my very first team ever!

[floatzel98]

this is my very first team i've ever made. so don't be to harsh , but i would like the help from you guys.ok.here we go.

THE LEAD

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Houndoom@leftovers
Ability:flash fire
Ev's:40HP/252SpA/216Spe
Moves:
Taunt
Flamethrower
Dark pulse
Will-o-wisp


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kingdra@Leftovers
Ability:Swift swim
Ev's:252Atk/24SpA/232Spe
Moves
DD
Waterfall
Ice beam/Draco meteor
Outrage

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Staraptor@
Ability:Intimadate
Ev's:4HP/252Atk/252Spe
Moves
Closecombat
Return
Brave bird
U-turn

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Tyranitar@
Ability:Sand stream
Ev's:252Atk/176HP/80Spe
Move's
DD
Aqua tail
Stone Edge
EQ

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Gardivour@
Ability:Trace
Ev's:56HP/252SpA/216Spe
Move's:
Thunderwave
Psychic
Thunderbolt
Shadowball

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Electivire@Expert Belt
Ability:Motor drive
Ev's:4HP/252Atk/252Spe
Move's
Thunderbolt
Ice punch
Cross Chop
EQ

Yes well thats my team and i'd like any help i could get so, well.

Changes in BOLD

 

[Pandeji]

Just to start off with for the other real raters to get here, we need to know natures, held items are also good. And you might wanna edit your sig after this... =P

 

[Darkfall]

Your sig makes me want to tell you to get out but those're competitive movesets if I ever 'em.

I'll rate what I can without full info:

Houndoom is a decent set, but not as a lead.
It's stopped by many Taunt/Scout leads and does nothing to Heatran, who'd likely switch in on WoW and feed you Earth Power for breakfast.
Go for HP Fighting > NP as Doom is too frail/predictable to set up.

Shell Bell is rubbish, go with Leftovers or Life Orb.
Otherwise standard.

Return > Fly on Staraptor.

PSP char limit.

 

[floatzel98]

well i told you that it was my first team so i don't know really wat 2 chose

 

[Pandeji]

He's not being mean. ^^;;
It's competitive team rate and he's just, well, competitively rating your team.
And he also gave you props on your movesets in general.
Hahaha I'm a recent competitive player as well, so no worries about the apparant harshness some raters have.
It's all in good fun.

 

[Darkfall]

Fly lets your opponent set up/have a free turn/leaves you open to Thunder.
Choice it or Muscle Band, as LO will KO it quicker.

I don't understand Ttar. Ice Beam with no SpAtk EVs seems bizarre.

Thunder Wave/WoW oo Gardevoir. Both are more reliable then Hypnosis. Run an Ice Attack over Psychic.

Thunderbolt > Fire Punch.
Cross Chop > Brick Break.
Expert Belt.
Standard.

Otherwise Gyarados destroys you.

You have no counter to it, nothing to support Staraptor and no clear strategy.

 

[floatzel98]

Thanks anyway guys and thanks for the help.

 

[Reno]

Add descriptions or this will be closed.

 

[Darkfall]

Taunt on Houndoom is a terrible choice, it's far too frail. Sucker Punch is preffered as you can get the drop on something, and revenge kill with something.

Don't ignore Reno. Not that you would eh?