Bridg!” I laughed, before receiving a glare.
“Umbreon, Quick Attack again!”
“Flygon, Dragon Breath!”
Umbreon trotted towards Flygon again. Flygon took in a deep breath, and spat out a fiery blue flame, that scorched the oncoming pokemon. However, Umbreon still emerged, wounded, and finished its attack, this time, causing major damage too Flygon.
“Dammit!” I muttered under my breath. “Flygon! Crunch!”
“Umbreon, Tackle!”
Umbreon once again charged at Flygon. Flygon stood still on the ground. Umbreon galloped nearer and then leapt up into the air. Flygon sidestepped at the last second, catching Umbreon with both claws, before tossing it to the ground, leaving it in a dazed state. She then jumped up and stamped on the poor beast a couple of times, before letting off the attack. This was the opportune moment for me to take this pokemon out for good.
“Flygon! Bite, at the neck.”
“Umbreon! Move!” Sammy screamed.
Umbreon managed to open its eyes, only to witness itself being picked up by two small sharp claws. Sammy gasped in horror, I smiled, this battle looked liked it had been tied up in a neat little package, I mean, what pokemon could she possibly have left? Flygon lifted Umbreon up to its mouth, before sinking her jaw into Umbreon’s tough neck. That was it, as Flygon removed her teeth, Umbreon flopped to the floor in defeat, and pain.
“You monster!” Sammy cried. “Umbreon return.”
“Is that a complement from you?” I smiled.
“Shut up! Dragonite! Go!”
I stared in disbelief, Dragonite were about as rare as a Mew. Maybe that was a bit of an over exaggeration, but they were rare, not many trainers had them.
As Dragonite appeared from the ball, I gasped in amazement, I never thought I’d see one of these, they certainly looked good.
It was human shape, sort of, just a bit plumper down the legs, and the legs themselves were really stumpy. Its chest was beige with horizontal black lines going across it, this continued up the bottom of the tail, this part looked fairly scaly. Its main colour was an orangey-yellow. Its arms were a bit larger and thicker than Flygon’s, and the hands were more hands than claws. The tail was fairly long, and hung down below it as it was flying, like a pendulum. The wings were fairly small, but had orangey-yellow rims and a teal main bit, the bit that actually made it fly. Its head was dog shaped, except the nose bit was a bit more like the of a cartoon dinosaur. Its eyes looked beady and friendly, as did the tassels coming off the top of its head, although these most probably counted as ears.
“Surprised James? Didn’t think I had it in me? Well you were wrong! Dragonite, Hyper Beam!”
Flygon turned to me looking worried, I was shocked; for once I couldn’t issue a move. I shrugged and frowned. Flygon nodded and frowned as well, before turning to brace for impact.
Meanwhile, Dragonite was already preparing its attack, as a bright white light grew around its mouth. As this grey to bigger than the pokemon itself, I was more and more concerned about Flygon’s safety. My fears were confirmed as Dragonite released its attack. A massive bright white beam shot from its fairly small mouth. As this light engulfed Flygon, I covered my eyes. Not only did I not want to see my pokemon get hurt, I also had to shade my eyes, as the beam hit the ground beneath Flygon, and exploded and engulfing all the nearby surroundings, luckily not including Jolteon or me.
Once this light had faded, I saw a knocked out Flygon, which was also slightly sizzled.
“Don’t underestimate me James, or else it leads to that.” Sammy warned me, smiling as she pointed to my Flygon.
I returned my Flygon, the next pokemon choice would most defiantly decide the fight, and I really didn’t think Mew was up to it, which meant it was up to Jolteon.
“Jolteon! You’re up!”
“Ha! Your electric puppy doesn’t stand a chance!”
Jolteon jumped forward, growling at Sammy’s comment.
“Jolteon lets open up with a Thunder!”
He nodded and turned towards Dragonite, who looked worn out from its previous attack. Jolteon lent back, before screaming out a call to the clouds up above. Seconds later a massive lightning shot down from the sky and crashed into Dragonite. Dragonite recoiled a bit, but seemed almost immune to the attack. This was not what I wanted.
“I told you James, I told you didn’t stand a chance!” Sammy laughed. “Dragonite, finish this piece of ****, Hyper Beam!”
“Jolteon, brace for impact!”
I was completely ****ed though, that pokemon and that attack was pure immense, I needed a Miracle of some sort.
Dragonite once again, charged its attack, and shot it directly at my Jolteon. The searing white beam engulfed my pokemon, and exploded. But this time, the explosion was bigger, much bigger.
“****…” I muttered, there was no way Jolteon could have survived that.
And in a way, I guess he didn’t. Because standing in place of Jolteon was a much bigger pokemon, the same shape, just much bigger, I could ride on the thing with ease. It didn’t seem to have taken any damage, though I couldn’t be too sure.
“James?” Bridget called.
“Yeh?”
“Do you know what that is?”
“No…”
“That’s the best electric pokemon ever known about, and rarest. In fact, I think you’re the second person to ever get one. It’s the evolved from of Jolteon, Shockleon.”
I couldn’t say a word, I was so shocked, and amazed.
“No one knows how it evolves, but it’s an electric dragon type, try issuing the move, Thunder Strike.”
I nodded. Sammy was as surprised as I was, and if Dragonite had any pants, they’d be dripping. Shockleon was huge, much bigger than any pokemon I’d ever seen. Its main body was a lightning blue colour, and sparked with the odd electrical current coming off the fur hairs. His legs looked much stronger and more powerful than Jolteon’s, although I guessed they had to be. Its collar, which used to be white, was now a shocking orangey red, these obviously showed the dragon part of Shockleon. He turned around to me as if to question me for an order. His head was now shining silver, and his inner ears were a dull green, obviously a representing the old Jolteon part of the pokemon. He coughed to reveal his dark green inner mouth, with its powerful jaw with gleaming white teeth.
“Shockleon, Thunder Strike!” I ordered, feeling all-powerful and proud.
Unfortunately for Dragonite, it was worn out again from its second all-powerful attack, so it sat there looking sorry for itself, most probably twiddling its thumbs inside. Shockleon was once again screaming upwards, like with Thunder, but this time, dark clouds gathered overhead and a thunderstorm started. Fork lightning bolts struck the ground from all around us, but suddenly, a massive bolt struck Shockleon on the head, causing more sparks than normal going around his body. These disappeared and a huge lightning ball gathered around Shockleon. Seconds later, he began charging towards Dragonite before pulling out from the charge about twenty metres before hitting Dragonite. Shockleon may have pulled out, but the terrifyingly large ball of Lightning shot towards Dragonite before exploding in a hyper beam sized explosion around it. All of us shaded our eyes, and when we looked back, we saw a knocked out Dragonite before us, lying in a scorched crater.
“Owee.” Mew whimpered.
“Nice.” I stated.
“****.” Sammy muttered.
“Wow! So that’s what that attack looks like, I have to note this down.” Bridget exclaimed.
I turned to look at Bridget, so much for us all saying one worders.
“Dragonite! Return.” Sammy called, as if to break the mood of the moment. “Guess it’s up to you ol’ buddy, Go! Wartortle!”
A Wartortle? Was she stupid? She should have used this pokemon a while back, but I guess it is her favourite, and most probably her most powerful pokemon. Oh well, I guess it was time to destroy her beliefs that she could actually battle pokemon.
“Shockleon, Thunder!”
“Wartortle, Hydro Pump!”
This Hydro pump was an attack I can’t remember encountering before, but I couldn’t imagine it would be that bad, either way, it was a water attack obviously, and Shockleon had a double resistance to water, dragon and electric. We’d learnt it in school, ages back. Funny how the small things pop back into your head when you think about it.
Shockleon was the first to unleash his masterful attack. He was most probably the fastest thing in the universe, and it was all under my command, mine!
He screamed up to the heavens, and a bolt of thunder came down and struck Wartortle, striking it down.
“Over already Sammy? Thought your Wartortle was good?”
“Shut up!” She snapped. “Lo… look! He’s getting up!”
I glanced at her Wartortle, to see that in fact it was getting up. Slowly but surely it was getting up.
“Shockleon, finish this waste! Thunder shock!” I ordered.
Shockleon gladly agreed, and just as Wartortle was getting up, he fired a quick ball of bright yellow electricity at the enemy. Wartortle was hit by this and immediately collapsed.
“Tell me when I need to try Sammy, and don’t waste my very precious time.” I said, as Shockleon trotted back to me.
“Shut your ****ing mouth, you ignorant *******!” Sammy screamed, returning her battered Wartortle. She turned, and sprinted into the vast fields that I had come from.
“Eventful day huh?” Bridget said.
“Guess so, think we can ride Shockleon?”
“In my research, it says the sparks patrolling his body are harmless to human passengers, it sure would get us places faster.” She told me. “You can try it first though, to be safe.”
I laughed, before hoping onto an already crouching Shockleon.
“Seems fine to me Bridg, give it a go.”
She nervously poked Shockleon in the side, before hopping up behind me. Mew plopped herself in front of me.
“To Ovrus city I guess. I got some unfinished business there.”
Bridget nodded, as did Shockleon, and we set off into the distance, at an amazing speed.
Well, I'm glad this is finally back. I'd actually given up on it, but I'm very glad it's back. The only thing is that this last chapter didn't seem as great to me as they used to. Maybe it's because I've been spoiled by the likes of Scrap and Chibi Pika and Serpent Syra with they're awesome description. To me that's what this chapter lacked. You did a great job describing the new pokemon, but it seems things like some of the attacks were a little lackluster and didn't have that flavor I've become so used to.
Another thing is, who's Bridget? I know I haven't read any of this for a while, but I don't ever remember a Bridget earlier.
Finally, I found one mistake.
too should be to.
Just because I thought the chapter was lacking something doesn't mean anything really. I still enjoy reading this and love the plot and characters.
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Another thing is, who's Bridget? I know I haven't read any of this for a while, but I don't ever remember a Bridget earlier.
Finally, I found one mistake.
too should be to.
Just because I thought the chapter was lacking something doesn't mean anything really. I still enjoy reading this and love the plot and characters.
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Motig
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Thanks for the reply, same goes to Bulba the Great who PM'd me.
Okay, here we go
Kaizer63: Well it did take a long time to write, and its been ages since the one before. He met Bridget in the same chapter as Aerie got kidnapped, the one with the pizza and everything...
Bulba: Can't remember what was in you PM exactly, cos i think i deleted it >.>; Althogh if the pokemon didn't go down in 2 attacks, I'd still be writing today ^.^; And i think you're the onl;y person so far who doesn't like Shockleon. It may be a bit unrealistic but Jolteon is my favorite Pokemon, and i needed to make him better >.>
I've lost my PM list so if you want me to PM you for the next chapter, please, when you reply, say so.
I'll start writing the second last chapter of My End soon, expect it sometime in 2007
Only kidding, 2006, 2005 if I'm lucky.
L8r
Motig
Okay, here we go
Kaizer63: Well it did take a long time to write, and its been ages since the one before. He met Bridget in the same chapter as Aerie got kidnapped, the one with the pizza and everything...
Bulba: Can't remember what was in you PM exactly, cos i think i deleted it >.>; Althogh if the pokemon didn't go down in 2 attacks, I'd still be writing today ^.^; And i think you're the onl;y person so far who doesn't like Shockleon. It may be a bit unrealistic but Jolteon is my favorite Pokemon, and i needed to make him better >.>
I've lost my PM list so if you want me to PM you for the next chapter, please, when you reply, say so.
I'll start writing the second last chapter of My End soon, expect it sometime in 2007
Only kidding, 2006, 2005 if I'm lucky.
L8r
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josh09
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Great fic dude. ive read the whole thing including the prequel.
i kinda imagine james at this point to look like itchiai from naruto.
Anyway, great fic, but why did you stop handing out cake? lol
-Josh-
i kinda imagine james at this point to look like itchiai from naruto.
Anyway, great fic, but why did you stop handing out cake? lol
-Josh-
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Motig
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Weee!!!! New fan!
Thanks for the review, your going on the "PM list"
and OMG! I forgot about cake!
*Cake for all*
Right, on with the buisiness. I'm glad you enjoyed the fic and the chapter. I'm starting to write the next chapter now, I will PM ayou when the next chapter is up, meanwhile, I'll write and wait for some more reviews ^^
L8r
Motig
Thanks for the review, your going on the "PM list"
and OMG! I forgot about cake!
*Cake for all*
Right, on with the buisiness. I'm glad you enjoyed the fic and the chapter. I'm starting to write the next chapter now, I will PM ayou when the next chapter is up, meanwhile, I'll write and wait for some more reviews ^^
L8r
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Noelor
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<emerges from nowhere>
So, more of this, huh? Pretty good, I have to admit I'm impressed that you've continued a fic for so long without losing very much of the quality that there was when you started (again. possibly the third time, can't remember how many versions of TFN there were...) like a certain other author... <whistles innocently>
Good chapter, admittedly rather short for a 6-mon battle, but justifiably so even within context. Shockleon is... interesting. I remember one of the two of us sprited that once... quite garish. Also ridiculously powerful, but there's not so much wrong with that, James already has a Mew after all...
There were various typoes and a couple grammar mistakes... but I've lost them. Umbrian I remember came up once... bah.
I should read this from the start again, so I can remember what the hell's going on... but I'd rather play WoW <snicker>
cya
<melts back into the shadows... or something like that>
-DC
So, more of this, huh? Pretty good, I have to admit I'm impressed that you've continued a fic for so long without losing very much of the quality that there was when you started (again. possibly the third time, can't remember how many versions of TFN there were...) like a certain other author... <whistles innocently>
Good chapter, admittedly rather short for a 6-mon battle, but justifiably so even within context. Shockleon is... interesting. I remember one of the two of us sprited that once... quite garish. Also ridiculously powerful, but there's not so much wrong with that, James already has a Mew after all...
There were various typoes and a couple grammar mistakes... but I've lost them. Umbrian I remember came up once... bah.
I should read this from the start again, so I can remember what the hell's going on... but I'd rather play WoW <snicker>
cya
<melts back into the shadows... or something like that>
-DC
Wow. I mean wow and not in the good sense of the word. I mean talk about hopelessly violent. I cant stand the overwhelming violence in this fic. I mean geez i know its a fic but it should at least seem a little like the actual show and or games. I figured i should explain myself for the low rating i gave to this sadistic piece of writing. But once again thats just my opinion. Take no offense by it.
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Motig
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Oh, I'm gonna enjoy this
First of all, thank you Noelor, I'm glad you reviewed my fic.
Now onto you Manulya.
First off, I'd like to say I've read all 3 of your reviews. And all 4 of them have 4 stars, I bet all 3 of them had 5 stars before you reviewed. First off, you said it was hopelessly violent. READ THE WARNINGS! I presifically say before the start of a chapter if its violent or not, and if you don't like violence, then avoid this fic, don't go and complain about it. Second off or whatever, it should seem a little like the show or the games. Erm... I have pokemon in it, and The Forest Newbie was set in Kanto, hmm... not enough about the games. And a little like the show, fics like that are the ones that get low ratings and get closed. If anything, my fic is the anti-show fic, mainly because my character isn't a Mary-sue, and that’s mainly why people like it, because its different from the TV show. Thirdly the low rating, I feel I have not deserved this. What are you expecting? This to be a work of art like Lord of the Rings? I write this for fun, I know this most probably sucks compared to LotR, but you won't find many things even in that league!
And lastly: 'Take no offence by it." a bit like what you ended another 'review' with: "Don't take this to heart" it was something like that. I'm sure the author of that fic has taken offence, like I took offence to your blatant high expectations from a pokemon site. Non of us are professional authors, and we write for fun, and the things that stops our fun is people who write hurtful reviews, when really, the writing isn't that bad, take a look at all the replies to my fic, people generally enjoy it, thats how it got its 5 stars.
Now if you have anything else to say to me, like maybe an apology, you can PM me, but I think I speak out for the other 2 people I saw who you gave an abysmal review to, for a good piece of writing.
I can take a bad review, but that ain’t a bad review, that’s worse
First of all, thank you Noelor, I'm glad you reviewed my fic.
Now onto you Manulya.
First off, I'd like to say I've read all 3 of your reviews. And all 4 of them have 4 stars, I bet all 3 of them had 5 stars before you reviewed. First off, you said it was hopelessly violent. READ THE WARNINGS! I presifically say before the start of a chapter if its violent or not, and if you don't like violence, then avoid this fic, don't go and complain about it. Second off or whatever, it should seem a little like the show or the games. Erm... I have pokemon in it, and The Forest Newbie was set in Kanto, hmm... not enough about the games. And a little like the show, fics like that are the ones that get low ratings and get closed. If anything, my fic is the anti-show fic, mainly because my character isn't a Mary-sue, and that’s mainly why people like it, because its different from the TV show. Thirdly the low rating, I feel I have not deserved this. What are you expecting? This to be a work of art like Lord of the Rings? I write this for fun, I know this most probably sucks compared to LotR, but you won't find many things even in that league!
And lastly: 'Take no offence by it." a bit like what you ended another 'review' with: "Don't take this to heart" it was something like that. I'm sure the author of that fic has taken offence, like I took offence to your blatant high expectations from a pokemon site. Non of us are professional authors, and we write for fun, and the things that stops our fun is people who write hurtful reviews, when really, the writing isn't that bad, take a look at all the replies to my fic, people generally enjoy it, thats how it got its 5 stars.
Now if you have anything else to say to me, like maybe an apology, you can PM me, but I think I speak out for the other 2 people I saw who you gave an abysmal review to, for a good piece of writing.
I can take a bad review, but that ain’t a bad review, that’s worse
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josh09
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sooooooooo, is there a chapter coming along motig? cause im getting sick of waiting. none of my favorite fics have posted chapters in ages
-Josh-
-Josh-