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Pokemon Quest

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Jerry_Francis

Evil=Immense Fun
This is my first comic, I hope you people like it.

Prolouge
http://img156.imageshack.us/my.php?image=comicprolouge0rz.png

Lost Part One
http://img76.imageshack.us/my.php?image=comic1lost7be.png

Lost Part Two
http://img146.imageshack.us/my.php?image=comic2lost26qv.png

Lost Part Three
http://img145.imageshack.us/my.php?image=comic3lost30cl.png

Littleroot Crisis Part One
http://img45.imageshack.us/my.php?image=comic4littlerootcrisis2nt.png

Littleroot Crisis Part Two
http://img76.imageshack.us/my.php?image=comic5littlerootcrisis22wk.png
 
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-Yoshi-

Yoshi!!!
Not Bad, just that the idea is a bit unoriginal.

But there are two things that disturbed me:

1- The wurmple's white parts are green because when you pasted it, it took the green parts of the background, you should recolor it with a colour that looks like white.

2- When Poochyena is captured, some parts are not red and looked a little messy.

Those are not very bad problems, but they're eye-disturbing. But who cares, this comic is pretty good. Congrats.
 
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Bu†cH

Braaiiiiiinss......
The speech bubbles are terrible, the plotline is rushed and bad, and the panels are kinda too small to stuff in the action.

Suggestions: Try making the speech bubbles alot cooler and not rushed, slow down on making your comics, add more panels per issue, think of something original, and make up some good jokes.
 
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Tabby Catty

Courtney loves Ruby
A little too cliche but at least the plot is starting to get intresting with Team Aqua. I would recommend a few more plot twists to get rid of the cliche which many of us find old. I'm a pretty experienced comic writer myself and I have had my ups and downs too so your not alone. Some advice from me is try to sit down and brainstorm and plan out everything all right down to punctuation you could even write a script too. Your title seems a bit bland and people would probably think its just another dull cliche adventure story we all hate. If you look at my title Hoenn Mew Mews it is creative compared to Tokyo Mew Mew meets Pokemon or something but yeah a title is one of the reasons that people get drawn into your thread. Although I hate to admit I'm a bit of a novice at spriting if you get to the point where you become good I would recommend you start editing as long as you stay away from recolors unless its a really good reason (and it better be) so overall you comic is pretty good for a beginner.
 
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Jerry_Francis

Evil=Immense Fun
I have actually been planning this for months now, but this is where i got up to, so now I need to come up with more ideas, and I can take into account everyone's ideas. I do not know what else to call this, so if anyone has some suggestions just post them. The main plot of the story shall be revealed soon! (Yes, I had one all along)
 
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Requesto

Pokemon FF Creator
Sorry, but i do not like the text bubbles at all, you really should change them. And i think there could have been a better storyline, as somebody already said.

But still it did make me chuckle at some points

5/10 thats pretty good for your first comic too.

Requesto
 
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