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Naked-Advanceshipping One-Shot, Rated PG

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Uchiha Sakura

Sasuke-kun. <3
So, I got bored and was searching through my advanceshipping one-shots, and found this one. You may have seen it on Fanfiction.net, but I decided to post it here as well. So here's Naked, based off the song "Naked" by Avril Lavigne. ^^

WARNING-This is an advanceshipping fic, so if you don't like the pairing, then I suggest you don't read ahead.

Naked
Rated PG​
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The darkness of the night was peacefully fading over a small Pokemon Center. On the upper floor Ash and the gang were spread apart in three rooms. Max and Brock were sharing a room and Ash and May had their own. They guys were peacefully asleep, but a dream that was somewhat horrifying had woken May up.

I wake up in the morning
Put on my face
The one that's gonna get me
Through another day


She was slowly pacing back and forth in front of her small bed. Her dream simply boggled her 12-year-old mind. “Why would I dream about him like that?” She asked herself in her head. “After all, he’s my friend…but do I have feelings for him?” May shuddered at the very thought. “I can’t think about him like that, it’ll ruin our friendship!” She sighed deeply. “I just need a nice cold shower,” she said quietly to herself.

Doesn't really matter
How I feel inside
'Cause life is like a game sometimes


May glanced at her clock. It was a little past 5:30 in the morning. Everyone else wouldn’t be up for a while, so that would give her time to organize her thoughts. She grabbed her bag and went into the bathroom, locking the door behind her.
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Ash slowly opened his eyes and sat up straight. He thought that he heard May awake in the next room. He checked the clock and saw the same time she did. “I’d better make sure she’s okay.” He slowly got up and walked out of his room, Pikachu still asleep on the bed. He knocked on May’s door and waited for her to answer.

But then you came around me
The walls just disappeared
Nothing to surround me
And keep me from my fears


May quickly turned off the water and wrapped a towel around herself. She walked out the bathroom door. “Who’s there?” she asked.

“It’s me,” Ash replied.

She quickly opened the door and saw Ash standing there. She didn’t notice but Ash blushed slightly when he saw that she was only wearing a towel. “Come on in,” she said quietly. Her hair was soaked and beads of water were slowly sliding down her skin. Ash couldn’t help but looking at her as she closed the door.

“What are you doing up so early?” He finally asked her.

May hesitated a bit. “I couldn’t get back to sleep. I had a dream that was…kind of freaky.” She almost hit herself. She wasn’t supposed to tell him that much! But a small part of her felt comfortable telling him these things.

I'm unprotected
See how I've opened up
Oh, you've made me trust


“What do you mean?”

May sighed deeply. She wasn’t sure if she should tell him or not. After all, she could trust him. But he was the one person that her secret would affect the most.

Because I've never felt like this before
I'm naked
Around you
Does it show?
You see right through me
And I can't hide
I'm naked
Around you
And it feels so right


She sat down on her bed and looked down at her feet. “Well lately, I’ve been looking at one of my friends in a different way.”

Ash sat down next to her. “Again, what do you mean?”

May bit her bottom lip to keep from laughing. She slowly looked up at him. “I mean that…I’m starting to look at them as more than just a friend.”

Ash was a bit confused. “Like as a boyfriend?”

“Yeah, exactly.” She was a bit shocked that Ash had figured that out.

“Is he someone I already know?”

“Yeah I would hope so,” she said in her mind. “Yeah.”

“Is it Drew?”

“No,” she replied.

“Brock?”

May shook her head.

Ash thought for a moment. “I can’t think of anyone else.”

May sweatdropped. “Are you sure?”

“Yes.”

May was getting slightly uncomfortable. “If I tell you will you promise not to laugh at me?”

“Yes, May just tell me!”

May hesitated. “It’s you,” she said softly.

“What?”

I'm trying to remember
Why I was afraid
To be myself and let the
The covers fall away
I guess I never had someone like you
To help me, to help me fit
In my skin


She stood up and walked in front of him. “It’s you okay! You’re the one that I’ve fallen in love with!” She said a little louder. The she realized what she had said. “I-I didn’t say love before, did I?” she asked, her voice a little shaky.

Ash slowly shook his head. May sighed and sat down where she was before. She looked down at her feet and she was blushing. “I don’t think I should’ve told you that,” she replied softly.

Ash put his hand on hers. “I’m glad you did May, because,” he paused for a second, lifting her face so their eyes met, “I love you too.”

May was slightly surprised. “You do?" She questioned.

I never felt like this before
I'm naked
Around you
Does it show?
You see right through me
And I can't hide
I'm naked
Around you
And it feels so right


Ash didn’t say anything. Instead he slowly leaned in and kissed her. She blushed slightly but returned the kiss. But then she slowly broke away. “I just realized I’m only wearing a towel.” She said, giggling softly. “I’ll be right back.” She walked into the bathroom to get dressed.

I'm naked
Oh oh yeah
Does it show?
Yeah, I'm naked
Oh oh, yeah yeah


May came out a few minutes later wearing her usual outfit. She glanced over at the clock at it was almost 6:00. “I know it’s still kinda early, but do you wanna get something to eat?” She asked.

“I think you should know the answer to that!”

May laughed. “You’re right. Let’s go then!” She exclaimed, grabbing his hand and pulling him out the door. Ash slowly pulled the door shut behind them. As they were quietly walking down the hall, they couldn’t help but feel so relieved to get those feelings out in the open. Now, they were free to keep nothing from each other. They turned to each other and smiled, as if they knew what the other was thinking. Ash and May slowly looked back ahead of them, continuing to walk down the hall. They were no longer afraid to be “naked” around each other.

I'm so naked around you
And I can't hide
You're gonna see right through, baby

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Meh, a bit of a corny ending, I know. <.<; It's about 4 pages on Word, so it's a bit short IMO. ^^; So...that's all I have to say.
 
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Satoshi

リーリエの為に戦ってるトレーナー
I'm not an Advanceshipper, but this one-shot is pretty good. Nice in details, but Ash was a little OoC. The length of it wasn't very good, like you said, it reaches 4 pages on word, most one-shots reach between 7 and 9 pages on Microsoft Word. Otherwise, it was still great in-general.

The title drove me the wrong way at first. :p
 
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dragonmaster5000

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Oh wow, this story was so good! Ash was a bit clueless when he was asking her about the other boys, but the story was sweet nonetheless...and not corny at all. Heh...the title also drove me the wrong way at first. XD
 
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Ember

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I remember reading this on ff.net. It's very good and I love it! Keep up the great work!
 
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PikachuBlue

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Great song fic. The song was perfect for the plot and Ash and May's interaction towards one another. Anyways keep up the good work. ^^
 

Uchiha Sakura

Sasuke-kun. <3
Thanks a bunch for the reviews. ^^ Now, to um...review the reviews. o_O;

Satoshi said:
I'm not an Advanceshipper, but this one-shot is pretty good. Nice in details, but Ash was a little OoC. The length of it wasn't very good, like you said, it reaches 4 pages on word, most one-shots reach between 7 and 9 pages on Microsoft Word. Otherwise, it was still great in-general.

The title drove me the wrong way at first. :p
Yeah, I generally make the male characters a bit OOC without realizing it. ^^; I need to work on that. And the length, as well. <__< Lol, I figured the title might do that. xD

dragonmaster5000 said:
Oh wow, this story was so good! Ash was a bit clueless when he was asking her about the other boys, but the story was sweet nonetheless...and not corny at all. Heh...the title also drove me the wrong way at first. XD
Thank you. ^^ I might have overdone-it with Ash's dense...quality...or something along those lines. o__O Meh...it's just corny IMO. xD

may2 said:
I remember reading this on ff.net. It's very good and I love it! Keep up the great work!
Thank you. ^^ I'm actually thinking about making another songfic sometime soon, once I find the perfect song. ^^;

PikachuBlue said:
Great song fic. The song was perfect for the plot and Ash and May's interaction towards one another. Anyways keep up the good work. ^^
It's somewhat hard to find a good storyline to go perfectly with songs. But, once you find it, it turns out like this story. xP And thanks ^^
 
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dragonmaster5000

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Butter Knyfe said:
Thank you. ^^ I'm actually thinking about making another songfic sometime soon, once I find the perfect song. ^^;

I wish I could help, but I'm not good with songs...just piano and violin. XD How about a romantic Christmas song? It's almost Christmas, and there seems to be a ton of Christmas songs. *goes to find one*
 

Uchiha Sakura

Sasuke-kun. <3
Meganium XD said:
I also read this on FF.net, but it was prety good!

I also got confused at first by the title, but no offence
Lol, none taken. xD I was actually wondering if the title was going to confuse people. xP And thanks. xD

dragonmaster5000 said:
I wish I could help, but I'm not good with songs...just piano and violin. XD How about a romantic Christmas song? It's almost Christmas, and there seems to be a ton of Christmas songs. *goes to find one*
Well, I already have an idea in mind for an advanceshipping Christmas story. ;P It's not gonna be a songfic, but still a one-shot. So that'll be around...sometime in December. xP
 

Devilrose

Super Coordinator
I've read this already on fanfiction.net, but I don't think I ever realized it was your fic >.> Its pretty good though. Found a spelling error though >.>

May shock her head.

Should be shook *nod*
 
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dragonmaster5000

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Butter Knyfe said:
Well, I already have an idea in mind for an advanceshipping Christmas story. ;P It's not gonna be a songfic, but still a one-shot. So that'll be around...sometime in December. xP

Okay, I can't wait! Why do I feel like this involves a lot of mistletoe? XD I wish I could write half as well as you guys, but I'm only good with essays and not fanfiction. *sigh* Good luck with that! *begins countdown to Christmas*
 

Power Shot

Reignited with Ego!
Nicely done, I enjoyed that immensly. I saw no errors in grammer or spelling, very rare even for my fics. I look forward to more of your work.
 

Uchiha Sakura

Sasuke-kun. <3
devilrose said:
I've read this already on fanfiction.net, but I don't think I ever realized it was your fic >.> Its pretty good though.
Thanks. ^^ And I found the error and fixed it. <.< I don't know how that got by me but...oh well. xD

dragonmaster5000 said:
Okay, I can't wait! Why do I feel like this involves a lot of mistletoe? XD I wish I could write half as well as you guys, but I'm only good with essays and not fanfiction. *sigh* Good luck with that! *begins countdown to Christmas*
Um...cause it does? xD And it took me a lot of writing, and a looot of mistakes, to get this far with my writing skills. ^^ If you keep practicing, you'll get better. ^^

Power Shot said:
Nicely done, I enjoyed that immensly. I saw no errors in grammer or spelling, very rare even for my fics. I look forward to more of your work.
Thank you. ^^ I'm so glad that Word has spell check, otherwise I'd make a lot of mistakes. <.<
 
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