Emerald Charizard
Beginning Trainer
i have a few different versions.
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Emerald Charizard
Beginning Trainer
thsi is pokemon zero comic version 2
Emerald Charizard
Beginning Trainer
this is pokemon comic version 1
Omega Pirate
shove it up ya bum!
I'm sorry but these comics are horrible. What was the point of the Lapras doll bit? Everything is so rushed its like a 5 year old wrote it.
Emerald Charizard
Beginning Trainer
the lapras doll was so kai will buy them something since they like him
Emerald Charizard
Beginning Trainer
oh i made the top one my little brother made the bottom one
Divine_Light
Espeon will own all!
Oh deargod what has happend here, No offence but i hate newbie ruining ever thread but filling it up with [SPOIL]crap[/SPOIL] sorry but quit while your ahead i mean behind
Alphonse Elric
That's My Rule!!!
What_ the _ heck?
Sorry, but your comics are ridiculously unorganized, and they should have been saved in PNG. The panels are confusing. And it seems as if you just put in some random sprites in there... Though the plot seems a bit... okay, I guess.
And please DO NOT Double/Triple/Quintuple Post, this IS NOT a Chatroom, and it's completely against the rules. There is an edit button on the bottom right corner, please learn how to use it.
Sorry, but your comics are ridiculously unorganized, and they should have been saved in PNG. The panels are confusing. And it seems as if you just put in some random sprites in there... Though the plot seems a bit... okay, I guess.
And please DO NOT Double/Triple/Quintuple Post, this IS NOT a Chatroom, and it's completely against the rules. There is an edit button on the bottom right corner, please learn how to use it.
munchlaxboy
Catching up on XY
This comic is going way to fast and just plain stupid. The starters are eevee, bagon, and pikachu? WTF!? Oh, and it was really stupid when Jak said ,"since 2 out of 3 won, you all pass!" This WILL NEVER go anywhere. Oh, and your grammer is horrid.
jellsprout
Well-Known Member
Oh boy, this is going to take a while.
Before I start, I want you to know that I'm typing this to help you make better comics, not because I want to hurt your feelings or something. This is not flaming but giving construetive critisism.
Comic 1:
-Save as PNG, not as JPG. When you save something, there is a panel near the bottem-left corner. Change it to PNG everytime you save a new image. JPG ruines a image's quality so that it takes up less space. It is used for saving images, so don't use it for anything else.
-There are many, many grammar mistakes. First of all, you must use a capital for each first letter of a sentence. Your punctuation is also not very good. Always end a sentence with a period, end a question with a question mark, end a command with a exclemation mark and devide a sentence into two parts with either the word "and" or with a comma. You must also put an apostrophe between "we" and "re". Otherwise it says were, as in the past of are, instead of we are. You must also always use a capital with the word "I".
-The humour is not very funny. The "we need 4000 yen for a doll" joke was random and didn't make any sence and not in the good way.
-Why does Ryu want to travel with Kai when they didn't even know eachother? Ryu didn't even knew Kai's name when he asked him to travel with him. And if Ryu asks anybody he meets to travel with him, then why doesn't he travel in a group of 100+ people?
-Does that girl with the black hair always stand behind the girl with the blue hair?
-Why is that Bonsly gold one moment and brown the other moment?
-I feel sorry for that Metapod. He gets attacked in the back by Kakuna in the back and his trainer is walking away.
-Try to make all panels the same size and line them up in rows. That way you don't have to number them and you don't have to puzzle to know in what order you have to read them.
-Don't make such big comics. The stuff that happened could have easily be spreaded out over 5 or 6 other comics.
-How can Ryu and Kai capture those Poochyena without even fighting them?
-How can a newly obtained Bonsly beat an expirienced Agrron using Vine Whip? And how can an Umbreon beat a Mightyena with Psybeam when Psychic attacks don't affect Dark Pokémon? How can an Umbreon even have Psybeam?
-Journey comics suck horribly 99% of the times. So don't make one.
-Speech bubbles are nearly always better then text-under-panel.
Comic 2:
-Again, the people decide to travel together without even knowing eachother. I beleive Meg and Eric still don't know Mark's and Max's names.
-The grammar is again horrible. Use proper puncuation, capitals and all that stuff.
-Save in PNG, not JPG.
-This one could have also easily been split into 4 or 5 comics.
-The Gym battle didn't made any sence. Although one of them lost, he still got a badge because to other kids, who's names he doesn't even know, won?
-Eevee doesn't learn Counter.
-The four kids are in one town one moment and in another town in a blink? What happened to them between the two towns? I thought this was a journey comic.
-Journey comics suck 99% of the times. Don't make one.
-Speech bubbles are nearly always better then text-under-panel.
Also, don't double/triple/quadruple/centuple post for whatever reason. Use
instead.
Before I start, I want you to know that I'm typing this to help you make better comics, not because I want to hurt your feelings or something. This is not flaming but giving construetive critisism.
Comic 1:
-Save as PNG, not as JPG. When you save something, there is a panel near the bottem-left corner. Change it to PNG everytime you save a new image. JPG ruines a image's quality so that it takes up less space. It is used for saving images, so don't use it for anything else.
-There are many, many grammar mistakes. First of all, you must use a capital for each first letter of a sentence. Your punctuation is also not very good. Always end a sentence with a period, end a question with a question mark, end a command with a exclemation mark and devide a sentence into two parts with either the word "and" or with a comma. You must also put an apostrophe between "we" and "re". Otherwise it says were, as in the past of are, instead of we are. You must also always use a capital with the word "I".
-The humour is not very funny. The "we need 4000 yen for a doll" joke was random and didn't make any sence and not in the good way.
-Why does Ryu want to travel with Kai when they didn't even know eachother? Ryu didn't even knew Kai's name when he asked him to travel with him. And if Ryu asks anybody he meets to travel with him, then why doesn't he travel in a group of 100+ people?
-Does that girl with the black hair always stand behind the girl with the blue hair?
-Why is that Bonsly gold one moment and brown the other moment?
-I feel sorry for that Metapod. He gets attacked in the back by Kakuna in the back and his trainer is walking away.
-Try to make all panels the same size and line them up in rows. That way you don't have to number them and you don't have to puzzle to know in what order you have to read them.
-Don't make such big comics. The stuff that happened could have easily be spreaded out over 5 or 6 other comics.
-How can Ryu and Kai capture those Poochyena without even fighting them?
-How can a newly obtained Bonsly beat an expirienced Agrron using Vine Whip? And how can an Umbreon beat a Mightyena with Psybeam when Psychic attacks don't affect Dark Pokémon? How can an Umbreon even have Psybeam?
-Journey comics suck horribly 99% of the times. So don't make one.
-Speech bubbles are nearly always better then text-under-panel.
Comic 2:
-Again, the people decide to travel together without even knowing eachother. I beleive Meg and Eric still don't know Mark's and Max's names.
-The grammar is again horrible. Use proper puncuation, capitals and all that stuff.
-Save in PNG, not JPG.
-This one could have also easily been split into 4 or 5 comics.
-The Gym battle didn't made any sence. Although one of them lost, he still got a badge because to other kids, who's names he doesn't even know, won?
-Eevee doesn't learn Counter.
-The four kids are in one town one moment and in another town in a blink? What happened to them between the two towns? I thought this was a journey comic.
-Journey comics suck 99% of the times. Don't make one.
-Speech bubbles are nearly always better then text-under-panel.
Also, don't double/triple/quadruple/centuple post for whatever reason. Use
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pokeinuyasha
:D!
Ah, well... this is not good, I have to admit. Well, the same as jellsprout, you must improve some way. Continue making comics, but make careful planning before it and do not make Pokémon have attacks they can't learn. And you must work your grammar, and puntuaction too. Tell this to your little brother too. If we must choose one of them, I choose the one on the top. Save it as PNG. And your Pokémon just have plain strange colors. Completely gray Poochyenas? Gold Bonsly? And I thought that initial Pokémon didn't had special attacks yet! Your special effects are horrible, do not use Paint tools to make attacks, that's just plain stupid! Try, and you'll be better. But I admit, this is not good, sorry. Oh, yeah, and read some other good fics to jave an idea of how to make a comic.
Emerald Charizard
Beginning Trainer
thanks for your comments i will make my new commic better i even made my own custom sprites
Emerald Charizard
Beginning Trainer
here is the new one of this one i re made it.
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Emerald Charizard
Beginning Trainer
Sorry it is still in number form but my next one wont. I didnt change this one because it was done already
It is way, way, way, too rushed. They get a badge in one comic? If you keep this rate up, they'll be Pokémon Champions within 20 comics. Also, use puncation. Capitals, commas, et cetera. The non-stop sentences give it an even more rushed feel. Work on your effects too. And use the damn edit button already. You're going to get a ban this way.
The_Person25
Yo
Use the Edit button. You'll get banned sooner or later. With the comic though:
1. You have horribly recolored sprites. If you're going to recolor DON'T USE DEFAULT PAINT COLORS and add some more stuff (sunglasses, moustaches, tentacles, backpacks, etc.) to your sprite you recolored.
2. If you're going to make a journey comic, add some interesting stuff (twists and other stuff) to the plot since MOST journey comics usually turn out bad.
3. Use proper grammar. It's okay to have A FEW mistakes but please... Too many mistakes make your comic horrid. Use punctuation (commas, capitals, periods, spelling, etc.)
4. WORK ON YOUR BACKGROUNDS.
5. The thickness of the lines of your panels keep changing.
6. There's a lot of white within your panels.
7. Make better effects. Just because you might not have PhotoShop doesn't mean you have to have bad effects.
8. Panels are all mixed up. Keep them in SOME specific order.
9. Use speech bubbles. Text under panels is a bit confusing to tell which character is talking.
10. Work on your humor.
11. YOUR COMICS ARE HUGE. Make them a bit smaller (3 comics nearly took almost all the page).
12. Give credit to the people who made your sprites unless they don't need credit.
1. You have horribly recolored sprites. If you're going to recolor DON'T USE DEFAULT PAINT COLORS and add some more stuff (sunglasses, moustaches, tentacles, backpacks, etc.) to your sprite you recolored.
2. If you're going to make a journey comic, add some interesting stuff (twists and other stuff) to the plot since MOST journey comics usually turn out bad.
3. Use proper grammar. It's okay to have A FEW mistakes but please... Too many mistakes make your comic horrid. Use punctuation (commas, capitals, periods, spelling, etc.)
4. WORK ON YOUR BACKGROUNDS.
5. The thickness of the lines of your panels keep changing.
6. There's a lot of white within your panels.
7. Make better effects. Just because you might not have PhotoShop doesn't mean you have to have bad effects.
8. Panels are all mixed up. Keep them in SOME specific order.
9. Use speech bubbles. Text under panels is a bit confusing to tell which character is talking.
10. Work on your humor.
11. YOUR COMICS ARE HUGE. Make them a bit smaller (3 comics nearly took almost all the page).
12. Give credit to the people who made your sprites unless they don't need credit.
Divine_Light
Espeon will own all!
Oh god here we go again please for your own safety stop double and tripple posting and maybe you'll be better at writting knot comic making
pokeinuyasha
:D!
Sorry, but they continue bad. The effects are still horrible, and your sprites are somewhat good, but Richie is too thick, don't you think? If there's a Pokémon that has white in it, that doens't means that you must leave the white part transparent. It looks like the Marril's belly is made out of glass! The comics are too huge and the panels are confusing. The lines are different and they earned a badge in one comic? Don't double/triple, etc. post, edit your post instead! Your grammar, puntuaction, etc. are also bad. The panels are big. That's bad, they're WAY too big. And Oak says that Pikachus dislike pokeballs. There are just some Pikachu that dislike it. Just because Ash's Pikachu dislike it, that doensn't mens that all them dislike it. And Oak says it in just one panel? Did he already knew that a long time ago? Sorry, but it needs a lot of work...
Emerald Charizard
Beginning Trainer
is there a program for making sprite comics?