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Pokémon - The Trick Master's Son!

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Pokefan64

Lets-a-go!
Pokémon - The Trick Master's Son!

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Well I made a comic about my made-up region (Grotaf), but it was too big, so they were really blurred. So I made a second one (which is the first I've posted) about the Trick Master's Son going on a Pokémon Journey. Please comment and tell me how I can improve but don't just post stuff like "yeah, it's good" or "it's rubbish", please say why.

Bios
^Yes, Harry's back sprite is rubbish ...

Well, here they are:

Comic 1 - The Beginning
Comic 2 - On one condition ...
Comic 3 - Challenge 1 (part 1)
Comic 4 - Challenge 1 (part 2)
Comic 5 - The Second Beginning!

More to come soon ...

Credit:
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The Spriters Resource
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If you use my stuff, I shall biff you
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No really, please don't use my comics, they can take a long time to make.

Constructive crit, please ... !

~Pokefan64;245;
 
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Uber

Teh Ubermasta
Speech bubbles mayhem. Make what you want to be said first above what it to be later said, or it's hard to read the comic.
 
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pharaohguy530

The one and only.
Its pretty good for 2 chapters. And I never would have believed the trick master had a son even though he doesn't in the real game. What I am sayin is that I can't wait for more. A tricky jr.....
 
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Neopolis

Battle Pyramid Champion
Why does Harry look nothing like his trainer sprite? Look at his shirt color and hair-style o_O

The Trick Master was always an original one. I can't think of anything to whine about, except maybe too much of the panel is shown. Only a small part is needed. Comic 1 won't load, so I can't rate that.
 
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Sequoia

Well-Known Member
Try making your speech bubbles bigger....It's a bit hard to see the words you're putting in.

Apart from that, I think this comic is original... :D I don't think anyone's actually done a comic that features the Trick Master, or his "son" for that matter. ^.^
 
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Pokefan64

Lets-a-go!
Okay, I'll try to make the speech bubbles bigger. Personally, I can work out what the text says, but maybe that's just me
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Comic 4 isn't finished yet, but it'll be ready soon.
~Pokefan64;245;
 
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Blaze Dragon

T3h Blazing Ranger!
I have a question: If he has only 1 Pokemon, and he used HM Cut, why the only Attacks of Pikachu are Growl,Tackle and Thundershock, but not Cut?
 
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Pokefan64

Lets-a-go!
Good point. I think the kind of idea was he used the actual HM that his Dad gave him, that you can't do in the actual game. Thanks for mentioning that, I'll think about it.
~Pokefan64;245;
 
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Sequoia

Well-Known Member
Pokefan64 said:
Good point. I think the kind of idea was he used the actual HM that his Dad gave him, that you can't do in the actual game. Thanks for mentioning that, I'll think about it.
~Pokefan64;245;
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So TMs would be literally one-use only? o_O Or can you re-use them....like HMs..

Keep up the good work ^.^
 
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Sequoia

Well-Known Member
Pokefan64 said:
Sorry I haven't updated for so long, I went away for Easter.

Comic 4 is now finished, and I've made the speech bubbles bigger:
Comic 4 - Challenge 1 (part 2)

~Pokefan64;245;
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o_O How come Oddish faints with half HP left after Pikachu Thundershocks it? Oddish is Grass, right?

xD It's much easier to see now. At least your words aren't squashing up against the borders.
 
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SamsGFX

<< May Is Sexci!
Nice, I like it a lot. xD
 
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Matt`

r u srs?
Ok, first of all, your speech bubbles are sometimes too small and crush the letters. Also in Comic 2 the order of your speech bubbles are messed up because it reads "Ye-es!" "If that's what you want, then I'll let you go" and "Cool!" "You can set off on ...".

Also,
1. I don't think anyone will steal you comic, so adding "Do not steal" is unnecessary (though the border is good :p) and it's not going to stop someone from stealing your comic
2. "What will happen next" or "Find out next issue" is unnecessary and is basically blank space
3. Using pikachu is one of the most cliche things in comic making

Overall, your comic has an original plot and good sprites, but there are some things that need work.
 
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