Pokémon Extra

[Sportsplayer3]

Pokémon Extra

Pokémon Extra​

COMIC RATED PG-11 FOR MILD LANGUAGE AND STUFF THAT MAY BE INNAPROPIATE FOR YOUNG READERS.

[INTRODUCTION]
This is at least my tenth comic, but this one and another one (Team Shadow - T3h Comic) are the only ones I liked and continued.

Yes, I know this is a journey comic, but the comics I make that aren't journey comic pretty much stink.

[CHARACTERS]
This comic is a cliché journey comic with Brendan and May traveling throughout Hoenn. Professor Birch is the professor, and there are Camper's and Picknickers and stuff. BUT I also made some twist charachters. [SPOIL](Rapper Wally, Tyler, Nancy and a new gym leader ect.)[/SPOIL]

[PLOT]
Professor Birch needs to get as many trainers as he can (six) in order to get married with somebody. The trainers have to get to the pokémon league first in order for him to be heard. After the trainers select their starting pokémon, they decide to team up into pairs. They said that whoever gets to the pokémon league first gets 5,000,000 in cash. So they all agree and go off on a journey. And we get to see the stuff that happens to them. BUT, this comic isn't a joke every comic, comic. So this is just a warning to people out there.

[CRIT]
I know I need help on my comic, so post what I need to improve on. But please don't be harsh. I don't want a flamewar to start.

[UPDATING]
Please don't rush me on my updating. I'm an 11 year old with a huge social life. I'll try to make 2-4 comics a week.

[COMICS]
A Clichéd Beginning...Or Not?
Comic 1: Lumos
Comic 2: Money
Comic 3: Land
Comic 4: School
Comic 5: Present
Comic 6:Knock
Comic 7: Congruent: Under Construction
Comic 8: Past
Comic 9: Meatloaf
Comic 10: Dark
Comic 11: Discussion
Comic 12: Bed
Comic 13: Sick
Comic 14: Information
Comic 15: Blackthornsburrowmankey
Comic 16: Bored
Comic 17: Gangster
Comic 18: Confussion PG-13

[EXTRA]
Note: I started this comic back in January, 2006 so if you see a joke someone has used recently, I did not steal it.

Other Extra's will be shown soon.

[FAN STUFF]
I'll put your fan stuff here.

[CREDITS]
The Shuguy Kingdom for Brendan, May, and others.
Pokemonelite2000 for pokémon sprites.

I hope you enjoy my comic!

 

[Mutten jr]

Hah this is really funny. But try Doing the speech bubbles in order you would read them

 

[Matt Silver]

This is good (a bit cliched but who's comic isnt eh?)
Try fixing the bubles in the right order. Its funny. Keep it up.

 

[+Erin+]

class, eppi 8 is the best one

 

[Beco]

This comic is good, but can become much better.

- Like others said before, you need to give the speech bubbles another order, the order you use is confusing.
- Maybe it wasn't a good idea to use May and Brendan as main characters, that makes the story cliched
- I'd suggest to color the letters instead of the background of the speech bubbles.

Good luck

 

[Sportsplayer3]

Speechbubbles in order...Okay, I'll try to do that better.

This comic is good, but can become much better.

- Like others said before, you need to give the speech bubbles another order, the order you use is confusing.
- Maybe it wasn't a good idea to use May and Brendan as main characters, that makes the story cliched
- I'd suggest to color the letters instead of the background of the speech bubbles.

Good luck

1. read above.
2. I know, I know. I was just too lazy and picked them. But, most other characters are going to be different....That's why the title for this chapter is titled A Clichéd Beginning...Or Not?
3. I might do that...In a while maybe.

Well, anyway, I'll have a new comic up shortly...

BTW, thanks for the help Beco, and thanks for the comments +Erin+, Mattthegreat995, and Mutten jr.

EDIT: New Comic

 

[XxGreivousxX]

not really funny, childish humour, but foran 11 year old i would say this comic is preety damn good!

Pros
-No glitches
-Neat and Organized

Cons
-A journey comic
-Childish houmour

 

[Neopolis]

The comic is pretty good, but if it's supposed to be a humorous comic, work on that... It just wasn't funny. If it's not supposed to be funny, keep it up. Work on the speech bubbles, especially their tails. I kinda liked that clock-thing Brendan has.

@Greivous - Nothing wrong with a Journey comic, damnit -.-''

 

[XxGreivousxX]

actually damn is speeled right but if its used in "it" its dammit now damnit, neo yours comics are over 100 and they are still in what, rustbro? lol

 

[Sportsplayer3]

Thanks for the comments XxGreviousxX and Neopolis.

(I better change my speechbubbles all together)

New comic...Rated PG-13 for language.
Comic 18: Confussion

 

[Minun456]

Cool!Can't wait for the new ones!

 

[The first Buizeru]

I like it, but like it, its not funny though, if its supposed to be funny... work on it like Neopolis said, I liked the newest one though, lol

 

[Sportsplayer3]

I like it, but like it, its not funny though, if its supposed to be funny... work on it like Neopolis said, I liked the newest one though, lol

Yea, it's not going to be funny EVERY comic. Most comics are just going to be Drama/Seriousness and stuff. (The comic I made today was made to be funny)

I haven't started working on a new comic yet...so, I might put one up later today or tomarrow sometime.

Thanks for comments Minun456 and Chikorita III