“Yay!” Emboar and Emolga both cheered, having similar personalities.
“Channy boy! I must infer you that you are such a baby. Go home and drink milk from your mommy! If you happen to have one. If you don’t, I am sorry I offended you.”
“Drink milk from my mom? That doesn’t make much sense…”
“Sorry, I’m not that good with the whole insulting trend. Ludicolo does it way better than I do.” Alakazam began to make his spoons levitate with his psychic power, while doing the wave with his arms.
“I also invited my family over for dinner as well.”
“To tell both of them that… we’re… y’know…uh…” Lilligant couldn’t spit it out, so Throh spat it out for her.
“Yeah, goin’ steady. That. Thanks Throh.”
I’d don’t give a dang about a bad reputation
Ah. May I suggest a turkey?”
“A tur- what now?”
“I don’t know. Someone told me turkeys taste good, but I don’t know what one is
Five minutes of cheering and hugs later, Hitmonchan noticed that his instructor was still on the ground. Hitmonchan helped his fallen coach up, and the first words he said were, “Hoo-wee, son. You ready for some chocolate cake? A…ha ha ha…”
Wow, great job on this one! I can tell a lot of time was put into this chapter. It may have been the funnest one yet.
I see what you did there! Great song reference, though the "I'd" should be an "I"
Great jokes throughout the whole chapter, though I especially like this one:
It was great finally meeting Chan's family, and it was great seeing them all interact, especially the younger siblings of Chan and Lilligant. The fight between Chan and Throh was fantastic and hilarious! Especially the knockout at the end.
That is so how I pictured him reacting. The only suggestion I have is that it seems sometimes after dialogue you don't mention who said it and I sometimes have to go back and figure out who said what. Just be sure to try and add something like "stated Throh" or "Chan said" after dialogue so it makes it a little less confusing. Not a major problem at all, just a suggestion. Otherwise, the chapter was great and I thoroughly enjoyed it! Can't wait for the next one when Don and Lilligant meet up again *awkwardness!*
Hitmonchan, who was waking up from a dream about snow tigers, pushed himself to reach the door.
“AAAAAG!” Super Macho Machamp, who was getting a back massage from a Gardevoir in his secret pad, screamed in agony.
“What is it sir? Am I doing it too hard?”
“Oh nothing… I just feel like someone’s impersonating my macho-awesomeness… And isn’t doing a very good job of doing it! Anyhow, back to my massage… Ooh… Ooh… OOOOOOH! Now that’s what I’m talking about!”
Donphan took a heavy hit by Lilligant from behind him, who had used Giga Drain to suck the life out of the Ground type, and recover some health back. Heavily injured, the Donphan collapse on its side.
“Nice one Lil! How did you grow so strong?”
“I grew up in the ghetto part of town- a strong fighting strategy is crucial for surviving even a month where I lived.”
Throh spouted out the best possible ending statement to such an epic occurance. “All’s well that ends well right? Right?”
“Meh. Today felt too long. I’d rather go back and playing video games.” Lilligant compained.