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"Passion..." (NSFW 18+)

Clockworkz

SURPRISE BUTTSECKS
ARTISTIC NUDITY ALERT O_O
Approved by Esperante.
Do NOT click the link if you're under 18, at work or school... But then, I can't tell you what to do, so that was energy well spent on my part just typing this... =_=
Anyways...
Passion...
If you haven't guessed by now, I really love my characters. =P

Critique is, well, needed; I haven't gotten one good crit yet =_=
ALSO: If I hear ANYONE be like, "ew they're doing it lolol yiff!!!1", I will report you to a mod or three. Just a word of warning.
 

Jason Park

The Steel Master
Okay, let's see.

The guy's hand could be a little bigger and the girl... She seems have to adam's apple. It might help to remove that so the girl is more feminine.
 

Angel Paladin

A Seraph has risen
Ah Clockworkz, you've been on a roll haven't you? lol Well, I really like this one a lot. I'm a little concerned about how long Nikki's face is. I don't know, it's too long to me. Everythin else, looks grand to me. :)
 

whiteabsol

.:Daisy Dancing:.
Hmmm.... the guy's muscles are somewhat too big and you might want to smooth out the female's neck a little to get rid of that bump, seeing that she is a girl. Other that, it's pretty good.
 

Clockworkz

SURPRISE BUTTSECKS
Well, I kinda caught her mid-swallow.
Not like swallowing... that, but... Y'know, but like...
Chicks seem to swallow a lot when they're in the throws of passion, or so it seemed to me when I was with my girlfriend >_>
I can edit it out, but I don't know how it would look.
Also, please specify which hand you mean when you say stuff like "her hand needs to be larger". I'm not pyschic =P
 

Angel Paladin

A Seraph has risen
Clockworkz said:
Well, I kinda caught her mid-swallow.
Not like swallowing... that, but... Y'know, but like...
Chicks seem to swallow a lot when they're in the throws of passion, or so it seemed to me when I was with my girlfriend >_>
I can edit it out, but I don't know how it would look.
Also, please specify which hand you mean when you say stuff like "her hand needs to be larger". I'm not pyschic =P

Yeah, but Nikki is. XD Anyway, I don't think there is too many flaws and that bump to me isn't to big.
 

whiteabsol

.:Daisy Dancing:.
I can tell that you smoothed out her neck (kinda obvious there :p )and that you kinda enlarged the guy's hand. It looks a little better.

~W.A~
 

Act

Let's Go Rangers!
Hm, well, I dunno if this is the in 'anime' thing, but in both of your pictures the girls' nose and jaws protrude way too much-- they become like a snout, and it looks really strange.

Also, I'm pretty sure the dude would have to be on steroids to be that muscular o_O;;

Your anatomy is weird in little bits in other places as well, but, again, I don't really follow how anime anatomy is supposed to be. :shrug:

It's actually done pretty well. Uh... yay?
 

Infinity

Gone...
Half of you aren't even 18 XD

This pic embodies the passion that you have in your heart.

Your anatomy is awesome, I bet you someone will shout the magic four letter word though...

I just love anthro art.
 

Flame Haze SnS

Yin-Yang
Wow, you drew really good art. You drew Nikki's face beautifully! Nikki's left hand (the hand on Micheal's neck) seems a little weird. Other than that, kudos to ya! ^_^
 

Clockworkz

SURPRISE BUTTSECKS
Act said:
Hm, well, I dunno if this is the in 'anime' thing, but in both of your pictures the girls' nose and jaws protrude way too much-- they become like a snout, and it looks really strange.
Umm... Espeon morph, dude. Canine/feline features added to the face. -.-

Act said:
Also, I'm pretty sure the dude would have to be on steroids to be that muscular o_O;;
His story is posted in the "I love you" thread. I'm not repeating it now, because I'm being lazy. Too lazy to copy it, but not lazy enough to pick apart your quote. I WILL make an ammendment to it though. While in the camp, within the first month, the Rockets actually did test somekind of experimental growth hormone on him that nearly quadrupled his muscluar expansion. He was supposed to be a shock troop on the front lines, but the Rockets didn't count on an attack upon that camp, and Michael was freed.

Act said:
Your anatomy is weird in little bits in other places as well, but, again, I don't really follow how anime anatomy is supposed to be. :shrug:
If you don't know how anime anatomy is supposed to be, then, I dunno; don't say anything >_>

Every artist has one major flaw: Artist's Self Esteem, and with some people, it's fragile like a China dish. Mine is that fragile. Forgive me if I assault you when you "critique".
 
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Act

Let's Go Rangers!
Umm... Espeon morph, dude. Canine/feline features added to the face. -.-

I'm not a dude, thanks.

Anyway, I thought of that, but you don't enlongate his face at all, which is why I mentioned it. Following that logic, his face should be much more oval, considering ampharoas' head is like an egg. And in the end, it just looks a tad strange, IMO.

If you don't know how anime anatomy is supposed to be, then, I dunno; don't say anything >_>

I do that whole realism thing; I don't know how it applies to anime, but I point it out anyway :p Why not?

Better a witty fool than a foolish wit, in any case.

Every artist has one major flaw: Artist's Self Esteem, and with some people, it's fragile like a China dish. Mine is that fragile. Forgive me if I assault you when you "critique".

*shrug* Or no backbone, which I guess is the harsher term x( Though no one likes criticism, taking is with grace is something very admirable. You posted on an art forum; some people will offer "critique" whether you like it or not o_O;;

Good luck :) Like I said, you are quite good. Uh... the end?
 

Clockworkz

SURPRISE BUTTSECKS
*sigh* Now you made me quote my other thread. Thanks for making me exert effort :( =P
Clockworkz said:
Heh heh; actually, yeah. Michael is pretty buff. Six months of being in a Team Rocket Pokemorph Camp will do that to ya =\
Here's his story: Michael was stolen from a Pokemon Center by Team Rocket in a raid; as per protocol, there were no surviving witnesses. Michael was morphed at the age of 15, human years, but the genetic transgression amplification was a bit off, so he appears more human than he should.
*clears throat*
 

Angel Paladin

A Seraph has risen
Just calm down, Clockz, I think you're doin' fine. I'm glad you're that dedicated to your story. It's not very common to see a person who actually has the guts to make images of their own stories. You are tallented in writin' and artwork. :) Anyway, I'm sure your teqniuce will continue to get better with time. You are like me, both of us are a little bit nervous and doubtful of our artwork. We are intimidated by great artwork and are afriad our art will fall short of the great artists. Well, you can set those artists as a goal. Try to be the best like they do, and you will create masterpieces flawlessly. I know we are afraid at first, but with all of these artists bein as nice as they can be will support our work and help us grow in maturity and tecnique. :)
 
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karusho

Guest
i think i prefer the original. it looks wierd when you try to correct it. There is a thing as TOO perfect. After all, reality is far from perfection.
 
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