Pokemon - Kanto Region

[Hazzer]

Pokmon - Kanto Region​

This a Comic about this boy named charlie and his adventure around the REgion of Kanto.His story begins at his house in pallet town.If you are foing to say something about me or the comic,please try not to be that rude, say your thing.​

THE BEGINING
Comic 1
Comic 2


Credit:
Vgmaps
Pokemon Elite 2000




Thanks for reading
HAZZER;009;

 

[Chinese Teletubbie]

Wel there were a few grammer mistakes and as usaul its a boring adventure comic. But this was only the first comic so I'll judge it after a few more

 

[Divine_Light]

It needs more pannels imo, same old, same old, every one either does kanto, johto or hoenn why don't people make new regions, new pokemon, new characters, Please don't make this like every other boring normal comic adventure, Please make it exciting

 

[Pokefan64]

*Off topic - please give credit to me for the banner in your sig, Hazzer.*

*On topic:*

Good Points:

-The speech bubbles are big enough to be able to see what's in them.
-It's got good spriting.

[I know there are more good points, don't feel that you are being got at.]

Bad Points

-As the others have said, it looks like it's going to be a boring journey comic, BUT there could be a twist, like I did in my first comic.
-Grammar, capital letters etc.
-In the last frame, it looks like Charlie is running away from the girl's offer of a bike voucher - you could add a speech bubble saying something like "Okay, thanks.".
-The characters aren't exactly in the right squares.
-The characters are old, maybe you could make your own.
-We don't know who the girl is, Charlie could say "Okay, thanks ___" depending on the name.

A lot of these will probably be revealed, it's just that one comic doesn't reveal much, so sorry if they are going to be shown.

BTW, where did you get the sprites from? You need to give credit.

I won't rate it yet since there is only one, but as there is more, I'll get a rating.

I hope this helps!

~Pokefan64;245;

 

[shadowofdreams]

good comic, just add a little more.

 

[Hazzer]

ok
i've thought of a twist and will be adding it later on in the comic
Also i will give credit(thanks for reminding me)
And i might make my own people since you said it.
Anyway
Thank you for your comments
*scuttles off to make some more comics&*
~Hazzer;009;

 

[Pokefan64]

Are you going to make Comic 3? I want to see what happens!
~Pokefan64;245;

 

[Hazzer]

I am Going to ask a MOD to Close this.
Its rubbish
Bye Bye.

 

[ForeverFlame]

You can't call it rubbish, even if it is very unoriginal, and needs work. You shouldn't quit on these things! But I guess it's your choice...