[My Mind and My Heart] - A Poem

[[Cano]]

This is the first time I've ever posted a poem here. I rarely ever write poetry anymore because I seem to become poetic whenever I'm deeply depressed or ecstatically happy. This one comes from a mixture of both poles. Anyways, I thought I would submit this one...hopefully I won't be discouraged from submitting more.

My Mind and My Heart
By Eric A Maldonado

My mind says no,
But my heart says go.
I try to give you up,
but I don't want to...my heart says not to,
but my mind says differently.
My heart doesn't give a flyin **** about the consequences that might come from my feelings,
but my mind takes two steps back.
My heart continues to hold these feelings,
no matter how much my mind tries to beat them out of me...so I feel lost.
I can't tell up from down,
nor left from right.
A sheathe has been pulled over me,
robbing me of my sight.
A sheathe of reality,
confusion and doubt.
And no matter how hard I try,
I can't find my way out.
I'm lost in my own mind,
lost with the key.
But my heart shows me a picture,
and you're all I see.
So I'll take this road,
no matter where it leads me.
Because this maze is my mind,
and my heart is the key.​

Thanks for taking the time to read. Comments or criticisms are welcome alike, if you have the time.

 

[HB5squared]

It sounds familliar... did a song or other poem inspire you to write this one? I'll have to check where I heard this before but whether I did or didn't I still liked it, because it's a poem I feel a little bit pressured to give you a 5/5 but really I think if this was a story I wouldn't come back to see it again so that leaves the verdict as...

Overall... Good!

 

[Kutie Pie]

Aww...That's sweet. *hugs*

I loved it. Yeah, it's true... Our minds tell us it's not yet time, but our heart's cry: "PROCEED TWERP! IT'S TIME TO LOVE!" I'm close to that stage already, so I liked this.

Aww...You rarely write poems? Aw, and you're so good too. *gentle hugs* I hope you post more. You write well. A great blessing. Well, hope to see more heart-warming poems.

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♥Kutie Pie♥ Please be kind to midgets!

 

[[Cano]]

It sounds familliar... did a song or other poem inspire you to write this one? I'll have to check where I heard this before but whether I did or didn't I still liked it, because it's a poem I feel a little bit pressured to give you a 5/5 but really I think if this was a story I wouldn't come back to see it again so that leaves the verdict as...

Overall... Good!

Thank you. And no, I wasn't inspired by another poem or song...just my own thoughts. It actually started out as a letter to the person I'm referring to in the poem, and it ended as the poem you now see. Thanks again.

Aww...That's sweet. *hugs*

I loved it. Yeah, it's true... Our minds tell us it's not yet time, but our heart's cry: "PROCEED TWERP! IT'S TIME TO LOVE!" I'm close to that stage already, so I liked this.

Aww...You rarely write poems? Aw, and you're so good too. *gentle hugs* I hope you post more. You write well. A great blessing. Well, hope to see more heart-warming poems.

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♥Kutie Pie♥ Please be kind to midgets!

Thank you as well. As you can probably tell, I'm in the same sort of predicament...it's very tough. But I think I'll make the right choice in the end.

I use to right them all the time, when I was in the 8th grade. But like I posted earlier, it was due to a deep depression resulting form family matters and lack of many true friends.

And I'm so glad you think so. I'll try to find more inspiration, hopefully of a more optimistic sort next time. And I hope you view the next one too. Thanks again.
[Cano]

 

[billy5772]

whenever I'm deeply depressed or ecstatically happy.

Sounds like bipolar disorder. A lot of famous poets/authors were bipolar, though.

What?

Anyway, I liked this poem. Um, I don't know how the phrase "flyin' ****" fit with the overall tone you had goin' before, but it wasn't too jarring.

Otherwise, an interesting delve into the struggle between emotions and reason, or emotions and reality. I love where you took the "sheathe" symbol...having it be a sheathe of reality. Only because you usually associate reality with being made able to see more clearly, but here you're suggesting it as something that blinds your heart's eye. VERY cool.

Anyway, write more poems!

 

[[Cano]]

Sounds like bipolar disorder. A lot of famous poets/authors were bipolar, though.

What?

Anyway, I liked this poem. Um, I don't know how the phrase "flyin' ****" fit with the overall tone you had goin' before, but it wasn't too jarring.

Otherwise, an interesting delve into the struggle between emotions and reason, or emotions and reality. I love where you took the "sheathe" symbol...having it be a sheathe of reality. Only because you usually associate reality with being made able to see more clearly, but here you're suggesting it as something that blinds your heart's eye. VERY cool.

Anyway, write more poems!

Yeah, sometimes I question if I'm bipolar or not. xD

I put **** in because...I'm kind of a potty mouth so yeah...I couldn't really help it.

This poem sort of reflects how I feel at the moment. I'm stuck between knowing I have feelings for someone, and knowing what having these feelings might mean. At this point reality isn't clearing matters at all; rather, it's a hinderance on my emotions. And where reason normally helps me conquer this obstacle, I'm left alone...

At least that was the feeling I was trying to convey through this poem. ;>>
Anyways thanks billy5772, and I'll see what I can do.
[Cano]

 

[SpaceFlare]

Hmmm, this is good work. Hope to see more.