SlwaBluPhnx
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OK, I know I have no talent for this, but I could use some constructive feedback. Here is the one I wrote in the class.
Learn to play the game
So you might obey the same
As time goes on for all
To the lead you'll fall
Speaking nothing but ramming lies
At the end there is no big suprise
What you see is what you be
It isn't hard to do what you see
But it is not you nor your kind
To the glade of death you will come
One struck by lightning of anguish and fire
Will you be burned, shocked or will you hire
Bearing hate to your body
To wanna horphinto ones you see as chubby
Like a virus liquified your guts
There is nothing left of you other than your skin and lies
As you walk the march of chaos
The path you walk is a bad choice
In God must believe, in deny frozen in cold
You only move like a stringed doll
Early stages of the end we foresaw
Victims of prices sold
Divided we stand, united we fall
Won't come the doom of raze
Desire for someone who believe only in thyself
The light comes, brought by the elves
No, it is just the bore of our own fate
Fated to never shift we bleed
Cause the one above us bleeded before we
We're yawn, coiled of the same
So cat will tear us all but all
Because we're punished to be the same
One singled out will live
Differ your soul so you might feel
How a steal they made, the ones of steel
I don't know about the title. I came up with something but it wasnt good. So comments. Don't be harsh please.
Learn to play the game
So you might obey the same
As time goes on for all
To the lead you'll fall
Speaking nothing but ramming lies
At the end there is no big suprise
What you see is what you be
It isn't hard to do what you see
But it is not you nor your kind
To the glade of death you will come
One struck by lightning of anguish and fire
Will you be burned, shocked or will you hire
Bearing hate to your body
To wanna horphinto ones you see as chubby
Like a virus liquified your guts
There is nothing left of you other than your skin and lies
As you walk the march of chaos
The path you walk is a bad choice
In God must believe, in deny frozen in cold
You only move like a stringed doll
Early stages of the end we foresaw
Victims of prices sold
Divided we stand, united we fall
Won't come the doom of raze
Desire for someone who believe only in thyself
The light comes, brought by the elves
No, it is just the bore of our own fate
Fated to never shift we bleed
Cause the one above us bleeded before we
We're yawn, coiled of the same
So cat will tear us all but all
Because we're punished to be the same
One singled out will live
Differ your soul so you might feel
How a steal they made, the ones of steel
I don't know about the title. I came up with something but it wasnt good. So comments. Don't be harsh please.
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