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Operation GEAR: The Angel of Reckoning (R)

The Great Butler

Hush, keep it down
FINALLY! I'm sorry for the long delay.

For the sake of caution, this chapter contains mentions of several crimes including murder and kidnapping, and a scene involving abduction victims that may be slightly disturbing to some.

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CHAPTER 4: Reaching for the Arcade Star (Part 1)

-:-

Cherrygrove City was a busy city on a coastline, larger than New Bark Town but still smaller than many of the other metropolis-size cities on the continent. Few of its buildings reached comparable heights to the skyscrapers those cities had, but Cherrygrove’s buildings – both residential apartment complexes and commercial centers – were enough to pack plenty into the small area of land the city actually occupied.

The previous night, while Matt, Olivia, Nekou and Bunny were staying at the home of Dr. Dante Fantomos, rain was buffeting Cherrygrove City much like Route 29. As a result, few were outside, and Pierce was completely fine with that fact. His mission entailed meeting a contact covertly, so as he stepped into an alley between two buildings, he appreciated the additional cover the rain provided him on top of the darkness of night.

Pierce walked a short distance down the alley before stopping, and after a moment’s hesitation, he raised his hand and snapped his fingers four times.

“So… you’ve come,” a woman who was hiding in the alley’s darkness said, emerging nearly immediately upon Pierce’s giving the signal. She was wearing a heavy coat that appeared to have significantly discolored over time along with a tattered blue scarf wrapped around her head and shoulders, obscuring the upper half of her face in a shadow. Though he did not voice it, what troubled Pierce about this seemingly homeless woman was that she carried a small child wrapped in a blanket in her arms. “Why has your organization sought us out?”

Significantly unsettled by this woman for a reason he could not fully identify, Pierce struggled to maintain his rigid composure. “Polaris has made its move, which has left Team Rocket with no choice but to take all available action to counter them. We are aware that you Tenganists who are left are planning to oppose them as well, so I have come to offer you a negotiation. Team Rocket can offer your group supplies to battle Polaris in exchange for your assistance in destroying them.”

“And why should I trust you?” the woman scoffed, though with a strange hint of fear in her voice.

“If you’re not convinced of my sincerity,” Pierce flatly stated, extending his right hand, “then take my hand. Everything will become clear.”

The woman haltingly placed her own right hand in Pierce’s, and the two of them abruptly froze. This lasted for several seconds before she pulled away, gasping for air.

“I could feel it in your mind… you’re one of us, too… one of my people… but why? Why turn to Team Rocket?”

“The circumstances of our lives are not easily controlled. My Tenganist heritage is not something I was raised in, as you were. Now, about the offer we can provide you…”

“I cannot make that decision right now. I am merely a symbol for the horrors inflicted upon our people by Ghetsis Harmonia, a symbol to motivate what remains of our dying culture to survive by any means necessary. Our enemy is Ghetsis, not Polaris.”

“You must not be aware that Ghetsis Harmonia is, in fact, a high-ranking member of Polaris.”

That apparently was the case, for as soon as Pierce stated that fact, the woman stepped back and gasped. Her voice became shaky and uncertain. “If Ghetsis is a member of Polaris, than this could be my chance to… I could finally…” Looking up at Pierce, the woman said, “I can’t decide right now. What that man is responsible for doing to us… and to me… I need some time to know if I’m ready to face it.”

“I will return here tomorrow night,” Pierce declared, turning toward the street. “I request that you make your decision by then.”

-:-

By the next morning, the rain had cleared up, and bright sunlight peeked through the patchwork of clouds still in the sky.

Nekou, Bunny and Dante led the way as the group entered Cherrygrove City from Route 29. Matt trailed behind them in order to stay alongside Olivia, who had to walk on crutches with her broken left leg bent up off the ground. The leading trio halted a short distance into the city’s boundaries, causing Matt and Olivia to stop as well.

“What is it?” he asked them. “Why did you stop?”

“You have to know where you’re going before you can go there,” Bunny replied. “So where exactly are we going?”

“I do say, we should head for the Pokémon Center first,” Dante proposed, switching which hand he used to hold the briefcase containing the Meteonite fragment and his cane. “We don’t want to burn out already.”

“You’re right. Olivia looks pretty tired, too… I don’t want to force her to walk for too long.”

“Let’s just go to the Pokémon Center,” muttered the sullen Olivia as she fell into agreement with Matt, Bunny and Dante.

“It’s not far from here,” announced Nekou, prompting the group to begin walking again. After they had been moving for a bit, she suddenly piped up again, saying, “So, Olivia, I’d say that with four Pokémon, you should have a good shot at that first badge.”

“Minccino, Roselia, Oshawott and Lillipup now,” Bunny reiterated. “Remember, Violet City’s Gym is a Flying-type Gym, so aside from Roselia, you have a pretty decent assortment of Pokémon to take it on. Just don’t forget to keep your team in shape, and that badge should be yours, no problem.”

“I don’t really want to talk about it right now,” Olivia growled back at the two women, shifting her gaze downward as she carefully hobbled on her crutches. “The last thing on my mind is a Gym battle. I’m a disgrace.”

“Don’t ever call yourself anything like that!” Nekou forcefully said, looking back over her shoulder. “You didn’t do anything wrong. This world is a ***** and the only way to beat it is to be a bigger ***** right back at it. That’s what Maman taught me, and it’s helped keep me going.”

“I do think I owe you an apology, though, Olivia.” Unlike Nekou, Dante did not turn at all while he spoke. Instead, he simply kept walking. “It was my experiment on the Meteonite that caused the Bisharp and Pawniard to go wild. If not for my experiment, you would be perfectly fine right now. I’m sorry.”

“I guess I forgive you, then…”

“That was thoughtful of you, Dr. Fantomos. Thank you, I think it means a lot.”

Just as Matt finished his sentence, the five travelers stopped again. They were standing before a red-roofed building primarily constructed of blue-tinted glass, which had a Poké Ball shape above its entrance. Nestled within the more developed buildings of Cherrygrove City, this building and the trees visible beyond it presented an anachronistic appearance.

“Well, we’re here. The Pokémon Center,” Matt said out loud, not specifically addressing any of the others in particular. “Let’s go.”

No objection was raised, so the group moved forward once more. The double doors representing the entrance into the Pokémon Center slid aside when Nekou stepped before them, allowing her and the others inside.

The interior of the Pokémon Center presented a drastic contrast to the cold-feeling city outside its walls. Warmth radiated from the golden walls of the two-floored building, and the number of trainers in the facility with their Pokémon – ranging from those clustered around a large plasma-screen television to the left of the entrance, to those using a bank of public computers on the right, and still more traveling up and down between the two floors – truly made the Pokémon Center feel like a central terminal for the community.

As the first and most pressing order of business, Matt led Olivia to the desk at the center of the first floor, nestled between the two escalators going up to and down from the second floor; Nekou, Bunny and Dante followed shortly thereafter.

“Good morning!” the pink-haired nurse behind the desk cheerfully exclaimed in greeting. “Welcome to the Pokémon Center! What can I help you with?”

“We’ve all got some Pokémon that need healing,” Matt explained. He noticed that Olivia refused to speak to the nurse, though he reasoned that she might have just not been paying attention, so he stepped in.

“How many of you need healing? All five?”

“No, just four of us,” Bunny corrected. She glanced over to Dante; the old scientist hadn’t battled the Pawniard and Bisharp like they had, so she correctly reasoned that whatever Pokémon he had wouldn’t require healing.

“Then please place your Poké Balls in these trays one at a time,” the nurse explained, all while setting out a tray with six circles depressed into it on the brown surface of her desk. Olivia suddenly snapped back to attention and wobbled up first, carefully maintaining her balance as she placed her four Poké Balls in the tray. “Do you have a Pokédex, young lady?”

“Huh? Oh, yeah…here.” Carefully reaching into a pocket within her cape, Olivia produced her pink Pokédex and handed it to the nurse, who promptly scanned it with an electronic device.

“So you met up with Professor Juniper, Olivia? She’s a great person,” the nurse said, handing back the device before setting out a second empty tray. “You’re lucky to know her. Now, who’s next?”

“I am,” Matt answered, stepping forward carefully to allow Olivia space to move aside. Without hesitation, he placed six spheres of his own into their places. “Thank you for being so kind.”

“It’s my job, after all. May I see your Pokédex, sir?”

“I don’t have one.”

As soon as Matt said those words, the smile on the nurse’s face began to slowly fade. “Then in that case, the charge will be three hundred dollars.”

“Pokémon Centers in this region charge for service?” What Matt had just learned completely stunned him. He’d never heard of such a concept before; in his home region of Sinnoh, Pokémon Centers were entirely free, so the idea of having to pay for their services caught him completely off guard. Compounding his confusion further, though, he remembered that the nurse had clearly not asked Olivia for any sort of fee.

“Only trainers who have obtained a starter Pokémon and Pokédex receive free service at a region’s Pokémon Centers,” explained the nurse.

This made the whole idea make more sense in Matt’s mind, for in Sinnoh he had a Chimchar and often used a Pokédex loaned to him by his grandfather for fieldwork. Even though he was still rather surprised, he resigned himself to the situation and handed over his credit card to cover the fee.

“Transaction complete, thank you,” said the nurse, carefully returning the card to its owner.

Stepping aside to allow Bunny to move forward in line, Matt turned around and noticed an unusual number of people clustering around the television in the Pokémon Center’s lobby. He suddenly felt rather impatient due to his intrigue in the scene.

“Dr. Fantomos, look over there,” Matt commented, gesturing to indicate the area by the television. “What do you think is going on?”

“Obviously there’s something being broadcasted that has them all interested. Let’s go see what it is, shall we?”

Matt curtly nodded to the elderly scientist, indicating his agreement with the proposal. They walked side-by-side across the lobby to the viewing area with Olivia following closely behind. Once they reached the edge of the crowd, Matt tapped one of the trainers on the shoulder.

“Yeah, what?” When the young man, who was wearing a black leather jacket, turned around, his rather pronounced brown pompadour ended up right in Matt’s face, forcing Matt to back up a step.

“Just wanted to know, what’s going on here?”

“Oh, they’re saying that some speech is going to be given by a representative of something called Polaris,” he answered, turning back around. “I don’t really know what that means either.”

“Polaris… the group that tried to kill me in Whitegold City, and the ones Dr. Fantomos warned me about…” Matt thought to himself. “There must be a reason why that name keeps coming up…”

Something was clearly going on, and whatever it was, Matt found himself deeply troubled by it. While he pushed himself to think of some sort of connection between these events, though, Bunny and Nekou arrived, having dropped off their own Pokémon.

“So what the hell is going on here?” Nekou demanded in her typical fashion.

“Someone from Polaris is about to give a speech.”

Almost as soon as Matt answered her, though, the newscaster on the television attracted the attention of the entire crowd.

“We’re now going to go live to the speech to be delivered by a representative of the Polaris group.”

The image on the screen switched from the elderly, gray-haired newscaster at his desk to a simple, tight shot of the Polaris representative – that representative being Ghetsis, seen from the shoulders up with the oversized collar of his cape partially covering his mouth.

Though neither of them nor anyone else noticed, both Nekou and Dante scowled when they saw him.

“Good morning, people of the Tohjo Continent. My name is Ghetsis Harmonia, and I would like to speak to you today about a very important subject. More and more in this day and age, young trainers are suffering. The ideals we as older generations push upon our successors in this world are forcing our children to put themselves in dangerous, difficult positions. All Pokémon trainers are born equally, as are all Pokémon. It is this world, this system we have created that leads to inequality and suffering! It saddens me to the bottom of my heart to see young men and women suffer with no money on the road because they lost all of it in battles.” Ghetsis’s voice was actually losing its composure at this point, as if his sadness was sincere. “We must ask ourselves, what is the best way to help make this world a more equal and fair place? Polaris is pursuing that truth. We will find the way to bring about true equality and fairness in the world! Please, continue listening to what we have to say as we work for a better tomorrow! Thank you for your time.”

Upon his thundering conclusion, Ghetsis disappeared from the screen, and the crowd in Cherrygrove City’s Pokémon Center descended into a loud discussion of what his speech precisely meant. Many questioned the true meaning of the rambling speech, while plenty of others intensely discussed the merits of his point about the inequality of Pokémon trainers. It was as if the crowd had become possessed.

“What… was that?” Bunny wondered aloud, noticeably unsettled by the spectacle.

“I don’t know, but I don’t give a **** about what that disgusting freak has to say,” Nekou immediately hissed.

Though he was equally as disturbed by Ghetsis’s speech, Matt pondered questioning why Nekou was so overtly agitated by it. He decided against doing so, however, and instead offered, “Let’s just forget we saw that and get our Pokémon.”

Matt, Nekou, Olivia, Bunny and Dante walked back toward the counter to retrieve their Pokémon. However, there was something else they weren’t aware of.

The homeless Tenganist woman, the one who had met with Pierce the night before, was hiding behind a pillar in the corner of the Pokémon Center. She had seen Ghetsis’s entire speech, and saw Matt’s group as well.

“It’s all starting to happen…” she mumbled to herself, nestling her child closely against her chest as her nerves frayed. “I didn’t want you to get involved…”

-:-

A short while later, Matt, Olivia, Nekou, Bunny and Dante were sitting around a table in the Pokémon Center’s dining area, discussing the events of the previous twenty-four hours over their respective meals.

“I really cannot apologize profusely enough for the consequences of my experiment.” Dante kept tripping over himself verbally in his efforts to express just how remorseful he was. “It was never my intent for such chaos to break out.”

“I appreciate it and all, and I’m glad you fixed my leg, but…” Olivia looked away before finishing, “…just stop apologizing.”

The mood at the table became incredibly awkward as a result of Olivia’s dour attitude. Matt just stared into his breakfast sandwich of egg and cheese on an English muffin, while Bunny shifted uncomfortably in her seat while rapidly glancing between Olivia, Dante and Nekou.

Perhaps fittingly, it was Nekou who broke the silence, blurting out, “Hey, Olivia, remember that pizza I promised Matt would get us? We’re still getting that!”

“Wait, I never…”

“Thanks, then…”

Matt was interrupted and subdued by the forced smile Olivia showed him. He’d seen that smile before, and it was one of his primary weaknesses related to her. It wasn’t a sarcastic smile, nor a genuinely happy one; instead, she used it when she was forcing herself to find one shred of positivity in a situation, usually when it involved her father.

“Want a newspaper?”

While collapsing in on himself over how much Olivia’s false smile bothered him, Matt failed to notice the still-disguised Pierce approach the table until the undercover Team Rocket agent was holding a folded-up newspaper right in his face.

“Yeah, um… I guess so? Thanks.”

As Matt accepted the paper, Pierce sat down at the next table so that their backs would be facing and opened up one of his own. Once he had made sure that the others were occupying themselves with eating, Matt unfolded and opened the paper he’d received from Pierce.

Almost immediately, a black file folder fell out onto Matt’s lap.

“What is this?”

“Open it,” Pierce instructed, not moving his head or even setting down his newspaper.

When Matt put his newspaper on the table but hesitated to do anything more, Nekou wasted no time in chiming in, saying, “You might as well take a look inside it. What harm could it do?”

“Eh, I guess so.”

When Matt opened the file, he was greeted by several documents, the topmost of which bore a large picture of Ghetsis in its upper-right corner. The rest of the folder’s contents elaborated in detail upon what appeared to be criminal case files regarding him.

“What is this?” Matt questioned, glancing back at Pierce, who still hadn’t moved. “And who are you? What’s going on?”

“That man you saw earlier on television, Ghetsis Harmonia, is not who he appears to be,” Pierce explained, seemingly ignoring Matt’s questions. “He was once the number one criminal on the International Police’s most wanted list for an array of crimes in Unova including kidnapping, forced servitude, Pokémon abuse, child abuse, burglary, assault and murder, both attempted and successful, all as the leader of an outfit called Team Plasma.”

Nekou and the others were listening to Pierce’s furtive explanation, too, and she gritted her teeth as he went on.

“So yeah, this man is bad news. The reason why I said he was once the International Police’s most wanted fugitive is because a little over two years ago, he was entirely purged from their database, meaning no evidence of his crimes survives, nor does any warrant for his arrest. That’s part of why he was able to make a fresh restart here as a member of Polaris.”

“What’s the other part?”

“Someone in the government is shielding him, I fear. The internet and all other communication mediums have been carefully controlled to make finding out the truth about Team Plasma and Unova impossible in this country. I dread to think what could happen if Polaris has already infiltrated deeply into the highest ranks of the government here.”

With that, Pierce rose from his seat, his newspaper tucked under his arm. Before he could leave, however, Matt spoke up again.

“Why are you telling me this, and who are you exactly?”

“You may call me Sam. Consider me an information broker… what I just gave you is essentially free. If you ever need my services, look for me in the one place not constrained by any rules, the place where the government cannot clamp down on the truth.”

“What was that all about?” Bunny groaned as she watched Pierce walk away. “Why do these strange things keep happening?”

“Don’t pay it too much mind,” Nekou abruptly answered. “He didn’t do anything to hurt us.”

“I guess not,” Matt decided with a shrug. “Let’s finish up here, then.”

-:-

Ghetsis hobbled down a cold, gloomy corridor in Polaris’s base shortly after his speech. His gait was crooked and uneven, and the white cane he supported himself on crashed noisily on the metal floor with each step. The cane was itself a rather unusual item; it was topped by a hollow circle with a knob-shaped handle at its highest point. Within the circle, positioned at the nexus of two narrow rods forming a cross shape, was a shield colored half-black and half-white that bore a blue ‘P’ insignia overlaid on a backward ‘Z.’

Approaching an iron door, Ghetsis raised the cane up and slammed it into the ground, activating a secret mechanism that opened the portal. He went inside, and the door slid shut behind him.

A dark, gloomy chamber waited beyond the doorway. It was illuminated only by the light filtering up from flickering computer screens and the pale blue neon lights fixed in a glass enclosure within the room.

Anthea and Concordia, the two women who Ghetsis had presented to the Sacred Helix, were contained within the transparent cage. They were still dressed shabbily in torn rags, and had loose chains connected to their wrists and ankles. Neither woman noticed Ghetsis come into the room and begin approaching their prison, as they were both more interested in the books of mythology their jailer had given them; however, when Ghetsis slammed his cane into the ground again, they immediately turned their blank eyes toward him.

“I see you two wenches have put yourselves to some use,” he menaced, seemingly deliberately trying to taunt them. “Are those books of myth decoded yet?”

“Lord Ghetsis, sir…”

“Of course they are not finished yet!!” Ghetsis thundered, interrupting Concordia before she had a chance to do much more than open her mouth. Both she and Anthea flinched, but only slightly; by this point they were beyond knowing Ghetsis’s typical behavior. “In the amount of time you have had those books, only a genius could have deciphered their secrets already! Of course, we all know that that word is one of the last ones we’d use to describe you two!”

In a fit of rage, Ghetsis swung his cane out and smashed a blown-glass flowerpot sitting nearby on the floor, leaving soil and a cluster of flowers to spread out on the ground. This outburst prompted a stronger-but-still-muted reaction from the two women, who still had enough left of their broken instincts to raise their arms over their faces; this also served the secondary purpose of hiding the tears of terror developing in their eyes.

Once Ghetsis was done with his explosive anger, he calmed down and began breathing deeply, trying to catch his breath. “But, it’s okay. None of it matters, because in the end, you two are simply nothing more than used, broken waste with little to no use left for me! I have everything I needed from you two, but I will allow you to live to see the world I will shape from the cold flames Polaris will reduce this planet to. A perfect world, in the image of a perfect ruler… you Tenganists cannot die out completely before some of you bear witness to what the king of Harmonia will create. And do you want to know what the best part about this entire thing is? All that remains to be done simply requires that defective freak son of mine along with the woman you Tenganists consider a prophet. You two have a front-row seat to the greatest spectacle this world will ever see!”

Though their faces remained blank, when Anthea and Concordia turned to face each other, terrible realizations came over them. Everything Ghetsis had said in his deranged rant, despite sounding like it made no sense, actually was completely true.

A sound like a gust of wind suddenly rang out in the chamber, prompting Ghetsis to turn around.

“Very well, you’ve returned. Report now.”

Three identical young men stepped out from the shadows. Each one was wearing a wig of long, white hair along with sleeveless, figure-hugging gray mesh uniforms and mouth covers. Their hands were covered by heavy black gloves that matched their equally-heavy boots, and their baggy black pants were surrounded by dark skirts closed up in the fronts by gray crosses.

“Lord Ghetsis, we have analyzed and searched Route 44 and the Ice Path,” one of the three stated.

“Neither your son or the woman you told us to look for was present in either location.”

“Some of the Pokémon in the areas we searched appeared to have been befriended without capture, however. This would suggest your son was in fact there at some point, Lord Ghetsis.”

“I see,” Ghetsis said, pondering this new information as he leaned forward on his cane and tightened his grip on it. “Redouble your search and expand the area. We must find that inhuman boy and the Tenganist woman before the others do.”

“We will meet your demands, Lord Ghetsis.”

Another gust of wind indicated the swift disappearance of the three ninja-like young men. Ghetsis briefly turned back to Anthea and Concordia.

“You two saw and heard nothing just now. I’m sure you both want to keep getting the amount of food you do get.”

Disappearing back into the darkness, Ghetsis wobbled to the door and exited the chamber. Once it was silent again, Concordia crumpled down onto her back and twisted slightly in the bedding that stretched from one end of their cage to the other.

“Anthea…” Concordia whispered, staring up at the ceiling, “…please, pray with me...”

-:-

“Are we heading to the Battle Arcade now, Matt?”

Bunny’s question came as the group left the Pokémon Center to return to the streets of Cherrygrove City. She had become the one walking alongside Olivia, as Matt had taken the lead, leaving the two of them along with Dante and Nekou to carry the rear.

“I don’t think I want to go there yet,” Matt announced, pausing his walk so the others could hear him. Putting his hands on his hips, he turned slightly and explained, “The Frontier Society facility leaders, the Frontier Brains, change their Pokémon to match the skill level of each challenger. With the Pokémon I have, it’s likely I’ll be facing a trainer at Gym Leader level or higher, so I’d like to find a place to do some training first.”

“Then I can help you with that, youngster!”

Having been sitting on a bench right outside the Pokémon Center, a surprisingly energetic-looking old man in a green sweater approached Matt. He had plainly overheard Matt and Bunny talking, and appeared eager to add his own contribution, his narrow eyes and thin mouth curled into expressions of genuine excitement.

“Who’re you?” Nekou said, grimacing. “And don’t you know it’s rude to eavesdrop?”

“You should talk…” Matt sarcastically mumbled under his breath.

“Now, now, it’s no problem at all,” the old man hurriedly assured. “People around town call me the Guide Gent, because I give tours of Cherrygrove. What’s this I hear about you wanting to go to a place where you can train your Pokémon?”

“Exactly that. I’m going to challenge the Battle Arcade soon, and I want to practice before I go.”

“Well, then, you’re in luck, kid!” The Guide Gent did not notice how uncomfortable Matt looked every time ‘youngster’ and ‘kid’ were used to refer to him, but both Nekou and Olivia did, and they began whispering mischievously to each other in the background.

The Guide Gent continued, “There’s a place in this city called a Trainer House. A lot of towns have ‘em now. Pokémon trainers gather there and have battles with each other, which should be just what you’re looking for. Interested?”

“Well, Olivia, what do you think?” Matt asked, turning halfway around. He was intrigued by the concept, but wanted to confirm that Olivia was comfortable with such a thing first.

“It couldn’t hurt.” Nekou suddenly whispered something in her ear, prompting Olivia to smile more broadly than she had all day and add, “Right, youngster?”

“Oh, come on,” he sighed, exasperated and yet encouraged by Olivia’s slow return to form. After running his hand down his face, Matt looked back at the Guide Gent and said,” Show us the way, please.”

“Will do! Come, youngsters, follow me!”

-:-

Before the group knew it, they found themselves standing outside of a spacious three-story building in the heart of Cherrygrove City. Aside from the Poké Ball logo on the building’s doorway, it was a rather inconspicuous structure that blended in well with the small but busy city around it.

“Here we are, the Trainer House!” the Guide Gent declared, spreading his arms and speaking with great pride in his voice. “This is right where you’ll want to be if your goal is to train your Pokémon.”

“Thank you very much for taking us here,” Matt said graciously. The old man’s help had definitely shaved quite a bit of time off of their trip, which in turn allowed Matt more time to dedicate to practicing for the Battle Arcade.

“Think nothing of it. I hope what you get out of coming here is worth the price.”

“Wait, what?” Bunny stopped the Guide Gent from walking off by putting her hand on his shoulder. She was troubled by his ominous statement and, as she was unable to put it out of her mind, Bunny resolved to clear it up. “What exactly do you mean by ‘price?’”

“This city was not always so congested,” responded the Gent, his voice becoming poisoned by a hint of bitterness. “It used to be a small, peaceful city on the shore. But when the Battle Arcade was built, and the Trainer House along with it, things changed around here.”

“Let the gentleman go, Bunny,” a bored-sounding Dante instructed. “There is nothing more he can offer us.”

Dante’s advice prompted Bunny to realize that he was right, and accordingly, she released her grip on the Guide Gent, who promptly bowed slightly to them one last time before exiting the area. There was no more business to be had outside the Trainer House, so the group moved inside, passing through the automatic double doors of the facility.

Inside was a sight much like the Pokémon Center, but different in a way that Matt and the others had trouble putting their fingers on. The facility’s vast lobby took up the entirety of the first floor; its floor, patterned with black and silver tiles alternating in a checkerboard arrangement, was polished so well that it reflected everything on it, from people to Pokémon to fixtures such as the elegant elevators and marble reception desk.

Another similarity between the Trainer House and Pokémon Center was that a thick cluster of people were gathered around a large television not far from where Matt and the rest of the group entered. Aside from Dante, they were drawn to the scene by a natural desire to see just what was going on.

Matt, Nekou, Bunny and Olivia discovered a battle playing out on the television, depicting a Ludicolo facing off against an unfamiliar Pokémon. This creature had an insect-like appearance, taking on the general shape of a green mantis with leaves coming from his neck and waist.

“Another close call between Nando’s Leavanny and Dahlia’s Ludicolo!” blared the commentator of the match. “Leavanny has a distinct advantage, but the Arcade Star is powerful! She’s holding her own!”

“It’s Mister Nando!” Olivia exclaimed, finally cheering up as she recognized one of the figures on the television. He was someone she knew from five years ago, a man who indulged in both battles and the far showier Pokémon Contests. She didn’t know him to have the Pokémon he was now using, Leavanny, but it fit in with what she knew of his preferences, which tended toward Grass-types, Bug-types and Pokémon with musical ties.

“So he’s here too…” Matt mused, recognizing Nando as well. “This is the Battle Arcade, then?”

-:-

Indeed, the battlefield seen on the television was that of the Battle Arcade. A huge video screen loomed over the half-black, half-red arena floor, flanked on each side by a tall, cylindrical screen. Each of the side monitors displayed the three Pokémon designated for the battle by each trainer, while the center screen simply displayed a giant black square with several progressively smaller, outlined white squares condensing toward its middle.

Going downward from the top, Nando’s Leavanny was his second Pokémon, as was Dahlia’s Ludicolo. Their first Pokémon – Dragonite for Nando, Togekiss for Dahlia – were grayed out, indicating that they had fainted.

“What fabulous luck you’ve had so far!” Dahlia exclaimed, twisting around her space on the red side of the battlefield with fluid dance moves. The Arcade Star was a tall, thin woman whose skin showed a tan. Her clothing – a midriff-exposing yellow shirt and a pair of blue jeans – was so tight it left little to the imagination, and her messy, black, tendril-like hair wrapped around her as if it had a mind of its own as she danced. “But, I won’t let you leave here without a real test! Let’s see if you have enough luck to defeat me. Ludicolo, Energy Ball!”

“Very well,” Nando calmly responded, strumming the strings of the golden, Mew-shaped harp in his hand, “I shall show you what you seek. Leavanny, please use Signal Beam.”

Between the leafy antennae atop Leavanny’s head, a sphere of white light took shape briefly before transforming into a rainbow-colored beam aimed straight in Ludicolo’s direction. However, Ludicolo seemed to be much faster, and the glowing Energy Ball she launched had nearly connected before Leavanny intercepted it with his own attack.

The resulting explosion not only threw Leavanny back, it also created a gust of wind that visibly disturbed Nando’s long black hair and green cape. His cape would have blown off if he didn’t have it pinned in place with the red jewel and sky blue cravat he used, in fact.

“Those two attacks cancel each other out!” declared the announcer, to the delight of the audience gathered in the Battle Arcade. “It’s pretty clear that Leavanny is suffering under the effect of the Trick Room induced by our game board, while Ludicolo is benefitting from a boost in its speed. Can Nando overcome this to gain the upper hand against our Arcade Star?!”

The question made Nando adjust his wide-brimmed green hat and squint with his right eye, the one that was not covered by his hair, while he pondered the situation. It was true, he knew, that the speed-inverting effect of the Trick Room created at the start of the battle was forcing his Leavanny to move more slowly than Dahlia’s Ludicolo. This made dodging and attacking far more difficult than it usually was.

“Ludicolo, Hyper Voice!”

Dahlia’s command made Nando realize what he had to do right away. “Leavanny, please, bear with me and take the attack!”

Leavanny braced himself as Ludicolo began screaming, her voice taking visible form in sound waves that washed over Nando’s Pokémon. As much as he wanted to crumple before the deafening noise, Leavanny knew he had to hold fast and put as much effort as he could into doing so. Once Ludicolo’s Hyper Voice subsided slightly, Nando jumped on the opening.

“Now, Leavanny, I call for Air Slash!”

Jumping up into the air, Leavanny pulled his arms back. Blades of air formed around them, and with Ludicolo in his sights, he sent the blades plummeting down by swinging his limbs. Dahlia and Ludicolo were caught off guard by this sudden move and thus had little time to prepare, resulting in large pieces of Ludicolo’s grass poncho being cut off as she slipped to her knees.

“Dahlia’s Ludicolo is down, but is it out?!”

“Oh, not yet, honey! Try my last-ditch longshot move! Drain Punch!”

Nando simply shut his eyes and gently smiled as Ludicolo rushed Leavanny with her right arm drawn back. He knew a close-quarters move like this had to be coming, and it had finally arrived. As soon as he heard Ludicolo’s fist connect, he instructed, “Leavanny, grab Ludicolo.”

Much to Dahlia’s surprise, Leavanny effectively followed this direction, pinning Ludicolo in his grip. With her Grass-and-Water-type Pokémon frantically trying to escape its enemy, Dahlia exclaimed, “What?”

“And now it is time for my finishing move~” Nando sang while again strumming his harp. “Signal Beam!”

Another Signal Beam formed between Leavanny’s antennae and hammered Ludicolo into the ground at point-blank range with relentless force. A number of the audience members gasped at this turn of events, especially when the smoke cleared to reveal that Dahlia’s Ludicolo truly was defeated.

“Ludicolo is unable to battle!” the referee declared as Ludicolo’s icon was grayed out on Dahlia’s side of the field. “The winner is Leavanny!”

“Another one of Dahlia’s Pokémon is down! The challenger now has a numbers advantage, with two of his Pokémon remaining against only her last one… but it’s also Arcade Star Dahlia’s most mighty fighter! Who is going to win this battle?”

“Well done, Ludicolo, I hope you had a good time,” Dahlia said as she drew Ludicolo back into her Net Ball, a blue Poké Ball with black lines drawn on it to simulate a net pattern. The next ball she drew out, however, was a Master Ball; two bulbous red circles framed the letter ‘M’ in white against its dark blue top. “You’ve shown me excellent luck so far, Nando. I think it might even be more than that. Even with this Trick Room condition, you’ve managed to hold your own well against the Pokémon of a Frontier Brain… but I’m not the Arcade Star for no reason, you know! Prepare for my ultimate Pokémon! Now… dance, Zapdos!!”

The flash of light from Dahlia’s Master Ball took on the shape of a large, avian Pokémon, one with a long, pointed beak and jagged-edged wings. When its yellow-and-black coloring filled in, there could be no more doubt in any viewer’s mind that it was indeed the Legendary Pokémon, Zapdos.

“Yes, it’s Dahlia’s Zapdos! Now, let’s see how Nando deals with fighting a legend! And remember, Trick Room is still in effect, so that could also affect the outcome!”

“Legendary Pokémon are indeed creatures with incredible levels of power,” Nando said out loud, though the calmness in his voice now sounded rather forced. What truly betrayed his feelings, though, was the subtle shaking of his fingers as they wrapped around the base of his harp. “But… they can be beaten, and I think I may have an advantage in that regard…”

“Do you now?!” exclaimed Dahlia, the Frontier Brain’s energy boiling over. “Zapdos, don’t hold back! Show him what you’ve got! Heat Wave!”

“Leavanny, escape and use Air Slash!”

Zapdos pulled its wings back, but before it could complete its attack, Leavanny shot behind it in a burst of Trick Room-fueled speed. As a result, the gust of fire that Zapdos produced was left to flow aimlessly away, and the Legendary Electric-and-Flying-type took an Air Slash to the back that it easily shrugged off.

“Ah, that’s right, normally Zapdos would be faster,” Dahlia realized. “I must give you credit for using Trick Room to your advantage now after being hurt by it earlier. That’s not just luck, it’s taking control and making it your own. Unfortunately for you, your luck has run out! Zapdos, get behind Leavanny and use Drill Peck!”

“What?”

Nando was left briefly stunned when, instead of the frontal counterattack he was expected, Zapdos twirled through the air to get behind Leavanny. Even Zapdos’s movements, which were as agile and fluid as its trainer’s, exuded power.

“It makes sense, a dancer training their Pokémon to reflect their personal style.” Nando’s voice was calm once again, but this time, it was because he was seemingly resigning himself to his fate. “Repel it with Leaf Storm, please.”

From his own body language – particularly the steely, tense expression he wore on his face – it was clear that Leavanny also knew his fate was sealed. He knew he couldn’t run forever, even with Trick Room boosting his speed and agility, as that would never win the fight. For that he’d need to land effective strikes on his foe, and none of his moves would prove effective enough to stop Zapdos.

Nevertheless, Leavanny turned around to courageously face his fate, which took the form of Zapdos diving toward him beak-first while spinning rapidly like a drill. The torrent of sharp leaves he called forth did little to injure or otherwise halt Zapdos, and when its Drill Peck made contact, Leavanny was hurled dozens of feet back across the stage, past Nando and into the wall at the back of the Battle Arcade.

“Leavanny is unable to battle! The winner is Zapdos!”

“And Nando’s Leavanny falls to Dahlia’s mighty Zapdos! It’s a stunning show of strength from our Arcade Star, and we now have a sudden death situation on our hands! One Pokémon left on each side... who will win?!!”

“Please take a rest, Leavanny, you have more than earned it.” After returning his utterly defeated Leavanny to the safety of its Poké Ball, Nando turned back to face Dahlia and took out another sphere from his brown messenger bag. “Arcade Star Dahlia, I thank you for a most exhilarating match so far. When I entered the Battle Arcade today, I desired precisely this kind of battle, and I don’t want to let it end yet. Exploud, make your entry!”

Unlike Leavanny, who cut an elegant and refined figure, Nando’s final Pokémon was much more homely in appearance. The most distinguishing features on her blue body were her large mouth and the yellow-tipped tubes protruding from her head and tails.

“For his final Pokémon, Nando calls upon a master of sound, Exploud! Could he be hoping to tap into the wide array of moves Exploud can offer?”

“I don’t think I want to take chances with this one,” Dahlia mumbled, acknowledging her gut feeling telling her that Exploud was dangerous. “Zapdos, Heat Wave!”

Quickly running his fingers over his harp’s strings, Nando called out, “Get beneath it and use ThunderPunch!”

Normally, Exploud would be an even slower Pokémon than any of the others, but with Trick Room in effect she was able to slide underneath Zapdos with great speed. While Zapdos’s Heat Wave went off with no effect, Exploud’s right fist became wrapped in a shroud of electricity shortly before she leapt up to try and hit the Legendary Pokémon.

“Don’t let it!” Dahlia hastily warned. “Drill Peck!”

Even with the effect of Trick Room slowing it down, Zapdos was able to contort itself in the air to face downward, meeting Exploud’s ThunderPunch with a Drill Peck. The electricity of Exploud’s move combined with Zapdos’s spinning motion to send sparks and bolts of lightning all over the arena for a time; not long after the two combatants were separated by the force of their respective attacks.

“An impressive showing from both trainers creates a gorgeous combination of moves! Most exciting!”

“A combination of moves...” Nando thought to himself. “That’s it! Maybe my Pokémon Contest techniques will help!” Thrusting his arm out, he called, “Exploud, please, use Fire Blast!”

“Such a thing won’t put me down! Zapdos, show no fear! Drill Peck!”

Dahlia’s words were not lost on her Zapdos, as it courageously dove right into the thick fireball that Exploud burst from her mouth. When the rapidly spinning avian Pokémon made contact with the burning blast, the fire exploded into a twisting spiral; however, by that time, Exploud had already appeared behind Zapdos.

“Now, use Hyper Voice!” Nando commanded, pointing forwardly across the field.

“I see what you’re up to. Thunderbolt!”

Like Dahlia’s Ludicolo before her, Nando’s Exploud took a deep breath and let out an explosive roar that manifested as visible sound waves. However, Zapdos stopped short while still enveloped in the remnants of Fire Blast and discharged electricity from all over its body. The electricity fused with not only the fire but the sound waves of Hyper Voice as well, creating shining rings of sparkling red energy that ultimately caused a gigantic explosion.

The bright light and gusting wind that radiated from the point of the explosion forced both Nando and Dahlia to cover their eyes. It took a full minute before the blast died down, revealing both Exploud and Zapdos, injured and breathing heavily.

“You were trying to force this to look like a Contest battle, weren’t you?” Dahlia correctly guessed, standing confidently with her hand on her hip. “I’ve participated in plenty of Pokémon Contests myself, so if you want to go there, I’ll gladly do it.”

Nando took a step back, clutching his harp with nervousness that also reflected in his eyes. “Both Pokémon are getting exhausted,” he thought, apprising both Exploud and Zapdos standing still on the battlefield. “I have to break through and start landing hits directly upon Zapdos, or we cannot win this…”

“It’s time to wrap this up, Zapdos!” Dahlia shouted, as if she was reading Nando’s thoughts. She threw her hand upward into the air and yelled, “Launch Ominous Wind into the air, then Drill Peck through it!!”

Turning completely away from Exploud, Zapdos swung its wings upward, blowing a gust of purple-hued wind into the open air. Then, in front of the stunned eyes of Nando and the crowds both in the Battle Arcade and watching on television, Zapdos initiated Drill Peck, spinning right through the Ominous Wind before aiming for Exploud.

Staring at the purple spiral careening straight for his Pokémon, Nando came to a nervous realization. “We lose if we cannot keep up. Exploud, use ThunderPunch from below!”

Like earlier, Exploud attempted to slide beneath Zapdos and hit it with ThunderPunch, but this time, the aura surrounding the powered-up Electric-and-Flying-type clipped and stunned her.

“Go for the win now!” Dahlia exclaimed as Zapdos glided back to her side of the field. “Thunderbolt!”

“Exploud, don’t give up yet! Fire Blast!”

Exploud’s fireball and Zapdos’s lightning bolt cut past each other in midair, just barely avoiding a collision. As a result, both Pokémon suffered direct hits and were sent falling to the ground, where, burned and battered, they stared each other down with what strength they had left.

“I’m truly impressed. It’s been a while since Zapdos has had a fight this worthwhile... but it’s about time this came to an end! Use Heat Wave and then Drill Peck!”

As Zapdos mimicked its earlier combination move, substituting Heat Wave for Ominous Wind, Nando realized just how serious his situation was. “We’re going to have to go for the long shot, Exploud. Combine Ice Punch and ThunderPunch, I ask you!”

On Nando’s order, Exploud’s right fist began emanating ice while her left fist became electrified. She hit them together, combining the powers of ice and electricity into both fists, then swung them both forward to intercept Zapdos’s fiery drilling attack.

The two managed to hold even ground against each other. Neither could knock out or even force the other back. Embers from Zapdos’s body flaked over Exploud, singeing her skin, while the ice and electricity of Exploud’s punches began to nullify the force of Zapdos’s charge.
 

The Great Butler

Hush, keep it down
For a brief moment, Exploud and Zapdos could see into each others’ eyes within the maelstrom of their attacks. A glare of respect was exchanged between them – then they each gave their last ounce of strength into a final push forward.

From the explosion that resulted from the powerful clash, Zapdos dropped forward past Exploud, crashing into the ground – and it did not get up. A split second later, Exploud fell down, but her opponent was already defeated.

“Zapdos is unable to battle! The winner is Exploud, and the victory in this Battle Arcade match goes to the challenger, Nando!”

A thunderous cheer went up among the assembled crowd at the Battle Arcade as the announcer, channeling the excitement into his voice, declared, “And there’s an outcome we rarely see! I know I never expected it today… Dahlia’s Zapdos has been beaten! Nando’s Exploud has managed to defeat it!!”

“Hm… so that’s how my luck runs out…” A broad smile came over Dahlia’s face as she recalled Zapdos to its Master Ball. “You did great, Zapdos! The luckiest thing of all is when you get to battle all out, and I couldn’t have had such a treat without your help!”

With that, Dahlia began walking over to Nando, who was kneeling next to his badly wounded Exploud and petting her head.

“And I must congratulate you too, Nando!” she said happily. “A fierce battle is truly a joyous occasion, and you have the honor of being the winner! You too, Exploud, you were truly impressive!”

“I sincerely thank you, Arcade Star Dahlia,” Nando responded, rising back to his full height. “My Pokémon thank you as well, for this most excellent battle.”

-:-

Having seen the conclusion of Nando and Dahlia’s battle, much of the crowd surrounding the television in the lobby of the Trainer House began to dissipate. Matt, however, remained firmly rooted where he stood, and as a result, the others in his group didn’t leave either.

“Mister Nando’s just as amazing as always, don’t you think?” Olivia cheerfully said to him, seemingly forgetting about her crutches for a brief moment.

However, Matt was all but oblivious to what she was saying, as his attention was fixated on what had just unfolded at the Battle Arcade. “So that’s what I’m up against?” he mumbled to himself. “I’m not sure I stand a chance…”

“I told you, the road to the truth is not an easy one.” Seemingly having overheard Matt’s musings, Dante stood alongside him, pushing up his glasses before speaking further. “But if you cannot stand up to Zapdos, how do you hope to ever have a chance of finding Reshiram, whose power greatly eclipses it?”

“You’ve got a point. I’ll need to prepare if I’m going to have any chance of winning, though.”

“That means you’ll be training here, then?” Bunny chimed in, having made her way into the conversation. “The registration counter’s right over there,” she then added, gesturing to her right.

“Let’s do it, then.”

With a sudden spring in his step, Matt strode across the lobby, arriving at the registration desk well before the others, with Olivia and Dante bringing up the rear. A brunette woman dressed in a plain white blouse and green pencil skirt was operating the counter, and she smiled at the group when they arrived before her.

“Welcome to the Cherrygrove City Trainer House.” Though her voice was pleasant enough, she was hoarse and spoke robotically, as if she’d said the same thing repeatedly and worn herself out on it. “We offer facilities for Pokémon trainers to develop and hone their battling skills in controlled environments. Would you like to rent one of our training rooms?”

Disregarding what he thought was the woman’s obvious boredom with her job, Matt replied, “Yes, that’s exactly what I’d like, please.”

After signing his name to the guest ledger that the receptionist thrust in his direction, Matt was handed a ticket that she printed out from the computer on her desk. It read “S1-R12.”

“Your battle room is number twelve on sublevel one. Please take the elevator to your left. Thank you for using our services, Mr. Chiaki.”

Almost immediately upon his turning around, Nekou grabbed Matt’s arm and began dragging him toward the elevator. “No time to lose! Wasted time can’t be regained!”

Wrenching his arm free of her grip, Matt growled, “What’s gotten into you? This time, I mean.”

“If you don’t train, you won’t beat Dahlia. And if you lose, what good are you to me?”

“What does that mean?”

“It means… um… ****. Did you forget about that pizza you promised me and Olivia? If you lose, you can’t keep your promises!”

“I didn’t promise that…” Matt sighed in exasperation before turning to Bunny, Olivia and Dante. “I need a training partner, though.”

“I’ll train with you,” Dante offered as the group resumed their trip to the elevator. “I think battling you would be a rather intriguing affair.”

“You’ve got Pokémon of your own?” Bunny questioned, plainly surprised by Dante’s words. “I hadn’t quite expected you to be a trainer yourself.”

“Well, not professionally like the younger generation, at least.” A wistful look filled Dante’s eyes as he spoke. “Things aren’t like how they were when I was younger.”

“Then why are you offering to train with me exactly?”

“I like you and your little team, Matt,” Dante confessed. “You four remind me of how things used to be, when people quested for big things. Well, that and the fact that I can just feel how badly my Alakazam and Ditto want to battle again, but do forgive this old man for making you listen to his ramblings.”

“It’s no big deal, in fact, what you had to say was actually kind of interesting.” Matt caught Nekou grimacing in the corner of his eye and realized that she didn’t share his appreciation of Dante’s philosophizing at the time. Disregarding that, though, he realized that they had reached the elevator, and reached for the call button.

Before Matt could press it, the doors opened in front of him. Inside the elevator was someone Matt recognized – a young man, dressed plainly in a black jacket and blue jeans but sporting shoulder-length red hair and an intense facial expression. He plainly recognized Matt too, and stepped out of the elevator before putting his hand on his hip and confronting the group.

“Somehow I’m not surprised I ran into you here, Matt Chiaki. I knew I had to get stronger before facing you, and it looks like that time has come.”

“Have we met before?” Bunny questioned, raising an eyebrow.

“I remember you,” Matt said. He then tilted his head back and looked over his shoulder to Bunny. “Silver, the trainer I was going to battle at the Frontier Society tournament back on the Indigo Plateau. Remember? I was going to battle him but he decided to surrender and leave the tournament.”

“Oh, now I remember!”

“So what’s the matter, Silver?” Nekou mockingly asked of the young man. “Did Matt, of all people, scare you?”

“You, be quiet.” Silver’s casual, rude dismissal of Nekou’s provocation surprised Matt far more than her original action did, leaving him to stare blankly as Silver turned an intense glare toward him. “I have unfinished business with Matt Chiaki.”

“This young man certainly appears to mean business, Matt,” Dante advised. “I’ll politely step aside from battling you this time, because it looks like you’ve found your real opponent.”

“I guess it makes sense, doesn’t it? Silver, if you’re serious about this, and I have no reason to think you aren’t, follow us back downstairs. Come on, Olivia.”

With Silver now in tow, the group crowded into the ivory-walled elevator. Olivia and Dante entered first, owing to the fact that they had assistance devices for walking. Matt, Nekou, Bunny and Silver all followed them.

On the wall next to the door was a selection of buttons, marked “1,” “2,” 3” and “S1.” Matt chose the final button and pressed it, prompting the elevator’s doors to close so the car could transport its passengers down.

“You never really explained why you quit the tournament, Silver.”

Silver growled; evidently he was bothered by having to think about his previous encounter with Matt’s group, even though nothing bad had happened. “I wasn’t strong enough,” he finally admitted, however. “I saw your strength and I knew I was outmatched.”

“Why not just battle him and find out how it would go?” Olivia questioned.

“There was no reason to. I could have, but I would not have gained anything from it. In order to get stronger, I believe that you must fight on the same level as your enemy, which meant I had to hone my skills further.” Silver thrust his finger upward, pointing right in Matt’s face, and declared, “I’ve done that, so now, consider this battle the one we didn’t have then.”

Before Matt could say anything in regards to the challenge laid down against him, the elevator stopped and its doors opened. Beyond the threshold on sublevel one was nothing more than a wide, brightly-lit corridor. Six doors lined up next to each other on each wall, each leading to its own athletic court.

“Tell me what number room you got,” Silver demanded.

“Twelve,” Matt replied, fumbling for the reservation ticket in his pocket.

“Fine. It’s this way.”

With his hands tucked into his own pockets, Silver skulked over to the door nearest to the elevator on the right side, which had a large number ‘12’ painted on it in yellow. Silver snatched the ticket from Matt’s grasp and held it up to a sensor next to the door, prompting it to open. He then crumpled the paper up and tossed it back to Matt before abruptly entering the room.

“Someone got their cornflakes pissed in this morning,” Nekou groaned, following behind Olivia into the room.

“Please don’t make a scene now,” Matt pleaded with her. “Let this go as smoothly as it possibly can.”

Surprisingly enough, Nekou listened and backed down, allowing both herself and Matt to finally enter after the others.

Inside was an entirely blank, slate-gray room. A crude battlefield outline was drawn on the floor in chalk, and off to the side, there was a bench for spectators. Bunny, Olivia and Dante were already there, so Nekou joined them while Matt took his place on the battlefield to face Silver.

“This is where we’re going to fight?” Matt blanched. “It’s so lifeless.”

“That’s why they give you the opportunity to customize it,” snapped the redheaded young man. “Learn what you’re doing, or you aren’t a worthy opponent for me.”

As if on cue, a robot in the shape of an oversized Poké Ball floated down next to the spectator bench. Nekou immediately jumped up, and using a keyboard attached to the machine, activated the program to edit the battlefield. Small, crystalline domes surrounding the battlefield space began to glow as a result.

With only a few clicks, Nekou loaded a battlefield map, and the crystal generators shined even brighter. When their light faded, the room had been completely transformed, now resembling an artificial forest in a greenhouse. Trees and rocks were everywhere, and the rocky floor had been transformed into a cool, healthy clearing of grass.

“So it’s true!” Bunny exclaimed. “I had heard these places could become any kind of battlefield, and it really was true!”

“All computers and holograms,” explained Nekou. “This battlefield is for all intents and purposes solid, but it can be reverted back into data and put back into the system when we’re done with it.”

With Matt and Silver each on their respective end of the forest arena, the battle only needed some rules put into place before it could begin, an opportunity Silver seized without hesitation.

“We’ll make this a Single Battle with three Pokémon on each side,” he announced while pointing straight at his opponent, leaving no room for debate. “Obviously, the battle will be over when all three Pokémon on one side faint.”

“Fine by me,” Matt agreed, grasping the front of his hat. “Do you want to use the Pokémon we used in the tournament first?”

“I don’t care about that. The rules of that tournament were too restrictive for me to get much out of it, so I don’t care what Pokémon you go with. For myself, on the other hand…”

Cutting himself off in the middle of his own sentence, Silver took a Poké Ball from his belt and threw it. A hulking, blue Pokémon with a muscular build and powerful jaws erupted out; he stood on a pair of firm legs as he stretched out his clawed, club-like arms.

“I was training Feraligatr at the tournament,” Silver elaborated, “so I’ll use it here too.”

“I see.” Still holding the front of his hat, Matt quietly pondered what he had to do. “This battle is to practice for the Battle Arcade. Dahlia uses Togekiss, Ludicolo and Zapdos, and with me now… I have Heatran, Reuniclus, Aggron, Rotom, Golurk and Salamence with me. Based on that… I know which three I’ll go with.”

Readying a Poké Ball of his own from his bag, Matt called out, “Tony, make your mark!”

Feraligatr’s bulk was more than matched by the Pokémon Matt sent out to face him, a dinosaur-like creature whose craggy black body had bands of silver metal around the limbs. Coming in at a height just shorter than that of his opponent, the Aggron turned his steel head upward to allow his blue eyes to meet the gaze of Silver’s Feraligatr.

“An Aggron,” Bunny noted with a bit of apprehension, “against a Feraligatr. Aggron is Steel-and-Rock-type, while Feraligatr is Water-type. I’ve got to wonder what Matt was thinking, sending in something with such an obvious disadvantage…”

“And Feraligatr is the final evolution of Totodile,” Olivia added, somewhat bitterly. “I wonder how much I missed out on…”

“I don’t know what you’re trying to do, but sending in a Rock-type against a Water-type?” On his side of the battlefield, Silver was just as confused as Bunny about Matt’s choice. “Basic type logic is on my side, but I’m sure you know that already.”

“I’m getting ready to challenge Dahlia over at the Battle Arcade,” Matt explained, “so I’m going with the Pokémon I want to use there, to warm them up.”

“If your path to the Battle Arcade goes through me, I’ll see to it that you never get there! Feraligatr, Waterfall!”

“Tony, I think you can outgun it! Head Smash!”

Both Tony and Feraligatr started to charge at each other, their bodies each taking on different qualities to reflect their moves. Tony’s head took on a bright glow, while Feraligatr’s entire body was surrounded by a current of water.

When they collided, the two Pokémon pushed against each other for several intense moments before Tony was overwhelmed and thrown back. However, his attack was not entirely a failure, as Feraligatr also stumbled backward in Silver’s direction, just in a far more subtle way.

“So that didn’t work. Fine, I’ll try something else. Tony, give Iron Tail a shot!”

“Hmph, how desperate can you be?” Silver sighed, as if he was annoyed by how the battle was going. “Feraligatr, you use Iron Tail as well!”

Both Pokémon lunged at each other again, this time with their tails glowing with silvery light. They both tried to hit the other by swinging their tails, but once again, Feraligatr prevailed, pitching Tony back into a tree textured by the battlefield. The false foliage cracked under Tony’s weight, and a large portion of it faded into thin air in a cloud of binary code.

“The reason why Aggron is an especially poor choice against Feraligatr is actually twofold,” Silver spoke before not only Matt but Nekou, Olivia, Bunny and Dante, who were all fascinated in the battle for their own reasons. “One, the reason you already know, that Water is super-effective against Rock. You already knew that, but what shocks me is that you don’t know reason number two – Steel-type moves don’t affect Water-types much. For that reason, you have no chance. Recall Aggron if you want to have any chance of defeating Feraligatr.”

Matt stopped and stared nervously at the ground. “He’s got a point. I knew that, but it slipped my mind,” he thought, running a hand over the stubble on his face. “If my attacks can be so easily repelled, I won’t be able to win. Maybe I should recall Tony…”

“Time’s up, your decision for Aggron is made. Feraligatr, Waterfall!”

Seeing the water-cloaked Feraligatr charging his way again, Matt panicked and blurted out, “Block it with Double-Edge!”

Matt hadn’t noticed yet, but Tony seemed to realize something about the battle and Feraligatr. As a result, he lowered his head and turned Double-Edge into a headbutting move instead of a tackling move. He charged ahead, right into Feraligatr’s attack, and managed to hit Feraligatr’s own head directly. Both Pokémon were affected by the collision, but Feraligatr was visibly shaken up by the force he’d been hit with.

“Tony, what did...” Suddenly, what his Pokémon had done clicked with Matt. “Aggron as a species is far more defensive than Feraligatr! If we simply parry Feraligatr’s attacks with similar moves of our own, Feraligatr will end up defeating himself!” Undoing and opening his coat, Matt said to his Pokémon, “Good thinking, Tony! That’s how we’ll win!”

“I don’t know what you’re talking about, but I will be the winner! Feraligatr, Iron Tail!”

Tony’s Double-Edge had more of an effect on Feraligatr than either Matt or Silver realized, however. The hulking Water-type could not carry out his orders immediately due to the fact that he was having difficulty maintaining his balance after the blow he’d received.

It wasn’t long before Feraligatr managed to overcome his dizziness, though, and Matt was ready for him when he did. “Hit Feraligatr’s tail with Dragon Claw!”

As Feraligatr swung his tail around, Tony had a glowing claw ready to intercept it. Iron Tail had so much force put into it that Tony had to strain greatly for his own move to have any effect, but it paid off when he managed to reverse the pace of Feraligatr’s attack, throwing Silver’s Pokémon into a spin.

“If that won’t work, we’ll get even closer! Feraligatr, use Ice Punch repeatedly!”

In order to stop his spinning, Feraligatr leaned down and dug his claw into the ground, quickly halting his movement. He then rose to his full height, tensed the muscles in both of his arms and charged at Tony anew, with his claws and forearms radiating icy air.

“I’ll gladly fight up close! Meet every one with Dragon Claw, Tony!”

Bracing himself, Tony met every one of the punches dealt by Feraligatr by stabbing Feraligatr’s fists with his claws; both alternated their strikes, matching each other evenly.

“Now this is a battle,” Nekou commented, still standing behind the floating computer. She seemed to be paying surprisingly close attention to the match. “Olivia, what do you think?”

“Feraligatr’s strong, but I expected that.” Smiling, she continued, “But Matt’s doing really well. I’m actually impressed.”

“I agree,” Bunny concurred. “Even with the bad type matchup, Matt’s figuring out ways to make it work. I’m not sure if he can actually pull off a win, though…”

For his part, Dante simply sat still and quietly observed the events unfolding before him.

Tony and Feraligatr were still exchanging blows when Silver suddenly smirked. “I’ve got you right where I want you,” he tauntingly hissed. “Iron Tail!”

In the blink of an eye, Feraligatr halted his punching assault and switched back to using his tail, undercutting Tony and forcing him to fall forward. He fell right into Feraligatr’s grasp, and the Water-type Pokémon gripped Tony by wrapping his arms around the Aggron.

“What?!” Matt gasped in disbelief, a sentiment shared by his friends on the sidelines. “How am I supposed to... use Iron Tail, I guess!”

Tony’s tail did begin to glow, but he was unable to wriggle free of Feraligatr’s grasp and therefore was unable to use it. Feraligatr smiled; it was not a smile of happiness but one of cocky confidence, much like the one worn by his trainer.

“Now, Feraligatr!” Silver called out, pointing directly forward. “Throw Aggron with Waterfall!”

A veil of water erupted around the two Pokémon, putting Tony into visible distress. That wasn’t enough for Feraligatr, though; he began trying to lift his opponent, exerting all the energy he could into raising the Aggron up.

It was Feraligatr’s clear struggle to pick up Tony that inspired Matt to continue. “I know you’ve got some more left in you, Tony. I can feel it!”

Responding to Matt’s encouragement, Tony growled and shifted himself against both Feraligatr’s grip and the water pounding his body, making himself even heavier and thus harder for Feraligatr to lift.

“Come on, Feraligatr, finish it!” roared Silver. Despite the resistance Tony was putting up against his Feraligatr’s advances, Silver still thought he could feel victory within his reach.

“Dragon Claw!”

Even though he was still trapped in Feraligatr’s grasp, Tony managed to pull his left arm free. He jabbed his glowing claws into Feraligatr’s torso, a move that finally broke the Waterfall and freed him from the Water-type.

“Aggron got away!” Bunny exclaimed as she, Nekou, Olivia and Dante watched the two Pokémon separate in what appeared to be preparation for a final clash. “Matt just might pull this one out after all!”

“Maybe he isn’t so bad after all,” Nekou deadpanned at the battlefield controls. “He might actually earn some credit this time.”

“Feraligatr’s strong, but… maybe Matt and Aggron are stronger?” With her hand over her mouth, Olivia’s voice came out muffled but still reflective of the thought in her mind.

Tony threw off the water that was still dripping down his steel armor by flicking his arms and head. After that, seeing that Feraligatr was still standing prompted to shake the room with a mighty roar.

“Tony…” Interpreting the roar as a sign of his Aggron’s emotions toward the battle, Matt hesitated for a moment before smiling. “You want to finish this up, then? Be my guest. Head Smash!”

Growling in frustration, Silver would have none of this. “Feraligatr, get the upper hand! Waterfall!”

In the exact same way that the battle had begun, Tony and Feraligatr rushed each other and collided head-to-head. However, unlike the first time, Feraligatr’s body had become weak after trying to pick up Tony, and as a result he could not hold out. Tony’s Head Smash made full impact and threw Feraligatr over, and with his head reddened from the blow, the Water-type did not get up.

“Well done, Tony,” Matt congratulated, wiping his brow. Both he and his Aggron were gasping for air after Feraligatr finally went down, exhausted for different reasons. “That was excellent work.”

It slipped their minds for just a brief second that Feraligatr was only the first of Silver’s Pokémon to fall and that the battle was far from over. This was not a fact forgotten by Silver, though, and as he wordlessly recalled Feraligatr he already had his second Pokémon ready.

“That was the first Pokémon I ever got that you just beat.” Holding up a Great Ball – a blue Poké Ball with two red bars on its top – in his right hand, Silver spoke in a voice that was subtly poisoned by an angry, frustrated growl. “I must have underestimated you, and that will not happen again! Mamoswine, enter the battle!”

If Feraligatr could be called a large Pokémon, the beast that followed him as Silver’s second choice could rightfully be known as huge. Her massive body was supported by four stout legs and covered in brown fur. A white-and-blue frame surrounded her fairly small eyes, and below the smattering of cream-colored fur around her red nose, two grand tusks shaped from solid ice emerged. She stamped her foot into the ground repeatedly as she looked down on the Pokémon before her.

“Mamoswine’s a completely different obstacle than Feraligatr,” commented Bunny, “what with being an Ice-and-Ground-type.”

“It’s true that his Ground-type is a risk,” Matt responded, having heard Bunny speaking, “but Mamoswine is half Ice-type, too. Tony, still up for this?”

Though he was visibly tired, Tony was enjoying the fight too much to quit. He grunted and nodded back to his trainer, so Matt adjusted his hat and steeled his stance.

“Good luck, then, Tony. Use Iron Tail!”

“You aren’t getting me this time!” Silver yelled out. “Mamoswine, Earthquake!”

Long before Tony had any chance of reaching Mamoswine with his glowing tail, the towering Pokémon slammed her front legs into the ground. The resulting shockwave ravaged much of the illusionary landscape on its way to violently shaking beneath Tony’s feet. Blasts of seismic energy radiated through Tony’s body from underground, causing him to spasm sharply before falling down as soon as the attack abated.

“To be expected,” Nekou scoffed. “Aggron would have had a hard time even without the stress from beating Feraligatr first.”

“Good job, Tony,” Matt said to the Poké Ball in his hand after recalling his Aggron to its confines. “That wasn’t an easy fight by any means.”

“We’re even now,” Silver called out across the field, his voice as cold as the ice composing his Mamoswine’s tusks. “Tell me that your next Pokémon is going to actually give Mamoswine a challenge. I won’t get any stronger if I just crush you.”

“And I won’t get stronger either if that happens, so wouldn’t you say a tough battle would be good for us both?”

“Now that’s what I wanted to hear.” A daring smile crept onto Silver’s face, breaking his usual dour attitude. It wasn’t out of happiness, though; instead, it was fueled entirely by his eagerness for a brawl. “Show me your next Pokémon!”

“That’s fine by me! Patrick, make your mark!”

Matt threw the Dive Ball after taking it from his bag, sending Patrick out once again. The Seismitoad briefly yawned, but when he saw Mamoswine, he realized that he was in a battle and snapped to attention.

On the sidelines, Bunny seemed slightly alarmed by Matt’s choice. “Matt’s going with a Pokémon he only just caught recently, against a well-trained opponent no less?”

“Well, he’s got to help get Seismitoad stronger at some point, right?” Olivia pointed out. “And Seismitoad did help us fight that nasty Bisharp, so it could work.”

“Don’t think you’ve got this wrapped up yet,” Silver grunted, standing with his hand tucked firmly in his pocket. “Give me everything you’ve got.”

“Gladly,” Matt quickly replied. “Patrick, if he wants to be hit hard, let’s give him just that. Scald!”

“Mamoswine, Hail.”

The two Pokémon maneuvered their bulky bodies in curves around the field, matching each others’ movements. Neither broke eye contact with the other, but it was Patrick who acted first, opening his wide mouth to spit up a stream of steaming-hot water into Mamoswine’s face. The Ice-and-Ground-type closed her eyes as the burning water erupted into steam against her face and singed her fur.

A splash of red, discolored hair formed a bizarre spot on Mamoswine’s face as a residual of the attack. She did, however, manage to snap back into focus rather quickly, and once she did, she looked up to the high ceiling and howled. A soft white aura surrounded her body briefly before bursting into a thick cover of clouds that enveloped the entire chamber, within which a relentless ice storm began. Hailstones buffeted Patrick, but they had no effect on Mamoswine, who seemed to fade into the mist.

“Matt better watch himself,” Nekou muttered to Bunny and Olivia while wiping the water off of her glasses. “If Silver’s doing what I think he is, then this is going to be quite a ride. I’m not surprised he’d use a Ground-type with such skill, though.”

“His favorite type, like my dad with Water-types?” Olivia wondered.

“It’s just in his blood, I guess you could say.”

Matt was openly as bothered by the clouds in the air as Nekou was. He squinted his visible eye several times and wiped condensation off of the mask covering his other eye before saying anything.

“So you’re going to work me down slowly with Hail?” he breathily said. “I’ll have to deal with you quickly, then. Patrick, use Scald again!”

“Just what I wanted,” Silver mumbled with a smirk.

What happened next was hard to describe. Patrick thought he saw Mamoswine clearly in the storm while he aimed Scald, and as far as Matt, Bunny, Nekou and Olivia all could see, there was no reason to doubt that. Just before the searing stream made contact, though, what appeared to be Mamoswine simply vanished, revealing itself to be little more than a mirage.

“What? How did it miss?”

“That was Mamoswine’s ability, Snow Cloak,” Nekou explained, her glasses catching the light from the fluorescent bulbs on the ceiling and glowing as a result. “It becomes more evasive in a hailstorm.”

“So the Hail wasn’t itself what was going to wear me out, it was Mamoswine escaping my attacks…”

“That’s right. I wanted to test this tactic out on opponents who could give it a challenge.” While offering these details, Silver remained nearly still, keeping his body stiff and his hand in his pocket. He finally moved shortly after, however, pointing at Matt as he called out the command, “Earthquake!”

Mamoswine had completely disappeared in the murk consuming the battle, so when she roared, her disembodied voice seemed to be coming from everywhere at once. It was impossible for anyone to tell where the shockwave radiating through the ground originated from, but regardless of that fact, Patrick was shaken to his knees as a result.

“I think it’s behind you, Patrick! Hit it with Drain Punch!”

A gurgling sound rumbled from Patrick’s mouth, indicative of his anger as he whirled around and swung his glowing fist in a wide arc across the space previously to his back. It was all for naught, though; if Mamoswine had been there just a moment earlier, she no longer was.

“This works better than I expected,” Silver mused. “If I’m getting this much mileage now, I can only imagine how well it’ll do against his Pokémon. It’s about time to wrap this up, so use Earthquake one more time!”

Once more, Mamoswine bellowed from no discernible location and broke the ground with a seismic shockwave. Patrick fell from his knees onto all fours, trembling violently from the repeated spasms forced through his body. Yet, he did not faint, and that was what visibly flustered Silver while leaving Matt relieved.

“That didn’t do it? I’ll have to admit it, then… you’re giving me just the kind of challenge I wanted.”

“Underestimating your opponent’s a mistake,” Matt advised the younger trainer. “If you underestimate what you’re against, you won’t bring your best to the fight.”

“That’s good and all but I wasn’t underestimating you,” Silver sneered, his façade of smug calmness beginning to crack. “You are a means to an end for me, and for that, I need you as strong as you possibly can be. You think I’m underestimating you? I’ll show you how serious I can be! Mamoswine, Ice Shard! Finish it off!”

A glint in the churning murk of the hailstorm caught Matt’s eye, and he knew immediately what he had to do. “Ninety degrees to your right! Scald!”

In a sudden burst of agility, Patrick deliberately fell onto his stomach and turned around by exactly the prescribed angle. The chunks of ice that Mamoswine had directed his way simply flew right over his head, having no effect on him as he spat back another burst of boiling water.

“Mamoswine, wha…” Silver stopped his response to Mamoswine’s pained wail short when he spotted her amongst the clouds. She was now the one trembling, with some sort of injury near her mouth acting as the source of her suffering. From the bright red discoloration of her fur in that area, Silver realized that she had been inflicted with a burn. “Damn it! Stopped when I was so close... this is not over yet. Mamoswine, come back!”

Seeing no sense in forcing Mamoswine to fight further at the moment, Silver called her back into the relative safety of her Great Ball. He then gripped another Poké Ball in his hand, but hesitated in throwing it.

“My third and last Pokémon,” Silver thought aloud. “To call this a win for myself, I must make everything I can out of this one. Mamoswine can’t do this alone, and if I want to get strong enough to defeat him, I have to be able to win battles like this…” Finally throwing the Poké Ball, he shouted, “Gengar, enter the battle!”

In keeping with the eclectic, random nature of Silver’s team, his third Pokémon was a roughly five-foot-tall ghost with the appearance of a black shadow. Just about the Gengar’s only distinguishing features were his sinister red eyes and wide, toothy smile.

“A Gengar? Now I’m interested.” Stiffly pushing her glasses up on her nose, Nekou walked away from the control computer and dropped herself next to Bunny on the bench. “This might be where Silver turns it around.”

“What’s gotten into you all the sudden?” Bunny questioned, genuinely confused regarding how Nekou’s mind had changed so fast.

“Ghost-types fight completely differently than users of brute force like Feraligatr and Mamoswine,” Nekou explained. “I’m interested to see how Matt handles one…” She then abruptly added, “Strictly from a knowledge standpoint, of course. I just want to know what he’s capable of.”

From his spot on the battlefield, Matt was having similar thoughts. After taking a moment to assess the situation and his chances, he thrust his hand out and called, “Patrick, use Scald again!”

“Counter it with Shadow Ball!”

In the haze of the continuing hailstorm, neither Patrick nor Gengar could get a clear lock on where the other was. As a result their attacks sailed within inches of each other on their way to grazing their respective targets.

“This hailstorm has got to end soon…” Matt mumbled to himself. The weather effect laid out by Silver was indeed making it more difficult for him to strategize Patrick’s moves. “Just try another Scald for now!”

“If you’re going to have trouble hitting me, I’ll try my luck. Gengar, Metronome!”

Moving with great speed, Gengar pointed straight up with both hands and then waved his arms back and forth. A split second later, an orange aura surrounded him as rushed forward with his arms crossed, karate chopping Patrick in the stomach in an ‘X’ shape. Though this Cross Chop attack did knock the wind out of the Seismitoad, he was able to quickly recover and take advantage of his now-close proximity to his enemy to blast Gengar with hot water. The phantom tumbled through the air, groaning shrilly in pain.

Much to Matt’s delight, the hailstorm finally abated at that point. The entire virtual battlefield – much of it damaged by the vicious sparring it hosted – returned to full view, and the two panting Pokémon growled while sizing up what it would take to defeat each other.

“It’s time to put an end to this once and for all. Patrick, hit Gengar with one more Scald dead-on!”

“That’s what you think!” Silver shouted in response. “Gengar, Toxic! Now!”

Patrick opened his mouth in preparation to launch yet another Scald, but before he could get any water out, Gengar complicated things. Stretching his right arm out in Patrick’s direction, Gengar focused a swirl of poisonous sludge around it, ultimately using the arm as a guide to shoot the vile substance right into Patrick’s face.

The Seismitoad’s entire visage was covered by the sludge, throwing his Scald far off target. He completely panicked, desperately trying to wipe away the thick fluid that was already sapping his last bits of endurance.

“Patrick, is there anything I can…”

“There’s something I can do,” Silver interrupted. “End this fight. Gengar, Venoshock!”

Gengar stared upward and spread his arms, letting out a high-pitched cry. Four pools of similar purple sludge erupted around Patrick, and Gengar’s power caused each puddle to rise into the air in the shape of a lightning bolt. Suddenly, the four spears of poison converged on Patrick, shocking him from head to toe in brutal, agonizing pain.

“Venoshock is a special toxin that attacks the bodies of already poisoned targets,” Silver explained while he and Matt watched Patrick writhe desperately within Gengar’s assault. “Do what you must to win, with no rules or limits… that’s the way of the world and the way I battle. Your Seismitoad’s name is Patrick, right? Patrick, thank you for being a useful training partner.”

Silver snapped his fingers, making the Venoshock barrage finally cease. Almost instantaneously, Patrick crumbled to the ground in front of Gengar, unable to move even a centimeter more.

“Patrick, no…” Looking up with grief in his eyes, Matt yelled to Silver, “Call the rest of the battle off! I have to take Patrick for treatment now!”

“Don’t ****ing choke now!” Nekou suddenly called out, startling the others. “It’s just regular damage, Patrick’s no worse hurt than he’d be from any normal fight! Silver’s just trying to psych you out!”

“Yeah!” Olivia piped up in support. “Don’t let him get inside your head!”

“Yeah, my head is mine…” Matt chuckled, shaking it to work out a cramp in his neck. Turning back to the battle, he held up the Dive Ball and recalled Patrick, saying, “Patrick, you fought courageously. I’ll get you to the Pokémon Center soon.”

“So what’s it going to be last?” demanded Silver. “It’s two against one now. Face it, my training here will end with my victory!”

“Not if my old friend has anything to say about it!” Matt countered, pulling a yellow-and-black Ultra Ball from his bag and throwing it. “Nikola, make your mark!”

As Matt’s last Pokémon took shape, its form became a rather unusual one: an orange refrigerator with a spike on top, cloaked in a blue plasma that formed a pair of lightning bolt-shaped ‘arms.’ On the refrigerator’s front, two white-and-blue eyes framed a small, smiling mouth.

“It had to be a Rotom, something I wasn’t prepared for?!” Silver exclaimed in surprise and disgust. “I see you’re not going to make that victory easy for me. Gengar, it’s time to go all out! Toxic!”

“Stop it with Thunderbolt, Nikola!”

Gengar raised his arm again and started to funnel sludge around it, but Nikola cut him off. The electric blast loosed by the Rotom cut right through Gengar’s Toxic and powerfully shocked him, making him stumble onto one knee.

“You’re not going to stop me! Not yet!” Silver swiftly pointed forward and roared in command, “Gengar, Shadow Ball!”

Trembling, the weakened Gengar extended his arm again, this time to draw dark energy out of the air in the shape of a sphere. He locked his eyes on the floating refrigerator Rotom and flicked his finger, sending the orb of shadow at its target; Nikola, however, made no effort to dodge, instead opting to take the hit and endure it. The Electric-and-Ice-type emerged nearly unscathed.

“Show that Gengar a Shadow Ball of your own, Nikola.” By this point, Matt’s confidence levels were rising. Barring any unforeseen turns, all Silver had left in reserve was a burned, injured Mamoswine, which would be far from enough to win him the day, a fact Matt was well aware of.

Obliging its trainer’s direction, Nikola focused the same dark energy as Gengar between its lightning bolt arms. The resulting Shadow Ball was smaller than Gengar’s but hit its mark perfectly, dropping the Ghost-and-Poison-type completely to his knees.

“It’s all or nothing now!!” Silver was beginning to completely lose his composure, which was something that was off-putting to Matt and the others, who were used to his normal cool, calm demeanor. In fact, he was acting with such intensity that it was almost frightening. “Put everything on the line for one last shot! Metronome!!”

Something in Silver’s fiery voice stirred Gengar, and the Pokémon stood back up. Wearily, he waved his arms once more, but this time, the result was something unusual – overcome by a surge of energy, Gengar held his arms out, allowing them to take on the shape of large scythes.

“That’s…” Matt gasped.

“****!” Nekou exclaimed.

“It’s Guillotine!” Bunny finished. “If this hits, it’s all over!”

Olivia, meanwhile, simply sat and stared, completely silent in her fascination with the turns the battle was taking. Dante still sat next to her, carefully observing every single movement both Matt and Silver made.

Leveling the blades that his arms had become, Gengar let out a bloodcurdling scream and leapt at Nikola. His intent plainly was to use his transformed arms like a pair of shears to critically injure and cripple Nikola all at once.

“Get out of the way and use Shadow Ball!” Matt cried out, almost reluctant to even look at the battle any further. He didn’t think Nikola would be able to move swiftly enough to avoid the brutal attack due to the heavy appliance serving as the Pokémon’s body.

Despite its bulk, however, Nikola managed to lift itself just enough to cause Gengar’s scythes to come together harmlessly right below it. In immediate retaliation, the Rotom dropped another Shadow Ball on its foe, slamming the screeching ghost into the ground.

“Not yet!” A slight growl worked its way into Silver’s speech as he saw Gengar trying to stand up, but even then, he was beginning to realize that the Ghost-and-Poison-type had been pushed to his limits. “Toxic!”

“I won’t let you!” Matt countered. “Nikola, drop a Thunderbolt and finish this!”

With his injuries impeding his movements, Gengar was barely able to lift his arm toward Nikola before the Rotom answered by striking him with an electric blast. This was what pushed Gengar over the edge, and he crumpled back onto the floor and became still.

Before anyone had a chance to speak, Silver swiftly and wordlessly sent Gengar back to his Poké Ball and released Mamoswine from her Great Ball again. Unlike earlier, her fur was matted and messy, and she labored for breath as a visible burn around her mouth took its toll.

“Get ready, Nikola! It’s time to end this!” Once he saw that Nikola was ready to make its move, Matt clenched his fist. “Knock it out once and for all using Blizzard!”

“Oh no you don’t! Mamoswine, use Superpower and aim for the rocks, then the trees!”

Just as Nikola sent a gust of freezing air and ice at Mamoswine from its plasma coat, the great giant cloaked herself in a red aura before charging forward.

The Blizzard missed, but Matt was more puzzled by why Mamoswine appeared to be charging at one of the virtual boulders making up the battlefield. “Keep attacking, Nikola! Keep up the pressure!”

Nikola released blast after blast of Blizzard, but they all fell short of hitting Mamoswine. The Pokémon, despite her huge body, was actually climbing into the air by using the rocks as platforms. Faster than Matt or the spectators could process it, Mamoswine was on top of the tallest tree.

“Now, Mamoswine! Do it!”

With Superpower still activated, Mamoswine made a valiant leap, aiming to crush Nikola with her weight. The Rotom froze, fearing the rapidly growing shadow covering it.

“Now’s your chance, Nikola! Finish with Blizzard!”

Matt’s direction gave Nikola the confidence it was lacking, and spurred it to overrun Mamoswine with a massive Blizzard. The concentrated storm packed so much force that it actually flung Mamoswine out of her path and crashed her to the floor.

Mamoswine did not stand up again.

“He did it!” Olivia exclaimed, her excitement boiling over. Quickly propping herself up on her crutches, she hobbled over to her and threw her arms around him, a sentiment he returned by setting his own hand on her shoulder.

“Well, well, well, what have we here?” Nekou smirked, and when combined with the light once again filling her glasses, she presented a face of obvious mischief. She and Bunny had followed Olivia to Matt. “Maybe I can get something out of this bargain after all.”

“What does that mean?” Matt asked in confusion.

“It… it means…” Flushing as she searched for words, Nekou finally settled on an excuse and said, “Now that pizza tonight can be for all of us! You know, to celebrate you winning today.”

Matt sighed. “Fine. You know, sometimes I wonder if this all wouldn’t make more sense if you actually were taking advantage of me outright.”

“Why don’t you join us, Silver?” Bunny called to the sullen young man, who was slowly making his way to the door after recalling Mamoswine.

“Idle time is time wasted,” he grumbled in response, slowing to a stop but not turning around. “My father is powerful and ruthless, both as a person and as a trainer. I will not rest until I defeat him and put him in his place. Matt Chiaki… I took the loss this time, but it was valuable training for when I ultimately confront him. You only concern yourself with growing stronger, so you will continue to give me the challenges I need for training.”

“Um… fine, I guess?” By that time, Silver was through the door and Matt was talking to the inner side of the portal. “How unusual.”

“That boy, Silver…” Dante spoke up, having remained silent for some time. “He appears to be skilled, but raw emotion dominates all his functions. If he learns to control that anger for his father, he could become a truly powerful Pokémon trainer.”

“Whatever,” Nekou sighed, “I don’t even want to worry about it anymore. I want to go relax.”

“For once, you’ve actually got a good idea,” Matt flatly said.

-

The sun was high in the sky as Silver exited the Trainer House, casting a warm light over much of Cherrygrove City. He silently filtered into the street and began walking to the Pokémon Center, but he was soon distracted by the sound of a telephone ring.

“Who’s calling me at a time like this?” he sneered, reaching into his pocket for a communication device. Colored blue with a white half- Poké Ball patterned on each side, the Pokégear continued to ring loudly in Silver’s hands until he flipped it open, revealing two screens inside. On the top screen was Looker, the thin-faced detective from the Kiss of Death case.

“Oh, it’s you,” Silver groaned. “What do you want?”

“Important information to pass on, yes. Still caught up at this location taking a look into and investigating the Clemens murder, but word comes back to me from the officers who are working elsewhere in the field.”

“Spit it out already.”

“Activity that is suspicious is taking place in Azalea Town. People wearing suits colored black, like the darkness of the night. Gathering supplies of equipment for some purpose that is obviously nefarious!”

“So Team Rocket finally resurfaces… Thanks, then.” Abruptly hanging up and putting the Pokégear away, Silver resumed his march to the Pokémon Center, but at double the speed.

“I’ll take out your worthless team one-by-one, I swear… and then I’m coming for you, father.”

-

That night, after the sun had gone down and the group retired to their room in the Pokémon Center, Matt made good on the so-called ‘promise,’ even if Nekou had entirely invented the idea. The long coffee table near the room’s television was covered by a combination of two pizza boxes and a myriad of beverages. As was becoming familiar to Matt, Bunny and Olivia, Nekou’s unstoppable appetite earned her a pizza all her own, while the second was mainly divided up between Bunny and Olivia. Matt insisted on only taking two slices for himself.

“Aaaaaaaah!” Nekou gasped after taking a sip from the can of beer in her hand. “This is the life, you know? Pizza, some friends to share it with, and…” Nekou shook the can and glanced to the rest of the six-pack resting on the couch next to her before finishing, “my old buddy with his five brothers to keep me company. It doesn’t get better than this.”

“It is nice to finally relax a little,” Bunny admitted. “The Pokémon look like they’re having fun, too.”

Bunny’s assessment was completely correct. They’d set out plates of Pokémon food on the floor, inviting Marie along with Nekou’s Gothorita, Murkrow, Duskull and Zorua to eat out of two of the plates, Marie taking one all to herself. Balin was eating out of a third plate, while Olivia’s Minccino, Roselia, Oshawott and Lillipup shared two others.

“They’re all so cute,” Olivia said, her voice devoid of its usual warm energy. “I wish I could sit with them, but this leg…”

“Don’t you worry, Olivia, you’ll recover soon,” Nekou assured the younger girl. “Once you do, the Pokémon will still be here for you to play with all you want. I don’t want to see you stressing out over anything, so let’s just enjoy the pizza, okay?”

Olivia nodded her head. “Yeah, good idea,” she whispered, smiling. “Thank you.”

Off to the side, Matt was eating his own pieces of pizza while reading a book, staying away from getting too involved in the peaceful, cheerful exchange the others were having. He looked up when he heard Olivia and Nekou talking, and found himself feeling comforted by the honest connection they seemed to share.

-

Just like the night before, Pierce walked into the dark, dank alley and snapped his fingers four times. The signal still worked, for almost immediately, the Tenganist woman emerged from the shadows at the end of the alley.

“You came back,” she muttered, sounding surprised in her words but not in her voice, which remained flat.

“I did,” Pierce affirmed, “because our shared goals are precious to us both. Have you made a decision?”

“I must go to the survivors living near Blackthorn City to fully confirm the arrangements, but I have made a decision. We accept the proposal of an alliance between our forces, with the condition that my people remain autonomous, free from taking orders from your leader.”

“That is something I can pull some strings to arrange. For now, I can furnish you with supplies and some explosives.”

“A fair deal,” the woman agreed while nestling her infant in her arms.

“I’ll be going back to my base to iron out the details, then. What’s your name, if I may ask? How should I refer to you to my superiors?”

“I am a woman with no name. It was stripped from me. Today I am merely the prophet that sustains the life of my people.”

“Your identity was stripped from you…” Pierce turned away as his voice became shaky. “Just like me, then. Rest assured, I will do everything in my power to aid you in your battle against Ghetsis and Polaris.”


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Matori

THE QUEEN IS BACK
I really love how you opened this chapter. You did an excellent job setting up a noir-ish atmosphere and I think that's the perfect atmosphere to really let Pierce's character shine, since he's so mysterious. You also did well using those scenes to show not everything is as it seems in your story's world and that there's a lot of ugliness. I also really enjoy how you bookended the rest of the chapter with those scenes- it really brought together the whole chapter. I'm hoping to learn more about the mysterious woman later- she sounds fascinating from what we know about her so far, and I'm already starting to love her even though we don't even know her name. The Pierce subplot is looking like it'll be quite the ride.

“Don’t ever call yourself anything like that!” Nekou forcefully said, looking back over her shoulder. “You didn’t do anything wrong. This world is a ***** and the only way to beat it is to be a bigger ***** right back at it. That’s what Maman taught me, and it’s helped keep me going.”

Good words of wisdom. The way Nekou is a role model for Olivia is really awesome and empowering and her advice might be a little on the vulgar side but it's always true. You're developing their relationship great- I think it's really realistic and it's fun to watch Olivia start taking cues from Nekou little by little. You can tell just by reading it's helping Olivia become more confident.

The bit about the Pokemon Center services only being free to those with Pokedexes and starters is a fascinating deconstruction of the world, as well as an interesting little bit of social commentary (however unintentional it might be). I love the little touches you add in that show what happens to those other trainers we meet along the way in the games.

Ghetsis' speech was terrifying and the fact he manages to get an entire Pokemon Center of people gathered around the television to watch it is even more so.

I see what you did there, giving Pierce the codename Sam. I see it. I'm really wondering what it is Pierce has up his sleeve from these scenes, and I can't wait to find out in later chapters.

Ghetsis in general... Ghetsis is TERRIFYING. It's clear he's completely unhinged and dangerous, and the way he treats Anthea and Concordia is really horrifying and messed up. Good to see you kept his cruelty completely intact.

The Guide Gent is... odd. I'd be unsure of how to react to a man popping out of nowhere and offering to guide me around. Good work highlighting the frequent absurdity of the games.



NANDO'S BACK! I loved reading his battle with Dahlia, and how you characterized both of them well with their dialogue and actions. Both battles in this chapter- Nando vs. Dahlia and Matt vs Silver- are excellently written and suspenseful and the action in them flows wonderfully, as well as developing the characters involved nicely.

The way Nekou keeps nagging about the pizza throughout the chapter is adorable. She loves good food.

Silver and his portrayal in this chapter are amazing. At first I found him an irredeemable *******, but as you developed him during his battle with Matt, I started realizing that he's not so much an ******* as he is very serious about what he does, even if it means stepping on some toes. The Matt vs Silver battle was one of the most exciting battles I've ever read, and you did really well to keep the action flowing and unpredictable. It's clear Silver is going to be a serious rival in the story and I can't wait to see more about him. I really didn't see the twist with Silver coming at the end- obviously he's not worked out his little Team Rocket issue yet, but I never expected him to be working alongside Looker or at least keeping in contact with him for information.

“Aaaaaaaah!” Nekou gasped after taking a sip from the can of beer in her hand. “This is the life, you know? Pizza, some friends to share it with, and…” Nekou shook the can and glanced to the rest of the six-pack resting on the couch next to her before finishing, “my old buddy with his five brothers to keep me company. It doesn’t get better than this.”“Aaaaaaaah!” Nekou gasped after taking a sip from the can of beer in her hand. “This is the life, you know? Pizza, some friends to share it with, and…” Nekou shook the can and glanced to the rest of the six-pack resting on the couch next to her before finishing, “my old buddy with his five brothers to keep me company. It doesn’t get better than this.”
Nekou has the right idea. She finally got her pizza too! Girl needs her pizza and booze.

Overall, this was an excellent chapter, and you plotted it out really well. The action all flows naturally and the transitions are excellent, and the way you spaced scenes kept it interesting. I can't wait to see what's coming next.
 

Bay

YEAHHHHHHH
Pretty interesting you have Pierce a Tenganist. I assume you’ll get a bit more in depth over that soon?

I admit to laughing at Matt’s reaction over the Pokemon Center’s fee (and him being called youngster later on in the chapter, lol) .I always thought it’s free considering in the games it seems it’s free for the public, but that’s just me.

Ghetsis hobbled down a cold, gloomy corridor in Polaris’s base shortly after his speech.
A dark, gloomy chamber waited beyond the doorway.
You used gloomy twice within a couple paragraphs. Perhaps for second quote leave gloomy out? I do have to give you credit for describing the loud noise Ghetsis’s cane keep doing, very nice. Also, oh dear over the child and the woman from the earlier scene. D:

Yay for Nando appearing! As much as I enjoyed the battle a lot, I feel you can leave out the first part of Nando and Dahlia’s battle, or least show the end of it, and go straight with Zapdos (considering Matt will go against Dahlia) so the plot goes at a slight faster pace, but that’s just me.

Wrenching his arm free of her grip, Matt growled, “What’s gotten into you? This time, I mean.”
“If you don’t train, you won’t beat Dahlia. And if you lose, what good are you to me?”
“What does that mean?”
“It means… um… ****. Did you forget about that pizza you promised me and Olivia? If you lose, you can’t keep your promises!”
Awwwwww. :3

“I like you and your little team, Matt,” Dante confessed. “You four remind me of how things used to be, when people quested for big things. Well, that and the fact that I can just feel how badly my Alakazam and Ditto want to battle again, but do forgive this old man for making you listen to his ramblings.”
Maybe it’s just me, but confess seems to me Dante admires him a little too much, LOL. In all seriousness though, I think said or respond would be better to not give that kind of indication.

“I see.” Still holding the front of his hat, Matt quietly pondered what he had to do. “This battle is to practice for the Battle Arcade. Dahlia uses Togekiss, Ludicolo and Zapdos, and with me now… I have Heatran, Reuniclus, Aggron, Rotom, Golurk and Salamence with me. Based on that… I know which three I’ll go with.”
Matt stopped and stared nervously at the ground. “He’s got a point. I knew that, but it slipped my mind,” he thought, running a hand over the stubble on his face. “If my attacks can be so easily repelled, I won’t be able to win. Maybe I should recall Tony…”
“Tony, what did...” Suddenly, what his Pokémon had done clicked with Matt. “Aggron as a species is far more defensive than Feraligatr! If we simply parry Feraligatr’s attacks with similar moves of our own, Feraligatr will end up defeating himself!” Undoing and opening his coat, Matt said to his Pokémon, “Good thinking, Tony! That’s how we’ll win!”
I noticed the first part of the battle you have Matt keep thinking aloud to himself. I think you don’t have to keep Matt saying his thoughts over the battles. You can easily mention his feelings and such through narrating.

What happened next was hard to describe. Patrick thought he saw Mamoswine clearly in the storm while he aimed Scald, and as far as Matt, Bunny, Nekou and Olivia all could see, there was no reason to doubt that. Just before the searing stream made contact, though, what appeared to be Mamoswine simply vanished, revealing itself to be little more than a mirage.
The bolded part sounds awkward in relation to narrative. Could be easily fixed by taking it out. The Snow Cloak ability is pretty cool, though.

“My third and last Pokémon,” Silver thought aloud. “To call this a win for myself, I must make everything I can out of this one. Mamoswine can’t do this alone, and if I want to get strong enough to defeat him, I have to be able to win battles like this…” Finally throwing the Poké Ball, he shouted, “Gengar, enter the battle!”
Here you go with the thought aloud again. :x

One other thing I noticed is you keep describing the Pokemon, which you don’t really have to considering the people reading are Pokemon fans and they already know how they look like.

Despite those mentions, I enjoyed the battle overall. Great Matt and Silver get the battle and I wasn’t disappointed. My favorite parts have to be Tony able to stand on his own and Nikola able to barely dodge the Guillotine. It’s also nice Olivia getting excited while watching the battle after still holding a grudge at the beginning of this chapter.

“Aaaaaaaah!” Nekou gasped after taking a sip from the can of beer in her hand. “This is the life, you know? Pizza, some friends to share it with, and…” Nekou shook the can and glanced to the rest of the six-pack resting on the couch next to her before finishing, “my old buddy with his five brothers to keep me company. It doesn’t get better than this.”
This is why I love you Nekou. <3

Looks like quite a few things are hinted upon this chapter, which is exciting. Looking forward to next chapter!
 

Skiyomi

Only Mostly Dead
Hey there. I'm here from the review game with some comments on chapter 3. I haven't read the previous chapters, but I did read the information you offered in your post. So here I go...

I can't really say how well the start of the chapter worked as a follow up to the end of your last chapter since I haven't read it, but just as an opening in general, it works pretty well. You use the weather neatly to set up a forboding atmosphere, not just for whatever shady things the Rockets are up to, but for the events of the chapter. However you look at it, a storm is coming.

You've got some good description here in general, though I've noticed a few issues with it. First off, some of the details seem a little unnecessary. For example, taking the time to go over the controls on James's tablet computer--I didn't really find that the level of detail there did much. The second problem I've seen is that the description seems very localized and clumped--a new Pokemon or person will appear, there will be a paragraph explaining how they look and then we're pretty much done. I tend to find that this breaks the flow of the prose and stifles movement. I'd prefer if we just got a glimpse of description from the start, and then have further development as the scene goes on.

“As you were made aware of,” Pierce instructed,

I don't think you need the "of" there.

Almost immediately upon materializing, Oshawott proudly held up his shell, only flinching slightly when he realized that Zorua was staring at him. He realized that this would be his first chance to prove himself to his trainer, so he intended to make the best of it.

You’ve doubled up on “realized” here. In such close proximity, it would be better to use another synonym to avoid repetition.

I would like to see a little more “stage business” from the characters during extended scenes of dialogue since it really adds more of a sense of movement and tends to embody the characters more. Tone and blocking are important, and you’re taking care of that quite conscientiously, but I think some quality of gesture would give a greater sense of completion. I'm not saying you never include gesture/stage business, because you clearly do, but I feel like you could use more of it.

I’m kinda missing the heavy Brooklyn accent from Meowth. I suppose it’s not a necessity since it’s a dub thing, but if you’re trying to go for more of his English voice, then I’d expect more of his accent reflected his text. Otherwise you seem to be doing a really good job with his word choice and character.

Nekou handled it significantly more poorly. Even though she had only known Olivia for a little over a week, Nekou was already developing both sisterly and maternal instincts toward the girl, and an aggressive creature causing Olivia direct harm deeply violated those bonds. She flew into a screaming rage, viciously rushing Bisharp with her switchblade; however, she was unable to inflict much damage due to Bisharp fighting back.

I suppose for *my* benefit as a reader coming in at chapter 3 without having read any of what comes before, explaining Nekou’s regard for Olivia is helpful. But you shouldn’t need this. Her relationship with Olivia should be shown through her actions, not directly told to the reader through exposition. I can’t connect to the bond they have if you just tell me that’s what it is.

“If that fall would bang me up, though, think of what it would do to Olivia!”

The “though” seems unnecessary and kind of off to me here. I think you could nix it all together and not have to replace anything at all, but if you wanted to add something, I think a “then” in the place of “though” or a “But” at the beginning of the sentence would sound more natural.

When we get to Dante’s house and he and Matt start talking there’s a lot of it that makes me kind feel like we’ve arrived at “super convenient exposition time.” Part of this seems to be to recap things from your past stories (my guess, since I only read a bit of one of them), while the other part seems to be to establish Dante’s past. I realize that these are probably things you need to do, but, well, like I said, if feels a little convenient. Maybe I’ve just read too many stories now that I can sniff out backstory summary coming. I just prefer when it gets slipped into my food, so to speak, or teased out slowly instead of dumped on me in a way that feels more convenient to the plot than natural to the moment. It honestly came as quite a relief to me when Nekou interrupted them.

“I’d like to take you apart,” Nekou wryly commented at the exact moment Matt finished speaking. “Your insides sound fascinating.”

...Of course, the fact that it's a really good line made me all the happier :)

“Don’t forget me, I’m a woman of science,” Nekou piped up, before slyly adding, “Just because my science is a lot madder doesn’t disqualify me.”

And she’s two for two! I should probably stop and say that Nekou was the highlight of this for me. She's the strongest character in my estimation, gets the best lines, and keeps the reader on her toes because she can be unpredictable. Plus she keeps a switchblade in her blouse. That's, like, automatic character bonus-points right there :p

You clearly have some very complex plotting going on here and there's no shortage of intrigue--even just getting your backstory and the events of the chapter conveys that. So, nice to see. Good luck as you continue this project.
 

The Great Butler

Hush, keep it down
I'm going to split up my response into two posts because I want to have some extra space for my reply to Skiyomi.

I really love how you opened this chapter. You did an excellent job setting up a noir-ish atmosphere and I think that's the perfect atmosphere to really let Pierce's character shine, since he's so mysterious. You also did well using those scenes to show not everything is as it seems in your story's world and that there's a lot of ugliness. I also really enjoy how you bookended the rest of the chapter with those scenes- it really brought together the whole chapter. I'm hoping to learn more about the mysterious woman later- she sounds fascinating from what we know about her so far, and I'm already starting to love her even though we don't even know her name. The Pierce subplot is looking like it'll be quite the ride.

Thank you. I enjoyed writing those scenes and I think bookending the chapter with them was a good idea too. I like your comment about the scenes being "noir-ish" - I think I might use that idea for some more Pierce scenes.

Anyway, yes, this subplot is going to be a ride indeed. I hope you've bought your safety harness.

Good words of wisdom. The way Nekou is a role model for Olivia is really awesome and empowering and her advice might be a little on the vulgar side but it's always true. You're developing their relationship great- I think it's really realistic and it's fun to watch Olivia start taking cues from Nekou little by little. You can tell just by reading it's helping Olivia become more confident.

I think I was actually overplaying how familiar their relationship is at this point earlier on, so I'm working to dial it back just a bit. I hope to make their relationship feel a little more natural in the upcoming chapters.

The bit about the Pokemon Center services only being free to those with Pokedexes and starters is a fascinating deconstruction of the world, as well as an interesting little bit of social commentary (however unintentional it might be). I love the little touches you add in that show what happens to those other trainers we meet along the way in the games.

This is actually very intentional and something I would strongly advise you keep in mind as this story goes on.

Ghetsis' speech was terrifying and the fact he manages to get an entire Pokemon Center of people gathered around the television to watch it is even more so.

Another important point to remember. Also, there's more here than meets the eye, maybe...

I see what you did there, giving Pierce the codename Sam. I see it. I'm really wondering what it is Pierce has up his sleeve from these scenes, and I can't wait to find out in later chapters.

It's also a callback to something previous that some of you might have caught. On what he has up his sleeve, though, you might be able to piece it together soon enough.

Thanks for the interest.

Ghetsis in general... Ghetsis is TERRIFYING. It's clear he's completely unhinged and dangerous, and the way he treats Anthea and Concordia is really horrifying and messed up. Good to see you kept his cruelty completely intact.

I didn't just keep it intact, I think I dialed it up... what he did to Anthea and Concordia (that you've seen so far, anyway) is just the tip of the iceberg.

The Guide Gent is... odd. I'd be unsure of how to react to a man popping out of nowhere and offering to guide me around. Good work highlighting the frequent absurdity of the games.

Thanks. I used him because I wanted to use some less notable characters from the games, and I couldn't work in the Dude who teaches you how to catch Pokemon in the previous chapter.

NANDO'S BACK! I loved reading his battle with Dahlia, and how you characterized both of them well with their dialogue and actions. Both battles in this chapter- Nando vs. Dahlia and Matt vs Silver- are excellently written and suspenseful and the action in them flows wonderfully, as well as developing the characters involved nicely.

Thanks once again. It was nice to be able to write Nando again after a while. His battle with Dahlia was something I actually had in mind for a while.

I'm glad the Matt VS. Silver battle actually worked out as I wanted. Mamoswine was surprisingly challenging to write for.

The way Nekou keeps nagging about the pizza throughout the chapter is adorable. She loves good food.

Yes she does.

Silver and his portrayal in this chapter are amazing. At first I found him an irredeemable *******, but as you developed him during his battle with Matt, I started realizing that he's not so much an ******* as he is very serious about what he does, even if it means stepping on some toes. The Matt vs Silver battle was one of the most exciting battles I've ever read, and you did really well to keep the action flowing and unpredictable. It's clear Silver is going to be a serious rival in the story and I can't wait to see more about him. I really didn't see the twist with Silver coming at the end- obviously he's not worked out his little Team Rocket issue yet, but I never expected him to be working alongside Looker or at least keeping in contact with him for information.

I'm glad you see what I tried to do with Silver. I hope his motives came across fairly clearly here.

It should be interesting to see him going forward.

Nekou has the right idea. She finally got her pizza too! Girl needs her pizza and booze.

Gotta live the good life, right?

Overall, this was an excellent chapter, and you plotted it out really well. The action all flows naturally and the transitions are excellent, and the way you spaced scenes kept it interesting. I can't wait to see what's coming next.

Thank you very much! I think you'll continue to enjoy it, at least, I certainly hope you will.

Pretty interesting you have Pierce a Tenganist. I assume you’ll get a bit more in depth over that soon?

It's something that's going to be gradual. I don't have the progression of that plot point mapped out fully yet, but I have the basic ideas assembled.

I admit to laughing at Matt’s reaction over the Pokemon Center’s fee (and him being called youngster later on in the chapter, lol) .I always thought it’s free considering in the games it seems it’s free for the public, but that’s just me.

That's actually the point I was trying to raise: in almost every game, you receive a starter Pokemon and a Pokedex from a professor, meaning that you fulfill the conditions for free Center usage presented here by default. The only notable time I can think of this not being the case is in the Orre games, but Orre quite plainly doesn't follow the same customs as the other regions already.

You used gloomy twice within a couple paragraphs. Perhaps for second quote leave gloomy out? I do have to give you credit for describing the loud noise Ghetsis’s cane keep doing, very nice. Also, oh dear over the child and the woman from the earlier scene. D:

You're right, I didn't catch that double use of "gloomy." My mistake.

I wanted the Ghetsis scene to be very atmospheric, so sound was just as important as visual cues there.

You better warm up that emoticon for her subplot. You're gonna need it.

Yay for Nando appearing! As much as I enjoyed the battle a lot, I feel you can leave out the first part of Nando and Dahlia’s battle, or least show the end of it, and go straight with Zapdos (considering Matt will go against Dahlia) so the plot goes at a slight faster pace, but that’s just me.

Well, two points, actually. Matt may be one of the main characters, but I want the story to have a wider focus than just the main protagonists and antagonists, so I felt it appropriate to give Nando a strong establishing scene. Also, since the scoreboards in the Battle Arcade show each trainer's Pokemon in advance, the surprise about Zapdos would have been ruined if I waited; so, the reason why I used the Ludicolo battle as well was not only to establish Nando but set up and resolve the surprise of Zapdos in this chapter all at once.

Awwwwww. :3

Yes, that is how you should feel. ^^

Maybe it’s just me, but confess seems to me Dante admires him a little too much, LOL. In all seriousness though, I think said or respond would be better to not give that kind of indication.

I'm going to select my words carefully here, but it is more than a simple compliment, just not in the way you seem to be thinking. Therefore, I feel "confessed" is appropriate.

I noticed the first part of the battle you have Matt keep thinking aloud to himself. I think you don’t have to keep Matt saying his thoughts over the battles. You can easily mention his feelings and such through narrating.

Hmm, I suppose you have a point. I guess I still have a bit to break myself into.

The bolded part sounds awkward in relation to narrative. Could be easily fixed by taking it out. The Snow Cloak ability is pretty cool, though.

I had a lot of difficulty working out what to say there. I feel as if it does need some sort of wording to indicate in what direction that line is going, but I definitely agree that I could have done it better than I did...

One other thing I noticed is you keep describing the Pokemon, which you don’t really have to considering the people reading are Pokemon fans and they already know how they look like.

I actually have a rule that I try to follow which I developed years ago when I started writing. That rule is to always describe the Pokemon of the newest generation in more detail than older Pokemon. I do see ways I could diversify the methods of description for older Pokemon, but for Generation 5 - which has a rather divided public opinion - there's a good chance some people may not be familiar at all with the new Pokemon, which makes it a mistake to rely on assumptions for images, I think.

Despite those mentions, I enjoyed the battle overall. Great Matt and Silver get the battle and I wasn’t disappointed. My favorite parts have to be Tony able to stand on his own and Nikola able to barely dodge the Guillotine. It’s also nice Olivia getting excited while watching the battle after still holding a grudge at the beginning of this chapter.

Thank you, it's nice to receive praise for something I worked hard on.

Although, I wouldn't say Olivia had a "grudge." She's just really moody right now after her first day of being a trainer ended with her falling off a cliff and breaking her leg.

This is why I love you Nekou. <3

Precisely. XD;

She is not shy about liking self-indulgences.

Looks like quite a few things are hinted upon this chapter, which is exciting. Looking forward to next chapter!

Correct, and thank you for continuing to be interested!
 

The Great Butler

Hush, keep it down
Hey there. I'm here from the review game with some comments on chapter 3. I haven't read the previous chapters, but I did read the information you offered in your post. So here I go...

Welcome, then! I've seen you around for a while now, so it ought to be very interesting to see what you've got to say here.

I can't really say how well the start of the chapter worked as a follow up to the end of your last chapter since I haven't read it, but just as an opening in general, it works pretty well. You use the weather neatly to set up a forboding atmosphere, not just for whatever shady things the Rockets are up to, but for the events of the chapter. However you look at it, a storm is coming.

Ah, a very keen observation. There are certainly a few layers to what you see in this scene, and you've skillfully picked up on them. Well done.

You've got some good description here in general, though I've noticed a few issues with it. First off, some of the details seem a little unnecessary. For example, taking the time to go over the controls on James's tablet computer--I didn't really find that the level of detail there did much. The second problem I've seen is that the description seems very localized and clumped--a new Pokemon or person will appear, there will be a paragraph explaining how they look and then we're pretty much done. I tend to find that this breaks the flow of the prose and stifles movement. I'd prefer if we just got a glimpse of description from the start, and then have further development as the scene goes on.

In hindsight, I definitely see your point. It was a failed attempt at a shout-out.

In general, description structure is something I personally identify as one of my chief weak points. I've already been trying to incorporate what you pointed out, but clearly I haven't been doing well enough. That's something I absolutely needed to hear. I know exactly what you're talking about and I'll work even harder at it.

I don't think you need the "of" there.

I can see your point there.

You’ve doubled up on “realized” here. In such close proximity, it would be better to use another synonym to avoid repetition.

That makes sense. I'm by no means anywhere near perfect, so I appreciate the input.

I would like to see a little more “stage business” from the characters during extended scenes of dialogue since it really adds more of a sense of movement and tends to embody the characters more. Tone and blocking are important, and you’re taking care of that quite conscientiously, but I think some quality of gesture would give a greater sense of completion. I'm not saying you never include gesture/stage business, because you clearly do, but I feel like you could use more of it.

Agreed. I've already begun trying to take this into account with the work I've done on the next chapter.

I’m kinda missing the heavy Brooklyn accent from Meowth. I suppose it’s not a necessity since it’s a dub thing, but if you’re trying to go for more of his English voice, then I’d expect more of his accent reflected his text. Otherwise you seem to be doing a really good job with his word choice and character.

Now, this is where it's going to wade into opinion territory, unfortunately. For one, I feel that his accent does not translate well to a text medium, which would cause the reader to see things he says as humorous or silly even when not because of how strange it looks. Second, I feel that the accent was part of what the late Maddie Blaustein really invested into to make iconic with Meowth, and I prefer to not even use the pretext of someone else trying to imitate it.

I've tried to adapt his speaking style and speech patterns as closely as I can, and from what you say, I think I must be doing an okay job of it. I'd prefer to keep it there if possible.

I suppose for *my* benefit as a reader coming in at chapter 3 without having read any of what comes before, explaining Nekou’s regard for Olivia is helpful. But you shouldn’t need this. Her relationship with Olivia should be shown through her actions, not directly told to the reader through exposition. I can’t connect to the bond they have if you just tell me that’s what it is.

I already have an idea of something I can do in the next chapter to at least right this little mistake going forward, so thank you for the advice.

The “though” seems unnecessary and kind of off to me here. I think you could nix it all together and not have to replace anything at all, but if you wanted to add something, I think a “then” in the place of “though” or a “But” at the beginning of the sentence would sound more natural.

Looking at it now, you're exactly right.

Word usage and description tends to be one of my weaknesses, but I'm working on it, as I've alluded to earlier.

When we get to Dante’s house and he and Matt start talking there’s a lot of it that makes me kind feel like we’ve arrived at “super convenient exposition time.” Part of this seems to be to recap things from your past stories (my guess, since I only read a bit of one of them), while the other part seems to be to establish Dante’s past. I realize that these are probably things you need to do, but, well, like I said, if feels a little convenient. Maybe I’ve just read too many stories now that I can sniff out backstory summary coming. I just prefer when it gets slipped into my food, so to speak, or teased out slowly instead of dumped on me in a way that feels more convenient to the plot than natural to the moment. It honestly came as quite a relief to me when Nekou interrupted them.

Now, I'm going to have to disagree with you but only halfway here. One thing I've been trying extremely hard to do is make this story accessible to readers who don't have time to read the previous stories, and I personally don't feel that most readers would be willing to wait for all the details about the previous chaos they've been wrapped up in to be described gradually while they don't understand the characters' motivations. I hope I'm not underestimating my readers and potential readers, though, because that would be very embarrassing and probably offensive to them.

I can see how Dante's story could have been spread out over some longer period of time, though.

...Of course, the fact that it's a really good line made me all the happier :)

Plenty more where that came from. ^^;

And she’s two for two! I should probably stop and say that Nekou was the highlight of this for me. She's the strongest character in my estimation, gets the best lines, and keeps the reader on her toes because she can be unpredictable. Plus she keeps a switchblade in her blouse. That's, like, automatic character bonus-points right there :p

Besides the fact that these things should make her an entertaining character, I want to go for something a little deeper here through use of her so drastically different behavior compared to just about every other character. Contrast her wild personality against the introverted, regret-ridden Matt, straight-laced Bunny and Olivia, who is still growing up and hasn't fully found a role for herself yet. In a sense, Nekou is not only a character but a catalyst for the characters around her to evolve past their initial definitions.

You clearly have some very complex plotting going on here and there's no shortage of intrigue--even just getting your backstory and the events of the chapter conveys that. So, nice to see. Good luck as you continue this project.

Thank you very much for this comment and for your overwhelmingly kind and generous review overall! I hope I'll see you here again sometime - your input was very informative and helpful.
 

Morpher01

Bewear my power
Well, review time again.


Pierce is definitely planning something with that homeless woman (who
may or may not actually be the Kiss of Death killer
). That's probably just taking a stab in the dark, but it's something (weird).

Ah, Nando's back, with a Leavanny and Exploud to boot! Quite an interesting battle he had with Dahlia, and the fact that they both made it into a Contest battle definitely added some flavor. Wonder when he'll be meeting up with the main group? Fairly soon, I'd wager.

Silver also returns...good battle with Matt, too. I have to confess that I didn't remember that Gen V made Rotom's type change with the form it took, so I initially thought that Gengar's Metronome-spawned Guillotine wouldn't affect it. And then I looked in the Pokedex. XD Fail on my part. Interesting choice giving Silver a Mamoswine. I have to agree with Nekou and say that it fits, giving Silver's lineage. And I see he's still "working" with Looker. Have to wonder how long Silver can tolerate Looker's unique speech pattern.

“Don’t you worry, Olivia, you’ll recover soon,” Nekou assured the younger girl. “Once you do, the Pokémon will still be here for you to play with all you want. I don’t want to see you stressing out over anything, so let’s just enjoy the pizza, okay?”

Why do I get the feeling that the bolded part will turn out to be completely untrue? I just get that feeling when I read stuff now. XD I don't know why.


Well, it'll be interesting to see where Matt's battle with Dahlia takes him, and how he deals with her Zapdos (and whatever other Legendaries that the remaining Frontier Brains dish out). Keep up the good work!
 

The Great Butler

Hush, keep it down
Pierce is definitely planning something with that homeless woman (who
may or may not actually be the Kiss of Death killer
). That's probably just taking a stab in the dark, but it's something (weird).

It certainly is something, isn't it?

I wouldn't tell you whether or not you guessed it correctly even if you did. Or would I?

Ah, Nando's back, with a Leavanny and Exploud to boot! Quite an interesting battle he had with Dahlia, and the fact that they both made it into a Contest battle definitely added some flavor. Wonder when he'll be meeting up with the main group? Fairly soon, I'd wager.

"Fairly soon" is about right... it'll be in a couple of chapters or so.

Silver also returns...good battle with Matt, too. I have to confess that I didn't remember that Gen V made Rotom's type change with the form it took, so I initially thought that Gengar's Metronome-spawned Guillotine wouldn't affect it.

Yeah, that's an important change to remember. I think it was a good choice on the part of the games, too - Rotom's become much more usable since this generation started.

Interesting choice giving Silver a Mamoswine. I have to agree with Nekou and say that it fits, giving Silver's lineage.

It also is partially Ice-type. Ice is super-effective against Ground.

And I see he's still "working" with Looker. Have to wonder how long Silver can tolerate Looker's unique speech pattern.

You're implying he ever did. XD;

In all seriousness, though, Looker and Silver are both using each other, they're both aware of such and neither really cares. By cooperating with Looker, Silver gets to take out Team Rocket, and by exploiting Silver's desires of revenge, Looker has someone doing his dirty work mopping up the remnants of Team Rocket. They both win.

Why do I get the feeling that the bolded part will turn out to be completely untrue? I just get that feeling when I read stuff now. XD I don't know why.

Because I've trained you well. Heh heh heh...

Well, it'll be interesting to see where Matt's battle with Dahlia takes him, and how he deals with her Zapdos (and whatever other Legendaries that the remaining Frontier Brains dish out). Keep up the good work!

I think you'll enjoy the battle, definitely.

Thanks!
 

JX Valentine

Ever-Discordant
So, sort of on the same line as my other reviews, I'm just going to tackle the most recent chapter because I'd probably be here forever if I tackled every single one. Also, this is going to be more of a general/reaction-to-plot review than a nitpicking review. In general, your grammar is pretty clean, so there's not really that much to worry about in terms of that anyway.

In any case, let's get started, shall we?

Cherrygrove City was a busy city on a coastline, larger than New Bark Town but still smaller than many of the other metropolis-size cities on the continent. Few of its buildings reached comparable heights to the skyscrapers those cities had, but Cherrygrove’s buildings – both residential apartment complexes and commercial centers – were enough to pack plenty into the small area of land the city actually occupied.

One of the things I've noticed about your writing is the wordiness at times. I know it's very difficult to keep this kind of thing from happening, but try to avoid awkward wording whenever possible. If you're not reading your chapters aloud, it might help to do so.

In this case, for example, you've got a misplaced modifier; on a first read-through, a reader might think you're saying that the coastline was larger than New Bark but smaller than many of the other metropolis-size cities. Remember that a dependent clause following a comma is often attached to the first noun before the aforementioned comma.

The second sentence, meanwhile, is plagued by the question of "plenty of what?" It might help to think of it like this: your readers are going into your story with a blank slate, so you'll need to describe as much as possible to get your ideas across. Likewise, be very careful with how you word things as well to avoid any awkward phrasing that seems vaguer than you intended.

“The circumstances of our lives are not easily controlled. My Tenganist heritage is not something I was raised in, as you were. Now, about the offer we can provide you…”

Going to have to agree with what's already been said about making Pierce Tenganist. It adds a lot of depth to his character, particularly given the fact that the anime doesn't give us much in the way of characterization for him.

In general, I love that you're using canon characters. A lot of people these days scoff at the thought of doing that, but if it's pulled off well, then it becomes a showcase of the author's talent – especially if they're writing in the anime universe. I mean, the anime does a poor job of providing backstory and personalities for characters, so to do so and to do it in a way that makes sense for what we see of the characters shows that a writer can be flexible and competent with characterization all in one go.

That and it appeals to the fangirl side of certain folks (like yours truly). On that note, I have to say I'm really excited about seeing the actual Jessie, James, and Meowth in this fic. Not too many people include them (and most people include badly done rip-offs of them), so it'll be fun to read an actual fic with them as main characters – preferably in-character… which they are so far, by the by. (I also have to say I thoroughly enjoyed the scene where they were recruited from their flower shop. It was really cute to see them actually having a legit lifestyle – as in, attempting to make an honest living – before they were dragged right back into Rocket shenanigans. They would live like that, and besides that, that scene gave them a lot of depth for moments like this, where Jessie just wants to get it over with, James is nervous, and Meowth is completely okay with being a part of the Rockets' plan.)

“The last thing on my mind is a Gym battle. I’m a disgrace.”

Okay, I might have to be blunt for a bit here, and I'm really sorry to say this. I just don't really feel all that attached to Olivia. Back when we were first introduced to her in the XD series, it just felt like she was a stereotypical little kid, a kind of Scrappy Doo for the cast. She didn't really have much development past the whole cute thing.

Now, we're on the Operation GEAR series, and I have to say she does have more depth, but I don't really know what to feel about her. There are times when she curses out Matt or mimics Nekou's vulgarity, and at those times, I'm on the fence. On the one hand, a teenager would try to emulate something she thinks is cool; on the other, it's sometimes tiring to read two characters with basically the same personality.

Not to mention there's also the discipline issue. Olivia's still a kid, but people are completely okay with her mouthing off at her parental figure. But the parental figure bit is also a bit weird because no one's told her that her dad's dead. I'll admit I've lost track of exactly how old she is at this point, but wouldn't someone have told her, "Oh, well, your dad isn't coming back because he's sort of dead"? Her entire goal is focused on not only finding Rich but also getting his attention or at least doing the equivalent of *****slapping him. Sure, it was mentioned earlier that this gives her fuel to live, but… she's surrounded by people who care about her. She's a trainer. A professor has recruited her to help in her research. Heck, even the subjects she's studying would give her some sense of passion. The point is, she's got plenty to live for, so letting her spend a lot of effort tracking down someone who's dead (someone she's meant to love and respect, given that he's her father and a hero) seems crueler than just saying, "I'm really sorry, Olivia, but he's dead. But it's okay because he would have wanted you to live a fulfilling life, and we care about you." Also, there's the fact that she's old enough to comprehend what death is, so it's almost an insult to her intelligence that they're keeping that from her and letting her continue to work towards that particular goal.

But the reason why I'm pulling this particular quote is because she just seems so defeatist and negative. She basically threw a temper tantrum over the fact that she wasn't able to get a Totodile, for starters. For another, when she fell and broke her leg, she was crying because she was defeated, not because, well, breaking your bones hurts like a mother. At this point, she's just berating herself. Yet all that's happened is she got an unexpected starter and nearly got killed. It was the first adventure she's had, and she made it out alive. I mean, Ash pretty much had the same situation happen to him. He got an unexpected starter and nearly got killed. Multiple times, in fact, including one instance where he had to come to terms that he was a selfish idiot (because he nearly had his Metapod killed in the process due to his stupidity). Yet, he still got up and walked onward. I'm not saying that you should have a carbon copy of Ash. (In fact, I encourage you to avoid that.) I'm just wondering why Olivia is acting like it's the end of the world and the end of her journey for her when, well, it just began. She's been through a lot already, so why does this break her? I just feel like not everyone should break down over every negative experience. Certainly, some people would, but it tends to happen a little more frequently than usual with your cast. (It certainly happened a lot with the XD series. It hasn't happened quite as often with the Operation GEAR casts, although Matt has a tendency to do it too. And, well, there's also Anabel, but anyway.)

On the other hand, I wonder if you're trying to say something about her – like she's trying to represent someone who's not exactly typical. But that's a side thought.

As soon as Matt said those words, the smile on the nurse’s face began to slowly fade. “Then in that case, the charge will be three hundred dollars.”

And I love you.

One of your stronger storytelling points is your worldbuilding abilities, definitely, and this is one of them. I like reading what people have to say about the way the Pokémon world works, and it's interesting that you're tackling the one thing pretty much no one talks about – how Pokémon centers work in terms of funding and the billing system. It's very interesting that the service is free to trainers with a 'dex and a starter. The explanation fits canon perfectly, and it's completely believable from what we've seen of the main game characters.

There's just one little question, though, and that's, "How often do trainers get Pokédexes?" Some of the lines of dialogue in the games (especially in Gen I and FRLG) imply that the 'dex is actually a rare item, and in the animeverse, only people who met with a professor to start a journey received one. The problem lies in the fact that not everyone started their journey by meeting a professor, so you have people like Misty and Brock who might not have had a 'dex. It'd be interesting if this part would be expanded just a bit or at least if the idea could address who can receive a 'dex, who gives out 'dexes, and so forth.

The ideals we as older generations push upon our successors in this world are forcing our children to put themselves in dangerous, difficult positions.

Polaris is pursuing that truth.

I see what you did there.

He was someone she knew from five years ago, a man who indulged in both battles and the far showier Pokémon Contests. She didn’t know him to have the Pokémon he was now using, Leavanny, but it fit in with what she knew of his preferences, which tended toward Grass-types, Bug-types and Pokémon with musical ties.

I keep going back and forth between moments like these. You do this often enough when introducing characters: you either stop the narration to describe their looks or stop the narration to describe facts like these. The information you bring up is important to know for the most part (although probably not so much if Nando isn't going to be a major character in this story), so in that sense, I'm somewhat more okay with the fact that it's brought up. On the other, I'm also not completely comfortable with the transitions. It's very difficult to pull off an info drop (that is, stopping the narration to talk about something or feed a reader information) because of the fact that you're disrupting the flow of the chapter to do so. It's usually better to integrate information like this into the story, usually whenever appropriate. (In this case, perhaps having a character bring up Nando's Pokémon preferences themselves would do it.) Otherwise, it just sticks out like a nail in the floorboards.

That and in general, the transition could be smoothed out a bit. You go from talking about his preferences in team members to Matt's line, so there's very little to help ease the reader from topic to topic there.

The Arcade Star was a tall, thin woman whose skin showed a tan. Her clothing – a midriff-exposing yellow shirt and a pair of blue jeans – was so tight it left little to the imagination, and her messy, black, tendril-like hair wrapped around her as if it had a mind of its own as she danced.

This is what I meant by pausing the action to describe a person, by the by. Considering this is a very action-oriented scene (given that it's a battle), it would be better if you linked descriptions of the character to her actions. For example, instead of simply telling us that she was a tall, thin woman and so forth, you could say something along the lines of:

The tall, lithe woman leaned back as a smirk crossed her thin, tanned face. One of her hands slipped up the leg of her tight-fitting jeans until it rested on the curve of her hip as the other pulled a black tendril of her hair out of her golden eyes. The rest of her dark hair writhed around her as she moved, brushing across the taut, yellow cotton of her top and the swarthy flesh of her midriff with each tiny shift of her body. In all ways, she looked like a snake – all to catch her opponent off-guard.

Sure, that still pauses the action a little, but these are easier to break apart. As in, you don't have to describe her in one go. Instead, you can take one sentence of this and use it in her introduction. Then, maybe further down the line, you'll be able to use the sentence that describes her hair writhing around her when it feels more appropriate for her to move in a way that would cause it to do that. Maybe at another point, she puts her hands on her hips in frustration, which allows you to use the line about her hips. Or you could keep the paragraph intact, and it would still be a little less obvious that you're describing her because she's still doing something – as in, you're not really stopping the action just to describe her.

The key in this case is to make it less and less obvious that you're launching into a detailed description. The more you tie each detail with an action, the more subtle it becomes until it turns into just another fragment of the story, if that makes sense.

The resulting explosion not only threw Leavanny back, it also created a gust of wind that visibly disturbed Nando’s long black hair and green cape.

This is more of an example of how description is best done, actually. It's integrated with action so that the story doesn't stop just to describe Nando.

“Leavanny, grab Ludicolo.”

Much to Dahlia’s surprise, Leavanny effectively followed this direction, pinning Ludicolo in his grip. With her Grass-and-Water-type Pokémon frantically trying to escape its enemy, Dahlia exclaimed, “What?”

One of the many things I have to give you credit for is the way you get across creativity in battle. Not too many people remember that battles aren't just a couple of people duking it out on a generic field wherein nothing but attacks can be used to one's advantage. I know that there was an instance in the last chapter where Olivia took advantage of the layout of the field (i.e., the fact that Zorua was using Dig) to attack, and in this instance, you have Nando make a move that isn't just another attack. It makes battles more interesting because it's no longer possible to predict exactly what characters are going to do. They could very well attack directly, or they could manipulate the field or put themselves into a new strategic position or a million other different things.

In short, battles aren't predictable or repetitive in this fic, and that's something I appreciate because not a lot of people know how to keep battles from being predictable or repetitive. It's very refreshing to see a match be something other than Pokémon A uses Move B on Pokémon C over and over again, and it keeps things suspenseful and exciting to read.

(See, kids? Battles can be interesting to write about and read, even if they're not climactic battles. You just have to do them correctly.)

“And now it is time for my finishing move~”

…But shame on you for tilde abuse.

Nando was left briefly stunned when, instead of the frontal counterattack he was expected, Zapdos twirled through the air to get behind Leavanny. Even Zapdos’s movements, which were as agile and fluid as its trainer’s, exuded power.

“It makes sense, a dancer training their Pokémon to reflect their personal style.” Nando’s voice was calm once again, but this time, it was because he was seemingly resigning himself to his fate. “Repel it with Leaf Storm, please.”

However, I do have to comment about pacing here. I know that Trick Room is in effect, but at the same time, it seems a bit off that Nando would have time to meditate and think about what was going on while Zapdos is launching an attack. Attacks are still fairly quick unless there happened to be a lot of distance between Zapdos and Leavanny, so I'm having some difficulty picturing exactly what's going on here.

Just remember that it's okay to fudge game mechanics a little. That includes the turn-based system.

Also, we were talking privately about how you might trim a chapter, and if you're still interested, this may be a good example. See, chapters should only contain enough information to drive the story forward. While Nando's battle with Dahlia does convince Matt that he needs to train, it might not have been necessary to show all of the battle. Sure, the attacks were beautifully described and the strategies were fascinating to read, but it also seemed out-of-place, considering Nando doesn't immediately have anything to do with the rest of the cast. As in, the only thing that affects Matt and company in this scene is Nando's victory; even if Matt had only seen Exploud versus Zapdos instead of Leavanny's matches, the outcome would have been the same because a sample of Nando's talent is still encapsulated in the very last match of the battle. So, you could actually distill the battle down to just the last part (Exploud vs. Zapdos) and still have it inspire Matt. That makes whatever came before it rather superfluous, and superfluous information just adds to your page count while serving as a distraction from the main point.

Of course, if you want to keep that part of the battle in, it can probably also be left in without making the chapter feel like it's dragging on, but it's definitely an option when it comes to trimming things down.

Tony’s Double-Edge had more of an effect on Feraligatr than either Matt or Silver realized, however. The hulking Water-type could not carry out his orders immediately due to the fact that he was having difficulty maintaining his balance after the blow he’d received.

Be careful. Don't fall into the trap of telling instead of showing, and this is actually one case of it. Instead of showing us Feraligatr struggling to move, maybe wincing and hunching over as he steadied himself (or something along those lines to show that Feraligatr is struggling after the Double-Edge), you simply tell us that he's hesitating because of the attack. That's one thing I've noticed now and then: you say "due to" and then launch into an explanation, and that's something that you may want to phase out of your writing because it makes it easier for you to tell instead of show.

Matt’s direction gave Nikola the confidence it was lacking, and spurred it to overrun Mamoswine with a massive Blizzard. The concentrated storm packed so much force that it actually flung Mamoswine out of her path and crashed her to the floor.

Mamoswine did not stand up again.

I also have to appreciate the fact that you realize a battle needs to be drawn out. Tying in with the idea that your battles aren't just Pokémon A uses Move B against Pokémon C, Pokémon don't just knock each other out with a couple of hits. That makes battles all the more exciting because it's just not something that happens in fanfiction for some reason. Maybe it's because people just don't want to spend that much time on battles, or maybe it's just because people are eager to get to the end because they already know the outcome. Either way, it's different to see a battle that's drawn out over a messload of pages, and while I had a feeling Matt would win, it was still a satisfying read.

Now, okay, I have to say that I knew Matt would win, and it's because of something I told you in private about the XD series a long time ago. Namely, there's a definite lean towards the protagonist. As in, I think it's pretty rare to have one of your main characters lose, and when it happens, it's devastating. For example, one of the first battles we've seen in this particular fic had Olivia winning despite using low-leveled (for the most part) Pokémon. The only time she lost a fight of some kind was when she had to be given a reason to beat herself up (i.e., the fight against the Bisharp army). More recently, Nando wins against a legendary owned by a Frontier Brain – which, okay, is something Ash has been known to do, but still. Before that, I can't really think of any moments where the main characters have actually lost a battle except for one instance in XD^3.

It's really just something I noticed, and it could just be me (as in, maybe I'm forgetting instances everywhere wherein a main protagonist loses a match). If it's not just me, though, let me just say that the story is still enjoyable either way, but it would be cool to get some variety so that it's a little bit harder to predict. That and it might be more satisfying to read about moments when a character nets a victory if their win-loss ratio was a bit more even.

Another thing I noticed? I thought it was unusual that you were going for game portrayals of moves instead of anime portrayals (like in the case of Venoshock), but that's really just your preference. It does strike me as curious either way, though, so… there's that.


Overall, it's really not a bad story. The pacing is well done (even though you could cut some material out if you wanted to), and the premise is pretty riveting. Not only that, but you have a knack for taking canon characters and making them deep and interesting while still being spot-on. Not to mention your battles are frequently well-described and exciting – not at all turn-based or game-like. In that sense, this is actually a pretty good fic.

It's just that there's some bits centering around the characters that could be worked out. For example, there's the tendency to stop all narration to describe a character. For another, there's the fact that the protagonists have an inordinately high chance of winning a battle, which tends to make the fight scenes slightly predictable.

But more than that, I have to say I'm undecided about a lot of your OCs. There are times when I really like what you do with them. (For example, Matt is one of my favorite characters right now because he feels like such an underdog despite the fact that he's pretty competent. Satsukoro was one of my favorites in the XD series because of his complex backstory.) On the other, some of your characters are also difficult for me to like. (I'm not fond of Nekou because I don't see her as badass as much as immature – like a teenage boy trying to convince me that he's awesome, and I'm not fond of Olivia because of how she used to be a childlike stereotype and is now prone to tantrums and teenage angst.) I'm not quite sure how to feel about your villains either (because almost all of them turn out to be psychotic and violent). I'm not quite sure what you can take away from this comment or how you might be able to improve on your weaker characters, given that it's pretty late in the series for all of them; I just wanted to get it out there that basically the only thing that might be affecting the quality of your fic are some of the OCs' personalities.

Of course, this is literally the only thing. Shrugging off the typos, you've done some impressive work with canon characters, battles, and descriptions in general (and not just of characters), and that much is what a lot of writers fail to do. That's where the strong points of your fic lie, and I honestly think your story still works because in the end, that list embodies basically most of the spirit of Operation GEAR. You can still work with the OCs you've got. (And to be fair, they're a lot deeper than a number of other OCs out there; they just hit my "these kinds of people annoy the **** out of me" button. …Which may actually be a good thing because I'm annoyed because of their personalities, not because they're flat characters.) That's because in the end, you still have a story that stands up on its own.

So in that sense, this story isn't that bad. I'll definitely keep an eye on it.
 

The Great Butler

Hush, keep it down
So, sort of on the same line as my other reviews, I'm just going to tackle the most recent chapter because I'd probably be here forever if I tackled every single one. Also, this is going to be more of a general/reaction-to-plot review than a nitpicking review. In general, your grammar is pretty clean, so there's not really that much to worry about in terms of that anyway.

In any case, let's get started, shall we?

Oh boy, the most nerve-wracking time is here XD;

Just kidding.

One of the things I've noticed about your writing is the wordiness at times. I know it's very difficult to keep this kind of thing from happening, but try to avoid awkward wording whenever possible. If you're not reading your chapters aloud, it might help to do so.

I do do that sometimes, but I'm not sure I'm completely seeing what you mean in this part specifically, unless you mean the two uses of "buildings" in the same sentence which is something I just caught myself.

In this case, for example, you've got a misplaced modifier; on a first read-through, a reader might think you're saying that the coastline was larger than New Bark but smaller than many of the other metropolis-size cities. Remember that a dependent clause following a comma is often attached to the first noun before the aforementioned comma.

I had to read the line several times to see what you meant, and I do see it now. I think it does hold true either way (whether you're referring to the coastline only or the entire city) but I don't think I can honestly promise to do all that much about it. The sentence sounded perfectly fine to me until I reread it several times times and finally spotted the poor wording, so I don't know how easy it will be for me to catch it next time. I'd like to, but I can't promise it.

The second sentence, meanwhile, is plagued by the question of "plenty of what?" It might help to think of it like this: your readers are going into your story with a blank slate, so you'll need to describe as much as possible to get your ideas across. Likewise, be very careful with how you word things as well to avoid any awkward phrasing that seems vaguer than you intended.

This one, however, is something I can clearly see now. That sentence is a muddled mess. I can completely see it and I'm not sure how that happened. That is completely fixable and avoidable, which I'll do my best to do.

Going to have to agree with what's already been said about making Pierce Tenganist. It adds a lot of depth to his character, particularly given the fact that the anime doesn't give us much in the way of characterization for him.

Thank you!

I've got more in store for him. Developing it was something I enjoyed quite a bit, and I think it should work out to make him interesting enough. He has his place in everything.

In general, I love that you're using canon characters. A lot of people these days scoff at the thought of doing that, but if it's pulled off well, then it becomes a showcase of the author's talent – especially if they're writing in the anime universe. I mean, the anime does a poor job of providing backstory and personalities for characters, so to do so and to do it in a way that makes sense for what we see of the characters shows that a writer can be flexible and competent with characterization all in one go.

Coming from you, with the great care you put into expanding the characters of Bill and Lanette (for example), I do take that as quite a compliment. Perhaps it's because I enjoy fitting existing characters that lack much specific characterization into a larger plot that allows them to shine more, but taking existing characters and expanding their roles is just something I like doing.

Perhaps I should clarify here though that this is not strictly anime universe, it's an AU that takes elements of the anime and the games together. I'm doing this because I feel both have strengths that I can combine for greater effect than simply using one or the other alone.

That and it appeals to the fangirl side of certain folks (like yours truly). On that note, I have to say I'm really excited about seeing the actual Jessie, James, and Meowth in this fic. Not too many people include them (and most people include badly done rip-offs of them), so it'll be fun to read an actual fic with them as main characters – preferably in-character… which they are so far, by the by. (I also have to say I thoroughly enjoyed the scene where they were recruited from their flower shop. It was really cute to see them actually having a legit lifestyle – as in, attempting to make an honest living – before they were dragged right back into Rocket shenanigans. They would live like that, and besides that, that scene gave them a lot of depth for moments like this, where Jessie just wants to get it over with, James is nervous, and Meowth is completely okay with being a part of the Rockets' plan.)

You literally cannot understand how much of a relief it is to hear this in such detail. Seriously.

I was terrified that I wouldn't be able to properly balance out some humor with their abilities from Best Wishes!. Especially with the riots this generation over how the trio should be depicted, with the possibility being raised of going back to the (in my opinion) repetitive and unfunny DP versions. I wanted so badly to try to show a way to depict them that doesn't fall into either extreme.

I wouldn't necessarily categorize them as "main characters," as a few of the other remaining Rockets will appear later; one angle from BW I'm trying to play up is the "team" in "Team Rocket." But yes, there won't be Expys of them in Polaris or anything. The "Jessie, James and Meowth" role here will be filled by Jessie, James and Meowth and no one else.

I'm glad you liked that scene, too. I'm not sure what I can say about it, but it's something that I hoped people would like.

Okay, I might have to be blunt for a bit here, and I'm really sorry to say this. I just don't really feel all that attached to Olivia. Back when we were first introduced to her in the XD series, it just felt like she was a stereotypical little kid, a kind of Scrappy Doo for the cast. She didn't really have much development past the whole cute thing.

I'm not really bothered by you saying that, because quite honestly, I can see exactly why you wouldn't necessarily connect with her yet. I think she has to hit rock bottom before these things can begin to get better; the illusion has to be shattered before progress can be made, and I can tell you, it's coming.

Now, we're on the Operation GEAR series, and I have to say she does have more depth, but I don't really know what to feel about her. There are times when she curses out Matt or mimics Nekou's vulgarity, and at those times, I'm on the fence. On the one hand, a teenager would try to emulate something she thinks is cool; on the other, it's sometimes tiring to read two characters with basically the same personality.

Understandable, already putting some work into it.

Not to mention there's also the discipline issue. Olivia's still a kid, but people are completely okay with her mouthing off at her parental figure. But the parental figure bit is also a bit weird because no one's told her that her dad's dead. I'll admit I've lost track of exactly how old she is at this point, but wouldn't someone have told her, "Oh, well, your dad isn't coming back because he's sort of dead"? Her entire goal is focused on not only finding Rich but also getting his attention or at least doing the equivalent of *****slapping him. Sure, it was mentioned earlier that this gives her fuel to live, but… she's surrounded by people who care about her. She's a trainer. A professor has recruited her to help in her research. Heck, even the subjects she's studying would give her some sense of passion. The point is, she's got plenty to live for, so letting her spend a lot of effort tracking down someone who's dead (someone she's meant to love and respect, given that he's her father and a hero) seems crueler than just saying, "I'm really sorry, Olivia, but he's dead. But it's okay because he would have wanted you to live a fulfilling life, and we care about you." Also, there's the fact that she's old enough to comprehend what death is, so it's almost an insult to her intelligence that they're keeping that from her and letting her continue to work towards that particular goal.

I want to preface this by saying that I do agree with you.

What I want to say as a larger point, though, is that to a degree this is how I wanted it to go this early. I wanted this because I wanted to emphasize how terrible a situation Olivia is in without even really being aware and also emphasize just how much Matt failed to really do what had to be done when he was given a responsibility he couldn't handle. He didn't want to feel responsible for disillusioning her (or whatever he feared would happen) so he made the worse choice and kicked the can down the road. That's something I really wanted to put focus on immediately - these aren't flawless characters. They've made major mistakes and caused others serious harm through them. That's a huge part of why Matt is so downcast on himself, because he's aware he screwed up but finds himself trapped in a (seemingly) impossible situation.

Things have to be broken here before they can be fixed, I think. This isn't where the characters should be at the end, obviously. But I think that starting off on such a broken base is a gamble I'm willing to take. I'm willing to take the risk because I think the payoff will be better in the end.

But the reason why I'm pulling this particular quote is because she just seems so defeatist and negative. She basically threw a temper tantrum over the fact that she wasn't able to get a Totodile, for starters. For another, when she fell and broke her leg, she was crying because she was defeated, not because, well, breaking your bones hurts like a mother. At this point, she's just berating herself. Yet all that's happened is she got an unexpected starter and nearly got killed. It was the first adventure she's had, and she made it out alive. I mean, Ash pretty much had the same situation happen to him. He got an unexpected starter and nearly got killed. Multiple times, in fact, including one instance where he had to come to terms that he was a selfish idiot (because he nearly had his Metapod killed in the process due to his stupidity). Yet, he still got up and walked onward. I'm not saying that you should have a carbon copy of Ash. (In fact, I encourage you to avoid that.) I'm just wondering why Olivia is acting like it's the end of the world and the end of her journey for her when, well, it just began. She's been through a lot already, so why does this break her? I just feel like not everyone should break down over every negative experience. Certainly, some people would, but it tends to happen a little more frequently than usual with your cast. (It certainly happened a lot with the XD series. It hasn't happened quite as often with the Operation GEAR casts, although Matt has a tendency to do it too. And, well, there's also Anabel, but anyway.)

On the other hand, I wonder if you're trying to say something about her – like she's trying to represent someone who's not exactly typical. But that's a side thought.

Well, as far as to why she was reacting in such an ... exaggerated? ... manner, she's banking so much on succeeding at this quest that for it to not go exactly as she intended throws off her entire balance. It's something she's going to have to grow out of, and I can tell you that I do have such a thing already in the works.

As for when she was lying at the bottom of the cliff, she was most likely delusional and so near blacking out that she didn't even consciously feel the pain.

Although, I think you might have started to catch onto something by the end of your thought here. For example, she's probably at least guessed at some point that Rich is dead, but she so violently wants to reject that idea that she shut off the part of herself that thought of it. tl;dr of it, she's not exactly well.

And I love you.

Aw, thanks! XD;

One of your stronger storytelling points is your worldbuilding abilities, definitely, and this is one of them. I like reading what people have to say about the way the Pokémon world works, and it's interesting that you're tackling the one thing pretty much no one talks about – how Pokémon centers work in terms of funding and the billing system. It's very interesting that the service is free to trainers with a 'dex and a starter. The explanation fits canon perfectly, and it's completely believable from what we've seen of the main game characters.

Well, like I've said, in every game you start right away by getting a starter and a Pokedex from the professor (or in the case of the Johto games, professors) while the most notable exceptions - the Orre games - can be handwaved due to how lawless the region is.

I'm glad you liked it, because it will act as a step into more thematic elements later.

There's just one little question, though, and that's, "How often do trainers get Pokédexes?" Some of the lines of dialogue in the games (especially in Gen I and FRLG) imply that the 'dex is actually a rare item, and in the animeverse, only people who met with a professor to start a journey received one. The problem lies in the fact that not everyone started their journey by meeting a professor, so you have people like Misty and Brock who might not have had a 'dex. It'd be interesting if this part would be expanded just a bit or at least if the idea could address who can receive a 'dex, who gives out 'dexes, and so forth.

An excellent question, actually.

I'm operating under the assumption that Pokedex/starter distribution is indeed a rarity. It is something important to provide background for later elements. You raise an excellent point about characters such as Brock and Misty, to which I guess I can only say that Gym Leaders get special permissions.

The rest of the questions have answers or answers that are being developed (your raising some of these questions is helping me frame my planning of them) but there's not much I can say right now about them. I don't want to give away too much, but I can say that they are relevant subjects to think about.

I see what you did there.

Not the first time you're going to see it.

I keep going back and forth between moments like these. You do this often enough when introducing characters: you either stop the narration to describe their looks or stop the narration to describe facts like these. The information you bring up is important to know for the most part (although probably not so much if Nando isn't going to be a major character in this story), so in that sense, I'm somewhat more okay with the fact that it's brought up. On the other, I'm also not completely comfortable with the transitions. It's very difficult to pull off an info drop (that is, stopping the narration to talk about something or feed a reader information) because of the fact that you're disrupting the flow of the chapter to do so. It's usually better to integrate information like this into the story, usually whenever appropriate. (In this case, perhaps having a character bring up Nando's Pokémon preferences themselves would do it.) Otherwise, it just sticks out like a nail in the floorboards.

That and in general, the transition could be smoothed out a bit. You go from talking about his preferences in team members to Matt's line, so there's very little to help ease the reader from topic to topic there.

This subject has been covered several times by other reviewers, so I'm afraid I haven't much more to say about it. I fully acknowledge that this habit is my weakness, and I'm trying to break myself of it. That's all I've really got to say.

The transitions point is taken into account, however. I'll work on it.

This is what I meant by pausing the action to describe a person, by the by. Considering this is a very action-oriented scene (given that it's a battle), it would be better if you linked descriptions of the character to her actions. For example, instead of simply telling us that she was a tall, thin woman and so forth, you could say something along the lines of:

The tall, lithe woman leaned back as a smirk crossed her thin, tanned face. One of her hands slipped up the leg of her tight-fitting jeans until it rested on the curve of her hip as the other pulled a black tendril of her hair out of her golden eyes. The rest of her dark hair writhed around her as she moved, brushing across the taut, yellow cotton of her top and the swarthy flesh of her midriff with each tiny shift of her body. In all ways, she looked like a snake – all to catch her opponent off-guard.

Sure, that still pauses the action a little, but these are easier to break apart. As in, you don't have to describe her in one go. Instead, you can take one sentence of this and use it in her introduction. Then, maybe further down the line, you'll be able to use the sentence that describes her hair writhing around her when it feels more appropriate for her to move in a way that would cause it to do that. Maybe at another point, she puts her hands on her hips in frustration, which allows you to use the line about her hips. Or you could keep the paragraph intact, and it would still be a little less obvious that you're describing her because she's still doing something – as in, you're not really stopping the action just to describe her.

I can't say that that kind of language style is necessarily something I'd feel all that comfortable using myself, but that's really not the point here. If I'm interpreting what you're saying correctly, I think what I could do is simply split the description up completely and slip in bits and pieces of it during the battle instead. I'll have to remember to do that.

The key in this case is to make it less and less obvious that you're launching into a detailed description. The more you tie each detail with an action, the more subtle it becomes until it turns into just another fragment of the story, if that makes sense.



This is more of an example of how description is best done, actually. It's integrated with action so that the story doesn't stop just to describe Nando.

Oh, it makes perfect sense. I think I have just the idea I need to have to get this right, I just need to put it into practice.

One of the many things I have to give you credit for is the way you get across creativity in battle. Not too many people remember that battles aren't just a couple of people duking it out on a generic field wherein nothing but attacks can be used to one's advantage. I know that there was an instance in the last chapter where Olivia took advantage of the layout of the field (i.e., the fact that Zorua was using Dig) to attack, and in this instance, you have Nando make a move that isn't just another attack. It makes battles more interesting because it's no longer possible to predict exactly what characters are going to do. They could very well attack directly, or they could manipulate the field or put themselves into a new strategic position or a million other different things.

In short, battles aren't predictable or repetitive in this fic, and that's something I appreciate because not a lot of people know how to keep battles from being predictable or repetitive. It's very refreshing to see a match be something other than Pokémon A uses Move B on Pokémon C over and over again, and it keeps things suspenseful and exciting to read.

(See, kids? Battles can be interesting to write about and read, even if they're not climactic battles. You just have to do them correctly.)

Now here's something I took vast inspiration from the anime for. A good battle can be exciting enough in the games, but when you have the freedom that a more open medium grants you, you would be foolish to not take advantage of it, I think. You just have so many options at your disposal for battles here.

One battle I hold up as a gold standard for this is the Nando VS. Zoey battle from episode 176 of Diamond and Pearl, which puts Nando's Kricketune and Lopunny against Zoey's Mismagius and Leafeon. On paper it's just a Double Battle between four UU-at-best Pokemon, but in practice it turns into a very exciting match in which both sides use each others' moves to build their own, and the outcome is not clear until the very end.

I think you're going to be very pleased with what you see next chapter.

…But shame on you for tilde abuse.

I know I shouldn't be defending myself here, but I couldn't figure out another way to indicate Nando's sing-song voice in a line like that.

However, I do have to comment about pacing here. I know that Trick Room is in effect, but at the same time, it seems a bit off that Nando would have time to meditate and think about what was going on while Zapdos is launching an attack. Attacks are still fairly quick unless there happened to be a lot of distance between Zapdos and Leavanny, so I'm having some difficulty picturing exactly what's going on here.

Just remember that it's okay to fudge game mechanics a little. That includes the turn-based system.

While your larger point is correct, in this case, Zapdos was quite far above Leavanny when it started its attack, and the adapted effect of Trick Room drastically slowed down its movements. In order to make a move like Trick Room function more realistically, I changed it from just blatantly reversing the order of who attacks when and made it so the more speed a Pokemon has before Trick Room is initiated determines how dramatically slowed down that Pokemon becomes. In this case, Zapdos is normally very fast, so it was slowed by a great amount.

Also, we were talking privately about how you might trim a chapter, and if you're still interested, this may be a good example. See, chapters should only contain enough information to drive the story forward. While Nando's battle with Dahlia does convince Matt that he needs to train, it might not have been necessary to show all of the battle. Sure, the attacks were beautifully described and the strategies were fascinating to read, but it also seemed out-of-place, considering Nando doesn't immediately have anything to do with the rest of the cast. As in, the only thing that affects Matt and company in this scene is Nando's victory; even if Matt had only seen Exploud versus Zapdos instead of Leavanny's matches, the outcome would have been the same because a sample of Nando's talent is still encapsulated in the very last match of the battle. So, you could actually distill the battle down to just the last part (Exploud vs. Zapdos) and still have it inspire Matt. That makes whatever came before it rather superfluous, and superfluous information just adds to your page count while serving as a distraction from the main point.

Of course, if you want to keep that part of the battle in, it can probably also be left in without making the chapter feel like it's dragging on, but it's definitely an option when it comes to trimming things down.

I want to go for something that doesn't compress around the main cast to a claustrophobic degree in this story, which I hope to get by giving other characters some focus of their own once in a while to increase the scale of the plot. That, and the battle also served to introduce Dahlia as the major driving force of this two-chapter arc, setting up her strength and fighting style so not only Matt but the reader themselves should feel prepared for the formal battle with her next chapter. The entire events of these two chapters revolve in some way around Dahlia or at least tangentially involve her, so I wanted to give her more screentime as well.

It's not like she's spilled her entire bag of tricks yet, either.

Be careful. Don't fall into the trap of telling instead of showing, and this is actually one case of it. Instead of showing us Feraligatr struggling to move, maybe wincing and hunching over as he steadied himself (or something along those lines to show that Feraligatr is struggling after the Double-Edge), you simply tell us that he's hesitating because of the attack. That's one thing I've noticed now and then: you say "due to" and then launch into an explanation, and that's something that you may want to phase out of your writing because it makes it easier for you to tell instead of show.

Yeah, I'm not sure how I let that happen. I'm going to have to fix it.

I also have to appreciate the fact that you realize a battle needs to be drawn out. Tying in with the idea that your battles aren't just Pokémon A uses Move B against Pokémon C, Pokémon don't just knock each other out with a couple of hits. That makes battles all the more exciting because it's just not something that happens in fanfiction for some reason. Maybe it's because people just don't want to spend that much time on battles, or maybe it's just because people are eager to get to the end because they already know the outcome. Either way, it's different to see a battle that's drawn out over a messload of pages, and while I had a feeling Matt would win, it was still a satisfying read.

I was actually afraid that some of the battles were too short.

But anyway, I'm glad once again that you liked the battles. I'm shooting to give the reader some great visuals when I write battles, which I think is something that acts as a major hook into the scenes. Of course, they also have to be well-written, so I take great care in doing research on the Pokemon in each battle to determine their moves, an adaptation of their game actions, tactics and so on. I like going out of the box, which is why I gave Gengar the Toxic/Venoshock combo and Metronome, which could only be obtained as a Move Tutor move in FRLG.

Now, okay, I have to say that I knew Matt would win, and it's because of something I told you in private about the XD series a long time ago. Namely, there's a definite lean towards the protagonist. As in, I think it's pretty rare to have one of your main characters lose, and when it happens, it's devastating. For example, one of the first battles we've seen in this particular fic had Olivia winning despite using low-leveled (for the most part) Pokémon. The only time she lost a fight of some kind was when she had to be given a reason to beat herself up (i.e., the fight against the Bisharp army). More recently, Nando wins against a legendary owned by a Frontier Brain – which, okay, is something Ash has been known to do, but still. Before that, I can't really think of any moments where the main characters have actually lost a battle except for one instance in XD^3.

It's really just something I noticed, and it could just be me (as in, maybe I'm forgetting instances everywhere wherein a main protagonist loses a match). If it's not just me, though, let me just say that the story is still enjoyable either way, but it would be cool to get some variety so that it's a little bit harder to predict. That and it might be more satisfying to read about moments when a character nets a victory if their win-loss ratio was a bit more even.

It's a little hard for me to answer this one without giving away too much. I am aware of what you're saying.

You may get your wish at some point. That's all I can say. I'm sure you understand.

Another thing I noticed? I thought it was unusual that you were going for game portrayals of moves instead of anime portrayals (like in the case of Venoshock), but that's really just your preference. It does strike me as curious either way, though, so… there's that.

Well, in the case of Venoshock for example, it's just a recolored Sludge Bomb in the anime. I want moves to look unique, so I adapted the game portrayal and modified it to make it a literal "shock" of "venom."

Overall, it's really not a bad story. The pacing is well done (even though you could cut some material out if you wanted to), and the premise is pretty riveting. Not only that, but you have a knack for taking canon characters and making them deep and interesting while still being spot-on. Not to mention your battles are frequently well-described and exciting – not at all turn-based or game-like. In that sense, this is actually a pretty good fic.

Thanks again!

It's just that there's some bits centering around the characters that could be worked out. For example, there's the tendency to stop all narration to describe a character. For another, there's the fact that the protagonists have an inordinately high chance of winning a battle, which tends to make the fight scenes slightly predictable.

But more than that, I have to say I'm undecided about a lot of your OCs. There are times when I really like what you do with them. (For example, Matt is one of my favorite characters right now because he feels like such an underdog despite the fact that he's pretty competent. Satsukoro was one of my favorites in the XD series because of his complex backstory.) On the other, some of your characters are also difficult for me to like. (I'm not fond of Nekou because I don't see her as badass as much as immature – like a teenage boy trying to convince me that he's awesome, and I'm not fond of Olivia because of how she used to be a childlike stereotype and is now prone to tantrums and teenage angst.) I'm not quite sure how to feel about your villains either (because almost all of them turn out to be psychotic and violent). I'm not quite sure what you can take away from this comment or how you might be able to improve on your weaker characters, given that it's pretty late in the series for all of them; I just wanted to get it out there that basically the only thing that might be affecting the quality of your fic are some of the OCs' personalities.

Hmmm. Well, first off, I'm glad that you like Matt. You've definitely got the right idea on him - he doesn't do a bad job, all things considered, but no matter how hard he tries he just keeps getting more in over his head when bigger obstacles come up.

re; Nekou and Olivia: I think my big problem here is that I overplayed my hand with them too soon. I've already begun taking measures to scale it back while writing the next chapter. I want to portray Olivia as a bit more clearly troubled for more understandable reasons while Nekou gets more dimension to her character. I only ask that you give them some more time, because they haven't come into their own fully yet.

Also, it's not relevant right now but there is a reason Nekou is the way she is.

re; Villains: I'd chalk this up mainly to circumstances. In the previous stories, Colonel Nixon was a corrupt military official during a more warlike time, so violence from him would be expected. Meanwhile, Liam Everton had to be the spiritual successor to Grings Kodai, the antagonist of the Zoroark movie, so he had to take everything Kodai did up to the proverbial eleven.

As for right now, Ghetsis is Ghetsis, there's not much more that can be said about him. Rest assured that not all of the rest of Polaris is like him - he's only the useful one to use as an introductory villain since he's a known quantity already. I think I've assembled a decent cast of villain types for the Sacred Helix, which should come out more once the others get more time.

Of course, this is literally the only thing. Shrugging off the typos, you've done some impressive work with canon characters, battles, and descriptions in general (and not just of characters), and that much is what a lot of writers fail to do. That's where the strong points of your fic lie, and I honestly think your story still works because in the end, that list embodies basically most of the spirit of Operation GEAR. You can still work with the OCs you've got. (And to be fair, they're a lot deeper than a number of other OCs out there; they just hit my "these kinds of people annoy the **** out of me" button. …Which may actually be a good thing because I'm annoyed because of their personalities, not because they're flat characters.) That's because in the end, you still have a story that stands up on its own.

So in that sense, this story isn't that bad. I'll definitely keep an eye on it.

Thank you for your extremely kind words and generous review.

I can't promise that all these things will be immediately addressed in the next chapter (for one, it's almost half done already) but I'll shoot for that "isn't that bad" to become "is pretty good" or something. Hey, goals motivate, right?
 

The Great Butler

Hush, keep it down
It should be noted that there’ll be some dark stuff discussed later in this chapter, such as a discussion of a genocide against a certain group of people. None of it is depicted though.

Hopefully you’ll still enjoy!

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CHAPTER 5: Reaching for the Arcade Star (Part 2)

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A blazing orange crept over the land as the sun rose the next morning, spreading peals of warm light over the autumn trees of the Tohjo Continent. Cherrygrove City glittered in the shine; for as depressing a place as the city could be, the first minutes of daylight brought even Cherrygrove’s dull streets to life.

Just outside the city, in the thicker woods off the road north, Jessie, James and Meowth stood speaking to Pierce.

“…that is what you need to know about what’s going on,” Pierce finished, running a hand through his shoulder-length, dark blue hair before putting his hat back on over it. He had just finished explaining a truncated version of his work from the past twenty-four hours. “I am going to return to the base to meet with Dr. Zager and Ariana regarding this. That means you three are in charge of maintaining the mission here in the field until I return.”

“But what are we supposed to do if things go bad? You were our extraction!”

“You know, James has got a point here,” Meowth concurred with his human companion. “Say we go after that chunk of space rock and Polaris shows up. Then what?”

With her hand on her hip, Jessie stepped up to face the others. “Do you two even hear yourselves? The boss didn’t put us on this mission for nothing. If we play our cards carefully we’re going to be just fine. We don’t have to have our hands held for everything we do!”

“You’re both right,” Pierce intervened. “I will return to aid you once more when my business at the base is finished. It will not be that long. For now, this is your assignment – continue monitoring the group involving Matt Chiaki, Olivia Mistbloom, Bunny Spruce and Dante Fantomos. The old man is in possession of the Meteonite fragment, so if you get a chance to take it with little risk, do it. If not, remember that a contingency plan is already uploaded into your R-Pad.”

“Ah, fine,” James said, gritting his teeth. “Make it back safely.”

“Very well. I wish you luck.”

Pierce turned and walked away, the tails of his coat fluttering behind him from the force of his sharp movements. Once he was far enough from the trio, Jessie let out an annoyed sigh.

“This is going to be a lot harder than it has to be if you don’t put some effort into it, James!” she yelled, straightening her back to give herself a height advantage over her partner.

“Oh, come on, Jessie, you know I’m not throwing it in that easily. I just don’t like taking orders from Pierce.”

“I agree with that,” Meowth chimed in. “The boss is the only one who’s worthy of giving us orders!”

“We’ll listen to Pierce but the boss is the one we really work hard for.”

Considering what her teammates had to say, Jessie realized they had a good point and backed down. “Finally, something we can all agree on. Let’s get a move on and see if we can track down that group in Cherrygrove!”

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“So this is it, then…” Matt softly said while lifting the front of his hat, enabling himself to see further upward without raising his head.

Nestled in a cluster of tall buildings near Cherrygrove City’s shoreline stood a wide structure with four spires reaching up to the sky, each one ending in a diamond-patterned onion dome. The early afternoon sun glittered on the façade, casting a glare over the street where Matt, Nekou, Olivia, Bunny and Dante all stood. Several red flags trimmed with gold borders hung around the building’s entrance, each bearing the stylized Poké Ball surrounded by seven stars that served as the Frontier Society’s logo.

“Yeah, you’re right,” Bunny concurred, “this is it, the Battle Arcade.”

“Then what are we waiting for? Let’s go!”

Nekou’s remark spurred Matt into action, and without another word he approached the double doors of the Battle Arcade, which slid open to allow him inside. Dante immediately followed, while Nekou at first hesitated. Once she saw that Bunny was helping Olivia walk, though, she also went through the entrance, with the injured girl and the archeologist bringing up the rear.

None of them noticed Jessie, James, Meowth and Wobbuffet – all disguised in their trenchcoats – slip in right behind them.

The lobby that awaited beyond the threshold was a dimly-lit place, with neon lights on the walls and ceiling largely substituting for normal sources of illumination. An orange carpet lined with golden diamonds stretched from the doors to a desk across the room, while nearby, a small cluster of tables framed by floor lamps offered other visitors a place of rest.

Not wishing to waste any time, Matt immediately and briskly walked to the desk, where a woman in a green business suit and beret was waiting.

“Welcome to the Battle Arcade!” the receptionist greeted him, using a warm voice. “Are you here for a challenge?” When Matt nodded, the woman continued, “You’re in luck. There are no challengers signed up ahead of you for the day, so you’ll be going right in. Is this your first visit to a Frontier Society facility?”

“Yeah, why?”

“May I have your name?”

“Matt Chiaki. What is this about?

“Just give me a second to register you in our database…” Turning to the computer on her desk, the receptionist typed for a moment, then looked up again. “All done. Pretty quick, huh? You’ll be needing these two things...”

The woman pushed two objects into Matt’s hands. The first was an identification card bearing Matt’s name and picture, colored red and gold like the Frontier Society’s flag, while the other was a small box with seven indentations inside.

“Your Frontier Pass and Medal Box,” she explained. “The Frontier Pass will get you into the Frontier Society’s facilities and services, while the Medal Box is to store the awards you’ll get from defeating Frontier Brains. Speaking of which, are you ready to begin?”

“Yes.”

“Then the next thing I’m going to need are the three Pokémon you intend to enter. Please allow me to check them.”

“I’ll be going with my Aggron, Rotom and Seismitoad,” he answered as he stored the documents and handed over the Poké Ball, Ultra Ball and Dive Ball containing his chosen Pokémon.

Using a handheld scanner, the receptionist inspected the three spheres, downloading images of their respective Pokémon into her computer. She then returned them to their owner, saying, “Your entry is fully processed. Are you ready to go in?”

“I am,” Matt replied, placing the orbs into his bag. Before walking away, though, he turned around to the others, who had since arrived behind him. “You guys are going to the audience area, right?” he asked, gesturing to a doorway a short distance away marked ‘Audience Seating’ in neon letters.

“I guess so,” Nekou answered. She puffed up her cheeks and exaggerated her facial expression to act like she was frustrated at being told to go somewhere, even though she fully knew this was normal and to be expected. “Don’t **** it up out there, or there’ll be hell to pay. I’ll see to that.”

“Somehow I’m not sure that’s actually encouraging,” Matt sighed, grimacing.

“Now, I think she has a point.” Surprisingly, it was Dante coming to Nekou’s defense. “Maybe she worded her encouragement poorly, but she is right in that you cannot progress if you are stuck here.”

“If you put it that way, I guess I understand. I wouldn’t want to hold up Olivia from reaching Violet City and getting her badge either. Anyway, wish me luck out there.”

“You can beat her,” Bunny gently said, setting her hand on Matt’s shoulder. “Just leave everything out here to me.”

“Thanks. See you guys later, then.”

With that, the group split in two. While Matt followed the receptionist into one of the nearby doors, the others went for the seating area. Bunny assisted Olivia in balancing on her crutches, while Nekou ate from a bag of potato chips she’d gotten from somewhere. Dante, finally, remained distant from the three young women, walking stiffly with his cane in one hand and the briefcase containing the Meteonite fragment in the other.

On the other side of the lobby, Jessie, James and Meowth waited, watching them. The trio of agents blended into the casino-like atmosphere of the Battle Arcade rather well in their trenchcoats, hats and sunglasses. Wobbuffet was with them, too, wearing a similar disguise of his own.

“There they go,” James observed while standing with his arms crossed. “How should we do this?”

“Attacking the old man in a public place like this would only go wrong for us,” commented Jessie. “I say we just go in there and watch what happens for now.”

Meowth gave a nod of approval, then added, “We got five pairs of eyes on that old man and the space rock. They ain’t going anywhere.”

Finding themselves all on the same page, the members of Team Rocket entered the audience area themselves.

-:-

The receptionist had led Matt down a long, narrow hallway before stopping abruptly near a closed green curtain. Because the hallway was just as dark as the lobby had been, Matt nearly crashed into her.

“Oh! I’m sorry, I didn’t mean to…”

“Please, don’t worry about it. Now, you need to wait here for a moment.” The woman bowed slightly in a show of courtesy toward Matt.

“What? Why?”

Matt’s question was answered almost immediately, when the announcer’s voice came blaring through the curtains into the hallway, accompanied by an eruption of audience cheering. “Ladies and gentlemen, welcome to the Battle Arcade! A day full of high-energy battling is about to get underway!”

Thunderous applause filtered through the curtain into the hallway, leading Matt to realize quickly exactly what he would be facing once he stepped through. Never feeling all that comfortable in front of a crowd in a closed setting, he started breathing deeply and pacing in an attempt to ward off the attack of nerves that he felt coming on.

“I can tell you’re all fired up, so let’s move ahead and get started with the first show of the day! Coming in first is a challenger who is making his debut on our young Frontier Society circuit! Going for his first medal here at the Battle Arcade, please welcome Matt from Snowpoint City!”

Matt found that all the attempts he’d made to tame his nerves amounted to nothing when the curtain in front of him whisked open, leaving him nearly completely locked up. Barely able to breathe, he shuffled out a short distance onto the black runway leading to the battlefield before nervously eyeing the audience.

Spotting Nekou, Bunny, Olivia and Dante sitting in the front row along with Marie and Olivia’s Minccino gave him a burst of energy, especially when he saw Olivia with her mind seemingly off her broken leg. Feeling revitalized, he picked up his pace and reached his box on the battlefield, where he stopped. A rotund man wearing a pair of dark sunglasses was already there, waiting in a space just off to the side of the field’s middle.

Immediately upon his arrival, the tall, thin screen on Matt’s side of the arena illuminated to display icons of the three Pokémon he’d selected, Aggron, Rotom and Seismitoad.

“Our challenger is now set!” the announcer declared while Matt simply stood there, still feeling some nerves from the relatively small space and the crowd. The lights dimmed and multicolored disco lights started to flow around the stadium, leading the audience to cheer more loudly than ever. “Yes, everyone, you know what that means! You know what time it is! Now, allow me to introduce once more the woman of the hour! The one you’ve all been waiting for! The one, the only… Arcade Star Dahlia!!”

Simultaneously, the lights in the stadium came back up and the audience erupted in the loudest round of cheering yet. All of this was over the caped figure that appeared in a burst of confetti at the opposite end of the battlefield.

With fluid movements that almost made her body look as if it was made of water, Dahlia moved down her runway, waving to the crowd all the while. Once she reached her destination, she stopped and waved one last time before turning toward Matt. Her screen, meanwhile, displayed her Pokémon in the same order as the day before – Togekiss, Ludicolo and Zapdos.

“Welcome, challenger!” Dahlia cheerfully said in greeting, striking a sharp pose with her hand on her hip. “Welcome to my Battle Arcade! How are you feeling today? Lucky?”

“Let’s just say I’ll be feeling more lucky once we get this battle going,” he replied straightforwardly. This wasn’t a lie, as the anticipation of the battle was intimidating him more than the battle itself. Unfortunately, he was unable to mask it well.

“Are you nervous or just eager to get this show on the road? Either way, let’s give you exactly what it is you want!” A thin pedestal with a red button on it rose out of the floor in front of Matt, visibly startling him. Picking up on this, Dahlia spoke, “Surprised? What we’re gonna do before battling is test just how lucky you really are! Bring up the game board!”

On Dahlia’s cue, the central video screen displayed a grid of sixteen squares, arranged in four rows of four. Each space had a different symbol on it, apparently signifying something different in each box.

“This big game board will determine the conditions we battle under,” Dahlia explained. “Anything could come from it. You could trigger a rainstorm, or maybe some sunlight or relentless hail... we could battle in a Trick Room or with our Pokémon asleep… we could even trade teams before we battle! Truly, the possibilities are endless!” Having worked herself into a frenzy, Dahlia threw her arms into the air before finishing her speech. “Hit the button to stop the board, okay? Now… set it in motion! Let’s go!”

An orange frame lit up around the upper-left corner space on the grid and began cycling past each of the board’s sixteen squares. Overwhelmed by the sudden pressure he felt from the correct realization that the outcome of this could decide the battle before it even started, Matt tried to push aside thoughts of the crowd and focus in on the game board.

From his quick inspections, he picked out the weather effect tiles, plus the Trick Room space that he’d seen Nando battling under the previous day. He also concluded that a tile with two opposite arrows was the aforementioned team-trading space, and that a lightning bolt space would inflict paralysis on his Pokémon. Running through some ideas in his head, he devised a quick plan and zeroed in on the space he wanted.

“Now!” he shouted, slamming down on the button.

“The battle condition has been decided!” blared the announcer. “This battle will be conducted under a steady rainfall!”

Crystal generators similar to those in the Trainer House glowed to life in a ring around the ceiling of the stadium, and mere moments later, clouds gathered and rain started to fall over the battlefield. The space the frame had stopped on – a tile displaying a water drop – now filled the entire central screen.

“So it’s rain, huh? Once again, the board delivers a turn on the road of life... luck is not just what twists and turns that road throws at us, but also how we deal with them and thus make our own luck. Is that something you’re good at?”

“I get the feeling you’re going to answer for me,” Matt deadpanned in response. “The answer is how this battle turns out, isn’t it?”

“You’re pretty smart. Since you know how things are going to go here, let’s waste not a single moment more!” Tearing off her cape and throwing it aside, an action that revealed her familiar outfit from the day before, Dahlia posed dramatically, yelling, “Show me your luck! No, show me if you can conquer it and make luck your own!!”

“If that’s what you want me to do...” Matt took out his Poké Ball, but hesitated slightly because of the crowd cheering once again. “…I…I’ll show you what you want! Tony, make your mark!”

“Dance, Togekiss!” Dahlia immediately called back, rolling a Poké Ball of her own down her outstretched arm before popping it open.

Materializing on Matt’s side of the field, Tony straightened to his full height and roared, then locked eyes with the Togekiss that emerged from Dahlia’s Poké Ball. The Normal-and-Flying-type Togekiss showed no fear in her eyes, even as she was confronted by the mighty Aggron.

“The battle between the challenger, Matt, and the Arcade Star, Dahlia, will now begin!” The referee raised his arm upward before bringing it down in a chopping motion. “Go!”

“Tony, start strong!” Matt exclaimed, stretching out his arm to point at Togekiss. “Head Smash, now!”

Undeterred by the echoing roar Tony sent ringing through the Battle Arcade’s stadium prior to his charge, Dahlia shook herself in another of her fluid dance moves as she directed, “Togekiss, move aside and use Water Pulse.”

Well before Tony could collide with her, Togekiss glided off to the side of the field, leaving the Aggron to hit nothing but thin air. She then began to spin, forming an upright circle with the tips of her wings. This circle soon became physical upon being traced in a stream of water from Togekiss’s wings, and it flowed straight into Tony, pushing the growling Steel-and-Rock-type back. The attack was strengthened in intensity by the rainfall, which added water to the ring to increase its size.

While Tony nursed the burn-like wound that the Water Pulse had left on his hide, Matt was left to reassess his opponent in a silent panic. Dahlia’s overwhelming confidence could be seen in footage of her battles, but he realized that seeing was only one part of it. Standing across a battlefield from Dahlia was another thing entirely, as her spirit burned powerfully enough to almost be physically felt. Looking at her standing there with her hand on her hip and her gaze fixed on the Pokémon, Matt very quickly found himself feeling in over his head.

“Togekiss, use Water Pulse again!”

Snapping back to attention, Matt saw the second ring of water flying toward Tony and immediately blurted out, “Dodge it!”

If the Battle Arcade was a facility of luck, Matt wasn’t having much of it, as even though Tony bent back in an attempt to let the Water Pulse sail over him, it still caught the edge of his steel horns and pulled him back until he fell over completely.

“Aggron goes down, but it’s not out yet! Will Matt be able to turn this around somehow, or will the Arcade Star take the lead in a decisive motion?”

“He’s embarrassing himself out there,” Nekou said monotonously, resting her head on one hand in a fit of exaggerated boredom as she took a handful of chips from her bag with the other. “Dahlia’s making a fool out of him… he can’t touch her in the least.”

“It’s only just started,” commented Bunny, “so don’t give up yet.”

“If I was giving up I would have left already.”

“Come on, Matt, pull yourself together!”

Olivia’s plea managed to restore some of Matt’s confidence, but before he could even calculate a new approach, Dahlia was on the attack again.

“Togekiss, get ready to finish this!” she shrilled while her Pokémon took up a position right over Tony. “Water Pulse, straight down!”

“I see it!” An idea suddenly came to Matt, and he wasted no time in putting it into motion. “Tony, Head Smash! If Togekiss is aiming down, you aim up!”

Because of her spinning, Togekiss did not see Tony using his tail as a spring to throw himself into the air toward her. It was this blind spot that allowed Tony to finally land a hit, headbutting Togekiss hard enough to cause her half-formed Water Pulse to explode, throwing both Pokémon in opposite directions – Tony fell downward and crashed into the ground, while Togekiss flew back violently and somersaulted through the air.

“So you’ve got some fight in you, huh?” A light giggle escaped Dahlia’s lips while she shifted her weight from one leg to the other. “Looks like I’m going to have to step up my game a little. Togekiss, use Psychic on the rain!”

“Head Smash once more!” Matt reflexively answered, not realizing what Dahlia was doing even when individual drops of rain began getting caught in the purple light of Togekiss’s power.

Tony charged, but soon found his movement impeded by something weighing down his left leg. Both he and his trainer realized in horror what it was all too late – a cluster of raindrops had been forcefully congealed around that limb, rendering it useless. Before Matt could figure out any way out of this trap, and before Tony could lash the surprisingly heavy water off of himself, Togekiss used Psychic to pin down his other leg and both arms before completely encasing him in a tight cocoon of water.

“Like that one?” Dahlia casually said to Matt, who simply stood there stunned by his Aggron’s ordeal. “That’s actually one of my favorite Contest moves. I see you look surprised… did you actually think I’d leave everything up to luck? Like I said, the best kind of luck is the kind you make for yourself. This Battle Arcade and everything inside it is my home, and in here, everything happens according to my luck. You’re clearly relying on something different… chance. Chance is when you throw all caution to the wind and let things happen as they will… now let me show you what the true meaning of luck is. Togekiss, the grand finale!” Throwing her arms wide, Dahlia called out into the air, “Water Pulse!!”

Flying to just above where Tony was bound in place, Togekiss started spinning again, drawing water upward from the trapped Aggron. The two Pokémon became surrounded by the same fluctuating stream of water, but a brief moment later, a bright glow radiated from Togekiss’s half of the fluid structure, and the entire thing exploded in a spectacular and violent burst of shining water and wind.

Matt had to shield his face from the surf-like spray thrown on him as well as the harsh gust, which hurt his eye. The sustained force of the blast Togekiss trigged blew his hair and coat for several seconds; meanwhile, Dahlia was facing the same conditions, but she simply stood there as if none of it fazed her, her wild black hair flying in all directions.

Finally, the force radiating from the center of the stage abated, revealing the almost painfully obvious results – a winded but otherwise fairly healthy Togekiss flapping her wings cheerfully over the prone form of her defeated Steel-and-Rock-type opponent.

The referee raised his arm toward Dahlia and announced, “Aggron is unable to battle! The winner is Togekiss!”

“Down goes Aggron, marking the fall of a dangerous enemy for Dahlia’s Togekiss! With only Rotom and Seismitoad left, is it already too late for Matt?”

Even from the stands, Bunny could see that the question posed by the announcer was evidently already on Matt’s mind. She watched him silently call Tony back to his Poké Ball, recognizing the same sudden soullessness she’d seen on her archeological projects with him when something went terribly wrong.

“Is he going to be okay?”

Snapping out of her bubble, Bunny turned to see Olivia pulling on Nekou’s arm. What truly surprised her wasn’t the fact that Olivia was turning to Nekou for alleviation of her doubts, as she’d already recognized how the two seemed to connect. It was instead how deadly serious Nekou seemed to be treating the whole matter.

“You don’t worry, Olivia,” the dark-haired woman reassured. “Even if he can’t come through for himself, he’ll do it for you. The amount of strength one can gain just by knowing their actions mean something to someone else is unbelievable.”

“Right.” Olivia nodded, smiled weakly, then turned back to the battle and screamed out as loud as she could, “Come on, you! Don’t you let me down!!”

His face blank, Matt slowly turned to the stands, completely oblivious to the rest of the crowd cheering for Dahlia’s decisive actions. He saw Olivia, and with something in his mind clicking, he shook his head and snapped back to attention.

“There you go,” Nekou thought with a smile. “I knew you wouldn’t **** up when it came to helping her out.”

“Got yourself together yet?” Dahlia called out across the battlefield. “Togekiss and I want to see which of your Pokémon we’re up against next!”

“I know exactly what I’m doing now,” Matt replied after a brief hesitation. Readying the Ultra Ball in his hand, he yelled as he threw it, “Nikola, make your mark!”

“Matt calls upon his Frost Forme Rotom as his second Pokémon!” exclaimed the announcer, putting words to the image of Nikola taking shape in the stadium.

“Ah, now that’s something I don’t see every day! I’m pleasantly surprised at you, but that doesn’t mean I’ll go easy. Togekiss, start this off with a bang! Hyper Beam!”

“Block it with Thunderbolt!”

Acting swiftly, Togekiss hummed serenely while charging up energy in the form of a red sphere in front of her face. Nikola took aim and fired a horizontal bolt of lightning just in time to intercept the pulsating beam that burst from Togekiss’s mouth. It failed to stop the Hyper Beam completely, but Thunderbolt did serve some function, as the beam was split up and only a fraction of it struck its target.

“Rotom, tom,” Nikola said, shaking off the weaker but still forceful blow it had received. A dark patch on its midsection was one of the few signs left of the hit.

Togekiss, meanwhile, did not escape scot-free either. Having expended much of her energy to create and fire the Hyper Beam, she could now only float before Dahlia, breathing heavily as she waited for her strength to return.

“Dahlia, do you remember what you said earlier about luck, chance and this Battle Arcade?”

“Yeah?” Dahlia inquisitively answered, scrunching her face. “What about it?”

“I think two people can have the same luck. Chance has given me a shot of demonstrating that. Nikola, use Blizzard up into the clouds!”

Both Dahlia and the collective audience gasped in surprise at Matt’s improvised strategy. Almost immediately upon Nikola beginning to shoot gusts of frosty wind up into the rainclouds, the rain itself changed temporarily into hail. The icy stones crashed loudly against the battlefield, but Dahlia was paying that no heed. Instead, she was staring at and gesturing frantically to her Togekiss while attempting to give it commands. As she was caught in the sudden storm, Togekiss could only suffer under repeated strikes until she gave in and fell to the ground.

“Dahlia’s Togekiss goes down,” declared the commentator, over a deafening roar from the crowd, “but is it out? We know how the Arcade Star is in situations like this!”

“That’s right, when your luck runs out, you improvise… that’s what you just did, isn’t it?” As Dahlia spoke, the rain returned, blocking out the false Hail.

“You talked about this Battle Arcade being a place where you control all the luck in the facility as your own. Well, I think it’s time I took some of that luck myself. Nikola, finish it off with Thunderbolt!”

A single jagged bolt of lightning flashed out from Nikola’s plasma body, which had turned from blue to yellow as static built up in it. Pinned to the ground by chunks of ice, Togekiss could not escape from this counterattack. She was left helpless to avoid being struck down, and her body went limp after the initial shock of Thunderbolt wore off.

“Togekiss is unable to battle! The winner is Rotom!”

“Score one for the challenger in a decisive blow! We’re now even, with one Pokémon down on each side! Now, let’s see what the Arcade Star’s next course of action is!”

“See, I told you he’d pull through for you,” Nekou said to Olivia.

“You were right, but let’s see if he can actually win this battle completely.”

While Nekou and Olivia were exchanging comments on Matt, Bunny happened to glance over to her other side. She spotted Dante sitting rigidly in the next seat, staring intently at the battle as if he was intending to memorize every single detail of it. At first disturbed by this, she quickly brushed it off and decided to pay it no mind.

“You did very well, my dear Togekiss,” Dahlia whispered to the Poké Ball she’d recalled her beloved Pokémon to. “I think I underestimated you, Matt.”

“Don’t be so sure. How can you say that I didn’t just get lucky?”

“Luck only goes so far. I’ve got a knack for telling when I’m up against someone who can give me a challenge, and right now, whether you realize it or not, I’m getting that feeling. Now let’s see what you can really do. Dance, Ludicolo!”

Dahlia threw her Net Ball next, which released the green, pineapple-shaped Pokémon within. Ludicolo began dancing cheerfully almost immediately, taking great pleasure in the rain.

“A Water-and-Grass-type,” Matt observed, trying to carefully examine Ludicolo to the best of his ability. He was however unable to glean much from simply seeing it standing and dancing, and he didn’t have that much available to him as a result of seeing Nando fight her, so he decided to use a straightforward approach. “Let’s just attack and see what happens, Nikola. Signal Beam, go!”

A bright light flashed out of the spike on the top of Nikola’s refrigerator body, followed by a rainbow-colored beam of energy. Ludicolo, seeing the ray approaching her, stopped dancing and stood still.

“Now, Ludicolo! Drain Punch!”

In the blink of an eye, Ludicolo disappeared into thin air, visibly astounding both Matt and Nikola. Just as quickly, however, she materialized again right in front of the floating Electric-and-Ice-type, with just enough space to pull her arm back and deliver a powerful, glowing punch that slammed Nikola downward.

“Fueled by Swift Swim, Dahlia’s Ludicolo lands a devastating blow! Let’s see how the challenger manages to deal with this development… or will he even be able to?”

“That’s right, do you like it?” Dahlia asked of her surprised, stunned opponent. “Rain is perfect for my Ludicolo and her Swift Swim ability. Will you be able to keep up with our speed, or are you already left in the dust?”

“There’s got to be a way out of this,” Matt thought, even going as far as shutting his eyes to try to focus. “Come on, think of something!”

“What’s the matter, Ludicolo got your tongue?” Dahlia was clearly taunting Matt, trying to goad him into attacking while continuing to stand with her hands on her hips. “Let me loosen it up then. Energy Ball!”

This time opting to not use Swift Swim to get close, Ludicolo remained in her position and instead threw a sparking sphere of green energy at Nikola.

Matt snapped his eyes open and he pushed both of his arms forward. “Get away if you can, Nikola! After that, use Signal Beam!”

There was barely enough time for Nikola to get out of the way of Energy Ball after recovering from the bruising injury Drain Punch dealt out, but it managed to do so. Afterward, it aimed another Signal Beam down at the aggressive Ludicolo, hoping as hard as it could that this time, the attack would not fail.

“How troublesome,” Dahlia uttered, rolling her head back slightly so she’d have to look downward at an angle to see Matt. “Ludicolo, move in and go for Hyper Voice!”

Falling back into her original tactic, Ludicolo evaded Signal Beam by evaporating into the driving rain, then warping into the space right in front of Nikola. This time, though, she retaliated against her foe by screaming in a loud voice, forming circular shockwaves that visibly rattled Matt’s Pokémon.

“That’s it!” Thinking carefully, Matt recalled something he’d seen during Nando’s battle the previous day – namely, how Exploud’s Hyper Voice could be fused with other moves to create intensely powerful techniques useful for both Contests and standard battling. Framing this within some of the things he’d observed about Ludicolo’s patterns, he knew he had a solid idea toward stopping her. “Nikola, Signal Beam one more time, please.”

“You’ll go nowhere with that old trick! Ludicolo, Drain Punch!”

Though its Signal Beam once again missed as a result of Ludicolo’s Swift Swim speed fueling her escape, Nikola had her right where Matt wanted.

Grinning ever so slightly, he called out, “Thunderbolt! Just release it into the air!”

Snickering, Nikola quickly shot a lightning bolt in a random direction and sustained the charge for several seconds. The electricity caught onto the raindrops at an exponential rate, and soon, the entire field was flooded by electrical energy.

Within the depths of the storm, the lightning even caught up to Ludicolo, who was shocked out of midair during her Swift Swim-powered rush. Feeling increasingly frustrated at how difficult this fight was becoming, Dahlia pushed her hands through her hair.

“Fine! If you want things to go this way, be my guest! If we can’t get up close, we’ll go from a distance! Ludicolo, Energy Ball!”

“Give me another skyward Blizzard!” Matt raised his arm and pointed upward for emphasis after
giving this command.

Nikola ignored Ludicolo even as she was giving shape to her next Energy Ball, instead opting to focus on blowing another gust of cold air into the clouds overhead. Dahlia’s Pokémon barely managed to launch her attack before chunks of ice rained down on her in much the same way as Togekiss. While Ludicolo crumpled under the harsh blows leveled out by the falling ice, Nikola had left itself open and winced when the glowing sphere struck it in the face.

“Try Signal Beam one more time, Nikola!”

“I see what you’re doing, and you won’t get away with it! Ludicolo, Hyper Voice!”

Dahlia was so absorbed in the battle that she failed to notice Matt smile slightly when she gave the go-ahead for Hyper Voice. Both trainers just watched as Ludicolo avoided Signal Beam by merely stepping back before screaming and forming a sonic energy ring heading back in Nikola’s direction.

“Now that’s what I was waiting for!” Matt exclaimed, running his hands down the sides of his face before pointing forward. “Go, Nikola! Thunderbolt!”

Nikola shocked the wave manifested by Ludicolo’s Hyper Voice, and the circular wave itself became electrified, thus spreading lightning through the air. Dahlia gasped when she realized that she could not direct Ludicolo to move or attack because of how thickly occupied by electricity the space was, a sentiment visibly shared by Ludicolo. The Water-and-Grass-type Pokémon muttered nervously and adjusted her sombrero while waiting for the air to clear.

Matt, however, had other plans. “Shadow Ball!”

Aiming right for the center of the electrical field, Nikola dropped in an energy sphere of its own, this one glowing with black light. The Shadow Ball reacted with all of the lightning, causing a bright, sparkling explosion that blinded all everyone and everything within the arena.

As soon as his vision started to return by even a small bit, Matt shouted, “Now, Nikola! Go through and finish this with Signal Beam!”

Dahlia’s Ludicolo recovered from the shock of Matt’s previous combination move in just enough time to see Nikola lunging through the lingering smoke, a Signal Beam taking shape on the spike atop its head. Mentally, she wanted to jump away, but the results of several harsh hits had left her body in an unresponsive state. Swift Swim couldn’t save her, so she had to simply wait for the inevitable to come as the rainbow-colored beam struck her down.

“Ludicolo is unable to battle!” the referee called before the eyes of the enthralled audience. “The winner is Rotom!”

“Ludicolo goes down as Rotom racks up a second consecutive win! The Arcade Star now only has one Pokémon left, but the outcome is far from certain. Will she fall in defeat at our challenger’s hands, or will she rally to overcome this disadvantage?!”

“Nikola, good job! That was exactly what I needed!” Though Matt’s praise of his Rotom was expressed in a confident-sounding voice, Matt was anything but confident at that point.

Nekou, Bunny and Olivia all shared the same doubts he had, as they all knew that the biggest problem was about to happen. Without one move being made it was already realized that the next Pokémon would be easily a more grueling challenge than Togekiss and Ludicolo.

“You made me proud out there, Ludicolo. There’s nothing more I need from you.” Returning the Net Ball to her belt, Dahlia kept her hand at her waist while turning a suddenly fiery glare at Matt. “As for you, I’ve gone easy on you until this point. Do you understand what that means? That means you must step up your efforts even further if you think you’re going to win this, because now I’m going to get serious.” Tearing the Master Ball from her belt, Dahlia threw it and shrilled the words Matt knew he’d have to face even though he didn’t want to, “Show yourself on the dance floor, Zapdos!!”

Erupting from the Master Ball in a spectacular flash of light, Zapdos slowly unfolded its jagged-edged wings and looked down on Nikola. It wasn’t just a matter of positioning – Zapdos clearly held itself in much higher esteem than the allegedly lesser Electric-and-Ice-type Pokémon before its eyes.

“Yes, it’s what you’ve been waiting for! Arcade Star Dahlia’s Zapdos has entered the battle! Hold on to your seats, because now you know we’re in for a ride!”

“They’re in for a ride?” Matt quietly growled through his gritted teeth, attempting to grasp the sheer magnitude of the task before him. “How about the ride I’m in for?”

“I see you talking to yourself over there, so how’s about I give you something to talk about?!” Seemingly as soon as she sent Zapdos into the intense battle, Dahlia became a different person. Her stance became stiffer, and her movements went from being fluid to sharp and abrupt. Thrusting both of her arms forward, she cried, “Zapdos, Heat Wave!”

“Not good…” Desperate to avoid being defeated by the intimidating Legendary Pokémon, Matt chose the first decision that jumped into his head. “Quickly, Nikola, use Blizzard!”

Instead of aiming for the clouds this time, Nikola simply locked straight ahead to target Zapdos directly. Its gust of freezing air was met by the tide of fire that Zapdos had pushed forth, however, and Heat Wave won out. With its attack nullified completely, Nikola was left trapped to weather a painfully effective blow.

“Finish it off now, Zapdos! Give it a Drill Peck right to the chest!”

At this point completely overwhelmed by the stunning power and speed he was up against, Matt flinched and couldn’t manage to give a command. Nikola acted on its own, shooting a Thunderbolt at Zapdos as the Electric-and-Flying-type barreled toward it, but Zapdos shrugged the last-ditch counterattack off with little effect before viciously colliding with Nikola.

“N-Nikola!” Matt screamed out, though it was completely in vain.

“Rotom is unable to battle! The winner is Zapdos!”

“Down goes Rotom! He never had a chance to touch Zapdos! Now, the challenger only has one Pokémon left as well!”

Not content to simply defeat the Rotom, Zapdos pinned its victim under one of its talons while cawing loudly, all to show off its dominance over the battlefield.

“Now that’s just overkill,” Bunny reacted with disgust.

“You should have expected something like this,” Nekou said with a hint of sarcasm. “You can tell she isn’t the type to be subtle about anything. This is her stage, and when she’s on it, she’s going to absolutely play it to the ****ing hilt.”

“Come on, don’t you blow this now!” Olivia called out with her hands cupped around her mouth. “If Nando could do it, so can you!”

“So it comes down to this…” Having recalled Nikola, Matt stood rigidly in a way that caused his eye to be obscured by the shadow of his hat’s brim. “I’ve got to pin all my hopes on this last one after all… out of these three, he’s my newest Pokémon, but I’m not going to just let this go…” Whipping his head up, he sharply added, “I’m not letting this go because those who run cannot find the truth! Patrick, make your mark!!”

In a blindingly fast motion Matt got the Dive Ball out of his bag and threw it with a flick of his wrist, releasing the bulky-bodied Seismitoad within to face Dahlia’s savage Zapdos. Patrick slowly turned his lazy-looking eyes upward to face Zapdos directly, who by this time was staring back with a look of sheer annoyance.

“It’s the final showdown, folks! Everything’s on the line! Matt’s Seismitoad versus Dahlia’s Zapdos… only one will walk away from this with the spoils of victory, but who will it be?!”

“A Water-and-Ground-type Pokémon?” Dahlia uttered while standing with her hands on her hips. “What a bother, Zapdos’s electrical attacks won’t work… but that just means this will be all the more fun! Get started with Drill Peck, Zapdos!”

As soon as Zapdos started spinning in Patrick’s direction, Matt growled to himself and shouted, “Stop it with Scald!”

The rainfall lent Patrick’s Scald some additional power, turning it into an almost beam-like blast of burning water instead of just a spray. Zapdos didn’t care about this power upgrade, though; it simply twisted around the boiling jet in midair to avoid being hit, then drilled straight into Patrick’s stomach, throwing him back as he croaked painfully.

“Patrick, no...” Matt whispered in shock, while he watched Patrick slump against a nearby wall.

“Is it too much?” taunted Dahlia, leaning forward while waving her right hand’s pointer finger in the air. “Tell me when you’ve had enough. I’ll stop whenever…”

Suddenly, a loud, guttural voice echoed through the stadium, interrupting Dahlia mid-sentence. Patrick, now standing again, raised both of his arms and let out an earsplitting battle cry before lunging at the grounded Zapdos.

Taking advantage of this turn, Matt directed, “Hit it with Drain Punch!”
 

The Great Butler

Hush, keep it down
As it did not suspect Patrick to be capable of striking so quickly, Zapdos was caught off guard and took a forceful blow squarely to the chest. The wound left behind quickly transformed into light that flowed into Patrick, restoring some of his stamina.

“Hit my Zapdos in such a way? I think not! Zapdos, take to the air and use Ominous Wind!”

Just as Zapdos began to lift itself into the air, Patrick jumped up and swung out with his hand, managing to grab onto the Electric-and-Flying-type’s leg. The feeling of Patrick’s weight immediately caused Zapdos to panic, and it forced itself upward in a frenzied attempt to get free.

“Good thinking, Patrick!” Matt called out in compliment, a wide smile coming across his face. “It has nowhere to run, so use Scald!”


“Toss that thing now!” Dahlia tore back in response.

Despite Zapdos’s valiant efforts to flip Patrick over its head, the Seismitoad managed to pull it back. While still holding on to keep Zapdos in place, Patrick assaulted it with another jet of steaming water, this one connecting straight to the Legendary Pokémon’s chin.

Zapdos finally lashed free of Patrick’s grip after taking the Scald directly, but it wasn’t yet out of trouble. This was evidenced by the sudden shudder that wracked its body as a red aura overtook it.

“That’s a burn, the secondary effect of Scald! Zapdos is on the clock now!”

In her mind, Dahlia saw her range of options narrowing. For a moment she squinted and stared at the two Pokémon, then she threw her hands up in the air and screamed to the ceiling, “Zapdos, ascend!”

While still visibly suffering from the burn’s effects, Zapdos managed to follow its trainer’s directions by moving upward until it was just skimming the underside of the clouds. At that point, it started to glide around in wide circles over the battlefield.

“If that’s what you’re going to do, then I have little choice in how to answer.” Pointing upward at the avian Pokémon, Matt sharply instructed, “Patrick, aim as best as you can and use Scald!”

Another jet of heated water shot into the air, but Zapdos evaded this one by twisting around and flying above the clouds. In frustration, Patrick blindly spat out yet another Scald with no orders, missing Zapdos by a figurative mile.

“Zapdos, it’s time for us to take the lead!” Compared to her earlier difficulties, Dahlia appeared to be getting her hyper, cheerful edge back. “Ominous Wind!”

Dahlia’s Zapdos dipped just below the cloud cover before forcefully flapping its wings, pushing a gust of glowing purple wind over Patrick. The Water-and-Ground-type Pokémon crossed his arms to act as a sort of defense, and to a degree, it did work. Aside from small cuts spreading over a number of places on his body, Patrick wasn’t hurt much at all, prompting Dahlia to clench her teeth.

Adding to her frustration, Dahlia could see Zapdos still being afflicted by the red aura of the burn left earlier. She realized that if she continued to approach the battle with a casual pace, she’d lose, not because of Patrick knocking Zapdos out but because of the burn simply wearing Zapdos out.

Knowing that she was in a situation worse than she’d initially thought, Dahlia took charge by quickly and directly ordering, “Drill Peck!”

“Patrick, hit it right in the face with Drain Punch!” Matt reflexively said to counter Dahlia. As he did so, he repositioned himself so that he was standing with his legs somewhat further apart while leaning forward very slightly.

Even when Zapdos hadn’t yet dove to strike, Patrick was getting ready to hit back. He clenched his fist and pulled back, but unlike before, this time a strange purple glow surrounded his arm. Though he did swing and connect with Zapdos’s face as the Legendary Pokémon drilled toward him, Patrick failed to affect it in any significant way, being thrown back forcefully but not nearly as hard as before. Zapdos, meanwhile, flipped back and returned to circling the battlefield from near the clouds.

“Looks like you don’t have complete luck yet after all,” Dahlia commented in a much more serious tone than the one in which she usually spoke. “Far too late for that to come into play.”

“What are you talking about?” Matt skeptically asked, noting to himself that engaging Dahlia in a discussion would afford Patrick a chance to rest momentarily.

“Did you see that purple glow? Your Seismitoad’s ability must be Poison Touch, which means that that Drain Punch would have poisoned Zapdos if it wasn’t already burned. Unfortunate for you, isn’t it?”

“But fortunate for me,” she quickly thought as an amendment to her original sentence. “I’m in enough trouble trying to win with Zapdos being burned…”

“It’s good to know that, but at this point, it doesn’t matter.” Turning his head upward so he could see Zapdos circling, Matt spread his arms and called out, “Patrick, cut it down with another Scald!”

“Get away!” Dahlia countered, gesturing in a sweeping motion. “Drill Peck into the clouds!”

Matt had been hoping for a decisive blow to end the fight, but those hopes disappeared when Patrick’s boiling water stream sailed just below Zapdos’s talons as it spun upward and out of sight. For his part, Matt clenched his fists and stared and the spot where Zapdos had been mere moments before, but Patrick became even angrier. Ignoring the fact that he could not aim at all, Patrick began randomly shooting blasts of steaming water up into the clouds, each one apparently missing Zapdos by a wide margin.

However, after only two rounds of these blind attempts, Patrick suddenly started gasping when he tried to use Scald again, no longer able to draw upon its power.

“Patrick, what’s wrong?” Matt desperately shouted, having become alarmed by the rapidly escalating appearance of frustration and panic on his Seismitoad’s part.

Sighing in relief, Dahlia wiped her forehead, which had become damp with sweat, and said, “I almost was afraid that I wouldn’t be able to last this long to let Pressure work!”

“Pressure…” With his breath becoming slower and shallower, Matt took a slow, shaky step back. “Zapdos’s ability… I never even took it into account…”

“Since you know what it’s called, then you must at least have an idea of what it does. You’ll run out of steam for your moves one by one at double the rate! That means, since you can’t use Scald anymore, you can’t hurt Zapdos!”

Dahlia’s claims not only affected Matt – who became visibly more tense as he tried to grapple with the meaning of his situation – but the spectators in the stands as well. Panicked, Olivia hurriedly turned to Nekou and Bunny in a bid to gain better understanding of what was going on.

“Is that actually true?! It can’t be over like that!”

“Nothing in this world is that simple,” Nekou explained in a seemingly flippant manner, not really paying much attention to her own words. “It’s something you’d benefit from remembering. When something seems like it has an obvious answer or outcome… it usually doesn’t.”

“It’s true that of Seismitoad’s remaining moves, one won’t work at all and the other would only cause slight damage,” Bunny added. “But, Zapdos isn’t exactly in great shape either. If it can’t stay out of Seismitoad’s reach, this could still turn around.”

“Now, Zapdos,” Dahlia called out to her airborne Pokémon, “use Ominous Wind!”

With seemingly no options available to him, Patrick simply crossed his arms in front of his face as a feeble defense against the glowing purple wind sent blowing down onto him. He wasn’t moved far by it, though.

Zapdos dropped out of the cloud cover, and its ravaged, weakened body and uneven breathing made clear that the burn’s effect was doing what Matt’s attacks were failing to do. Dahlia looked up with wide eyes at her Pokémon, trying to accept the reality brought on by the red glow consuming it and what this light meant.

“Zapdos… you’re not going to last much longer, are you?” Already knowing the answer to this question, Dahlia turned her head back down and stared at Matt. Her gaze was intense enough to make him uncomfortable; to him, her eyes were like two spears piercing into his own. “Fine!” she boomed, pointing her finger at him. “Matt Chiaki, you’ve put on a good show for us here today, so as a sign of respect, I will show you my special finishing move! Zapdos, use Heat Wave! Follow it with Drill Peck! Then, finish this with Thunderbolt!”

“Impossible,” Nekou said in disbelief. “What is she even trying to do? Heat Wave will barely affect him, and Thunderbolt…”

“She’s just trying to use the attack’s impact strength!” Bunny exclaimed, having arrived abruptly at the answer. “After all of this talk about luck, it’s come down to brute force!”

By this point, Zapdos had already used Heat Wave to create a curtain of fire in the air, and it was now using Drill Peck to spin through said curtain and gather its energy. During all of this, Matt and Patrick could only sit and watch.

“Get ready, Patrick.”

The Seismitoad grunted and nodded to his trainer in affirmation. They both knew that what Dahlia was planning was likely to spell the end for them, but one thing both Matt and Patrick had resolved to was to go down fighting.

“It ends NOW!” Dahlia screamed out, her excitement and energy finally boiling completely over. Flinging her arms up into the air before bringing them sharply back down, she roared, “Zapdos, GO!!”

All of the remaining fire in the air convened around Zapdos as it twisted around and began shooting electricity from all over its body. Locking onto Patrick, Zapdos started to descend rapidly, taking on the form and power of a spinning rocket powered by the dual forces of fire and electricity.

“This is it! Dahlia’s final move! Is this truly going to be the end?!”

“Now, Patrick!” Matt shut his eyes as he held up his arm. He did not want to see what was about to happen. “Hit it head-on with Drain Punch!”

Showing more courage than his trainer, Patrick fearlessly faced the raging inferno that bore down on him. He didn’t expect to inflict much harm either, but he intended to come out having done something to help. With perfect timing, he swung his fist just perfectly to connect with Zapdos’s beak.

Zapdos’s frenzied attack was the one that won out, easily overwhelming Patrick. His Drain Punch, however, caused the Drill Peck/Heat Wave/Thunderbolt combination to go off target, and it instead mowed the Seismitoad down at his feet and pushed him down onto the Legendary Pokémon’s back.

A combination of Zapdos’s pained, frustrated squawks and the explosion of noise from the audience forced Matt to open his eyes and see what was going on – Zapdos flittering around the arena in a panic, trying to get Patrick off of its back.

“Now I’ve seen ****ing everything…” he thought, unable to form words for a minute due to the sheer shock of what had happened and what he’d seen.

“WHAT?!!” Dahlia was rapidly approaching a point where if she became any more high-strung, she might scratch her own skin off. Her voice was thin and high-pitched, and her once-tanned-and-smooth skin had become clammy with sweat. “How could you not only survive my finishing move, but even turn it against me?”

“I guess it just boiled down to pure luck,” Matt said with a quick shrug.

Taken aback by how simple the entire thing actually was, Dahlia grunted and abruptly turned upward, staring straight at Zapdos as it glided around in the air with Patrick holding onto its back. “Throw that thing off! Drill Peck!”

“Patrick, keep your grip by any…” When he saw that Zapdos did not even have enough strength left in its burn-ravaged body to even use Drill Peck, Matt cut off his direction. He realized that the only thing remaining was to finally put an end to the battle once and for all. “Patrick, hit Zapdos square in the back with Drain Punch.”

While struggling to keep his hold on the Legendary Pokémon using only his left hand, Patrick raised up his right hand in a clenched fist. After holding it back for a short time to channel strength into it, he brought it down on the center of Zapdos’s back with great force.

Ordinarily, a Fighting-type move would do little against a Flying-type like Zapdos. However, because of the significant weakness left in Zapdos’s body by the burn plus Patrick’s precise aim, the expectation held by most of the spectators was defied. Zapdos plummeted from the sky and crashed into the floor with such speed that Patrick actually didn’t start falling until a split second later, allowing Matt the time to quickly plan his final move.

“Now, Patrick come down right on top of it with Earthquake!”

Before the stunned eyes of Dahlia along with Nekou, Olivia, Bunny and the rest of the crowd, Patrick clasped his hands together and flipped forward, delivering a devastating double punch to Zapdos’s body in a spot not far from where he’d just hit moments earlier. A seismic shockwave erupted from the impact, forcing Matt, Dahlia and the referee to brace themselves.

Though his body was violently shuddering, with every muscle wanting to give out, Patrick stood triumphant when he emerged from the final exchange. Zapdos lay nearby, sprawled out and crushed into a hole in the battlefield.

“Zapdos is unable to battle! The winner is Seismitoad, and the victor is Matt of Snowpoint City!”

“I don’t believe it!” exclaimed the announcer, though he was barely audible over the cheering erupting from the crowd. “What a show! At the end of this no-holds-barred clash of titans at the Battle Arcade, the challenger comes out on top, defeating Arcade Star Dahlia!!”

“Patrick, thank you!” Matt rushed forward when he saw Patrick, who was trying to walk to him, start to collapse. He managed to catch his Pokémon in his arms, and in response, Patrick weakly croaked and smiled in exhausted contentment. “Patrick, don’t worry anymore, you can rest now. That was amazing for one of your first battles with me.”

Dahlia, meanwhile, held up her Master Ball, bringing Zapdos back within it. “Another good show, my friend,” she said to it, putting the ball back on her belt. “Two losses in a row, but you can be blamed for neither. That’s just how the wheel spins and how the dice roll.”

Great amounts of chatter had already broken out amongst the audience members about what they had just witnessed. In the back of the seating area, lurking out of the active areas but having watched all along, Jessie, James and Meowth took advantage of this activity to cover their own actions with Wobbuffet standing alongside them.

“That’s that, then,” Jessie sighed, looking back down to the battlefield. “He could be a valuable ally to the cause if we play our cards right, don’t you think?”

“Right, Jessie, but what’s with all the people we’ve run into lately? Our hands were tied like a Tangrowth because that old man was strong, and obviously we can’t make Matt mad at us. You can see why.”

“That don’t really matter one way or the other in the end,” Meowth interjected. “The boss has got someone working on working him over. We ain’t got nothing to worry about with him. What still gets me, though, is what we’re gonna be doing to fix our little mess with the Meteonite piece.”

“We’ll lay low,” suggested James. “Come on, let’s leave. This certainly isn’t the place to have this talk.”

“Wobbuffet!” the blue Psychic-type Pokémon cheerfully shouted, waddling after his trainer and her friends as they left the arena.

-:-

“That was great! I loved it!”

Though she could not hug Matt as he came back out into the Battle Arcade’s lobby like she wanted, Olivia still greeted him with as much enthusiasm as she could muster from her crutches. Beside her stood Nekou, Bunny and Dante, all of whom were smiling, even the elderly doctor.

“Well, I wouldn’t want to disappoint my fans,” Matt chuckled, scratching the back of his head. “It looks like you’re feeling lively again, Olivia. That’s good.”

“Watching you battle helped me remember what I want to do,” the girl explained. “I know I can do it. You inspired me to keep trying to make my dream come true!”

Briefly hesitating when he was forced to consider just what Olivia’s dream was, Matt slowly turned to the others. “And what did you three think?”

“Even I have to admit when you do something right.” Nekou spoke with a huff in her voice, but in reality, she was simply trying to annoy Matt by being sarcastic. “The tactics you used were actually kind of impressive.”

“Especially how you defeated Zapdos,” Bunny quickly chimed in.

“In that battle, the Pokémon and their trainers worked together very well, which brought out the best of their abilities.” The others turned their heads in Dante’s direction while he continued musing, “My theory is that it came down to who could improvise better, and Matt, you flying blind that whole time may just have saved you. Dahlia had all her strategies planned out so well in advance that when you made things up, it put her out of her comfort zone.”

“What are you saying about me, old man?!”

When Dahlia came bounding out of the arena doorway, speaking playfully and far too loudly for the situation, she made the group of four jump in surprise. In fact, Matt almost landed right in Nekou’s arms because of how far he stumbled.

“What?” Even Dante, as calculating as he was, couldn’t completely process Dahlia’s sudden arrival.

“Oh, relax, I’m just playing with you. You’re not too far from the truth, really…” Turning to Matt, who had managed to compose himself, Dahlia continued, “Matt, your ability to go in with a rough framework of a plan and retool it on the fly is something that will serve you well going forward, but do realize that the rest of the Frontier Brains are tougher than me.”

“Sure, that sounds like a good thing…” he said in sarcastic response.

“Relax, you’ll be fine. So what will you do now?”

“Well…” Matt hesitated as he spoke; he was unsure if discussing the subject was a good idea. Ultimately deciding that explaining his motives could prove helpful, he said, “I’m looking to find Reshiram, actually. I want to see the truths its fire burns to reveal.”

“Well, you sure picked a hell of a region to do it in! That’s Unova, not Johto!” Matt and Bunny could only stare with stunned expressions at Dahlia, as her airy, casual tone completely mismatched against how serious he was being. “Sorry, though, in all seriousness, I don’t really know anything about that. You might want to talk to the Factory Head, the Frontier Brain of the Battle Factory in Goldenrod City, though. He’s more into the details of legends than I am.”

“Goldenrod City,” Bunny repeated. “That’s pretty far from here.”

“I guess we’ll be waiting a while, then…” The dejected tone in Matt’s voice could not be missed. His disappointment at losing a potential lead came right out to the surface.

“The Factory Head knows a lot of things, that’s why he got put in charge of a facility specializing in knowledge itself. Anyway, check this out. It’s what you earned by defeating me.” Reaching into a pocket inside her shirt, Dahlia withdrew a golden coin and flipped it to Matt, who caught it with his right hand. Printed on it was an image of one of the Battle Arcade’s onion domes. “It’s the medal for winning here at my Battle Arcade. With it, you can go on the Frontier Society’s website and get an additional prize.”

“Thanks, I’ll have to remember to do that. Thank you for the great battle, too.”

“Think nothing of it. Anyway, I gotta get back in there to see some more challengers, so I’ll see you around. Good luck out there!”

“Bye!” Olivia called out to Dahlia, who had turned and begun swaggering back to the arena.

“She is… certainly someone I’m not going to forget meeting anytime soon,” Bunny sighed.

“Mister Chiaki?”

An unfamiliar voice coming from behind prompted Matt to turn around. Standing there, clutching a black briefcase and gasping for air, was a well-groomed man in a brown suit.

“Yeah, that’s me, Matt Chiaki. Who are you?”

“Sorry, please forgive me. I’m just glad I managed to catch up with you.” Straightening up, the man smoothed out his suit and straightened his yellow tie, giving himself a much more professional look. He offered his hand to Matt, saying, “That was rude of me. Please allow me to introduce myself. The name’s Dominic.”

“Well met, then.” Seeing no reason to turn down the courtesy Dominic was showing him, Matt took the man’s hand for a firm handshake.

“That’s quite the handshake,” Dominic immediately pointed out. Noticing the confused looks that greeted this rather odd proclamation, he hurried to explain, “I’m a salesman for the Angel Corporation, you see, so in my line of work a good handshake goes a long way. Anyway, I hope I’m not intruding too much, but when I saw you here, Mr. Chiaki, I had to give approaching and asking you a shot.”

“Ask me what?” Matt found himself less bothered by Dominic’s presence than his seeming inability to actually get to the point. Nekou was standing just behind him and giving Dominic an exaggerated death stare, but Matt was completely unaware of this.

“Will you be going to Violet City?”

“Wait, that’s it?” The sheer simplicity of the question caught Matt completely off guard, and he did not have an answer ready.

“Of course!” Olivia immediately cut in. “That’s where my first Gym is!”

“But why would you want to know?” A hint of suspicion flavored Nekou’s inquiry. Harboring a dislike for not knowing what was happening, she felt uncomfortably on edge.

“I said I was a salesman, well, I’m actually a traveling salesman. I’m asking about Violet City because my son and two daughters are attending Earl’s Pokémon Academy there for a while, and after seeing you battle, I’d really appreciate it if you could meet them.”

“I don’t think I see any reason why I should say no,” Matt answered with a shrug. “It’s not out of the way…”

“Good choice, I wanted to go!” In a complete departure from her previous feelings, Nekou now loudly supported the proposal. “A school would have one of my favorite things in it!”

“I swear,” Matt sighed, “if you say free food…”

“No, that’s number two.” Ignoring the look of exasperation plastered on Matt’s face, she continued, “I’m talking about books, the one thing that goes well with absolutely anything. I’ll read as much as I want there.”

“And you never know,” Bunny added, “we could find a clue about Reshiram there.”

“Good point. What about you, Olivia? What do you think?”

“I say we go. I could warm up for the Gym there.”

Turning back to Dominic, Matt shrugged again and said, “There you have it, we’ll go.”

“Thank you, Mr. Chiaki, thank you very much!” Seizing up Matt’s hand once more, Dominic smiled broadly as he spoke. “I’m sure my kids will appreciate meeting you very much. Now, please excuse me. I’ll have to be taking my leave now so I can get back to them.”

-:-

Pierce barely had a chance to step through the door of Dr. Zager’s run-down laboratory before the doctor was upon him. Even though the scientist was visibly angry, Pierce managed to remain completely stone-faced.

“Is it correct to assume that you received my report, Dr. Zager?”

“Oh, I received it, Pierce, and I’m not very happy with what I saw in it!” Zager threw his hands up in the air in frustration and walked a few steps away from Pierce before quickly returning. “You cannot simply spill Team Rocket’s plans to people you run into on the street!” he hissed through teeth masked by his mustache. “Any of them could be members of Polaris! All it takes is one slip up for us all to be destroyed!”

“I just ask that you pass on the information I supplied to Giovanni,” Pierce flatly said. “I am confident that he will judge what I did as correct.”

“And what if you’re wrong?”

“You boys ought to stop fighting,” Ariana suggested, walking up to Zager’s computer console. She was playful at first but quickly turned serious. “I’ve already passed the information on.”

“And I have already received it.”

The stern, powerful voice of the man on the screen brought both Zager and Pierce into line nearly instantly. Both the younger agent and the older scientist dropped down onto one knee and set their right hands over their hearts while Ariana stood by.

“Hail Giovanni!” both declared in unison.

“Dispense with the formalities,” Giovanni ordered, waving his hand to dismiss their actions. Before speaking further, the Team Rocket leader adjusted the lapel of his suit – a black article with red pinstripes – and pushed up his blood-red necktie. “Pierce, you have had interactions with a representative of the Tenganist people?”

“That is correct, sir,” Pierce rigidly replied. “She informed me that their surviving numbers are planning to rebel against Polaris, so I marshaled her into an agreement, the details of which you can see in my report.”

“Yes, we arm them and in return they will cooperate with our efforts to destroy Polaris. I see it here.”

“With all due respect, sir,” Zager interrupted, “this plan is very risky. We do not know if the Tenganists have been infiltrated by Polaris in the first place.”

“Dr. Zager, this goes far deeper than simple alliances. There has been a systematic campaign to eradicate the Tenganist people going on in secret. Many of their settlements have been destroyed, Michina Town being the first we know of, and the chief suspect we’ve identified as being behind this genocide is Ghetsis Harmonia. His hatred of the Tenganists is a poorly kept secret that Team Rocket’s intelligence forces picked up in Unova.”

“And as Ghetsis is now the public spokesman of Polaris in the Tohjo Continent,” Pierce continued, using Giovanni’s line of thought, “there is an obvious connection between the cleansing of the Tenganist people and Polaris. Also…” Pierce’s face darkened, and his normally forceful voice became much weaker. “My sister and I had our mother taken from us by Ghetsis and Polaris. Yes, I am one of them.”

“Stacia is as well, Dr. Zager.”

Under the intense eyes of Giovanni, Pierce and Ariana, Zager slowly stepped back and leaned against the nearby lab table. “This is getting worse and worse… fine. I agree to the plan to arm the Tenganists, but I want the supplies I send to be carefully observed.”

“I will take the responsibility of escorting the shipment of goods to their designated point,” Pierce volunteered without hesitation. “They are my people, even if I am not as devout as them.”

“I’m going out, too,” Ariana announced, stepping forward with her hand on her hip.

“I can’t say I think that’s a good idea. I recommend you stay here, Ariana.”

Sighing at Zager, Ariana shot back, “And because that’s one dumb-*** suggestion, I’m going to ignore it. You’ve got agents in the field who could be in way over their heads right now.”

“You’re both wrong,” Giovanni intervened. “Jessie, James and Meowth failed me more times than I can remember. But, they have proven their worth through their actions during our operations in Unova. They are some of Team Rocket’s top operatives and I have full confidence in their ability to get the mission done. That said, however, I do not object to dispatching an Executive to assist them. Ariana, do what you must to accomplish the mission.”

“You got it, boss!”

-:-

Sitting in his ornate, finely-furnished office, Giovanni pressed a key on the videophone device on his desk to close the call to Dr. Zager’s laboratory. Just then, the sound of his door creaking open caught his attention.

A young woman, bearing back-length purple hair and cold green eyes framed by glasses, carefully worked her way into the room, holding a cup of coffee on a saucer. She slowly and deliberately walked forward toward Giovanni’s desk, taking great care not to let her shaky hands spill the coffee on the red-and-purple material of her military-style dress. Eventually managing to reach her boss safely, she set the cup down before him.

“Mister Giovanni… the coffee you asked for…”

“Thank you, Stacia,” he answered, showing a rare moment of gratitude before slipping back into the dour mood that was already consuming him.

As his loyal secretary and someone who would willingly kill or die for him at the drop of a hat, however, Stacia knew more than enough to be able to read Giovanni’s face without a struggle. “Is something wrong, sir?”

Giovanni did not reply at first. Instead, he turned his chair around, giving himself a view through the huge window positioned behind his desk. His faithful Pokémon, Persian, walked up to his side and meowed, so Giovanni scratched the large, cream-colored cat under the chin, prompting him to purr contentedly.

“Stacia, when did we end up as the ones who must hold up the world? Polaris cannot be allowed to continue with what they are planning. A world ruled by the warped beliefs of Polaris can never move forward, and that would destroy Team Rocket as well.”

-:-

Once again, Ghetsis was standing outside the electronic prison in which he had placed Concordia and Anthea, listening to their findings.

“We have only translated one passage fully so far, Lord Ghetsis,” Concordia explained, detached from the situation despite the high chance of Ghetsis going into an explosive rage over it.

“It speaks of the two heroes in Unova legend, the White Hero of Truth and Black Hero of Ideals. We have not found anything more yet, only that this legend is involved.”

“I’m keeping you two alive and this is what you repay me with?!!” Of course, Ghetsis actually did end up exploding. Slamming his cane into the ground over and over, he fumed, “I won’t be able to keep ahead of those small-minded, imperfect fools on the Sacred Helix at this rate! I must! I am a perfect being, the perfect ruler for a world that shall be shaped into perfection!”

“Lord Ghetsis, come in,” a voice coming from a device in Ghetsis’s ear said. “This is Shadow Triad leader Darkness.”

“Report!” Ghetsis snapped.

“We have extensively searched Ecruteak City and Route 36 for your son and the Tenganist prophet. No results. What are your orders, my lord?”

Ghetsis closed his eyes and stood still, trying to calm his mind so he could process the information being supplied to him. Concordia and Anthea sat by and watched through the translucent walls of their prison as several tense seconds slowly passed by.

“Split up,” Ghetsis spoke once he finally reopened his eyes. “Darkness, you and Pestilence go to the west, toward Goldenrod City. Send Chaos off to the east, in the direction of Violet City and Cherrygrove City. Find those two freaks no matter the cost!”

“Your orders are our command!”

Taking his hand off his ear, Ghetsis slowly pivoted on his cane to face the two women in his cage, who were watching him with empty stares. “Prepare to bear witness to the rise of the man born to rule this broken planet! It’s been so many long years in the making…”

As he walked toward the room’s exit, Ghetsis began laughing to himself, smug in the confidence he held in his plans.

-:-

That night, the group was once again staying in the Pokémon Center’s hotel. Matt decided to go to sleep earlier than Olivia and Bunny, who were watching television together in the lobby, while Nekou was nowhere to be seen. After bidding them good night, he headed for the room the four of them were staying in.

As he entered the room, he reached for the wall next to the door, looking for the light switch he needed to trip to illuminate the darkness. The one thing he didn’t expect, though, was to have his hand held down on the switch by the hand of someone that was already there.

“Aah! Who’s there?!”

Whoever was attacking Matt pinned him against the door, which they slammed shut with their leg. Now blind in the dark room, he thought of defending himself but lacked the willpower to do so.

“Marie, turn on the lamp.”

“Snea!”

Nekou’s Sneasel turned on the lamp sitting on the nearby table, allowing Matt enough light to see that his so-called assailant was really nobody more than Nekou herself. Sighing, he tried to push her away, but she only released his left arm, the one that had been reaching for the light switch in the first place.

“I’m not in the mood for this. Let me go to bed.”

“What’s Olivia doing?” There was a strange intensity in Nekou’s eyes as she asked this question, one that showed she wasn’t joking around as Matt thought she was.

“You can go out there and see for yourself.”

“Answer the question.”

Matt sighed once again. “Fine. She’s out there watching a Pokémon Baccer game with Bunny.”

“Alright.” With that, Nekou released Matt and started to walk away, but before long she turned right back to him. “You did really well at the Battle Arcade today.”

“I just did what a lot of others have done,” he answered in a bland voice.

“Don’t sell yourself short. Olivia really looks up to you, more than you seem like you even know.”

“You two really have hit it off, haven’t you? You haven’t even known each other for very long.” The uncharacteristic seriousness of Nekou’s attitude was beginning to make Matt feel uncomfortable. By this point he was trying to find a way to get out of the conversation.

“Olivia and I do get along very well, that’s right,” she concurred. “From what she’s told me, she really likes you, even if she doesn’t outwardly show it.”

“Get to the point, please.”

“She needs you more than ever right now,” Nekou explained, closing her eyes and breathing deeply to alleviate the tension from what she was saying. “You have to tell her the truth about what happened to Rich before she goes too far down the rabbit hole to be saved.”

“How can I do something like that?” This was the last thing Matt wanted to talk about. Feeling crushed both physically and mentally, he began to just simply talk without thinking. “I can’t break her like that, I just can’t. It’s my job to make sure she keeps going. How can trash like me even think to…”

He suddenly stopped when he felt Nekou put her hand on his cheek. She was staring right at him, but while her usual sarcastic tone returned, something about what she said still sounded strangely sincere.

“Trash? **** no, stop tearing yourself down like that. We’re all… I mean, Olivia and I are relying on you, and do you know why that is? Because we trust you.”

“Thanks, I, uh… guess.” It took a moment but something in what Nekou said caught in Matt’s mind as odd. “Wait, why are you relying on me too? For what?”

“That’s not important. Just promise me you’ll tell Olivia the truth.”

Matt found Nekou’s argument oddly compelling, and after some thought, he decided to go along with it. “Fine, after Olivia wins her first Badge, I’ll tell her what happened. I want to wait until then so she’ll have something to be confident in.”

“Now that’s the Matt I knew was in there.” Nekou moved over to the bed she was sleeping in and reached into the rumpled sheets, pulling out two cans of beer; she tossed one to Matt then opened the other. “That’s for you. Let’s celebrate a little, alright?”




END of CHAPTER 5
 

Matori

THE QUEEN IS BACK
I'll try and cover everything in this. There's so much I liked about this chapter though so I'm not sure where to start.

A blazing orange crept over the land as the sun rose the next morning, spreading peals of warm light over the autumn trees of the Tohjo Continent. Cherrygrove City glittered in the shine; for as depressing a place as the city could be, the first minutes of daylight brought even Cherrygrove’s dull streets to life.

Excellent use of imagery there. I really love how vivid your description always is in your writing.


Just outside the city, in the thicker woods off the road north, Jessie, James and Meowth stood speaking to Pierce.

“…that is what you need to know about what’s going on,” Pierce finished, running a hand through his shoulder-length, dark blue hair before putting his hat back on over it. He had just finished explaining a truncated version of his work from the past twenty-four hours. “I am going to return to the base to meet with Dr. Zager and Ariana regarding this. That means you three are in charge of maintaining the mission here in the field until I return.”

“But what are we supposed to do if things go bad? You were our extraction!”

“You know, James has got a point here,” Meowth concurred with his human companion. “Say we go after that chunk of space rock and Polaris shows up. Then what?”

With her hand on her hip, Jessie stepped up to face the others. “Do you two even hear yourselves? The boss didn’t put us on this mission for nothing. If we play our cards carefully we’re going to be just fine. We don’t have to have our hands held for everything we do!”

“You’re both right,” Pierce intervened. “I will return to aid you once more when my business at the base is finished. It will not be that long. For now, this is your assignment – continue monitoring the group involving Matt Chiaki, Olivia Mistbloom, Bunny Spruce and Dante Fantomos. The old man is in possession of the Meteonite fragment, so if you get a chance to take it with little risk, do it. If not, remember that a contingency plan is already uploaded into your R-Pad.”

Pierce makes everything better always. Good work making Jessie the badass lady in charge she should be.

“This is going to be a lot harder than it has to be if you don’t put some effort into it, James!” she yelled, straightening her back to give herself a height advantage over her partner.

“Oh, come on, Jessie, you know I’m not throwing it in that easily. I just don’t like taking orders from Pierce.”

“I agree with that,” Meowth chimed in. “The boss is the only one who’s worthy of giving us orders!”

“We’ll listen to Pierce but the boss is the one we really work hard for.”

This was a really cute scene and I think you have their priorities perfect as far as the three of them go. I get the impression they don't really like listening to anyone they're not used to working for and you showed this perfectly. You also did a really good job showing James and Meowth as bros to each other who have each other's backs.

Nestled in a cluster of tall buildings near Cherrygrove City’s shoreline stood a wide structure with four spires reaching up to the sky, each one ending in a diamond-patterned onion dome. The early afternoon sun glittered on the façade, casting a glare over the street where Matt, Nekou, Olivia, Bunny and Dante all stood. Several red flags trimmed with gold borders hung around the building’s entrance, each bearing the stylized Poké Ball surrounded by seven stars that served as the Frontier Society’s logo.

Beautiful use of description there.

None of them noticed Jessie, James, Meowth and Wobbuffet – all disguised in their trenchcoats – slip in right behind them.

WOBBUFFET IN A TRENCHCOAT. That will not be obvious at all nothing can ever go wrong with this.


“I guess so,” Nekou answered. She puffed up her cheeks and exaggerated her facial expression to act like she was frustrated at being told to go somewhere, even though she fully knew this was normal and to be expected. “Don’t **** it up out there, or there’ll be hell to pay. I’ll see to that.”

haha never change, Nekou.

“I can tell you’re all fired up, so let’s move ahead and get started with the first show of the day! Coming in first is a challenger who is making his debut on our young Frontier Society circuit! Going for his first medal here at the Battle Arcade, please welcome Matt from Snowpoint City!”

I really enjoyed reading the announcer in this chapter and the vast amount of enthusiasm he has. His announcing during the big battle against Dahlia really did well to keep me in the action of the battle and make me feel like I was actually in a stadium full of cheering spectators, and he's very believable as an announcer.

“Our challenger is now set!” the announcer declared while Matt simply stood there, still feeling some nerves from the relatively small space and the crowd. The lights dimmed and multicolored disco lights started to flow around the stadium, leading the audience to cheer more loudly than ever. “Yes, everyone, you know what that means! You know what time it is! Now, allow me to introduce once more the woman of the hour! The one you’ve all been waiting for! The one, the only… Arcade Star Dahlia!!”

Made me want to dance. Dahlia's definitely got the most thrilling introduction.

“Welcome, challenger!” Dahlia cheerfully said in greeting, striking a sharp pose with her hand on her hip. “Welcome to my Battle Arcade! How are you feeling today? Lucky?”
I get the feeling Dahlia's going to give him more than he bargained for.

“Let’s just say I’ll be feeling more lucky once we get this battle going,” he replied straightforwardly. This wasn’t a lie, as the anticipation of the battle was intimidating him more than the battle itself. Unfortunately, he was unable to mask it well.

I think this is an important part of Matt's personality and you show it well. He's not the best with crowds as you've shown before and that's a major challenge he has to overcome in this battle. I think the fact that Pokemon battles are about the trainer is often forgotten and there are definitely factors that can make a battle easier or harder for the trainer in question.

“This big game board will determine the conditions we battle under,” Dahlia explained. “Anything could come from it. You could trigger a rainstorm, or maybe some sunlight or relentless hail... we could battle in a Trick Room or with our Pokémon asleep… we could even trade teams before we battle! Truly, the possibilities are endless!” Having worked herself into a frenzy, Dahlia threw her arms into the air before finishing her speech. “Hit the button to stop the board, okay? Now… set it in motion! Let’s go!”

Dahlia's enthusiasm just makes me smile so much.




There was a lot I liked about the actual battle but pulling out and quoting all of it would take forever so I'll just pull out examples of what I liked most and comment on those.


“Like that one?” Dahlia casually said to Matt, who simply stood there stunned by his Aggron’s ordeal. “That’s actually one of my favorite Contest moves. I see you look surprised… did you actually think I’d leave everything up to luck? Like I said, the best kind of luck is the kind you make for yourself. This Battle Arcade and everything inside it is my home, and in here, everything happens according to my luck. You’re clearly relying on something different… chance. Chance is when you throw all caution to the wind and let things happen as they will… now let me show you what the true meaning of luck is. Togekiss, the grand finale!” Throwing her arms wide, Dahlia called out into the air, “Water Pulse!!”

Dahlia's motif of luck that she uses in all her speeches was something I really enjoyed, the difference between luck and chance with luck being something you make for yourself as opposed to chance. It really sets the tone for one of the major themes of this whole battle. I also really love how she uses her contest moves in battle because it makes an important point about how knowledge is important to a trainer.


“Is he going to be okay?”

Snapping out of her bubble, Bunny turned to see Olivia pulling on Nekou’s arm. What truly surprised her wasn’t the fact that Olivia was turning to Nekou for alleviation of her doubts, as she’d already recognized how the two seemed to connect. It was instead how deadly serious Nekou seemed to be treating the whole matter.

“You don’t worry, Olivia,” the dark-haired woman reassured. “Even if he can’t come through for himself, he’ll do it for you. The amount of strength one can gain just by knowing their actions mean something to someone else is unbelievable.”

Showing Olivia's reactions throughout the battle was a VERY important detail to show, because it not only shows how important Matt is to her but that Matt's not just battling for his own glory, he's doing this for those who trust him too. And I really love how both Matt and Olivia rely on each other to keep going. It's a really good dynamic to show in a situation like this.


“I think two people can have the same luck. Chance has given me a shot of demonstrating that. Nikola, use Blizzard up into the clouds!”

Both Dahlia and the collective audience gasped in surprise at Matt’s improvised strategy. Almost immediately upon Nikola beginning to shoot gusts of frosty wind up into the rainclouds, the rain itself changed temporarily into hail. The icy stones crashed loudly against the battlefield, but Dahlia was paying that no heed. Instead, she was staring at and gesturing frantically to her Togekiss while attempting to give it commands. As she was caught in the sudden storm, Togekiss could only suffer under repeated strikes until she gave in and fell to the ground.

The way Matt exploits the weather conditions in this battle was really my favorite part. It's a strategy you don't normally see and the way he was able to take things he watched and translate them to help him out was really clever and enjoyable to see.


Snickering, Nikola quickly shot a lightning bolt in a random direction and sustained the charge for several seconds. The electricity caught onto the raindrops at an exponential rate, and soon, the entire field was flooded by electrical energy.

The mental image of a snickering Rotom is adorable. Also, electrified raindrops is the greatest thing in ever.

“Yes, it’s what you’ve been waiting for! Arcade Star Dahlia’s Zapdos has entered the battle! Hold on to your seats, because now you know we’re in for a ride!”

“They’re in for a ride?” Matt quietly growled through his gritted teeth, attempting to grasp the sheer magnitude of the task before him. “How about the ride I’m in for?”

ohhhhhhhhhhhhhh ****.

“That’s a burn, the secondary effect of Scald! Zapdos is on the clock now!”

An important detail to note- in a way, Scald greatly equalized the playing field, so to speak. Dahlia had to finish her plans quickly because burning isn't a joke and any time Zapdos could have been wiped out completely.

“Zapdos, it’s time for us to take the lead!” Compared to her earlier difficulties, Dahlia appeared to be getting her hyper, cheerful edge back. “Ominous Wind!”

**** Ominous Wind. Seriously that move caused me so much grief in the games and when it comes out I assume bad things are about to go down.


The tension in this Zapdos battle scene was really well-handled, I think. Like the rest of the battle, I was constantly left guessing what would happen next, but this had the added tension of being the final round so it was even more important and anything could cause a sudden loss on either side.


“Zapdos… you’re not going to last much longer, are you?” Already knowing the answer to this question, Dahlia turned her head back down and stared at Matt. Her gaze was intense enough to make him uncomfortable; to him, her eyes were like two spears piercing into his own. “Fine!” she boomed, pointing her finger at him. “Matt Chiaki, you’ve put on a good show for us here today, so as a sign of respect, I will show you my special finishing move! Zapdos, use Heat Wave! Follow it with Drill Peck! Then, finish this with Thunderbolt!”

This is a really rough sequence of attacks and I kind of cringed when I realized there was a reason she was that specific.

“Now I’ve seen ****ing everything…” he thought, unable to form words for a minute due to the sheer shock of what had happened and what he’d seen.

That makes two of us.


Matt's finishing combo of moves (Drain Punch+Earthquake) was really brutal and satisfying to see because of all the hurt Dahlia had put on him in the match, and overall I really enjoyed how action-packed and unpredictable this battle ended up being.


“Wobbuffet!” the blue Psychic-type Pokémon cheerfully shouted, waddling after his trainer and her friends as they left the arena.

Wobbuffet closing TR's scene at the end of this battle really made it for me. You did really well capturing the spirit of them in the show with that bit.

Though she could not hug Matt as he came back out into the Battle Arcade’s lobby like she wanted, Olivia still greeted him with as much enthusiasm as she could muster from her crutches. Beside her stood Nekou, Bunny and Dante, all of whom were smiling, even the elderly doctor.

“Well, I wouldn’t want to disappoint my fans,” Matt chuckled, scratching the back of his head. “It looks like you’re feeling lively again, Olivia. That’s good.”

SO CUTE.


“What are you saying about me, old man?!”

haha, I love how sassy Dahlia is.

“Oh, relax, I’m just playing with you. You’re not too far from the truth, really…” Turning to Matt, who had managed to compose himself, Dahlia continued, “Matt, your ability to go in with a rough framework of a plan and retool it on the fly is something that will serve you well going forward, but do realize that the rest of the Frontier Brains are tougher than me.”

I think this is an important warning for Matt and also a wake-up call of sorts- he's going to be in really deep when he challenges more of the frontier.

“Good choice, I wanted to go!” In a complete departure from her previous feelings, Nekou now loudly supported the proposal. “A school would have one of my favorite things in it!”

“I swear,” Matt sighed, “if you say free food…”

“No, that’s number two.” Ignoring the look of exasperation plastered on Matt’s face, she continued, “I’m talking about books, the one thing that goes well with absolutely anything. I’ll read as much as I want there.”

Nekou has her priorities in order. :D

“You boys ought to stop fighting,” Ariana suggested, walking up to Zager’s computer console. She was playful at first but quickly turned serious. “I’ve already passed the information on.”

“And I have already received it.”

The stern, powerful voice of the man on the screen brought both Zager and Pierce into line nearly instantly. Both the younger agent and the older scientist dropped down onto one knee and set their right hands over their hearts while Ariana stood by.

“Hail Giovanni!” both declared in unison.

“Dispense with the formalities,” Giovanni ordered, waving his hand to dismiss their actions. Before speaking further, the Team Rocket leader adjusted the lapel of his suit – a black article with red pinstripes – and pushed up his blood-red necktie. “Pierce, you have had interactions with a representative of the Tenganist people?”

I really enjoyed this bit in particular because it nicely captures what I love about a lot of the interactions between Giovanni and other Rockets, especially from earlier in the show, where everything is very official and foreboding and atmospheric, and the way you captured that interesting type of tension was very cool. I also love how Pierce and Zager are super official and formal and Ariana's just standing there.

“Dr. Zager, this goes far deeper than simple alliances. There has been a systematic campaign to eradicate the Tenganist people going on in secret. Many of their settlements have been destroyed, Michina Town being the first we know of, and the chief suspect we’ve identified as being behind this genocide is Ghetsis Harmonia. His hatred of the Tenganists is a poorly kept secret that Team Rocket’s intelligence forces picked up in Unova.”

More of that showing Gio as a thinker that I love oh so much.

Sighing at Zager, Ariana shot back, “And because that’s one dumb-*** suggestion, I’m going to ignore it. You’ve got agents in the field who could be in way over their heads right now.”

to quote the same source material, "I understand that reference." Nice shout-out there.

“You’re both wrong,” Giovanni intervened. “Jessie, James and Meowth failed me more times than I can remember. But, they have proven their worth through their actions during our operations in Unova. They are some of Team Rocket’s top operatives and I have full confidence in their ability to get the mission done. That said, however, I do not object to dispatching an Executive to assist them. Ariana, do what you must to accomplish the mission.”

PERFECT I wish there were more portrayals of him like this with regards to how he views his subordinates instead of just "generic misanthrope."

A young woman, bearing back-length purple hair and cold green eyes framed by glasses, carefully worked her way into the room, holding a cup of coffee on a saucer. She slowly and deliberately walked forward toward Giovanni’s desk, taking great care not to let her shaky hands spill the coffee on the red-and-purple material of her military-style dress. Eventually managing to reach her boss safely, she set the cup down before him.

Everything that is awesome about Matori's character in one gorgeously detailed paragraph.

Instead, he turned his chair around, giving himself a view through the huge window positioned behind his desk. His faithful Pokémon, Persian, walked up to his side and meowed, so Giovanni scratched the large, cream-colored cat under the chin, prompting him to purr contentedly.

Gotta have Persian in there somewhere.


“I’m keeping you two alive and this is what you repay me with?!!” Of course, Ghetsis actually did end up exploding. Slamming his cane into the ground over and over, he fumed, “I won’t be able to keep ahead of those small-minded, imperfect fools on the Sacred Helix at this rate! I must! I am a perfect being, the perfect ruler for a world that shall be shaped into perfection!”

Ghetsis's entire scene gave me chills but particularly this part. I can't imagine what Concordia and Anthea must be feeling in that cell.

“Split up,” Ghetsis spoke once he finally reopened his eyes. “Darkness, you and Pestilence go to the west, toward Goldenrod City. Send Chaos off to the east, in the direction of Violet City and Cherrygrove City. Find those two freaks no matter the cost!”

Clever naming.


The final scene between Nekou and Matt makes her even more mysterious- it's clear this is a lady who gets what she wants and looks out for those she cares for, and it's very clear she's very invested in Olivia. I think you added a great deal to her with that closing scene of your chapter, and added equal amounts to the stakes Matt faces. I think he's starting to realize that he eventually needs to let Olivia know exactly what's going on or he's going to really have her trust in him shaken in the end if she hears it from someone who's not him, or at least that's how I see it. I think Nekou's discussion with him was an important one to have and Matt is incredibly lucky to have received it because he really DOES need to check himself.

Also, I really love that you had her hiding two beers under the sheets, because of course she would.

Great work all around. I'm totally looking forward to your next chapter now.
 

Bay

YEAHHHHHHH
The first part I want to say real quick I like Jessie’s comment over them not needing to be held hands all the time. Nice moment for her there.

Over the battle, yay a rainfall one! XD I love Dahlia use of Psychic during the rainfall, though I predicted Matt will use it to make temporary hail.

“There’s got to be a way out of this,” Matt thought, even going as far as shutting his eyes to try to focus. “Come on, think of something!”
Not sure if you’re having Matt saying his thoughts aloud here, but going to assume so as you’re using quotation marks there. If that’s the case, already mention your repetition of having characters say their thoughts aloud too many times. :x Otherwise you can just italicize his thoughts.

Snickering, Nikola quickly shot a lightning bolt in a random direction and sustained the charge for several seconds. The electricity caught onto the raindrops at an exponential rate, and soon, the entire field was flooded by electrical energy.
Love the image of Nikola snickering. XD

The Water-and-Grass-type Pokémon muttered nervously and adjusted her sombrero while waiting for the air to clear.
And don’t know why, but thought that’s an adorable image, heh.

“Nikola, good job! That was exactly what I needed!” Though Matt’s praise of his Rotom was expressed in a confident-sounding voice, Matt was anything but confident at that point.
Minor, but the repetition of Matt’s name sounds a bit awkward. Replace the second Matt with “he” will easily fix that.

“So it comes down to this…” Having recalled Nikola, Matt stood rigidly in a way that caused his eye to be obscured by the shadow of his hat’s brim. “I’ve got to pin all my hopes on this last one after all… out of these three, he’s my newest Pokémon, but I’m not going to just let this go…” Whipping his head up, he sharply added, “I’m not letting this go because those who run cannot find the truth! Patrick, make your mark!!”
Er, yeah, have to point out Matt talking his thoughts aloud again (even Dahlia notices that, heh). :x

Onto the end of the battle, nice use of Pressure. Predicted Matt would win, but I admit to liking the idea of Patrick on Zapdos’ back, haha. Overall a fun and entertaining battle.

“You’re both wrong,” Giovanni intervened. “Jessie, James and Meowth failed me more times than I can remember. But, they have proven their worth through their actions during our operations in Unova. They are some of Team Rocket’s top operatives and I have full confidence in their ability to get the mission done. That said, however, I do not object to dispatching an Executive to assist them. Ariana, do what you must to accomplish the mission.”
Yay for continuity from the anime!

Like Nekusagi, I too like the conversation between Neku and Matt. Not surprised Neku relies on Matt just as much as Olivia does (meant it in a good way!)

Another enjoyable chapter there! Looking forward to more.
 

The Great Butler

Hush, keep it down
Excellent use of imagery there. I really love how vivid your description always is in your writing.

Thank you. I wanted to give a sort of painting-like image for that opening scene.

Pierce makes everything better always. Good work making Jessie the badass lady in charge she should be.

I'm starting to feel really comfortable writing them, finally. I think I found my groove with them.

This was a really cute scene and I think you have their priorities perfect as far as the three of them go. I get the impression they don't really like listening to anyone they're not used to working for and you showed this perfectly. You also did a really good job showing James and Meowth as bros to each other who have each other's backs.

'Cute' wasn't really what I was going for with the scene, but I won't fault you for taking that away. The fact that the three of them are sort of like their own little family in a way is an especially important part of who they are as characters, I think, so I wanted to get that across.

As for them not liking taking orders from Pierce, it just seemed like something that would work, so I did it.

Beautiful use of description there.

Does what it has to do, I think.

WOBBUFFET IN A TRENCHCOAT. That will not be obvious at all nothing can ever go wrong with this.

THERE IS NO WAY ANYTHING ABOUT THIS COULD POSSIBLY BE WRONG.

haha never change, Nekou.

She probably never will. XD;

I really enjoyed reading the announcer in this chapter and the vast amount of enthusiasm he has. His announcing during the big battle against Dahlia really did well to keep me in the action of the battle and make me feel like I was actually in a stadium full of cheering spectators, and he's very believable as an announcer.

I think having that little extra bit of in-universe narration definitely helps to move along the action and also to draw in the reader's interest a bit more.

Made me want to dance. Dahlia's definitely got the most thrilling introduction.

What I was going for there was to give Dahlia a completely over-the-top introduction to emphasize the showiness of the whole thing. Looks like I succeeded.

I get the feeling Dahlia's going to give him more than he bargained for.

Oh definitely.

I think this is an important part of Matt's personality and you show it well. He's not the best with crowds as you've shown before and that's a major challenge he has to overcome in this battle. I think the fact that Pokemon battles are about the trainer is often forgotten and there are definitely factors that can make a battle easier or harder for the trainer in question.

I actually almost forgot about this element until I remembered how I used it in The Victory Star of Fate. Now, I think I will keep working on it, now that it seems to be an element of his character that is going over well.

Dahlia's enthusiasm just makes me smile so much.

I really wanted to capture that essence, her character of being so excitable and intense yet confident.

Dahlia's motif of luck that she uses in all her speeches was something I really enjoyed, the difference between luck and chance with luck being something you make for yourself as opposed to chance. It really sets the tone for one of the major themes of this whole battle. I also really love how she uses her contest moves in battle because it makes an important point about how knowledge is important to a trainer.

And that ties into what I just said, about depicting Dahlia as knowledgeable and confident. She really knows the meaning of her facility well, and her intention is to impress that meaning into the challengers that she faces. I think that's something important that someone like a Frontier Brain should be doing.

Showing Olivia's reactions throughout the battle was a VERY important detail to show, because it not only shows how important Matt is to her but that Matt's not just battling for his own glory, he's doing this for those who trust him too. And I really love how both Matt and Olivia rely on each other to keep going. It's a really good dynamic to show in a situation like this.

Yes, you got that exactly right. That's exactly what those scenes were going for.

The way Matt exploits the weather conditions in this battle was really my favorite part. It's a strategy you don't normally see and the way he was able to take things he watched and translate them to help him out was really clever and enjoyable to see.

I think you'll like his battles, then. That's what he does - he thinks about things and tries to use what's available to him creatively.

I also thought it was important to show him taking advantage of what the battle condition offered him, because Dahlia is obviously not the only one able to use it.

The mental image of a snickering Rotom is adorable. Also, electrified raindrops is the greatest thing in ever.

Heh, yeah. Rotom is a troublemaker.

ohhhhhhhhhhhhhh ****.

Exactly the feeling you should have had there.

An important detail to note- in a way, Scald greatly equalized the playing field, so to speak. Dahlia had to finish her plans quickly because burning isn't a joke and any time Zapdos could have been wiped out completely.

Precisely. It was definitely the equalizer.

**** Ominous Wind. Seriously that move caused me so much grief in the games and when it comes out I assume bad things are about to go down.

And I didn't even have its secondary effect - boosting all stats - take effect!

The tension in this Zapdos battle scene was really well-handled, I think. Like the rest of the battle, I was constantly left guessing what would happen next, but this had the added tension of being the final round so it was even more important and anything could cause a sudden loss on either side.

That's a good analysis. I hadn't thought about the ramifications of it being the final match.

This is a really rough sequence of attacks and I kind of cringed when I realized there was a reason she was that specific.

I think that it could have been predicted - this technique was foreshadowed in the previous chapter by Dahlia using similar combinations while fighting Nando.

Matt's finishing combo of moves (Drain Punch+Earthquake) was really brutal and satisfying to see because of all the hurt Dahlia had put on him in the match, and overall I really enjoyed how action-packed and unpredictable this battle ended up being.

That's what it was going to come down to from the start, most likely - who could deliver the most forceful push over the line of defeat.

Wobbuffet closing TR's scene at the end of this battle really made it for me. You did really well capturing the spirit of them in the show with that bit.

I knew people would like the part with Wobbuffet. Myself, I like how well he still fits into their scenes even though their role is more serious here.


Get it while you can.

haha, I love how sassy Dahlia is.

I think it suits her.

I think this is an important warning for Matt and also a wake-up call of sorts- he's going to be in really deep when he challenges more of the frontier.

It makes for a good "oh ****" moment - after everything he had to do to defeat Dahlia, the other six are even stronger.

Nekou has her priorities in order. :D

Books and food. You bet she does.

I really enjoyed this bit in particular because it nicely captures what I love about a lot of the interactions between Giovanni and other Rockets, especially from earlier in the show, where everything is very official and foreboding and atmospheric, and the way you captured that interesting type of tension was very cool. I also love how Pierce and Zager are super official and formal and Ariana's just standing there.



More of that showing Gio as a thinker that I love oh so much.

I don't want to get preachy, but this is what I think Team Rocket really should be. They can work in humor, but the organization is still a major crime syndicate that is involved in some very deep things. Each one has their own defined role - Giovanni is almost like a businessman/CEO type who has to run Team Rocket like a corrupt corporation, Zager is someone who takes periodically weird science seriously, and Pierce is just a straight-laced secret agent.

Ariana, meanwhile, is pretty much the contrast to them. She's actually superior in rank to all of them but Giovanni, yet, she is the one who has the most casual attitude going about her job. Obviously I can't explain everything going on with every character now, but she has some more things coming that should give her more dimension, too.

to quote the same source material, "I understand that reference." Nice shout-out there.

I told you I'd do it. XD;

PERFECT I wish there were more portrayals of him like this with regards to how he views his subordinates instead of just "generic misanthrope."

Well, on one hand he does use his subordinates to advance his own agenda, but then again his agenda is Team Rocket's agenda too. I just think he appreciates the ones who are loyal and do a good job for him anyway.

Everything that is awesome about Matori's character in one gorgeously detailed paragraph.



Gotta have Persian in there somewhere.

Two things I can pretty much only say "yes" to.

Ghetsis's entire scene gave me chills but particularly this part. I can't imagine what Concordia and Anthea must be feeling in that cell.

That's if they can feel anything.

Clever naming.

I already told you, but for everyone else, explanation of the Shadow Triad's names.

Darkness, Pestilence and Chaos. Each one has a particular Pokemon, in order: Absol, Accelgor and Banette. Those three suit the names quite appropriately. Also, when some people suspected that the Striaton brothers were the Shadow Triad, After the name used when they battle you in B2W2 was revealed to be "Team Plasma Dark" (from Dark Trinity), it was proposed that there names were Dark(ness), Pestilence and Chaos - which have the same first letters as Dent, Pod and Corn, the brothers' Japanese names.


The final scene between Nekou and Matt makes her even more mysterious- it's clear this is a lady who gets what she wants and looks out for those she cares for, and it's very clear she's very invested in Olivia. I think you added a great deal to her with that closing scene of your chapter, and added equal amounts to the stakes Matt faces. I think he's starting to realize that he eventually needs to let Olivia know exactly what's going on or he's going to really have her trust in him shaken in the end if she hears it from someone who's not him, or at least that's how I see it. I think Nekou's discussion with him was an important one to have and Matt is incredibly lucky to have received it because he really DOES need to check himself.

Also, I really love that you had her hiding two beers under the sheets, because of course she would.

I see. I wanted that scene to be a deceptively-simple-but-surprisingly-complex look at her from several angles. She's completely violating his personal space, but she doesn't care, and she has a serious point she has to make with it. She's a character of seemingly conflicting traits and I wanted to capture some of that.

As for the beer cans... it's about easy access.

Great work all around. I'm totally looking forward to your next chapter now.

Thank you!

The first part I want to say real quick I like Jessie’s comment over them not needing to be held hands all the time. Nice moment for her there.

I wanted to capture some of their defiant attitude and overly-confident approach to things, and I think Jessie was the best to use to establish that.

Over the battle, yay a rainfall one! XD I love Dahlia use of Psychic during the rainfall, though I predicted Matt will use it to make temporary hail.

Good prediction skills, then. Both sides using the rain to their own advantage at times was another thing I felt important to show.

Not sure if you’re having Matt saying his thoughts aloud here, but going to assume so as you’re using quotation marks there. If that’s the case, already mention your repetition of having characters say their thoughts aloud too many times. :x Otherwise you can just italicize his thoughts.

It's internal dialogue he's thinking to himself, hence the quotation marks and italics together.

Love the image of Nikola snickering. XD

I think I may need to use this more often. XD;

And don’t know why, but thought that’s an adorable image, heh.

I took it from Ludicolo's animation in Colosseum and XD, actually. If you look closely, Ludicolo adjusts its hat as part of its animation after getting damaged.

Minor, but the repetition of Matt’s name sounds a bit awkward. Replace the second Matt with “he” will easily fix that.

You're right about that.

Er, yeah, have to point out Matt talking his thoughts aloud again (even Dahlia notices that, heh). :x

This time he actually was talking out loud to himself, but I'm not sure I totally understand what's wrong with that. Could you explain it more, please?

Onto the end of the battle, nice use of Pressure. Predicted Matt would win, but I admit to liking the idea of Patrick on Zapdos’ back, haha. Overall a fun and entertaining battle.

I decided to use Pressure because I wanted to use something that you don't see very often in battles within fics. I personally haven't seen much of abilities being used in such a way, so it was fun to do.

Yeah, sorry the outcome was a little predictable. I don't think I could have really helped it at this point.

Glad you liked the battle overall. I wanted it to be enjoyable and memorable.

Yay for continuity from the anime!

It's the best way to maintain the Trio's credibility, I think.

Like Nekusagi, I too like the conversation between Neku and Matt. Not surprised Neku relies on Matt just as much as Olivia does (meant it in a good way!)

Nekou meant it in more ways than one. There's a lot more to that scene than you might think...

Another enjoyable chapter there! Looking forward to more.

Thanks! You can bet there's going to be more.



I should put a note to everyone now, though: the next chapter is probably going to be quite long. It needs to cover a lot of material that can't easily be broken into two parts.
 
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Bay

YEAHHHHHHH
This time he actually was talking out loud to himself, but I'm not sure I totally understand what's wrong with that. Could you explain it more, please?
My last review I already explained how you have the characters say aloud their thoughts and plans during the battle and not through narration. I know the anime does that several times, but if I were in a Pokemon battle in real life I wouldn't say my every feelings and such aloud. You should take advantage of the emotions more through narrative to make it more show and not tell. That's probably just me though. Hope this makes sense. D:
 
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Have to say, this was a pretty decent chapter.

Matt VS Dahlia, being the meat of the chapter, was handled pretty well, having a good amount of action and interesting tactics. The group's interactions are just as fun as ever, including Dante. Speaking of which...

While Nekou and Olivia were exchanging comments on Matt, Bunny happened to glance over to her other side. She spotted Dante sitting rigidly in the next seat, staring intently at the battle as if he was intending to memorize every single detail of it. At first disturbed by this, she quickly brushed it off and decided to pay it no mind.

Not a good idea, Bunny. Not a good idea in the least...

Anyway...

Gee, why am I not surprised that Ghetsis is plotting world domination AGAIN? Some people just don't learn, I guess. I do eagerly anticipate N's arrival on the scene, however.

And now, some obligatory quotations:

“Now, Patrick!” Matt shut his eyes as he held up his arm. He did not want to see what was about to happen. “Hit it head-on with Drain Punch!”

Showing more courage than his trainer, Patrick fearlessly faced the raging inferno that bore down on him. He didn’t expect to inflict much harm either, but he intended to come out having done something to help. With perfect timing, he swung his fist just perfectly to connect with Zapdos’s beak.

Zapdos’s frenzied attack was the one that won out, easily overwhelming Patrick. His Drain Punch, however, caused the Drill Peck/Heat Wave/Thunderbolt combination to go off target, and it instead mowed the Seismitoad down at his feet and pushed him down onto the Legendary Pokémon’s back.

A combination of Zapdos’s pained, frustrated squawks and the explosion of noise from the audience forced Matt to open his eyes and see what was going on – Zapdos flittering around the arena in a panic, trying to get Patrick off of its back.

“Now I’ve seen ****ing everything…” he thought, unable to form words for a minute due to the sheer shock of what had happened and what he’d seen.

Patrick is awesome. Enough said.

“Sorry, please forgive me. I’m just glad I managed to catch up with you.” Straightening up, the man smoothed out his suit and straightened his yellow tie, giving himself a much more professional look. He offered his hand to Matt, saying, “That was rude of me. Please allow me to introduce myself. The name’s Dominic.”

“Well met, then.” Seeing no reason to turn down the courtesy Dominic was showing him, Matt took the man’s hand for a firm handshake.

“That’s quite the handshake,” Dominic immediately pointed out. Noticing the confused looks that greeted this rather odd proclamation, he hurried to explain, “I’m a salesman for the Angel Corporation, you see, so in my line of work a good handshake goes a long way. Anyway, I hope I’m not intruding too much, but when I saw you here, Mr. Chiaki, I had to give approaching and asking you a shot.”

“Ask me what?” Matt found himself less bothered by Dominic’s presence than his seeming inability to actually get to the point. Nekou was standing just behind him and giving Dominic an exaggerated death stare, but Matt was completely unaware of this.

“Will you be going to Violet City?”

“Wait, that’s it?” The sheer simplicity of the question caught Matt completely off guard, and he did not have an answer ready.

“Of course!” Olivia immediately cut in. “That’s where my first Gym is!”

“But why would you want to know?” A hint of suspicion flavored Nekou’s inquiry. Harboring a dislike for not knowing what was happening, she felt uncomfortably on edge.

“I said I was a salesman, well, I’m actually a traveling salesman. I’m asking about Violet City because my son and two daughters are attending Earl’s Pokémon Academy there for a while, and after seeing you battle, I’d really appreciate it if you could meet them.”

I think I'm going to end up being suspicious of just about everyone who walks up to Matt and co., Dominic included. Especially if they, like him, are connected in some way to Angel Corp/Polaris.

“Split up,” Ghetsis spoke once he finally reopened his eyes. “Darkness, you and Pestilence go to the west, toward Goldenrod City. Send Chaos off to the east, in the direction of Violet City and Cherrygrove City. Find those two freaks no matter the cost!”

I know you've already explained your reasoning for the naming convention of the Shadow Triad, but I still find it interesting (and fitting) that their names are like the kind used by the Horsemen of the Apocalypse.

“Now that’s the Matt I knew was in there.” Nekou moved over to the bed she was sleeping in and reached into the rumpled sheets, pulling out two cans of beer; she tossed one to Matt then opened the other. “That’s for you. Let’s celebrate a little, alright?”

I suppose it was only a matter of time before this happened...


Everyone--Team Rocket and Polaris--is setting up for their plans down the road. Olivia's going to be challenging the Violet City Gym. Ghetsis is being a piece of crap. Everything comes together to form an awesome package.

Can't wait to see how this all unfolds. :)
 

The Great Butler

Hush, keep it down
Have to say, this was a pretty decent chapter.

Thank you!

Matt VS Dahlia, being the meat of the chapter, was handled pretty well, having a good amount of action and interesting tactics.

I hope to have more battles like it going forward. But, on the other hand, there has to be a diversity in how the battles go out, so I'll have to live up to the challenge of having a lot of different ideas up my sleeve.

The group's interactions are just as fun as ever, including Dante. Speaking of which...

Not a good idea, Bunny. Not a good idea in the least...

Hey, he just really gets into watching battles. Nothing wrong with that, right?

I'm satisfied to see that you still like the group dynamic at play here. Now that the first major battle plot has passed, I'd like to bring group relations more into focus again for a while.

Anyway...

Gee, why am I not surprised that Ghetsis is plotting world domination AGAIN? Some people just don't learn, I guess. I do eagerly anticipate N's arrival on the scene, however.

It's a little more complicated than that, but as for what it is he wants... we'll have to wait and see.

And now, some obligatory quotations:

Patrick is awesome. Enough said.

A lot of that turn of events was luck, in accordance with the theme of the fight, but yeah, he is pretty awesome. I wanted to give a Seismitoad a chance to shine.

I think I'm going to end up being suspicious of just about everyone who walks up to Matt and co., Dominic included. Especially if they, like him, are connected in some way to Angel Corp/Polaris.

That's something you're going to have to look at future events to decide.

I know you've already explained your reasoning for the naming convention of the Shadow Triad, but I still find it interesting (and fitting) that their names are like the kind used by the Horsemen of the Apocalypse.

To be honest, that part of it actually slipped my mind until it was pointed out to me.

I suppose it was only a matter of time before this happened...

I think I know where your mind is going, and the next chapter is going to show you it didn't go there.

Everyone--Team Rocket and Polaris--is setting up for their plans down the road. Olivia's going to be challenging the Violet City Gym. Ghetsis is being a piece of crap. Everything comes together to form an awesome package.

Can't wait to see how this all unfolds. :)

Thanks for all of your points. I'm very happy that you're enjoying the story so far.

Oh, here's something I'll toss out there: something is going to happen involving Team Rocket in the next chapter. They're not going to be on the sidelines anymore.
 

The Great Butler

Hush, keep it down
There’s going to be some violent content in this chapter. Nothing too intense, but I’d rather be more cautious than I have to be instead of not cautious enough. Also, language.

-:-

CHAPTER 6: Transcending Humanity

-:-

Matt and Nekou had spent a small amount of time talking over the beer she shared with him the previous night. Somehow, it was actually a worthwhile discussion – they spoke of Olivia’s well-being for a while, then started talking about books they liked. The alcohol took its toll on Matt, though, and he soon felt tired. It was not long after that that he simply fell asleep.

On the upside, though, he slept well and felt completely reinvigorated the next day. As he had finished eating well before the others had even all gotten up, he separated from them and left the Pokémon Center to await them at the gateway to Route 30. The bright morning sun cast golden light over the flowing grass stretching out beyond the borders of Cherrygrove City; it also warmed the earthy red leaves of the autumn trees surrounding the route.

He had a wait of about forty minutes before Nekou arrived with Olivia, Bunny and Dante in tow. Even when he knew they were behind him, however, he did not immediately turn around.

“Matt, I think you better see this…” Judging from her voice, something had clearly disturbed Bunny.

“What happened?” he wondered, taking his time to turn around.

The answer didn’t come immediately to him. He glanced over the four of them; the flamboyant young woman, his conservatively-dressed friend and her outlandish counterpart, and the elderly scientist wearing a brown coat and holding a briefcase in his hand. All of them merely stood before Matt and stared back as he tried to figure out what was wrong.

It didn’t take long for the truth to hit him like a speeding truck.

Olivia was standing there like the others.

“Olivia, your leg!” Matt exclaimed, adjusting his glasses in disbelief. “How are you standing there like that without your crutches?”

“I guess it just got better during the night,” Olivia answered with a shrug. “It was feeling a little better yesterday, and when I got up this morning, I could walk again.”

“It is atypical for someone to recover from an injury that quickly,” Dante stated. He hesitated briefly before adding, “But I’m sure you already knew that. The Pokémon Center nurse and I took her cast off before we came out here. I’m not sure why she recovered so quickly, but I’m sure there must be a reason.”

“Don’t look a gift horse in the mouth, I say. Maybe she wasn’t injured as badly as we all thought. What do you think of that?”

Olivia smiled when Nekou patted her on the head, and in response to the question Nekou posed, she said, “You might be right, I guess. I’m not concerned about it.”

Though he wanted to accept Olivia’s decision, second thoughts clouded Matt’s mind. He stood still, unable to rid himself of a lingering concern that something just couldn’t possibly be right about Olivia’s miraculous recovery. To force it out of his head, he finally turned back around to face what he had been looking at.

“And I’ve got something to show you,” he declared, spreading his arms wide. “Take a look at this!”

Sitting just off the road, a robotic vehicle the size of a large truck greeted the eyes of Matt’s companions. Sleek in both its aerodynamic shape and primarily black coloration, it cut the figure of something out of a science fiction movie.

Nekou drew in a stunned breath, clearly impressed by what she was seeing. “That’s... you built this?”

“That is not the same one you had when we worked together years ago,” Bunny swiftly pointed out. “What happened to the old one?”

“For those of you who don’t already know,” Matt answered, “this is the HR-E second version, or HR-E 2 for short. The original HR-E was destroyed five years ago when its electronics got fried by an EMP and then it got blown up.”

“What… what is it, exactly?”

Matt nodded to acknowledge Dante’s question, as he clearly recognized the confusion present in the old man’s mind. “To put it simply, it’s a mobile home and a laboratory at the same time. I designed the original version using everything my robotics teacher taught me so I could use it to travel around and do field research. For this new version, I simply streamlined the old plans for the original. So what do you think? It can serve as a place to stay if we ever need such a thing, and I can call it to me no matter where we are!”

“I’m in.” As she responded almost instantly upon Matt finishing, Olivia was the first to get in her thoughts. “The old one that my dad, my mom and I stayed in was great, and the new build is even better.”

“I’ve got to agree,” Bunny concurred. “I don’t mind fieldwork, obviously, but if I have somewhere comfortable to sleep, I’ll take it.”

“I have to,” Dante added with a quick cough. “These old bones aren’t getting any younger.”

“We’re all on the same page then.” Smiling, Matt pointed directly down the road. “Route 30 awaits us, and beyond that Violet City, so let’s get going.”

-:-

At that same time, somewhere far away, Finansielle was meeting with Jeunes and Getriebe. The video screen displaying her armor-covered shoulders, head and face was so outsized that it allowed her to lord over the sterile, metallic laboratory where the two male Polaris members were.

“The correct solution is just eluding us, Finansielle,” Getriebe explained in a bored-sounding, monotonous voice. “We haven’t been able to find the genetic key that will make the Pokérus take the form we want.”

“But everything else is going exactly according to plan,” Jeunes made sure to hastily add, all while pushing up his Mewtwo mask to push up the glasses held underneath. “The gathering of battle data has gone smoothly. We’re tracking the Meteonite right now, and we have several teams ready to go to secure it, which I intend to personally lead. Getting back to the Pokérus for a moment, though, we have managed to find the way to trigger a transformation in its genetic makeup. We just don’t know how to get it to mutate into what we want yet.”

“I’m rather disappointed that I put so much investment into your research only for the most important answer to remain elusive.” Finansielle’s stinging criticism of their work prompted Getriebe – who was younger and wearing a helix-patterned suit along with his Electivire-themed helmet and mask – to shift his weight uncomfortably from one leg to the other. “It’s not that we don’t have a use for you any longer, though. Jeunes, what you should be doing is overseeing the collection of the Meteonite.”

“It will get done, I swear it. The final stage of our search is not far off.”

“Good. And Getriebe, your role is to continue gathering the battle data necessary for when we have the modified Pokérus and the equipment to harness it ready.”

“Of course, Finansielle,” Getriebe said while leaning forward into a seemingly forced bow. “My Purine Base serves that exact purpose…”

“Very well. I’m confident you’ll have good news for us all at the next meeting of the Sacred Helix. As for me, I am currently heading to the Adenosine Base. I’m calling in an expert on Pokémon strength to analyze the existing research and help fill in the missing gaps. He’s arriving there via helicopter sometime soon and I’m on my way to greet him. We’re now one step closer to our promised world…”

-:-

“Drowzee, use Pound!”

Further up the lightly wooded road of Route 30, Renzo and his Drowzee were engaged in a battle against a wild Pokémon while three younger children watched from the sidelines. The Pokémon – a fluffy, round, white ball of cotton – used a pair of green leaf-like appendages to flutter out of Drowzee’s grasp, making it hard for the Psychic-type to land a hit.

After escaping several times, the Pokémon flicked her arms to toss several sharp-edged leaves as a counterattack. Much to Renzo’s annoyance, Drowzee was too slow to escape from the wild Pokémon’s Razor Leaf, leaving his body riddled with cuts. Behind his mouth-obscuring scarf, Renzo clenched his teeth.

“I will not fail to capture you, Cottonee! Drowzee, take a ranged approach this time. Psycho Cut!”

Jumping back, Drowzee quickly slashed the air in front of himself using his right arm, flinging a purple-hued blade of psychic energy directly into his opponent. The Cottonee crumpled beneath the crushing force Drowzee’s Psycho Cut carried, the wide gash across her face still faintly glowing from the residue of what created it.

“You’re mine now! Go, Poké Ball!”

Renzo pulled a red-and-white sphere from the inner part of his tattered poncho and threw it at the Pokémon he’d just finished fighting. The Poké Ball cracked open upon hitting Cottonee’s body, allowing its inner technology to convert the Pokémon into energy before pulling her in. It then sealed up and fell to the ground, where before the eyes of Renzo and his Psychic-type, it rocked and shuddered.

“Come on...” the ragged trainer thought to himself. “I can’t afford any more Poké Balls…”

He didn’t need to worry, however, as almost immediately after he finished that thought, the Poké Ball became still and gave off a pinging sound, indicating a successful capture. Renzo’s attitude quickly changed; he excitedly ran over to where the Poké Ball lay on the ground and picked it up, while the more lethargic Drowzee simply ambled up alongside his trainer.

“Wow, great job!” called one of the children, a bright-eyed girl whose brown hair hung in a side-tied ponytail.

“Yes, thank you…” Renzo replied, before cracking the Poké Ball in his hand open once more. The Cottonee, her body visibly bruised in several places, materialized from its confines and almost immediately shrank back upon seeing Renzo and his Drowzee. “Now, now, you don’t have to be afraid, Cottonee. We’re not going to hurt you. Please, forgive us for doing what we had to.”

Lowering himself so he wound not appear as intimidating to the small Pokémon, Renzo extended a hand and waited as Cottonee nervously examined it. It took a bit of time, but Renzo’s newly-caught Pokémon did eventually decide that the situation was safe, at which point she hopped up into his hand and allowed him to hold her.

“There you go,” he said in an attempt to further comfort her, “nothing to be afraid of.”

“Mister Renzo, outsiders!” one of the two male children suddenly cried.

“Hmph. I would wager that I can guess who.” Slowly turning around, Renzo came to face Matt, Olivia, Nekou, Bunny and Dante, who had arrived in the pass just after Cottonee was captured. His guess having evidently been right, he sighed and said, “So the usurper and her followers return, with a new addition, no less. Listen, I will not be persuaded away from my goals, no matter how large your group becomes!”

“We’re not interested in you,” Matt attempted to argue while adjusting his glasses in exasperation. “We just want to go to Violet City.”

“That Pokémon in your arms,” Olivia observed, pointing straight at Cottonee. “I’ve never seen it before.”

“Cottonee, the Cotton Puff Pokémon,” her Pokédex stated once she took it out. “Perhaps because they feel more at ease in a group, they stick to others they find. They end up looking like a cloud.”

“I would say that your little invader is plenty interested in me, thank you very much. Actually, come to think of it, we have a bit of a score to settle from New Bark Town, do we not? Olivia, I challenge you!”

“Bring it on!” Olivia immediately shot back, without even taking a moment to think. “I beat you once and I’ll do it again!”

“You go for it, Olivia!” Nekou encouraged. “Put him in his place!”

“Ha! Fat chance!” The boy from earlier, who was clothed in a red t-shirt and denim shorts, was starting to walk over in Renzo’s direction. “Renzo beat all three of us without breaking a sweat. He’ll make quick work of you, too!”

“Please, do not interfere.” Renzo’s request prompted the bold-tempered boy to stand down. “This is a burden I must bear alone, teaching this undeserving swine her place in the world.”

“Don’t you think that’s a little cruel?” By the scowl on her face, Bunny was clearly bothered by Renzo’s names for Olivia. “The way you talk, you make it sound like Olivia killed your mother or something.”

Renzo flinched, but quickly recovered. “Olivia, I will not be using this Cottonee against you. I just captured it, and it is not in prime health for battling. Neither will I be using my Drowzee, who is tired from battling Cottonee. I have prepared a Pokémon specifically for my next meeting with you, and now it is time for you to meet that Pokémon.”

“Like I said, bring it on! I’m not afraid of you!”

“You should be.” With Cottonee, Drowzee and the three children looking on, Renzo drew out another Poké Ball from his poncho and silently threw it.

From that Poké Ball emerged a muscular Pokémon whose gray body was covered in pink veins bursting from his skin. His lumpy head, round red nose and the iron beam he held alongside himself offered Olivia the only hints to his identity.

“That must be…” she gasped, quickly taking out her Pokédex once more.

“Gurdurr, the Muscular Pokémon. Evolved form of Timburr. With strengthened bodies, they skillfully wield steel beams to take down buildings.”

“So you evolved it, big deal.” Though Olivia was putting up a tough front, she had an increasing feeling of dread developing in her mind. Gurdurr was much more intimidating in appearance than Timburr was, and she knew that evolution would bring the Pokémon even more strength than he had before. “I won’t be afraid. Oshawott, let’s play!”

Olivia’s Water-type Pokémon appeared on the path in a burst of bright light. He did not notice his soon-to-be-foe right away; instead, he started playing with the shell on his stomach by turning it to different angles. Once he finally did notice Gurdurr standing over him, though, he quickly became serious. Like his trainer, he was nervous to be facing the menacing Gurdurr, but he had resolved to prove his worth to Olivia.

“Are you going to try to take a stand here?” Renzo taunted, extending his right arm and gesturing to dare Olivia to attack. “Throw everything you’ve got at me! This time is going to be different!”

“You’re going to regret saying that! Oshawott, Water Gun!”

“That’s it? Gurdurr!”

Drawing in a deep breath, Oshawott spit a stream of water from his mouth, aimed squarely at his opponent’s chest.

Gurdurr remained unfazed, however. He picked up his metal beam with dexterity that betrayed how thick and unwieldy his arms were, then began spinning it in circles in front of himself, creating a shield. Oshawott’s Water Gun bounced harmlessly off the beam, accomplishing nothing.

“Evolution really made that Gurdurr stronger,” Matt commented, a cold feeling running down his spine.

“It’s a natural trait of the evolution family of Timburr,” Dante explained. “As it goes through its evolutionary stages, a Timburr gains more and more skill in using its chosen weapons. This Gurdurr’s shield technique, though… it’s impressive.”

“Alright, now give her a taste of what you can do offensively, Gurdurr. Drain Punch!”

In order to give himself more mobility, after he was finished using the iron beam as a shield Gurdurr stuck it firmly into the ground. He then lunged at Oshawott with his right fist pulled back and enveloped in a red glow.

Oshawott held up his shell in a feeble attempt to shield himself from the terrifying Fighting-type Pokémon bearing down on him, but it made no difference. The shell was no match for the force of Gurdurr’s fist, which shattered it into pieces before striking Oshawott directly in the stomach, sending him rolling back through the dirt. Oshawott was hit so hard that he dug a trail into the path as he skidded to a stop.

“Oh no, Oshawott!” Olivia cried out, her earlier feelings of dread now manifesting as sadness and fear for Oshawott’s safety. She was planning to call him back, and even had taken out his Poké Ball, but he struggled to his feet.

“Osha! Osha!” Though his voice was shaky, Oshawott’s message was clear – he wanted to continue, no matter the cost.

Unfortunately, Olivia and her supporters were not the only ones who understood this message. Renzo picked it up, too, and he nodded his head slowly. “Your Pokémon is a foolhardy one who knows not when to quit... kind of like you, usurper. Gurdurr, teach it a lesson. Mach Punch!”

In a flash, Gurdurr was towering over Oshawott once more, and without facing any resistance, he used a blazingly fast punch to slam Oshawott into the ground.

This time, when Gurdurr pulled his fist back, Oshawott did not rise again. He lay unconscious in the hole smashed open by the sheer force of the blow.

“No!”

“Olivia, send Oshawott back!” Bunny shouted with her hands cupped around her mouth, unable to bear seeing Olivia’s Pokémon suffer. “This isn’t worth it!”

Silently, Olivia followed Bunny’s advice, calling Oshawott back to the safety of his Poké Ball. Instead of backing down, however, she armed herself with another sphere. “I won’t be afraid…” she said out loud, seemingly addressing her own nerves. “Minccino, let’s play!”

Once he saw Minccino emerge from Olivia’s second Poké Ball, Renzo scoffed. “You bank your hopes on the power of love? That’s all you’ve got with that weak little thing against Gurdurr. Well, let me tell you right now, the power of love is a lie! I’ll prove it to you right now! Gurdurr, attack with Drain Punch!”

“Minccino, counter that using Aqua Tail!”

Both Minccino and Gurdurr let out battle cries and jumped at each other, Minccino somersaulting through the air and Gurdurr with his fist pulled back. Minccino’s tail, which had taken on a blue glow, met Gurdurr’s fist with explosive results; the blast threw both Pokémon onto their backs.

“Don’t let up, Minccino! Keep the pressure on it! Tail Slap!”

Olivia had already honed in on one of Gurdurr’s weaknesses – outside of Mach Punch, he was not very swift. This weakness affected his recovery from the collision of Aqua Tail and Drain Punch, as he was struggling to stand back up. Taking advantage of this, Minccino rushed in and spun, enabling her to use her tail as a whip, striking Gurdurr’s body four times. Each hit elicited a low, pained groan from the thick-bodied Fighting-type.

From the sidelines, Matt smiled. He was proud to see Olivia taking charge as much as she was.

“That will not get you what you want. Wake-Up Slap, now!”

Minccino was not out of Gurdurr’s reach just yet, and he took full advantage of that to strike back with a vengeance. He swept his arm across the space before him, smacking Minccino with a sharp slap.

“Ciiiinooo!!” cried the tiny Normal-type. By the time she landed at her trainer’s feet, Minccino was completely unconscious as a result of Gurdurr’s extremely effective hit.

“Minccino…” Olivia was beginning to become numb. Watching Oshawott fall in defeat quickly was hard enough for her to accept, but to watch the same fate befall her beloved Minccino affected her on a deeper level. She no longer could clearly visualize her surroundings beyond the battle, nor could she even hear Nekou yelling to her. She simply recalled Minccino and got the next Poké Ball ready. “Roselia, let’s play!”

Gurdurr immediately locked eyes with Olivia’s Roselia when she was freed from her ball, and Roselia returned the gesture. Memories of New Bark Town flashed between them. Back then it had been Roselia that defeated Gurdurr, when he was still a Timburr prior to his evolution. He’d never let go of that defeat, and seeing Roselia again sent rage flowing through every bit of his body. It took all the restraint he could muster to remain in control and stop himself from attacking without orders.

“Roselia, Sludge Bomb! Let’s try to get in a good hit!”

“Gurdurr, you know what you must do.”

The bursts of slime Roselia fired from her flowers never reached their target, as once again, Gurdurr spun his metal beam to shield himself. Once the poison dispersed in clouds of smoke, Gurdurr tensed his muscles in preparation for his next command.

“Now, Gurdurr, Rock Slide!” To give his order some force, Renzo thrust his arm straight up, briefly tossing his ragged poncho open.

Once again, Gurdurr planted his beam in the ground, but this time he climbed atop it. From his perch, he focused all the rage he felt toward Roselia and raised his arms into the air, roaring a battle cry across the field. His power caused an energy field to open over Roselia and drop large rocks onto her, crushing the leaves on her body.

By this point, Olivia had long since realized that this battle was a lost cause, but something in her refused to allow her to quit. Taking what few openings she had left, she yelled, “Quick, Energy Ball!”

“Rock Slide, once more!”

The sparking green orb Roselia produced using what nature-based power she could draw upon while partially buried missed hitting Gurdurr, but it did cut down the iron beam, leaving the metal’s owner to fall to the ground. However, before he hit the dirt, Gurdurr triggered another Rock Slide, adding enough pressure on top of Roselia to force her to faint.

“**** this!” Nekou screeched, still trying to get through to Olivia. “Olivia, there’s no shame in throwing in the towel! This isn’t worth it anymore!”

“You stay out of this!” Renzo angrily shouted over her. “This battle is between me and Olivia! This is my score to settle and I will not let you interrupt it!”

Ignoring Renzo’s ranting, Matt loudly said, “I agree with Nekou. There’s no need to go further!”

All of it was in vain. Olivia was too broken by watching Oshawott, Minccino and Roselia go down easily, and she could not just let the battle go. She’d already called Roselia back and sent out Lillipup, who shrank before the intimidating gaze of Gurdurr.

“Is that all you’ve got left?” Renzo furthered his grandstanding by throwing his head back and spreading his arms. “Don’t bother lying, I can tell you don’t have any more Pokémon. I can see it in your face. That look of sheer despair when there’s no option left but to give up… it’s something I’m too familiar with, so I’ve learned to tell when I’m looking at it. So… shall we get on with finishing this once and for all, usurper? Gurdurr, Drain Punch!”

Olivia couldn’t even give Lillipup a direction with how numb she was. He was left with no other choice but to watch in terror as the slow moving but immensely powerful Gurdurr bore down on him.

“Enough. Kangaskhan, Sucker Punch.”

Suddenly, Gurdurr’s path to Lillipup was cut off by a Kangaskhan appearing between them. She swung and punched the Fighting-type, not hurting him much but knocking him back and stopping him from attacking Lillipup.

“What?!” Renzo stomped his foot into the ground in rage over having been interrupted. “Who did that? Was it you, *****?!” he screamed as he pointed at Nekou.

“You would know if it was me, kid. And ‘*****?’ You wish that was the worst name I’ve been called.”

“It was I.”

To the surprise of all the people gathered on the road, a tall, lithe young man jumped from the bushes to stand in the middle of the battle. His windbreaker jacket – designed with a checkerboard pattern over half-black, half-white coloring – fit loosely on his thin frame, while his long green hair flowed into a ponytail against his back from beneath his similarly-colored baseball cap.

“And who are you, freak?!” Knowing the intruder’s face didn’t placate Renzo’s rage at all. In fact, it made him even more angry.

“Fighting so brutally against Pokémon weaker than your own… it isn’t right…” As he spoke, the young man made strange gestures with his hands, as if he were manipulating something in the air before him. “Kangaskhan, Mega Punch.”

“It’s just a Normal-type, Gurdurr! Get that thing out of my way! Drain Punch!”

Gurdurr and the mysterious trainer’s Kangaskhan each swung their respective right fists toward each other, but when the two met, Gurdurr’s effort was easily overpowered. Kangaskhan managed to land a bruising blow directly on Gurdurr’s body, injuring him critically. Unable to believe what he was seeing, Renzo could do nothing but watch as his Pokémon crumpled to the ground before its mighty new foe.

Kangaskhan kept growling at Gurdurr, but she stopped when her trainer put his hand on her side as an indication to stand down. The trainer then walked over to Gurdurr and lowered himself onto his knees.

“What are you doing?!” Renzo raged as the young man placed his hands upon Gurdurr’s body. “Get off of my Pokémon!”

Ignoring Renzo, the trainer closed his eyes and said quietly, “Transcend the confines of time and space...”

Matt’s group, the three children and Renzo all looked on in varying degrees of surprise. They were watching a soft green light envelop Gurdurr and seemingly heal the visible wound he’d received. None of the observers to this was more shocked than Matt, though.

“He’s using that power, I know it!” Matt thought, his eyes wide. “It’s almost the same as hers!”

A moment later, the light faded, leaving the fully healed Gurdurr completely visible. Both the Pokémon and the trainer who healed him rose to their full heights, with the trainer walking back in Olivia’s direction while Gurdurr retreated to Renzo’s side.

“Just who are you?” Renzo demanded. “Who the hell do you think you are?!”

“So ungrateful, but I forgive you…” The strange young trainer continued gesturing strangely as he spoke, moving his hands and arms in wide, sweeping gestures. “My name is Nikolai, and I am a trainer… well, that’s not quite right. I am searching… for trainers and Pokémon who get along as equals. Where will you go from our meeting?”

“Not that I owe you any answer,” Renzo replied with a scoff, “but I am going to traverse Dark Cave and the mountains of Route 45 beyond. My goal is Blackthorn City, where I will get a Dratini no matter what I must do.”

“Why Dratini?” Bunny questioned. “I get that it’s rare, but you seem like you have a deeper reason.”

“Dragonite was her favorite…”

Without saying anything further, Renzo wandered off with his Pokémon. heading north on the road. The others who remained had little time to ponder his bizarre behavior, as Nikolai next approached Olivia.

“Please allow me to see your Pokémon…”

“Um…”

“We’re here, Olivia,” Matt said in an attempt to reassure her, not noticing that Dante and Nekou both had stepped back to coldly observe things. “I… I think he’s trustworthy. He did protect you from Gurdurr…”

“You’re right.”

Her concerns soothed, Olivia quickly released her severely weakened Minccino, Roselia and Oshawott once more. They joined Lillipup, who had been hiding behind Olivia’s legs for some time, only coming out once the other Pokémon were present.

“Thank you,” Nikolai spoke in a voice that was almost whispering, as he once again knelt down. “You have a fine collection of Pokémon… Now, transcend the confines of time and space…”

Nikolai spread his hands over Olivia’s four Pokémon, and the same green light that healed Renzo’s Gurdurr engulfed them. Before anyone knew it, Oshawott, Roselia and Minccino were completely healed. Several stunned pairs of eyes rested squarely on Nikolai as he stood back up.

“Your Pokémon spoke to me, Olivia... Oshawott says he wants to impress you and make you proud of him… Roselia and Minccino love being with you... Lillipup is scared of the big Pokémon but wants to get stronger…”

“Wait, just what is it you’re saying?” Dante questioned, abruptly dropping back into the exchange. “You can talk to Pokémon?”

“It’s the power of Transcendence,” Matt explained, earning a nod of agreement from Bunny, who was the only other one that knew what he was talking about.

“How do you know about my power…?” Nikolai’s gaze was strangely pitched, as if he was looking over Matt’s shoulder to some object far away.

“Because I used to know someone who had that power.” Reaching into his coat, Matt took out a pocketwatch, which he opened. Inside was a second cover, and on that second cover was a painting. It depicted a young woman, wearing white priestess clothing and her brown hair styled into three buns, whose face was distinguished by thick eyebrows above a pair of fierce, powerful blue eyes. Matt spent a moment looking at the painting, allowing himself the memories and regrets it brought to mind, before he spoke again. “Sheena was her name. She had the power of Transcendence like you, except she could only link with the hearts of people and Pokémon, not heal them like you do.”

“I see… there aren’t many others like me. I want to use my power to… encourage humans and Pokémon to live together in harmony. This is all I can think of… please allow me to meet the Pokémon each of you possess.”

“Why would you want to do that?” Nekou interrogated, her voice carrying more than a hint of suspicion over Nikolai’s motives.

When Nikolai answered not by speaking but by merely staring at the ground, Matt decided to pick up the slack for him. “He healed both that Gurdurr and all of Olivia’s Pokémon when he didn’t have to, and quite honestly, I don’t think someone with powers like Sheena’s can be all that bad. I’ll go first.”

While Matt took care in sending out each of his six Pokémon one at a time, there was more going on than any of them were aware of. Hiding in the woods and still following Matt’s group, Jessie, James and Meowth had been spying on the entire scene with their equipment and turned to each other in a panic.

“What is he doing here?” Jessie demanded of the others. “We already knew about Ghetsis but this is something nobody said anything about!”

“Team Plasma is more connected with this than we were ever told,” James said in agreement.

“And if those crazy knights are mixed up with what’s going down with Polaris, things might be about to get really bad.” After seizing the R-Pad from James, Meowth touched an icon on its screen that allowed access to videos. “That contingency plan Ariana and the doctor came up with might be just what we need now.”

Out on the road, Nikolai seemed to have a childlike sense of wonder as he examined Matt’s six Pokémon, the light of his power emanating from his outstretched hands all the while. He had quickly gravitated towards Matt’s Heatran, as he was aware of the kind of stories told about the stout-bodied Fire-and-Steel-type. Next, he moved on to Matt’s Sigilyph and Golurk, and the brightly-colored, three-eyed bird and towering golem both appeared more than happy to interact with him. The same could also be said about his Salamence and Beartic, but his final Pokémon – an eel whose blue body had three yellow dots on each side – visibly vexed him.

Meanwhile, while Nikolai was carrying on his conversations with Matt’s Pokémon, the third of the children approached Olivia. Unlike the first two, who were rather excitable, the bowl-cut-wearing boy conducted himself very timidly as he looked up at her with wide, green eyes.

“Um... you have an Oshawott, and a Pokédex…”

“So?” Whatever the boy was trying to get at, Olivia wasn’t understanding it. “Besides it being Oshawott instead of Chikorita, Cyndaquil or Totodile, what’s the big deal?”

“That scary guy on the television keeps telling us that trainers who have starter Pokémon and Pokédexes are the reason why trainers like my friends and I never get anywhere…”

“Do you mean Ghetsis?” Nekou interrupted. When the boy nodded, she asked him, “What do you mean when you say that you and your friends never get anywhere?”

“None of us have starter Pokémon. I just have my Taillow, while Julia has her Sandshrew and Ronald has his Marill. The three of us have been trying to make it to Violet City for weeks, but stronger trainers keep coming and beating us, and we don’t have enough money for medicine or the Pokémon Center…”

Having listened intently to the boy’s story, Nekou decided to give them help. She immediately looked up and called, “Matt!”

“What?” He had been watching Nikolai with his Pokémon, and as a result he was not paying attention to Olivia or the children.

“Call HR-E here. These kids are in desperate need of some supplies.”

“Hm?” Nekou’s request was so sudden that it took Matt several seconds to fully process exactly what it was she wanted. Once he fully grasped it, though, he reached up to his mask and pressed a tiny button located just under the eyepiece. “It’ll be here in a little while. What’d I miss?”

“Ghetsis has been giving speeches claiming that trainers with starter Pokémon and Pokédexes keep trainers without those things from succeeding. I think this might be a little more serious than just the typical dime a dozen television snake oil salesman.”

“Isn’t Pokémon training supposed to be about making it your own way, no matter which way you choose?” Olivia wondered out loud. “The idea of one group of trainers making it harder for another group of trainers to succeed doesn’t make sense to me.”

Though she claimed to not find any sense in the story, however, the idea behind it did bother Olivia. She truly believed that Pokémon trainers on the most basic level helped each other, yet standing before her was someone who seemed like he might actually buy into the concept of a simple yet fundamental difference between groups of trainers hurting one of those groups.

“Please explain something to me…” Matt’s attention was pulled back to its original location when Nikolai suddenly spoke up after having approached moments before. “Your Pokémon all seem at least relatively happy to be with you, as they’ve told me stories of some of your adventures… but why is your Eelektrik not responding in the same way?”

“I haven’t really used her at all yet, to be truthful. I was hoping to get in some training with her soon...”

Suddenly becoming angry, Nikolai moved in a single abrupt motion to get right in Matt’s face. “You must treat your Pokémon better! When I spoke to your Eelektrik, it told me that it feels forgotten. Simply capturing a Pokémon in one of those awful Poké Balls is not enough! You must spend time allowing that Pokémon to be free, as well!”

“Geez, go easy on him, he only caught Eelektrik recently!” Bunny interjected as a defense for Matt. “Also, you say Poké Balls are awful, but don’t you use them as well?”

Backing down from his anger somewhat, Nikolai admitted, “I do, but I do not take pleasure in doing so. I do not believe in confining Pokémon in situations where it is completely unnecessary… but in this society, it is difficult to travel with a party of Pokémon. I prefer to allow my Pokémon to live in the wild in various places until I need them, when possible...”

“If I need to spend more time with Charlotte, then, how about you and I practice a bit?”

“I dislike battling, except when one of my Pokémon wishes to engage in one...” Nikolai briefly closed his eyes and said after reopening them, “I can feel that I do have a Pokémon with me that desires a battle. Stantler, come alongside me, my friend.”

Just as Nikolai sent out his Stantler from his ball, the HR-E 2 came gliding up, making a quiet, clean run just off the main path. As it settled into place, Matt looked back over his shoulder to Nekou, Bunny and Olivia.

“Would you three go in there and get the medicine and supplies for the kids? It’s not hard to find.”

“Do I have to do it?” Olivia sighed. “I want to train too!”

Before Matt could say anything in response, Bunny said to him, “It’s okay, Nekou and I can do it ourselves, no problem.”

“Alright, if you say so.”

Nekou was uncharacteristically quiet and cooperative as she followed Bunny up to and past the entrance door into the HR-E 2. Calling back his other Pokémon, Matt brought Charlotte, his Eelektrik, to the forefront to face Nikolai’s Stantler.

“Lillipup, Oshawott, I want to focus on training you guys specifically. Come on over here.”

All four of Olivia’s Pokémon heeded her call despite her only requesting Lillipup and Oshawott; Roselia and Minccino stood beside her while the two she wished to battle waited in the front.

“You want to battle against us?” Ronald took Olivia’s actions as a challenge, so he dragged his timid, soft-spoken friend alongside himself to face her. “Fine, let’s have a battle where you use two Pokémon and we’ll each use one! I’m fired up!”

“If that’s what you want,” Olivia answered with a shrug, feigning a sort of surprise at how badly contrasting the personalities of the two boys were.

-:-

Off somewhere deeper in the woods, further away from the road than before, Jessie, James and Meowth were gathered around the R-Pad, which James was holding.

“Are we far enough away?” he wondered.

“They won’t hear us here,” Jessie sharply said. “Play the video.”

“And go!”

Meowth reached under James’s arm and pressed his paw against the R-Pad’s screen, triggering a pre-recorded video of Dr. Zager sitting in front of a camera.

“Welcome. If you’re watching this video, something has gone wrong with the mission to capture the Meteonite from Route 29, and therefore you require the pre-prepared contingency plan. On Route 30 is the home of a man known as Mr. Pokémon, who collects and researches rare treasures. It is highly likely that he possesses information on the Meteonite. You are to remotely hack into his servers and download any data you can find, then forward it on to me.”

“It’s all working out in pitch-perfect shape,” Meowth realized out loud. “That old guy’s got the Meteonite and is taking it to Mr. Pokémon. All we gotta do is keep following him until they meet up, and then we swoop in for the score!”

“Let’s move, then,” Jessie directed. “What we can’t afford is to fall behind.”

-:-

Some time later, Matt, Nekou, Olivia, Bunny, Dante and Nikolai were once again walking on the road, having reached the northern part of Route 30. Dante and Matt were leading the pack, with Olivia, Bunny and Nekou clustered in the middle and Nikolai bringing up the rear.

“I’ve got to tell you, Olivia, you did really well back there,” Matt said over his shoulder. “Even for a training battle, that was good work.”

“Thanks!” the girl beamed, smiling broadly for the compliment. “Harold and his Taillow were stronger than I expected… I thought Ronald’s Marill would be tougher, but I was wrong. Lillipup and Oshawott really came through for me, though.”

“And what about you and Nikolai?” Bunny chimed in. “You two had a pretty nice sparring match yourselves.”

“I guess he was right about Charlotte wanting to have some time out doing things. She really responded to getting a chance to battle. Nikolai, thanks for that.”

“I’m only doing what I think is right…” By now, Nikolai’s anger from earlier had fully subsided. He lurked behind the others and watched them carefully as they walked, not bothering to socialize but also not bothering to detach himself from the group.

“Mr. Pokémon’s home is right through here.” Gesturing to an offshoot of the path that briefly crossed into the forest, Dante led the others in the direction he indicated.

At the end of the path was something none of them were expecting.

The house, a modest, two-story building made of wood, was being attacked by a Pokémon. They had to look carefully to see it, but there was a blue rock Pokémon shooting energy blasts from its yellow core at the structure.

“What is that Pokémon?”

Even before Matt finished asking his question, Olivia had her Pokédex out and was already in the process of scanning the Pokémon.

“Roggenrola, the Mantle Pokémon. The hexagonal-shaped hole is its ear. It has a tendency to walk in the direction the sound is coming from.”

“Why is that Roggenrola attacking Mr. Pokémon’s home?” Dante lamented aloud.

The owner of the house was nowhere to be seen; Matt assumed, or at least hoped, that he was still safely inside. Roggenrola didn’t seem to notice the group and remained fixated on firing Rock Blast attacks at the building.

“Let me find out,” Nikolai declared, showing an unexpected assertiveness as he stepped forth and extended his hands. “Transcend the confines of time and space!”

Roggenrola didn’t even become aware of the group when Nikolai activated his power, but the glow from his hands enthralled Matt, Olivia and Bunny. As he probed into the mind of the small Rock-type Pokémon, Nikolai started to sweat, as accessing the innermost of Roggenrola’s thoughts was proving harder even than healing Olivia’s injured Pokémon.

“Why is he having trouble?” Olivia asked Matt out of worry.

“Sheena told me once that when a Pokémon is enraged, it becomes harder to reach that Pokémon’s heart. He’s trying to break through.”

“I’ve… aah!” Nikolai’s eyes whipped open and he stumbled back, prompting Matt and Bunny to run to hold him up. “Th-thank you. That Roggenrola… it’s gone into a feral state and is trying to get food from in the house, because he’s been feeding the wild Pokémon in the area…”

“Well, if that Pokémon is feral, maybe capturing it would be a good idea? We could civilize it.”

Unsure of Matt’s proposal, Nikolai pulled his hat down and said, “I disagree on principle, but your Pokémon were fairly happy to be with you…”

“I don’t see any other way to calm it down, and I think I might be able to get some training out of this, too. Charlotte, make your mark!”

This was actually the idea that had jumped into Matt’s head almost immediately upon seeing the wild Roggenrola. Ever since learning that Charlotte was unhappy with her current situation, he’d been hoping for a chance to let her have a real battle. The sparring with Nikolai’s Stantler was a start, but he wanted something a bit less controlled.

Charlotte balanced her long body on the ground so she could stand up and sent electricity flowing through her muscles, lighting up the spots on her sides.

“Take the first attack, Charlotte! Charge Beam!”

Some sparks shot out of Charlotte’s open mouth, followed by a concentrated blast of electricity. Roggenrola had finally taken notice and turned around when she heard Matt give his command, but she was nowhere near agile enough to avoid being swept up in the electric flow.

Leaping out from the vortex, Roggenrola aimed the opening on her body at Charlotte, which then began to glow as it gathered power. Four energized rocks shot out of the opening and smashed into Charlotte, leaving purple bruises across her skin.

“That first attack was quite effective, Matt.” After announcing her assessment, Bunny thought quickly and added, “I don’t think you need more than one more. Be very careful not to knock it out!”

“Well, it’s a Rock-type, right? Then a Poison-type move should weaken it just enough. Acid Spray!”

Charlotte cut off the flow of electricity to her mouth, then spat out a blob of green acid. Though the acid washed over Roggenrola’s body and broke down her defenses, however, it did not add significant injury to the already-hurt Pokémon. She could be seen breathing deeply, most likely drawing in air through the opening on the front of her body.

“Ro-genn!” she cried, rushing forward on her tiny brown feet. She threw herself at Charlotte, but the Eelektrik weaved away, allowing the failed Headbutt attack to sail harmlessly past. Roggenrola ended up sliding into the dirt just beyond where Charlotte stood.
 
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