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My first comic.
- Thread starter Dean
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Alas, you will get a review by me.
Ok... Try to work on using a bit more detail when you customize a sprite, add shading, outline it in black and remember things are not 2-D in many good comics. Uh and please tell us where you obtained the sprites too.
Text under panels isn't the greatest practice here, my suggestion is to use speech bubbles by the characters and lead a tail off of that speech bubble to the character that is speaking.
"OK, I'm getting dress right now," is a grammatically incorrect.
"Okay, I'm getting dressed right now," is correct. You did well regarding grammar, but I do think you should run your text through a Word processor before you post a comic. The background looks a bit bland and it's like you didn't spend a very long time on this comic. You need to put more time into formulating comics. Some web comic professionals spend 18 hours just working on their comic.
To be honest I really do not see what is the point of this comic. Let me tell you a tip, an interesting kicker always comes at the last couple panels of a comic. Whatever is going to make you laugh or it's going to be dramatic it's there, otherwise it's going to be unappealing to your audience.
I strongly suggest you go through the stickies at the top, it'll help you with the construction of your comic.
Ok... Try to work on using a bit more detail when you customize a sprite, add shading, outline it in black and remember things are not 2-D in many good comics. Uh and please tell us where you obtained the sprites too.
Text under panels isn't the greatest practice here, my suggestion is to use speech bubbles by the characters and lead a tail off of that speech bubble to the character that is speaking.
"OK, I'm getting dress right now," is a grammatically incorrect.
"Okay, I'm getting dressed right now," is correct. You did well regarding grammar, but I do think you should run your text through a Word processor before you post a comic. The background looks a bit bland and it's like you didn't spend a very long time on this comic. You need to put more time into formulating comics. Some web comic professionals spend 18 hours just working on their comic.
To be honest I really do not see what is the point of this comic. Let me tell you a tip, an interesting kicker always comes at the last couple panels of a comic. Whatever is going to make you laugh or it's going to be dramatic it's there, otherwise it's going to be unappealing to your audience.
I strongly suggest you go through the stickies at the top, it'll help you with the construction of your comic.
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Bagonclaw
Guest
Aiya! Infinity, you beat me again! It seems you said everything I was going to! Anyway, if you take Infinity's crit and use it to make your comic better, more people will come. And don't say "I only have paint."
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Magical Trevor
Guest
well it's your first coic so I can't crit too hard but I reckon you don't need those little numbers at the top of the pannel