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My Harry Potter Story

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Mrs. Daniel Radcliffe

#1 Harry Potter Fan
Hello I'm Mrs. Daniel Radcliffe and this is my first ever fanfiction. This is a Harry Potter fanfiction! Please no flaming, rude comments, or anything of that sort. Please review! Since this is my first fanfic the rating is about PG to PG-13. Also I will try and post the chapters everyday. Its also in paragraph form. This fanfiction is COMPLETELY ORIGINAL. So don't PM me telling me I stole it! Please excuse all spelling mistakes, grammer or anything else. So here's the first chapter....

Chapter One

One morning, on a gloomy Privet Drive, a young boy of seventeen rose from his small bed in his aunt and uncle’s house. His emerald green eyes shown brightly through his unruly black hair, but he had wide-awake for hours knowing that his birthday was today. He stood about 5’9. He had known his friends were coming and that he had to be up. His name was Harry Potter. He knew his aunt and uncle were still asleep so he had made them breakfast and had grabbed his trunks. He also grabbed Hedwig, his faithful owl, and walked out side knowing this was his last year at Hogwarts School for Witchcraft and Wizardry. He had met new people this year and they were all pretty cool. Jasmine Fudge was he’s crush since she had joined last year. She had the most beautiful brown eyes. Her long brown hair went down to her mid-back making her look so sweet. She was in Slytherin, but she would also hang out with the Gryffindor’s on occasion. Since he had kissed Ginny last year, Jasmine went out with Draco Malfoy, his arch-enemy, so that he couldn’t go out with her. Harry knew that this year was different. He had gotten a letter from Hermione and Ron that they were coming for him. Ron was his best friend since they had met on the train first year. Ron had grown since then standing about 6’0. His red hair stayed the same since fourth year. He was also into Quidditch now; Ron was playing keeper on the Gryffindor team. Harry’s other best friend, Hermione, was the smartest in the group. Her boyfriend, Victor Krum, who played on the Bulgarian Quidditch team, had joined Hogwarts to stay with Hermione this year. Hermione had joined Dumbledore’s Army as well as Ron, Harry, and a few others. As the wind blew through Harry’s hair the Ford Angelina drove up. Hermione jumped out first and gave Harry a giant hug. “How have you been Harry?” said Hermione with a smile. “I’m fine, they kept me locked in my room all summer and I just had to get out,” Harry said. They all got in and Harry noticed that Fred and George were in the car driving. “What are you two doing here?“ Harry said. The two looked at each other as Fred said, “We graduated and we wanted to drive you to the Quidditch World Cup this year,” said Fred. Harry smiled as they drove off knowing that the Dursley’s would wake up soon to find out that Harry was not there. Ron asked Harry, “So, you ready for another year of Quidditch?” Harry nodded as they got to the portkey where Mr. Weasley was waiting for them. “Ah, Harry it’s so good to see you,” Mr. Weasley said. Harry nodded as they all grabbed to old boot. Harry noticed Ginny and smiled at her. She smiled back as they were whisked away to the Quidditch World Cup. Harry dusted himself off and helped Ginny up. As they walked to the Quidditch World Cup they noticed Jasmine and another girl with her smiling and laughing. Jasmine was wearing a black t-shirt and jeans. The girl with her was about their age and she had light brown hair with caramel highlights in her hair. Her hazel brown eyes had a hint of green in them. She was wearing a t-shirt and a jean skirt. They both had heels on to make them look taller. Harry and the group walked up to them and smiled. Jasmine noticed Harry and said, “Ello Harry, how are you?”. Harry just smiled and said, “I’m good” Jasmine smiled and said, “Oh, this is my cousin Irena” Irena smiled and waved. “She will be joining from Beauxbaton’s too as a seventh year as well.” Ron smiled and stuck out his hand, “My-My name is Ron, Ron Weasley” she smiled and shook his hand. “Well, we have to go meet up with Draco now. See you at school” she smiled as she walked off. A few minutes later Draco Malfoy walked up to the two and kissed Jasmine on the cheek. She smiled as the two walked away and Irena walked back to Harry and the group. Harry had noticed Draco had changed in a year. His blonde locks went down to mid-ear. He also was wearing a black buttoned up shirt, black slacks, and fancy shoes. As Jasmine and Draco walked hand in hand Hermione tugged on Harry’s shirt and dragged him to the Weasley tent. Irena was talking with Ron as Hermione was talking to Harry. “Those two look so cute” she smiled. “Yeah, I hope she gets sorted into Gryffindor so that Ron won’t get hurt” he looked at Hermione. She nodded and Mr. Weasley said, “Come on everyone, its going to start soon” they all left and walked into the stadium when they all noticed Draco and Jasmine walking around. Draco noticed Harry and said, “Potter, what are you doing here? ”. Harry turned to him and said, “Malfoy, I was invited to come.” Harry gave Draco and Jasmine a dirty look as they walked off.
 
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RaZoR LeAf

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Is your enter key broken? There doesn't appear to be any paragraphing or starting a new line when someone speaks. I suggest you get your keyboard fixed so you can write properly in the future.
 

Mrs. Daniel Radcliffe

#1 Harry Potter Fan
here is chapter 2. This is in paragraph form too.

Chapter Two

The game was the Bulgarian’s versus the Irish. As the game was going Harry was wondering what Jasmine was doing. The Bulgarian’s won and Harry walked back to the tent with the rest of them as Irena walked back to Jasmine and Draco. Jasmine waved to them as she left with Draco. After staying with the Weasley’s for a few days, it was time for them to go to Hogwarts of there last year. As Harry boarded the train he noticed Jasmine, Irena, and Draco getting on the train together. Hermione asked Harry, “You sure you are okay?” Harry just nodded and said, “I’m fine.” As they found an empty compartment they all got in and sat down. Irena walked into their compartment and said, “Ello Ron, Ello Harry, Hermione” they nodded and she took a seat next to Ron. He blushed and scooted over for her to sit next to him. Jasmine opened the door and smiled at Irena. “Don’t be to much trouble okay” Irena nodded and Jasmine left. Everyone fell silent as the train slowly pulled away. Irena was whispering something to Ron that made him blush. Slowly the train stopped as they pulled up to Hogwarts. Everyone grabbed their trunks as they got off. As Hermione, Ron, Harry, and Irena got into the carriages, they could all hear Hagrid say, “First Years come with me.” Harry remembered his first year here the Sorcerer’s Stone and You-Know-Who. Soon the carriages were off for Hogwarts. As Hermione, Ron and Harry walked into the Great Hall, they heard a voice behind them. “Why so tense Potter?” It was Malfoy, Draco Malfoy. He grinned and went to the Slytherin table to sit down. Hermione noticed that Dumbledore was waiting on them, so they quickly sat down. “Welcome Students to another wonderful year at Hogwarts,” soon after there was a round of applause. As he quickly raised his hands, everyone quickly became silent. “This year as promised will be another Yule Ball. Also I would like to welcome back Miss Jasmine and Miss Irena Fudge.” Everyone turned to the Great Hall entrance to see them both standing there. Both of them took their seats at their house tables and Dumbledore continued, “This year is going to be a little different, we are going to have a day called ‘Rose Day’. It’s a day especially for the girls to get roses from secret admirers and friends. There will also be a Valentines Day dance too. At these dances you may were whatever style of dress you like. All students must attend these dances with a date. Without one, you won’t be able to attend. All students must stay out of the Forbidden Forest unless they want a certain death. Also stay out of the third floor corridor, because it’s forbidden. This year were rejoined by our lovely staff. Also to all, have a wonderful year!” Soon after all the tables filled with lots of food. Ron noticed the pile of drumsticks in front of him and smiled, “Can you believe it ‘Arry, were seventh years.” Harry just smiled and turned to look for Jasmine. He spotted her smiling and laughing with Pansy, Draco, Crabbe, Goyle, and Blaise. She soon spotted Harry and waved at him. Harry nodded and turned back to Ron and Hermione. “Harry, are you okay?” said Ginny smiling. Harry nodded and sipped some pumpkin juice. “So Harry, this year are you going to go to Hogsmead with us?” said Ginny smiling. “I don’t know, I might though”, he said to Ginny quietly. On the other side of the Great Hall was Miss Jasmine Fudge. She was a cunning Slytherin at the most but she was brave as a lion. Jasmine lightly kissed Draco on the cheek and continued eating her meal. “So, you going to get a cool dress for the dance Jasmine”, said Pansy in a sly voice. Pansy was jealous of Jasmine at first when she took her Draike-Poo away from her but since then she was okay with it. Jasmine just smiled and said, “Yes, and I want you to help me with it Pansy. You’re going to help me pick it out.” Pansy smiled and then squealed. “Can I help you with your hair and make-up too?”, Jasmine smiled and then nodded. Draco just rolled his eyes at the boys and smiled. “Anything for you Jasmine, I’ll pay for it how’s that”, said Draco. Jasmine hugged Draco just as Dumbledore was just about to speak. “I would like to announce our heads this year”, everyone got quiet. “The Head Girl is going to be Miss Hermione Granger, and Head Boy is going to be Mr. Blaise Zambini”, everyone was smiling. ‘Wow…this year is going to be good’ “May both Heads please come see me after everyone leaves”, he said as he sat down. Jasmine smiled and got up from the table and started to walk towards the Slytherin Common Room. In private, under Mr. Fudge’s order, Irena was sorted into Gryffindor. She was so happy she would be joining Ron, Hermione, and Harry. As soon as she was sorted, she quickly ran towards the Gryffindor Common Room.
 

The Doctor

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No, no, you have not paragraphed it at all, have you dear? IT MADE MY EYES HURT. T_T

This fanfiction is COMPLETELY ORIGINAL. So don't PM me telling me I stole it!
Um, no-one ever said this was stolen. This might be me, but it sounds like you're implying this isn't your idea. But who would want an idea like this anyway? From what I can gather, it's all lovey-dovey and anything else is just unceremoniously shoved aside for one-sided canon ships. If you don't listen to advice soon, this thread will go klaposdie (closed).
 
I reated two very strange threads you realise. One named Fanfiction Rules, an extension of the forum rules. The other is called Advice for Aspiring Authors, a guide to mak sure writting does not melt any eyes.

I highly suggest you read them ebfore you turn anybody else blind.


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