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Pokemon Meven

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Pokemon Groudon

Blah Blah Blah
]Im gonna show you my first comic thats about a young boy whos about to see new pokemon, get gym badges and.....well you know the rest.
This is my first comic and im still learning, i hope you like it......Here goes.....


A NEW BEGGINNING
Comic 1
Comic 2
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+Erin+

Banned
dude its terible the spech bubles are a mess
you forgot to take the withe bit of the charecters
that ruins the background,and i cant read the 2nd one
2/10
 
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Pokemon Groudon

Blah Blah Blah
its my first time thoe can you give me suggestions??
 
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+Erin+

Banned
Pokemon Groudon said:
its my first time thoe can you give me suggestions??
Click to expand...
never use squares as your spech bubles,but this is a remake from
pokemon emerald so add some twists,if your using MS paint click
on the square next to the star then click on the bottom of the picture
that has squares,cilinders and circle to take the withe bit of the charecter
that way the background looks better
 
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Neopolis

Battle Pyramid Champion
Squares as speech bubbles are ok. In fact, I use them. But make sure to outline them.
 
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Pokemon Groudon

Blah Blah Blah
i made another one cuz i was kinda bored (p.s ty for the webs poke)

Comic 3
 
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Pokefan26

Woot! SSB!
Terrible...
Speech Bubbles are Bad....
Battle effects are bad....
Transperatize the characters....And Pokemon.....
Devil G said:
Alright, I'm gonna say it right now, because I feel it needs to be said.

Age/Programs/Experience/etc. Are NO excuse for having a bad comic. I can't tell you how many times I've seen a comic title that said somthing like "_____ (Made in MS paint)" or "My first Comic (Don't be Harsh)" or that crap. You might expect Pity Sex; I'm going to give you a slap with the Swordfish of Reality and Critisizm.

Take a look at Chronicles of Hyrule. My comic. 80% of it was made in MS Paint, and It's gonna go pro in a couple of weeks. What does that tell you? Those Idiots who say that MS paint is their downfall are Downright Lazy.

Another interesting fact is that, when making the ORIGINAL CoH, The FIRST Rendition of it was crap. Downright crap. Did I say "Oh, well" and post it? No. I trashed it, opened up a new window, and tried again. Half of the people who post comics at SPPf don't do that. Guess what? These are ALSO the guys who cry when we say "This is utterly disgraceful crap." You want us to lick your shoes? Make your damn comic better than ours.

In short: If you know you made a crappy comic, Don't post it.
If you post it, Don't ask for Pity sex.
If you ask for Pity Sex, Don't whine when someone tears apart your comic.
If you whine at Crit, Get off the Internet.
Simple. =)
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Yeah....

Don't you ever read stickies??
 
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+Erin+

Banned
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Tenten

"Just kidding!"
Umm, Pokemon Groudon, if you're going to make comics, you really should read and follow the tutorials on the sites that pok*e found for you. It's really hard to follow, since it really looks messy. And try to use better battle effects. Oh and one more thing: I really suggest you try NOT to make comics about pokemon journeys where this one character tries to become a pokemon master and stuff.

I'm really sorry about saying this, but reading a lot of "pokemon journey"-based comics is becoming too tedious, it basically follows the game, and it ends up being really predictable. If you really want to make a comic, try using a different, less often used topic or make up something that might interest people. I know you're new to comic making, so you should listen to other people's suggestions. They will help you improve, so good luck. (If I sound like I'm nagging you to do this and that, please don't take this personally. I'm only trying to help you improve).
 
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Joe Vega #4

RAWR.
I... don't like this. The characters and Pokémon are covered with squares, varying from black to grey to white. Ever considered using StarOffice 8? You could make proper speech bubbles instead of using MS Paint to create text boxes close to characters and poorly lnking them with black & white lines that look lazily done, seeing as you can stil see hints of the background right through them. Puncuation errors and capitalization errors everywhere ya look. Ya don't just make an exclamation like: "Torchic dodge!!"

Properly done, it'd be:

"Torchic, dodge!"

*zaps to the Fanfiction section and continues his business*
 
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Capt.Miko

Flapjacks!
Your comic needs a LOT of work! (it's terrible) But here are some ways to improve it.

1. The character sprites. There are boxes around them. Next time, you should either copy + paste them into a new file on the art program you use, turn off the background's visibility and erase the white box around the sprite very carefully or get your sprites from a transparent sprite sheet where you don't have to worry about that. And the pokémon sprites should be facing each other (can be done by mirror-flipping)

2. The speech boxes. The outlines are very shaky. A smaller brush size should be used and be more precise with the outlining.

3. No capitalization, bad grammar

4. The battle effects. Lack the depth and realism of the attacks they represent. (i.e: Fire attacks are in shades of red and orange, water attacks are a much lighter blue)

5. The plot. Way too predictable. Try adding your own twists to it to make it stand out. Not to mention it is also very rushed. (i.e: Meven's mom woke him up early. Why did she wake him up early? Need to be more in-depth about those kind of things)
 
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kapslock

Well-Known Member
Erm it doesn't seem like you used the tutorials +Erin+ and i gave you<_<.The speech bubbles are still Erm crap, and the chars still have the squares on them.Read the tutorials Kay?
 
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Socrates With A Lobotomy

Well-Known Member
PKMN Knight: You're not serious... are you?

Comic could use a lot of work, I rip sprites better than you. (And I suck. A LOT.).
 
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Typhlojoe

Thunder Trainer
Your speech bubbles are terrible, use the speech bubbles that are provided in programs like "Word". Your characters have big whit spaces around them. Try either moving them line by line (Of Pixels), or put the backgrounds around them; cut out the part of the background you're putting them on and make it part of the sprite.
 
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Matt`

r u srs?
Those aren't speech bubbles.
Those are crap bubbles.

Also, you don't have to say "End of Comic". We know the comic ends when there's nothing left.

There's much to be improved.
1. Speech bubbles - it might take a long time to make, but its worth it.
2. Squares around the people - get rid of them. It just makes the comic look worse.
3. Pokemon attacks - they need to be a little better. All they look like are little dots.
 
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