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Pokemon Chao: Legandary Massacre

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Imperial Flygon

My asparagus Burns!!
I promise that i am not going to make any other comic unless this one does goes for a good shot. This comic is about 3 of the legandary birds, Articuno Zapdos and Moltres on what happens when they are in Chao forms. Please Tip on how good or bad the comic is the comic. Also, Photo Shaop is hard for me so thst is why the back ground is messy.

Prologue
Comic 1
Start of Neo legandary
Comic 2
Comic 3
Comic 4
Comic 5 PT1
Comic 5 PT2
 
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Tip The Waitress

Nooo! I'm too young!
Not very suspenseful...
 
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Imperial Flygon

My asparagus Burns!!
I wasn't trying to make it suspense at that comic. Atleast i got a post
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Divine_Light

Espeon will own all!
Looks good but shouldn't all 3 legendary birds be fighting and then lugia comes, you have to make a proluge and then the comic, all i'm gonna say is Watch This Space, I'll be watchin :)
 
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Modem X

Oh Snap....
Dude if you do not make it suspenceful and original call me a hipocryte if you may it's going to be like aw piss on it comics. Sorry
Ross
 
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Modem X

Oh Snap....
Their an improvement but like I said make it original not like OMFG33LugiaisheretoPwnallofusn00bs!!!!!!1111@@@@ HONESTLEY that was done in the year 2000 I can't believe some retarts think thats the turn of the milenium anyway make original.
Ross
P.S.
I don't care if you hate me or not just execute the bloody plan.
 
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Neopolis

Battle Pyramid Champion
Punctuation is your friend. Use commas, full stops, and question marks.

The sprites look really strange, they keep on changing as they turn... The story is... Well, the fact of having the 3 birds as main characters is original, but the idea of an evil knid of Pokémon trying to exterminate the real ones, one way or another, that's not original. Neither is 4th wall breaking (I'll destroy you next panel!) or exclaiming actions in text bubbles (*pain*). You could've done something like: "Damnit, that hurt!". Oh yes, and the attack effects look horrible.

But you get bonus points for using Articuno and shinies <_<
 
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Imperial Flygon

My asparagus Burns!!
Neopolis said:
Punctuation is your friend. Use commas, full stops, and question marks.

The sprites look really strange, they keep on changing as they turn... The story is... Well, the fact of having the 3 birds as main characters is original, but the idea of an evil knid of Pokémon trying to exterminate the real ones, one way or another, that's not original. Neither is 4th wall breaking (I'll destroy you next panel!) or exclaiming actions in text bubbles (*pain*). You could've done something like: "Damnit, that hurt!". Oh yes, and the attack effects look horrible.

But you get bonus points for using Articuno and shinies <_<
Click to expand...

I was gonna but i thought it be decent enough to say what i put but i'll take your advice and do what you said.
 
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Imperial Flygon

My asparagus Burns!!
Well here is a Long 2pt special.And yes Neopolis, I'll put my Punctuation marks at a good time like in your comics(wich is good by the way).
Comic 5 PT1

and

Comic 5 PT2
 
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Neopolis

Battle Pyramid Champion
Why is Lugia married? It's Genderless! o_O And I don't get how Moltres (Or XD003 or something) broke in two pieces with a perfectly vertical line without anything else happening before it. Also, still work on the special effects. You impresove on puncuation a bit though.
 
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pokeinuyasha

:D!
Well, I like it, but you need to work on grammar and puntuaction. Use all Neopolis tips, and you will be a nice comic maker ^^
 
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