Pokemon presents....Crystal Star

[D-Boi]

It has been 3 years since the last Pokemon Master title was inherited (by Ash just so ya know). In a lost region, a large but rather small group of Legendary pokemon has gathered together to discuss the issue of the evil dark lord Shukhan returning to the world from his eternal death 5000 years ago. They decide to form a small team of gifted trainers to take on Shukhan as told they once did 5000 years ago. Featuring Misty(age:16), and a whole new set of characters like Melissa(misty's younger cousin age:15), Michael (from Pokemon XD: G.O.D. age:15), Christina (age:14), Korien (my character ovecorse age:16), and Ash Ketchum (now age:14). With each individual's combined might with thier Pokemon, will they have what it takes to work as a team and overcome the ultimate challenge of thier entire lives? Find out next time until I learn how to put chapters and episodes on this thread.

Hey! I'm new to this forum thing, OK!? Get off my back will ya!?

I also want some feedback on this to. And anyone who wants to know what happens in this story, can you help a brotha out and teach me how to do this thing?(yes I am black, SO WUT!!)

I'll give some credit those who help me, 'kay?

 

[The Smore]

Right. First off is Ash a new carachter ? Like the old Ash's son or something ? But anyway, I'd be gald to help, if you pm me the first chapter I'll put it onto word and corect mistakes etc.

EDIT ~ what do you meant " a large but rather small group " ??

 

[Jonouchi]

It has been 3 years since the last Pokemon Master title was inherited (by Ash just so ya know). In a lost region, a large but rather small group of Legendary pokemon has gathered together to discuss the issue of the evil dark lord Shukhan returning to the world from his eternal death 5000 years ago. They decide to form a small team of gifted trainers to take on Shukhan as told they once did 5000 years ago. Featuring Misty(age:16), and a whole new set of characters like Melissa(misty's younger cousin age:15), Michael (from Pokemon XD: G.O.D. age:15), Christina (age:14), Korien (my character ovecorse age:16), and Ash Ketchum (now age:14). With each individual's combined might with thier Pokemon, will they have what it takes to work as a team and overcome the ultimate challenge of thier entire lives? Find out next time until I learn how to put chapters and episodes on this thread.

Hey! I'm new to this forum thing, OK!? Get off my back will ya!?

I also want some feedback on this to. And anyone who wants to know what happens in this story, can you help a brotha out and teach me how to do this thing?(yes I am black, SO WUT!!)

I'll give some credit those who help me, 'kay?

If you want to know how to post chapters, do it like you would any other thread. Post the chapter using the reply button. It's that simple.

The story seems like another trainer fic to me. try putting some originality into the story so it doesn't seem so cliche'd

Next time, post the chapter before you make the topic

 

[Yami Ryu]

Hey! I'm new to this forum thing, OK!? Get off my back will ya!?

That does NOT excuse you for spamming and being a rule breaker. Read the rules. There is no excuse for ignoring them/not reading them.

I also want some feedback on this to. And anyone who wants to know what happens in this story, can you help a brotha out and teach me how to do this thing?(yes I am black, SO WUT!!)

Why are you pointing out you're black? It doesn't matter, or are you one of the people that cry omg I'm black, you're white, you're racist! I've already had an idiot do that to me for trying to help him. ._. so if you will refrain from that I will be happy.

It has been 3 years since the last Pokemon Master title was inherited (by Ash just so ya know). In a lost region, a large but rather small group of Legendary pokemon has gathered together to discuss the issue of the evil dark lord Shukhan returning to the world from his eternal death 5000 years ago. They decide to form a small team of gifted trainers to take on Shukhan as told they once did 5000 years ago. Featuring Misty(age:16), and a whole new set of characters like Melissa(misty's younger cousin age:15), Michael (from Pokemon XD: G.O.D. age:15), Christina (age:14), Korien (my character ovecorse age:16), and Ash Ketchum (now age:14). With each individual's combined might with thier Pokemon, will they have what it takes to work as a team and overcome the ultimate challenge of thier entire lives? Find out next time until I learn how to put chapters and episodes on this thread.

This is coming off as a cliche plot. Authors notes amongst the half assed attempt of a prolouge? And how is Ash still 14, in game time he would be atleast in his early 20's, and the COLO verse hinted that Ash was possibly Eagun and he was the grandfather of Rui. Not only have you badly meshed univereses/characters and OC's, but well, this seems to be 'standard undead villian rises' 'good goes to battle 'good fights' 'good conqures' and only difference is, you're using the pokemon verse to host it.