Pokemon: The Saphirre Gem

[pokemonmaster]

Plot:3 Years Ago Ash & Co. Had Won The Orange Leauge They Then Re-Unite With Brock And Get Ready For The Johto Leauge Until Pikachu Is Captured So Are Ash,Brock,Misty And Tracey Then A Young Boy Named Harry (My Charachter) Is Captured But He Escapes Will He Be Able To Save Ash & Co. From There Terrible Fate One Thing We Know He Won't Be Able To Do It Alone
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Sign-Up

Name: (Anything)
Age: (11 to 18)
Gender: (Male or Female)
Pokemon: (You May Have Up To 6 Pokemon)
Description: (What Your Charachter Looks Like You May Post A Picture Here If Ya Want)
Personality: (What Your Charachter Acts Like)
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My Charachter

Name:Harry

Age:12

Gender:Male

Pokemon
1.Pikachu (Male)
2.Nidoran (Male)
3.Baby Articuno (Female)
4.Psyduck (Female)

Description:Blonde Hair,Blue Eyes,Gold Earrings,Black T-Shirt,Blue Pants And White Trainers With A Red Zig-Zag On The Left Side Of Both Trainers

Personality:Short-Tempered,Curious,Sarcastic Most Of The Time And Sometimes Stubborn

 

[/Exiled/]

Omg...... How does he send out for people? how do the characters meet? You need to elaborate on the plot to make sure everybody will understand whats going on. Not to mention the mediocrity of this plot. Please be original. Look at some popular rpg's sign ups then look at yours. Also your description and personality should be highly elaborated and in deph......

But this will probably be closed....... So think of these tips for next time.

 

[Psychic]

First, don't post topics twice. >.<

Second, this absolutely sucks. The plot is waaay too short, and it's crappy and boring and making little sense, especially with every single word capitalized like that. It's annoying to read.
Didn't you read the Stickies first? They give you advice on making a good RPG. Lord knows you need it. Hell, you can't even make a good Sign Up!


Yea, there's no point in trying to help you. You're beyond help. This will get closed by a Mod for sure.


~Psychic

 

[pokemonmaster]

Sorry First Try I'm An Peanut Brain I'll Try And Remember Those Tips

 

[Psychic]

>.< Read the rules again. Being new isn't an excuse for not reading the rules. Have to been to the Newbie Lounge? Have you read all the Stickies there?
No? Well, you should have. -_-

And again, stop typing all in capitals. It's very annoying.


~Psychic

 

[/Exiled/]

it wasnt that friggin bad. I've seen newbs with much much worse.
*coughcouchmewmastercoughcough*
He isnt beyond help. Anyways he seems to accept it when he makes a bad rpg.
Just dont make an rpg until you can make sign ups like some of the poplular rpgs. Take a look at their size. And elaboration. Also, How old are you?

please dont crush all of someones dreams.... Or sumtin along the lines of that....

besides. How many people read all the stickies anyway -_-

 

[CHeSHiRe-CaT]

Plot:3 Years Ago Ash & Co. Had Won The Orange Leauge They Then Re-Unite With Brock And Get Ready For The Johto Leauge Until Pikachu Is Captured So Are Ash,Brock,Misty And Tracey Then A Young Boy Named Harry (My Charachter) Is Captured But He Escapes Will He Be Able To Save Ash & Co. From There Terrible Fate One Thing We Know He Won't Be Able To Do It Alone

Er...can you say, "Oh-my-God-looooooooooooooooooooooooong-run-on-sentence?"

Seriously. I read what you called the "plot," and that one single sentence gave me the impression of someone high on sugar decided to scream the plot non-stop without pausing to breathe. I also see you capitalized every single beginning letter of each word. You shouldn't do that, unless that's the title (or a proper noun), in which case I'm obliged to say, "omfg lawl that's long." What I could understand of the plot isn't very impressive... No one wants to RP with a storyline including Ash and company. It's been done so many times that just posting this thread here kinda screams, "cliché." You're also giving the RPers no clue what they're supposed to do, and leave out complete detail of appearances, as many mentioned above.

besides. How many people read all the stickies anyway -_-

All the SMART and good RPers read the stickies. And believe it or not, that's quite a lot, so that's how many.

You should read the stickies, whether you care or not. If you want any hope of posting a successful RPG, then those guidelines should make you improve on what you're missing. Read more books, improve on your description in writing, and overall, just improve with your English skills. I fear that if you tried to start another RPG, or continue with this one, that nothing will get better. Ask someone to edit your ideas and posts, and correct you. If you can't try any of the above, maybe you should wait a year...or two...

 

[Lady Myuu]

you know guys, this rpg may go into the 'don't reply just report' catagory.

pokemonmaster, you have been given the advice needed. Please sumbit anymore rpgs you want to make to a rpg mod so it can be clearified as a suitible rpg.

thank you.

Myuu

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