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Pokemon legends :Joeen Journys

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dnglover25

Hikari Trainer
hope you like my FF and even if you don't please reply

Pokemon Masters Chp 1

pika pika pika my pichu alarm went.
it was 12:00 I overslept!
My mom or sister didn't wake me and I had to get my pokemon ID card!
I turned 13 yesterday so I am know legal to be a pokemon trainer.
I had two pokemon though since I was one.
Treecko Torchic lets go! I picked up two red and white pokeballs and threw them against the wall.
A green pokemon emerged from one then a red small pokemon emerged from the other.
I left my room to see my sister watching pokemon and my mom cooking eggs.
your cooking eggs at 12:00 and you didn't wake me up I missed getting my ID and poke dex and getting a another starting pokemon!

Shut up big bro I’m watching pokemon and it's a new one! I said wait Pokemon comes on at 9.
It does sweetie it's 9, my mom began. I was going to wake you up now.
oh sorry I’m going to get ready for 11.
Treecko tree! I know I said that was close!
I sat down and watched pokemon with my sister Anissa and my two pokemon. Here's your eggs my mom said. I could see my mom's face wet. Mom what's wrong. I'm gonna..I'm going to miss my baby.She began to cry more. Mom, i began- don't kris just don't i want you to have fun with your life that's why when you showed so much intrests as a baby to pokemon i got you treecko and torchic. Thanks mom. wel i gotta go. She gave me a Camp ball. Kris this stores your cloths and tents okay. Okay mom. Bye sis. Bye kris. I was off to my pokemon adventure

Chp 1 's pokemon ;258;
 
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dnglover25

Hikari Trainer
Chp 2 Oaka's Lab all trainers Meet!

I live in the JEONN region in Everglaze city.
Your adventure starts and ends here you get your starters here and face the 8th gym leader.
at 10:48 I left down the street to Prof Oak’s daughters lab. Hey Prof Oaka! Hey Kris your late it was at 10:30!
Dang it I thought but some people waited for you I saw Michael my arch rival and a girl I had a crush on Cassie. I knew he liked Cassie and we knew she liked one of us. you 2 are going on the journey together said sadly? I don't wanna face gym leaders Cassie said I wanna go on a journey with you she said!
My face lit up I had forgot! I was waiting with her, Michael said I gotta go by! I totally forgot I promised Cassie she can go with me. Bye Michael who did you get though? You'll see he said and Oaka you can't tell him! Bye Cassie.
Here Oaka said since you have the other 2 pokemon and I have the last Wurmple to Cassie here’s your Mudkip, Poke dex, trainer card id, Fusion dex and Poke Nav. good luck at the Live root gym! okay I said back off the Live root town!
My mom and Sis where out side Bye Kris!
After the love feast it was onto my journey! Me and Cassie where off into the Root woods where our journey turns sour


300 pokemon and counting 8 gym leaders and my journey was just begging!

My pokemon
Torchic
Treecko
Mudkip

Cassie’s pokemon
Wurmple
 

dnglover25

Hikari Trainer
CHP 3 Close encounters of the Snesal kind
we traveled though the Root woods and we became lost! check the poke Nav, Cassie Snapped. If there’s a bridge go jump off it I snapped back! She ran off in tears. what have I done? I ran after her but as I started to run got stuck in a Wurmple web! I could hear the Wurmple in a branch above me.
Cassie was far away running when poke ball fell from her pocket. and rolled away.
I got out the web when I heard Snesal sne! A Snesal attacked with fury swipes right at me! Treecko popped out his poke ball and used Safe guard.

Move it you over grown weed the Snesal insulted!
What you can talk I said?!?
Yep take after me old pops Meowth me moms the strongest Snesal ya ever see if ye ask me but right now 100% chance I’ll be ye last Snesal ye see ye hear?!?!
Ye crazy I said yet cool!
Snesal swiped at me but Treecko use tackle on him.
I got in back off the tree and called Cassie Via Poke Nav.
Hello you've reached Cassie Jones and I can't come to the Nav right know please leave the message after the beep. oh and by the way Kris is a - beep the poke Nav went.
Cassie I know you hate me right now but I’m under attack by a talking Snesal no joke!!!
Cassie read the message instantly she purposely didn't answer the phone and was hoping to go meet up with Michael. Liar she said hearing the message. Liar.
 

dnglover25

Hikari Trainer
Chp 4 The Wurmple Scruple
Liar Liar! she said!
Snesal’s coming for you a voice said but it wasn't Kris. then there was a crash and static!
What that wasn't Kris! He...He.... wasn't lying!
Cassie reached into her back pocket. Go Wurmple... wait my poke ball must of fell out when I ran away from Kris.
Cassie began to retrace her steps. Mur Murkrow. Two Murkrow and one has my poke boff. In no time Cassie was back where she started right by where she ran from Kris. Kris! Kris! where are you. Then the Snesal saw her and things got worse.
Another twerp he said. Snesal sne! Snesal charged at Cassie but then, bullet seed
Kris that Murkrow has Wurmple! Cassie there's three Murkrow
all! Hey crow face give me that ball! the Murkrow took
 

dnglover25

Hikari Trainer
Chp 5- The Murkrow, the trainers and a Snesal

Go Mudkip and Torchic!
Mud mu. Tor tor chic!
now water gun and ember on the Murkrow.
Murkrow doge with Aerial Ace.
Torchic no!
Kris who said that?!? then to people came out of the bushes. There was a girl with long Blue hair and a guy with short spiky hair.
Get ready for trouble-Girl
and make it a new generation of it- Boy
Jessica-girl
Jamie- boy
To Cosmos soars at the speed of light- Both
Snesal that’s right
Kris what is happening and why don't they give me my Wurmple back!
A Wurmple we caught!!! How weak, Jessica said. Go Dustox.
But look at those other three pokemon, Jamie said! Go Cancena!
Dus Dus Can ce ce ce.
Where the merged team of Team Magma, Aqua, and Rocket! so your going down twerps, Jessica said!
 

dnglover25

Hikari Trainer
Chp 6- lets get ready to torkip!!
I heard about you guys I said. But I'm not gonna let you take her Wurmple! Fusion time! Mudkip and Torchic lets go! He pulled out his fusion dex and Fused them!
Torkip the Fire/water pokemon is quick, can swim, and jump high.
okay use fire pulse on the Murkrow who mouth looks like it's Pealibird!
when the attack hit the Murkrow and the branch it was on fell to the ground. Crack! Murrr. The came out it's mouth and then all the Murkrow flew away.
Hey you Murkrow get back here, Jessica screamed! At least there the bosses Jamie replied. The boss will get mad that his precious Murkrow got hurt while on duty with us! Where all ready on thin ice, Jessica snapped.
Cassie picked up her poke ball. Go Wurmple! A figure emerged from the poke ball. Sil sil coon. The pokemon jumped on Cassie well this is so my Silcoon! Sil sil coon!

Next Chapter the poke battle rages on!
 

Boonge

Cascade Trainer
make ur chapters way bigger atm its way to short.


WHAT does your characters look like?

What do the pokemon look like we already no but it would be better if u still put it in.
 

Dilasc

Boip!
What the hell was that? That wasn't a fic? That was a rushed together piece of horse feces, and calling that as such is an insult to all feces everywhere. As such, I must appologize... to all that poo.

Anyway, lets read your story. If you're lucky, you'll get a ton more sarcasm.

pika pika pika my pichu alarm went.
it was 12:00 I overslept!

Hmm, unoriginal much? Yes, yes! Very unoriginal much!

All in all, this story blows! You have no punctuation, nop description and this is very scripty. All in all, closure of this horridity that deserves death is imminent. Go read Advice for Aspiring Authors, head to the Author's Cafe, and then go read some good fics. Then again, with your grammar, you probably do not know how to read, let alone read carefully. As such, giving up is not exactly nice advice, but if you don't seek to improve, you'll be making enemies far greater than myself.

Do you know how long it takes me to make a chapter? Sometimes months! That's right, MONTHS! It reaps rewards though. I don't know if you'll believe me, but it's true. If you put an original effort into it, then maybe you too can have a well written story! Go read some good fics! Read them again and again and LEARN how to write from them. Got it?
 
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