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Operation GEAR: The Angel of Reckoning (R)

The Great Butler

Hush, keep it down
Hello! This is probably weird of me to review Chapter 3 when you're already at Chapter 17 last time I checked but it's the farthest I've gotten and I'm here from the review game.

Review what you need to, don't worry.


So does this mean all of these anime-canon villains are also canon to your story? I don't remember reading much about them in your backstory unless I totally forgot that they were there, so I was just wondering how important they are to this story. Now, regarding Polaris, I've googled them but all that comes up is the North Star. However, this name also comes up in Jax's fic, so I'm curious as to how Polaris fits into the PokeVerse.

Basically it's just a nod to what went on in the anime in the past.

My Polaris and Jax's are different, the naming was just a coincidence. Their purpose will become clear with time.


I found this line kind of unusual. Based on the first two chapters, the gag seems to be that Matt says something and either Nekou or Oliva (or both in this case) snap at him and he gets annoyed. Maybe you could have said "prompting Bunny to giggle and Matt to roll his eyes." Otherwise, the dialogue exchange is pretty good between these characters. And the battle scene between Zorua and Oshowatt was superbly written. I found it very exciting, especially for a couple of baby Pokemon in a friendly battle, which makes me excited for future battles involving Rocket and/or Polaris.

I think I explained this to you before writing this reply, but he's laughing because of the humor in them both saying it at the same time.

I'd like to think the battles are all uphill from here.

Be careful with repetition. While it doesn't faze me all that much, it could get on reader's nerves to see the same description (e.g. cliff-laden) for the same subject (e.g. the road) over and over. Other alternatives you could use are, simply, "the path" "the upcoming trek" etc.

You're right, that line simply slipped my mind as I was writing. I never even caught it.

Not much to say about this short scene probably the shortest out of the first 3 chapters. I'm a little worried at this point about the roles of Jesse, James, and Meowth in this story since they appear to be replicas of their anime counterparts. Personally, I prefer deeper explorations into the characters than the anime offers, or alterations in their personalities. Hopefully I get to see that as I continue to read on.

If they're like anything, they're like the way they were in the BW season of the anime. Their purpose is different than what 90% of the show uses them for.

Be careful with that comma splice there. A period would actually be the correct symbol to use. Or, if you wanna go the dramatic route, "Something's not right... I can sense it."

True.

I love how badass Nekou is. She's definitely my favorite character at this point, which is interesting since I expected it to be Bunny. Hopefully she gets developed more later on.

Bunny, you mean? They're all going to get development, but Bunny is a little slower in that regard compared to the others.


I somewhat remember Marie being mentioned in previous chapters. But with the length of each chapter, and the amount of posts between them, I don't think it's fair to expect readers to search through your older chapters to figure out what Pokemon she is. Nor is it reasonable to expect all readers to recall Marie's identity of the top of his/her head when you're utilizing a ton of characters and Pokemon in this fic. So I would suggest mentioning the identities of nicknamed Pokemon every chapter to be on the safe side; it's not hard, either. By the way, this action scene is totally exciting! I had to share that with ya :)

I already do mention the species instead of nickname alone sometimes, but I can do it more.

And it was a pretty fun scene to write. ^^

I thought this was a great portrayal of Olivia's character. It fits her very well to be this frightened and reliant on the man whose head she keeps biting off when she pretends like she can handle anything. It's also the first time I empathize with her since she was annoying in Chapter 2.

Good to hear. That's really what I wanted to do with her, to have her be someone who challenges the reader initially when it comes to liking them instead of being someone who's designated 'sympathetic good guy' instantly.

Again, great characterization here, this time for the these three. I'm already getting emotionally attached to these characters. Now you just gotta develop everyone else and you're golden! Overall, this was a very stunning and well-written scene.

Wow, stunning wasn't the word I was expecting. I'm flattered, thank you!

I'm reviewing as I go along, so I'm guessing this is an Axew. Even if it isn't, now is as good a time as any to ask you something that's been lingering in mind: what's with the Unova invasion? I know you mentioned that the Gen 5 Pokemon have found their way onto Johto, but I originally thought that was just a fair excuse to incorporate them into your story---not to exclusively feature them. This is probably coming off as complacent and maybe part of it is since Unova is probably my least favorite region but I just think it's more believable to feature some of the original 251, since those are the Pokemon who have made Johto their home since the region's inception. And yes, Bunny has a Ninetales, but she could have gotten that anywhere. So far in Route 29, we come across a Lillipup, Pawniard, and a Bisharp, and the majority of trainers' Pokemon are Gen 5. So yeah...just wanted to rant get your thoughts on this.

It's just a byproduct of having to firmly establish the migration point and having to juggle so many different Pokemon at once. At least that's the case for the wild ones, the trainer ones almost entirely were obtained in their other regions.

Perhaps I ranted too soon...perhaps...

I hope so.


Without dropping any hints for how each character develops (because they do) this is the kind of thing that's going to happen again. Get used to it. :p

Can't wait to see their reactions when they found out they're planning to raid a world-renowned scientist/Polaris affiliate. Don't let me down, Butler.

Give it time, it'll come.

I realize this passage was to help new readers catch up to the world you've been creating throughout your multiple fics, but it also gets major bonus points for adding emotional depth to Matt. Kudos!

Thank you. I think you'll be seeing more of that kind of thing.

PfftHAHAHA Nekou for MVP! I'm really loving her character. So please, please work on Bunny. Seriously, Nekou is fantastic.

I hope you don't mind me asking for patience. I admit, I didn't have Bunny's role fully planned before I began, so it will take a bit of time before I get to developing her as much as the others. Don't worry, though, it is coming.


Okay, I think you've mentioned Angel Corp. before, but is there anything we should know about them at this point besides "oh hey this Dante guy is collaborating with them"? Still, I must admit that I'm almost done with this chapter and I haven't really been left confused like in the past, so it's definitely an improvement. Also, great job connecting that "random" attack to the Meteonite, which is connecting this former-Polaris scientist to Team Rocket and the 4 protagonists.

The Angel Corporation is something that's being foreshadowed for now, really. A background element, I suppose.

Everything is connect.


Uh-oh! Another comma splice. Still, 2 in one very long chapter isn't so bad. They're a huge peeve of mine, so I can't help but point them out.

I can't blame you. Please forgive me.

This is a very touching scene. I was kinda hoping things would get a bit more snuggly between Matt and Nekou, unless you're not taking the shipping route between them. Anyway, if you're gonna reference classic literature that not everyone has read, be sure to be detailed. You talk a whole lot about Captain Ahab but you barely explain Ishmael, the person whom Nekou uses as a comparison for Matt. In the end, I don't even understand her reference since you didn't explain Ishmael's relevance to Moby Dick.

Hm, you're right. I didn;t think that scene through at all, not nearly enough...


You know, there were multiple points in this chapter where I thought, "This would've been a great place to end this chapter." I know you like writing long chapters...but, you know, I don't see the point of them being that long which probably discourages participants of the review game thread to review them. So I find it kind of amusing that you chose to end it very...anticlimactically. I thought the second to last scene between Matt and Nekou would've been a great place to end. Call me crazy, but I sensed a variety of tension in that scene, including sexual. It's a shame because you did a good job keeping me interested so far with the endings of Chapter 1 and Chapter 2.

There was a lot of tension in that scene, that was my intent. But like I mentioned, I like to have chapters end on a conclusion of some sort unless it's a special case.

Luckily, this chapter blew my expectations out of the water, so I'll definitely tune in for Chapter 4 (and maybe the other 13). Sorry to any reviewers who might be annoyed with me reviewing a really old chapter. Looking forward to what lies ahead! ~flamebeam

Thank you very much! And please, do not worry about reviewing an old chapter, nobody minds.
 

The Great Butler

Hush, keep it down
Not bad, not bad at all. Nice battles all around, per usual. The highlight of this chapter I felt was Lyra's characterization and battle. You just seem to know how to write nicely characterized individuals and it showed here with Lyra. Especially since she doesn't have much of a striking game characterization to go off of, you decided to go with your own interpretation of the character rather than simply going with the anime's. You seemed to portray her as a "destroyer," sweet but brutal.

I confess, I did have some basis for creating Lyra's character. I based her on some memes that went around about her back in 2010 around the time of HGSS's release; I can't repeat what they were here, but they provided the base I used to develop her as a brutal fighter who gets aroused by vicious battles.

I like how Bunny and Dante are painting her in such a violent light, they are Matt's support and seeing him getting trounced by such a mighty opponent probably lead to them making pretty harshly conceived notions about Lyra. Not sure if it was intentional, what with how grim "bloodthirsty" sounds. As for the battle, I particularly liked your descriptions of attacks. Eruption specifically and Baton Pass's imagery felt like something I feasibly could see in any area of canon. I'm glad you seem to be deciding to do your own thing with some of these attacks.

I have to admit I was worried about Eruption in particular, given how deadly a combination of Eruption/Water Spout and a boost of speed can be in the games. I still went with it due to how attractive the visual of Hitmonchan fighting the Eruption in such a way was.

I actually figured Azumarill's secondary typing was going to come into play somehow, given you pointed out the idea of "Fairy" and alluded to Azumarill being Lyra's Pokemon pre-battle. Just something I had on my mind, not really anything bad or good. Also I like how you reaffirmed Matt's main mission in life is to meet Reshiram and reveal "the Truth." Still not quite sure what "the truth" refers to, seems a bit vague but nothing wrong with not laying all your character's cards out on the table from the start.

Azumarill's type was deliberately withheld because of something I can't specify right now without giving spoilers. Just rest assured, you will understand fairly soon why I left it out.

The truth is quite literally the truth about a subject, it's not really complicated.

I just thought this was a cute scene, just seeming the gang being all chill and casual with one another and her Pokemon outside of its ball. You seem to know how to treat Pokemon without going overboard with their personality quirks, they feel like lessers to the humans in some forms but your story is more driven by the humans than the Pokemon so it makes sense and there's nothing wrong with that. Your own route you're going with handling the Pokemon feels fine.Set-up of the next destination, great way to end a scene transition.

I still am worried about not featuring the Pokemon enough, to be honest. But as you said, this is a more human-centric story.

The ending scene with Matt and Nekou caught by eye and both of themdefinitely have the strongest connection to Olivia. Felt very fitting seeing them confide to each other. As for the villain scenes, not much I can say other than I'm glad TR added Goomy to their numbers. Fitting conclusions to the little B-plot you had going last chapter. The group scene between Olivia and Nekou with Mareep appearing again, had a strong feeling we weren't going to see the last of it. Still loved the interactions between the trainers a lot and the contrast their Pokemon have with one another, Olivia's being more cute and respectful while Nekou's were more problematic and tended to be dark-colored. Your Nikolai scene was great, really liked the character's actions.

The Matt and Nekou part of Olivia's scene was actually something I just randomly decided to write as I went. I think that even despite that it turned out to be very important.

Goomy will be a fun Pokemon, I think. Thankfully there's a big battle coming up right away so they can give it some mileage.

I think the Pokemon groups Olivia and Nekou have suit them, don't you agree?

Nikolai's got some stuff to do coming up, so yeah.

Apologies if this was a bit short. Overall I didn't really have much critique on this chapter and wasn't disappointed with what you brought to the table at all. I just didn't have a huge amount to say that I feel could really benefit you and didn't want to soundlessly waffle on.

Cheers!

No, don't worry, your review was good. I look forward to hearing your feedback next time. ^^
 

Matori

THE QUEEN IS BACK
Apologies in advance for taking so long on this review. Let's get started.

Northeast of the National Park and Battle Cafe, between Ecruteak City and Mahogany Town, stretched Route 42. It was a rugged road broken up by multiple rivers, which flowed from within Mt. Mortar. The craggy peak dominated the landscape, casting a wide shadow over the woods around it.

The thick brush around the road rustled as a black-and-white shape cut through. It was Nikolai’s jacket, and when he was about halfway down the route, he emerged from the bushes to observe his surroundings.

Good, strong description to open the chapter and set the scene.

A group of five people - three men, two women, all dressed in identical Polaris uniforms - had assembled. On the orders of their leader, they drew gun-like weapons and began firing strange, blue-and-black Poké Balls at their targets. It took mere seconds for the Crustle, Timburr, Throh and Sawk to all be engulfed. Each ball floated to the person who had fired it, depositing themselves in tanks worn on the Polaris members’ backs.

I like the concept of those capture devices.

“I lost,” Olivia said with a shrug. “I don’t care though. I got what I wanted, which was a chance to understand how strong I have to be. And besides, I got to knock out one of his Pokémon, so I’m happy with it. That’s not the only reason why I called you, though.”

Once again Olivia shows amazing growth and development.

“What?” Anabel’s eyes went wide, and from her side of the call, the sound of something crashing down could be heard. “Olivia, please, stay out of trouble! If anything happens to you, I…”

Anabel's protectiveness is sweet but also a little bit sad.

From her vantage point several feet away, Nekou could see Olivia’s fists tighten. “I made a decision. You’ve seen those Polaris broadcasts, right? Well, Matt, Nekou, Bunny and I… we got caught up in what happened in Goldenrod City.”

“What?” Anabel’s eyes went wide, and from her side of the call, the sound of something crashing down could be heard. “Olivia, please, stay out of trouble! If anything happens to you, I…”

“Nothing is going to happen to me,” Olivia interrupted her mother to firmly say. “I decided that I’m going to honor Dad by standing up to Polaris. What they want is against everything he taught me. And… I have to admit, I have very good friends who will help me get stronger and protect me. I can do it.”

“Your father’s primary concern was your safety. After all the torture we had to go through together… all we wanted was to give you a safe, comfortable life.”

“I… I…” Suddenly, Olivia was choking up, leaving her speech broken. “Don’t you think I know that? But you saw the news, if nobody does something to stop Polaris, there won’t be a safe, comfortable life for anyone!”

“But why does it have to be you?” Now Anabel was becoming noticeably distressed. “How much more do we have to give? Is it going to take my life and yours too before this stops?”

Olivia took a deep breath, seemingly in preparation to voice a strong counter to her mother’s fear, but instead relaxed slightly and changed the subject. “I know Dad would want me to do what’s right. I… I want to remember what having him around was like before things get any worse. I’m going to be in Ecruteak City later, so I want you to send some old home videos to the Pokémon Center for me. Please.”

“I… I can do that,” Anabel muttered, accepting defeat. “Not like I could do anything. I couldn’t save Rich from himself when I was right there, why would I think I could save her from here…”

I really think this, too, shows how Olivia has grown up. She's ready to make decisions for herself and stand up for her values, even if her own mother, who she loves more than anyone else, is afraid. This was an especially moving scene and I think you handled it well.

“She tries to be tough, but… her strength isn’t just from her. She is strong when she has strength to draw from around her. She relies on Matt and Bunny and Monroe and…” Nekou felt her heart skip a beat, and her skin began to feel as cold as ice. “...me. ****… I’ve been using her and lying to her just like everyone else… but, I’m… I’d be nothing without Maman, and now there’s someone who needs me just like I need Maman…”

Aww, Nekou. It's interesting to see her admitting her weakness here.

“I…” Nekou had realized what she started, and suddenly found her courage gone. She quickly improvised, putting on her usual attitude and saying, “I really can’t ****ing wait to help you train! Let’s get out there and raise some hell, how about it?”

Even if she's trying to seem cool, I can still see a little bit of weakness to her.

Charlotte redoubled her efforts on Matt’s urging, and with the more intense flow of acid she used, she finally managed to burn the last of the threads away. However, just as she got free, Kricketune was on top of her. With a flowing motion he cut her twice in a brutal X-Scissor attack boosted by his earlier Swords Dance. Charlotte collapsed backward, two long gashes slashed into her sides.

The detail you're showing here to show how Swords Dance affects an attack is great.
 
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Starlight Aurate

Just a fallen star
So I cannot apologize enough for how long it has taken me to get this done. I have reasons, involving a wedding, driving 5 hours in one day, a baby, living in a new environment, having hours of homework, and mostly having a computer without Microsoft Office on it. But the last of these is taken care of, and so (hopefully), I can now be on a proper schedule and actually give reviews. Onto Chapters 3 and 4!

Chapter 3

James was holding in his hands a rectangular black tablet computer with ten buttons, a plus-shaped control pad and two thumb pads surrounding its screen
Sounds like a mix between a DS and a GameCube controller :p

There have been reports of unusual activity in Cherrygrove City that I’ve been ordered to investigate, so if there are no further questions about your mission, I will be going.”
Something that, I'm guessing, is either happening from Olivia and the gang's actions, or will lead into a conflict with them.

The humble yet busy streets of New Bark Town gradually disappeared behind Matt, Olivia, Nekou and Bunny as they headed west into Route 29, giving way to a curving, cliff-laden road framed by long blades of fragrant grass. Off in the distance on all sides, tall trees provided boundary lines appropriate to the concept of a road through the woods.
I just want to say that this description is really beautiful, yet also simple, so it's not over-the-top. Well done :)

Having reached into her blouse and produced a Poké Ball,
Into her blouse[?/i] Uh... where does she keep those Pokéballs? o_o

Almost immediately upon materializing, Oshawott proudly held up his shell, only flinching slightly when he realized that Zorua was staring at him. He realized that this would be his first chance to prove himself to his trainer, so he intended to make the best of it.
Awww, the way Oshawott tries to impress and please his trainer is so endearing ^_^

“So Oshawott’s beginning moves are Water Gun and Tackle."
Water Gun? That's the best water starter ever! All of the water types I've had just start out with Tackle and Growl....

“Now, Olivia, don’t panic just yet,” Nekou gently advised, noting that both her opponent and the girl’s Oshawott seemed surprised by Zorua’s move. “I know you’re good at straight, all-out attacking, but from watching you beat that caped guy before, I know you can be pretty analytic too. Just try to calm down and assess the situation. What would be a good way to get me now?”
Even though Neko likes to be rude and bossy, it's a time like this that shows that she has a sweet side and can be quite motherly.

“Oshawott…” uttered the Water-type Pokémon, relieved that Olivia was pleased with his performance even somewhat.
Aww ^_^

“Don’t get the wrong idea!” fumed Olivia, her face turning red.
Aww :/

“What else is there to do, then?” Jessie asked rhetorically. “Break in, collect the rock, get out of there, and profit when the boss rewards us!”

“That’s right!” both James and Meowth exclaimed.
Oh, typical Team Rocket. You always try those sorts of tactics, and those tactics never quite seem to work XD

“You know, Olivia, for once he has a point,” she advised. “You have plenty of time before your first Gym battle, so there’s no need to rush to catch more Pokémon.”
See? Nekou can be caring AND sensible!
And it is sweet how she is trying to do what's best for Olivia; the car she shows her is just heartwarming ^_^ Though Olivia's attitude....

In a single sudden, incredibly fast motion, Nekou pulled a switchblade from the inside of her blouse with her right hand
Just how much stuff does she keep in there?!

As if a switch had been thrown, Nekou’s personality was now completely serious
Heh, I like the wordplay here :p

Almost on cue, a nearby bush started rustling, causing Matt, Olivia and Bunny to jump nervously. Nekou, meanwhile, simply tensed up in preparation for combat, expecting a threat to come jumping out of the brush at any moment. Her instincts weren’t without merit, either, as mere seconds later something did indeed emerge.
Nekou is such a boss; preparing to fight while the others are cowering and dropping all immaturity and playfulness when it's time to get serious.

Lillipup barked weakly and began slowly moving toward the group, making his injured right hind leg become apparent.
It's a trap!

Pawniard, the Sharp Blade Pokémon. Type is Dark/Steel. Even if it gets injured, it doesn’t care. It attacks its prey in a group, using the blades all over its body.”
Okay, well, maybe it wasn't a trap, but the Lillipup did herald danger!

“Bisharp, the Sword Blade Pokémon. Type is Dark/Steel. Evolved form of Pawniard. A scary Pokémon that will take the injured, immobile prey that battled a group of Pawniard and portion it out.”
I take back what I said before; releasing Unova Pokémon into Johto was not a good idea.

Just as the third Pawniard was driven back, a rumble of thunder passed through Route 29 and a light but steady rain began to fall.
Ooh, this is going to make the setting even more tense! Fitting! :D

He hastily raised up his arms to protect himself, resulting in a loud crashing sound when Bisharp’s steel blades hit the metal of his prosthetic limbs.
Matt has prosthetics? If it was mentioned before, I must have missed it.... I guess they're certainly useful in situations like this.

This Poké Ball was a special type – it was colored in varying shades of blue in a wave pattern. Matt threw this Dive Ball with a flick of his wrist and called out to the Pokémon inside.
Another interesting touch; I don't often seen special Pokéballs in fanfiction (or Anime, or manga, or anything besides the main games); every time one appears, it just sticks out to me more and I think it's pretty cool.

Shaking off their own injuries, the two Pawniard once again leapt to their leader’s defense, attempting to hold Patrick back with resistance formed from their respective Psycho Cut and Metal Claw.
I don't know if Bisharp earns the Pawniard's loyalty by bossing them around or threatening them or what, but the devotion they show her is admirable.

“Marie, herd them together using Low Sweep, then Zorua, you **** them up with Incinerate!”
Ah, Nekou, using language may not help you in this match, but it sure does bring a smile to my face.

Even though she had only known Olivia for a little over a week, Nekou was already developing both sisterly and maternal instincts toward the girl, and an aggressive creature causing Olivia direct harm deeply violated those bonds. She flew into a screaming rage, viciously rushing Bisharp with her switchblade; however, she was unable to inflict much damage due to Bisharp fighting back.
Even more sweetness of Nekou's concern and love for Olivia :)

With nowhere to escape to, she received a devastating blow right to her torso, delivered with such force that she was thrown off the cliff and far into the distance, disappearing into the thick trees beyond the well-traversed road.
I hope Bisharpdidn't get sent into the same place Olivia did o_o

“Yeah, I do. Olivia’s tough. A little fall might rough her up a bit, but she will get back up and move forward. I know she can do it.”
Hm, Nekou's acting a lot differently than before. Did defeating Bisharp calm her down that much?

followed by her trainer, an elderly man wearing round spectacles and a heavy brown coat.
Mr. Pokémon? :D

and his double helix-printed necktie.
D:
... Project J?
“Meet Doctor Dante Fantomos, the man whose work made modern science itself possible!”
Darn, I was wrong :(

“I’m flattered to have fooled you, then,” Dante remarked, playing off Matt’s accidentally insensitive comment with a bit of sarcasm.
At least he's as polite and happy as Mr. Pokémon is!

Matt took a moment to think about just how strange a day it had been as he walked behind Dante but in front of Nekou, Bunny and the Pokémon. Everything had started with Professor Elm’s disappearance and the meeting with Professor Juniper, then they had run into Renzo and heard his ranting. After that, they moved into Route 29, were attacked by a group of bloodthirsty wild Pokémon, and finally were separated from Olivia. Yet, he still couldn’t believe that he was now about to sit down for tea with one of the most important scientists in history, a man who he had long believed to have died years earlier.
And none of these things are happening purely through coincidence ;)

“You’re lucky I found her out there, Matt Chiaki,” Dante said.
How does he know his name o_o

“In due time, my friend."
No, don't accept that answer! It's never a good thing if he knows your name and hasn't seen you before!

“My heart,” Dante sadly replied.
Not sure if this merit's an "awww" or is an overly-sappy comment. Though it does make the words, "Do you think those who are dead ever truly leave us?" true (Albus Dumbledore, Harry Potter and the Prisoner of Azkaban. And yes, I do memorize Dumbledore quotes XD).

“Don’t you worry about it. I’ve taken steps to make sure her memory is preserved.”
Something about this comment seems a little... off.

“Now, Matt, why don’t you join us for some tea? Olivia was telling me earlier about some of the rare Pokémon you have seen, such as Heatran and Dialga.”
Telling random people about the legendaries you've come across really doesn't seem like a good idea.

"But I was never the same person after I left La Ciudad Dorada. That was where my life started to change.”
It seems to me that whenever a person can say something like this, they haven't changed as much as they thought they have or they over-dramatize the events. I haven't read your previous stories (sorry!) so I don't know, and he did talk of a person dying (which definitely CAN be a life-changer, and his unease of talking about it is very understandable), but most people aren't as outright as this. He's either matured a lot since then to be able to admit something like this, or he thinks it affected him more than it did (and if I had read your previous installments, I might be able to say which it is....)

“I’d like to take you apart,” Nekou wryly commented at the exact moment Matt finished speaking. “Your insides sound fascinating.”
That's... a little creepy.

“I’m not concerned about that anymore besides how it affects Olivia,” Matt responded. He then turned his view halfway toward the girl. “Olivia, how are you doing? You’re still looking forward to your first badge, right?”

“I don’t want to talk about it. I want to go to bed.”
Wait, why would it affect Olivia? Is she a Pokémon? 0_o

“Let me warn you of one thing, though, Matt Chiaki. As men of science we both pursue truth, but what you must recognize is that truth is a beast that cannot be tamed. If you decide to pursue it, you must be fully prepared to find that the truth is far more terrible than you ever thought it could be.”
Sounds a lot like what Dumbledore said of love (dangit, now I'm on a role with Dumbledore sayings....). Which is fitting, as truth and love go hand-in-hand :)

“Hmm... I agree. Listen, continue to monitor the situation for now. I have some business to finish
wrapping up here in Cherrygrove City. Over and out.
Um, did you mean to press enter?

“The only thing on all twelve numbers of a clock is time to drink."
Oh Nekou, how we love you.

Stepping closer to the bed, Nekou leaned over and scrunched up her face as she stared at the book Matt was reading. She could make out the drawing on the book’s cover, which depicted an old man in sailor garb standing in a small boat and brandishing a harpoon directed at a giant, white Wailord.
Moby Dick! The Wailord!

There was a beat of silence, but suddenly, Nekou delivered a backhanded slap across Matt’s face, tears of anger welling up in her eyes. He just looked blankly at her and held his face as his book fell onto the bed.

“Do you even care about how your attitude could affect others? You say you want Olivia up on her feet, but how do you think it would make her feel to lose someone else she cares about and relies upon? How do you think Bunny would take losing someone she clearly considers a friend? And me… I have no home to go back to. If you go away, I don’t know what would happen to me.”
I'm agreeing with Nekou here; he deserved that slap.

“I need to deliver the Meteonite to an acquaintance of mine, the scientist who’s called Mr. Pokémon, who lives on Route 30.”
YES! The man I've been waiting for! :D

This was a long chapter, but it had a beautiful ending. At least some things in this fic are happy. Other than the aforementioned comment about Matt, I don't have much else to say. But I'm sure that there will be plenty to say in the chapters to come :)

Chapter 4
For the sake of caution, this chapter contains mentions of several crimes including murder and kidnapping, and a scene involving abduction victims that may be slightly disturbing to some.
*Grabs popcorn*

“The last thing on my mind is a Gym battle. I’m a disgrace.”
Sympathy=gone. If having an overly-cheerful character is annoying, then an overly-upset one is even worse. I mean, with your friends doing everything they can to cheer you up, the least you can do is show some gratitude!

"This world is a ***** and the only way to beat it is to be a bigger ***** right back at it."
Uh, I'm not sure that this is the best way to go about getting her back in high spirits....

As soon as Matt said those words, the smile on the nurse’s face began to slowly fade. “Then in that case, the charge will be three hundred dollars.”
So THAT'S how the PokeCenter makes money!

that representative being Ghetsis
I KNEW IT.

seen from the shoulders up with the oversized collar of his cape partially covering his mouth.
HE'S AS EVIL AS HE APPEARS!

Ghetsis’s voice was actually losing its composure at this point, as if his sadness was sincere.
It's amazing how big of a difference the words "as if" can have.

“I didn’t want you to get involved…”
I don't know what suffering or issues this woman is going through right now, but the way she shows concern for her child and is just trying to make sure that her child can grow up in a safe world, uninvolved in this fighting, is endearing to see.

“So yeah, this man is bad news."
That's putting it lightly!

“Don’t pay it too much mind,” Nekou abruptly answered. “He didn’t do anything to hurt us.”
... Seriously? It's no coincidence that he happened to go to you and tell you people specifically all that information.

Each one was wearing a wig of long, white hair
They're wigs? D:

“In the amount of time you have had those books, only a genius could have deciphered their secrets already! Of course, we all know that that word is one of the last ones we’d use to describe you two!”...This outburst prompted a stronger-but-still-muted reaction from the two women, who still had enough left of their broken instincts to raise their arms over their faces; this also served the secondary purpose of hiding the tears of terror developing in their eyes.
We've barely seen Anthea and Concordia, but they already have more sympathy from me than any other character :(

“Anthea…” Concordia whispered, staring up at the ceiling, “…please, pray with me...”
I'm not sure if she's referring to Christian prayer or that of any other religion, but it is heartening to see that in spite of everything they're going through, she still has strength to keep faith and hope.

He had plainly overheard Matt and Bunny talking, and appeared eager to add his own contribution, his narrow eyes and thin mouth curled into expressions of genuine excitement.
Overheard? Seems more like eavesdropping to me.

“People around town call me the Guide Gent, because I give tours of Cherrygrove."
:D My fears have been proven fruitless!

“This city was not always so congested,” responded the Gent, his voice becoming poisoned by a hint of bitterness. “It used to be a small, peaceful city on the shore. But when the Battle Arcade was built, and the Trainer House along with it, things changed around here.”
The evils of urbanization :mad:
Seriously, though, I get where he's coming from. The twon I live in used to be small, with a forest behind my house and everything. Now it's gone, replaced by a road and apartments and a shopping plaza, and several new traffic lights have been put in and the rates of crime have gone up. The Guide Gent's bitterness isn't entirely unjustified.

“What fabulous luck you’ve had so far!” Dahlia exclaimed, twisting around her space on the red side of the battlefield with fluid dance moves. The Arcade Star was a tall, thin woman whose skin showed a tan. Her clothing – a midriff-exposing yellow shirt and a pair of blue jeans – was so tight it left little to the imagination, and her messy, black, tendril-like hair wrapped around her as if it had a mind of its own as she danced. “But, I won’t let you leave here without a real test! Let’s see if you have enough luck to defeat me. Ludicolo, Energy Ball!”

“Very well,” Nando calmly responded, strumming the strings of the golden, Mew-shaped harp in his hand, “I shall show you what you seek. Leavanny, please use Signal Beam.”
I like how distinguishable you made these characters in this bit of dialogue. I don't know Dahlia or Nando at all, but I can already tell their personalities just form how they act during battle and how they treat their Pokemon during it.

“And now it is time for my finishing move~” Nando sang while again strumming his harp.
I know that the ~ should be counted as a grammatical error, but it fits in so perfectly here that I don't complain (and I don't think anyone else will, either).

The next ball she drew out, however, was a Master Ball; two bulbous red circles framed the letter ‘M’ in white against its dark blue top.
WHERE did she get a Master Ball from?!

Prepare for my ultimate Pokémon! Now… dance, Zapdos!!”
WHERE DID SHE GET A ZAPDOS FROM?!?

Even Zapdos’s movements, which were as agile and fluid as its trainer’s, exuded power.
I like this bit. It's clear that Zapdos livese up to its status as a legendary, especially with all of the power its displaying. But you can also tell that it IS Dahlia's Pokemon, and that her Pokemon moves and acts like she does. I'm not sure how to describe it, or if I'm even making much sense, but I like these sort of trainer-Pokemon bonds.

“No time to lose! Wasted time can’t be regained!”

Wrenching his arm free of her grip, Matt growled, “What’s gotten into you? This time, I mean.”

“If you don’t train, you won’t beat Dahlia. And if you lose, what good are you to me?”

“What does that mean?”

“It means… um… ****. Did you forget about that pizza you promised me and Olivia? If you lose, you can’t keep your promises!”
Ah, typical Nekou XD

Matt caught Nekou grimacing in the corner of his eye and realized that she didn’t share his appreciation of Dante’s philosophizing at the time.
Any person of culture should appreciate it when a man named Dante starts philosophizing!

Inside the elevator was someone Matt recognized – a young man, dressed plainly in a black jacket and blue jeans but sporting shoulder-length red hair and an intense facial expression.
Silver? :D

“Someone got their cornflakes pissed in this morning,” Nekou groaned, following behind Olivia into the room.
It is nice to have Nekou lighten the mood when Silver is there making everything all serious :)

“All computers and holograms,” explained Nekou. “This battlefield is for all intents and purposes solid, but it can be reverted back into data and put back into the system when we’re done with it.”
So... are the trees and plants really there, or do they just appear to be?

Coming in at a height just shorter than that of his opponent, the Aggron turned his steel head upward to allow his blue eyes to meet the gaze of Silver’s Feraligatr.
It's going to be a dinosaur battle! :D (I know Feraligatr is technically an alligator, but that's the closest thing we have to dinosaurs anyway and besides, dinosaurs are cool).

“And Feraligatr is the final evolution of Totodile,” Olivia added, somewhat bitterly. “I wonder how much I missed out on…”
Oh, shut up.


The false foliage cracked under Tony’s weight, and a large portion of it faded into thin air in a cloud of binary code.
Well, I guess that answers my previous question; it's just a different way of looking at it than what I would have thought.

“This works better than I expected,” Silver mused. “If I’m getting this much mileage now, I can only imagine how well it’ll do against his Pokémon.
Oh? And who could "his" refer to?

“A Gengar? Now I’m interested.” Stiffly pushing her glasses up on her nose, Nekou walked away from the control computer and dropped herself next to Bunny on the bench.
I don't know why, but Nekou seems like a Gengar person to me. Just a thought.

The Rotom froze, fearing the rapidly growing shadow covering it.
This makes for a hilarious mental visual XD

“My father is powerful and ruthless, both as a person and as a trainer. I will not rest until I defeat him and put him in his place.
Ah.... well, that answers my other question. Poor kid :/

That night, after the sun had gone down and the group retired to their room in the Pokémon Center, Matt made good on the so-called ‘promise,’ even if Nekou had entirely invented the idea. The long coffee table near the room’s television was covered by a combination of two pizza boxes and a myriad of beverages. As was becoming familiar to Matt, Bunny and Olivia, Nekou’s unstoppable appetite earned her a pizza all her own, while the second was mainly divided up between Bunny and Olivia. Matt insisted on only taking two slices for himself.
I like this scene and the whole atmosphere it creates. Everyone is doing what befits them, and it seems like they're all having a good time :) And now I really want some pizza

He looked up when he heard Olivia and Nekou talking, and found himself feeling comforted by the honest connection they seemed to share.
It's amazing how heartwarming sincerity and small moments like this can be <3

And you left us with quite an ominoux and mysterious ending....

So, yeah, sorry for not getting to this sooner. Like a lot sooner. A lot a lot sooner >_< I didn't really have much to say about the battle, except that it was enjoyable (and enough to keep my attention to where I wasn't being interrupted by my thoughts and commenting on every little bit). Overall good job :) I'll get right to working on the next chapter! And hopefully it won't take me over a month this time XP
 

ChewieJ

Pokémon Writer
Hello there!

You’ve been a great supporter to my story, so I thought I should give you the long-delayed review you rightfully deserve.

Unfortunately, I didn’t have time to read all of the previous chapters, so I’m going to try my best to comment as much as I can on the latest one.

Now the way I review stories is different. Instead of quoting portions of a chapter, I’m going to read the whole chapter and create a review that sums up my thoughts. I thought about quoting, but if I commented on every part that intrigued me, I would write a novel-long review. I apologize if you prefer the latter.

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Review for “Chapter 17, The Bard and the Diva”:

The beginning of the chapter definitely hooked me in. I never really liked waiting too long for something to happen, so I liked how I was led straight to the action.

When the people from Polaris abducted the three Pokémon, I was shocked. I knew Polaris was an antagonist for this story like Team Rocket was in the original Pokémon series, but Polaris really proved they aren’t like the bad guys in Saturday morning cartoons. I liked it.

The characters, especially Olivia, were intriguing. I admired Olivia’s desire to follow her father’s footsteps to save the world. A hero isn’t a hero without taking risks, and Olivia was definitely taking some. Do I sense an impending betrayal from Nekou’s side? What an enticing twist!

I liked the details of the battles. I truly felt Matt’s struggle to defeat Nando’s Kricketune as if I was battling that Kricketune myself. I pictured the battle clearly in my head like I was watching it in the anime. I wanted to cheer out loud when Matt defeated Nando. He’ll definitely give Polaris a run for their money.

Wow, this Ghetsis guy sounded evil. He seemed to be one of those bad guys that claims to serve one guy, but actually takes advantage of his master’s trust for his own gains. A very complex villain--I was impressed.

It was too bad I didn’t know the protagonists’ Pokémon that well. Their nicknames confused me, but I knew it wasn’t the nicknames’ fault. If I read the whole story from the beginning, I would’ve found this interaction a lot more endearing.

Wow, that Café Diva was scary good. She definitely deserved her position as the Frontier Brain, because I didn’t expect her to defeat Matt and do so so ferociously. It was a good thing she agreed to talk to him even after his loss. It made her more admirable not only as a trainer, but as a person as well.

And wow, the Team Rocket trio. I never thought Jessie, James, and Meowth would actually be threatening in this story. Not to be mean of course, but we have seen their failed plans in the anime so no one could blame me for being biased.

The relationship between Olivia, Matt, and Nekou intrigued me. It’s a complex relationship that’s worth getting to know, and I plan to be there as the story unfolds.

I greatly enjoyed this chapter. I knew this story would be a good one, and I was not disappointed.

Keep up the good work! I would like the read more ;)
 
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The Great Butler

Hush, keep it down
So I cannot apologize enough for how long it has taken me to get this done. I have reasons, involving a wedding, driving 5 hours in one day, a baby, living in a new environment, having hours of homework, and mostly having a computer without Microsoft Office on it. But the last of these is taken care of, and so (hopefully), I can now be on a proper schedule and actually give reviews. Onto Chapters 3 and 4!

What's important is that you managed to get to it. I hope it's okay if I don't necessarily respond to every point.

Chapter 3


Sounds like a mix between a DS and a GameCube controller :p

It was a Wii U Game Pad in my mind. In the Diamond and Pearl series they used a Wiimote and a Nunchuk with a couple of their robots so I built on that.

I just want to say that this description is really beautiful, yet also simple, so it's not over-the-top. Well done :)

Oh wow, thank you. I'm never confident about description, so hearing that praise is quite meaningful.


Into her blouse[?/i] Uh... where does she keep those Pokéballs? o_o


Sometimes it's better not to ask those types of questions with her. :p


Water Gun? That's the best water starter ever! All of the water types I've had just start out with Tackle and Growl....

I wanted to jump ahead and get started with a bit more pace going right away, to be honest.


Even though Neko likes to be rude and bossy, it's a time like this that shows that she has a sweet side and can be quite motherly.

I think you'll find her to be a lot less simple as a character than she may have initially seemed.


Oshawott does try. I know I overplayed Olivia's bad attitude about him at first, but I'd like to think I salvaged it fairly well.


Oh, typical Team Rocket. You always try those sorts of tactics, and those tactics never quite seem to work XD

You may find yourself surprised.

See? Nekou can be caring AND sensible!
And it is sweet how she is trying to do what's best for Olivia; the car she shows her is just heartwarming ^_^ Though Olivia's attitude....

All I will say here is that I think you're going to be fascinated by what directions their interactions take.

Just how much stuff does she keep in there?!

Like I said, don't ask :p

Nekou is such a boss; preparing to fight while the others are cowering and dropping all immaturity and playfulness when it's time to get serious.

That's what the goal with her personality was: something that's actively adapting and changing at all times. Because she needs to be doing that.

It's a trap!


Okay, well, maybe it wasn't a trap, but the Lillipup did herald danger!

Perhaps some decent fortune too, if you look at the silver lining.

I take back what I said before; releasing Unova Pokémon into Johto was not a good idea.

Well, it's more that it was done haphazardly, I think. There's very much a reason for it having happened this way, though.

Ooh, this is going to make the setting even more tense! Fitting! :D

You think so? I kind of wonder on hindsight if adding that made things a little too hammy.


Matt has prosthetics? If it was mentioned before, I must have missed it.... I guess they're certainly useful in situations like this.

I may have forgotten to mention it before that point in this specific story, but I thought I did say it.

Another interesting touch; I don't often seen special Pokéballs in fanfiction (or Anime, or manga, or anything besides the main games); every time one appears, it just sticks out to me more and I think it's pretty cool.

I do try to mix that up a little. My thought processes were the same as yours on this subject.

I don't know if Bisharp earns the Pawniard's loyalty by bossing them around or threatening them or what, but the devotion they show her is admirable.

It's real loyalty.

Ah, Nekou, using language may not help you in this match, but it sure does bring a smile to my face.

That's something you'll be seeing a lot of. :p

Hm, Nekou's acting a lot differently than before. Did defeating Bisharp calm her down that much?

She bounces back and forth between moods like that a lot.


Mr. Pokémon? :D


Darn, I was wrong :(


At least he's as polite and happy as Mr. Pokémon is!

Don't worry, he comes later.

How does he know his name o_o


No, don't accept that answer! It's never a good thing if he knows your name and hasn't seen you before!

You might be more perceptive than the people living it. :p

Not sure if this merit's an "awww" or is an overly-sappy comment. Though it does make the words, "Do you think those who are dead ever truly leave us?" true (Albus Dumbledore, Harry Potter and the Prisoner of Azkaban. And yes, I do memorize Dumbledore quotes XD).

It's probably both an 'aww' and overly sappy, but Dante tends to be... a little dramatic sometimes.

Something about this comment seems a little... off.

Without saying yes or no, I like that you're actively reading into the text. That's good.

It seems to me that whenever a person can say something like this, they haven't changed as much as they thought they have or they over-dramatize the events. I haven't read your previous stories (sorry!) so I don't know, and he did talk of a person dying (which definitely CAN be a life-changer, and his unease of talking about it is very understandable), but most people aren't as outright as this. He's either matured a lot since then to be able to admit something like this, or he thinks it affected him more than it did (and if I had read your previous installments, I might be able to say which it is....)

It actually did affect him like that. Before it happened, he was kind of naive but generally cheerful even though he had a bit of a depressed streak; watching her die for a reason he thinks was his fault threw him off a proverbial cliff.

That's... a little creepy.

She's just joking really. Or is she?

Sounds a lot like what Dumbledore said of love (dangit, now I'm on a role with Dumbledore sayings....). Which is fitting, as truth and love go hand-in-hand :)

Interesting.

Um, did you mean to press enter?

Yeah, probably not.

Oh Nekou, how we love you.

Words of wisdom. :p

I'm agreeing with Nekou here; he deserved that slap.

Yeah, he did.

YES! The man I've been waiting for! :D

I did promise him.

This was a long chapter, but it had a beautiful ending. At least some things in this fic are happy. Other than the aforementioned comment about Matt, I don't have much else to say. But I'm sure that there will be plenty to say in the chapters to come :)

Yeah, the long chapters are something you're going to have to get used to, unfortunately. I'm glad you really liked it, though.

Sympathy=gone. If having an overly-cheerful character is annoying, then an overly-upset one is even worse. I mean, with your friends doing everything they can to cheer you up, the least you can do is show some gratitude!

I think she's getting through it.

Uh, I'm not sure that this is the best way to go about getting her back in high spirits....

You might be misinterpreting what those censor stars are hiding.

So THAT'S how the PokeCenter makes money!

It's actually more important a point than you think.

I KNEW IT.


HE'S AS EVIL AS HE APPEARS!

Yes, yes he is.

It's amazing how big of a difference the words "as if" can have.

That scene sums up pretty nicely what he's all about, but I think you get that.


I don't know what suffering or issues this woman is going through right now, but the way she shows concern for her child and is just trying to make sure that her child can grow up in a safe world, uninvolved in this fighting, is endearing to see.

Oh man, when you get into her story more... you're going to look back on this and wonder how ominously you could have gotten it.

... Seriously? It's no coincidence that he happened to go to you and tell you people specifically all that information.

No, it's not.

They're wigs? D:

I always kind of figured as much. I have some concept art, really old concept art that has to be of their earliest designs, that shows each of them wearing their hair differently. It always gave me the impression of wigs.

We've barely seen Anthea and Concordia, but they already have more sympathy from me than any other character :(

That won't last forever. Not because of anything Anthea and Concordia did, but because it's going to get so much worse for everyone.

I'm not sure if she's referring to Christian prayer or that of any other religion, but it is heartening to see that in spite of everything they're going through, she still has strength to keep faith and hope.

They're the fictional religion that maybe has been mentioned once or twice already, but that'll become more important going forward.

The evils of urbanization :mad:
Seriously, though, I get where he's coming from. The twon I live in used to be small, with a forest behind my house and everything. Now it's gone, replaced by a road and apartments and a shopping plaza, and several new traffic lights have been put in and the rates of crime have gone up. The Guide Gent's bitterness isn't entirely unjustified.

Precisely. It's going to be a theme going forward, but given his role in the games it felt right to use him to introduce the topic.


I like how distinguishable you made these characters in this bit of dialogue. I don't know Dahlia or Nando at all, but I can already tell their personalities just form how they act during battle and how they treat their Pokemon during it.

Dahlia is the Frontier Brain of this facility in Platinum and HGSS, while Nando is a character from the Diamond and Pearl anime. It helped that they already have very distinct voices in their respective canons.

I know that the ~ should be counted as a grammatical error, but it fits in so perfectly here that I don't complain (and I don't think anyone else will, either).

You're right, though let me say that the intention was to indicate his sing-song voicing of that line. Perhaps that was repetitive and unnecessary given that I said "sang," though.

WHERE did she get a Master Ball from?!


WHERE DID SHE GET A ZAPDOS FROM?!?

Frontier Brains are pretty impressive with their Pokemon in the games; she has the Zapdos in her appearances, but she isn't even the most awe-inspiring one. One of the Emerald Frontier Brains (Anabel, in fact) had Raikou and Latios together, while another had six Legendaries in the Regi and bird trios.

I like this bit. It's clear that Zapdos livese up to its status as a legendary, especially with all of the power its displaying. But you can also tell that it IS Dahlia's Pokemon, and that her Pokemon moves and acts like she does. I'm not sure how to describe it, or if I'm even making much sense, but I like these sort of trainer-Pokemon bonds.

I understand what you mean. Once again, when it comes to Dahlia's mannerisms, she happened to present a very substantial bit of canon to run with. I don't want to sound ungrateful for your praise here, I really don't, but I do think I have to attribute credit where credit's due.

And she never appeared in the anime, which disappoints me.

Ah, typical Nekou XD

In more ways than you yet know.

Silver? :D


It is nice to have Nekou lighten the mood when Silver is there making everything all serious :)

There are some very good reasons why they play off each other so well. But again, in due time.

So... are the trees and plants really there, or do they just appear to be?

I know you found the answer to this question a bit later, but allow me to elaborate a little more on it.

While the landscape elements are technically "holographic" and generated from the computers, while present they are solid until they break. The concept is based on the Mirage System from the Mastermind of Mirage Pokemon OVA.

That's also some good information to know for other reasons for later, fyi.


Oh, shut up.

She gets over it soon.

I don't know why, but Nekou seems like a Gengar person to me. Just a thought.

Very astute analysis.

I like this scene and the whole atmosphere it creates. Everyone is doing what befits them, and it seems like they're all having a good time :) And now I really want some pizza


It's amazing how heartwarming sincerity and small moments like this can be <3

A break for some relaxation is always a good thing, especially in a situation that's going to degenerate rapidly.

Heartwarming bits are always good too.

So, yeah, sorry for not getting to this sooner. Like a lot sooner. A lot a lot sooner >_< I didn't really have much to say about the battle, except that it was enjoyable (and enough to keep my attention to where I wasn't being interrupted by my thoughts and commenting on every little bit). Overall good job :) I'll get right to working on the next chapter! And hopefully it won't take me over a month this time XP

Please, don't worry about how long it took. I'm no saint when it comes to schedules either, but even regardless of that, what matters is that you still enjoyed it. I enjoyed reading your thoughts and I'll look forward to more.
 
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The Great Butler

Hush, keep it down
I owe everyone an apology for how long the next chapter is taking. I cannot promise when it will be done.

As an act of goodwill to tide everyone over, here are the blurbs for the next two chapters. Spoilers, obviously.

Chapter 19

"The Weight of the World (Part 1)"

While Matt and the others learn the truth behind the Oberon and its connection to the Tenganist king AZ, Ghetsis launches Polaris’s operation with his major speech. At the climax of the event, Ghetsis heads to Bell Tower, where a final battle between Team Rocket and Team Plasma takes place.

Chapter 20

"The Weight of the World (Part 2)"

The streets of Ecruteak City descend into chaos. With the hidden powers of the Bell Tower in Ghetsis’s hands, Team Plasma rebels against Polaris and begins the systematic elimination of all threats to Ghetsis’s rule. An uneasy alliance between Matt’s group, Team Rocket, the Tenganist Liberation Front, the Gym Leaders and the Frontier Brains arises in a desperate bid to halt Ghetsis’s plans, but even with the intervention of a powerful and surprising ally, the battle may be one not everyone survives.

Hello there!

You’ve been a great supporter to my story, so I thought I should give you the long-delayed review you rightfully deserve.

Unfortunately, I didn’t have time to read all of the previous chapters, so I’m going to try my best to comment as much as I can on the latest one.

Now the way I review stories is different. Instead of quoting portions of a chapter, I’m going to read the whole chapter and create a review that sums up my thoughts. I thought about quoting, but if I commented on every part that intrigued me, I would write a novel-long review. I apologize if you prefer the latter.

It's good to see you here. I've actually been looking forward to your thoughts ever since we began talking.

Let me say now, while you may be helped by reading the previous chapters (you'll have plenty of time before 18 goes up) your style of reviewing is absolutely fine. What amounts to liveblogging is very time consuming, it's not for everyone. It can take me an entire night to write one review.

In other words, don't worry. All reviewing styles are good.

The beginning of the chapter definitely hooked me in. I never really liked waiting too long for something to happen, so I liked how I was led straight to the action.

I should mention that that's not typical for me; usually I begin with a non-action or a casual part before getting into the real meat of the chapter. This happened because 17 was the Part 2 of a two-part chapter. Just for fair disclosure.

When the people from Polaris abducted the three Pokémon, I was shocked. I knew Polaris was an antagonist for this story like Team Rocket was in the original Pokémon series, but Polaris really proved they aren’t like the bad guys in Saturday morning cartoons. I liked it.

Oh yes, Polaris is completely unlike anything of that sort. What you saw with them stealing the Pokemon is tame for what they do.

If you have to prioritize which past chapters to read, "Sweet Little Lies" and the two parts of "Goldenrod City Under Siege" will help draw those lines on Polaris for you.

The characters, especially Olivia, were intriguing. I admired Olivia’s desire to follow her father’s footsteps to save the world. A hero isn’t a hero without taking risks, and Olivia was definitely taking some. Do I sense an impending betrayal from Nekou’s side? What an enticing twist!

I'm encouraged that you got hooked on the characters even though you jumped in late. You'll definitely enjoy seeing how they got here, if you feel inclined to go ahead and do it.

I liked the details of the battles. I truly felt Matt’s struggle to defeat Nando’s Kricketune as if I was battling that Kricketune myself. I pictured the battle clearly in my head like I was watching it in the anime. I wanted to cheer out loud when Matt defeated Nando. He’ll definitely give Polaris a run for their money.

I do try to visualize the battles as they would play out in the anime, so if that worked, good. I tried to incorporate some creative strategy in that fight.


Wow, this Ghetsis guy sounded evil. He seemed to be one of those bad guys that claims to serve one guy, but actually takes advantage of his master’s trust for his own gains. A very complex villain--I was impressed.

I actually adapted him from how he was in the BW/B2W2 games and it turned out better than I hoped. He was more complex than the usual Pokemon villains in the former, but still had some of the cartoonish typical stuff and fell completely into it in the latter. But by having him have to bristle under Polaris's authority, I was able to create more complexity in him, I think.

It was too bad I didn’t know the protagonists’ Pokémon that well. Their nicknames confused me, but I knew it wasn’t the nicknames’ fault. If I read the whole story from the beginning, I would’ve found this interaction a lot more endearing.

Yeah, that's something I unfortunately can't help with much.

Wow, that Café Diva was scary good. She definitely deserved her position as the Frontier Brain, because I didn’t expect her to defeat Matt and do so so ferociously. It was a good thing she agreed to talk to him even after his loss. It made her more admirable not only as a trainer, but as a person as well.

I had a lot of fun writing her, I admit.

I also try to mix things up a bit; in other words, the heroes don't always win.

And wow, the Team Rocket trio. I never thought Jessie, James, and Meowth would actually be threatening in this story. Not to be mean of course, but we have seen their failed plans in the anime so no one could blame me for being biased.

It's based in canon, actually. They stepped up their competence in the Unova series, changed their outfits and became real villains.

[img139]http://www.psypokes.com/news/images/bw_rocket.jpg[/img139]

It didn't last, but they were meant at first to be directly opposing Team Plasma and pose a serious threat. In the universe this story takes place in, their reversion never happened.

The relationship between Olivia, Matt, and Nekou intrigued me. It’s a complex relationship that’s worth getting to know, and I plan to be there as the story unfolds.

Definitely. I think you will enjoy the ride.

I greatly enjoyed this chapter. I knew this story would be a good one, and I was not disappointed.

Keep up the good work! I would like the read more ;)

Thank you! I hope you will enjoy more as you go. ^^
 

Starlight Aurate

Just a fallen star
Man, I really need to review more often... sorry this takes so long x_x

Chapter 5
A blazing orange crept over the land as the sun rose the next morning, spreading peals of warm light over the autumn trees of the Tohjo Continent. Cherrygrove City glittered in the shine; for as depressing a place as the city could be, the first minutes of daylight brought even Cherrygrove’s dull streets to life.
Have I mentioned yet how much I really love your opening descriptions? Because I really love your opening descriptions.

None of them noticed Jessie, James, Meowth and Wobbuffet – all disguised in their trenchcoats – slip in right behind them.
Yay, Wobbuffet is here! :D

“I guess so,” Nekou answered. She puffed up her cheeks and exaggerated her facial expression to act like she was frustrated at being told to go somewhere, even though she fully knew this was normal and to be expected.
Ah, I hate people who are like that. It's definitely very much like Nekou, though.

“Now, I think she has a point.” Surprisingly, it was Dante coming to Nekou’s defense.
Whaaaaaaaaaaat?

“Maybe she worded her encouragement poorly, but she is right in that you cannot progress if you are stuck here.”
Well, fair enough.

Bunny assisted Olivia in balancing on her crutches, while Nekou ate from a bag of potato chips she’d gotten from somewhere.
I love the end of this sentence ^_^ Somehow, saying Nekou got them "From somewhere" actually adds more flavor to text :D

Meowth gave a nod of approval, then added, “We got five pairs of eyes on that old man and the space rock. They ain’t going anywhere.”
.... Five?
>_>
<_<
O_O I smell something bad coming.

Spotting Nekou, Bunny, Olivia and Dante sitting in the front row along with Marie and Olivia’s Minccino gave him a burst of energy, especially when he saw Olivia with her mind seemingly off her broken leg.
Not sure if "seemingly" is there because this is Matt's POV and he doesn't actually know what Olivia is feeling, or if it's there because Olivia doesn't have her mind off her broken leg. If it's the former, then that's sweet :) If the latter, then that's sad :(
If the Battle Arcade was a facility of luck, Matt wasn’t having much of it, as even though Tony bent back in an attempt to let the Water Pulse sail over him, it still caught the edge of his steel horns and pulled him back until he fell over completely.
I find it odd that something as heavy as an Aggron would topple over just from having the edge of his horns get caught in a Water Pulse. I know that I don't know how big and thick the pulses of water are, but I would normally have expected them to just sail through the them.

She spotted Dante sitting rigidly in the next seat, staring intently at the battle as if he was intending to memorize every single detail of it. At first disturbed by this, she quickly brushed it off and decided to pay it no mind.
You should realize by now that if something like that bothers you, don't just brush it off >-<
Though now I wonder as to why Dante is suddenly so serious....

“Fueled by Swift Swim, Dahlia’s Ludicolo lands a devastating blow! Let’s see how the challenger manages to deal with this development… or will he even be able to?”
I know that Swift Swim makes a Pokemon twice as fast in rain, but I didn't think would culminate in materializing in and out of place.

“Give me another skyward Blizzard!” Matt raised his arm and pointed upward for emphasis after
giving this command.
You accidentally split this into two lines ^_^

Returning the Net Ball to her belt, Dahlia kept her hand at her waist while turning a suddenly fiery glare at Matt. “As for you, I’ve gone easy on you until this point."
I really don't like how people say "I've gone easy on you," when their Pokemon are fainted. They're Pokemon are living beings, but they're going to let them get hurt just so they can "go easy" on a challenger? This apparently isn't the case, as Dahlia clearly loves her Ludicolo very much, in which case I assume she's bluffing--but that's still an odd thing to bluff about. Meh, I'm just ranting at this point :/

“Quickly, Nikola, use Blizzard!”
I'm not one to normally comment on battle tactics, but even that seems like a really not smart thing to do >_<

“Now that’s just overkill,” Bunny reacted with disgust.
My thoughts exactly. Though it does show that Zapdos really is Dahlia's Pokemon.

“Good thinking, Patrick!” Matt called out in compliment, a wide smile coming across his face. “It has nowhere to run, so use Scald!”


“Toss that thing now!” Dahlia tore back in response.
And here, you left two spaces between the paragraphs.

In frustration, Patrick blindly spat out yet another Scald with no orders, missing Zapdos by a figurative mile.
I like how you specified "figurative mile," so that we can get an idea of how far Patrick was off without being all "but the battlefield wouldn't actually be a mile long!!11!"

The end of the battle was especially cool; I like how Dahlia had Zapdos use a combination attack, and Matt was able to turn it against her. It also made me happy to see that Earthquake worked against Zapdos while on the ground; thoug hI know Zapdos is a Flying-type and Ground-type moves wouldn't affect it, I always thought that if a Pokemon was touching the ground, then those moves would have some effect.

Briefly hesitating when he was forced to consider just what Olivia’s dream was, Matt slowly turned to the others.
Ouch. Kinda kills the good mood :|

Reaching into a pocket inside her shirt, Dahlia withdrew a golden coin and flipped it to Matt, who caught it with his right hand.
Looks like Dahlia likes to keep stuff in the same place Nekou does....

“But why would you want to know?” A hint of suspicion flavored Nekou’s inquiry. Harboring a dislike for not knowing what was happening, she felt uncomfortably on edge.
It's nice to see that she's genre-savvy enough to be suspicious about stuff like this.

“And I have already received it.”

The stern, powerful voice of the man on the screen brought both Zager and Pierce into line nearly instantly. Both the younger agent and the older scientist dropped down onto one knee and set their right hands over their hearts while Ariana stood by.
Woah. Things got really serious really fast. Also, Zager's and Pierce's salutes show that this is an organization with way too much power over its members.

“Dispense with the formalities,” Giovanni ordered, waving his hand to dismiss their actions.
Kinda hard to dispense with formalities when you use language as sophisticated as that :p

"I am a perfect being, the perfect ruler for a world that shall be shaped into perfection!”
Using variations of the word "perfect" three times in this sentence really doesn't make you seem threatening, Ghetsis. And being in a rage and super serious about it just makes him come across as silly--though probably not to Concordia and Anthea.

“You have to tell her the truth about what happened to Rich before she goes too far down the rabbit hole to be saved.”
I cannot agree with Nekou enough right here.

Once again, since so much of the chapter is on a battle, I don't really have much to say about it. I appreciate the fact that you understand that battles have to be analyzed and drawn-out, not just "Pokemon A uses Flamethrower. It wasn't very effective. Pokemon B uses Water Pulse. Pokemon A fainted!" I really like all of the detail and thought you put into them, as the battle characterizes the Pokemon and their interactions with it as well as the trainers and how they deal with it. Good job!

The ending of this chapter was really sweet; I like it when Nekou brings out her kind side, by letting Matt know how important he really is and celebrating with a bit of beer :) This was a fun chapter! Now, onto the next!

Chapter 6
The alcohol took its toll on Matt, though, and he soon felt tired. It was not long after that that he simply fell asleep.
Either Nekou brought a lot of beer, or Matt is quite a lightweight.

On the upside, though, he slept well and felt completely reinvigorated the next day.
Nevermind; I suppose it was just from the day's excitement that made him pass out. Looks like he wasn't on a hangover.

He stood still, unable to rid himself of a lingering concern that something just couldn’t possibly be right about Olivia’s miraculous recovery.
No, you definitely should be concerned about this. There are just way too many strange things happening here for you all to shrug off as nothing.

"We’re tracking the Meteonite right now, and we have several teams ready to go to secure it, which I intend to personally lead."
Ohhhh crap. I smell trouble coming.

“It will get done, I swear it."
This sounds like me, every time I promise to review someone's work XP

Further up the lightly wooded road of Route 30, Renzo and his Drowzee were engaged in a battle against a wild Pokémon while three younger children watched from the sidelines.
Shouldn't "lightly wooded" have a hyphen between the words? Or no?

Renzo pulled a red-and-white sphere from the inner part of his tattered poncho and threw it at the Pokémon he’d just finished fighting. The Poké Ball cracked open upon hitting Cottonee’s body, allowing its inner technology to convert the Pokémon into energy before pulling her in. It then sealed up and fell to the ground, where before the eyes of Renzo and his Psychic-type, it rocked and shuddered.
I notice you're being a lot more descriptive here. Not that you weren't before; it's just that you've already shown us Pokemon coming out of Pokeballs, but you didn't really dwell on it. Here, you analyze every aspect of it and describe it as if someone was witnessing it for the first time. I don't really ahve a complain or anything, I just thought I'd point it out since I noticed it and maybe you're altering your writing style to match the current character's POV.
Eh, I just thought it was interesting.

Lowering himself so he wound not appear as intimidating to the small Pokémon, Renzo extended a hand and waited as Cottonee nervously examined it.
I think you meant "would," not "wound." ^_^

“Please, do not interfere.” Renzo’s request prompted the bold-tempered boy to stand down. “This is a burden I must bear alone, teaching this undeserving swine her place in the world.”
Considering Renzo's manner of speaking, especially here, it really does match having an overall more descriptive style!

Olivia’s Water-type Pokémon appeared on the path in a burst of bright light. He did not notice his soon-to-be-foe right away; instead, he started playing with the shell on his stomach by turning it to different angles. Once he finally did notice Gurdurr standing over him, though, he quickly became serious. Like his trainer, he was nervous to be facing the menacing Gurdurr, but he had resolved to prove his worth to Olivia.
I love it when Olivia's Oshawott comes out. It's so cute, and when he comes from his Pokeball he's obviously not immediately interested in battling, but the way he seeks admiration from Olivia is cute, too--and a little sad.

“Oh no, Oshawott!” Olivia cried out, her earlier feelings of dread now manifesting as sadness and fear for Oshawott’s safety.
It's about time she showed some concern for him!

Nikolai's appearance was just more surprising (for me, at least) than anything else, and it seemed to come out of nowhere--but after getting through 6 chapters of this, I know that everything has a reason for it, and that his timing was most likely not random ;)

Reaching into his coat, Matt took out a pocke****ch, which he opened.
Ahahahaha XD I guess the best thing you could do here is to separate "pocket" and "watch."

“I see… there aren’t many others like me. I want to use my power to… encourage humans and Pokémon to live together in harmony. This is all I can think of… please allow me to meet the Pokémon each of you possess.”
I just realized (because I am slow and oblivious)--is this N? The guy that Ghetsis is going after? :eek:

Out on the road, Nikolai seemed to have a childlike sense of wonder
Yep, it definitely is.... dang I'm slow.
Dante was already walking to the door of Mr. Pokémon’s home, while Nekou was spending her time looking at the trees surrounding the road.
Normally, I would expect this to be Dante to be doing what he thought was more important and Nekou to have been bored with the proceedings. With the past events, though, I take it that Nekou is on the alert for intruders (possibly TR?) and that Dante is dealing with the Meteonite.

“Look at that. Look what the feminists caused, that wench over there with her body hanging out everywhere.”
Would it be bad to say that I agree with Mr. Pokemon here a teensy bit? I don't remember what Nekou is wearing, but I don't like seeing girls with their "[bodies] hanging out everywhere" either ^_^ It's his first appearance, and he's already giving off the Grumpy Old Man vibe. I love it!

Nekou thrust her right arm out in front of Olivia and pulled her switchblade from her blouse with the left.
Nekou should probably find a safer place for her switchblade than her blouse XD

Though I like the battle with Chaos, I have to admit that the dialogue is a bit cheesy. It fits to an extent, though, since what we've seen so far from N and the Shadow Triad, it's not out-of-character for them to behave the way they are. Just lines like, “I am… the unbreakable steel of Chaos… " and "Cease these foolish games... Lord Ghetsis has grown impatient," feel cliched.

“I come out here to see what all the racket is, and what do I find? Nothing more than some white-haired ninja scoundrel making trouble for some innocents. It’s rightly disappointing.”
I definitely wouldn't be disappointed in seeing a white-haired Ninja ^_^; I guess Dante is just difficult to please.

I don't have much more to say on this; I really liked the end of the chapter, as it was action-packed and revealed quite a few things! I was upset that Mr. Pokemon was a Polaris member, but hey, that just makes him a more interesting character! I don't know who this Mercury is, but she seems like a boss, and Jessie and James's determination to get Meowth back was endearing :) Sorry about my obvious obliviousness to how the plot and characters of Black and White are; some of the comments I made were just because I couldn’t think of anything else to say ._. And sorry about commenting on your grammatical errors and pointing out stuff that I thought was cheesy, as I know this was written years ago and anything that I have to say has already been said. But anyway, other than the quips I had, this was a fun read! Good job!
 

The Great Butler

Hush, keep it down
Man, I really need to review more often... sorry this takes so long x_x

It's perfectly fine, please do not worry.

Chapter 5

Have I mentioned yet how much I really love your opening descriptions? Because I really love your opening descriptions.

Thank you. I do try to set a scene the best I can.

Ah, I hate people who are like that. It's definitely very much like Nekou, though.

It's all in good fun, really. Her personality is meant to be exaggerated and tough to pin down.


Whaaaaaaaaaaat?


Well, fair enough.

I had to smile at your reaction there.

I love the end of this sentence ^_^ Somehow, saying Nekou got them "From somewhere" actually adds more flavor to text :D

She is a mystery.

.... Five?
>_>
<_<
O_O I smell something bad coming.

Jessie, James, Meowth, Pierce and someone else are the five pairs.

But you are right about something bad coming. It wouldn't be me any other way :p

Not sure if "seemingly" is there because this is Matt's POV and he doesn't actually know what Olivia is feeling, or if it's there because Olivia doesn't have her mind off her broken leg. If it's the former, then that's sweet :) If the latter, then that's sad :(

It's the former. "Seemingly" is there because he doesn't have a way of clearly knowing exactly what her thoughts are.

I find it odd that something as heavy as an Aggron would topple over just from having the edge of his horns get caught in a Water Pulse. I know that I don't know how big and thick the pulses of water are, but I would normally have expected them to just sail through the them.

The reasoning for that was twofold. It was to emphasize how strong the attack was, as well as to show that even though it was not a square hit it still was super-effective (as Aggron is still part Rock-type.)

I know that Swift Swim makes a Pokemon twice as fast in rain, but I didn't think would culminate in materializing in and out of place.

It wasn't literally teleporting, it was moving so fast that it appeared to be invisible.

You accidentally split this into two lines ^_^

My word processor ate that line there for some reason, I try to avoid that when I can.

I really don't like how people say "I've gone easy on you," when their Pokemon are fainted. They're Pokemon are living beings, but they're going to let them get hurt just so they can "go easy" on a challenger? This apparently isn't the case, as Dahlia clearly loves her Ludicolo very much, in which case I assume she's bluffing--but that's still an odd thing to bluff about. Meh, I'm just ranting at this point :/

It's probably bluster, if nothing else. The way I look at it, mind games and trying to psych out your opponent are also major parts of any competition.

My thoughts exactly. Though it does show that Zapdos really is Dahlia's Pokemon.

They really are in touch with each other, I think. Zapdos goes hard because Dahlia goes hard.

I like how you specified "figurative mile," so that we can get an idea of how far Patrick was off without being all "but the battlefield wouldn't actually be a mile long!!11!"

I probably didn't need to do it, but you're right, it does make the narrative a little clearer.

The end of the battle was especially cool; I like how Dahlia had Zapdos use a combination attack, and Matt was able to turn it against her. It also made me happy to see that Earthquake worked against Zapdos while on the ground; thoug hI know Zapdos is a Flying-type and Ground-type moves wouldn't affect it, I always thought that if a Pokemon was touching the ground, then those moves would have some effect.

Agreed. Obviously the games have to simplify the physics, but I definitely think it makes sense for Ground-type moves to be able to affect Pokemon that are touching the ground.

Anyway, thank you for your kind words. I very much enjoyed writing that battle.

Ouch. Kinda kills the good mood :|

General rule - don't get too used to happiness.

Looks like Dahlia likes to keep stuff in the same place Nekou does....

They are pretty similar. :p

It's nice to see that she's genre-savvy enough to be suspicious about stuff like this.

She's got a good reason to be as savvy as she is.

Woah. Things got really serious really fast. Also, Zager's and Pierce's salutes show that this is an organization with way too much power over its members.

The salutes and such are more about respect than power at this point.

Using variations of the word "perfect" three times in this sentence really doesn't make you seem threatening, Ghetsis. And being in a rage and super serious about it just makes him come across as silly--though probably not to Concordia and Anthea.

What I was doing here was emphasizing a few traits exhibited by Ghetsis in the games, namely his obsession with perfection and vain self image (which I borrowed directly from his text in the games) and the way his megalomania borders on actual mental illness. It does come across as silly sounding, but that much is a little difficult to avoid when trying to stay true to the games with him - you have to just put it in context, I think.

I cannot agree with Nekou enough right here.

That's another thing that's surprising about her - she really is a lot more perceptive and intelligent than one might think.

Once again, since so much of the chapter is on a battle, I don't really have much to say about it. I appreciate the fact that you understand that battles have to be analyzed and drawn-out, not just "Pokemon A uses Flamethrower. It wasn't very effective. Pokemon B uses Water Pulse. Pokemon A fainted!" I really like all of the detail and thought you put into them, as the battle characterizes the Pokemon and their interactions with it as well as the trainers and how they deal with it. Good job!

Thank you very much. ^^

As I've said to others, the way I try to portray the battles is to take inspiration from the better ones shown in the anime (the Grand Festival and Pokemon League in the Sinnoh series are great for that) while also incorporating game mechanics, such as what you saw in the Dahlia battle.

The ending of this chapter was really sweet; I like it when Nekou brings out her kind side, by letting Matt know how important he really is and celebrating with a bit of beer :) This was a fun chapter! Now, onto the next!

I love getting to write character interactions, but theirs especially. I think they complement each other quite well.

Chapter 6

Either Nekou brought a lot of beer, or Matt is quite a lightweight.


Nevermind; I suppose it was just from the day's excitement that made him pass out. Looks like he wasn't on a hangover.

It's actually a little bit of both.

No, you definitely should be concerned about this. There are just way too many strange things happening here for you all to shrug off as nothing.

Yeah, he really should be. If anything, though, I think he's trying to suppress what he knows is true to escape the fear.

Ohhhh crap. I smell trouble coming.

Yes, yes you do.

Shouldn't "lightly wooded" have a hyphen between the words? Or no?

Personally, I don't think so.


I notice you're being a lot more descriptive here. Not that you weren't before; it's just that you've already shown us Pokemon coming out of Pokeballs, but you didn't really dwell on it. Here, you analyze every aspect of it and describe it as if someone was witnessing it for the first time. I don't really ahve a complain or anything, I just thought I'd point it out since I noticed it and maybe you're altering your writing style to match the current character's POV.
Eh, I just thought it was interesting.

I did it there because it was also an important scene setup line.

Considering Renzo's manner of speaking, especially here, it really does match having an overall more descriptive style!

An interesting interpretation, I'd say.

I love it when Olivia's Oshawott comes out. It's so cute, and when he comes from his Pokeball he's obviously not immediately interested in battling, but the way he seeks admiration from Olivia is cute, too--and a little sad.


It's about time she showed some concern for him!

I did promise some development on their front, and I hope I didn't disappoint. I have plenty more up my sleeve for them, and yes, the idea of "it's cute and a little sad" is apt.

Nikolai's appearance was just more surprising (for me, at least) than anything else, and it seemed to come out of nowhere--but after getting through 6 chapters of this, I know that everything has a reason for it, and that his timing was most likely not random ;)

While the timing wasn't random, and everything does have a reason for happening, I should mention that a trait of Nikolai's is his habit of making sudden, unexpected entrances and exits. On that front, it was deliberate.

Ahahahaha XD I guess the best thing you could do here is to separate "pocket" and "watch."

....for as long as this chapter has been up this is literally the first time I ever had any idea that happened. At least it's the first time I can remember it being brought up. I guess I'm going to have to fix it into two words in future chapters as I write them.

I just realized (because I am slow and oblivious)--is this N? The guy that Ghetsis is going after? :eek:


Yep, it definitely is.... dang I'm slow.

Don't worry too much about it, you figured it out and that's what matters. There may be some backstory to why he is "Nikolai" now that you might need filled in for you later, though. We can talk about that when we get to it.

Normally, I would expect this to be Dante to be doing what he thought was more important and Nekou to have been bored with the proceedings. With the past events, though, I take it that Nekou is on the alert for intruders (possibly TR?) and that Dante is dealing with the Meteonite.

You're half right. Dante is going about his work, but Nekou is just getting wrapped up in the scenery.

Would it be bad to say that I agree with Mr. Pokemon here a teensy bit? I don't remember what Nekou is wearing, but I don't like seeing girls with their "[bodies] hanging out everywhere" either ^_^ It's his first appearance, and he's already giving off the Grumpy Old Man vibe. I love it!

If that's how you feel, that's fine. Nekou's not exactly the kind of person everyone would be comfortable with, so agreeing with the principle of what Mr. Pokemon is saying here isn't unreasonable at all.

I decided to portray Mr. Pokemon this way because he's not a major character and I thought it would be amusing to have him basically be a cranky old man. Honestly, the original inspiration for the idea was to make him a parody along the lines of Kenji from Katawa Shoujo.

Nekou should probably find a safer place for her switchblade than her blouse XD

Suggesting that it actually worries her, what could happen. :p

Though I like the battle with Chaos, I have to admit that the dialogue is a bit cheesy. It fits to an extent, though, since what we've seen so far from N and the Shadow Triad, it's not out-of-character for them to behave the way they are. Just lines like, “I am… the unbreakable steel of Chaos… " and "Cease these foolish games... Lord Ghetsis has grown impatient," feel cliched.

The overarching reason for the lines being the way they were there is that the Shadow Triad are way overly dramatic. That "steel" comment, though - that's actually a leftover relic from something I had planned to do that I dropped after writing it. Originally, they were going to much later get one of the Regi trio each. Registeel would have been Chaos's, hence the "unbreakable steel" comment, while Regirock would be Darkness's (with his introduction being "stone cold darkness") and Regice as Pestilence's (though I never thought of an introduction phrase for him.)

I definitely wouldn't be disappointed in seeing a white-haired Ninja ^_^; I guess Dante is just difficult to please.

He has his reasons.

I don't have much more to say on this; I really liked the end of the chapter, as it was action-packed and revealed quite a few things! I was upset that Mr. Pokemon was a Polaris member, but hey, that just makes him a more interesting character! I don't know who this Mercury is, but she seems like a boss, and Jessie and James's determination to get Meowth back was endearing :) Sorry about my obvious obliviousness to how the plot and characters of Black and White are; some of the comments I made were just because I couldn’t think of anything else to say ._. And sorry about commenting on your grammatical errors and pointing out stuff that I thought was cheesy, as I know this was written years ago and anything that I have to say has already been said. But anyway, other than the quips I had, this was a fun read! Good job!

Mr. Pokemon being a Polaris member was very carefully orchestrated to teach a lesson. That lesson? Anyone, and I mean anyone, could be Polaris. They are everywhere.

Mercury is not a canon character, she's an original character. But yeah, she's definitely got a presence. The "Meowth rescue" arc will be an ongoing storyline for Jessie and James for quite a while, so I'm glad to see you're on board for it.

And please, don't apologize! Everything is absolutely fine. I'm very pleased with your reviews. You do them quite well.
 

The Great Butler

Hush, keep it down
And here we go, the long-awaited Ecruteak arc begins. Buckle up, the ride gets a little bumpy now.

Special thanks to JXValentine for the assistance she provided on the characterization of Bill, Audrey and Mako.

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CHAPTER 18: Winter of Discontent

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Olivia went to bed after about an hour and a half of watching her old home videos, or that had been what she had told Matt and Bunny. In reality, she was hiding under the blankets of her bed in the fetal position, clutching the sky-blue Pokégear Nekou purchased for her when they arrived in Ecruteak.

A single photograph was on the phone’s screen, and she could not pull her eyes from it. She’d taken it as a keepsake. In it, she and Monroe were smiling and making peace signs directly into the camera, while Nekou was visible in the background pulling up her collar to avoid having her picture taken.

“What am I doing?” she mumbled to herself. “I can’t go back. There’s no going back… just remembering stuff that already happened means all the work I’ve put in to come this far was for nothing.” Olivia curled into an even tighter ball. “But then what am I supposed to do with myself? If I can’t feel good in what happened in the past, then what is there?”

Suddenly, a realization hit her, thanks to her continuing to stare at the photograph. She took a single sharp breath as the thought filled her mind, then let a small smile reach her face.

“That’s why I got you after all,” she said to the Pokégear. “The past is just parts of the future that already happened. I’ll make that future even better than what happened for me before, and I’ll keep every last bit of it. That’s what I’ll do.”

Satisfied with her plan, she shut off the phone. Its light faded into darkness, leaving her alone with her thoughts as she let herself drift off into sleep.

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At the same time that Olivia was musing to herself, Nekou was similarly awake. Unlike Olivia, however, Nekou wasn’t keeping herself from sleeping. She was so overwhelmed by everything that had happened that she couldn’t rest.

“Aw, ****,” she swore, realizing that she’d drawn every last drop from the beer can in her hand. She flung it across the room, where it crashed into a pile with five other empty cans, then pulled another from under her sheets and opened it. “Of all the ****ing nights I can’t just drink myself into oblivion…”

Nekou spent several minutes rocking back and forth on the edge of her bed, drinking the beer as she stared blankly at the wall. Her breathing grew increasingly shallow with time. Once the can ran empty, she threw it into the pile and threw herself back on the bed. She rolled around to tangle her hair around herself, ultimately settling on her back. Had someone walked in and seen the suggestive position she was in, she wouldn’t have even cared.

“****, ****, ****… why do you gotta make this **** so ****ing hard?” The image of Matt admitting his demons to her earlier that night refused to leave her mind. Seeing him in such a way forced her to confront the thoughts underneath her sarcastic facade. Though she hated to admit it to herself, she pitied him and identified with him on top of her existing sympathies for Olivia. “This would be so much ****ing easier if I didn’t have to see my own ****ing face in you! There’s a reason I hate having my ****ing picture taken…”

Nekou rolled over on her side and fumbled out yet another beer can, which she opened.

“Never get attached,” she recited to herself. “Never sympathize. All who are not Team Rocket are against Team Rocket. Steal Pokémon for profit. Exploit Pokémon for profit. All Pokémon exist for the glory of Team Rocket. Raid on the city, knock out, evil tusks. All that **** they drive into you in training, right, Maman? And yet…”

A sudden shaking overtook her body as she opened her mouth to gasp for air. Her eyes widened as they sunk back into her head.

“****… I don’t know what to do anymore. It used to always be so easy. Go in, steal what’s necessary, go in a closet with some **** at a bar if you have to, get out and you win. I’m in too deep, I can’t get out of this. This job was too long. I can’t get out now. I know what I’m trained to do, and I know what I have to do… but I can’t bring myself to hurt them!” Nekou snapped the can across the room to join the others. “****! No matter how I think about this, I have to ****ing do something I don’t want to!”

“Sometimes it’s best to not think about what to do,” Ariana’s voice echoed in her head. “Put aside all thoughts when you have to and do what you want to.”

“Olivia doesn’t deserve to be in the middle of this ****, she’s just a kid… but… but I like her, for real. I have to help her. She never deserved any of this. And Matt…” Nekou bit her lip and arched herself upward slightly. “Don’t you think if I could, I would have already? I’m ****ing compromised enough already, it’s not worth losing all I know just for the thrill of breaking some little scout’s morals!” As the rush subsided, Nekou started gasping for air again. “What the **** is wrong with me… I’m actually scared of some little sadsack shithead like him?”

After several minutes of deep breathing, Nekou managed to stabilize herself.

“This is who you are,” she said to herself. “This is the life you know. Take whatever the **** you want and make your life what you deserve. Now just figure out what exactly it is you want here.”

-:-

Though the next morning in Ecruteak City was a sunny one, the air carried a bitter chill. The Team Rocket members assembled in the nearby woods - Jessie, James, Meowth, Pierce, Ada, Trevor, Ariana, Petrel and Proton - all were forced to wear their coats to stand the cold. They stood rigidly at attention as Giovanni addressed them, fighting against showing even a slight shiver.

“I do not have to repeat again the importance of this mission,” the Team Rocket leader sternly explained to his followers with his arms crossed behind his back. “Operation Atlas must lead to the downfall of Polaris. Otherwise, the odds of Team Rocket’s continued survival will become zero, and there will be none left to stand against their plans of destruction.”

These words brought a somber wave over those they were directed at. Though the importance of their mission was something they were all aware of, the fact that the time was now at hand ate at their nerves. James couldn’t help himself from rocking back and forth slightly as he gripped his arm, while Jessie could feel her hands sweating under her gloves. Pierce remained stone-faced as he often did, but had his fists clenched so tightly his fingers were pressing into his palms. The only one not standing in some level of formality was Ariana, who seemed dazed.

“Now, I will give you your respective assignments for this stage of the mission. Jessie, James, Meowth, you three will be my personal bodyguards.” As soon as they heard this task, their eyes brightened. “I plan to enter the Battle Hall tournament as the Gym Leader of Viridian City to provide an alibi and misdirect from what we really plan to do. You three will be planted in the audience to observe the proceedings.”

“You got it, Boss!” Meowth beamed in response. “We’ll guard you so good not even air gets past!”

“Wouldn’t that be a little much?” James sarcastically said to Meowth.

“You know what I meant!”

“It’s like what we did at the Battle Arcade, but for the Boss,” Jessie realized before confidently adding, “We got this, no problem.”

Turning his head, Giovanni next directed, “Pierce, you, Proton and Petrel will go undercover to scout out Central Square, where Polaris’s speech will be held tomorrow. See if you can observe and document anything about their movements that may give us an advantage in the battle to come.”

“Sir!” all three of them exclaimed at once.

“And finally…” before finishing his statement, Giovanni walked over to stand directly in front of Ariana and stare right into her eyes. “...Ariana, you will stay here with Ada and Trevor to maintain a base of operations. Continue communications with Zager and Rosalie to gather intelligence from RChannel and our satellite.”

“Uh, Boss, a-about that…” Ada stuttered. She opened her mouth to say more, but no words came out. Instead, she keyed a command into her laptop, using it to create a holographic projection screen with Zager’s face on it a few inches away.

“Zager?” Giovanni wondered. “Why have you contacted us now?”

“You must listen to me,” Zager said, his voice filled with urgency. “I have conducted preliminary analysis on the drive retrieved from the Battle Factory. While I must investigate it more to understand what exactly they were doing, Polaris was exploiting the Battle Factory to accrue massive amounts of data on Pokémon battling. I’m not sure what they intend to use it for, but everything - every Pokémon generated, every move used, every battle fought - all of it was recorded and sent to their Adenosine Base for some purpose. And that Adenosine Base… I’ve figured out where it is.”

Zager waited to continue until he saw that all of the assembled Team Rocket members, including Giovanni, were looking at him.

“Based on data in the drive, combined with the likely track that the ship was taking, the Adenosine Base is the Altru Northstar oil rig in the Whirl Islands.”

“Are you serious?” Trevor gasped. “There’s no way that’s possible, right?”

“Someone want to explain what this means?” Jessie demanded.

“Based on this analysis of the ship’s course,” Ada started to explain, “Zager’s guess is likely right. Unless we don’t know something, the Altru Northstar is the only facility anywhere in that area that could host laboratories of the kind they’d need. It’s a massive oil drilling facility that was built over the Whirl Islands several years ago when a huge deposit was found there. The thing is, while the rig itself was designed by Altru Inc., in order to cut down on overhead costs, they avoided having to send staff all the way from Almia by partnering with the Angel Corporation in a profit-sharing deal. In other words, Altru built it, the Angel Corporation runs it.”

“Runs it?” Petrel said. “You mean it was still open?”

“It was… it was never closed.”

“Then Polaris may have infiltrated the Angel Corporation at the highest levels,” Giovanni decided, “if they’re operating a laboratory on that oil rig. We have to acknowledge the possibility that Polaris is much more well funded than we initially thought.”

“I’ll continue my work,” Zager said before the transmission ended.

“That must underline the urgency of our mission,” Giovanni told the others with his eyes closed. “We are facing an enemy that may have the power of one of the world’s largest corporations in their pocket. If that’s the case, we must consider that wherever we go, Polaris has eyes on us. Remember that they are not just a pharmaceutical company. They have their hands in literally every large industry on Earth. We must hit hard and fast. The only way to defeat a giant is to be too small for it to strike. Now, to your respective positions. This will be the most glorious time in Team Rocket history!”

“Hail Giovanni!” they all cried, snapping to attention.

-:-

“All our preparations are in place, Lady Finansielle.” Ghetsis's fist shook as he looked up at Finansielle’s face on his screen. He loathed addressing her with respect, but he wasn’t going to risk his plans to act on his true opinion of her. “Tomorrow is the day. The fire of Polaris’s ambition will burn Ecruteak down before spreading to this entire nation!”

“The fire of our ambition or of yours?” Finansielle said, knowing she was taunting him. “Just kidding. What of Team Rocket and those trash terrorists?”

“I do not anticipate Team Rocket giving me much trouble. Even if they try to stage an attack even bigger than the one on Goldenrod, they’re dealing with me, not my useless henchmen. As for the Tenganists…” Ghetsis’s mouth twisted into a wicked smirk as his eye glittered in the light of the screen. “...I will take great delight in tearing them limb from limb and burning the survivors just as they burned their witches. Let them try their worst on me. I will relish the chance to destroy them all.”

Finansielle hesitated before she spoke again, but Ghetsis was too far into his violent fantasy to even notice. “Don’t screw it up,” she warned, before adding, “Of course, I don’t have to tell you that. I know you won’t.”

At that point, Finansielle disappeared from the screen. Finally free to release his anger, Ghetsis slammed his fist down on the armrest of the chair, then banged his cane against the floor repeatedly.

“Lord Ghetsis!” Darkness interrupted Ghetsis’s tantrum, appearing next to him. “Everything’s set. We are waiting for your order.”

“Excellent. Just one more day and I’ll finally get what’s mine…”

-:-

Shortly after her conversation with Ghetsis, Finansielle was conferencing with Colress via the video screen on the control panel of his airship.

“I just had some words with Ghetsis,” she said. “I don’t know if I can rely on him. I don’t trust him as far as I can throw him.”

“Don’t you worry, Lady Finansielle, I’ll keep him in line.” Colress smiled smugly and pushed up his visor. “Ghetsis is too big for his silly black britches. He only sees one outcome, complete domination in his own name. He fails to see the nobility of our work. Since he considers Pokémon to be nothing but his tools, he doesn’t realize what we can really accomplish by drawing out their true strength.”

“Remember your role, Colress. You’re going there to observe and document everything that happens.”

“And I’ll be there in just a few minutes to do exactly that. I’ll be sure to gather up some fantastic battle data while I’m at it.”

-:-

The Prophet was standing outside the entrance to the Sinjoh Ruins cave, her robes and the coat underneath shielding her from the cold. She was with one of her followers, a young woman who wore a robe that matched her flowing, silvery hair.

“You’re doing well,” the Prophet told her, setting a hand on her shoulder as she remained locked in her Transcendence prayer. “Your power is important to what we’re going to do. Tell me what kind of weather we’ll be expecting for the operation.”

“I… I see cold, I’m sure of that. Cold and… clear… it should be clear…”

The young woman could sustain her focus no longer and collapsed into her leader’s arms. The Prophet gently stroked her head.

“That’s good. It’s more than enough. Go rest up before we have to go.”

Jacob appeared in the entrance to the cave just as the follower entered. He looked back at her in confusion, then turned back to the Prophet.

“What was all that about?” he asked, shivering. “Who is she?”

“Her name is Sylpha. She’s one of the newest Tenganists I’ve taken into my protection…” The Prophet looked away from Jacob, unwilling to let him see the shame in her face. “Her village was one of the last Ghetsis destroyed. She’s just a kid, she doesn’t deserve to be caught up in all this…”

“What were you doing out here, though?”

“Sylpha’s Transcendence, we call it ‘The Forecaster.’ She can see upcoming weather patterns, but because she only recently developed her powers, she can’t see beyond a day or two at the most into the future. I needed to know what kind of weather is going to be in Ecruteak City tomorrow, because war is coming between us and Polaris.”

“Is there any way I can…”

“No,” the Prophet cut him off. “You can’t stop me from going through with this. Ghetsis and all of Polaris will pay their price for what they did to me… to us.”

“Then let me come along!” Jacob begged.

“Even if I was willing to do that, which I’m not, why would you even want to catch yourself up in all this? You will have to return to prison when this is over to continue serving your time for the murders you committed, yet you’re willing to make it worse by joining our terrorist war against Polaris?”

“Look at me,” Jacob said, spreading his arms to allow his ragged clothing to drape on his thin body. “I’m an old man. I haven’t got long left anyway. I’ve lived the past sixty years in shame for surviving what happened that day Saeko Oryo swallowed the stone… it should have been Sutter and I, not all those innocent people who died that day. We’re the ones who caused everything that happened… it’s only right that I do what I can to atone to your people for our actions.”

The Prophet stood as still as a statue for several long moments. When she finally moved, she grabbed Jacob by the arm.

“You listen to me,” she snapped. She reconsidered her tone, however, and softened her voice to say, “Jacob, listen to me. What happened all those years ago was nobody’s fault but the witch Saeko Oryo’s. She’s the one who carried out the sin of misusing the Jewel of Life… You were just archeologists looking for mythology. You were innocent.”

Suddenly, the Prophet giggled softly to herself, leaving Jacob confused.

“What was that? I’ve never seen you…”

“I was just thinking about how you really are more like Sutter’s grandson more than I ever thought. Pay me no mind. Did you send Xatu to Bunny?”

“Some time ago.”

When the Prophet looked down from Jacob’s face, a realization hit her. “Where are the warmer clothes I left you? Why aren’t you wearing them?”

“I looked for them, but they were gone…”

Jacob’s response drew a tired grin from the Prophet. “Oh, that. That’s the work of a Pokémon that lives here with us. Its powers allow us to hide this place from Polaris, but it likes to play pranks and steal things too. I’ll do something, don’t worry.”

“What kind of Pokémon is that?”

“One I bet you’ve never seen before. I’ll introduce you.”

-:-

“So how have your Pokémon been doing?” Amanda’s Zoroark appeared in the corner of the videophone screen and rubbed against her leg, prompting her to begin petting the Dark-type.
Disturbed by the noise of the busy Pokémon Center lobby behind him, Matt leaned closer to the screen. “They’re well, I just felt like having you send over a few changes. How’s everything on your end?”

“I’ve been making a lot of progress with that Boldore of yours.”

“Boldore? What’s that?”

Catching her mistake, Amanda giggled. “Manticore, that Roggenrola you sent me that you said was misbehaving? I’ve been making some good progress with it, and it even evolved into Boldore. That means it got stronger, you know? Oh, and I did some research and found that Boldore can evolve again, into Gigalith. Maybe by the time I send it back to you, it’ll have evolved again.”

“I’d be happy if you did that,” Matt said, reflexively smiling even though he knew Amanda couldn’t see him. “How is Anabel, while I’m talking to you?”

“She’s…” Amanda’s already cloudy expression became even more dim. “She’s the same as always. I do what I can to take care of her, but I can’t be a replacement for what she wants.”

Matt clasped his hands together and leaned forward into them, but did not say anything.

“Anyway, big brother, I’ve got some classwork to prepare. Have fun at the Battle Hall and give Olivia my best, alright? Oh, before I go, I caught a new Pokémon for you. When you get to Olivine, I’ll let you have it. See you.”

Amanda hung up the phone on her end of the discussion, causing the video stream to cut off. Matt slouched against the back of his chair, then stood, picked up his bag and began walking toward the other end of the lobby. Olivia, Nekou, Bunny, Monroe and Dante were there, sitting at a table where they were clustered around a television screen.

“Olivia, did you finish setting up your Gym battle?” Matt asked.

“Yeah!” she sharply replied, bringing her finger to her lips before gesturing to the screen.

Following Olivia’s guidance, Matt set his eye upon the news broadcast the others were watching. A female reporter was addressing her viewers with a microphone in her hand. Rust-colored trees formed a backdrop for her.

“We’re here live in Ecruteak City’s Central Square, where the spokesman for the Polaris organization is set to give a speech tomorrow. Now, this is quite a widely anticipated event. Interest in Polaris has increased dramatically in the days following their speech in Goldenrod City, which ended with interference from Team Rocket. The public wants to know the truth behind how Polaris’s cause can bring change to Johto, and we’ll be there on the front lines as that truth comes out. Right now we’ve got a supporter of Polaris here who has agreed to speak to us…”

The camera pulled back, allowing a spiky-haired, thick-eyebrowed young man into view alongside the reporter. He was dressed in thick clothing including a heavy coat and boots, all colored in various earthy tones.

As soon as she saw him, Nekou scowled. None of the others noticed her, as they were too invested in paying attention to the broadcast.

“What is your name, and where are you from?”

“I’m Dino, and I’m from Castelia City,”
the young man replied, putting his gloved hands in his coat pockets.

“Can you tell us about why you support Polaris?”

“Because they’re looking out for the little guys like me out there. Believe me, when the only shot you have in life is becoming a trainer, but you have to live from battle to battle, that’s an unlivable situation. You just can’t survive when you have to decide whether to spend the lousy pocket change you can get from a couple of battles on food or on Poké Balls so you can win more.”

“Have you been in that situation before? Is that why you support them?”

“Yes and yes. I had a very difficult life in my hometown. I finally managed to pull myself out and gain some success, but I never could forget how it was growing up, you know? Eventually I learned of Polaris and I came to understand that their cause is something that could have given me a hand up when I needed it. I support them because nobody should have to live the childhood I did.”

“Dino, was it? Thank you for your time.”
The reporter shook Dino’s hand, then he disappeared from view as she turned back to face the camera directly. “As you can see, Polaris’s ideals have garnered some very real interest, and tomorrow we will learn fully about their goals.”

“We don’t need to hear the speech,” Nekou grumbled to herself. “We already know what Polaris is about…”

“I suggest we get our business done and get out of this city right away,” Bunny commented.

Dante tightened his grip on the handle of his cane, slowly turned to the others, and said, “Perhaps it is for the better that you are here right now. Whatever Ghetsis is planning, it is not good. You were the ones who defeated Polaris in Goldenrod City. If anyone can prevent Ghetsis’s treachery, it’s you.”

“Treachery?”

“When Ghetsis was the leader of Team Plasma, he even betrayed his own men,” Nekou explained in response to Olivia’s question. “He portrayed himself as a wise, kindhearted sage serving their king. In reality, he was manipulating the so-called king for his own interests, and intended to dispose of his entire team save for a few trusted loyalists once he had come to power. His endgame? He wanted to use the mythology of Unova to convince all people to release their Pokémon using the cause of Pokémon liberation, but his true goal was to make himself the only one with any Pokémon and thus the unopposed ruler of the world. Loyalty doesn’t mean **** to him. For all we know, he could be planning to turn on Polaris to do it all again.”

“I don’t understand why they trust him,” Dante added. “Perhaps they are using him? Regardless, he is a threat, and I cannot think of anyone better to oppose him than you lot. Like I said at the Battle Cafe, I am convinced of your strength now.”

“A-Are you sure that’s a good idea?” Monroe nervously questioned. “He’s pretty scary…”

“And Nekou can be pretty scary too,” Olivia said. “We’ll be fine.”

“I’d at least try too, you know…” thought Matt, his lip curling slightly.

“But what about you?” Bunny asked of Dante.

“I have work to do here in this Pokémon Center. Gabriella’s got me looking into a potential formula for a new medicine she’s funding. If it pays off, we could be looking at dramatic process fighting some very real diseases.”

“Good luck with that, it’s important work.” Matt took out and opened his pocke****ch, then looked to the rest of his group. “We have to get going if we’re going to visit the Dance Theater before we split up.”

Following Matt’s direction, Olivia, Monroe, Bunny and Nekou stood and left the table. Dante also followed them, however, much to their surprise.

“I thought you were working here today?”

“Not right this moment, my dear Olivia.” A wide grin formed through Dante’s beard. “I’m waiting for a very important package to arrive. I can’t begin my work without it.”

The group of six headed for the exit of the Pokémon Center, finding themselves in agreement on what they would do. When the glass doors slid open in front of them, a gust of cool air blew through, making Matt and Monroe shiver.

“Oh, right,” Matt mumbled, his body creaking from the cold. “It’s the first day of winter today. I knew I sewed this coat up for a reason…”

A loud snarl suddenly caught their ears, causing the group to freeze just outside the Pokémon Center. It belonged to an Absol that was charging straight toward them, seemingly fixed on causing a collision.

“Watch out!” Bunny cried.

While Bunny and Matt jumped aside, Nekou and Dante both stepped back toward the doors. Monroe attempted to push Olivia out of the way, but despite his efforts, the Absol seemed to alter its course, now targeting Olivia specifically.

“Olivia!” This time, the cry was made from the collected voices of Matt, Nekou and Bunny.

Despite their shock, however, they were powerless to stop the attack. The Absol violently collided with Olivia, and she screamed as she fell backwards with a wide gash on her leg.

“Absol…” the Dark-type Pokémon growled, briefly stopping to turn back and look at its victim. Its horn was stained with blood, which dripped down onto its shaggy white fur.

“You ****er!” Nekou screamed at it.

The Absol simply ignored her, however, and ran off. Seeing no point in giving chase, Matt instead hurried to Olivia’s side and leaned down.
 
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Hush, keep it down
“I’ve got bandages in my bag. Are you going to be alright?”

“I…” Olivia was shaking, but she fought to compose herself. “Screw it, I don’t care. Just cover that.”

-:-

Ariana was slouched in the back of Team Rocket’s car, sipping coffee and eating doughnuts, while Ada worked on her laptop under Trevor’s observation.

“That kid on the broadcast,” Trevor said, “I know him. He’s a known associate of Team Plasma.”

“I don’t have a feed here. Who is it?”

In response to Zager’s question, Ada keyed in a command that made several data windows including a photograph appear on her screen.

“H-his name is Dino,” she said.

“Oh, hell, are you serious?” Zager choked. “I didn’t anticipate them bringing in actual troops.”

“Want to cut me in on what you’re talking about?” Ariana interrupted.

“This kid was a member of Team Plasma back in the old days of the war in Unova,” Trevor explained. “He was a typical Castelia street rat, grew up poor and was in and out of the clink for petty crimes. Most of the time I’d pity someone like that, but when he was looking at a three year bid for one too many burglary charges, Ghetsis sprang him and enlisted him into Team Plasma.”

“H-He fit the profile,” Ada stammered, furthering the story. “Ghetsis was looking for recruits susceptible to his ideology. Young, poor and angry at the world… he was an ideal soldier for the cause. Ghetsis fixed him up and set him off on the Unova League path as an undercover agent, and he even made the semifinals of the Vertress Conference.”

“In other words,” Rosalie piped up from her own window, “not a guy we want to mess with. If Ghetsis is gathering what remains of his loyal following from back then, he’s not just planning a speech. He’s planning a revolution in the streets of Ecruteak, probably not just against us but against Polaris too.”

-:-

“You’ve got to be kidding me!” Ghetsis fumed, slamming his cane on the floor as he looked up at the news broadcast with Dino’s image. “They sent him? That’s the trainer Athleta decided to send?”

“Lord Ghetsis…” Darkness quietly said, standing near Ghetsis’s chair with his brothers flanking him.

“This is a direct challenge to my authority!” Ghetsis didn’t even hear his follower addressing him beneath his shouting. “Taking a former adherent of Team Plasma, filling his head with all that trash Father teaches and turning him against me? I will not stand for this!”

“You don’t have to, Lord Ghetsis.” This time, Darkness’s voice was louder and more assertive. “Shall we take him out?”

Breathing deeply, Ghetsis gripped his cane so tightly it nearly cracked in his hand. “No. No, not yet. Let him live for today. It will send a message to watch him be caught up in my flames tomorrow.”

“Of course, Lord Ghetsis.”

-:-

The Dance Hall, situated just north of the Pokémon Center, was a building constructed in the style of a bygone era. Elegant paper lanterns hung outside, while lamps lit the interior with a warm, golden glow.

An audience of several people was sitting on cushions in front of a wooden stage. On the stage, five young women dressed in kimonos of varying colors observed as two similarly-clothed trainers faced off. Avril was one of them, and the other had thick, brown pigtails.

“Staryu, Flash Cannon!” Avril called out to the starfish Pokémon standing before her.

“Eevee, please use Quick Attack!” her opponent countered.

The Eevee began dashing toward Staryu, weaving back and forth to avoid the bursts of light it shot at him. Before he could collide with his target, however, Staryu managed to catch him and knock him back.

“Alright, Staryu, bring that Eevee down! You know what to do!”

With Eevee close in its sights, Staryu had a perfect vantage point for its attack. It needed no further prompting from its trainer to know what to do. Eevee was engulfed by the stream of bubbles Staryu sent out; they harshly battered his body as they pushed him back, and when the assault finally ended, he let out a soft, weak cry before collapsing.

“This battle has concluded,” the sister in the blue kimono calmly announced. “The challenger Avril has defeated our apprentice Furisode Girl.”

“We did it, Staryu!” Avril cheered. She allowed her Pokémon to leap into her arms, where it happily chattered back at her. “Scratch this stop off the list. I can’t wait to…” When Avril turned her head to the spectators, she saw Olivia watching with Monroe and the others save for Dante. “Well, speak of the devil.”

While the Eevee trainer she’d just beaten left the stage, Avril jumped down to confront Olivia. As soon as the two girls locked eyes, their faces twisted into nearly identical scowls.

“Look what the Meowth dragged in,” Avril taunted. “Sitting at the big kids’ lunch table yet?”

“Yu!” Staryu sharply added, wriggling around in Avril’s arms as if it was laughing.

“Oh, stuff it,” Olivia replied. “I have two Badges now, so take that attitude and…”

“Just two?” Avril couldn’t help but laugh out loud. “I have four! Violet, Azalea, Goldenrod, Ecruteak… all of them!”

As Olivia shrank back, embarrassed by the way her cockiness had backfired, Monroe took a step forward.

“C-come on, Avril,” he stuttered. “Let’s not take this too far…”

“I’m just teasing your girlfriend here.” Avril put her hands on her hips and smirked as both her brother and Olivia flushed. After a moment, she turned back to Olivia. “All that aside, I owe you an apology, you. I didn’t mean to do what I did at the Gym with your dad.”

Olivia slouched and her lip began quivering, but she forced a brave face. “Whatever. I believe you, I guess.”

“Avril, what are you doing here?” Matt asked, looking to change the subject. “If you already got Ecruteak Gym’s Badge…”

“Everyone has to see the Dance Hall when they visit Ecruteak, of course. I came here after the Gym because…” Avril hesitated, her words becoming stuck in her throat. “...well, Olivine’s Gym Leader makes me nervous. I don’t know if I can beat her yet, so I had to get stronger.”

“I’d say you’re on the right track, then!” a cheerful voice intervened.

The man who had interrupted the conversation approached the group from across the room, his hands tucked snugly inside the pockets of his cream-colored dress pants. Clinging to his side was the Furisode Girl who Avril had just beaten. Matt, Olivia and the others quickly guessed that the two were related, owing to the man’s slightly unkempt hair matching hers in color.

“You said your name was Avril, right? I like how you’re able to battle and still keep an emotional connection to your Pokémon. I could tell that Staryu trusts you.” Tapping the girl on the shoulder, he asked, “Audrey, don’t you agree?”

“My brother’s right…” she quietly said. “I think Eevee could tell, too.”

Matt stared at the man and adjusted his glasses. “Wait, haven’t I seen your face somewhere before?”

“Oh, probably,” he said with a chuckle. “I’m sorry I was rude, let me introduce myself. The name’s Bill, and this is my little sister Audrey.”

“Hi…” Audrey nervously added.

“She’s a little shy,” Bill confessed, smiling.

“Doesn’t bother me.” Olivia extended a hand to Audrey and said, “I’m Olivia.”

Audrey hesitated at first, but eventually met Olivia’s offer with a weak handshake. Bill smiled as he watched his sister.

“That’s good, Audrey. It’s important to make friends when you become a trainer. Nobody can always do everything alone.” Suddenly feeling obligated to explain his words to the others, Bill elaborated to them, “Audrey just started out as a trainer, and she hasn’t really found her calling, so she’s been practicing here.”

“Our mom was a Kimono Girl a long time ago,” Audrey piped up, “so I became an apprentice Furisode Girl…”

“So your mom was someone important too? Mine is the Frontier Society’s commissioner…”

When she heard what Olivia said, Audrey’s eyes brightened. “So you’re really strong, then? Can I see your Pokémon?”

“Olivia, we don’t have time right now,” Matt informed her. “We’re already a little behind.”

“Isn’t it wonderful when people can be brought together? I want Audrey to really understand how important it is to connect with others, so I’m happy we met.” Turning to Matt, Bill asked, “And why have you come here, Matt? Are you friends with Avril?”

“I don’t know if I’d say that…” Matt said, laughing nervously to himself. “Wait, how did you know my name?”

“I’d be hard pressed to think of a scientist who doesn’t know your name, Matt.” In an instant, Bill’s face had begun to glow just as his younger sister’s was. “It’s quite a wonder, the mixture of man and machine. I’ve been fascinated by how it could be made real ever since I read about it in the scientific journals. It’s something I never thought I’d see outside of movies… I mean, sure, I’ve worked on developing conversion of living matter into data and transferring it long distances electronically, but there’s always something to be said for the first look at a new innovation, wouldn’t you agree?”

Matt’s eyebrow and hands were twitching as he took a shaky step back. While he appreciated Bill’s enthusiasm, it was overwhelming for him to deal with.

“Y...yeah, I s-suppose. I… I came here to talk to the Kimono Girls about an old legend.”

“Unfortunately, we will be unable to provide you with that service today.” The blue-clad Kimono Girl had walked to the edge of the stage and overheard the conversation. “Allow me to introduce myself. I am Kuni, the oldest sister of the five Kimono Girls. I am in charge of this theater.”

“My name is Matt,” he replied, “and these are my friends Nekou and Bunny, my student Olivia, and her friend Monroe. We…” Matt blinked, having noticed something wrong. “Wait, where’s Dante?”

“I’m right here!” Having just arrived, Dante crossed the room to join the others as fast as his aged legs would let him. A Xatu was alongside him. “Sorry, I had to run back to the Pokémon Center and take care of something with much haste. Have I missed much?”

“Apparently we’re not hearing about the Oberon legend today.” Matt said with a shrug.

Kuni’s eyes widened slightly when she heard Matt mention the Oberon. “So that is what you wish to learn about? Very well, that is something we can tell you. However, we are going to need some time to prepare. Please bear with us and return tomorrow.”

Looking again at his pocke****ch, Matt decided, “That’s not a bad idea. We’ve got other things to do today anyway. We’ll return, I promise.”

While the others were talking, the Xatu that followed Dante approached Bunny and began pecking her arm. Once he had her attention, he gestured with his wing to a small pouch slung around him.

“Xatu…” Bunny said out loud. She gasped when she realized what the Pokémon’s presence meant, then immediately snatched a piece of paper from within the pouch.

“Bunny?” Matt asked. “What’s going on?”

“This is Jacob’s Xatu,” she hurriedly said, fumbling with the letter. “He must have sent this to me.”

“What does it say?”

As a response to Nekou’s question, Bunny began to read the letter aloud.

“Bunny, my dear Bunny, I can only pray with every ounce of life left in these old bones that this letter reaches you safely. I am one of two survivors of the bombing of the Magnet Train; the other is your detective friend, Looker. We are currently being held in an unknown location by a radical band of Tenganist terrorists, but they have gone out of their way to heal us and make us comfortable. They claim that we were not the target of their bombing, that they had been intending to bomb a train carrying cargo for Polaris. I do not know if this is the truth yet, but I feel I can trust them.

You must be extremely careful. Polaris is planning something terrible, and it appears that it involves the mythology of the Tenganists. I cannot do my own investigation right now, so I must rely on you. I know you will turn your nose up at that proposal, but I beg you, please listen to me. You must find out what the secret of the Coronet Rosary is.”


“The Coronet Rosary…?” Kuni uttered in shock.

“You know about it?” Bunny quickly asked.

“It is a forbidden part of Tenganist mythology.” Kuni’s eyes had become cold. She spoke in a flat voice as she looked down on the group from the stage. “We will tell you nothing. If you want to find anything about it, go to the Burned Tower.”

With that, Kuni turned and stormed off, her sisters following closely behind her. Bunny, Matt and the others looked at each other, trying to make sense of her sudden anger.

“The Coronet Rosary?” Bill wondered, rubbing his chin. “I wonder if our mother knew anything about it. Maybe her old Tenganist artifacts had something on it. Anyway, what will you be doing now?”

“I’ll go to the Burned Tower, I guess.” Bunny turned her head as she made this announcement, settling her gaze on the collapsed tower visible in the distance.

“Bunny, I’m going with you,” Nekou reflexively said, prompting Bunny to sigh.

“Guess I have a companion, huh?” she thought.

“I’m going off to the Battle Hall with Dante,” Matt revealed.

“May I come along with you?” requested Bill. “My older sister, Mako, she’s competing there today. I’d like to see her.”

“Sure. The more the merrier, I guess.”

“Hey, Audrey,” Olivia addressed her new friend, “How’d you like to come with Monroe and me to the Gym? You might have fun watching me.”

“That does sound pretty fun, actually…” A small smile worked its way onto Audrey’s face.

Olivia left the Dance Hall with Audrey and Monroe at that point. Avril, having nothing else to do, followed them. Bunny and Nekou departed next, but before they did, Bunny used a Poké Ball in Xatu’s pouch to claim ownership of the Psychic-and-Flying-type Pokémon. Matt, Dante and Bill went last.

Avril spent the next few minutes trailing behind her brother, Audrey and Olivia as they walked to the west, toward the Gym. At first, there was no conversation between any of them, so the still, cold air remained quiet.

“I know you’re there,” Olivia suddenly said, even though she didn’t turn her head to look at Avril. “What do you want?”

At first, Avril opened her mouth, but no words came out. When she did manage to speak, she uttered, “Checking out the competition. I’d have to be crazy to not stay up on what you’re doing.”

“I thought I wasn’t as good as you because I only have two Badges,” Olivia shot back, grinning.

“When you don’t stay on top of threats, they get out of control on you!” Avril protested.

“Things always like this?” Audrey asked Monroe, the two of them having started to trail back when Avril and Olivia’s bickering began.

“She can be mean sometimes, but…” Monroe pushed his hands into his pockets and looked down at the ground. “I wouldn’t give her up. We learned to live with each other, the two of us and our older sister Helena. Our dad’s away for work several times a year, so we have to take care of each other.”

“Kind of… that kind of reminds me of me,” Audrey quietly said as she hunched over slightly. “My brother and sister are really neat people but they’re busy a lot. When I even get to go shopping with them it’s nice.”

While Monroe and Audrey talked to each other, Olivia and Avril had continued their arguing.

“Did you even bother to reserve your battle?” Avril snapped. “This Gym makes you…”

“Of course I did,” Olivia countered. “You think I’m stupid? I know what I’m doing!”

Audrey and Monroe could only watch as Olivia and Avril crossed their arms and turned their heads away from each other.

-:-

While Ada continued working on her laptop to analyze the streams of information she was receiving, Trevor and Ariana were talking to each other in the back of the car.

“I’m worried about telling her,” Ariana said, rocking back and forth on her seat. “Do you think she’ll be able to keep going?”

“I know I have faith in her,” Trevor replied. He stared intently into Ariana’s widened eyes, emphasizing every one of his words. “Nekou’s tough, you know that.”

“She’s only tough because I made her that way.” Ariana’s lip quivered the entire time she offered her counter to Trevor’s words. “She needs the source of her strength.”

Ada, having been eavesdropping on the conversation, silently biting her lip and glaring at them through lowered eyes. She was brought back to attention, however, when Pierce suddenly appeared on her laptop.

“Executive Ariana!” he boomed. “Trevor, Ada!”

“What?” Ariana wearily groaned. “What happened?”

“We have a problem. Dino is not the only member of Team Plasma Ghetsis has brought in here. We spotted that girl he used to use in his speeches.”

“You mean that one who had a different story every time he trotted her out?” Ariana asked, concentrating on the subject as much as she could.

“T-that’s her,” Ada confirmed. “We don’t know who she is or where she came from, so we call her Lucky, the name Ghetsis used to refer to her. All we could figure out is that she’s a real believer in his cause, so much so that he used her as a supporter of his ideals in his speeches.”

“If she’s here too,” Trevor added, “then Ghetsis is really going all out. This is where he’s making his stand.”

Ada pressed her fingers into her forehead. “How should we handle this? What do we do?”

“Keep up your observation of Central Square,” Ariana directed Pierce, taking a deep breath part of the way through the sentence. “I don’t expect Ghetsis to make any moves today, but be vigilant.”

“Roger.”

Once Pierce ended his contact with Ada’s computer, Ariana slouched on her seat and shut her eyes.

-:-

A huge, tent-like building north of the Pokémon Center and Dance Hall towered over the rest of Ecruteak’s eastern half. The modern structure stood out like a sore thumb amidst its rustic surroundings, its mismatched presence made even more noticeable by the multicolored spotlights surrounding it. A digital billboard expressing welcome to those visiting the Battle Hall was displayed next to a line of sliding glass entry doors.

While scores of spectators cycled in, the competing trainers awaited the beginning of the tournament in a posh lounge just outside the arena. Nando and several others were seated at a bar, while Colress lurked in a corner, leaning against the wall. Giovanni watched the scientist warily, using his fedora to hide his glare.

Another of the tournament’s trainers was a certain red-haired young man. When he came through the doorway, he saw Giovanni and almost instantly became overcome with rage. He approached his father with slow, deliberate steps, each one accompanied by an intensifying of his angry memories.

“You!” Silver growled, causing his father to abruptly turn around. “Showing your face here… how could you?!”

“You’re as misbehaved as ever, Silver,” Giovanni coldly replied. “You must learn when to pick your fights. Now is a bad time for your agenda.”

Clenching his fists so tightly that his arms shook, Silver threatened, “I see plenty of people around me who had trouble from your gang. All of us against you. You like those odds, old man?”

“You don’t know what you’re talking about.” Putting his hands in his pockets, Giovanni continued, “There are people in this room that I guarantee you would stand with me against.”

“Do you want to bet money on it?” the red-haired young man sneered.

“Perhaps another time, I would.”

While Giovanni and Silver’s argument unfolded, Matt had entered the lounge. After taking a quick look around, he sat down at the bar next to Nando and quietly ordered a drink.

“So how did your visit to the Dance Hall go?” the minstrel asked. He had altered his appearance with makeup to thicken his eyelashes, along with wearing a golden shoulder plate and a feather in his hat. “I am sure that the Kimono Girls were able to tell you what you needed.”

“Not yet,” Matt glumly replied, staring into the bar. “They told me they needed a day to prepare.”

“I see,” Nando said. He calmly strummed the strings of the larger harp he carried, modeled on a pair of Mew instead of just one. “Perhaps I will be able to join you tomorrow then.”

“I think that can be arranged.”

While Matt and Nando spoke, Dino entered the room and quietly walked to Colress, striking up a hushed conversation.

Moments later, Matt felt a tap on his shoulder and turned around. He found himself being addressed by a young woman wearing a dark gray, buttoned-up top and matching skirt, both of which bore purple accent lines. Her dark boots went up to her knees, where long socks took over the rest of the way up her legs.

Recognizing the girl for the brown hair that spilled from under her cream-colored hat and her slight yet warm smile,, Matt said, “You know, I shouldn’t be surprised you’re here.”

“Well met, Miss Trista,” Nando added. “It is good to see you again. I hope we get to battle once more.”

“I’d enjoy battling you both here,” Trista said, before lowering her voice and gesturing to the still-arguing Giovanni and Silver. Despite what she was speaking of, her voice remained somewhat flat, as if she was bored. “Isn’t that the boss of Team Rocket, though? You know, the one who attacked the Indigo Plateau while we were there?”

Matt squinted at Giovanni. The angle he was at didn’t afford him a good view, but he managed to come around quickly. “Yeah, it is, I think. What’s he doing here?”

“He’s still the Viridian City Gym Leader,” Trista mused, lowering his eyes in disappointment. “I’m guessing he’s using that as an excuse. You would think they’d figure him out by now.”

Feeling his heart sinking, Matt rubbed his chin and whispered, “But why did he come here? He didn’t come here as a Gym Leader, you know that as well as I do. What’s he really after?”

Before they could come to a conclusion on Giovanni’s motives, still another Gym Leader approached them. Though he’d traded his traditional clothing for a dark brown leather pilot’s jacket, Falkner still wore his hair over his right eye, and Matt immediately recognized him as a result.

“Imagine, seeing you here!” the Violet Gym Leader greeted Matt. He had his hands planted deeply into his pockets, carrying himself with a casual attitude. As a result, he fit in well with the ordinary trainers around him, instead of standing out as a Gym Leader. “I assume these are friends of yours, then?”

“Yeah,” Matt answered, smiling as he relaxed his body slightly. “Trista and Nando, they’re both old friends I met years ago who do both Gym battles and Contests.”

“Interesting. I hope when I go back home to Violet City you’ll come visit my Gym.”

“You’re away right now?” Trista asked. “For more than just this tournament, I mean.”

“Yeah,” Falkner replied with a short nod. “I decided to close my Gym for a while and resume training on the road to make my Flying-type Pokémon even stronger. Speaking of which, Matt, where is Olivia?”

“She’s off at Ecruteak’s Gym now.”

“Morty’s a tough Gym Leader. I hope she’s up to the challenge.”

-:-

Ecruteak Gym was an odd entity within the city. Neither modern nor rustic, it held a strange charm all its own. Its appearance, based on an old mansion, left Olivia feeling slightly nervous as she approached with Monroe, Audrey and Avril. A bead of sweat rolled down her face despite the chill in the air.

“Not exactly a welcoming place, is it?” she said out loud, her voice shaking.

“What’s the matter, you scared?” Avril taunted her.

Olivia’s face flushed. “No, I’m not scared at all!” she shouted. Despite her protestations, however, she knew Avril was at least somewhat right. The Gym menaced her, and the dirt under her feet crunched as she rocked slightly back and forth.

“This is a weird Gym,” Monroe said to interrupt Olivia’s fearful thoughts. “A lot of people have so much trouble here, yet others… well, I had a pretty easy time, at least.”

“Well I guess we’re not getting anything done just standing around.” Olivia took out her Pokégear and gestured to the others. “Come here. I want to take a picture.”

Avril complied along with her brother and their new friend, but as she approached she asked, “Taking a picture? For what?”

“I decided I’m going to record as much as I can about what I’m doing,” Olivia explained, her tone becoming wistful as she thought about her memories. “I want to make a lot of new things worth remembering, so I don’t have to live with the old ones anymore.”

“That’s a cool idea…” Audrey quietly said.

The group lined up with each other, pushing close enough to all fit on the Pokégear’s camera. Audrey was the most eager to get in the picture, while Monroe and Avril hesitated at first due to embarrassment, albeit over different reasons.

After taking the picture, Olivia smiled, took a deep breath to build her resolve and stepped forcefully toward the Gym’s entrance. To move the heavy wood doors she had to push with as much strength as she could muster against their golden handles. They slowly opened accompanied by loud creaking, eventually giving way to allow Olivia and the others inside.

Beyond the doorway, a dark parlor greeted them. Their steps were absorbed by the soft, blood-red rug running straight from the door to the far wall, where a large painting was hung over an unlit fireplace. There was a single door flanking each side of the fireplace.

A shiver ran down Olivia’s body, and she crossed her arms to ward it off. It wasn’t the air in the Gym that was cold, it was the gaze of the many portraits lining the walls. Though they all were just works of art, she felt as if the men and women on the canvases were watching her every move.

“It sure feels like a Ghost-type Gym…” Olivia nervously murmured, recalling Nando’s words regarding it.

All of a sudden, a voice filled the room. “So you’ve come at last…”

Startled by the abrupt shattering of the silence in the Gym, Olivia screamed and jumped back. Audrey flinched, too, but Avril and Monroe just looked at each other and smiled.

“Don’t worry about that,” Monroe said in an attempt to calm Olivia down. “It’s nothing. He did it to Avril and I too.”

A man with blonde hair barely kept orderly by a purple headband had appeared on the video screen over the fireplace, its masquerade as a painting no longer necessary. He looked down on his guests with lazy, half-closed eyes and cracked a slight smile.

“Welcome back, Avril, Monroe,” he said, his voice breathy and calm. “I see you’ve brought your friend for her battle, just as you said you would.” Both Monroe and Avril flushed when the man revealed that they’d called Olivia their friend to him. “Olivia, it’s good to see you here as well. I have been looking forward to seeing you since you made your appointment. Let’s formalize this. I’m Morty, the Gym Leader of Ecruteak City’s Gym. It is said that a rainbow-colored Pokémon will appear to a strong trainer that fights for justice. That’s a myth of this city. I grew up listening to it, so I’ve trained my Ghost-type Pokémon to become strong enough to fight for the people here. What do you think? Do you have such an ideal in mind, Olivia?”

“I’m still figuring it out,” Olivia admitted, lowering her head. “The thing is, no matter what it is I end up doing, I want it to be something that my dad would have been proud of if he was still around. You know that Polaris gang that’s been on the news a lot lately? I want to stand up against them and prevent them from ruining what my dad would have wanted.”

“That’s admirable, your courage. I admit, I’ve been a bit concerned about Polaris as well. Their campaign has been roiling Ecruteak City for some time now. I have respect for someone like you who is willing to stand up against such a force. If it comes to such, I will need allies to stand alongside me against them. Let’s get started and find out if you possess that potential, shall we?”

“Alright!” Olivia agreed, her mood brightening considerably.

“Very well. Monroe, Avril, and…”

“Audrey,” Bill's sister identified herself.

“...Audrey, hello. You three remain in the parlor and watch Olivia battle on the screen. Olivia, what you must do to reach me is this: in each of the rooms ahead of you, one of my Pokémon awaits. You will have a one-on-one fight with that Pokémon, then, whether you win or lose, you must go to another room and fight another Pokémon with a new Pokémon of your own. You can’t reuse a Pokémon until you’ve used all three. If you can beat two rooms before losing all three of your Pokémon, you may bring all of your remaining Pokémon to go against my Gengar in the grand hall. Do you understand?”

Olivia took a moment to absorb all the directions Morty had given her, then nodded.
 
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“Excellent. One additional rule… based on the Pokémon you informed me you possess when making your appointment today, I have equipped each room to contain an item or prize that you can use to make the fight easier. If you find yourself struggling, you should seek it out during the fight.”

“Alright, thanks.”

“So let us begin. Olivia, on your left is the doorway to the armory room, and on your right is the greenhouse. Choose your path, challenger. I wish you luck.”

-:-

A sellout crowd packed the Battle Hall’s arena, surrounding the stage that played host to its battlefield. Four rows from the front, Dante and Bill sat side-by-side. While the former sat and stared dispassionately at the stage, Bill fidgeted nervously. The deafening noise of the crowd around him irritated his nerves.

The assembled audience went silent, however, when the lights went down in the arena.

“Ladies and gentlemen, welcome to the Frontier Society’s Battle Hall!” an announcer declared. “One of the toughest tournaments in the entire Frontier Society is about to get underway. Here as your guide to this monumental event is the Frontier Brain of the Battle Hall, our very own Hall Matron, Kate!!”

Several huge spotlights illuminated a figure standing in the doorway below the arena’s massive video screen, and the crowd immediately began cheering more loudly than ever. After striking a pose, the violet-haired woman swaggered down the catwalk connecting the passageway to the stage. The lights glittered against her red clothing and polished black boots.

“Welcome, welcome to you all!” Kate beamed once she reached center stage. “Yes, as you just heard, what you are about to witness is one of the greatest shows the Frontier Society can present. In just a few minutes, sixteen trainers will face off in a sudden death showdown to determine who can stand at the top. Sixteen trainers, sixteen types of Pokémon… only one of them will have the star power to make it through the fray and stand before me to conquer this facility. Aren’t you ready to find out who it will be?”

Following a resounding cheer from the crowd, Kate turned around and faced the video screen. Almost immediately, Dante spotted something and leaned forward on his cane.

“Bill, look at that,” he said, pointing forward. “On her headset.”

Indeed, there was something embedded in the left-hand headphone of Kate’s headset. It was a circular, blue-and-yellow object bearing a double helix pattern within it.

Bill had to squint to see it, but when he did, he gasped. “A Key Stone, right? Doesn’t that mean she can…”

“Mega Evolution,” Dante confirmed. “I had heard a rumor that there was a Frontier Brain capable of using it. Now only to find out what Pokémon it is that she’s accomplished it with.”

“I’ve never seen a Mega Evolution before!” Bill cheerfully said, his nerves having melted away thanks to his enthusiasm. “I mean, I only just started learning about it, but the whole idea of a Pokémon temporarily evolving even further is exciting, don’t you think? I always was fascinated by Eevee but this just takes it to a whole other level.”

“You sure seem into it, my friend,” Dante joked.

“Take a look at our big board!” Kate urged the crowd. On the screen, mugshots of the trainers for the tournament were displayed, along with tags reading different types. “As you can see, sixteen types, all there for the taking. Each type designates at least one type of that trainer’s sole Pokémon. Are you ready to begin?” When her question was answered by a mighty cheer, she continued, “Alright, that’s the answer I wanted to hear! Let’s shuffle them all up and see who will be facing who in the first round!”

While the crowd’s noise level lowered to a consistent murmur, the portraits on the screen flipped over and began to mix around. After several seconds, they stopped and turned back over, posting the trainers in eight pairs.

Matt and Dino, tagged with the Psychic and Ghost types respectively, were paired together. Nando and his Grass-type were slated to battle Trista and her Dragon-type, while Colress, Falkner, Giovanni and Silver were placed into their own matches against other trainers.

“And there we have it, everyone!” Kate boomed, turning back to face the crowd. “The last man standing at the end of this will face me in a championship match. There’s a lot of battling to get done, so let’s get to meet our first two competitors! Hailing from Goldenrod City and representing the Electric type, Mako!”

Kate gestured toward the right side of the stage, where a woman was approaching via another catwalk. Her dark brown, gold-lined coat flowed elegantly around her slacks just above her tall boots. She carried herself with calm, fluid motions that gave her an almost otherworldly air.

“Go for it, Mako!” Bill called out to his sister from his seat. “I know you can win!”

Mako flashed her brother a brief smile as she stepped into her box on the stage. Once she was in position, Kate turned around and stretched her arm toward the opposite pathway.

“Opposing Mako and her Electric-type Pokémon is the representative of the Ice-type, hailing from Mossdeep City, Abner!”

When the lights shined on the left-hand catwalk, a shaggy-haired, unshaven man wearing hiking clothes and a huge yellow backpack appeared in the doorway. He stood for a moment and smiled smugly, bathing in the audience’s praise. Though he took his time, he eventually joined Kate and Mako on the stage.

“Oi, a real cutie for my first fight, it looks like?” After winking at Mako, he continued, “I ain’t gonna be going easy on you, nope, not at all. Try not to let yourself get too hurt!”

“Some real trash talk from Abner!” Kate shouted, deliberately stoking the playful hostility between the two trainers. “Does Mako have something to say about that?”

Mako reached up and clutched her necklace, then closed her eyes. “I’m not too worried about getting hurt,” she calmly said.

“Mako’s showing real confidence, but who will be the one to stand on top?” Kate thrust her hand into the air and cried out, “Let the battle begin!”

“Froslass, let’s go!” Abner announced, throwing the Poké Ball he’d taken from his backpack.

After drawing out her own Poké Ball, Mako extended her arm in a fluid motion, causing the bracelets she was wearing to tap against each other. She took a deep breath, then threw the ball and called out, “Jolteon, let’s win this!”

Once they had appeared from their respective capsules, Jolteon and Froslass took time to carefully examine each other. Jolteon lowered himself nearer to the ground and slowly circled toward his opponent, who was forced to drift in the opposite direction to avoid letting him get an opening against her.

“Defense and then offense should win the day, Froslass. Hail!”

Mako smirked. “Snow Cloak, as I thought. Looks like I’m going to need some fortune of my own. Jolteon, Thunderbolt!”

Froslass spread her arms, and a soft white aura surrounded her. Clouds began to form above the battlefield, but before anything could happen, Jolteon unleashed a blast of electricity from his body and shocked her. She lost her focus as she reeled back in midair, her once-gentle cry twisting into a distressed shriek.

“Jolteon strikes first with a devastating Thunderbolt!” the announcer boomed over the crowd’s cheering. As Froslass sank to the floor, her body convulsing from the electric shock, he added, “And it appears that Froslass has been stricken by paralysis!”

“F-Froslass…” Abner stumbled.

“And now I call check.” Mako thrust her arm forward. Her bracelets hit each other once more, and the spotlights glistened on the ring she wore. “Shadow Ball!”

With a sharp growl, Jolteon leapt into the air. A dark, glowing sphere took shape in front of his mouth, and by shaking his head, he flung it straight down at Froslass’s prone body. It exploded when it made contact with Froslass, and when the smoke from the blast faded, the Ice-and-Ghost-type Pokémon was sprawled face-down on the stage.

“Froslass is unable to battle!” Kate announced. “The winners of this battle are Mako and Jolteon!”

The crowd erupted into raucous cheering once more, so loud that Bill didn’t notice Dante speaking to him until he felt a tap on his shoulder.

“What…?”

“I said your sister really is impressive. After that, I want to see her and Matt go at it. I’d bet on her, though.”

Mako and Abner shook hands at center stage, their Pokémon at their sides. He hastily scribbled something on a piece of paper and handed to her, and as they separated to leave the arena, she tucked it into a pocket inside her coat.

“That was just the kind of battle we needed to start this tournament out, I’d say,” Kate cheerfully said to the audience. “What do you say we kick it up even further? Huh?” When her question was met with deafening cheers, her smile widened. “Alright, let’s go for it! Up next we have two trainers who have also met several times on the field of Pokémon Contests. They’ve both had their share of glory against each other, but which of them will stand on top this time? Introducing the representative of the Grass type, from Alamos Town, Nando! And against him, hailing from Whitegold City and carrying the Dragon type, Trista!”

Nando and Trista entered the arena from opposite ends; while she carried herself with a hardened determination that reflected on her face, he was simply smiling in the same gentle manner he usually had. His mind was still on the battle, though, it just manifested itself in the tight grip he had on his giant harp.

“So we meet in combat once more, Trista,” he calmly said, his eyes closed. “I look forward to seeing how our battle will turn out.”

Trista took a wide stance and leaned forward, never taking her eyes away from her opponent. “I’m going to beat you this time, I’ll warn you now.”

“I hoped to hear that from you.” Slowly opening his eyes, Nando quietly but firmly added, “Go all out. I will as well.”

“It’s time to can the talk and get to fighting!” Kate thrust her hand into the air, then sharply brought it down. “Battle begin!”

Nando pulled a soft note from his harp, then removed a Poké Ball from his bag. “Roserade, make your entrance!”

The light from Nando’s Poké Ball broke apart like fireworks, providing fanfare for Roserade as he took shape on the field. He held his arms in a cross in front of himself and stood perfectly still with his eyes closed, serenely waiting for the Pokémon he would face.

“When I saw you in the Grass category, I thought you’d be using Roserade,” Trista said, her face rigid. “I came prepared. Dorothy, let’s go!”

A Kingdra appeared from the Poké Ball Trista threw, floating just above the floor as if she was in her natural water habitat. She looked down on Roserade with cold eyes; the two had met before, and they shared a mutual sense of competition against each other.

-:-

Meanwhile, as the Battle Hall’s first round had begun to unfold, Olivia’s challenge of Ecruteak Gym had also begun. She had taken the left-hand door, which led to the mansion’s armory. As a result, she found herself against Morty’s Yamask, a Pokémon that resembled a small black ghost attached to a golden mask. While her Minccino sprinted around the room, using the many suits of armor scattered around as cover from Yamask’s Will-O-Wisp attacks, Olivia was frantically searching the furniture.

“It seems we’re at a stalemate here, Olivia,” Morty commented, his face displayed on a screen much like the one in the parlor. “Yamask can only do residual damage to Minccino, but Minccino can stay away from Yamask. On the other hand, though, if you don’t get close, you can’t damage Yamask either. What will you do?”

“You said…” Olivia was interrupted when she pulled a drawer on an old desk open, sending a cloud of dust into her face. She coughed several times before finally saying, “You said there was something in here that would help me win!”
“I didn’t lie. You only have to find it.” After waiting a moment to allow Olivia to continue her search, Morty moved closer to the camera transmitting his image. “Yamask, continue using Will-O-Wisp!”

Olivia could hear Minccino’s frantic cries behind her, accompanied by the noise of the armor as it crashed down around the Pokémon. She knew that Minccino wouldn’t be able to run forever.

“Hold on, Minccino, just a little longer…” she thought. Sweat rolled down her face as she moved on to search the chest next to the desk, even though the air in the Gym carried a strong chill. “I’ll get you out of this… just hold on…”

In spite of Olivia’s determination, however, the chest contained nothing but another cloud of dust. She pulled her head back in time to avoid inhaling it. The noise of Yamask chasing Minccino forced her to quickly turn around in order to figure out what she was dealing with, but as she watched the pursuit, a glint from an empty flower pot across the room caught her eye.

Olivia reflexively raised her brows, and a glitter filled her eyes. “Minccino, run to where I am now! Just keep dodging Yamask a little longer!”

Minccino looked toward Olivia, and after responding with an energetic cry, turned sharply in her direction. One of Yamask’s Will-O-Wisps just barely missed her head, breaking apart the armor it hit. Olivia deftly danced around the combat, weaving her way past the flying flames and rushing Pokémon, reaching the pot within seconds.

When she reached inside, the only thing she felt was an egg-shaped object. A chill ran up her arm when her hand grazed it, but she still didn’t hesitate to pull it out.

It was a transparent stone that glowed brightly from within. As she realized what it was, Olivia’s eyes widened, and the stone’s brilliance glowed in them.

“Ah, well done!” Morty praised her. “I see you found the Shiny Stone I left for you. You passed the test, so go ahead and use it.” Moving his head slightly, he directed, “Yamask, back off for a minute.”

“Ya,” the Ghost-type Pokémon answered, floating back as he had been told to.

“Minccino, you know what this means, right?” Olivia asked, her voice radiating with excitement. She was clutching the stone so tightly her knuckles were whitening. “Now we can step up to the…”

Locking eyes with Minccino gave Olivia pause, and she stopped walking toward the Pokémon.

“If I force Minccino into this...” she thought, her mind suddenly locking up. “That would be wrong. Herdier and Dewott, when they evolved, it was up to them. I have no right to take that choice away from Minccino…”

Minccino stared at Olivia, gasping for breath as she recovered her strength. She knew what her trainer was holding and understood its purpose. What puzzled, her, though, was the fact that Olivia wasn’t using it. She asked herself in her mind why Olivia was hesitating, why she couldn’t see just how badly Minccino wanted to take Yamask down.

Olivia was lost in thought until she felt a tug on her leg. When she looked down, she saw Minccino climbing up her body, fixated on the stone. Minccino climbed onto her arm, grabbed her hand before she could react, and pulled the stone from her grasp.

By the time Minccino reached the floor again, both she and the Shiny Stone were enveloped in bright light. She absorbed the stone and grew larger, and long tufts of fur emerged from her head to wrap around her body. Her tail also changed, becoming very similar in appearance to the new, fluffy growths. When the light faded a few moments later, a different Pokémon stood where Minccino once had been.

“Cin-ci!” the newly evolved Cinccino cried, putting her paws on her hips to show off her appearance.

“You wanted to…?” Olivia uttered, dumbfounded. “Somehow I didn’t think…”

Cinccino sighed and turned away from Olivia, deciding that the battle was more important than trying to get through to her. She waved her paw at Yamask, taunting him.

“Congratulations on your Minccino evolving,” Morty calmly said. His voice then turned much more serious as he added, “Don’t think it means I’m going to make this easy on you, though. Yamask, go back on the attack! Will-O-Wisp!”

In an instant, Yamask formed two more orbs of blue flame, one in each of his hands. Cinccino waited for a direction from Olivia, but one never came, so she shot down the flares by flinging a pair of small rocks at them with her tail.

“Cin-cii!” the Normal-type Pokémon shrilly reproached her trainer.

Cinccino’s admonishment finally snapped Olivia back to reality. “Th-that’s right, sorry, Cinccino… that wasn’t an attack I’ve seen you use before.” Olivia took out her Pokédex and pointed it at Cinccino, browsing through the pages until she reached its known moves. “Rock Blast… and you learned Bullet Seed, too, I see. Let’s give him a taste! Bullet Seed!”

“Block it, then use Disable,” Morty commanded.

After carefully aiming at Yamask, Cinccino spit four round, pellet-like seeds at him, one at a time. Yamask didn’t flinch, even when they got near to him. He simply held up his golden mask like a shield, causing them to bounce away with little effect. He then flashed a purple light in his eyes, and the same light briefly flashed around Cinccino’s body.

“No more Bullet Seed for now,” Olivia mumbled through clenched teeth. “I need an out right now…”

Olivia thought back to what her Pokédex told her about Yamask at the beginning of the battle. “These Pokémon arose from the spirits of people interred in graves. Each retains memories of its former life. Each of them carries a mask that used to be its face when it was human. Sometimes they look at it and cry.”

After another quick look over her surroundings, Olivia felt an idea suddenly hit her. She hesitated only a brief moment to wonder why she hadn’t thought of it earlier before making her move.

“Cinccino, rush Yamask!”

“You’re not giving up, are you?” Morty taunted, unaware of what was about to happen. “Yamask, stay on Minccino and use Will-O-Wisp!”

Olivia grinned. “Just what I wanted,” she said under her breath. She then raised her voice and ordered, “Hurry, dodge under the armor, then use Aqua Tail!”

Cinccino turned at a sharp angle and sprinted under the legs of a nearby suit of armor. Yamask followed, but the Will-O-Wisp he threw hit the floor and dissipated harmlessly. Though Cinccino was out of his sight after that, he could hear her jump up and strike the back of the armor, which collapsed over him in a heap.

“Ci cino!” the Normal-type Pokémon laughed as she stood over the wreckage.

“Good job!” Olivia called out, pumping her fist into the air. “That’ll turn things around!”

“Do I sense overconfidence now, Olivia?” In spite of what he said, Morty raised a brow. “She wouldn’t get that upbeat if she wasn’t up to something… but what…”

The top of Yamask’s head phased through the metal, allowing him to peer over at Cinccino, who was staring at him intently. He growled to himself, angered by how his home in the Gym had been used against him, then continued to float upward.

Suddenly, he felt a slight tug on the bottom of his body. The armor pieces beneath him shifted, and when he exerted more effort in order to free himself, he shot upward into the air. His mask was no longer attached to him, and when he realized it, he began to flail around and cry.

Morty’s eyes widened, and his mouth slowly fell open. “So that’s what you were…”

“That’s right,” Olivia bragged, “Yamask might be a ghost, but that mask is solid. So obviously, ghosts can go through solid objects, but other solid objects can’t! And now you have no defense either, so eat this! Rock Blast!”

Grinning widely, Cinccino jumped toward the now-vulnerable Yamask with several rocks in her tail. He stopped thrashing, but only to watch in helpless, wide-eyed terror as Cinccino flung the stones at him. His body was weak without the protection the mask provided, and after the fourth stone cut into him, he crumpled to the floor with one last whimper.

“Impressive, Olivia!” Morty complimented her. Now smiling, he pressed a button on his side of the screen, activating the wall-mounted Poké Ball to call Yamask back. “That was the first step on Ecruteak Gym’s challenge. What do you think so far?”

“It was…” Olivia almost said ‘easy,’ but caught herself and realized the untruth of that statement before she finished. “It was tough, but I think I had fun.”

“You did a pretty good job juggling the scavenger hunt with keeping your battle in line, too.” Looking down, Morty added, “And of course, I have to give you credit as well, Cinccino. You’re the one who did the fighting, after all.”

Pleased with herself as the result of Morty’s praise, Cinccino once again took her paws-on-hips pose and smirked. Both the Gym Leader and Olivia couldn’t resist laughing at her playfully cocky attitude.

“Anyway,” Morty continued, “You now have to move on to the next room. As before, there are two doors.” Lights came up on the passages upon Morty’s prompt. “On the left is the mansion’s toy room, on the right, the dining room. Which one will it be?”

Almost immediately, Olivia answered, “The toy room sounds like fun. Let’s go there.”

“See you there.”

Morty nodded gently before his face disappeared from the screen. After scratching Cinccino behind the ears one last time, Olivia recalled her, then walked for the left-hand door.

“A toy room, huh? He’s a Ghost-type Pokémon user, so I should expect…”

Before she even realized it, Olivia found herself standing just inside the next room of her challenge. It was just as dimly lit as the armory, but instead of the cold presence of the suits, it was filled with all sorts of wooden and plush toys strewn about. Olivia felt her muscles automatically relax slightly in response to the more comforting surroundings.

“Welcome, Olivia!” Morty greeted her after his face appeared on the toy room’s screen. “Are you ready to meet the Pokémon that guards this room?”

“I’m as ready as I’ll ever be,” Olivia responded. She had her Poké Ball prepared already, even though she hadn’t seen what Morty would go with yet.

“Alright. I like your nerve, I have to say that. Anyway, here we go, Shuppet!”

Morty pressed another of the buttons before him, and the Poké Ball near the screen burst open. The Shuppet that emerged hung limply in the air, though her eyes burned with life.

“I think my choice is a good one,” Olivia said to herself as she pulled her arm back to throw the ball. “Herdier, let’s play!”

-:-

“Now, for our next battle… it’s Matt from Snowpoint City versus Dino from Castelia City!”

Matt had his eye wide open as he walked to the stage on Kate’s cue, but his mind was elsewhere. It was the only way he could prevent himself from falling apart in front of the crowd. To force thoughts of them from his mind, he stared at the floor and considered the battles that had come before him as he walked.

Nando and Trista’s battle hadn’t been long. Roserade tried to outmaneuver Dorothy early, but Trista’s Kingdra was well prepared to face her old foe once again, and quickly overwhelmed him using Ice Beam. Colress fought a bodybuilder and her Swalot using his Klinklang in the third match, and easily won as a result of his Steel-type’s superiority over the Poison-type. After him, Falkner and Pidgeot managed to defeat a Gligar in a closely-fought aerial battle. Matt and Dino were the fifth match, and after him, Giovanni and Silver had slated battles using their Normal and Water-type Pokémon respectively.

A bead of sweat rolled down Matt’s face as he thought about his competition. The Battle Hall’s focus on a single Pokémon dramatically limited his options, and even though he had more faith than ever in his Sigilyph thanks to her performance at the Battle Cafe, he knew just how much every factor in a one-on-one battle mattered. Colress in particular worried him; the man’s cold, calculating nature combined with his Steel-type Klinklang’s ability to trump Sigilyph on type left Matt well aware of the threat Colress posed.

Matt was so lost in thought that he actually stepped just past his mark. He didn’t realize it until he noticed both Kate and Dino staring at him from their appropriate places.

“****,” he thought, feeling a nervous shock running through his body as he returned to where he should have been.

“Well now that everyone is in their places....” Kate loudly remarked, her sarcasm only making Matt even more nervous, “...it’s time to get this battle started! It’s the Psychic-type versus the Ghost-type! Battle begin!”

“Don’t fold now… you came this far,” Matt mumbled to himself, clutching the Poké Ball in his bag for a moment before throwing it. “Cordelia, make your mark!”

When Cordelia materialized in front of Matt, Dino shoved his hands into his pockets and grinned. “Interesting, so you went with your Sigilyph like you did at the Battle Cafe. This ought to be interesting.”

“How… how do you know about that?” Matt choked.

Dino removed his hands from his pockets and shrugged. “There are television shows that cover notable battles at the Frontier Society facilities. Someone fighting tooth and nail to reach Lyra only to lose spectacularly makes for a good show, you know? Anyway, let’s get started. I’ve been waiting to get a shot at you since I first saw coverage of you.”

By that point, Matt was completely frozen. The idea of his battles attracting attention even outside those watching him in person brought his stage fright to a whole new level, and the only response he could muster was the all too familiar twitch that returned to his fingers.

“Now for my Pokémon,” Dino declared, pulling a Poké Ball of his own from his pocket. “Trevenant, let’s go!”

When the ball burst open, a Pokémon completely alien to Matt emerged. He heavily resembled a dead tree, with several places on his body rotted away to expose something black underneath. His thin, outstretched arms ended in sharply hooked claws, and he supported his weight on six thick roots bent like spider legs.

Matt shivered under the Trevenant’s cold glare. “A Ghost-type might be trouble,” he reasoned to himself as he worked his tablet from his bag, “but it looks like it might be a Grass-type too…”

“Trevenant, the Elder Tree Pokémon. Type is Ghost and Grass.” Matt relaxed slightly once his suspicions were confirmed. “It can control trees at will. It will trap people who harm the forest, so they can never leave. Using its roots as a nervous system, it controls the trees in the forest. It's kind to the Pokémon that reside in its body.”

“Yeah, I think I can handle this…”

The truth was that Matt knew he was lying to himself, however. He could feel the heat from hundreds of pairs of eyes searing into his skin, and when he factored in the countless people not watching in person, he felt like he was baking inside his coat. He briefly considered removing it between rounds, but he remembered that he couldn’t get even a little cold and let go of the idea.

“That’s good and all,” Dino said, “but what matters is what happens on the battlefield. That’s where you can become anyone you want.”

“Both trainers have potential type advantages over each other,” Kate thundered, her words pumping up the energy of the crowd. “How will this situation play out? Is it as even as it looks, or does one side hold an advantage we don’t yet see? Let us find out! Let the battle begin!”

“Cordelia, Air Slash!” Matt called out the moment the battle started.

“Alright, Trevenant, use your legs to boost off the Air Slash, then use Shadow Claw!”

Just before the blade of air struck Trevenant, he pushed himself up on his legs. Cordelia’s attack swept under him, creating an updraft that pushed Trevenant skyward. He lunged forward in midair and swung with his glowing-black claw, but failed to do more than graze Cordelia’s body. She flopped backward but quickly recovered and lowered her eye at her foe.

“You just made one mistake,” Matt said, confidence bracing him for the first time. “Now that I know how you respond to my Flying-type moves, I just need to stop you from doing that. Cordelia, Ice Beam!”

Despite his disadvantage, Dino didn’t lose his composure. He calmly directed, “Trevenant, knock it away with Shadow Claw.”

While Cordelia immediately started chilling the air in front of her body, Trevenant hesitated to follow Dino’s command. He stared up at the Pokémon facing him, and even though it was only for a brief moment, it was enough for Matt to take notice of it. He raised an eyebrow just as Cordelia overran Trevenant’s arm with ice, freezing it.

“Again, Cordelia! Ice Beam!”

Though Matt was decisive in calling his next move, he felt doubt creeping up again. It was an unpleasant sensation rising through his arms as if they were still his natural ones; though he was familiar with the feeling he never had gotten used to it.

Dino wasn’t responding to him and giving directions to Trevenant anymore. Whether it was because he knew he had lost, Matt wasn’t sure. All he knew was that Trevenant feebly tried to block the Ice Beam with his other arm, only for it to get frozen as well. Cordelia didn’t relent, either, quickly following it up with a third Ice Beam that froze Trevenant’s feet in place.

“Trevenant is completely frozen still!” the announcer blared, giving words to accompany the visual. “Is this the end for Dino already?”

Matt sighed, his thoughts focusing on one goal - to escape from the increasingly uncomfortable situation as quickly as possible. “Cordelia, finish this up with Air Slash.”

“Nothing you can do when you’re beaten,” Dino thought to himself, clutching the Poké Ball in his pocket even before Cordelia moved.

-:-

Much had changed about Ecruteak City over the years. For a long time, the entire city was like the eastern half of its modern incarnation, filled with quaint, traditional buildings. In fact, it was more like a village, even though it had always been called a city.

When change came, it took hold hard and fast. Ecruteak’s western half evolved into a dense, run-down urban space over the course of only around a decade, coming to resemble Goldenrod City more than itself. All of the swift change was brought on by society’s rapidly increasing interest in Pokémon training and battling. It was the Angel Corporation behind that paradigm shift, through their ad campaigns promoting the then-impending arrival of the Frontier Society in tandem with the migration of Pokémon from foreign lands. Among young people, these acts led to a dramatic spike in interest in the career of a traveling trainer. Other facilities, such as Pokémon Centers and Gyms, also saw greatly increased activity. In the end, even an ancient, traditional city like Ecruteak could not completely escape the change.

One trait about Ecruteak that hadn’t changed over the years was the city’s symbol, their two towers. The Bell Tower was one, and to its east, located exactly on the borderline between the traditional and modern halves of the city, was the other. It had once been called the Brass Tower, but after burning down well over a century earlier, it came to be known more simply as the Burned Tower. Unlike its counterpart, it was fully open to the public, a fact that Bunny and Nekou were taking full advantage of.

Bunny would have been shivering from the cold air flowing through the ruins if she hadn’t had Balin out with her. The Ninetales was exhaling a small, gentle flame from her mouth, providing both heat and light to her trainer, who was leaning down and examining pieces of a broken wall. She was carefully copying down the writing on the wall in a notebook.

“So glad I didn’t have to look long to find this…” Bunny thought to herself. “Not really in the mood to dig around in the cold, quiet dark today…” Realizing what she had thought, she stopped writing and said out loud, “Wait, quiet? With Nekou around?”

Bunny stood and turned around, and discovered that what she noticed actually was true. Nekou was nowhere to be seen.

“Well, that’s weird. I wonder where she went. I guess we’ll meet up again later… she’ll be alright.”

Satisfied with that conclusion, Bunny went back to her work transcribing the strange writing. Because of how the wall had been damaged, a good deal of it was incomplete and out of order.

Several minutes passed in peaceful silence, allowing Bunny to devote her full attention to what she was doing. All of a sudden, however, a bright light appeared over her, causing her to drop her pen and notebook as she sprang up in shock and turned around.

Behind her, a ghostly creature floated, shining the light from within her pumpkin body. A black spirit bearing yellow eyes and a small, fanged mouth grew from inside the pumpkin as well.

“What the hell is…”

“Having fun, Pumpkaboo?” Nekou abruptly appeared, grinning broadly. The Pokémon giggled in response, prompting Nekou to laugh slightly as well. “I see you’ve met my new Pokémon, Bunny.”

“Is that where you went?” Bunny demanded, pointing her finger at Nekou. “You go off and disappear and then you’ve got another of your troublemakers. I shouldn’t be surprised at this point, should I?”

“Nope,” Nekou replied, her voice a monotone. “You know me well enough by now. You should know how things go with me.”

“You know what, you’re right.” Bunny lowered her eyelids and the tone of her voice to match Nekou’s eyes and voice. “I do know how you get.”

While Nekou and Bunny talked, Pumpkaboo floated over to Balin and settled on her head. The Ninetales immediately became irritated and shook around to remove her, then began growling once she got Pumpkaboo off.

Bunny sighed and brought her hand to her face. “Can you try not to disrupt me from doing this? It’s kind of important.”

“Alright, alright,” Nekou answered, waving her hand dismissively. “I’ll be good. Just let me watch.”

For the next few minutes, Bunny quietly continued working on copying the writing, though she was irritated by the feeling of Nekou hovering mere inches away from her.

“Huh?” Suddenly, Bunny stopped writing. “What’s this?”

Nekou peered slightly over Bunny’s shoulder. “Something got you confused?”

“Right here,” Bunny said, running her hand over a section of the wall. Instead of text, it appeared to be part of a spherical shape carved into the stone.

-:-

As Olivia pushed the great doors of the Gym’s main hall open, light flooded her eyes. She couldn’t help but instinctively close them and raise her arm up until she got used to it. Once she was able to fully appreciate her surroundings, she realized the grandiosity of where she was.

The hall could not have been any more unlike the other rooms in the mansion. They had been dim, dusty and cramped, while the final chamber was spacious and well-furnished. Paintings in ornate frames lined the walls beneath marble arches, while a grand crystal chandelier hung over the checkered ballroom floor at the center of the space.

After drawing inside by a few more steps, Olivia could see Morty standing at the far end of the room. He had his back to her and was staring into a video screen, evidently the one he’d been broadcasting from all along.

“I’m impressed with how easily you made it past Shuppet, Olivia.” Morty slowly turned to face her, his arms crossed and his face bearing a wide, gentle smile. “Your Herdier was quite impressive indeed.”

“Well, I raised it well,” Olivia replied, grinning. “I know what I’m doing.”

“I agree, you do. Now…” As he descended the short staircase to the battlefield, Morty started tossing a Poké Ball in his right hand. “Because you advanced through the first two rooms you visited and did not lose a single Pokémon, you may use Cinccino, Herdier and one more Pokémon against my ultimate Pokémon. This will be a straightforward battle, no tricks or hidden bonuses. Are you ready?”

“As ready as I’ll ever be,” Olivia said, steeling herself and grasping her own Poké Ball. “Bring it on.”

“Very well. The Fog Badge is at stake, so let’s begin!”

Morty put his left hand behind his back and threw the Poké Ball with a sweeping motion of his right. When it burst open, a dark figure emerged from the light, quickly congealing into the form of a Gengar. He stood in front of his trainer with a slouched posture that only made his grin even more sinister.

“I think I might have guessed that was what it would be…” Olivia admitted. She met Gengar’s gaze head-on, but she felt a chill run through her body nevertheless. “I want to try something a little different. It might not work out, but I want to try. Mr. Mime, let’s play!”

Morty took a step back when he learned of Olivia’s choice. He had expected Herdier to return, owing to his knowing Crunch to use against Ghost-types. On top of that, though, he also never thought Olivia would choose a Psychic-type due to their own natural weakness against Ghosts.

“I guess it makes sense, though,” he thought. “Gengar is part Poison-type, and she did say she expected it.”

“Mr. Mime, are you ready to go?” Olivia asked.

To Olivia’s surprise, Mr. Mime replied with nothing but a weak, emotionless groan. He looked up at his enemy, but stood with his arms hung limply at his sides.

“I suppose I will take the first move,” Morty declared. As he raised his arm, he expressed a silent hope that his attack would reveal what was wrong with Olivia’s Pokémon. “Shadow Punch!”

“Mr. Mime, use Mimic!”

Morty immediately understood the kind of strategy Olivia had planned while he watched Gengar lunge toward Mr. Mime. The Ghost-and-Poison type struck Mr. Mime with his glowing, black arm, forcing Olivia’s Pokémon back. As Mr. Mime stumbled, however, his body glowed with golden light.

“Carrying Mimic in order to take Ghost-type moves, which will work well against Ghost-types… it’s risky, but a clever strategy nevertheless.” Though he was complimenting Olivia, in his mind Morty was still questioning what was going on. “I want you to show me what your full convictions are capable of. Gengar, Night Shade!”

“You know what you have to do, Mr. Mime!” Olivia hoped that if she showed determination in her voice, whatever was upsetting Mr. Mime would alleviate itself. “Shadow Punch!”

Mr. Mime lifted his fist and focused the same dark energy Gengar used around it, but he acted so sluggishly that he did not take any further movements. He simply stood and allowed Gengar to overrun him with beams of black light fired from his eyes.

With a weak, frustrated groan, Mr. Mime slouched to the floor in a heap. He could be heard sobbing softly, and he refused to lift his head to either Olivia or Morty.

“Stop, this isn’t working!” Olivia ran out onto the battlefield and got between Mr. Mime and Gengar, waving her arms as she went. “I don’t totally understand why, but I get it, Mr. Mime doesn’t want to fight.” Turning around and leaning down, she asked her Pokémon, “Is that right?”

The only response Olivia got was a frustrated, quiet murmur.

“I think I understand,” Morty intervened, drawing Olivia’s attention. “I won’t force you to make Mr. Mime fight any further, but I hope you understand that I have to count this as a knockout.”

Olivia rose back to her full height, but she couldn’t find words to say right away. Deep down inside, she knew that the right thing to do would be to accept the penalty and let Mr. Mime have his rest. Yet, part of her wanted to refuse the deal and try to turn things around.

“No, I can’t do that!” she snapped to herself in her mind. “What kind of person would I be if…”

Refusing to allow herself to finish the stomach-turning thought, Olivia nodded her assent to Morty’s offer. She then took Mr. Mime’s hand and carefully led him him to the sidelines. It was almost entirely her own effort that moved the two of them; Mr. Mime barely moved a muscle.

Once she had deposited him on the sidelines, Olivia started on her way back to the battlefield. She could feel Mr. Mime’s presence like a burning flame on her back, and it made her hang her head. It horrified her that she could even have entertained such thoughts. By the time she was back in place, she was more concerned with asking herself how she could be so blind to Mr. Mime’s needs.

Morty noticed Olivia’s eyes twitching, but decided to try and work her through it by focusing her back on her goals. “I will be ready to begin again as soon as you decide which Pokémon you wish to go with. Will it be Herdier or Cinccino?”

“Cinccino’s still a bit tired from fighting Yamask, so…” Her mind made up, Olivia took out Herdier’s Poké Ball and threw it, calling out his name as she did so.

-:-

Matt stormed through the tunnels behind the Battle Hall’s stage, his heavy footsteps echoing loudly in the metal corridors. There weren’t any other people around with him, but even if there had been, he wouldn’t have cared if he disturbed them. His one impulse to handle his frustration - jamming his left fist into his pocket while clutching a bottle of Soda Pop with his right - barely helped.

The source of his stress was the newly-announced slate of matchups for the second round of the tournament. Silver and Giovanni, who had won their matches using Persian and Feraligatr, respectively, were matched against each other. Matt found himself amused in a dark way by that, but when he learned of who he was to battle, all humor disappeared.

It was Colress. Matt had feared having to deal with a Steel-type, and knowing that he now had to go against Colress’s mighty Klinklang, his goal of pulling information on Reshiram from Kate felt further away than ever.

“Maybe I can talk to her even if I can’t reach her,” he mentally reasoned. His mood brightened briefly, but quickly fell again. “She’s too famous, though. It would be like trying to get a private autograph from Trevor Hastings. Back when he was around, anyway…”

Matt’s frustration with his situation abated a small amount as his mind wandered to the man he’d seen during the battle on the Magnet Train. He swore that it looked like a someone he knew from one of his favorite films, but the idea of a once-famous actor being in Team Rocket’s ranks confused him.

Suddenly, as he neared a corner, he could hear voices talking just around the bend. Recognizing one of them as Dino’s, he abruptly stopped and pressed himself against the wall. He knew eavesdropping on Dino’s conversation was wrong, but felt strangely nervous about passing by it.

“I owe you an apology, Doctor,” Dino said. “Trevenant didn’t work out the way we hoped.”

“It’s no big deal,” the other party to the conversation replied. “Experiments aren’t experiments if they don’t sometimes fail. We’ll just try again with another subject.”

“That voice…!”

Matt immediately knew that his odd bout of nerves was justified. He recognized the second voice as Colress’s, and realized that something strange was going on. Feeling a great need to know more, he edged slightly closer to the corner.
 

The Great Butler

Hush, keep it down
“Finansielle won’t be terribly pleased,” Colress continued, “but then again she’s always such a miser. Even a failed experiment produces valuable data that moves the project forward.”

“Is it really okay that you talk about her like that?” Dino said, somewhat shocked by what he was hearing.

“It doesn’t matter,” the scientist laughed, spreading his arms and tossing his coat open. “I’m just having a little fun. In the end, my work on Pokémon strength is exactly what the doctor ordered. Literally. Go ahead and release that Trevenant outside the city.”

All of a sudden, Matt could hear footsteps as Colress and Dino separated. One set was fading away down the hall, but the other was drawing closer.

“...oh, ****!”

Matt’s mind filled with panic, and he tried to move away. However, before he was even completely away from the wall, he found himself staring face-to-face with his soon-to-be second round opponent.

“Well, Matt, I didn’t expect to see you off the battlefield.” Colress flashed a disarming smile as he pushed up his visor, though it did little to alleviate the feeling of terrified embarrassment Matt felt. “Taking a break?”

“Y-yeah,” Matt stammered. “I… I went to get some Soda Pop, you know?”

“That stuff will rot your teeth.” Laughing, Colress stuck his hands into the pockets of his coat. When he saw Matt cringe, he said, “Please, forgive me. Just trying to make a joke. If I might ask, how is your friend, Miss Hammond?”

Matt raised an eyebrow. “Miss...Hammond? Who are you talking about?”

“That lady friend of yours with the black hair and the glasses. Jane Hammond.”

“You mean Nekou? I don’t know any Jane Hammond.”

Colress stepped back. “Nekou…? I see. She must be someone who just resembles that person I know. Jane Hammond was a scientist I met a few years ago at a function at my father’s laboratory in Unova. I thought I might get to reconnect with her.”

“Well…” The entire situation was getting too strange, and Matt was beginning to become desperate to escape. “I hope you manage to meet up with her again.” Extending his hand to Colress, he asked, “See you on the battlefield, I guess?”

Without hesitation, Colress gave Matt a hearty handshake. “Thank you, and I wish you luck later.”

Due to his nerves, Matt felt a sudden jolt go through his arm, causing him tighten his grip on Colress’s hand. He quickly pulled away and apologized, and though Colress assured him to not worry, as he turned and walked away he could feel sweat brought on by the entire encounter rolling down his forehead.

Colress, on the other hand, merely stood still with his hands in his pockets and watched Matt walk away. Once they were separated by a sufficient distance, the scientist went back around the corner, took his unfolding tablet out of his pocket and tapped its screen several times.

“Lady Finansielle,” he quietly said to his superior, who had materialized on the computer.

“Colress, if you’re contacting me in the middle of your little data-gathering project, something must have gone wrong.” Finansielle’s voice was full of irritation, though Colress sensed it wasn’t genuine. “What went wrong?”

“That fellow you’re interested in, Matt Chiaki… I think he knows something. He might have overheard me talking to Athleta’s trainer.”

“Is that seriously it?” Dropping her feigned anger, Finansielle smiled. “I am not concerned about him in the least. He’s not half the man his grandfather was. There is nothing he can do that is outside of my expectations. Tell me, though, did you rat out his little girlfriend?”

“I put some feelers out there, you know? I asked him about her old alias from the last time I met her. He didn’t seem to know a thing.”

“As I thought, he’s totally in the dark. Don’t bother telling him, he’ll find out soon enough. Just finish your work at the Battle Hall and get ready for the mission tomorrow.”

“Understood.” Colress shut off the tablet and put it away, then looked back down the hall and pushed up his visor once more. “I always do love the beauty of an experiment on an unwitting subject.”

-:-

“You can’t evade me forever! Gengar, use Toxic again!”

“Just watch me! Herdier, you know what to do!”

Morty’s Gengar spit up a ball of thick, purple sludge, but Herdier sprinted out of the way and avoided its effects. They’d been locked in this dance since their battle began, with Herdier sprinting around the battlefield while Gengar tried to bog him down using Toxic.

Even though she and Herdier had been holding out for some time, though, Olivia knew it couldn’t last forever. While she was working through ideas and holding her increasingly aching head, Morty suddenly changed the situation himself.

“Alright, Olivia, if this isn’t working, I guess it means I have to try something else. Gengar, go in and use Shadow Punch.”

“I finally wore him out!” Olivia gleefully thought. “He’s making a mistake!” Throwing her hand forward, she ordered, “Herdier, use Crunch!”

When Gengar arrived in front of Herdier and began to bring his fist down, the Normal-type Pokémon simply bit through the shadows surrounding it and clasped onto the phantom himself. Herdier held Gengar with all his might, but even in the face of the critically effective move, Gengar never stopped grinning.

It was at that point Olivia put her hands over her mouth, gasped and realized that she, not Morty, was the one making the mistake.

“You won’t get away now!” Morty bellowed, his voice much louder than Olivia had gotten used to. “Toxic!”

Herdier released Gengar and attempted to push himself back, but both he and Olivia knew that Morty’s words were true. Gengar opened his mouth and spit up sludge once more, this time covering Herdier’s body in it. Almost instantly, Herdier began shuddering as the poison took hold over him.

“There’s one thing I can do about that!” Olivia declared, taking out a Poké Ball and pointing at Herdier. “Herdier, come back!”

“Ah, good thinking, Olivia,” Morty complimented her as she called Herdier back. “Unfortunately, I think you’ll find that I’m more than ready to do this for a long time. Send Cinccino out and let’s get started.”

Olivia froze. She hadn’t considered what Morty’s strategy could have been for long; the immediate conclusion she’d arrived at being that he aimed to use severe poison to help him finish off her Pokémon more quickly than usual. Never had it crossed her mind that he was trying to do the opposite, to sit back and take his time while the strength of her Pokémon slowly faded away.

She could only stare forward at Gengar and Morty as she felt her mind begin to weaken. Her body began to shake, and the same feeling from when she blacked out in Azalea Gym began to return.

“No, not this time!” Her thoughts were spoken in her own growling within her mind. She quickly turned to verbalizing her fury, saying, “I know I’ve got a way out of this! I know it! Cinccino, let’s play!”

Morty barely waited for Cinccino to appear from her Poké Ball before he gave his next direction to Gengar. “Alright, Gengar, use Curse.”

With a sharp cry, Gengar spread his arms and formed a spike of light above his head. The spike slowly drove itself down into Gengar’s body, causing him to shake and groan more and more with every bit it descended. Each inch also brought on an increasingly intense purple aura around Cinccino, indicative of the curse the move was named for taking hold.

“Cinccino, don’t worry,” Olivia said to reassure her Pokémon. The seeds of an idea were already taking shape in her mind. “Take it easy. Just take it easy and use Rock Blast.”

Overcoming the pinching feeling the curse induced in her muscles, Cinccino jumped into the air and began spinning. Five uneven spheres of energy formed into stones in her tail, which she then flung downward to buffet Gengar. Each impact forced a small grunt from the ghost, and his shadowy body showed the scrapes from them despite its composure.

Seconds later, Cinccino was overcome by the sensation of the curse, shuddering violently as it sapped a large deal of her strength. Morty wasn’t satisfied by just this, however, and slowly extended his arm toward Olivia.

“Hit Cinccino with Toxic now!”

With his enemy seemingly prone before him, Gengar grinned even wider, believing that he had an easy target. Just before he spit up another wave of slime, though, he saw a glint in Cinccino’s eye that made him realize he was wrong.

“Aqua Tail!”

Cinccino roared back to life and dove toward Gengar, but when he released the Toxic, she quickly twisted out of the way. The sludge sailed harmlessly past her, but she also failed to reach Gengar for her own strike and suffered the affliction of the Curse once again.

“Oh, that’s right,” Olivia recalled, “Cinccino doesn’t like getting dirty.”

Olivia took a step back both mentally and physically to look over her options. It would be difficult to get Cinccino in close enough for Aqua Tail to work with Toxic acting effectively as a deterrent. Gengar was immune to Tail Slap, and Bullet Seed would barely be effective against him thanks to his Poison-type. That only left Rock Blast, but Olivia was unsure if she felt confident enough that it would finish the fight. She could see the physical damage all over Gengar’s body and thought she noticed his stance weakening, but she wanted to be sure that she could win.

There was one other option, and before she knew it, she had subconsciously selected it and begun raising up Cinccino’s Poké Ball.

“Cinccino, come back!”

“Not bad, thinking on your feet,” Morty said, grinning gently once again. “Herdier’s still poisoned, though.”

“I know,” Olivia countered, flashing determination through every bit of her face she could. “But I also know you can’t use Curse again, or Gengar will take itself out! Herdier, let’s finish this!”

As Herdier returned to the battlefield, Morty raised his head slightly and looked downward at Olivia.

“You really are pretty good, Olivia. You’ve outwitted me. With your Normal-types keeping my best moves in check, I can’t put this over the finish line, and Gengar getting worn out quickly means I can’t stall as I’d like...”

Before Morty knew it, Olivia had called for Crunch and Herdier was dashing toward Gengar. He could see that Olivia was looking to him for his next move, but he had no intention of denying her the victory she had rightfully won.

“Gengar, you’ve fought well,” he uttered, resigning himself to defeat and beginning down the stairs before Gengar even was hit. By the time Herdier released his grip on Gengar and the ghostly Pokémon fell, the Gym Leader was already just a few feet away.

“I did it,” Olivia uttered in shock. Her body started to go limp in the time it took for her victory to sink in. When Herdier turned around and barked at her, the true meaning of her accomplishment finally took hold, and her strength returned in a great rush. “I did it! I won! Three Badges now!”

Olivia pumped her fists into the air repeatedly. Each swing brought an increasing sense of exertion, creating a self-fulfilling cycle where she felt more energy after expending some. Once she was able to bring herself down from her high, she turned to Morty, who was scratching his Gengar behind the ear.

“Bravo, Olivia, that was quite a show.”

While his trainer approached Morty, Herdier went up to Gengar. He stared up into the ghost’s eyes, and found himself greeted with what seemed to be seething hate. Moments later, though, Gengar grinned and slapped Herdier on the shoulder. He cheerfully said his name as a gesture of congratulations to a worthy opponent like the Normal-type Pokémon, while Herdier just cringed.

“Thank you, Morty,” Olivia said, smiling weakly. “I enjoyed it.”

“You definitely appear like you did. Here, this is yours.” Extending his open hand, Morty showed Olivia a Badge in the shape of a purple ghost. “The Fog Badge. You’ve proven yourself more than worthy of it, so I am honored to give it to you.”

Olivia was lost in the emotional weight of her victory, and as a result did not reach out immediately to claim the Badge. When she finally snapped out of her daze, she took it from Morty and stared at it in her palm.

“I know I’ll have memories of this,” she thought. “Every one of these is worth remembering…”

-:-

“Viridian City’s Gym Leader continues his dominating performance! Will he soon put this away or will Silver be able to turn this battle around?”

A gust of wind created by Giovanni’s Persian hitting Feraligatr in the chest with a Power Gem blast swept over the arena. Silver had to put up his arm to shield his eyes, but the force caused his hair and clothing to blow around violently.

The wind wasn’t Silver’s primary source of discomfort, though. He had his teeth so tightly clenched that the muscles in his neck were cramping up. It wasn’t something he was consciously doing, but facing his father was bringing up such intense emotion in Silver that he couldn’t help his rage.

“After all this time, is this all you’re capable of, boy?” Giovanni taunted his son. He was well aware of what the meeting was making Silver feel. “If you still aren’t capable of standing on my level, then I’m going to remove you from this stage.”

“I don’t… I don’t care what you say,” Silver growled. “You’re still only showing your strength when it’s in front of others… you’re still the same, and I’m not going to fall short after coming this far!”

“Actually, yes, you are. Persian, Seed Bomb.”

“Feraligatr, knock them away with Ice Punch!”

Persian rapidly spun around in a circle, kicking up a number of large, round seeds. Feraligatr attempted to bat them down by swinging his cold fists, but each one exploded as he hit it. Their force caused Feraligatr to fall behind the pace of Persian’s attack, and left him to get buffeted by the bursting seeds.

Unable to continue standing with his body bruised and battered by the explosions, Feraligatr groaned weakly and fell backward, hitting the ground with a great crash.

“No!” Silver shouted in dismay. “It can’t…”

“Feraligatr is unable to battle!” Kate announced from her position at mid-field. “The winners of this battle are Giovanni and Persian!”

“I thought it would go like this,” Giovanni coldly said, putting his left hand deep into his coat pocket and holding his hat with his right. Persian sat and meowed contently, rubbing in his victory much like his trainer was doing. “Listen, boy, your anger is clouding your judgment. Face me again when you can remain cool headed on the battlefield.”

Silver held up Feraligatr’s Poké Ball, but then he froze. As much as he was loathe to admit it, something about his father’s words was resonating with him. Usually, he was able to remain fairly held together when battling, but when he stepped onto the stage with Giovanni, he felt his vision for battle draining away. Subconsciously he had been well aware of how his obsession with his father had clouded his judgment, and he had to admit he knew that was why he lost.

Finally, after calling Feraligatr back to his Poké Ball, he mumbled, “I get it. I’ll see you next time.”

As Giovanni and Silver departed the stage, the former walked past Matt, who had been watching from one of the tunnels leading to the battlefield. Matt didn’t say anything, but Giovanni still stopped next to him.

“Don’t trust anyone,” he warned, whispering to Matt. “Least of all that next opponent of yours. Polaris is everywhere.”

While Giovanni walked off, Matt froze in fear. He was already nervous about facing Colress, and the decisive nature of Mako’s victory over Falkner and Trista’s victory over a hulking sailor with a Primeape didn’t help those matters at all. There also were the nagging concerns about the strange conversation he’d overheard between Colress and Dino earlier. Matt didn’t need anything more to worry about, and Giovanni’s sudden warning gave him exactly that.

“And now coming out for his second battle, the Psychic-type representative, Matt from Snowpoint City!”

It took several seconds for Matt to fully realize that Kate was calling him out. When he finally snapped back into reality, he could see Colress standing in the distance, already positioned on the far side of the stage and waiting with a smug grin on his face.

“I have to get my **** together!” he mentally choked, stumbling down the catwalk.

Up in the stands, the crowd’s cheering lessened somewhat due to Matt’s clumsy entrance. Bill and Dante cringed at the sight.

“If you ask me, he needs to get over his stage fright,” the elderly scientist remarked, his voice containing a hint of a joking tone.

“I have to admit I’ve been looking forward to this, Matt,” Colress called across the stage. “I’ve been intrigued by you since I saw fight Dahlia, not to mention that your stand against the Battle Factory was something too. I’d like to learn for myself what kind of strength you have.”

Matt fidgeted where he stood, repeatedly tightening his grip on his bag’s strap and breathing heavily. The pressure he felt to keep advancing was getting overwhelming. Looking at Kate both encouraged and demoralized him; never had his goal of learning about Reshiram felt both so close and so far away.

“Alright, trainers, send out your Pokémon!” Kate declared, throwing her hand skyward. “Let the battle begin!”

Resolving to take some initiative, Matt swiftly threw his Poké Ball, calling out, “Cordelia, make your mark!”

Colress didn’t respond to the appearance of Matt’s Sigilyph with any words. Instead, he simply lifted his hand from his pocket and gently tossed his own Poké Ball, calling forth his Klinklang in a burst of light.

“Alright, so I don’t have any move a Steel-type doesn’t resist,” Matt thought as the noise from the crowd began to lessen, “so what are my options here? If I look at it objectively… the only thing there is is to try crippling it.” Crossing his arms, Matt called out, “Cordelia, see if you can freeze it. Ice Beam!”

“You can weather that, Klinklang,” Colress said. He had once again unfolded his tablet, and was tapping its screen as he watched the Pokémon. “Take it and then use Shift Gear.”

Wobbling slightly forward in the air, Klinklang braced itself. Cordelia’s Ice Beam hit it in the outer rim surrounding its body, and though the cold ran through Klinklang, its recovery was swift. It then began spinning its gears at an escalated speed, surrounding itself with a silvery glow.

“Klinklang’s raised its attack power and dramatically increased its speed!” Though he had knowledge of what Shift Gear’s effect was, Matt found himself mentally appreciating the announcer’s note. “Will that increased strength spell a rapid end to Matt’s challenge?”

“If freezing didn’t work, maybe flinching will! Cordelia, use Air Slash!”

“Just use Shift Gear again, Klinklang.”

Cordelia swung her wings to direct blades of air at Klinklang, but the Steel-type Pokémon simply rotated its gears even faster than ever, breaking the Air Slash apart.

Groaning, Matt tilted his head back and ran his hand through his hair. He realized that not only had he been right to fear Colress in the tournament, but the truth of his situation was worse than he had ever figured. None of the moves he had at his disposal could do much to Klinklang, and it was exponentially stronger than it was when the fight started.

Matt looked up at Cordelia and saw that she was looking back at him. Realizing that his Pokémon needed his help gave him enough strength to make another command. “I guess you could try weakening it with Psychic, Cordelia. Give it a shot.”

This time, Colress didn’t even give an order in response to Matt’s. Grinning and tapping on the screen of his tablet, he stood by as the purple light from Cordelia’s eye surrounded his Pokémon.

After several seconds of the light pulling at Klinklang’s body, Colress finally said, “I think I’ve analyzed you enough. You aren’t living up to what I’d hoped for. Klinklang, put an end to this with one shot! Wild Charge!”

Klinklang abruptly stopped rotating its gears, causing its body to shake. It slowly tilted back so its gaze would be angled directly at Cordelia, and even though the expressions on its two faces didn’t change, Matt understood the passion that was flowing through it. One more glance from Klinklang to Kate forced him to resign himself to his fate, and he shut his eye.

As bright yellow electricity enveloped Klinklang, it set its stare evenly with Cordelia’s. Like her trainer, she could see the burning spirit in the Steel-type Pokémon’s mechanical eyes. By that point she had already come to understand how little her moves could do to it. Mimicking her trainer, she closed her eye and waited for the crushing blow of Wild Charge to come.

When Klinklang collided with Cordelia, the electricity in its body discharged, causing an explosion. Cordelia was flung down to the floor like a rocket, her body sparking with the energy that had just been used to cut her down.

“Sigilyph is unable to continue battling! The winners of this round are Colress and Klinklang!”

Even though he had been hoping to win, something about hearing Kate declare him the loser had a cathartic effect. Matt’s mind eased, even if only slightly since the audience was once again cheering at a deafening volume.

“Matt!” Colress called across the stage, prompting him to lift his head. “I know it was quick, but I have to say thank you for facing me. I aim to discover what brings out the true strength of Pokémon. In a way, that makes us kind of similar, I suppose. Battling you puts me one step closer to that goal.”

Matt found himself somewhat lost over Colress’s rambling. Not wishing to pursue the subject while he was still in the middle of the crowd’s attention, though, he opted to quietly recall Cordelia and nod to his victorious foe.

“You’re welcome, I guess. Good luck in the next rounds.”

Up in the stands, Bill said to Dante, “I have to admit I’m a little disappointed. I was kind of looking forward to seeing him battle my sister.”

“Sometimes wishes don’t come true,” Dante replied. “I know he’s capable after what I saw at the Battle Cafe. I guess the one-on-one format just caused him to come up short.”

-:-

Though it was a sunny and clear, the air in Ecruteak had gotten colder as the day went on. While walking to the Battle Hall from the Gym with her friends, Olivia found herself thanking the luck that had led her to her new, warm coat.

A puff of air floated from her mouth with every breath she took, and her hand shivered around her Pokégear. She wasn’t paying much attention to the cold, though. Her attention was instead fixated on the photo she had just taken with the device, in which she posed with Audrey, Monroe and Avril to show off her new Fog Badge.

“You did… you did really well, Olivia.” For once, Monroe’s stuttering wasn’t because of his nerves, but instead because of the chilly air. “Like I said before, I didn’t have too much trouble beating Morty, but lots of people say they do.”

A slight grin played onto Olivia’s face as she looked toward him. “Thanks. I think I just got lucky having the right Pokémon to use against him. Those status moves of his could have been really hard to deal with if my Pokémon could get damaged by his actual attacks too.”

“Cinccino and Herdier did all the lifting, don’t fool yourself,” Avril remarked, walking with her arms crossed behind her head. “I don’t know why you didn’t just go with Dewott third. Mr. Mime was at a disadvantage from the start.”

“Stop being such a buzzkill. So I didn’t do it perfectly.”

While Avril and Olivia glared at each other through the sides of their eyes, Audrey stepped closer to them and said, “I think Avril has a point this time, Olivia. Was something wrong with Mr. Mime that he wouldn’t fight, though?”

“You know…” Olivia put away the Pokégear and took out Mr. Mime’s Poké Ball, then stared sadly into its surface. “I’m not sure. I thought he would enjoy battling more after the Goldenrod Gym and Battle Cafe.”

“Do you want to know what’s wrong with Mr. Mime? I can tell you.”

Olivia, Avril, Monroe and Audrey all jumped. None of them had noticed Nikolai approach them, let alone realized that he was walking alongside them.

“Who are you?” Audrey blurted out.

“Calm down,” Olivia said, “I know him.” Turning to face Nikolai, she asked, “What are you doing here? What’s wrong with Mr. Mime?”

“I will answer your questions one at a time. First, I was traveling outside the city when I saw Polaris capturing Pokémon outside of Mt. Mortar. I followed them into Ecruteak but then I lost their trail and while I was walking around I could hear your Mr. Mime’s voice…”

“Does he always talk this fast?” Audrey whispered to Olivia.

“You get used to it.”

“But I’m getting ahead of myself,” Nikolai continued rambling, seemingly unaware that Audrey and Olivia had been talking about him. “Please, let Mr. Mime out of the Poké Ball.”

Seeing no reason not to comply with Nikolai’s request, Olivia pressed the button on the center of the ball, causing it to pop open and release Mr. Mime. Almost immediately upon being summoned, he looked around at his surroundings, then slumped to the ground once again.

“I can hear the anguish…” Extending his hand toward Mr. Mime, Nikolai intoned, “Tell me what is causing you such pain. Transcend the confines of time and space.”

“What’s he doing?” Avril wondered, while the four of them watched Nikolai’s eyes and palm begin to glow.

“He’s got some kind of powers or something,” answered Olivia. “You’d probably have to ask Matt for the details, but he says he can hear the thoughts of Pokémon.”

For the next minute, Olivia, Avril, Monroe and Audrey watched in awe as Nikolai stood rigidly still, occasionally mumbling something as if he was conversing with Mr. Mime. Once he was done, he lowered his hand, causing his eyes to return to normal.

“Mr. Mime no longer wishes to battle with you,” he flatly said.

Olivia could feel her heart sink when she heard this news. “But why? I don’t understand!”

“Mr. Mime was taken from somewhere quite far from here to be given away as a prize at the Game Corner,” Nikolai explained, his disgust evident in his tone. “At first he did not mind working with you, but losing to a Fighting-type like Hitmonchan at the Battle Cafe caused him to become demoralized. He couldn’t fight at the Gym because he now wishes to go back home to where he came from.”

“I-Is…” Unable to speak without facing her Pokémon, Olivia walked around to stand in front of Mr. Mime and stared deeply into his eyes. “Is that true, Mr. Mime?”

“Mime, mime…” the Pokémon said sadly.

“Olivia, w-what will you do?”

Olivia waited to respond to Monroe, allowing herself time to consider what her possible options were. She didn’t need long, though. Almost immediately one particular idea jumped to the front of her mind, where it stayed.

Standing back up straight, she finally answered, “I’ll help Mr. Mime go back home. He can tell me when we reach the right place.”

“You’re doing the right thing, Olivia,” Nikolai happily said.

None of the five assembled humans, nor the Pokémon with them, noticed that they were being watched. A pair of black eyes with a cloud of yellow wool behind them were peering out from the grass near the road.

“Reep…”

-:-

A deafening roar of a gasp filled the air of the Battle Hall as the final match reached its climax. Colress’s Klinklang and Trista’s Kingdra were locked in a close struggle, twisting around each other as they looked for openings to attack each other.

Both of the trainers were coming off of strong performances in the third round. Much like his fights against the bodybuilder’s Swalot and Matt’s Sigilyph, Colress had an easy time against Giovanni thanks to the vast type advantage Klinklang held over Persian. Though Persian had put in plenty of effort, and did manage to at least put up a fight using Dark Pulse, he couldn’t keep up with Klinklang after the Steel-type had boosted itself with Shift Gear. As for Trista, her battle with Mako had been the closest of the entire tournament to that point. Mako’s Jolteon attacked hard and fast like he had in the previous rounds, but Kingdra’s bulky body was able to endure Jolteon’s electrical attacks so she could wear him down.

In their current fight, Klinklang was gradually overcoming Kingdra’s attempts to escape its attacks thanks to the power of Shift Gear granting it more speed. The two Pokémon continued to jockey for position over each other, but Klinklang was edging Kingdra out.

“You’re doing just fine, Klinklang,” Colress said, tapping his tablet’s screen. His visor was recording the battle and streaming the data directly to the device. “I’d like to try to finish this up now, though. Wild Charge!”

Trista clenched her teeth, and a bead of sweat rolled down her forehead. She hadn’t expected Klinklang to pose such a challenge. “Dodge and see if you can stop it with Surf, Dorothy!”

Klinklang cloaked itself in electricity and rushed at Dorothy, but the Kingdra managed to twist away again, though she only escaped by a razor’s edge margin. She took the opportunity presented by Klinklang slowing down to wash a tidal wave of water over it.

While watching Klinklang shake the water off, Colress noticed the leftover electricity still on it sparking through the drops. Seeing this gave him an idea, and he smiled.

“I know the path to victory, Klinklang. Use Shift Gear again.”

Fully recovering from the shock of Dorothy’s Surf, Klinklang sharply turned around and accelerated the rotation of its gears even more, further elevating its attacking power and speed.

Trista narrowed her eyes and allowed an annoyed grunt to escape her throat. She knew very well what Colress was capable of once Klinklang had boosted itself so many times over, and she also knew that allowing Klinklang to get close would be too much of a risk.

“You’ve got to keep Klinklang at bay, Dorothy!” Trista warned. “Hold it back with Surf!”

Colress’s smile became a little bit wider once Trista’s words hit his ears. Pushing up his visor, he immediately said, “I know you’re a Coordinator too, so watch this combination move. Klinklang, dive right into the Surf while you use Wild Charge!”

Dorothy surrounded her body with water, and from there another powerful wave took shape. This time, Klinklang did not make any effort to avoid it. Instead, the Steel-type Pokémon simply threw another of its electrically-charged tackles straight into the swell.

Klinklang was able to push about halfway through the surge of water before the current became too strong for it to counter. That didn’t stop what Colress had been aiming to do, though; in fact, it was exactly what he had hoped for. The electricity from Wild Charge reacted with the water and flowed through it, creating a deadly trap for Dorothy. The entire hall lit up with the light from the electrical cage, and the Kingdra could be heard crying out from within it.

Seconds later, the water dissipated, causing the electrical cage to collapse. In the midst of the still-sparking droplets, Dorothy reeled back, let out a sickly groan and fell down to the floor. Trista was left in shock at how quickly her fortunes had turned.

“Kingdra is unable to continue battling!” Kate announced. “The winners of this round and of the Battle Hall tournament… Colress and Klinklang!”

The crowd went wild, having been whipped into a frenzy by the non-stop, fast-paced battles that had unfolded. Their praise showered down on Colress and Klinklang like a waterfall, and while Klinklang robotically but cheerfully chattered its pleasure, his trainer scoffed at the attention.

“Of course they love me,” he thought, once again pushing up his visor. “I’m a genius beyond compare!”

Not everyone in the Battle Hall shared the general mood over Colress’s victory. Trista, though she felt disappointment as she left the stage, wasn’t upset over her loss. Both Matt and Giovanni, however, felt misgivings over the situation, but for different reasons. In Matt’s case, it was because he was still unsure of what Colress’s motives were, as well as his continuing frustration over having not been able to reach Kate. His mind had been obsessively focused on Reshiram following his loss, and as a result he had barely paid attention to any of the battles before the final round.
 

The Great Butler

Hush, keep it down
Giovanni, on the other hand, knew exactly what was driving Colress, or at least had a strong hunch about it. The presence of a Polaris member at the Battle Hall worried him, especially after the betrayal of Thorton to their side. He trusted in the abilities of his subordinates to monitor all of Polaris’s activity, but the feeling of powerlessness he felt immediately at the tournament enraged him. All he could do was pull his hat down over his eyes and wait.

Out on the stage, Kate approached Colress and produced a medicine contained within a yellow box with a spray nozzle on it.

“Congratulations on winning the Battle Hall tournament,” she said to him.

“You’re very welcome, my dear.”

“As you know, the next step in your quest is a battle with me, the Hall Matron. If you can best me you can receive the medal for the Battle Hall. In order to make this a fair fight, here’s a Full Restore to put your Klinklang back in tip-top shape.”

Kate handed Colress the medicine, then turned and began walking toward the empty box on one side of the battlefield. By the time she arrived, Colress had already sprayed it on his Pokémon, instantly revitalizing its strength. Klinklang floated alongside Colress, clicking away as it waited for its final fight to begin.

“Alright, Colress, it’s time for the grand finale to get underway! You won your way through all your opponents with your Steel-type Pokémon to stand before me. Only one question remains… do you have the star power to shine the brightest of all? Only one can come out on top as this Battle Hall’s superstar. Are you worthy of that spotlight? Show me right here, right now!”

“The Battle Hall’s Frontier Brain challenge! The challenger Colress… versus the Hall Matron Kate! Let the battle begin!”

“Come on out, my dear superstar! Take the stage and show off your brilliance!”

The crowd had already been energized by the announcer’s words, but when Kate threw her Poké Ball, they erupted. A Venusaur stomped out of the light of the ball and roared, his voice loud enough to even quiet the audience.

Bill and Dante both found their attention drawn to a leather strap that was tied onto Kate’s Venusaur’s front left leg. They could see a gray stone bearing a red and blue helix set into it.

“I knew it!” Bill exclaimed. “Kate has the Key Stone in her headset… and Venusaur has a Mega Stone. That means she’ll Mega Evolve it!”

“Sounds like you’re going to get a chance to see your first Mega Evolution today,” Dante said, wryly winking at him.

The two scientists in the stands weren’t the only ones who were keenly aware of what Kate and Venusaur possessed. Colress knew what the stone meant as well.

“I get to see a Mega Evolution and battle it head-on… working with Polaris really has paid off for my research!” After gesturing to prompt Klinklang forth, Colress said to Kate, “I can see the Venusaurite your Venusaur is wearing, and I’ve seen the Key Stone on your headset. I know what those mean, so don’t take it easy! Show me everything you’ve got!”

“I have every intention of showing you all my talents.” Kate touched two fingers of her left hand to the Key Stone, causing both it and Venusaur’s Mega Stone to begin glowing. “Our ultimate showstopper… Venusaur, Mega Evolve!”

Bright light flooded the entire stadium, causing much of the crowd to have to cover their eyes. Even the losing trainers in the backstage lounge, who were watching on closed-circuit television, had to look away. Venusaur’s mighty roar once again echoed through the hall during the entire process.

The light suddenly broke away, revealing that Venusaur had transformed. His body had gained a significant amount of bulk, mainly to support the jungle-like growths sprouted around the giant flower on his back. Smaller pink flowers had appeared on both his forehead and rear. To conclude the Mega Evolution, the helix sigil that both the Key Stone and Mega Stone bore briefly lighted up over Venusaur. The crowd instantly began cheering more loudly than ever, and even Bill and Dante were too fascinated by the Mega Evolution to be bothered by the noise.

Colress looked down at his tablet, where he could see energy readings dramatically increasing. “It’s exactly what I’ve been looking for, this energy…” Though he found it difficult, he managed to force down his excitement enough to engage in battle, telling Klinklang, “Get started with Shift Gear!”

“Oh no you don’t!” Kate intervened with a sweep of her arm. “I know how you do this. Venusaur, stop it with Leech Seed!”

Klinklang started to rotate its gears at a higher speed, just as it had done in all the other fights, but Kate had a tactic up her sleeve to stop it. A light appeared in the center of Venusaur’s giant flower and fired diagonally toward the Steel-type, and once they hit, the lights faded to reveal large seeds. These seeds then sprouted vines that wrapped around Klinklang’s body, jamming it from using Shift Gear. Moments later, Klinklang shuddered and briefly glowed green as the vines drained some of its energy.

“That’s clever,” Colress said, grinning mischievously. “Of course, I should expect no less from a Frontier Brain, especially a superstar like yourself.”

Kate knew that Colress was trying to butter her up. Instead of saying as much, though, she pretended to fall for it by returning his grin and saying, “I guess you really know what you’ve gotten into.”

“But the question is, do you?” Having fallen for Kate’s deception, Colress became more openly cocky than ever. “Klinklang, use Wild Charge to escape!”

Though it was still unable to rotate its gears, Klinklang was able to throw another of its electrically-charged tackles. By the time it collided with Venusaur, the electricity had burned away the seeds and vines. The impact caused Klinklang to be thrown back, but Venusaur barely shifted due to his resistance to Electric-type attacks.

“Alright, Venusaur, time for the reprisal act! Leech Seed!”

Klinklang hadn’t pulled away in time, and as a result, Venusaur was able to cover it in Leech Seeds again at nearly point-blank range. The Steel-type Pokémon reeled back as strength was sapped from its body into Venusaur, who roared powerfully.

“Did you really think that would work when I just showed you how I can break out of it?” The stage lights glistened on Colress’s visor as he thrust his finger forward and called out, “Wild Charge!”

Colress was too caught up in his confidence to notice the wicked smirk that had come onto Kate’s face. Knowing she had full control of the battle, she stood back and didn’t give Venusaur any orders. He had a perfect grasp on what she was doing, and with full trust in his trainer, he stood fast against the charging Klinklang.

While the vines fell off of Klinklang for the second time, Kate decided to make her move. “Venusaur, Frenzy Plant!” she cried out.

Venusaur’s body became outlined by green light seconds before he stomped the ground with incredible force. The ground began to shake as his power flowed through it.

All of a sudden, giant roots erupted from the floor beneath where Klinklang was floating. It had no time to even try to move. As a result, the roots tore over it and became entangled in its gears, once again crippling its ability to rotate them.

The audience collectively gasped, but Colress remained cool and confident. “I don’t think you’ll overwhelm me with a type disadvantage. And shall I remind you that Frenzy Plant makes your Pokémon need to rest? You just gave me an opening! Klinklang, Wild Charge!”

Klinklang grumbled in a mechanical fashion, then started to charge its body with electricity and attempted to move. The vines of Frenzy Plant were far thicker than their Leech Seed counterparts, however. As a result, Klinklang couldn’t break free this time. It struggled mightily, but all it could accomplish was making its body shudder and spark.

“What?” For the first time, Colress’s cockiness faded. He was reduced to a wide-eyed wreck with his mouth hung open. “I can’t break through?”

“That’s what’ll happen when you underestimate me.” Kate accentuated her cheerful taunt with a wink. “Feel free to try and get out of that, though. With how thick those Frenzy Plant vines are, you’re going to need all the luck you can get.”

Colress lowered his head slightly. Though he was loathe to admit it, he knew that Kate was right. Without its usual mobility, Klinklang was crippled.

“Give it all you’ve got, Klinklang!” Colress called up to his immobilized Pokémon. “Throw all your power into Shift Gear!”

Though it put as much strength as it could into trying to move, Klinklang could manage nothing beyond a ragged shaking. Its voice came out in a weak gurgle as it did so.

All around him, Colress could hear the audience beginning to become riled up once again. The meaning of this wasn’t lost on him - they sensed that the victory of their beloved Frontier Brain was near, and he knew it just as well as they did.

“Klinklang, you’ve got one last chance to turn this around,” he advised. “Take it up to a Gear Grind! See if that works!”

As soon as it heard Colress’s order, Klinklang abruptly reversed the direction it was attempting to rotate in. It didn’t amount to much, though, for even though Klinklang managed to move a slight bit more, the vines held fast.

“Gear Grind, one more time!”

Kate adjusted her glasses and smugly said in response, “It’s the end of the show. Venusaur, Earthquake!”

While Klinklang continued to hopelessly try to move, Venusaur reared back onto his hind legs, then brought down his massive weight onto the stage. The resulting shockwave traveled through the floor before being channeled up through the vines, which allowed it to violently impact Klinklang’s body. The Steel-type Pokémon was torn from the vines’ grasp by the force and thrown into the air before coming crashing down onto the ground.

“That’s it!” the announcer declared over the thunderous roaring of the crowd. “The Battle Hall tournament is over, and the victor of the final battle… is the Hall Matron, Kate!!”

For several moments, Colress stood still and silent. Once the shock of his stunning reversal of fortune sank in, he sighed contently.

“I got enough data, Finansielle will be pleased,” he thought while tapping the screen of his tablet a few more times before putting it away in his coat.

Klinklang slowly picked itself up, but stopped when it felt Colress’s hand on the top of its largest gear. It uttered a noise of defeat, but the scientist didn’t stop smiling.

“You did well enough, sweeping through all those other rounds,” he said. “Can’t win ‘em a…”

Colress was abruptly cut off when he felt his arm being pulled upward. Kate was standing next to him, having approached without notice, and was now showing him off to the crowd.

“A big hand for our tournament winner, Colress!” she beamed, inciting the crowd even further. Colress could only stare at her, dumbfounded. “He didn’t beat me, but he put on a great show for you all, so show him your love!”

“I appreciate your sense of theatricality,” he finally said, though he could barely hear himself speak above the crowd’s cheering.

“Thank you,” Kate answered, “And I do mean it, I enjoyed facing you.”

-:-

A short while later, Matt was leaving the arena. He was by himself, but cared little, preferring to remain lost in his thoughts than to be carrying on a conversation. With his head low and his hands firmly planted in the pockets of his coat, he was in a fog over once again failing to reach his goal.

“Sometimes I wonder why I even keep doing this,” he mused out loud as he walked. “These trainers are way outside my capability, to say nothing of the Frontier Brains themselves…”

“But you beat Dahlia, no?”

Matt froze when he heard Dante’s voice, and it was only then that he realized that he had completely failed to notice the elderly scientist standing with Bill. In fact, he had nearly walked past them altogether.

“I-I-I…” The sudden meeting had thrown Matt, and he found himself struggling to speak as a result. “I don’t know, I guess that’s true. It just feels shitty to be on such a losing streak, you know?”

“It’s good to know one’s limits,” Bill offered, scratching his chin. “Believe me, I know. I’ve lost whole weeks at a time working without knowing when to stop.”

“So have I,” Matt playfully shot back. “My grandfather used to have to carry me back to my dorm in Rustboro all the time. I’d fall asleep everywhere else while overworking myself.”

“****ing hell, you sure are full of new stories all the time.”

Nekou’s voice attracted the attention of Matt, Bill and Dante to the direction of the Battle Hall’s entrance. The other two groups had since reunited, and Nekou was approaching them with Bunny, Olivia, Audrey, Monroe, Avril and Nikolai behind her.

“You heard that?” Matt chuckled nervously. “Yeah, I didn’t take care of myself too well…”

“Judging by your mood I’m guessing you lost.”

“You always have been able to read me pretty well, I guess,” he replied, scratching the back of his head. Shifting his gaze slightly, he asked Olivia, “And how did you do at the Gym?”

“See for yourself,” Olivia said with a broad smile. She took her Pokégear out of her pocket and showed the photograph of herself with the Fog Badge to her friends. “And guess what, Minccino evolved into Cinccino during the battle too!”

“Ah, well done, Olivia,” Dante complimented. “You’ve always kept on impressing me, ever since we met. Your drive reminds me of my own daughter… she used to be such a hard worker…”

“Oh boy, here he goes with one of his stories again…” Nekou mumbled, rolling her eyes. “Bunny, tell them what you found.”

Bunny drew a sharp, irritated breath, then took a step forward and said, “There was something written on the walls of the Burned Tower’s basement in the ancient Tenganist language, but… it was incomplete. Broken apart. It’s going to need some time to be translated, and even then, it won’t tell us the whole story.”

“You wrote it down, right?”

“Come on, Matt, you know me,” Bunny groaned. “Of course I did. Working on my own, though, it won’t be a fast process.”

“You know, Bunny…” Bill interjected, “I’ve done some research into into Tenganist history myself. Our mother used to be one of the Kimono Girls, so it interests me. Think you could give me a look at what you found sometime?”

“I…”

“I thought you were going to ask that flower girl to be your...ahem...assistant?”

Bill’s face flushed from Mako’s joke, as his older sister approached alongside Kate. Both of them were wearing wry grins. When Bunny realized the meaning of what Mako said, she turned red as well.

“Don’t get the wrong idea!” Bunny fumbled.

“Mako, I wish you wouldn’t joke like that…”

Instead of backing off, Mako laughed and threw her arm around her brother, making him cringe. “You know it’s all in good fun, Bill. Maybe you’d loosen up a little if you had someone looking after you.”

Sensing an opportunity to cause mischief, Nekou slid in with the same sneaky expression Mako had, adding, “Yeah, listen to your sister.”

“Two of you now?!”

While Nekou and Mako teased Bill, Matt approached Kate. “Why are you here?”

“To talk to you about Reshiram, silly,” Kate said with a gentle, weary smile. “I know you’re wondering how I know about that right now. Us Frontier Brains talk a lot, so I heard you were coming my way from Lyra.”

After making a mental note to thank Lyra if he ever saw her again, Matt asked Kate, “So what is it? Are you able to tell me anything?”

“I’m the Hall Matron!” Kate laughed. “I’m a star who’s been around the world! Of course I can tell you.” Relaxing her body and lowering her voice, she explained, “It’s something I learned when I was performing in Unova. I think the legend went something like this… the king of Unova in ancient times had two sons, twin princes who were greatly admired by their subjects. One prince sought to build a world based on the truth, and believed in this cause with all his heart. One day, his dedication to knowledge and truth caused a mysterious white orb to appear before him.”

“The Light Stone?” Matt guessed.

“That’s what it’s called now. The prince did not know he was even looking for it - it was as if the Light Stone found him, not the other way around. Confirming the prince’s dedication to the righteousness of truth, the Light Stone transformed, giving rise to Reshiram. From that day forward, Reshiram served at the prince’s side, and the truths the prince sought would reveal themselves in Reshiram’s flames.”

“That’s all stuff we already know, though,” Bunny blankly said to Matt while rubbing her fingers on her forehead.

“Actually, no, it’s not,” he replied, lowering his head and running his hand over his rough chin. “I caught one detail I hadn’t heard before. From the sound of it, that Light Stone doesn’t actually have a fixed location. It sounds like the prince found it because he wanted to, not because he tracked down its actual location.”

“That’s the way I interpret it,” Kate agreed. “Of course, it’s an old legend. You don’t really know how much of it is true, but I hope it was at least helpful.”

“I think so. Thanks for taking the time to tell me.”

-:-

Viridian City’s nighttime skyline cast a vivid glow through the towering windows of Gabriella’s office on the top floor of the Angel Corporation’s building, especially in the crystal-clear waters of her pool in the suite. The bright colors of the neon signs and spotlights glittered over her body and bobbed hair as she calmly and deliberately pushed her way from one end of the pool to the other.

The quiet in the room was broken when the grand doors leading inside creaked open.

“President Bouchard, I’ve come as per your req…” Dominic said as he entered the office. When he realized that Gabriella was in the pool and staring straight at him, he flushed and tried to hide his eyes. “Please forgive me! I didn’t…”

Gabriella laughed and playfully splashed the water. “Oh come on, Dominic, you have three kids. It ain’t like this is something you haven’t seen before.”

“With my wife, not my boss!”

“Alright, calm down. I’m sorry.” Gabriella swam over to where she had a neatly folded robe placed, climbed from the water, and slipped it on. She then sat down at the pool’s edge and said, “You can look now.”

Dominic was hesitant to look at her, so he first peeked out of the corner of his eye. He only turned when he realized she was out of the water. “Bit late for a swim, isn’t it?”

“A nice dip is a good thing after a hard day’s work,” she answered, sipping at a cup of tea that had been next to the robe. “Cools the body down, clears the mind.”

“I wish you would have warned me before you called me up here.” Dominic sighed, then asked, “Why did you call me anyway?”

“Look on my desk over there, see that case?” Gabriella gestured toward her dark wooden desk, on which a metallic silver briefcase was resting. “Go look in there.”

Without a word, Dominic followed his boss’s orders. He walked across the room to the desk, which bore the same logo of the letter ‘A’ within a halo that was on the bottom of Gabriella’s pool, and pressed his thumb against the scanner on the case to open it. Within it was a stack of papers.

“Those are the documents I need Matt Chiaki to sign to complete the Angel Corporation’s licensing of his ALEA system and officiate the beginning of the prototype construction in Roseridge City. Since I know you’re going to see your daughter in Olivine City, I want you to deliver those papers to him and get them finished up.”

“I can do that, President Bouchard. Leave it to me.”

“Good. Oh, before I forget, I slipped in a little gift for Helena. See that red button in the corner? Press it.”

Dominic quickly located the button within the case and pressed it. Once he did, the tray holding the papers flipped up into the case’s lid, revealing something hidden beneath. Almost instantly, Dominic’s eyes widened.”

“A-Are you sure we can have this?” he stuttered. “This is something very important! Shouldn’t someone who works for the company have this?”

“It’s better that a good kid like Helena use it. We can get data from it regardless, so why should it rot not being used by someone who would really want it?”

“Thank you, President Bouchard! I’ll make sure to tell her how kind and generous you’ve been!”

“Stop trying to be so proper. Lighten up, or I might invite you to swim with me.”

Though Gabriella had been joking, her comment was enough to get Dominic to do what she wanted by relaxing his body.

-:-

The members of Team Rocket had set up a camp around their car on the outskirts of Ecruteak City. While their subordinates sat nearby and ate by a fire, Giovanni and Ariana were sharing a bottle of champagne while Rosalie smoked her pipe. Both women noticed the way Giovanni was staring emptily out into the trees, though they also both hesitated to be the one to address it first.

“There something wrong?” Ariana eventually asked, deciding to take the plunge herself. “This isn’t like you.”

“Something that that kid said to me at the Battle Hall has been eating at me,” he said without turning his head to face them. “He said I still only show my true strength when it’s in front of others.”

“And since when do you listen to what he says?” Rosalie scoffed between drags on her pipe. “Hell, I still remember when I pulled him out of you, Ari. Kid was screaming like a little *****. Always figured we all stopped listening to him at that point.”

“That’s the thing,” Giovanni uttered, “in the past I think I would just see it as more of his whining. Right now, though, it bothers me. With everything that’s happening, I wonder if he’s right. I should be using my full strength at all times right now.”

“I don’t see anything wrong with that…” Ariana said. “What has you so worked up over it? Is it that Silver said it?”

Unwilling to admit his concern for Silver’s words, Giovanni instead reached into his pocket and removed a Poké Ball, which he handed over to Rosalie.

“What’s this?” the scientist asked, keeping her pipe held in her mouth.

“Keep him safe tomorrow. I don’t want him to be in the middle of this.”

-:-

The public areas of Ecruteak’s Pokémon Center had largely emptied out by the nighttime hours. Only the nurse and occupants of a few scattered tables were still around.

The quiet didn’t bother Matt, though. He was sitting at one of the videophones in the lobby, wearing his eyepatch and night clothes despite the fact that he was conducting a business call with Gabriella.

“I’ve sent an Angel Corporation suit toward Olivine to deliver the papers to you,” she explained. “He’s someone you know already. Can you guess who it is?” Gabriella didn’t even allow Matt a chance to think about it before revealing, “It’s Dominic! I’m sure you guys will be glad to see each other again!”

“Oh, you bet,” Matt said, grimacing. “I’ll get everything signed, cut and printed as soon as I can. Thanks for backing my project.”

“No prob, it’s nothing. What good would my money be if I wasn’t putting it towards helping people? But whatever. I’ll see you soon.”

Gabriella hung up, causing her image to disappear from the screen. Once she was gone, Matt stood up, took a deep breath, turned around and started to walk back toward the hotel area of the Pokémon Center. He hadn’t gone far, though, when he caught Nekou sitting at one of the tables out of the corner of his eye. She was alone, reading something on her computer while sipping at a cup of tea.

“Hey, what are you doing?” he asked, causing her to jump as he approached.

“Stop ****ing sneaking up on people, for one,” she said sarcastically. “I’m just reading a book and enjoying some tea. Relaxing. You know, why don’t you try it?”

“Is that an invitation?”

“Consider it one.”

Matt hesitated. He was caught off guard by Nekou actually asking him to stay. Sensing that something was wrong as he sat down, he asked her, “What’s going on? This isn’t like you.”

“The **** are you talking about?” she demanded, raising her eyebrow.

“Inviting me to sit down while you’re having tea and reading. You’ve never done that before.”

Nekou’s fingers tensed around the handle of her teacup. Though she hadn’t planned out the way the conversation had gone, she realized that he was right. She did, on some level, want him to sit down.

“Fine, you got me,” she said with a sigh. She closed her computer and took a deep breath before continuing, “I’m worried about tomorrow. You know, Polaris’s speech and all.”

“I don’t think there’s anything to be afraid of.” Even though she knew Matt meant well, Nekou couldn’t help but cringe at how ignorant he was of the truth she knew. “We’re minding our own business. If we keep our noses to ourselves, why would they bother us?”

“Forgive me for saying this, but what the **** is wrong with you?! We’re likely number one on Polaris’s **** list after what happened in Goldenrod City!” Nekou expected Matt to flinch when she slammed her fist on the table, but he did not. She took the brief pause to note the irony in what she said. “And besides, do you really trust what someone like Ghetsis says? He’s dangerous, very, very dangerous.”

“Honestly…” Matt slunk down in his seat. “What does it even matter? This whole thing with Reshiram and the Frontier Society, it’s all a farce I’m dragging myself through to avoid admitting how shitty my existence is. Ghetsis can’t do anything to me I don’t intend to do to myself later.”

In that instant, Nekou’s emotion toward Matt turned from anger to pity. She could read the hopelessness in every inch of his face, from the wrinkles around his tired mouth to the glassed-over look in his one visible eye. It was then that she understood the exact meaning of why Matt was challenging the Fronter Society’s facilities instead of just seeking out conversation with the Frontier Brains - he was using the competitions as a form of self-validation.

“You need to take care of yourself more,” she finally said, her voice becoming gentle and compassionate. “This isn’t living, dragging yourself through each day. You need to find something that motivates you to truly want to keep going.”

“I don’t know anymore… will you help me, please?”

“Doesn’t that go without saying?” Nekou automatically replied, her instincts running well ahead of her mind. When she caught up to herself, she quickly added, “Just make sure you have my back too.”

“You’ve supported me through so much already, so there’s no other answer I can give. Of course I’m going to stick by you. If there’s one thing I do right it’s that I’m loyal to my friends.”

In response to this, Nekou silently drew her teacup back up to her lips and sipped the hot, aromatic liquid.



END of CHAPTER 18
 

Bay

YEAHHHHHHH
Ack usually I come fairly quickly, but I got sick over Thanksgiving holidays and pretty much behind on many things. D: As usual, put some of my thoughts in as I was reading along.


“Runs it?” Petrel said. “You mean it was still open?”

“It was… it was never closed.”

“Then Polaris may have infiltrated the Angel Corporation at the highest levels,” Giovanni decided, “if they’re operating a laboratory on that oil rig. We have to acknowledge the possibility that Polaris is much more well funded than we initially thought.”

Some interesting developments concerning Polaris and Angel Corporation there.

Ghetsis fist shook as he looked up at Finansielle’s face on his screen.

Missing an apostrophe , so should be Ghetsis’s.

“Even if I was willing to do that, which I’m not, why would you even want to catch yourself up in all this? You will have to return to prison when this is over to continue serving your time for the murders you committed, yet you’re willing to make it worse by joining our terrorist war against Polaris?”
Just real quick, he only did one murder in my fic. He did a couple other crimes, though. I think you can either have just “murder” or replace it with “crimes” (unless attempted murders are considered murders generally, which in that case my mistake).

Despite their shock, however, they were powerless to stop the attack. The Absol violently collided with Olivia, and she screamed as she fell backwards with a wide gash on her leg.

“Absol…” the Dark-type Pokémon growled, briefly stopping to turn back and look at its victim. Its horn was stained with blood, which dripped down onto its shaggy white fur.

Oh dear. D:

“Oh, probably,” he said with a chuckle. “I’m sorry I was rude, let me introduce myself. The name’s Bill, and this is my little sister Audrey.”

“Hi…” Audrey nervously added.

HI BILL. And also hi to Bill’s little sister too. :3 Mako’s pretty cool too.

“I’d be hard pressed to think of a scientist who doesn’t know your name, Matt.” In an instant, Bill’s face had begun to glow just as his younger sister’s was. “It’s quite a wonder, the mixture of man and machine. I’ve been fascinated by how it could be made real ever since I read about it in the scientific journals. It’s something I never thought I’d see outside of movies… I mean, sure, I’ve worked on developing conversion of living matter into data and transferring it long distances electronically, but there’s always something to be said for the first look at a new innovation, wouldn’t you agree?”
I can see Bill be very interested those things!

Concerning Jacob’s letter to Bunny—that’s quite a request there. Poor her having Nekou as a companion to the Burned Tower. :p

“You’re as misbehaved as ever, Silver,” Giovanni coldly replied. “You must learn when to pick your fights. Now is a bad time for your agenda.”

Clenching his fists so tightly that his arms shook, Silver threatened, “I see plenty of people around me who had trouble from your gang. All of us against you. You like those odds, old man?”

Not surprising Giovanni and Silver’s next interaction is like this, but still a good scene nonetheless. Also as I was reading further didn’t expect Falkner to show up, heh.

“Audrey,” Bill sister identified herself.
Bill’s sister.

“I’ve never seen a Mega Evolution before!” Bill cheerfully said, his nerves having melted away thanks to his enthusiasm. “I mean, I only just started learning about it, but the whole idea of a Pokémon temporarily evolving even further is exciting, don’t you think? I always was fascinated by Eevee but this just takes it to a whole other level.”

“You sure seem into it, my friend,” Dante joked.

Bill’s excitement over Mega Evolution is cute, haha.

Morty’s “gym puzzle” is fairly interesting and I do like the battle between Olivia’s Minccino/Cinccino and Morty’s Yamask. While it was nice another of Olivia’s Pokemon evolved (Cinccino is very adorable), I do wonder if some evolution stones like the Shiny Stone are easy to find considering Morty is nice enough to give items to his challengers. Then again, I’m pretty positive Morty knows what type of challengers he’ll be faced against.

Bunny would have been shivering from the cold air flowing through the ruins if she hadn’t had Balin out with her. The Ninetales was exhaling a small, gentle flame from her mouth, providing both heat and light to her trainer, who was leaning down and examining pieces of a broken wall. She was carefully copying down the writing on the wall in a notebook.
Real quick, Balin is male. :p

“Stop, this isn’t working!” Olivia ran out onto the battlefield and got between Mr. Mime and Gengar, waving her arms as she went. “I don’t totally understand why, but I get it, Mr. Mime doesn’t want to fight.” Turning around and leaning down, she asked her Pokémon, “Is that right?”

The only response Olivia got was a frustrated, quiet murmur.

“I think I understand,” Morty intervened, drawing Olivia’s attention. “I won’t force you to make Mr. Mime fight any further, but I hope you understand that I have to count this as a knockout.”

Ouch over Mr. Mime not wanting to fight anymore. Glad Olivia has him go rest in the end.

“That lady friend of yours with the black hair and the glasses. Jane Hammond.”

“You mean Nekou? I don’t know any Jane Hammond.”

Colress stepped back. “Nekou…? I see. She must be someone who just resembles that person I know. Jane Hammond was a scientist I met a few years ago at a function at my father’s laboratory in Unova. I thought I might get to reconnect with her.”
Hm… curious over that.

While his trainer approached Morty, Herdier went up to Gengar. He stared up into the ghost’s eyes, and found himself greeted with what seemed to be seething hate. Moments later, though, Gengar grinned and slapped Herdier on the shoulder. He cheerfully said his name as a gesture of congratulations to a worthy opponent like the Normal-type Pokémon, while Herdier just cringed.
I thought this part is cute, heh. Yay for Olivia winning her badge, though! I also liked that Morty showed some good sportsmanship at the end.

Silver held up Feraligatr’s Poké Ball, but then he froze. As much as he was loathe to admit it, something about his father’s words was resonating with him. Usually, he was able to remain fairly held together when battling, but when he stepped onto the stage with Giovanni, he felt his vision for battle draining away. Subconsciously he had been well aware of how his obsession with his father had clouded his judgment, and he had to admit he knew that was why he lost.

Finally, after calling Feraligatr back to his Poké Ball, he mumbled, “I get it. I’ll see you next time.”

Nice introspection of Silver there and him realizing his mistake there.

When Klinklang collided with Cordelia, the electricity in its body discharged, causing an explosion. Cordelia was flung down to the floor like a rocket, her body sparking with the energy that had just been used to cut her down.

“Sigilyph is unable to continue battling! The winners of this round are Colress and Klinklang!”
Even though it’s expected, I still feel bad for Matt losing against Colress like that.

“Mr. Mime was taken from somewhere quite far from here to be given away as a prize at the Game Corner,” Nikolai explained, his disgust evident in his tone. “At first he did not mind working with you, but losing to a Fighting-type like Hitmonchan at the Battle Cafe caused him to become demoralized. He couldn’t fight at the Gym because he now wishes to go back home to where he came from.”
Ah, so that’s why Mr. Mime reacted that way during Morty’s battle. Unfortunate he feels that way after losing to Hitmonlee. Him going back home is for the best.

Interesting to see Mega Venusaur in action. Also thought it was nice of Kate to have the crowd cheer Colress even though he lost to her.

“You know, Bunny…” Bill interjected, “I’ve done some research into into Tenganist history myself. Our mother used to be one of the Kimono Girls, so it interests me. Think you could give me a look at what you found sometime?”

“I…”

“I thought you were going to ask that flower girl to be your...ahem...assistant?”

Bill’s face flushed from Mako’s joke, as his older sister approached alongside Kate. Both of them were wearing wry grins. When Bunny realized the meaning of what Mako said, she turned red as well.

“Don’t get the wrong idea!” Bunny fumbled.

Poor both of them. :p

“President Bouchard, I’ve come as per your req…” Dominic said as he entered the office. When he realized that Gabriella was in the pool and staring straight at him, he flushed and tried to hide his eyes. “Please forgive me! I didn’t…”

Gabriella laughed and playfully splashed the water. “Oh come on, Dominic, you have three kids. It ain’t like this is something you haven’t seen before.”

“With my wife, not my boss!”

This is a pretty amusing scene too, LOL

The last part with Nekou and Matt I enjoyed a lot. I think many people can relate to losing motivation/finding self-worth there.

Quite a lot happen this chapter, I have to say. Kinda feel this chapter would be better if it was broken down into two chapters as there was a lot to sink in, but I still enjoy many of the scenes nonetheless. Mostly just see a few typos and a couple mistakes concerning Jacob (although again if attempted murders are considered murders then my mistake) and Balin. Battles are still fun to read and the interactions are great in this chapter. Looking forward to the next one!
 

diamondpearl876

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“That’s why I got you after all,” she said to the Pokégear. “The past is just parts of the future that already happened. I’ll make that future even better than what happened for me before, and I’ll keep every last bit of it. That’s what I’ll do.”

You can really see Olivia's struggle through her dialogue and her actions. Nicely done.

****, ****, ****… why do you gotta make this **** so ****ing hard?” The image of Matt admitting his demons to her earlier that night refused to leave her mind. Seeing him in such a way forced her to confront the thoughts underneath her sarcastic facade. Though she hated to admit it to herself, she pitied him and identified with him on top of her existing sympathies for Olivia. “This would be so much ****ing easier if I didn’t have to see my own ****ing face in you! There’s a reason I hate having my ****ing picture taken…”

A little too much swearing here, but I like the reference to not having her picture taken.

Don’t you worry, Lady Finansielle, I’ll keep him in line.” Colress smiled smugly and pushed up his visor. “Ghetsis is too big for his silly black britches. He only sees one outcome, complete domination in his own name. He fails to see the nobility of our work. Since he considers Pokémon to be nothing but his tools, he doesn’t realize what we can really accomplish by drawing out their true strength.”

I find it amusing that Ghetsis isn't being taken seriously. He thinks he has all these minions, all the power, and he really doesn't.

Because they’re looking out for the little guys like me out there. Believe me, when the only shot you have in life is becoming a trainer, but you have to live from battle to battle, that’s an unlivable situation. You just can’t survive when you have to decided whether to spend the lousy pocket change you can get from a couple of battles on food or on Poké Balls so you can win more.”

“decided” should be “decide”

Also, I'm not really sure a lot of trainers have to decide to buy pokeballs. That means spending more money for a mouth to feed, TMS, healing items, etc. It'd be cheaper to just buy food and train who you've got... if money is really the issue.

“I…” Olivia was shaking, but she fought to compose herself. “Screw it, I don’t care. Just cover that.”


Lol, she acts more and more like Nekou every chapter, it seems.

Audrey,” Bill sister identified herself.

Should be “Bill's”

Silver and Giovanni, who had won their matches using Persian and Feraligatr, respectively, were matched against each other

I would like to see that battle between them. That's for sure.

“Colress, if you’re contacting me in the middle of your little data-gathering project, something must have gone wrong.” Finansielle’s voice was full of irritation, though Colress sensed it wasn’t genuine. “What went wrong?”

“That fellow you’re interested in, Matt Chiaki… I think he knows something. He might have overheard me talking to Athleta’s trainer.”

“Is that seriously it?” Dropping her feigned anger, Finansielle smiled. “I am not concerned about him in the least. He’s not half the man his grandfather was. There is nothing he can do that is outside of my expectations. Tell me, though, did you rat out his little girlfriend?”

“I put some feelers out there, you know? I asked him about her old alias from the last time I met her. He didn’t seem to know a thing.”

“As I thought, he’s totally in the dark. Don’t bother telling him, he’ll find out soon enough. Just finish your work at the Battle Hall and get ready for the mission tomorrow.”

A good conversation full of tension and revealing of secrets.

“The **** are you talking about?” she demanded, raising her eyebrow.

“Inviting me to sit down while you’re having tea and reading. You’ve never done that before.”

PLEASE KISS

don’t know anymore… will you help me, please?”

“Doesn’t that go without saying?” Nekou automatically replied, her instincts running well ahead of her mind. When she caught up to herself, she quickly added, “Just make sure you have my back too.”

“You’ve supported me through so much already, so there’s no other answer I can give. Of course I’m going to stick by you. If there’s one thing I do right it’s that I’m loyal to my friends.”

darn, no kiss

but a cute interaction anyway ^-^
 

The Great Butler

Hush, keep it down
"The Weight of the World (Part 1)"

Summary: While Matt and the others learn the truth behind the Oberon and its connection to the Tenganist king AZ, Ghetsis launches Polaris’s operation with his major speech. At the climax of the event, Ghetsis heads to Bell Tower, where a final battle between Team Rocket and Team Plasma takes place.

Character List*:
*Presence on this list does not necessarily mean screen presence

Matt Chiaki
Nekou Langley
Olivia Mistbloom
Bunny Spruce
Monroe
Avril
Dante Fantomos
Jacob Alexison
Looker
Rowena Byrne
Bill
Audrey
Mako
Nando
Kate
Giovanni
Ariana
Proton
Petrel
Professor Rosalie
Trevor
Ada
Pierce
Ghetsis
Shadow Triad
Zinzolin
Archer
Dr. Colress Antimony
Lucky
Dino
Tenganist Prophet
Tenganist followers
Sylpha
Anthea
Concordia
Professor Elm
Kimono Girls
AZ
Amina Fantomos
Harmonians

Also, a couple notes before I get to replying:

-A little bit of a teaser to keep everyone's minds active: if you are particularly attentive and catch the right details, by the end of this two-parter the identity of a previously mystery character can be deciphered.

-I've already made corrections based on some comments in these two reviews, so I'll be skipping over those bits.


Ack usually I come fairly quickly, but I got sick over Thanksgiving holidays and pretty much behind on many things. D: As usual, put some of my thoughts in as I was reading along.

Don't worry about it at all. The fact you came is what matters.

Some interesting developments concerning Polaris and Angel Corporation there.

Plenty more intrigue where that came from.

Just real quick, he only did one murder in my fic. He did a couple other crimes, though. I think you can either have just “murder” or replace it with “crimes” (unless attempted murders are considered murders generally, which in that case my mistake).

I didn't redo this point, because the Prophet isn't intimately familiar with Jacob, and her addressing of his actions was in a casual context, not as if it was a serious listing of his past.

Oh dear. D:

This is actually not a pointless scene.

HI BILL. And also hi to Bill’s little sister too. :3 Mako’s pretty cool too.


I can see Bill be very interested those things!

Jax's headcanons on Bill and his family were a huge help, as you probably guessed.

Concerning Jacob’s letter to Bunny—that’s quite a request there. Poor her having Nekou as a companion to the Burned Tower. :p

This is actually an important moment for Bunny, it's going to set in motion a big growth for her plotline.



Not surprising Giovanni and Silver’s next interaction is like this, but still a good scene nonetheless. Also as I was reading further didn’t expect Falkner to show up, heh.

I actually kind of wonder if the Giovanni/Silver parts are actually all that good. I found myself having less time to highlight it than I thought I would.

Falkner's appearance I'd been planning since he debuted.

Bill’s excitement over Mega Evolution is cute, haha.

Hey, they're new, powerful Pokemon with many mysteries. Draws him in like a fly.

Morty’s “gym puzzle” is fairly interesting and I do like the battle between Olivia’s Minccino/Cinccino and Morty’s Yamask. While it was nice another of Olivia’s Pokemon evolved (Cinccino is very adorable), I do wonder if some evolution stones like the Shiny Stone are easy to find considering Morty is nice enough to give items to his challengers. Then again, I’m pretty positive Morty knows what type of challengers he’ll be faced against.

Perhaps I should have established it more clearly, but Morty equips the Gym with items for what Pokemon he's going to face.

Ouch over Mr. Mime not wanting to fight anymore. Glad Olivia has him go rest in the end.

I have some ideas for him too. I'm eager to see how they turn out.


Hm… curious over that.

You'll find out the truth in a few chapters.

I thought this part is cute, heh. Yay for Olivia winning her badge, though! I also liked that Morty showed some good sportsmanship at the end.

It felt like a nice bit of characterization to add to the Pokemon.

On Morty's bit, he always struck me as driven but also easygoing, and I think he's the type who wants to see his challengers do well.

Nice introspection of Silver there and him realizing his mistake there.

I have doubts if I executed Silver's realization in this chapter well. I probably should have held it for another time, though I do have plans for much later to deal with them.

Even though it’s expected, I still feel bad for Matt losing against Colress like that.

Now this, on the other hand, I'd like to think I did pretty well on. Establishing a clear threat to him within the tournament's ranks that forces him to confront the limits of his resources, it just felt right. I'm glad you liked it.

Ah, so that’s why Mr. Mime reacted that way during Morty’s battle. Unfortunate he feels that way after losing to Hitmonlee. Him going back home is for the best.

It's something I just thought of suddenly, actually. What happens to Game Corner prize Pokemon and where do they come from? As soon as I asked myself that question, it felt natural to see that one would want to go back home.

Interesting to see Mega Venusaur in action. Also thought it was nice of Kate to have the crowd cheer Colress even though he lost to her.

Fun fact, it was actually going to be Mega Charizard Y at first. She still has Charizard, though.

Poor both of them. :p

Bill and Mako have a pretty fun relationship.

This is a pretty amusing scene too, LOL

Gabriella is actually really fun to write because of the contradiction between her high ranking position and her lighthearted attitude.

The last part with Nekou and Matt I enjoyed a lot. I think many people can relate to losing motivation/finding self-worth there.

There's going to be quite a lot more where that came from.

Quite a lot happen this chapter, I have to say. Kinda feel this chapter would be better if it was broken down into two chapters as there was a lot to sink in, but I still enjoy many of the scenes nonetheless. Mostly just see a few typos and a couple mistakes concerning Jacob (although again if attempted murders are considered murders then my mistake) and Balin. Battles are still fun to read and the interactions are great in this chapter. Looking forward to the next one!

I agree, I probably should have split it. But by the time it started to get really out of hand it was too late.

Regardless of that, I am happy you enjoyed the chapter, and I'm quite confident you will enjoy the next ones even more.

You can really see Olivia's struggle through her dialogue and her actions. Nicely done.

As I elaborated to you elsewhere, I was hoping to show both her continuing collapse from what she was but also the baby steps of her growth out of it in that bit. Good to hear that it apparently worked.


I find it amusing that Ghetsis isn't being taken seriously. He thinks he has all these minions, all the power, and he really doesn't.

This has always been my intent with him, and I think you're going to really like where it goes.


Also, I'm not really sure a lot of trainers have to decide to buy pokeballs. That means spending more money for a mouth to feed, TMS, healing items, etc. It'd be cheaper to just buy food and train who you've got... if money is really the issue.

The logic is that if someone can acquire more Pokemon with practical and easily-obtained resources, they can more easily pull themselves out of the funding hole they're in. Also, I haven't really had a chance to mention it yet but Pokemarts are another thing affected by whether or not you have a Pokedex, like the Pokemon Centers are.




Lol, she acts more and more like Nekou every chapter, it seems.

Huh, you're right. I guess the little subtle developments are taking their shape, aren't they?


I would like to see that battle between them. That's for sure.

It will come, though maybe not in a full fight on-screen.


A good conversation full of tension and revealing of secrets.

Revealing secrets and answering questions, but perhaps raising some more at the same time, wouldn't you say?



PLEASE KISS



darn, no kiss

but a cute interaction anyway ^-^

Be patient. :p
 
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Blue Saturday

Unfurl your Blessed Wings!
I finally found the time to comment on this new chapter after a century of absence, dazzling job as always. Something I noticed is this chapter was very plump and full, not that I mind since I do enjoy reading your story thus a sizable chapter isn't stomach-turning to me.

Anyway, I'm going to talk about the main parts so this review doesn't drag on for forever and ever. It was nice to see Avril make an appearance and a new character in Bill's, thus Olivia got to hang with a motley little gang of four with Monroe rounding things out. I actually liked this gym battles a lot, not sure if I like it more than Goldenrod(Which I felt was your strongest gym battle, possibly?) but it was a nice little tricky gym. The battle between Yamask and Minccino and the usage of the Shiny Stone to induce the latter's evolution and use of the PokeDex to sink the win was pretty gripping. The later showdown and eventual win against Gengar was great, I liked the characterization of Morty as a mentor/teacher-like figure here. Really seemed to be "teaching" Olivia something while challenging her, as if she's a student being tested. I hadn't received that feeling ever from a gym leader thus far in this story so I commend you on your uniqueness with him and he always struck me as wise due to his knowledge on his own town's history.

As for Mr. Mime and it's role played here, I like how you actually made it feel sentient with it not being okay with being sold as a prize. That's something huge I had actually been wondering, where do TR get these prize Pokemon and why isn't this illegal? I also see another cameo by Mareep, I already just know what this is leading up to and I can't wait. But Mr. Mime does present another small struggle for Olivia and does remind me of how she's grown as a person to be more understanding of her Pokemon, unlike with Oshawott before who she treated very badly but grew to love(feels like we haven't seen Dewott in a while actually). It was nice seeing her considering Cinccino's feelings on evolution being forcefully triggered by stone without her Pokemon's permission too. So if iirc that leaves Olivia's team as Cinncino, Herdier, Dewott, Krabby as of now, with her Mr. Mime possibly leaving in the future and her capturing a new Pokemon Mareep, I'm certain. to fill the void.

Bunny and Nekou's little exploration certainly ended as quickly as it began, it might have helped to maybe just give us a few more flashes and what they were doing. Nekou obtaining a new Pokemon in Pumpkaboo was nice, I do question where she got it in the vicinity of the Burned Tower though. I imagine it would be a place to house Ghost-type Pokemon though, I guess we can assume Kalos Pokemon are being migrated into the environment in Johto too? As for Matt and his little tourney, he received another loss I see. Doesn't seem like things ever quite go his way, he's been on a bit of a streak in losses for a while and in-general seems to be a bit more down looking on himself. I like how his quest is one of self-validation, that shows how low Matt thinks of himself. Colress was pretty fun to read, his theatrics read well and his battling was strategized well. Why am I not surprised he entered the tournament with the intention of fighting a Mega Evolution? Since XY began I was very surprised Colress never played a role in Mega Evolution given his fascination with bringing out the latent power within Pokemon.

I'm feeling how you characterized Kate, but at the same time I feel like her voice and writing could be a bit more...unique? I think it read somewhat similar to Dahlia and possibly Whitney in a way. It's not huge but just more general variety in giving characters their own unique voices would be great, like how Nekou and Bunny and Olivia feel as their own. But Kate is a temporary character so it's whatever. For the record once you got really into the battle she felt more distinctly her own and more unique.
“Come on out, my dear superstar! Take the stage and show off your brilliance!”

The crowd had already been energized by the announcer’s words, but when Kate threw her Poké Ball, they erupted. A Venusaur stomped out of the light of the ball and roared, his voice loud enough to even quiet the audience.
Nothing wrong here, I just really liked Kate's dialogue here along with the description of Venusaur "stomping" out of the light of his PokeBall, actually made me smile and gave a powerful picture for Kate's Pokemon. It wasn't surprising she had complete control of the match from start to finish. Silver/Giovanni was nice to read and I did like the exposition of his past with him being Ariana's kid apparently as well but it's something I thought would have been expanded on more. This chapter felt lengthy and did a lot, but that's a scene I felt was lacking somewhat because Silver/Giovanni strife for a bit, battle, battle ends, they give each other words, and later have mild reflecting on the words. Not bad but it's something I feel you're trying to show as having big focus and impact on the readers with this character but it wasn't detailed a whole lot.

No complaints otherwise, nice chapter.
 
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The Great Butler

Hush, keep it down
I finally found the time to comment on this new chapter after a century of absence, dazzling job as always. Something I noticed is this chapter was very plump and full, not that I mind since I do enjoy reading your story thus a sizable chapter isn't stomach-turning to me.

I'm glad to hear that. This chapter really grew out of control in the planning stage, but I didn't really have many options available to me than to just power through it.

Anyway, I'm going to talk about the main parts so this review doesn't drag on for forever and ever. It was nice to see Avril make an appearance and a new character in Bill's, thus Olivia got to hang with a motley little gang of four with Monroe rounding things out. I actually liked this gym battles a lot, not sure if I like it more than Goldenrod(Which I felt was your strongest gym battle, possibly?) but it was a nice little tricky gym. The battle between Yamask and Minccino and the usage of the Shiny Stone to induce the latter's evolution and use of the PokeDex to sink the win was pretty gripping. The later showdown and eventual win against Gengar was great, I liked the characterization of Morty as a mentor/teacher-like figure here. Really seemed to be "teaching" Olivia something while challenging her, as if she's a student being tested. I hadn't received that feeling ever from a gym leader thus far in this story so I commend you on your uniqueness with him and he always struck me as wise due to his knowledge on his own town's history.

No, I think I agree on your assessment of the battle, and I'd probably pick Goldenrod as my personal favorite so far as well. My intention with this battle was to invert the usual expectation of this gym - Morty is usually cited as a highly challenging battle in the games along with Whitney, so while I kept Whitney formidable, I decided to have Olivia win this one fairly easily to change things up. When you look at the Pokemon she owns, especially Herdier and Cinccino, it fits.

Also, another contrast was that Goldenrod's chapter was mainly an Olivia chapter, while this one was more focused on Matt and setting up for the next two chapters.

Your thought on Morty is pretty appropriate. I developed his portrayal based on an easier-going interpretation of his character in the games; whereas he wishes to prove himself to Ho-oh in the games through his victories, here he is more easygoing and wants to share that opportunity with his challengers.

As for Mr. Mime and it's role played here, I like how you actually made it feel sentient with it not being okay with being sold as a prize. That's something huge I had actually been wondering, where do TR get these prize Pokemon and why isn't this illegal? I also see another cameo by Mareep, I already just know what this is leading up to and I can't wait. But Mr. Mime does present another small struggle for Olivia and does remind me of how she's grown as a person to be more understanding of her Pokemon, unlike with Oshawott before who she treated very badly but grew to love(feels like we haven't seen Dewott in a while actually). It was nice seeing her considering Cinccino's feelings on evolution being forcefully triggered by stone without her Pokemon's permission too. So if iirc that leaves Olivia's team as Cinncino, Herdier, Dewott, Krabby as of now, with her Mr. Mime possibly leaving in the future and her capturing a new Pokemon Mareep, I'm certain. to fill the void.

Well, it isn't Team Rocket running these Game Corners, not anymore. Though the point about importing Pokemon to act as prizes and the implications of how that affects them is still valid.

You're pretty much right on the money when it comes to Mareep, there's no point in trying to hide it when it's really quite obvious.

What had motivated me to introduce Mr. Mime at first was that I wanted to give her something unusual, and the possibility of it becoming a Fairy-type later was something I was interested in as well. But when I decided I wanted to build toward Mega Evolution with her instead I selected Ampharos as the subject and developed the homesickness story around Mr. Mime, which I think ultimately turned out better for everyone involved.

Sharp eye regarding Dewott, it's actually a relevant detail.

Bunny and Nekou's little exploration certainly ended as quickly as it began, it might have helped to maybe just give us a few more flashes and what they were doing. Nekou obtaining a new Pokemon in Pumpkaboo was nice, I do question where she got it in the vicinity of the Burned Tower though. I imagine it would be a place to house Ghost-type Pokemon though, I guess we can assume Kalos Pokemon are being migrated into the environment in Johto too?

There really wasn't much more to show with them, so showing them more often would have just stretched things too long.

The Kalos Pokemon have been showing up in Johto as well, yes. And that's correct, she got it in the Burned Tower itself, seemed like it fit to me.

Kalos Pokemon are being moved by Polaris using the Unova migration project as a cover.

As for Matt and his little tourney, he received another loss I see. Doesn't seem like things ever quite go his way, he's been on a bit of a streak in losses for a while and in-general seems to be a bit more down looking on himself. I like how his quest is one of self-validation, that shows how low Matt thinks of himself. Colress was pretty fun to read, his theatrics read well and his battling was strategized well. Why am I not surprised he entered the tournament with the intention of fighting a Mega Evolution? Since XY began I was very surprised Colress never played a role in Mega Evolution given his fascination with bringing out the latent power within Pokemon.

That's basically how Matt's life is, more or less. It's key part of his character that he need to find self-validation, absolutely key.

Colress and Mega Evolution are very closely linked here. Even before it was revealed, though, he was always going to appear in the Battle Hall like this, with his original goal simply being to record data from the tournament. Mega Evolution's existence just completed his role perfectly.

You really liked his strategy, though? It was quite a challenge to get through; Klinklang doesn't have very many moves so I had to mostly build up battles around its type being resistant to many others and the way it moves, complemented by Shift Gear.

I'm feeling how you characterized Kate, but at the same time I feel like her voice and writing could be a bit more...unique? I think it read somewhat similar to Dahlia and possibly Whitney in a way. It's not huge but just more general variety in giving characters their own unique voices would be great, like how Nekou and Bunny and Olivia feel as their own. But Kate is a temporary character so it's whatever. For the record once you got really into the battle she felt more distinctly her own and more unique.
Nothing wrong here, I just really liked Kate's dialogue here along with the description of Venusaur "stomping" out of the light of his PokeBall, actually made me smile and gave a powerful picture for Kate's Pokemon. It wasn't surprising she had complete control of the match from start to finish. Silver/Giovanni was nice to read and I did like the exposition of his past with him being Ariana's kid apparently as well but it's something I thought would have been expanded on more. This chapter felt lengthy and did a lot, but that's a scene I felt was lacking somewhat because Silver/Giovanni strife for a bit, battle, battle ends, they give each other words, and later have mild reflecting on the words. Not bad but it's something I feel you're trying to show as having big focus and impact on the readers with this character but it wasn't detailed a whole lot.

Hmmm... you're right. It's honestly been so long since I wrote Dahlia that her voice kind of faded from my memory. But then again, on the other hand, she really didn't have much to do until she battles (as you touched on) so perhaps it's just a case of her not having enough time to shine. Venusaur, on the other hand, came easily. With Mega Evolution in play here, I had a very clear goal: to really make Venusaur come across as powerful, almost like an unstoppable force that just overwhelms everything it's against.

Hm... yeah, you're right, I think Silver and Giovanni could have been done better. Luckily, I've got some ideas going forward that should deliver on it.

No complaints otherwise, nice chapter.

Glad you enjoyed it. I hope to deliver the next one soon.
 
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