Ok, this is my first story and I really need tips on how to make it better. Also, the first chapter is rated G
Characters
Name: Oliver
Gender: Male
Age:10
Appearance: Brown hair, Light Blue shirt, Dark Blue scarf, and Light blue eyes.
Personality: Oliver is a shy, smart boy and he always wears his blue scarf.
Pokemon owned: Mimey (Mime Jr)
Oliver was born to Drew and May in the town of Mahogany. His parents want him to follow their steps and be a top coordinator, but Oliver really wants to be a traveler like the famous trainer Ash Ketchum who has collected all of the badges ever made. But Oliver doesn’t know exactly what he really wants to be yet. Then one day, something strange was invented. It was a machine that allowed pokemon to evolve to an alternate stage that wasn't even real. For example: With the machine, Houndoor could evolve into a Steel/Fire type Bulldog. A couple of days later,
Gender: Male
Age:10
Appearance: Brown hair, Light Blue shirt, Dark Blue scarf, and Light blue eyes.
Personality: Oliver is a shy, smart boy and he always wears his blue scarf.
Pokemon owned: Mimey (Mime Jr)
Hometown: Oliver was born to Drew and May in the town of Mahogany. His parents want him to follow their steps and be a top coordinator, but Oliver really wants to be a traveler like the famous trainer Ash Ketchum who has collected all of the badges ever made. But Oliver doesn’t know exactly what he really wants to be yet. Maybe he will find out later…….
It was a clear, sunny morning in the Johto Region.
Everyone was happy. Ledyba flew peacefully in the sky with HootHoot and Noctowl.
Oliver was at the Lake of Rage sitting with his Mime Jr looking at the water.
Weedle and Caterpie played all day long.
When Oliver got up, the Weedle and Caterpie ran into the forest.
While he was standing, he took off his shoes, socks, scarf, and light blue shirt. He put the on a bench and then he jumped in with Mimey
“Splash fight Mimey!”
“Mime, Mimey!” The pokemon was filled with joy. Mimey loves to play in the water.
The two played and splashed for a while. Then they got out.
Oliver got out and walked over to the bench to get his clothes. As Oliver got dressed, Mimey shook all around like a dog, trying to dry off.
“Hey, look at all of the Remoraid Mimey!”
“Mime” Mimey stared in awe as the Remoraid swam by.
“I sure would love to catch one! Let’s go home to get some pokeballs Mimey”
As they walked home, a mysterious man in a black suit jumped out of the bushes. He was carrying a metal device attached to his arm.
“Did you here that Jason? We can test our DNA Mixer on the Remoraid.”
“Yeah, I heard boss. Let’s hurry before that brat comes back”
Back at Oliver’s House…………
“Hey Mom, Mimey and I found a lot of Remoraid at the Lake Of Rage while we were swimming”
“That’s nice honey, did you catch one?”
“No, I forgot to bring my pokeballs”
“Oh, that’s too bad. Maybe you’ll get one later”
“Yeah, I hope that they are still there. Mom, where is dad? I need to borrow some of his pokeballs.”
“I think he’s out back”
Oliver walked back outside and went around to the back. There, he saw his dad gardening with his Roselia. Next to Roselia there was a dark blue pokemon with long leaves on its head. It was an Oddish that was also helping Oliver’s dad.
“Hey dad, I found some Remoraid and I was wondering if you could give me some poke balls.”
“Sure Oliver, I’ll get them”
The tall-green haired man stood up to grab the red and white balls from his pocket
“Ah, here they are. 5 brand new pokeballs”
“Thanks dad!”
Oliver ran as fast as he could back to Lake of Rage. When he finally got there, he watched The Commander use his DNA Machine.
“Let’s do this! DNA Mixer, ON!”
He aimed it at one of the Remoraid. The Remoraid’s body turned all white, but you could see its DNA inside of it. It turned all purple, then blue, and then all of it turned white. The Remoraid started to get bigger and bigger. Then when it stopped glowing, it was a new pokemon. A giant blue squid stood there.
“Yes, it works!! I’ll name this one, Druid.”
“Oh my gosh, Who are these guys, and what did they just do to that Remoraid! Come on Mimey, we have to stop this”
What will happen. Will the Commander take the Druid? Or will Oliver stop him in time?? Find out in Chapter 2 of Pokemon Megalution!
Characters
Name: Oliver
Gender: Male
Age:10
Appearance: Brown hair, Light Blue shirt, Dark Blue scarf, and Light blue eyes.
Personality: Oliver is a shy, smart boy and he always wears his blue scarf.
Pokemon owned: Mimey (Mime Jr)
Oliver was born to Drew and May in the town of Mahogany. His parents want him to follow their steps and be a top coordinator, but Oliver really wants to be a traveler like the famous trainer Ash Ketchum who has collected all of the badges ever made. But Oliver doesn’t know exactly what he really wants to be yet. Then one day, something strange was invented. It was a machine that allowed pokemon to evolve to an alternate stage that wasn't even real. For example: With the machine, Houndoor could evolve into a Steel/Fire type Bulldog. A couple of days later,
Pokemon Megalution
~Chapter 1~
~Chapter 1~
Gender: Male
Age:10
Appearance: Brown hair, Light Blue shirt, Dark Blue scarf, and Light blue eyes.
Personality: Oliver is a shy, smart boy and he always wears his blue scarf.
Pokemon owned: Mimey (Mime Jr)
Hometown: Oliver was born to Drew and May in the town of Mahogany. His parents want him to follow their steps and be a top coordinator, but Oliver really wants to be a traveler like the famous trainer Ash Ketchum who has collected all of the badges ever made. But Oliver doesn’t know exactly what he really wants to be yet. Maybe he will find out later…….
It was a clear, sunny morning in the Johto Region.
Everyone was happy. Ledyba flew peacefully in the sky with HootHoot and Noctowl.
Oliver was at the Lake of Rage sitting with his Mime Jr looking at the water.
Weedle and Caterpie played all day long.
When Oliver got up, the Weedle and Caterpie ran into the forest.
While he was standing, he took off his shoes, socks, scarf, and light blue shirt. He put the on a bench and then he jumped in with Mimey
“Splash fight Mimey!”
“Mime, Mimey!” The pokemon was filled with joy. Mimey loves to play in the water.
The two played and splashed for a while. Then they got out.
Oliver got out and walked over to the bench to get his clothes. As Oliver got dressed, Mimey shook all around like a dog, trying to dry off.
“Hey, look at all of the Remoraid Mimey!”
“Mime” Mimey stared in awe as the Remoraid swam by.
“I sure would love to catch one! Let’s go home to get some pokeballs Mimey”
As they walked home, a mysterious man in a black suit jumped out of the bushes. He was carrying a metal device attached to his arm.
“Did you here that Jason? We can test our DNA Mixer on the Remoraid.”
“Yeah, I heard boss. Let’s hurry before that brat comes back”
Back at Oliver’s House…………
“Hey Mom, Mimey and I found a lot of Remoraid at the Lake Of Rage while we were swimming”
“That’s nice honey, did you catch one?”
“No, I forgot to bring my pokeballs”
“Oh, that’s too bad. Maybe you’ll get one later”
“Yeah, I hope that they are still there. Mom, where is dad? I need to borrow some of his pokeballs.”
“I think he’s out back”
Oliver walked back outside and went around to the back. There, he saw his dad gardening with his Roselia. Next to Roselia there was a dark blue pokemon with long leaves on its head. It was an Oddish that was also helping Oliver’s dad.
“Hey dad, I found some Remoraid and I was wondering if you could give me some poke balls.”
“Sure Oliver, I’ll get them”
The tall-green haired man stood up to grab the red and white balls from his pocket
“Ah, here they are. 5 brand new pokeballs”
“Thanks dad!”
Oliver ran as fast as he could back to Lake of Rage. When he finally got there, he watched The Commander use his DNA Machine.
“Let’s do this! DNA Mixer, ON!”
He aimed it at one of the Remoraid. The Remoraid’s body turned all white, but you could see its DNA inside of it. It turned all purple, then blue, and then all of it turned white. The Remoraid started to get bigger and bigger. Then when it stopped glowing, it was a new pokemon. A giant blue squid stood there.
“Yes, it works!! I’ll name this one, Druid.”
“Oh my gosh, Who are these guys, and what did they just do to that Remoraid! Come on Mimey, we have to stop this”
What will happen. Will the Commander take the Druid? Or will Oliver stop him in time?? Find out in Chapter 2 of Pokemon Megalution!
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