Pokémon BEAST

[Fang]

Pokémon BEAST (Now Hand-Drawn!)

After reading various comics on various websites, I decided to try my hand at making one. This comic happens to be my first one so I'd love some critique and comments.

Rated PG-13 for blood, violence, and language.

Story:
Boring, dull, and unexciting. These words describe the life of a sixteen-year-old PokéMart shopkeeper. However, all this changes when a scientist bursts in crying for help.

Location:
Most of the comic will take place on Hoenn's sister-island, Heara. Birth Island and Hoenn will also be visited for a short amount of time.

Character Bios:
The bios are updated frequently so that they contain all the up-to-date info about the characters. Be sure to check them often!

Fan Art:
I love it when people enjoy what I create. I love it even more when people spend the time to make something Pokémon BEAST related and send it in to me. So don't hesitate to email or post it!

Enjoy!

NOTE: This is in MANGA STYLE. (panels go right to left and the text goes top to bottom)

Issue #1 - DREAM
Comic #1
Comic #2
Comic #3
Comic #4
Comic #5
Comic #6
Comic #7
Comic #8
Comic #9

Newest Comic: Comic #9

Official Art / Character Bios:
Chris Tundrak
Zeal *NEW*

Fan Art:
Awaiting submissions...

Fun Stuff / Other:
Promotional Desktop Wallpaper #1 (1024 x 768)

Promotional Desktop Wallpaper #1 (800 x 600)

Desktop #2: Rain (1024 x 768)

~Updated 3/19/06~

Credits:

BlamBot - Fonts
Anime Model Sheets - Help with proportions
Anime Academy Radio - Something to listen to while I work ^_^
Aries - Something to download the music I just heard on AAR with

 

[Mastercougar]

I'm impressed and interested. You really seem to have a great story about to unfold, the spriting is nice, and the hand-drawn covers are a great touch. Keep up the good work!

~MC

 

[MochiShroom]

Beautiful! I have never seen a person off to such a great start! Here's what I have to say:
Graphics:Sprites are neat and the cover is awesome! I don't know, maybe you should decorate the bubbles or something but I think you should keep it as it is.
Text:What can I say? Neat and readable!
Humor:None really, but c'mon, this is the first episode!
Originality:Original! Hehe, I like the plot already!
Overall:Man, you are off to a stupendous start. Keep it up!

 

[Fang]

Thanks for the comments; I really appreciate it. As promised, Comic #2 is up for Wednesday. Enjoy.

 

[Magical Trevor]

Well i like it and it's a nice idea aswell though in comic one the text needed to be a bit bigger.

 

[Gosple]

I think this is a great start , and the plot sounds interesting . Keep this up , and it is going to be a great comic .

 

[Hiro xd]

Great start! And very good introduction! Well here's my review:

Sprites:Very good execpt in one window only in epi 2, his eyes loked a bit weird. Other than that great job!
Speech and Bubbles: Grammar is very good, good english and bubbles are very good.
Story:can't review yet must wait after 5 episodes to review this.
Humour:Like Moshishroom said it just the beginning
Orginality:Very original, first one of these I've seen
Note/Mark/Over All: Well I give you 9 on 10, it just the start so keep up the good work!

 

[blueguy]

I think that this comic does not deserve as much praise as it has received. Your first comic is very boring to the eye; it's a bunch of reading, with no change in graphics... at all. Aside from that, there's no space between the panels, and I advise you make some. The narration of Chris is sort of odd, as it makes it seem like he's awake, when he's fixed in that same pose in all four panels, clearly asleep... Chris's internal monologue was VERY boring to me... >_< It needs to be shorter. You'll also need to work on the placement of the text in your bubbles. There are a few spelling errors, so just be a little bit more careful. I'd like to thank you for using the accent. Thumbs up for that!

I think it's a fairly solid start, though I'm not particularly blown away.

EDIT - I'd also like to use this post as an oppurtunity to ask that all of the "oMG lyKe this comix iz SoooOOO gud 14/10" people refrain from posting, as it annoys me quite a bit... and spam is against the rules... *ahem*.

 

[zuloon]

I think that this comic does not deserve as much praise as it has received. Your first comic is very boring to the eye; it's a bunch of reading, with no change in graphics... at all. Aside from that, there's no space between the panels, and I advise you make some. The narration of Chris is sort of odd, as it makes it seem like he's awake, when he's fixed in that same pose in all four panels, clearly asleep... Chris's internal monologue was VERY boring to me... >_< It needs to be shorter. You'll also need to work on the placement of the text in your bubbles. There are a few spelling errors, so just be a little bit more careful. I'd like to thank you for using the accent. Thumbs up for that!

I think it's a fairly solid start, though I'm not particularly blown away.

EDIT - I'd also like to use this post as an oppurtunity to ask that all of the "oMG lyKe this comix iz SoooOOO gud 14/10" people refrain from posting, as it annoys me quite a bit... and spam is against the rules... *ahem*.

Ditto. The idea of a sales clerk sounds interesting and original, but your comic is very dull. Plus each "edition" is only a strip long, and the sleeping in thing is way too overused. And why do you have it like ten times bigger than normal? Also the text and the bubbles are quite ugly to my eye.

 

[Fang]

Thanks for the reviews and comments everyone. Before I post the next strip, I'd like to give a little history on Pokémon BEAST.

Originally, this started out as a hand-drawn comic written in Japanese I drew about three years ago. Eventually, I lost my enthusiasm and quit. About a month ago, I came across the comic's concept sketch.
Concept Sketch - Translated
I decided to redo the whole thing in sprite form. I wanted to keep the original dialogue but using Pokémon sprite bases limited movement. Hence the repeating of the same frame in the first comic.

Originally posted by zuloon
Plus each "edition" is only a strip long, and the sleeping in thing is way too overused.

Well, I do admit that the comic is a bit short (That'll change in Issue 3). However, I used sleeping as a way for the reader to relate to the main character. Everyone has slept in late before, right? I know I happen to do that a lot >_>;

Originally posted by zuloon
And why do you have it like ten times bigger than normal?

<_<; I think Zeal can answer that. Her response

Originally posted by zuloon
Also the text and the bubbles are quite ugly to my eye.

I agree. New text bubbles and font will make their appearance in Issue #3.

Originally posted by blueguy
I'd like to thank you for using the accent. Thumbs up for that!

I owe it all to your signature.

Comic #3 will be up shortly.

 

[zuloon]

Hey, if you have a scanner, why don't you make it hand-drawn? I personally think sprite comics are much harder, but I have no scanner ><.

 

[Fang]

Trust me, hand-drawn comics are a lot of work. That's one of the reasons I quit the original. But maybe I'll do a special hand-drawn episode once in a while.

Comic #3 is up.

 

[pika_power]

I like this comic but most other comics have ended up updated once in a blue moon or dead. Please keep it alive!

I know nothing about sprites and such but the first ep is not very exciting. The second ep was good though.

So far the only plot problem is team S. It seems... Overused.

Is Zeal going to be unjustly hammered? I hope not. She seems too strong for that.

 

[Fang]

Don't worry, pika-power. Though I won't give away the outcome, all I can say is that the battle will be a short one.

On a side note, I'm also updating the first post with character submission guidelines.

 

[blueguy]

Don't worry, pika-power. Though I won't give away the outcome, all I can say is that the battle will be a short one.

On a side note, I'm also updating the first post with character submission guidelines.

Character submission? Major no-no. -_- When you invite people, who are usually very... well... daft, to submit characters, it presents the picture that you're either uncreative or lazy; it means that you're not in full control of the plot, and that you are willing to allow someone else direct it for you.

As for the new comic: All the sprites are stretched out and mangled. Keep them as they would look in a game. Second, the text bubbles have no border, and easily merge with the panel in an unattractive way. The text within these bubbles seems to nearly spill from them as well. And as far as plot goes, it's getting a bit clichéed, what with pokémon gene splicing, and evil teams...

I think you should keep on trucking, though.

 

[Sora]

Pokemon gene splicing...

It's been done before but I'm intrigued

 

[Fang]

Originally Posted by blueguy
Character submission? Major no-no. -_- When you invite people, who are usually very... well... daft, to submit characters, it presents the picture that you're either uncreative or lazy; it means that you're not in full control of the plot, and that you are willing to allow someone else direct it for you.

Though I don't quite agree with you, I get what you’re saying. Due to the fact that the entire plot is already typed out, the guidelines I wrote prohibited the submission of main characters. It was just a way for users to see their characters in action as a passing-by trainer or a participant in a Pokémon contest.

I'll hold off on the submission until the main plot gets going. However, by the time Issue #4 rolls around, I'll probably re-post them.

Sorry for the double-post but I have an annoucement to make.

After going over some of the reviews, I decided that I'd redo all of the comics in a new "style" that I hope everyone will enjoy. So, I've taken all of the old strips down and replaced them with the new ones My updating times have also been changed. So...Enjoy.

Comic #1 - V.2 is up!

 

[zuloon]

Wow...it looks so much better...
But the text bubbles are hard to follow. Are they left down right down or what?
The coloring needs to be rid of the antianliasing, but I suggest you don't color it at all because:
1)It's too much work.
2)Most mangas only color the cover, because of point #1.

 

[Fang]

It's manga style so the panels go right to left and the text goes top to bottom. So it would be Pokéball -> Map -> PokéMart -> Purple -> Window -> Sleeping -> Clock.

 

[pika_power]

Hmmm. I dont know if I like this new style or not. Meh it will be a good comic in my eyes as long as it keeps colour.