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Here is a fan fiction movie i am working on, critiques and reviews appreciated and welcome
The first part is the "commercial" that would preview the movie and the Second part (Opening of Movie) is the movie itself.
(Fade in from black with drums onto picture of Ash and Brock standing together)
Ash: “Something doesn’t feel right” (turns to look at Brock)
Brock: “I can feel it”
(Drums play while fade out to black with eerie music and then jump in to a white and purplish background with Arceus, Palkia, Dialga, Darkrai and Giratina in a semi-circle with Arceus at the head of the circle)
Arceus: “The time to cleanse (Switch picture to a scene with a forest background with wild Raticate, Oddish, and Pidgey
fleeing as Celebi continues to fight off Darkrai and Dialga as Darkrai uses Dark Void and Dialga uses Hyper Beam, with Celebi dodging Hyper Beam and Dark Void as Hyper Beam and Dark Void cause an explosion) this world is NOW" (Echo word NOW)
(Fade out to black with drums and then fade in to a picture of Team Galactic Headquarters, showing Cyrus standing, looking at a depiction of The Spear Pillar)
Cyrus: “Our new world order will soon open the gateway to the beyond (Close up on Spear Pillar), and this world will be destroyed”
(Fade out with drums, and then fade in to show a news report on TV)
News Reporter: “There are massive reports of Pokemon hysteria, all around the globe, but experts are clueless as to what this is causing this uproar!!”
(Switch picture to Professor Oak’s Lab with storm clouds and rumbling thunder being heard above in the sky)
Professor Oak: (shaking head, to himself) “I don’t understand this, there (bangs hand on table) has to be an explanation for all these strange occurrences”
(Fade out to black with drums and then jump to a shadowy figure on a white background, zooming in on the character’s head which only has red eyes visible)
Brosh: (chuckling) “This is the beginning of the end for the universe!!”
(Fade out to black with drums and then while playing drums, twirl in title of movie in bright yellow letters on an oceanic background with high waves churning around)
(Fade out title after 5 seconds and then fade out scene to black with drums ending abruptly then end commercial) Estimated LORT (Length of Run Time) 1 minute 15 seconds
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Ok everybody here is the dramatis persona list and the current script
(Fade in to scene of Ash, Brock and Dawn at a Pokémon Center in Lazarma City sitting at a booth with Brock reading from an article about a mysterious Pokémon appearing over Lake Valor.)
Brock: “It seems that the strange Pokémon described could have been Mespirit, the legendary being of emotion.” (Both Ash and Dawn exchange confused glances)
Dawn: “But Brock, no one has ever seen Mespirit, it has only been told in a legend. How can they be sure?”
Brock: “The report says about a mysterious Pokémon and Lake Valor is supposedly where Mespirit is, according to the legend of Sinnoh folklore.”
Ash: “Well why are we just sitting here, let’s go see if it’s true!” (Starts to get up)
Brock (putting hand up to stop Ash): “Hold it Ash, we’re not going out there to go on a ghost hunt, we’re going to wait here until Nurse Joy is finished examining our Pokémon.”
Ash: “Fine” (Sits back down and crosses arms)
Dawn (looking at Ash): “Have patience for once in your life Ash, sheesh”
Ash: “Well you try becoming a Pokémon Master, and then come find me.” (Looks out the windows and starts fidgeting)
Brock: “Think of it this way Ash, you can go chasing one thing and then lose sight of what you really want”
Ash: (mutters) “Well like it or not, I‘m sticking with it”
Nurse Joy: “Excuse me, Ash (Ash looks towards Nurse Joy as she approaches the group from behind the counter) but there is a call for you from Professor Oak.”
Ash: (Gets up and faces Nurse Joy) “Professor Oak? (Smiles) wonder what he’s got for me now.” (Ash goes to the videophone, as well as Dawn and
Brock with newspaper in hand, where a photo of Professor Oak is displayed on the videophone screen, Pikachu jumps onto Ash’s shoulder)
Ash: “Hi Professor Oak” (Pikachu says hello as well)
Professor Oak: (over videophone speaker) “Well hello Ash it’s always a pleasure to see you, and you too Pikachu, how are you two doing on your adventure thus far?”
Ash: (to picture of Professor Oak on screen) “Oh, it’s been totally awesome; I’m so psyched about what kind of people and Pokémon I can still meet!”
Professor Oak: (with smile) “Well, I’m glad to hear it; you’ve certainly come a very long way since you left Pallet Town.”
Brock and Dawn: (Stepping in on either side of Ash) “Hi, Professor Oak!”
Professor Oak: “Well hello Brock and Dawn, and how are you two coming along with your journeys?”
Brock and Dawn (at same time): “Excellent!”
Professor Oak: (With smile) “That’s what I like to hear! By the way Ash, the reason I’m calling is because I have something to send to you. I will be making my way to Sinnoh along with your mom to each give to the three of you.” (Ash, Brock and Dawn let out a slight gasp of shock)
Ash: “What kind of surprise?”
Professor Oak: “You’ll just have to wait and see for yourselves. Once I am settled, I will be in Twinleaf Town with Professor Rowan.”
Dawn: (With surprise and excitement) “When do you think you’ll be coming, Professor?”
Professor Oak: “Well Dawn, I would say within the next few days.”
Dawn: “Really! This is so cool, (To herself, excited) I get to finally meet him in the flesh!”
Ash: (looks at Dawn) “Wow, you really are psyched about meeting him!”
Dawn: (looks at Ash, with excitement) “Well of course! He’s just (pause) well he’s just awesome!”
Professor Oak: (with hand on back of head) “Well I‘m not sure about that Dawn, but I am flattered for the comment.”
Brock: “Excuse me Professor Oak, but have you heard anything about a news report of a strange Pokémon, possibly being Mespirit, the legendary being of emotion, being sighted over Lake Valor at all? (Shows newspaper to camera)
Professor Oak: (puts hand on chin, thinking) “Hmmmm I, have heard of a story or two like that from Professor Birch in Hoenn, as well as Professor Elm and Professor Ivy in Johto and Valencia, but nothing has reached me from Professor Rowan, Brock I would advise Professor Rowan of this right away, if he hasn’t been already.”
Brock: (to Professor Oak): “Yes right away Professor!” (Leaves to go to another videophone)
Dawn: (to Professor Oak) “What kinds of Pokémon have been discovered so far Professor?”
(Telephone noise heard in background of videophone screen)
Professor Oak: “Excuse me Dawn, I’ll answer your question at another time, I have to go. Take care everyone and I’ll see you soon.” (Videophone screen goes blank)
Dawn: (looking at Ash) “What kind of Pokémon do you think they discovered?”
Ash: “I don’t know, but if it’s got Professor Oak interested, it could be normal, but then again it could be rare too.”
Brock: (comes over to the right side of Ash and Dawn) “Well Professor Rowan was informed about the sighting, but his assistants are out at Lake Valor already investigating it and he’ll be joining them in about a day or so when he finishes his other tasks.”
Ash: "Great, this means we can have more time for some training."
Dawn: (looking at Ash) "Ash, hold on, we just got here, I think we should at least have some time to ourselves before we get back on track."
Ash: (To Dawn) “Well you had all that time in Snowpoint City to relax, and I’m (with fist help up) ready to get going!” (Pikachu agrees with Ash by offering a smile towards Dawn.)
Dawn: (To Ash) “Well, hey it’s not my fault that we needed supplies and that you had a Gym battle too you know!”
Ash: "Well hey if m ever going to become the Sinnoh Champ, i need all 8 badges you know!"
Brock: (getting between both of them) "I think it's about time you two put that aside and concentrate on what we're here for."
Critiques and reviews appreciated
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My "Notebook"
In ths section you'll find ideas and such for ideas to thoughts to random aspects of the script and "movie" itself that i am thinking of editing, adding in, taking out. So this section will be devoted to those ideas.
Here is a fan fiction movie i am working on, critiques and reviews appreciated and welcome
The first part is the "commercial" that would preview the movie and the Second part (Opening of Movie) is the movie itself.Commercial for Pokémon: Arceus and the Legend of Light
Opening Scene
(Fade in from black with drums onto picture of Ash and Brock standing together)
Ash: “Something doesn’t feel right” (turns to look at Brock)
Brock: “I can feel it”
(Drums play while fade out to black with eerie music and then jump in to a white and purplish background with Arceus, Palkia, Dialga, Darkrai and Giratina in a semi-circle with Arceus at the head of the circle)
Arceus: “The time to cleanse (Switch picture to a scene with a forest background with wild Raticate, Oddish, and Pidgey
fleeing as Celebi continues to fight off Darkrai and Dialga as Darkrai uses Dark Void and Dialga uses Hyper Beam, with Celebi dodging Hyper Beam and Dark Void as Hyper Beam and Dark Void cause an explosion) this world is NOW" (Echo word NOW)
(Fade out to black with drums and then fade in to a picture of Team Galactic Headquarters, showing Cyrus standing, looking at a depiction of The Spear Pillar)
Cyrus: “Our new world order will soon open the gateway to the beyond (Close up on Spear Pillar), and this world will be destroyed”
(Fade out with drums, and then fade in to show a news report on TV)
News Reporter: “There are massive reports of Pokemon hysteria, all around the globe, but experts are clueless as to what this is causing this uproar!!”
(Switch picture to Professor Oak’s Lab with storm clouds and rumbling thunder being heard above in the sky)
Professor Oak: (shaking head, to himself) “I don’t understand this, there (bangs hand on table) has to be an explanation for all these strange occurrences”
(Fade out to black with drums and then jump to a shadowy figure on a white background, zooming in on the character’s head which only has red eyes visible)
Brosh: (chuckling) “This is the beginning of the end for the universe!!”
(Fade out to black with drums and then while playing drums, twirl in title of movie in bright yellow letters on an oceanic background with high waves churning around)
(Fade out title after 5 seconds and then fade out scene to black with drums ending abruptly then end commercial) Estimated LORT (Length of Run Time) 1 minute 15 seconds
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Ok everybody here is the dramatis persona list and the current script
Dramatis Persona
- Ash: (Male, Age 18, Main Character, Protagonist)
- Brock: (Male, Age 20, Main Character)
- Dawn: (Female, Age 13, Main Character)
- Gary: (Male, Age 18, Main Character)
- Max: (Male, Age 12, Main Character)
- May: (Female, Age 16, Main Character)
- Misty: (Female, Age 19, Main Character)
- Brosh: (Male, Age 18, Main Character)
- Team Galactic Leader Cyrus: (Male, Age 48, Main Character, Antagonist)
- Team Galactic Commander Saturn: (Male, Age 39, Main Character)
- Team Galactic Grunts: (Male and Female, Ages 20-35, Minor Characters)
- Tracey: (Male, Age 21, Main Character)
- Battle Pyramid King Brandon: (Male, Age 43, Main Character)
- Pokémon Hunter J: (Female, Age 32, Main Character)
- Pokémon Sinnoh League Champion Cynthia: (Female, Age 32, Main Character)
- Pokémon Hunter Grunts: (Male, Ages 20-45, Secondary Characters)
- Professor Oak: (Male, Age 52, Secondary Character)
- Professor Elm: (Male, Age 44, Secondary Character)
- Professor Rowan: (Male, Age 51, Secondary Character)
- Professor Birch: (Male, Age 41, Secondary Character)
- Professor Felina Ivy: (Female, Age 39, Secondary Character)
- Team Rocket Boss Giovanni: (Male, Age 44, Secondary Character)
- Team Rocket Member Jesse (Female, Age 34, Secondary Character)
- Team Rocket Member James (Male, Age 32, Secondary Character)
- Team Rocker Member Pokémon Meowth: (Male, Age 43, Secondary Character)
- Team Rocket Member Butch: (Male, Age 36, Secondary Character)
- Team Rocket Member Cassidy: (Female, Age 35, Secondary Character)
- Nurse Joy: (Female, Age 39, Minor Character)
- Officer Jenny: (Female, Age 40, Minor Character)
- Delia (Ash’s Mom): (Female, Age 38, Minor Character)
- Cheerleaders: (Female, Ages 17-18, Minor Character)
- News Reporters (Male and Female, Ages 25-45, Minor Characters)
Opening of Movie
(Fade in to scene of Ash, Brock and Dawn at a Pokémon Center in Lazarma City sitting at a booth with Brock reading from an article about a mysterious Pokémon appearing over Lake Valor.)
Brock: “It seems that the strange Pokémon described could have been Mespirit, the legendary being of emotion.” (Both Ash and Dawn exchange confused glances)
Dawn: “But Brock, no one has ever seen Mespirit, it has only been told in a legend. How can they be sure?”
Brock: “The report says about a mysterious Pokémon and Lake Valor is supposedly where Mespirit is, according to the legend of Sinnoh folklore.”
Ash: “Well why are we just sitting here, let’s go see if it’s true!” (Starts to get up)
Brock (putting hand up to stop Ash): “Hold it Ash, we’re not going out there to go on a ghost hunt, we’re going to wait here until Nurse Joy is finished examining our Pokémon.”
Ash: “Fine” (Sits back down and crosses arms)
Dawn (looking at Ash): “Have patience for once in your life Ash, sheesh”
Ash: “Well you try becoming a Pokémon Master, and then come find me.” (Looks out the windows and starts fidgeting)
Brock: “Think of it this way Ash, you can go chasing one thing and then lose sight of what you really want”
Ash: (mutters) “Well like it or not, I‘m sticking with it”
Nurse Joy: “Excuse me, Ash (Ash looks towards Nurse Joy as she approaches the group from behind the counter) but there is a call for you from Professor Oak.”
Ash: (Gets up and faces Nurse Joy) “Professor Oak? (Smiles) wonder what he’s got for me now.” (Ash goes to the videophone, as well as Dawn and
Brock with newspaper in hand, where a photo of Professor Oak is displayed on the videophone screen, Pikachu jumps onto Ash’s shoulder)
Ash: “Hi Professor Oak” (Pikachu says hello as well)
Professor Oak: (over videophone speaker) “Well hello Ash it’s always a pleasure to see you, and you too Pikachu, how are you two doing on your adventure thus far?”
Ash: (to picture of Professor Oak on screen) “Oh, it’s been totally awesome; I’m so psyched about what kind of people and Pokémon I can still meet!”
Professor Oak: (with smile) “Well, I’m glad to hear it; you’ve certainly come a very long way since you left Pallet Town.”
Brock and Dawn: (Stepping in on either side of Ash) “Hi, Professor Oak!”
Professor Oak: “Well hello Brock and Dawn, and how are you two coming along with your journeys?”
Brock and Dawn (at same time): “Excellent!”
Professor Oak: (With smile) “That’s what I like to hear! By the way Ash, the reason I’m calling is because I have something to send to you. I will be making my way to Sinnoh along with your mom to each give to the three of you.” (Ash, Brock and Dawn let out a slight gasp of shock)
Ash: “What kind of surprise?”
Professor Oak: “You’ll just have to wait and see for yourselves. Once I am settled, I will be in Twinleaf Town with Professor Rowan.”
Dawn: (With surprise and excitement) “When do you think you’ll be coming, Professor?”
Professor Oak: “Well Dawn, I would say within the next few days.”
Dawn: “Really! This is so cool, (To herself, excited) I get to finally meet him in the flesh!”
Ash: (looks at Dawn) “Wow, you really are psyched about meeting him!”
Dawn: (looks at Ash, with excitement) “Well of course! He’s just (pause) well he’s just awesome!”
Professor Oak: (with hand on back of head) “Well I‘m not sure about that Dawn, but I am flattered for the comment.”
Brock: “Excuse me Professor Oak, but have you heard anything about a news report of a strange Pokémon, possibly being Mespirit, the legendary being of emotion, being sighted over Lake Valor at all? (Shows newspaper to camera)
Professor Oak: (puts hand on chin, thinking) “Hmmmm I, have heard of a story or two like that from Professor Birch in Hoenn, as well as Professor Elm and Professor Ivy in Johto and Valencia, but nothing has reached me from Professor Rowan, Brock I would advise Professor Rowan of this right away, if he hasn’t been already.”
Brock: (to Professor Oak): “Yes right away Professor!” (Leaves to go to another videophone)
Dawn: (to Professor Oak) “What kinds of Pokémon have been discovered so far Professor?”
(Telephone noise heard in background of videophone screen)
Professor Oak: “Excuse me Dawn, I’ll answer your question at another time, I have to go. Take care everyone and I’ll see you soon.” (Videophone screen goes blank)
Dawn: (looking at Ash) “What kind of Pokémon do you think they discovered?”
Ash: “I don’t know, but if it’s got Professor Oak interested, it could be normal, but then again it could be rare too.”
Brock: (comes over to the right side of Ash and Dawn) “Well Professor Rowan was informed about the sighting, but his assistants are out at Lake Valor already investigating it and he’ll be joining them in about a day or so when he finishes his other tasks.”
Ash: "Great, this means we can have more time for some training."
Dawn: (looking at Ash) "Ash, hold on, we just got here, I think we should at least have some time to ourselves before we get back on track."
Ash: (To Dawn) “Well you had all that time in Snowpoint City to relax, and I’m (with fist help up) ready to get going!” (Pikachu agrees with Ash by offering a smile towards Dawn.)
Dawn: (To Ash) “Well, hey it’s not my fault that we needed supplies and that you had a Gym battle too you know!”
Ash: "Well hey if m ever going to become the Sinnoh Champ, i need all 8 badges you know!"
Brock: (getting between both of them) "I think it's about time you two put that aside and concentrate on what we're here for."
Critiques and reviews appreciated
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My "Notebook"
In ths section you'll find ideas and such for ideas to thoughts to random aspects of the script and "movie" itself that i am thinking of editing, adding in, taking out. So this section will be devoted to those ideas.
- Possibly toying with adding in Mr. Stone, and Steven Stone as Minor or Secondary characters, but am not sure of thier roles at this time
- Thinking of adding in a "suprise attack" on Pikachu from Team Rocket after the current scene develops more, but unsure as to what kind of "suprise" it will be at this time
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