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Pokemon Fiore EX Manga Summary

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Abyraria

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Hello every one.
I have decided to write my fan fiction in the style of Coronis's Manga Summarys.
If you have any critasisms do tell as long as there constructive.

EX1 VS Plusle

A storm is brewing over Fiore. In the dark interior of a lorry a group of people in blue uniforms sit and stand. At the back a young woman is pouring over a crumbling book with the help of her Lanturn's fin lure. In the front of the lorry an Octillery steers with it's tentacles while it's owner a youngish man with spicky blond hair and a styalized skull and cross bones tatto on his left arm seats and looks at the drawing of an ancient map on his lap top.

In the raria forrest a young man with bleached blond hair and a dazzaling smile looks up at Swinub nestled in the top branchs of a nearby tree too terrified to move. Smilling calmly he reasures the young boy next to him that Swinub will be fine. The boy says nothing but looks up at his petrified Swinub. Winking the blond haried man who's name is Jake sends out his Dragonite George and orders it to use a Wing attack to flush out pokemon hiding in the bushs. The boy's worried expresion vanishes and he looks on in wonder as the huge dragons cuases the bushes to shake with the beating of it's masive wings. A swarm of Spinarks and Parass surge out of the wind blown bush. Taking out his capture Stylus Jake temporeraly catchs a Ariados with ease. Jake orders a Spider Web attack followed by a Stringshot. The Ariados uses it's Spider Web to cover Swinub in webs and reels it in using stringshot. Jake grins, tears the remains of the webbing off of the frighted hog pokemon and passes it back the boy.
Cuddling the little Swinub in his arms the boy thanks Jake for rescuing his beloved pet. Jake laughs and says he would be much of a ranger if he did'nt. Just then the pokenav like device in Jake's pocket beginns to beep. Ignoring it Jake turns to the boy and apolozies saying that he would stay and that but he is needed urgently in Ring town how ever he hopes that the boy and his Swinub stay safe and have a good time. The boy and the little hog pokemon watch in awe as Jake flys of into the distance on his Dragonite.

Flying high over Fiore Jake looks down across the forests below and thinks how much he loves this place. and how proud he is to protect it. Patting his Dragonite on the head he points south and urges it to fly on to ring town.

In Ring town a girl with blue hair and a bandanna is watching the sky with her Plusle for Jake's arival, when she spots his Dragonite flying towards them in the distance she lets out a cry of indignation and rushs in to the nearby building.
Jake's Dragonite gracefuly decends onto the lawn outside the new looking building. Jake is greeted by a young man with iron grey hair standing in the doorway. Jake greets the man, Spensor and asks him what is so important as to call him back from his holiday, is'nt Ranger. Net satisfied with his work?.
Spenser smiles and shakes his head saying that Ranger. Net belive Jake to be with out a doubt the finest ranger in the country. This remark causes the girl behind Spenser to sweat drop and scawl at Jake who apears not to notice her. Noticing the look on the girls face Spenser hurridly exclaims to Jake the it was infact the Pokemon Asociation what needed his help. The girl who's name is Hana glares while the Plusle on her shoulder looks aprehensivly at the storm clouds on the horizion. Jake smiles at Hana and fliks his hair back which antagonises her even more.
Noticing the dark clouds and the anger between the two rangers growing Spenser sugests they go inside and he will explain every thing around the while they sit in the warm. Jake follows Spenser into the building quickly glad to get out of the way of the oncomming storm. Hana stands for a while staring at the ominus clouds untill she too heads into the building and closes the door.
Out in the stormy sea of Fiore a blue light flikers below the surface...
 

Yami Ryu

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I have decided to write my fan fiction in the style of Coronis's Manga Summarys.

Everyone say this with me;

Manga Summary =/= Chapter

Got it? Understand it? Good.

This was beyond rushed. Comma's and periods are absent/missing, leaving this long winded in places, or without a slight pause that would be graced if a comma had been thrown in here or there. Or even a period.

Summary is not a Chapter.

And a BAD summary is even worse. Even the GUIDES and SUMMARIES give more information than this did! This is Beyond rushed, I am going to now say. This is written up in the reply box rushed. Go read RULES AND ADVICE FOR ASPIRING AUTHORS.
 

Yami Ryu

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... chapter length for Fanfic section is a minimum of 3 pages.

Manga Summary =/= Chapter

DO YOU HEAR ME NOW?

SERIOUSLY!

Summaries are not chapters! Manga Summaries are not fics! If you don't want to put effort into reading all of the advice I threw out at you, nor take your rear to RULES and ADVICE FOR ASPIRING AUTHORS- you are going to have ALOT of closed threads if you continue to post crap like this :/
 

CWisgood

Coral Eye Trainer
Well, I find it easier to take money from the bank than work for my own, but that doesn't make it legal, does it?

THREE PAGES is the minimum for a chapter. Coronis wasn't writing fanfics, so his summaries can be any length he wants (although Joe might have something to say if he did :p ).

And once more,

Manga Summary =/= Chapter

Get it? =/
 

Abyraria

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As i said again I will add many more doing it in small install ments helps break it up.

I would be interested to know the exact amounts of wording in the mangas as most of the points are ilustrated by pictures (They still would be a lot longer than mine though I do'nt think some would make 3 pages)

Allso I would like to ask the people who post not to use bold/ inlarged lettering (by all means use captitals) I find it rather anoying to the eye. Ofcourse i can only ask this politley and hope people comply I can not in any way influence your posting.

Thank you for your opions though
 
They're doing it for a reason because you are simply not listening.

ONE CHAPTER = 3 PAGES OR JUST UNDER, MINIMUM.

Not "Oh I find shorter eaiser", not "I'm too lazy to write much", not "I can't be bothered to use a word program".

If you can't stick to the most basic of rules so you can post of a remotely reasonable quality then why at all? All I see is a giant block of text with a ew paragraphs, not anything that could be remotely noted as a proper written piece of work.

Read Advive for Aspiring Authors. Read the Fanfiction Rules. Read a book/quality fanfiction. They are summarised for a reason as it is illegal to scan and show the orignal manga works, you've just amde up material which is virtually unreadable to all but yourself.

Time to listen, not excuse make.

Sandra
 
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