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tanhony

machine maniac
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.:Tremolo:.

POKEMON CRYSTAL PWNS
1 word. GRAMMAR. Plus, Anthony is a really bad recolor. And are Rowan and Louis like twins or something? They're the same sprite 'cept Rowan's hair is different. Oh. And the joke just came out of nowhere. You're telling Rowan to get off the boxes, and then all of a sudden Louis says completely out of nowhere, "Who wants to kill Anthony?"
 
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Dafearo(svensk)

Voodoobear
I know that it's very hard to be a beginner, and therefore, I'll try to be a little constructive...

1.Spelling: Not much to say here. Just check the whole comic before posting it.

2.Plot: First a guy is riding a bike and you tries to make a joke out of it( if that was what you wanted) and in the next panel there's a guy playing a video game ! You can't just change time and space...

3.Humour: You need to check ALL of your "jokes". If they make you laugh, they're good(or maybe not...).

4.Sprites: Anthony is just so: @_@; ... Do NOT use only one color for his closes!

5.Text: Do NOT make it bold and do NOT squeeze all words together, B'cause it's really hard to read.

That's it, I think... Work on and do NOT give up! If this comic screws, you can make a new one! Come on!!!;)
 
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Flygon

Guest
Like everyone said, grammer needs somw work. Also, the comic seems a bit messy.
 

Rikori

Lucas, gib meh soda.
Dafearo(svensk) said:
Wrongs that haven't been told in episode 1!!!

Where is that truck? Is it invicible? Or maybe so fast you can't see it?
And Out side of all the panels, why's there a little guy there? Is he just eating fish and chips? Maybe he's a disoriented character?

~~And of course you were kidding~~
I can fix the truck problem.. Maybe the truck were in Oldale Town? They didnt whisper I guess.. o_O'' And still, keep trying Tanhony, you'll reach, the top if you just tries a bit harder. Im off to search for Kirby Background now.. *flies away with Sponge to Happy Popcorn land..*
 

Xiang

Well-Known Member
Look kid, if you post something like this on the forums, expect criticism. Use it to improve and make your work better. If you don't listen and don't make it better based on what you hear, you're gonna be ridiculed big time.
 

May's brother

Now to the Maxtreme!
your not listening are you, your trainer recolours are crap, grammers bad, and rowan just has different coloured hair.
 

kapslock

Well-Known Member
Dude i don`t get jack on what`s happening.The pannels are all mushed together, and your grammer is TERRIBLE! Have you ever heard of speech bubbles? Really if you don`t listen, expect more crit.
 

tanhony

machine maniac
Ill start doing speechbuubles, doing edits, and working on my grammar, when Ive nailed that Ill do more comics.

sorry for DP but heres the new sprites the letter above them tells you who they are
code
a=anthony
r=rowan
l=louis
newsprites1qx.png
 
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Bagonclaw

Guest
The first comic.
I think Davis said...
Grammar, there are some mistakes. Use MS Word. plz?
The comic itself, is pretty dull. "LOMG U B IN DIS COMIXZ PLZ?"
That's breakin the 4th wall, and unfunny. And pretty boring.
As for grammar, many mistakes.
Don't break the 4th wall, peoples!
The red cape needs to be darkened a little.
The comic needs to be downsized and un-blurry.
That's my crit for this comic today.

_BC_
 

Klozo

The Voyager
1. Use proper grammar.
2. You left way too much empty space.
3. The text in bold is almost unreadable.
 

Emo Saria

Be my Penguin <3
How could anyone be saying that this kid has bad grammar, too much space, etc. I cant even see the comic!
Atleast try to make the images bigger. Do you why they're too small anyway?
 
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