my new story in the works

[PEE]

hello, iam starting to write about a story about a pokemon trainer fanfic, iam here to share some of the main idea of the story looking for some advise on my story[its my first attempt by the way]

first off i want to make this a boy and his pokemon, trainer story iam thinking his starter pokemon might be a makuhita, the way i have it plained so far the story takes place deep in a villiage called yumi village its a fighting pokemon villiage,
were there are dojo masters that battle and carry out missions in there villiage and outside there village.
the main person of the story is basicly a orphan kid who everyone in his villiage hates, he also is a trouble maker that plays pranks on others in the village, he meets a makuhita thats the same way, after going throuth some troublesome adventures with each other they become friends, but before he can become a pokemon trainer and leave the villiage he has to prove to the villiage lord that hes ready to set on his own and become a trianer so he gets asigned a dojo master teacher along with two other wana b trainers and the 3 of them try to prove they can be pokemon trainers, i dont wana give to much away, at the end of the day this is just a brand new storie that i just recently started writeing,iam a newbie writer so any advice would be very helpful

1.i would like to know does anyone think this sounds good?
2.do u think makuhitas a good starter pokemon? if not do u have a better starter in mind?
3.iam also trying to throw a romance in this story can i get advice on a good romance?
4.what pokemon would u like to see caught that dont appear alote in fanfics?
5.iam also looking for someone whos good at writeing i was thinking i could maybe team up with someone so i was wondering if there are anygood writers interested in my story idea?
7.anyone have a good name ideas for the main person in my story?
8.anyother adivice would be great

thanks in advance

 

[Astinus]

Sounds an awful lot like Naruto. Inspired by the story line, and wanted to put a Pokémon spin on it?

It's a different idea from the typical "go on a journey" fic, and a slightly different take on the school fics. Makuhita isn't used much in fics, I believe, so that's different.

It appears like you need a proof-reader. Unless this was just you typing quickly...?

I don't know if asking for other people's advice on a plot and even name for your character is a good idea. I'm not sure at all. If you do follow another's advice and ideas, then it seems like you are just writing another's fic.

For your shipping problem, I can't help you there. All I can suggest is reading other shipping fics to get a feel for how things are done.

Don't ask me to be a co-writer. I'm too busy with my own fic. Sorry.

 

[Heigani]

It actually sounds pretty good. So long as you use proper grammar. And Makuhita's a good starter, (just don't make it all immortal, that sorta ruins it.) And something like, maybe... 'Kunn' for your character? Romance is good, just don't make it happen all of a sudden, make it linger. And I'd like to see a Dunsparce or something caught. Well, those are my opinions. You can ignore them if you want.

 

[TheTurquoiseTauros!]

you should make the pokemon a pokemon that hurts fighting types and the kid gets kicked out of the village and starts a journey!!!!

 

[Jonouchi]

In order

1.i would like to know does anyone think this sounds good?

It seems a bit too much like Naruto, you know, with the troublemaker, the orphan and the disowning and all. Try to make it more original and somewhat different from what others read or have seen

2.do u think makuhitas a good starter pokemon? if not do u have a better starter in mind?

I guess. Makutita has some decent stats. It's up to you

3.iam also trying to throw a romance in this story can i get advice on a good romance?

Don't make chiche romance things (Saving a kidnapped princess, for example), also, make an event that eventually has them showing their true feeling somwhere towards the end

I'm not good with romance though, so get advice from someone else

4.what pokemon would u like to see caught that dont appear alote in fanfics?

Again, your descision. I haven't read too many fanfics to say who's appeared and who hasn't

5.iam also looking for someone whos good at writeing i was thinking i could maybe team up with someone so i was wondering if there are anygood writers interested in my story idea?

If you mean co-write. I guess one of us could lend you a hand, maybe me. Take advice from withers though and work on that spelling too

WHERE'S 6?!

7.anyone have a good name ideas for the main person in my story?

Once more, your decision. If you're stuck....let's see...Kagari? I don't know

8.anyother adivice would be great

Look in the Advice for Aspiring Authors if you need help. Also, work on the spelling. It'll greatly improve your fic's reputation


Take time to think these kinds of things. If you take our advice, you'll be good to go