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Pokémon Exsisto (Rated PG-13)+[Reposted/Revised]

CHeSHiRe-CaT

A Curious Breed
Pokémon Exsisto (Rated PG-13)+[Reposted/Revised]

Pokémon Exsisto
t h i s • f i c t i o n • i s • s e t • in • t h e • r e a l • w o r l d
What if Pokémon Were Real?

When an abnormal storm
arrives in the Machida district
of Tokyo, Satoshi Tajiri has nothing
more on his mind then ending his life as a
pseudo-Christian and his juvenile habit
of collecting insects. But when the
hurricane erupts into something
far greater than his own self,
he becomes part of a destined
chase around the world to stop
an evil organization from rising to
power, and to show the world the
true nature of the creatures shooting
from the sky.
This is Exsisto.


This Fan-Fiction is rated PG-13 for Violence,
Controversial Themes, Mild Language, and
Mild Blood/Gore. It is intended for the
reading pleasure of members on this
forum, and is in no way to be
copied without permission and
credit. The following is a chapter
index soon to contain/containing links to
the proper pages for each chapter. Each chapter
is written in Latin for the theme of the story, and their
English-translated meaning can be found right next to the
Latin title. Chapters will be updated frequently every three or
so days. I don't have a PM notification list; that's what subscribing
is for :p Enjoy your read!


Table of Contents
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Prologue: Diaboli Quiritatio (Scream of the Devil)
Chapter I: Fatum Plena Vesper (Evening of Fate)
Chapter II: Ymber Procella (Storm of Torrents)
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Prologue: Diaboli Quiritatio


Snidely figures slinked off into the darkness of the corridors. Rhythmic waves of light passing through the surface of the water into the subterranean fort wobbled on the cold, steel floor of the room. Furious tapping and crunching of keyboard combos was aloof in the air, and precision was etched into every desperate face of the scientists basking in the streaming glow of computer monitors. A square-shouldered man in a tuxedo strode in the shadows of the main branch in the facility, glaring over sweating employees’ shoulders to analyze and criticize the progress of the project.

Hmm, yes. Those were quite the beauties winking back at him on the monitor screen. The cute curve of their bodies…just what Nebley needed to put a trot in his giddy-up. For hours, he had been working on the simulation for the installation of anti-dimensional grids, tossing his personal affairs out of the window at the request of the head manager. Now he was staring and grinning at the lovely display Tiffany, Yolanda, and Jamie were putting on for him in the beach pictures that were alit in front of his acne-covered face. He had been to the site a few times before when his wife could not satisfy him. He even felt the need to renew his subscription…instead of doing his job.

Just as Nebley was sheepishly drifting into Porno Land, a black silhouette stepped down the aisle that led to his workstation. The footsteps…he recognized them immediately, nervously darting his eyes behind the frames upon his hooked nose, while zooming his mouse with catlike reflexes to close the windows he had open. It was then that he realized he had opened far too many photos of Yolanda spread on the sand, just as a looming presence entered the atmosphere. His face became hot and expressionless.

The manager took a deep breath of solid anger, and then thrust his hand around the scientist’s neck. Nebley released a gurgling a noise as his Adam’s apple attempted to move upward to swallow, clenched in the other man’s furious grip. He choked in agony, just as the chief’s fist hardened, and his fingers twitched horrendously toward the mouse in the pointless hope of closing the windows. It was no use, of course. The boss twisted his knuckled hand around, jerking the scientist’s body out of the rolling desk chair and knocking it off into a corner. Several of the scientists had stopped working to watch this scene of violence, while others continued pecking feverishly in fear of being targeted next.

The dark man pulled the scientist to face him, his hand still firmly clamped around his neck. The scientist’s face was becoming red and distorted, just as the other man lifted him off of the ground.

“I do not pay my researchers to become erect, Mr. Nebley,” the boss whispered harshly, his thick, Italian accent smearing his cruelty all over Nebley. “I pay them to do my bidding, and if this rocket launching project is to be a success, I don’t need failures.”

“BUT…SIR…” the scientist choked in a Swedish tongue, “…FORGIVE…ME…I WILL…CONTINUE…WORKING…”

“Ah, but you’ve already betrayed my expectations of you,” the Italian fiend barked, sweat from Nebley’s neck dripping onto his boss’ fist. “I don’t tolerate backstabbers, Mr. Nebley, and I don’t intend to keep one in this room.”

Suddenly, the man growled something under his breath into a microphone attached to his coat collar. Not a moment afterward, as he still held Nebley in his reach, a pounding of boots came bolting from the corridors. The scientist shook his head miserably in anguish, wriggling in the grip of his superior. In his peripheral vision, he could see them. The devious black bowler caps and the two uniformed soldiers marching steadily from the tunnel to the higher floor. He closed his eyes, dormant fear burning in his veins as the footsteps progressed.

It was only a matter of time before he heard the two men stamp firmly a few feet away, and in a moment, his throat was released, allowing a wave of euphoric despair to pound in his head. Then, he was heaved up underneath his arms.

Nebley shrieked, his voice hoarse and sputtery as the soldiers gave no mercy in dragging him into the tunnel, which was lit dimly by a pale, fluorescent light. Apparently there was a struggle, as the scientist helplessly tried to overwhelm them, but out of view of the work area, they took him into the hallway, where their silhouettes were cast darkly on the walls. Then, at once, the soldiers snapped whips from their sides and began beating the scientist, slashing at his face and body, causing him to exhaust blood-curdling screams. The crack of the whip snapped brutally, and sent a chill up each individual’s spine in the vicinity, with the exception of the advisor.

The soldiers lifted Nebley’s limp body upward, and resumed through the chamber, dragging him along. Around the corner, small droplets of his blood had sloped down from the hall. Every scientist stared at the tunnel with undeniable fear, and the bone-chilling consequences of similar actions. They did not say one word, and resumed to work once again. The boss grinned in content once more. He tossed a finger at one of the scientists sitting on the left subsection, a woman with dark, brunette hair.

“Dr. Keyes, what is our progress on the missile status?” he asked impatiently.

“The missile is complete and is currently in the combustion chamber to see if it can withstand friction of the atmosphere, and all other anti-dimensional grids have been simulated, tested, and approved to be placed inside the hull of the body,” she replied, tapping at the keys calmly.

“Excellent,” said the man, grinning as he turned to the tunnel. “Once this rocket has taken off, you won’t be far from doing so yourself in ranking.”

“I’m honored, sir,” she said breathlessly. “But…what about…?”

She pointed to the pool of blood collecting from the tributaries sliding down the ramp in the hall. He glared at the sight with a disenchanted hatred. Then, his mind quickly reformed to the task lying ahead. He turned to Lily, who peered up at him softly.

“Call the janitor in. It seems we have a rat problem.”
 
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Literate

black cat, black cat
Wow. So cool. @_@ I should learn from this. It's just so good. ^_^

You have a knack for writing stories like this. Gore. Yeah. The description was so cool. (I would say it was awesome but that isn't in my vocab.) It's so, so cool! It was nice, to say it in short term. Very nice and the details, nice. ^_^

Blood. How gruesome. So, I will stop now or else I'll repeat things.

But what does it have to do with pokemon? Yeah.

So that's it. It was pretty good. It was very good. ^_^ I enjoyed this a lot. ^_^

~PEACE~
 

Psychic

Really and truly
Yay, you reposted Existo, and I'm actually here to read it and hopefully follow it this time! XD Hopefully for Trials you'll tell me before posting, though.

Anyway, when I was reading this I was strongly reminded of my RPG- I remember I sent you my opening post, and it was a lot like this. The only difference was the hot picture (XD at that), the mamager was shown hurting his employee and you also showed Nebley being hurt. Other than that, I was really surprised how similar it is to Legndary Reawakening. @_@ I'm sure it isn't meant to be so, though.


Anyways, this was really well written, but of course, I have yet to see anything you've written that isn't. Very visual and even sort of realistic, though in a more...surreal sort of way. I liked how you kept everything very calm despite what was going on, though maybe some emotion would have worked well- not quite sure.


Meh, not sure what else to say. Just keep up the good work, and I'm excited to read on!

~Psychic
 

CHeSHiRe-CaT

A Curious Breed
litestars: Sorry, forgot to put that in the first post ^^; This fic is set in the real world, and involves the concept of Pokémon becoming real. *runs off to edit* Thank you very much for leaving a comment. Cool XD

Psychic: I'm glad you could stay this time D: Believe me, Exsisto is one of my more stronger works, and I try to make it as realistic as possible, but it's your job to tell me how I'm doing XD I think it was that particular part of your RPG that inspired me to write this prologue (or it inspired the setting). Thanks twinneh!

I'm watching Seussical the Musical on DVD... XD
 

Timid Kyogre

Endangered Creature
This. Is. So. Cool o_O

You see, I've always liked stories/movies/whatever with blood in it for some unknown and weird reason.

She pointed to the pool of blood on the floor, and the boss simply flicked his head back to eye it. He turned back to the tunnel, and said, “Call the janitor and tell him we had vermin.”

That was my favorite part.

I thought it was awesome XD Good job, Chesh!

~Timid Kyogre
 
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Bay

YEAHHHHHHH
Hey Ches! I read this and so far I liked it. Existo used to be posted here? I didn't know until now!

Okay, okay, now to the review. I liked it so far. It was a tad short, but it is a prolouge. I liked how your descrpiton flows really well with the story. For instance:

Nebley shrieked, his voice hoarse and gagging as the soldiers took no mercy in dragging him into the tunnel, which was lit dimly by a pale, fluorescent light. Apparently there was a struggle, as the scientist helplessly tried to overwhelm them, but out of view of the work area, they took him into the hallway, where their silhouettes were cast darkly on the walls. Then, at once, the soldiers snapped their whips from their sides and began beating the scientist, slashing at his face and body, causing him to shout blood-curdling screams. The crack of the whip was heard brutally, and sent a chill up everyone’s spine.

Yeah, you did not go full blown of the emotions, but that is quite good enough already. I know in this one you were going with the physical emotions. (Now I am starting to feel the chills).

Well, I will keep an eye on this fic and will review again soon!
 

Kiyohime

Well-Known Member
MY FAVORITE CHESHIRE CAT STORY IS BACK! *does the happy pen dance*

Your writing makes me jealous. ;_; And I love that format you have with the chapter index. D:

This prologue kicks monkey sock balls. "I do not pay my researchers to be erect." BEST LINE EVAR.
 

CHeSHiRe-CaT

A Curious Breed
Scrap: If I'm correct, this is the first story that brought you and Saber to me XD SO GLAD you both posted here that time. And yeah, I'm flashy XD

TK: Thanks, dear D: The blood is yermy.

Bay: Aye, this is mostly physical in the prologue, and there's a specific reason why I put that scene there. Guess you'll have to find out when the surprise pops up near the beginning of le fic @w@ Thank yeeeeew.

EDIT: Btw, FYI people:

IT IS "EXSISTO." Not "EXISTO" or "EXIST" or "EXISTIO!"

Dot. Dot. Dot.

It's Latin for "to exist" xPPPPPPP
 
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Praxiteles

Friendly POKéMON.
'Tis Latin? Sounded Spanish, though I barely know any more Spanish than Latin.

Anyways, you've made me happy today. And I mean really happy. I don't get quite how you do it, but there is something about your storylines that just draws me in. Or maybe it's just because of this certain quote:

“The missile is complete in the combustion chamber, and all other anti-dimensional grids have been simulated, tested, and approved to be placed inside the hull of the body,” she replied, tapping at the keys calmly.

Just the type I like. Antidimensional grids, eh? Connected in any way to traversing dimensions?

OK, well, maybe it's just to negate Vertical and lateral G's. Or I'm a complete idiotic hypocrite and am talking of stuff way out of my league...

This is coolus extremus! </badattemptatLatin> Everything about it, from the chapter titles to the idea itself and the characters in it, radiates good fic material. And the dialog... well... it's not good.

It's awesome!

Come on, who wouldn't like stuff like this:

“I’m honored sir,” she said breathlessly. “But…what about…”

She pointed to the pool of blood on the floor, and the boss simply flicked his head back to eye it. He turned back to the tunnel, and said, “Call the janitor and tell him we had vermin.”

You did forget a comma between 'honored' and 'sir, but that's rather small.

Anyways, I'll be seeing you!

Tachos Ligyna...
Pyroken Serafoculus
 
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CHeSHiRe-CaT

A Curious Breed
Just the type I like. Antidimensional grids, eh? Connected in any way to traversing dimensions?
DINGDINGDING. We have a winner 8D You're the first from the first and second versions to notice this. This quote is very important to keep in mind in the story.

You did forget a comma between 'honored' and 'sir, but that's rather small.
Huzzah, I'm off to editing @-@ *edits* I really gripe about that stuff, because it's so little, but I miss it ><; Thank yeeeew.
 

CHeSHiRe-CaT

A Curious Breed
Now, I am posting Chapter I, but note that I won't be posting chapters so quickly like I am now, merely because the prologue was short xP Also, as for the reason why I use Latin for the highlight language of this story is that everything in this fic is universal, and therefore, must use a language that is, so-called, "dead" and ancient, and because it is one of the main bases for all languages.

Chapter I: Fatum Plena Vesper

“La lala la lala…la la la la la la la, lala la, lala…la la la la la la…
Laudate Dominum in sanctis eius laudate eum in firmamento virtutis eius
La lala la lala…
Laudate eum in potentatibus eius laudate eum secundum multitudinem magnitudinis eius
La lala la lala…la la la la la la la, lala la, lala…la la la la la la…
Laudate Dominum in sanctis eius laudate eum in firmamento virtutis eius
La lala la lala…
Laudate eum in potentatibus eius laudate eum secundum multitudinem magnitudinis eius
La lala la lala…
Laudate eum in sono tubae, la…
Laudate eum in psalterio et cithara, la…
Laudate Dominum in sanctis eius laudate eum in firmamento virtutis eius
Laudate eum in tympano et choro…
Laudate eum in cordis et organo…
Laudate eum in cymbalis bene sonantibus…
Laudate eum in cymbalis, jubilationus, jubilationus, jubilationus, jubilationus
La lala la lala…la la la la la la la, lala la, lala…la la la la la la…
Omni spiritus, laudate Dominum…Omni spiritus, laudate Dominum
Laudate Dominum laudate Dominum laudate Dominum laudate Dominum… Al-le-lu-jia!”​

“All right, kids, that’s a wrap.”

Mrs. Matsura swept both hands in front of her scarlet dress, and clamped them together, signaling the choir to cease. Their large mouths closed tightly, and they all blinked silently. The woman turned the page on the music sheet while passing a bony finger through her grayed hair. She tipped her glasses, and looked at the class, who were all standing in one large circle around the room.

“All right…your marks for today are top-notch!” she exclaimed, smiling. The whole class eased up, and so began a minor chatter as the teacher searched through some papers. Once she found them, she walked over to the piano and handed the boy playing it a sheet of a new song. The boy looked over it carefully as Mrs. Matsura stared at the top of his black-haired head.

“Ken, I would like you learn this song on piano tonight, if you can,” she said as though she were tired, glancing at all of the children in their school uniforms. Ken nodded, certainly excited, but tired from the restless day. Another boy, about fourteen years old from the stands walked up to Mrs. Matsura, and he smiled at her.

“Thanks for the lesson today, Mrs. Matsura,” he said, bowing slightly. “It’s the only thing in my day I actually look forward to.”

She repeated his bow. “It was my pleasure, Satoshi-san. By now we should be ready to put on a concert, and a damn good one if I say so myself.”

“There’s one problem with that,” Ken said from the piano, pulling his jacket on and placing a notebook tablet in his pocket.

“What would that be?”

“It’s a Christmas concert,” Ken said, frowning as he picked up the music sheets and placed them inside a small briefcase. Satoshi watched his fellow peer pick up all of his things and walk toward he and Mrs. Matsura, who had both become rather sorrowful. Satoshi frowned at Ken.

“There isn’t even an audience, then?” the boy asked.

“No one in Machida is Christian…except for us. We’d embarrass ourselves out there.”

“Oh, dear…I don’t know why I ever took that into consideration,” the teacher said, walking over to the piano bunch slowly, then slumping down on it. She sighed miserably, and Ken came to her side, patting her back.

“It’s all right…we didn’t do it for nothing.”

“Do it for what, then?” she rasped. “That’s the only thing we do it for, is the people! Recognition is important to all of you, but…I never thought to be so incredibly stupid…how could I be so stupid?”

Mrs. Matsura then tore the glasses from her eyes, and carefully placed her face inside her clasped hands, and cried, right there, in front of the whole class. It made Satoshi and Ken terribly heart-broken; to see one of the greatest women in Tokyo brought down by something she could not fight. After all, Christianity was not the major religion, and surely, they would gain nothing from all the difficult work they had learned to achieve an excellent Christmas concert. The inevitable truth can often times be brutal. Once the poor woman had sniffled a few times, she withdrew a handkerchief and began wiping her face. She looked up at Satoshi Tajiri and Ken Sugimori, completely dejected and saddened.

“I don’t want you kids to come for choir tomorrow,” she said, tears welled in her eyes. “Or the next day, or the next day…I’m waving the white flag…there’s nothing we can do…”

“But Mrs. Matsura, you can’t give up so easily!” Satoshi exclaimed. “Without this class, I’m just…a kid who just can’t seem to make my grades meet. This is one of the only things I have left!”

“AND IS THAT MY FAULT? Where do you want to go?” the woman screamed at him, while the other students were dismissed from the class. “There is NO ONE in Japan that would like to see our concert. We would be a disgrace…I’m so stupid…just…get out.”

“But Mrs.—”

“I said, GET OUT.”

The sudden rage of his once gentle and kind music teacher made Satoshi cringe. Ken put an arm around his shoulder and gestured Satoshi to the door, where they would leave the private school. Outside the white building, the grass was greener than anything they had ever seen, but the sun that began to set in the west had cast an orange glare on the blades, shadowing the foreground of trees, whose colors flamed colors of glorious reds, yellows, and browns as each twig twittered and released leaves that fell to the ground. Machida was not a very large town, but it was in the district of Tokyo, and therefore was larger than most places. However, it felt small to Satoshi and Ken, who felt like goldfish trapped in a fish bowl.

Satoshi and his friend began walking down the steps of the school campus, immersed in clusters with the other students, for there would be trouble if they did not stay together. Meanwhile, they talked amongst themselves as they traveled down the crowded sidewalks, watching cars pass by and honk belligerently. The rows of townhouses and apartments also passed, and many were hanging their clothes on wire lines that swung across separate windows. Ken turned to Satoshi as he began to pull out the notepad he had hidden in his pocket.

“So, are we going hunting again today?” he asked Satoshi, flipping through the notebook to show him sketches of insects he had made.

“I…don’t know,” the other boy replied. “I’m devastated at what just happened…”

Ken sighed, and looked down at the sketches as though they meant nothing. The pages were filled to the brim with pictures; pictures and images of insects of every origin, from the horned beetle to the white-winged wasp, and everything in between. It was a habit of the two boys, to go and hunt for these bugs, for it was their own escape from reality. Satoshi was the mastermind behind every plan and method to find these insects, for he had been a bug collector since he was a very small child. Other children engaged in searching for bugs in contests or just for the fun of it, and Satoshi had always been the only one to amaze the others.

Now that the years had gone by, however, children matured into young adults, and though the boys were young adults, they still were eager to discover a new genre of bug, even while their peers began to grow up from the juvenile sport of hunting insects, or because Satoshi and Ken were the best, and they could not be beat. That would be their optimistic point of view, of course, but now, they were not so positive.

“Look, Satoshi,” Ken said, lifting a hand, “we won’t be able to sing anymore. You never really liked singing anyway. See? No loss.”

“There is a loss, KEN,” Satoshi growled. “That was the only class I was getting by with, because I actually tried. No, I’ll admit I’m not a great singer, and I don’t really like it, but it was Mrs. Matsura’s spirit that guided us. I’m just…losing everything, Ken. I don’t know what I am going to do with my life…”

“Don’t talk like that Satoshi,” Ken said, patting his friend’s back. “Everything will be fine. Once you get to college, you’ll be away from this Hell.”

“I’ve already tried to get away,” Satoshi breathed, looking rather pale.

“What do you mean?”

As they continued walking, the boy unraveled his shirt sleeve, pushing it aside to reveal his arm to his friend. Upon his arm were three, very distinct marks that were welted and red…dried blood lined each of them, and they were rather painful to peer at. Ken’s eyes widened and he pulled Satoshi’s sleeve back down. They stopped abruptly.

“Don’t you understand how dangerous that is?” Ken said, walking to stand in front of his friend, a look of utter distaste written all over his face. “I would never expect this sort of thing from you! Trying to slit a vein? That’s complete ********.”

“What do you care?” Satoshi sneered. “You’re just my friend!”

“JUST your friend?” Ken exclaimed, completely bewildered. “Satoshi, I value our friendship beyond anyone else’s! We’ve been friends since we were six years old! I care about you! You’re like a brother to me.”

Satoshi bowed his head in discontent, and let out a small sob, though he shed no tears. Ken breathed deeply, and returned to his friend’s side. Satoshi did not speak for a moment, but then, his lips moved quietly, “I apologize…let’s go.”

Just as they were beginning to walk down the street, they noticed something terribly wrong. The crowd of their fellow school peers was gone, and no one was in sight but themselves and the careless cars that drove over the road lines. Ken’s eyes began darting furiously from side to side as he attempted to find the group, but it seems they had gone. Satoshi murmured something under his breath, and the longer they stood there, the harder their hearts pounded.

“Which way did they go?” Satoshi whispered.

“I don’t know…”

“We better hope to God…no, they can’t come here. They’re not…everywhere…”

Out of a nearby alleyway, someone came blundering through, banging a dent into a dumpster at random, and stomping heavily on the concrete ground. He was a rather tall figure; most likely near eighteen years old, with a stone-carved body. He wore a black, leather jacket unzipped against an indigo shirt, and faded jeans that had tears in the kneecaps. Naturally, his appearance startled them. He swayed toward them quickly, eyeing their uniforms. Ken did not turn to Satoshi, but mumbled one word, “Run.”

They turned carefully around to face the opposite direction of the sidewalk, when they burst into a full-out race, sprinting off in direction of their school. They moved so quickly they did not even hear their own feet dashing and skidding. However, following closely behind them, was the heavy footsteps of the man. In the fraction of a second, Satoshi and Ken felt something snatch the back of their collars, and they slowed to a halt as they saw that the older boy had grabbed them. Their blood ran warmly as they pushed against his force, both of them trying to start a round in a frenzy of randomized attacks. Still, the older one held them, and laughed jubilantly.

“Why, look here. It’s the Jesus Christ boys,” he said, pulling up harder on their collars so that it began to cut into their necks.

“Just let us go; we never did anything to you,” Ken snapped, croaking over the strain on his neck.

The older boy then relinquished his mighty grip on them, but instead, tossed them onto the concrete ground. Their faces slammed with great intensity onto the asphalt, scraping the skin on their faces to the point of burning, but they wasted no time in coming up with a reaction. They immediately scrambled to their feet, standing in front of their tormentor.

“I’ll teach you a lesson, about talking back to someone larger than yourself,” he said, laughing. They glared at him with a fiery anger, but before they could say one word, he threw his arm back and tossed his flying fist toward Ken’s face. Satoshi speedily lunged in front of Ken, blocking the blow from the older boy, and thrusting his very own white knuckles into the oppressor’s jaw. A slight crack came from it as it bounced to the other side of his skull, and he walked backward in shock. Satoshi panted with fury and wrath, unable to control his hatred for the older boy. The brawler clicked his jaw back into place, and gritted his teeth despicably at Satoshi. His eyes narrowed in vengeance.

“YOU LITTLE *******!”

The older boy sprung at Satoshi with haste, and in one destructive batter, he crushed his knuckles into Satoshi’s eye socket; the severity of the thrash sending him backward. The boy crashed into the pavement on his tailbone, and air left his lungs unexpectedly. Satoshi struggled to breath, his left eye numb with the stinging pain as the tormentor began heading for Ken.

Out of nowhere, a woman’s voice speared through the air, and the bully’s head twisted in the direction of which it came. Running from the door of the white building, Mrs. Matsura plowed across the lawns straight to the scene, releasing a flurry of curses and swears. As she and her violent scarlet dress strutted closer, the older boy fled across the street, jaywalking in front of a line of cars that had stopped at a green light. Their teacher ran with tension to the boys, whereas Ken came running to Satoshi. The boy ached in pain as he lied there hopelessly on the pavement, groaning as he struggled to breathe properly. Mrs. Matsura pursed her lips in dismay at the sight of her student lying there, beaten down by a cowardly fighter.

“Are you all right, dear?” she asked him, Ken standing by her side.

“Just…I’ll…be fine,” he said, attempting to stand back up, his lungs pressing difficultly against his chest. Mrs. Matsura turned to Ken: “I’ll take you boys home. You’ve been roughed up enough for one day.” They turned to her and thanked her graciously, and walked a small distance from the school down the walk to a faculty parking lot, where her old Mitsubishi pick-up was sitting. Satoshi was still catching his breath, but air began to come back to him as he continued to breathe slowly.

It was very odd to be driven somewhere by one’s own teacher, but under their circumstances, any help was appreciated and was to be grateful for. A small pride swelled in Satoshi’s heart for getting the first punch, but a deep regret nagged him for being arrogant and bigheaded, for thinking he could have stopped the older boy. Then again, he had saved Ken from a fair beating, which cancelled out the rest of his feelings as they piled into the front seats, becoming quite crowded and squashed. Mrs. Matsura slid in carefully, and then inserted the key to the ignition, turning and starting the car.

They pulled out of the parking lot, and directly into traffic. Apparently, it was rush hour as people wound through Machida and other sub-districts to get to Tokyo, where the important events happened. Lines became slow as they began taking turns down several streets. Mrs. Matsura took this opportunity to find out what had happened from the boys.

“What street do you live on, Mr. Sugimori?” she asked Ken politely.

“Pojo, ma’am,” he replied, staring off into space through the windshield.

“I know where you live, Satoshi-san,” Mrs. Matsura said, motioning to Satoshi. “Are your parents home?”

“Mom is…dad may be at work,” Satoshi replied, cupping his eye in pain.

“Well, you both sure are quiet,” she commented, managing a weak smile as she turned the steering wheel. “I’m surprised you didn’t tell me about your fight yet.”

The two boys did not say a word, and merely avoided making eye contact with their choir teacher. After a few minutes of silence, Mrs. Matsura sighed, really quite agitated that they were being stubborn, but breaking this small solitude, Ken said, “He called us the ‘Jesus Christ’ boys.” Mrs. Matsura exploded into laughter, and began chuckling madly. Satoshi and Ken stared at her in stupefaction as she continued to giggle over the remark, clearly finding it not as hilarious as she interpreted it to be. After she was done with her fit, she smiled and stopped at an intersection.

“Well, it’s just comical to use such a term, when he could have called you something different,” she said, musing to herself.

“I’m not a Jesus Christ boy,” Satoshi grumbled. “I’m not even Christian…”

“What?” Ken interjected. “You’re not?”

“No, he’s not,” Mrs. Matsura replied.

“My mom grew up in America,” Satoshi said, recalling facts from the top of his head, “in a Catholic school, because my grandmother moved there during World War II to find my grandfather. My mom converted to Baptism when she was older, because the nuns beat her hands with rulers.”

At this, Satoshi chuckled a bit, and Ken grinned. Mrs. Matsura smiled lazily into traffic, certainly glad the negative mood of the boys had been lifted.

“I suppose that’s a pretty good reason to convert,” Ken said jokingly, punching his friend softly in the arm. “So then, is your dad a Christian?” Satoshi shook his head, and spoke calmly, “No, he’s Buddhist. He used to live on the coast of Kanto, but when he met my mom when she came back to Japan for vacation, he said they fell deeply in love with each other, and they moved back into his parents’ home here in Machida. Corny, huh?”

“Then, why do you attend a private Christian school?” Ken asked, completely confused. Satoshi sighed, and turned to Ken. “Mom always wanted me to go to a good school…not necessarily because she wants me to follow her religion, but because she wants my atmosphere to be a place with good influences.”

“Which is very difficult,” Mrs. Matsura interrupted, “when your best friend is Ken Sugimori.”

The two boys laughed at this comment, when she continued, “It was actually your mother who introduced Mrs. Tajiri to me when she considered taking him to a public school here, Ken. She thought it would be better for them, which doesn’t bug me at all. Speaking of bugs, how goes the hunt?”

Satoshi peered over at his teacher and laughed loudly, “I haven’t gone down to the marshes for a week, now.”

“Now, why is that?”

“Because I have better things to do.”

“Not a good reason at all.”

“Well,” Satoshi looked out to the streets, “there’s no point in doing it anymore…I mean, no one cares what sort of bugs I collect anymore. That was something I did so long ago, when I was a kid. I’m not a kid anymore, and…I just…”

“—don’t get the same recognition as you used to?” she asked. He nodded, and she remarked, “This life is about recognition, Satoshi. Like I said in class before, people want to be known in the world for certain things. You, for example, wanted to be known as the greatest bug collector in the world at your age. Now, you think your ambitions have changed because of other people’s opinions. Never back down, Satoshi. They may think your habits are childish, but if it makes you happy and successful, pursue it.”

“But…Mrs. Matsura,” Satoshi said, careful not to upset her, “that’s hypocritical. You didn’t pursue the concert.”

Mrs. Matsura turned to him as they began driving down a row of nicely-styled houses, and she frowned, a small regret glinting in her eye. She slowed to a stop, and pulled the emergency brake.

“The concert would be appealing to a much larger audience, Satoshi,” she said, a great feeling of apology in her voice. “You have a society of teenagers to appeal to, while my concert would disrupt the balance of religion, which is indeed a touchy subject around here. Ken, I believe this is your stop; can you walk from here?”

“Yeah, my house is right there,” Ken replied, quiet all this time, listening. “Thank you, Mrs. Matsura.”

He opened the door, and with a bang, slammed it shut in an instant, carrying off one block to a house with white paint and blue trim. Mrs. Matsura continued driving down the street, until she came to a small intersection, where she turned down Hirokazu Road. It was a street that had similar houses as the ones on the corner, however, they were in a slightly in a lower class. The mood of the air seemed calmer than normal, and the sun had already set over the mountains on the horizon, leaving a blue sky attempting to overwhelm a beautiful sunset. As they drew nearer to the Tajiri home, Mrs. Matsura turned to him and spoke.

“You listen to me, Satoshi, and never forget this,” she said, pointing a finger at him. “You will become a great person one day. I know the feeling that aches in your heart, for it is the feeling of being rejected from society just because you think differently about something other people opinionate as childish and dense. Never forget, that whatever dream passes your mind, don’t sit and wait for it to come closer. Reach out and grab it. Reach out, and snatch it by the horns.”

They pulled up to a short driveway further along the road, and pulled into the property of a home furnished with Japanese maple trees and bonsai growing eternally and healthily in the midst of their yard. Mrs. Matsura pulled to a stop. She nodded to the boy, and just before he shut the door, she said to him once again, “Do not forget.” He thanked her, and let her be on her own way back home.

After arriving at his home, Satoshi went through the front door, and was immediately met by his Shih Tzu, Kia, whose facial hair was tied in a little red ribbon. Kia growled as though she had a coin lodged in her throat, which was usually her way of greeting. The black-haired boy picked her up shortly; stroking her long hair, and then set her done so she could go create diabolical presents. Passing a mirror on the way to the living room, he spotted his unfamiliar reflection in the looking-glass. Satoshi approached it, afraid of what he was going to see. Unfortunately for him, he had no choice, and when he saw that his left eye had swollen slightly as the dead tissue underneath had been dyed black, he knew he would not be able to hide it for long.

In the living room, his balding father and loving mother sat in their comfort seats as they were watching Tokyo5 News under a dim lamp one would find in the seventies. They did not notice him, even as his shadow crept under the light of the lamp. It appeared that there was a storm warning advisory for a system of low pressure coming from along the American coast and across the Pacific Ocean. It seemed that the pressure was not dissipating, but dispersing in different directions. However, Satoshi did not continue to watch as he snuck carefully into the hallway toward his bedroom. When he whipped his view away from the television set, his eyes were immediately met with those of his littler brother, Shang. The child’s eyes instantly noticed the black eye he wore, and a warm feeling of embarrassment swelled in Satoshi.

“Satoshi,” Shang cried rather loudly, “what happened to your eye?”

Without thinking, Satoshi slapped his brother across the face, which frightened the little boy. He screamed, releasing a cry that would put shame to a pterodactyl. Satoshi apologized, gasping and letting out a small whimper at the unexpected thing he had just done. The boy ran toward his door, and slammed it shut, locking it behind him.

Inside, posted all over the walls, were magazine articles from National Geographic, Animal Zoo Book, and other wildlife publications were tacked to it, along with dozens of pictures of insects. One that prominently caught one’s eye was the image of a praying mantis stretched over the ceiling in a large poster. Satoshi climbed across discarded items on his floor to his bed, where his wrinkled bedding and insect kit sat. In the hall, he could hear his little brother talking, and following the tiny voice was that of his father’s, a stern and deep one. Satoshi scuttled rather hurriedly to the kit, opening it to find an identification book, magnifying glass, tags, and small vials. A few of the vials were full already, but Satoshi’s entire collection laid on the top of his dresser, where they sat upon small, steel shelves.

Suddenly, there was a knock at Satoshi’s door, and his father’s voice boomed, “Satoshi-san, why did you smack your brother? Open this door.” The boy bowed his head solemnly as his father banged on the door several times, his eyes twitching under pressure. Most reluctantly, Satoshi returned to his door, and swinging it open, came face-to-face with his father, whose eyes were slit in a petite anger. Next to him was the sniveling pile that was Shang. But at the moment he saw Satoshi standing there with a black eye, his expression changed completely. The old man turned to Shang, looking disapprovingly at the youngling.

“Did you do this, Shang-san? How many TIMES have I told you not to beat your brother?” he growled. The little boy was completely confused, but Satoshi smiled slightly. However, his father found his own joke less than amusing, and his view wandered to Satoshi’s left eye.

“What happened to you, son?”

“Another guy punched me in the face,” Satoshi said.

“Why?”

“Because…I told him something that offended him…something about his bike, and he just punched me in the face for no reason,” the boy lied, feeling much too engulfed to reveal the truth and get into a discussion with his father.

“What is the name of this boy? I will call the school,” Mr. Tajiri said, looking back into the living room.

“No, Dad. He already got caught; he’s serving detention time tomorrow.”

“Serves him right!” Mr. Tajiri humphed. “Should deserve a week…anyway…why did you slap your brother?”

“He…swore at me.”

“I did not!”

“Satoshi, Shang knows not one word of filthy tongue! I have never sworn in front of him, and certainly, your mother has not.”

“That’s a lie, dear!” Mrs. Tajiri called to the living room. Her husband sighed heavily, not arguing, but he looked sternly back to his oldest son.

“Apologize.”

Satoshi peered into Shang’s eyes, feeling deeply regretful. He sighed as well, and released a fairly honest, “I’m sorry, Shang…I don’t know what got into me.” Mr. Tajiri nodded faintly, and then he pointed a finger at Satoshi’s chest.

“For a week, you will take the garbage out and to the end of the driveway as punishment. I don’t know what got into you either, but don’t do it again.”

“Yes sir.”

Without another word, Mr. Tajiri began to walk back down the hallway, Shang turning to the right into his own bedroom. Before his father returned to the living room, Satoshi called out, “I’m going out to Samukai Woods!” A grunt replied in response, clearly indicating he had consent. Satoshi pulled open his dresser and retrieved a black linen jacket and placed it on the bed. He pulled off his uniform vest and tie, and tossed them onto the floor with the other miscellaneous objects. He then got the jacket again, and slipped it on over his shoulders. Satoshi then closed the case with all of the insect tools and carried it, and on his way out of the door, scooped a flashlight off of the floor, flicked the lights off, and shut the door tightly.
 
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Literate

black cat, black cat
Wow. This again was good. I'm just blown away. I have just one little question.

After arriving at his home, Satoshi went through the front door, and was immediately met by his Shitzu, Kia, whose facial hair was tied in a little red ribbon.
I wonder if that's the right spelling...

Other than that, everything is fine. It's so cool. ^_^ Now I kind of feel sorry for someone I punch in the head often. *Covers mouth* I should not have said that. >.>

~PEACE~
 

Timid Kyogre

Endangered Creature
Yay.

As usual, I really loved the description ^_^

“I said, GET OUT.”

That was sort of...scary o_O

It was a habit of the two boys, to go and hunt for these bugs, for it was their own escape from reality.

Must...kill...butterflies...today...

And I think I know what you have for this fic o_O Well, since [SPOIL]the real Satoshi and Ken like to catch bugs, I think maybe that it'll be like:

Both of them see Pokemon, create it, become famous, etc. etc.[/SPOIL]
“I would never expect this sort of thing from you! Trying to slit a vein? That’s complete ********.”

Ewch ewch ewch. Slitting...vein...

EWCH.

Suddenly, there was a knock and Satoshi’s door, and his father’s voice boomed,

I think that was supposed to be at.

Good job! ^_^

Oh yeah...what happened to Rolling Away? o_O

~Timid Kyogre
 

CHeSHiRe-CaT

A Curious Breed
litestars: Eh, yeah, I am certain that that's not the correct spelling, but I'm too lazy to check XD Word didn't pick up anything, but I know it's wrong. Guess it's time to sit up a bit @-@

TK: Mrs. Matsura's neurotic. And weird. Gotta have some weird people o_O Without it, the world would be like "bleach =/= yey" and that's bad.

D: to your theory.

I'll go fix the "and" part now @w@ Thank you for the reviews, guys.

EDIT: Apparently, it's "Shih Tzu" XD And Kelly, as for Rolling Away, I'm afraid it's not going to work out. I couldn't have two Celebi-ish fics out at the same time, so I'm melding a few things from Rolling Away into the Serebeth Noob Trials. Hopefully it will capture what people liked in what little I had written of Rolling Away ^^;
 
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Sike Saner

Peace to the Mountain
Awesome. Liked this before; still like it. Probably the best real-world based Pokémon fic currently in existence, this.

I ought to mention the "Satoshi getting his butt whupped" scene because I don't think I have before. You did a very good job writing out the action, and every hit was described in a way that really drove the "ouch" factor home.

“I do not pay my researchers to become erect, Mr. Nebley,”

I wil stop citing that line only when it stops pwning. Hence, never. ^^

“I don’t want you kids to come for choir tomorrow,” she said, tears welled in her eyes. “Or the next day, or the next day…I’m waving the white flag…there’s nothing we can do…”

“But Mrs. Matsura, you can’t give up so easily!” Satoshi exclaimed. “Without this class, I’m just…a kid who just can’t seem to make my grades meet. This is one of the only things I have left!”

“AND IS THAT MY FAULT? Where do you want to go?” the woman screamed at him, while the other students were dismissed from the class. “There is NO ONE in Japan that would like to see our concert. We would be a disgrace…I’m so stupid…just…get out.”

“But Mrs.—”

“I said, GET OUT.”

Wow…

o_o

That was a powerful moment there.

My mom converted to Baptism when she was older, because the nuns beat her hands with rulers.

I just love that line. XD

“Satoshi,” Shang cried rather loudly, “what happened to your eye?”

Without thinking, Satoshi slapped his brother across the face, which frightened the little boy.

Oh, snap! XD That was great.

Next to him was the sniveling pile that was Shang.

“Sniveling pile”. Nice. ^^



I like quality and cleverness. ^^ Hence, I like this story. *salutes*
 

Cybernetic Angel

Servant of Darkrai
After reading this, I must say, I am impressed. Even though there's been a prologue and one chapter so far, I've seen quite a bit of what's possibly going to happen next. That gives me the incentive to stay around and keep an eye on this story.

Now, I don't know much about the REAL Satoshi's high school years, but you put in a few basic things one would expect to find, while keeping the true facts, well true. When will kids learn that cutting themselves is the WUSS way out? Take life head on and kick Fate in the fragile package, HARD!
 

Praxiteles

Friendly POKéMON.
So very sorry to be late, but my internet was acting up, and I lost the review I'd written yesterday. Along with my will to write it again.

Anyways, on to it. I have to commend this; I know you'd written a short one before that chapter, but still: you got Chap. 2 down in ONE DAY?

Nice.

Next: I'm quite intrigued with your idea. Taking it straight from Mr. Tajiri's point of view? I was interested before, but now I'm interested. Can't wait to see him take a look at one of the Pokés... I personally hope that he's already come up with the idea of Pokémon before he sees them for real. I'd think it would be more interesting to read that way, but that's just me. Do whatever you wish.

I was pointing out errors in the last one, so I'll rewrite the ones I can find now:

The older boy then relinquished his mighty grip on them, but instead, tossed them onto the concrete ground.

You're being vvveeerrryyy contradictory there. So contradictory, in fact, that when I explained it in the other review, it took a 6-line paragraph. I suggest you vaporize that 'instead'.

Inside, posted all over the walls, were magazine articles from National Geographic, Animal Zoo Book, and other wildlife publications were tacked to it, along with dozens of pictures of insects

Maim and torture to death that 'were', please; you already said it at the beginning of the sentence.

I have a question, though: how much of this chapter did you base from fact, other than names? I'm just curious.

Highlights of doom:

“Which way did they go?” Satoshi whispered.

“I don’t know…”

“We better hope to God…no, they can’t come here. They’re not…everywhere…”

I likes zis. No reason.

“Then, why do you attend a private Christian school?” Ken asked, completely confused. Satoshi sighed, and turned to Ken. “Mom always wanted me to go to a good school…not necessarily because she wants me to follow her religion, but because she wants my atmosphere to be a place with good influences.”

“Which is very difficult,” Mrs. Matsura interrupted, “when your best friend is Ken Sugimori.”

Heeheeheehee... creepy person I am... and random...

Klautyag; arhuins pyre...
Pyroken Serafoculus


EDIT: By the way...

DINGDINGDING. We have a winner 8D You're the first from the first and second versions to notice this. This quote is very important to keep in mind in the story.

*faints* I ACTUALLY GOT A PLOT BIT RIGHT? *dances like a drunk rabbit*

...

*gets a lawsuit from Timid Kyogre for stealing idea*
 
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CHeSHiRe-CaT

A Curious Breed
Thanks to Sike, Angel, and Pyroken. Also to Pyroken, I actually appreciate your criticism here XD Those little things are so easy to spot for some, but not for me @-@ I'll fix them when I get ze chance.

There are plenty of real aspects of Satoshi's life in this, which I had to do some research to find out. It's not that difficult to find here on the net, however (I believe it was an interview from Pokemon Dream that provided some information). I won't say exactly what was real and what wasn't, but if you find out for yourselves, you'll see XD
 

Bay

YEAHHHHHHH
Hey Ches! All right now, here is my review for Chapter One.

This chapter is quite good. I like how this chapter put some realism in it. (Gets slap after forgetting this is suppose to be set in the real world). Also, the description here is real good.

Anyways, here are some quick highlights:
Mrs. Matsura then tore the glasses from her eyes, and carefully placed her face inside her clasped hands, and cried, right there, in front of the whole class. It made Satoshi and Ken terribly heart-broken; to see one of the greatest women in Tokyo brought down by something she could not fight. After all, Christianity was not the major religion, and surely, they would gain nothing from all the difficult work they had learned to achieve an excellent Christmas concert. The inevitable truth can often times be brutal. Once the poor woman had sniffled a few times, she withdrew a handkerchief and began wiping her face. She looked up at Satoshi Tajiri and Ken Sugimori, completely dejected and saddened.

“I don’t want you kids to come for choir tomorrow,” she said, tears welled in her eyes. “Or the next day, or the next day…I’m waving the white flag…there’s nothing we can do…”

“But Mrs. Matsura, you can’t give up so easily!” Satoshi exclaimed. “Without this class, I’m just…a kid who just can’t seem to make my grades meet. This is one of the only things I have left!”

“AND IS THAT MY FAULT? Where do you want to go?” the woman screamed at him, while the other students were dismissed from the class. “There is NO ONE in Japan that would like to see our concert. We would be a disgrace…I’m so stupid…just…get out.”

“But Mrs.—”

“I said, GET OUT.”

Dang, I would have never thought teachers can act like that! (Saying they are stupid I mean).

The older boy then relinquished his mighty grip on them, but instead, tossed them onto the concrete ground. Their faces slammed with great intensity onto the asphalt, scraping the skin on their faces to the point of burning, but they wasted no time in coming up with a reaction. They immediately scrambled to their feet, standing in front of their tormentor.

“I’ll teach you a lesson, about talking back to someone larger than yourself,” he said, laughing. They glared at him with a fiery anger, but before they could say one word, he threw his arm back and tossed his flying fist toward Ken’s face. Satoshi speedily lunged in front of Ken, blocking the blow from the older boy, and thrusting his very own white knuckles into the oppressor’s jaw. A slight crack came from it as it bounced to the other side of his skull, and he walked backward in shock. Satoshi panted with fury and wrath, unable to control his hatred for the older boy. The brawler clicked his jaw back into place, and gritted his teeth despicably at Satoshi. His eyes narrowed in vengeance.

Go Satoshi! Yeah, I was rooting for him. 0.o

Out of nowhere, a woman’s voice speared through the air, and the bully’s head twisted in the direction of which it came. Running from the door of the white building, Mrs. Matsura plowed across the lawns straight to the scene, releasing a flurry of curses and swears. As she and her violent scarlet dress strutted closer, the older boy fled across the street, jaywalking in front of a line of cars that had stopped at a green light. Their teacher ran with tension to the boys, whereas Ken came running to Satoshi. The boy ached in pain as he lied there hopelessly on the pavement, groaning as he struggled to breathe properly. Mrs. Matsura pursed her lips in dismay at the sight of her student lying there, beaten down by a cowardly fighter.

Yay, the emo depressed teacher saved the day! (Gets slap by the teacher by calling her emo, but later apoligize to her).


My mom converted to Baptism when she was older, because the nuns beat her hands with rulers.

I like this part. Reminds me of one of the "Simpsions" epsiodes.

“Satoshi,” Shang cried rather loudly, “what happened to your eye?”

Without thinking, Satoshi slapped his brother across the face, which frightened the little boy.

I know how that feels. My sister sometimes hit me if I made her very mad.

So far this story is getting good. Hope you put up more chapters soon!

(This has to be the wierdest review I had ever written so far)
 

katiekitten

The Compromise
Hurray! It's back! *happy dance*

Anways, as brilliant as it was before, Cheshire! The prologue is priceless, (I do not pay my researchers to have erections, Mr Nibley. XD) And the first chapter great as ever. *gives cookie*

I quite like the latin song at the beginning, it is quite effective, and is really quite lovely. ^.^ I quite like your characters, they seem quite nice, three dimensional. Which is great. :)

Highlights:

“Call the janitor and tell him we had vermin.”

Priceless. XD

Keep up teh good work, Cheshire! :)
 
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