Pokemon: Kraaten

[~Phanpy~]

Hi everyone, I am new here and here is a comic I have been developing, called Pokemon Kraaten. It has been developed by me, and is made of a new world called Kraaten, as the title suggests. It will have a few changes to the other Pokemon series though, but I won't spoil it yet!

Episode 1: A Tour of Pereniel Valley​

 

[Nick Mckenzie]

I get first post. To criticise with.(This is becoming somewhat of a Strong Bad E-mail ripoff, as I always type something before I get serious.
1. Cliche. BIG cliche.
2. Bad recolors.
How the hell did you get the name?(this isn't a plus or minus)
4. At the top, the Oak/Beauty mix is horrible. I'll be having nightmares
tonight.
5. When "Cinder" is coming out of the Pokeball, it looks like a Zapdos.
1. This is an extra, a Plus. There's no spelling mistakes!
6. "And this is her work, Fossil Co." Uh, baaad grammar.
I'll wait for the next comic. You might want to put some humor in as well.

 

[.:Tremolo:.]

I thought it was pretty good. But somewhat of what Nick Mckenzie said.

 

[Euphoria]

Jeez, Nick Mckenzie. I mean the comic isn't wonderful, but its also not that bad either. Making comics that appeal to a large audience isn't that easy. You don't have to be so harsh.

Anyways, ~Phanpy~, I do agree with Nick to some extent, you need to work on the humour (if that's what you were intending), and fix the recolours and there are a few grammar mistakes. Other than that, it's pretty good. Nice clean layout, and good speech bubbles and text. The maps look pretty decent aswell. I'll be watching.

 

[.:Tremolo:.]

Jeez, Nick Mckenzie. I mean the comic isn't wonderful, but its also not that bad either. Making comics that appeal to a large audience isn't that easy. You don't have to be so harsh.

Anyways, ~Phanpy~, I do agree with Nick to some extent, you need to work on the humour (if that's what you were intending), and fix the recolours and there are a few grammar mistakes. Other than that, it's pretty good. Nice clean layout, and good speech bubbles and text. The maps look pretty decent aswell. I'll be watching.

You call this:

I get first post. To criticise with.(This is becoming somewhat of a Strong Bad E-mail ripoff, as I always type something before I get serious.
1. Cliche. BIG cliche.
2. Bad recolors.
3. How the hell did you get the name?
4. At the top, the Oak/Beauty mix is horrible. I'll be having nightmares
tonight.
5. When "Cinder" is coming out of the Pokeball, it looks like a Zapdos.
1. This is an extra, a Plus. There's no spelling mistakes!
6. "And this is her work, Fossil Co." Uh, baaad grammar.
I'll wait for the next comic. You might want to put some humor in as well.

harsh?

 

[Flygon]

Work on those recolours, maybe even make a sprite with the "doll"* in the sprite tutorials if you want.

*= The term "doll" is copyright os MS. So, um, you want money from me, MS, or what?

 

[Euphoria]

You call this:


harsh?

Yeah, I do.

 

[Eglice]

I thought Cinder when he was coming out was a fearrow atacking her >.<

 

[Pokefan26]

The sprites are recolored bad.
What Nick McKenzie said.

 

[~Phanpy~]

trying to create own sprites. will repost comic soon hopefully!

~Phanpy~

 

[Nick Mckenzie]

trying to create own sprites. will repost comic soon hopefully!

~Phanpy~

Yay, I'm getting popular
I think this is a veeerrryy average comic, but it's better than some. Maybe you might not want to create your own sprites, though. There's nothing wrong with using normal game sprites.

 

[~Phanpy~]

here's some sprites i made for kelly. i will re do everyone else who is in/going to be in the comic, and then repost.

~Phanpy~

 

[lil gangsta]

 

[lil gangsta]

Check out my sprite

you can have it if you want

 

[lil gangsta]

:025n172: weeee

 

[Carpetted!]

No one saw the uncoloured corner of the pokecenter?
The mixes are somewhat bad, and the words just don't flow.
Still, pretty good.