Ah, my mistake. The Scyther Jack caught isn't called Blitz... he's called Gash (although only by Static and Jack) And he was captured back in Chapter 14, I believe... during Celadon.
Other than that, my point still stands. What on earth happened to him?
“Careful, Sceadon. This is Mike’s first Pokémon.” Jack watched as Mike widened his stance, ready for the final act. Simultaneously, the Sceptile moved into the same position without a backwards glance. The reptile’s eyes glinted. And then, he was gone.
I've really loved this, since being the lucky 7th unique poster =P It's been a great journey so far and I can't wait for the rewrite. To spend so long working on this world of your own is an amazing thing, and wishing you the best for finishing it off. Although, gotta say, I was hoping there'd be more in the chapter than the battle. You described it well and made it pretty realistic, although I probably wouldn't have expected Jack to do as well against Mike as he did. Some dramatic flair in there, which was good =)
As for the chapter.
I really did enjoy the battle it was fluid and fast-paced, the description was good as I could vividly imagine the battle happening before my eyes. I forgot you don't sugarcoat injuries and the like. The outcome may have been a little predictable, by which no means is bad. I enjoyed this chapter, and can't wait to read the rest.
I apoligize for this being short, can't really think of way to help you improve. So with that, I have enjoyed this series this far and most likely will continue too. It will be intresting to see what your rereleases entail (how you have changed your tastes over the years, and will make it better or more concise), and how this story goes on and then ends.