Pokemon Sutra -[The Deadlier Side to pokemon]-

[ForeverDes]

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[This comic is Rated T For teen for use of Adult words and Adult Situations]

Introduction

Thirty Years Have Passed.
Thirty Years have Passed since Silver Broke in and stole Totodile.
Thirty Years have passed since Gold defeated Silver.
Fifteen years have passed since Silver has married Kris.
Ten years have passed since they gave birth to me.
Ten years have passed since they left me.
Two years have passed since Ive lived in the back of Elm's Lab.
3 days have Passed since they found Dr.Silph's Dead body in Goldenrod.


Comic

Season 1
Issue 1-[http://i1.*******.com/rm1fsw.png]
Issue 2-[http://i1.*******.com/rtzy13.png]

Characters

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Bio-[All I know is he's a assassin, Thats what they said on the news.]

 

[Bu†cH]

The text, the originality, the background, the other visual stuff....perfect.

But the speech under screen thing might confuse some people later in the comic.
So I might suggest speech bubbles.

Even though, your comic has a bright future ahead. ^_^

 

[ForeverDes]

I personally dont like speech bubbles...

Ill probbaly Color code the text for each character so you dont get confused.

 

[Matt Silver]

Certainly different there Des, but still great.
I don't no the plot yet so I can't properly review.
When more comics come out, I'll give a more thourogh review. Until then, keep it up!

 

[Infinity]

When you have the guy fall I notice a black box instead of where the building is supposed to be. Since the panels are so small, it wouldn't benefit too much from speech bubbles. I'll keep my eye on this.

 

[jellsprout]

It looks good. The text under panel makes this comic a bit confusing, because you don't know who's talking. But I guess that won't be a large problem if you're able to do it correctly.
The plot is very good. It's full of mystery and darkness and it leaves the reader wanting to find out what will happen next, who everybody is and why everybody did what they did.

So Silver and Kris were fifteen when they married and twenty when they had kids? O_O

 

[Zero Nexus]

one word...perfect!

 

[ForeverDes]

It looks good. The text under panel makes this comic a bit confusing, because you don't know who's talking. But I guess that won't be a large problem if you're able to do it correctly.
The plot is very good. It's full of mystery and darkness and it leaves the reader wanting to find out what will happen next, who everybody is and why everybody did what they did.

So Silver and Kris were fifteen when they married and twenty when they had kids? O_O

****.

hang on a sec...
I changed it to thirty years, so they were 30 when they had kids.

 

[XxGreivousxX]

wut, my mom had when I she was 15

Anyway, the first part is very confusing, I didnt get it.
The storyline is kind of orginal, although the greaphics are exellent.
keep it up.

 

[blueguy]

Interesting! Very interesting! However, you're getting more credit and praise than you deserve, at least at this point. The text in the first issue is abominable and difficult to understand. DO NOT PUT TEXT UNDER PANELS. This is the Fan Comics forum, and comics use speechbubbles, which prevent the confusion I dealt with when reading your first issue.

The visuals so far are very good and strong. I can't be certain that this will be constant but I hope so. It's very nice to look at, apart from lack of speechbubbles (a MAJOR no-no).

I think this looks very promising, and I hope you'll continue with it. Just remember that the people who scream out "perfect" have no idea what they're talking about. -_-

EDIT - And I noticed you said you "don't like" speechbubbles. Bull. You just don't want to put a bit more effort into it.

 

[ForeverDes]

Well, Ive made the second issue, and i tried using speechbubbles.
Ill admit it looks better.

 

[Zero Nexus]

whrz the link?

 

[Metallic Mantis Reborn]

Really great comic,very original. Wouldnt have thought to us Silver n Kris...but great idea nontheless

 

[ForeverDes]

whrz the link?

Im not posting the link until monday.
Ill update the comic every monday,wednesday,and friday.

Ive noticed those who dont keep an updating track, often flush out too many comics at once, then wait a while, and everybody is all "wheres our new comic?!!"

So yeah...
I have the next 3 issues done, and they will be posted on mon, wed, and fri.

 

[ForeverDes]

Sorry for the Double post, but issue 2 is up.
We are introduced to our hero and an older Prof. Elm.

 

[Solar boy Nick]

more i love it

 

[pikachu_rocks19]

Make more i think it will be great!