Pokefun

[Zac Rhodes]

My first comic, the story of Red, Blue, and Green made ms paint rated pg13
#1http://i73.photobucket.com/albums/i215/zac129/comic1.png
#2http://i73.photobucket.com/albums/i215/zac129/comic2.png
#3http://i73.photobucket.com/albums/i215/zac129/comic3.png



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credit
the spriters resource

 

[Pikachu & Bonsly master]

Where's the comic?

 

[mo_money]

i don't see anything wrong with it, the only thing that bothers me though is that this looks like a journey comic,but at least you had a reason(a funny one).

 

[Blaze Dragon]

The links doesn´t work

 

[Zac Rhodes]

Wow two replies already, I finnished the comic #2 "Psyco Killer"
and , mo_money my comic will not be like other journey comics it will be better.
the links work for me Blaze Dragon

 

[LGameboyR]

I like it it's funny, but if it's a cliche, I don't care, a comic is a comic, it's funny too!

 

[SoulGuardian]

My first comic, the story of Red, Blue, and Green made ms paint rated pg13
#1http://i73.photobucket.com/albums/i215/zac129/comic1.png
#2http://i73.photobucket.com/albums/i215/zac129/comic2.png

Yes, the links do work. Anyway, the comic is pretty good and I see that Red is trying to destroy everything cliche' around him. Also, you have HORRIBLE grammar and spelling so PLEASE improve on that. Do your best!^^

 

[Torchic23]

I like it! And I usually don't read these comic things, so I guess I was lucky to find a good one! It's pretty funny so far, continue!

 

[Zac Rhodes]

Yes, the links do work. Anyway, the comic is pretty good and I see that Red is trying to destroy everything cliche' around him. Also, you have HORRIBLE grammar and spelling so PLEASE improve on that. Do your best!^^

I am aware about my speeling and gammers[joke] but I don't know how to fix that problem because looking up each word that I don't know would take to long and thanks for all the kind words

 

[Tabby Catty]

so far you're off to an excellent start because you actually had a reason to go on a journey, you didn't go to the professor to get you pokemon, and you got an otherwise uncommon starter to end up with you are heading in the right direction

 

[Blaze Dragon]

It was my computer, now they work. Is funny by now, but a journey?

 

[OmegaDragon]

As others said, so far your on a right track, making this comic different from cliches. To fix spelling and grammar, I would suggest to spell check the script first before you put it into the comic.

 

[NEO GOHAN]

mo_money my comic will not be like other journey comics it will be better.

every journey comic says that. :/ few can live up to that promise.
at least the reason's a bit original. but lame. *1star'dforlamejourney*

 

[blueguy]

Uninspired, riddled with errors... Thumbs down... On the flipside it doesn't look too bad... it's just really poorly written.

 

[mo_money]

i don't really care about the grammar as long as i can read it,nice new eppi. btw.
i'm glad to see that this is not a "i'm old enough to go to the professor to get my first pokemon" comic.

 

[Zac Rhodes]

I understand the comments about the errors in spelling and grammer but do not say the comic's story is poorly written or cliche because there has only been two comic so far, I am realy poor at in spelling and grammer, wich I plan to fix.

 

[POKErUsAm]

I really think, if you keep the comic up, it will be very succesful.
It is very funny so far, but if you are on paint, then you might have trouble with battle scenes and stuff.

 

[blueguy]

I really think, if you keep the comic up, it will be very succesful.
It is very funny so far, but if you are on paint, then you might have trouble with battle scenes and stuff.

I make PokéChow with nothing but Paint. Battle scenes are quite simple. There are tutorials and everything if one is confused in the Fan Sprites forum. It's all a matter of looking around and putting some effort itn.

I understand the comments about the errors in spelling and grammer but do not say the comic's story is poorly written or cliche because there has only been two comic so far, I am realy poor at in spelling and grammer, wich I plan to fix.

I said nothing of clichés, but from what I have seen so far, your comic is poorly written. Even if your dialogue was perfectly grammatically correct it would still be clunky and odd.

 

[Zac Rhodes]

I said nothing of clichés, but from what I have seen so far, your comic is poorly written. Even if your dialogue was perfectly grammatically correct it would still be clunky and odd.

I didn't say you where the one who said anything about clichés, but you are right it is clunky and odd, something I need to work on.

 

[~Sirnight~]

It is looking good. Humorous, but make sure to stay away from any cliche'.