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Pouncer (One-Shot)

Psychic

Really and truly
One-Shot number five and we’re still alive!

About a week ago inspiration hit thanks to reading a Trainer fic by Saphira_Thron at 12:30 at night, and so for an hour I forced myself to write as quickly as possible to get down my story idea, and I have been working on editing it ever since.
This is extremely random and a spur-of-the-moment type thing, and is more of a muse and something to consider than anything else. It’s not epic or all that exciting, and for some reason it ended up being quite disproportionate, but I’m content enough with it in the end. It’s just a short, light read. ^^

As always, all comments are more than welcome. So just sit back, relax and…enjoy.




Pouncer


Near the northern exit of Route 1 a young man in his mid-teens stood leaning against a tree with his arms crossed. His clothing was nothing more than a pair of ripped jeans, a muscle shirt and a worn pair of running shoes which dug deep into the loamy soil over the tree’s roots. Dark green eyes stared straight ahead, down the dirt path straddled by tall, Pokémon-inhabited grass on either side, all the while long, bony fingers drumming against each arm as he waited, taking in every sound and noting every sight, from the scratching of Sentret paws against the ground to every Pidgey that fluttered past. For a brief moment his eyes flashed upwards as he quickly glanced at the sun’s position in the azure sky- just tickling the distant mountains in the west.

The boy grunted. He had already been visited by two ten-year-old Trainers that day, and surely the last couldn’t be far behind. After all, even after running back to Pallet Town to heal one’s Pokémon a few times, crossing through Route 1 didn’t take more than an hour, and the last Trainer had passed by almost three hours ago by now. Starting off slowly wasn’t a good sign, and was often a hint that such Trainer was nervous and a timid battler. Not to mention it showed that the three new Trainers were at different skill – or perhaps confidence - levels. The teen closed his eyes and let out a long breath of air through his nose, lips pressed together in a frown. He stayed like this for a while, eyes closed with the tree’s bark scratching slightly against his bare neck, but he hardly seemed to care and remained completely immobile as he tested his patience with the Waiting Game.

And then, finally, came the sweet, blessed sound he had been waiting for. The snapping of the twigs and crumpling of the leaves that had landed onto the path against which floppy sandals pounded and a young boy stumbled into view, tripping over a branch on the path as he did so. Curly, bright red hair bounced atop the boy’s head whose youthful face was littered with freckles bounded into view, the contents of a knapsack jingling about noisily as he finally caught sight of the newbie. Ah, such annoying, obnoxious sounds he was never so thankful to hear!

The boy still hadn’t noticed the teen even when he was only a few dozen feet away, so with a sigh he put on a large, goofy grin and waved enthusiastically to the approaching boy.

“Hey, kid, over here!” he shouted his salutation, waving the kid over. Glancing about, the young boy looked wildly around, as if unsure if the stranger in the wife beater was talking to him or not.

“Yeah, you!” he called back in as friendly a way as he could. After a few blank blinks of his light brown eyes, the young boy hurried forward, a questioning expression on his heart-shaped face.

“Hiya, kid. The name’s Corey! You look a little frazzled- newbie Trainer?” he asked cheerfully with a friendly wink and a thumbs-up.

“Er, uh…hi. Yeah, I just, uh, started my Pokémon journey today.” responded the boy slowly in a somewhat squeaky voice, which wavered, but grew slightly in confidence as he spoke. Ah, the joys of being a pre-pubescent kid.

“Ah, well, congratulations, er…sorry, you spoke so fast I didn’t catch your name!” Corey said earnestly, nudging the kid and offering him a sly smile.

“Oh, um, I’m Shaun, all the way from Lavaridge Town!” the boy said, pointing at himself proudly.

“Wow, Lavaridge! That’s all the way from Hoenn!” Corey marveled, eyes widening in awe.

“Yup! I um, I came aaaaaaall the way over here to get a Pokémon from Professor Oak! People say he’s the best in the world, yunno!” Shaun’s confidence had grown quite a bit, and Corey resisted the urge to laugh at children’s’ abilities to boast about just about anything, but he played along.

“Wow, so I’ll bet your Pokémon is pretty strong!” This part was just a matter of saying the right words with the right amount of cheerfulness and enthusiasm, and Corey did it with gusto.

“Er…” the Trainer’s confidence seemed to falter here and his chocolate-coloured eyes began to wander elsewhere. “I…guess…”

“Aw, c’mon, you look pretty tough! I bet behind those freckles is a battling heart of gold! That’s how Drake was, you know- shy and quiet, but a fierce battler!”

“Wow, Drake?” Shaun’s eyes immediately shot back to stare at the teen, eyes wide and mouth agape in awe.

“You better believe it! Of course, it did take a lot of hard work and battling, but you don’t get to be an Elite Trainer without a bit of practice, you know.” Corey’s grin widened as his gaze shifted upwards, eyes clouding over as if a bunch of thoughts were running through his head.

“Yeah, that’s what they say…” the young Trainer’s voice quieted as he spoke, also as if remembering something, something he had been told many a time before. There was a moment of silence as the two mulled over their own thoughts until Corey looked back down.

“Say, you know that when two Trainers’ eyes meet, it’s custom to battle- that’s how it works out here. So let’s have a go at it, right here and now!” Corey’s voice was all sincerity and his eyes widened enthusiastically, as if the idea was genius.

“Oh, uh, I haven’t battled any other Trainers yet…” Shaun mumbled, eyes dropping to look at the Pokéballs strapped around his waist. He dug the toe of one of his sandals into the ground and averted Corey’s eyes.

“So? Battling Trainers isn’t much different than battling wild Pokémon, and you look like you’ve done lots of that! What d’you say?” Corey took away a touch of eagerness, not wanting to scare the kid or look as if he was pressuring him. After all, what was wrong with an honest battle?

“Um, well, I did do a lot of battling here already…and there was this really tough Pidgeotto before…okay, let’s do it!” the young Trainer explained, mind made-up. He smiled somewhat nervously.

“That’s the spirit, Shaun old boy! I’ll run over here, and that’ll give us enough room to start!” Corey’s smile widened and he trotted over to a random spot that left their Pokémon a good few feet to battle freely.

“You ready, then? Okay, go, Shellder!”

“Yeah! I choose you, Bulbasaur!”

Two beams of white light materialized into the two Pokémon, and the battle commenced…




With a weak arm, Shaun recalled a green, toad-like Pokémon into its Pokémon, the small ice particles that had been clinging to the large bulb on its back melting as it disappeared in a beam of red light. The young Trainer trudged away, hanging his head dejectedly and letting his bright red locks fall over his eyes while Corey rested against another tree, a thin wad of bills in his hand and a grin spread from ear to ear across his face.

“Better luck next time, eh, Shaun?” he called gleefully as the young Trainer plodded slowly to Viridian City, and air of defeat surrounding him. “Hey, I thought your Grass-type would have the advantage, too! But I’m sure you’ll do better next time!” Corey let out a deep, booming laugh, not even trying to make out the ten-year-old’s mumbled response.

“Ahhhhh, those newbies never learn! But, the first battle’s always the toughest!” Corey chuckled as he fingered through his earnings. “Yup, Corey the Pouncer, that’s the one! They never know what cunning lies behind this friendly face! Those kiddies never learn that not everything is as happy-go-lucky as seem on TV, and who am I but an educator of the fine young Trainers, ha-ha!” Eyes twinkling, he pocketed the money and he looked back up at the sky, grinning as it darkened and just the smallest amount of sunlight could be seen from behind the western mountains.

In the distance, a Spearow cawed, as if in protest. Corey turned to the direction the sound had come from, hands on hips. “Well, a guy’s got to make a living somehow, doncha know!”



In a nearby Pokémon Center, three kids who had just become Trainers earlier that day buried their faces in their hands and wondered if every other day would be as miserable as their first…
 
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Sike Saner

Peace to the Mountain
Fwee, cute little thing, that was. ^^ I find Corey to be quite an interesting character, especially due to his interesting pastime… I wonder, are there only certain days of the year when trios of new trainers are sent out from Pallet Town? If so, I wonder where he might go to prey on newbies the rest of the time. I also wonder if he solely challenges newbies or if he ever takes on opponents with skill and experience more comparable to his own. And say—what would happen if one day some trainer came along who looked young for their age and seemed kind of meek or unsure of himself or herself, but in reality was just putting up a front to fool unsuspecting trainers and ended up wiping every last leaf and twig off the floor with him? XD But anyway, yeah, I’m always impressed with a character who inspires me to speculate about him or her like that. ^^

I also liked the way Corey spoke—he even said “doncha know”; I love that. :D I thought the dialogue in general was pretty good, for that matter, both his lines and Shaun’s.

And on a random note: for some reason, when that Spearow appeared, I thought it was going to drop a little white bomb on Corey’s head. XD Even though it clearly said that the bird was in the distance, that’s the assumption to which my brain immediately jumped when it saw the word Spearow. Lord only knows why. XD
 
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Eclipse

I AM GONE.
I enjoyed this. Very interesting to hear the point of view of the advanced trainer rather than the newbie. An interesting read!
 

Brian Random

I WAS FROZEN TODAY!!
Nice story you got there. It’s okay but it’s not the best there is because I didn’t get the excitement, I didn’t jump up and down for joy or anything but I did get a small giggle. The description was great, I like the characters, especially Corey with his naughty habit, I like that (better a naughty boy than a dirty one ^^), but I just didn’t get the utmost joy I usually get with your other fics but you say that it was late at night when you wrote this so I don’t blame you for the ‘lacking’. Overall, it was very good but not the best there is.

I agree with Sike. If you had that Spearow drop that white bomb on Corey, I’d be falling to the floor, laughing my head off. Really!
 

Psychic

Really and truly
Sike: Heh, yup- Corey's an...interesting guy. At first I was worried that I'd give off the impression that he was a pouncer in that he was some kind of sexual predator, which is why I found it incredibly funny in the way that you said "his interesting pastime" XD. And I believe that new Trainers are only given starters about once every few months, and until then, Corey probably either hangs out in his apartment or goes out drinking. Because Corey (or Caweeee, as he can also be called X3) is just like that. But unlike the irl Caweeee, Corey is a jerk and just...will do anything to get his way in the easiest possible fashion.

And XD I wanted to make sure the dialogue was light and Corey was really chummy. Thanks!


Eclipse: ^^ Glad you liked it! And yup, it felt important to do this more from Corey's point of view than Shaun's simply because to Corey, the kid is just one of many with whom he has no trouble taking advantage of, and the story is much more amusing when told from his side.


Isfahan: Well, it makes sense, doesn't it? When you think about it, what easier way is there than to take advantage of those you know you can defeat? I'm sure people on NetBattle do it all the time. Or so I assume. Thanks!


Brian: Yeah, this wasn't meant to be an exciting, riveting, edge-of-your-seat action story or dramatic reach-for-the-tissues tragedy. Just an ordinary tale of some teenager trying to make end's meat and the poor kid he has to step on.

However, it is an honour to know that you think so highly of my writing in general and I'm pleased to hear that it usually has such a great effect on you. Admittedly, the fact that I wrote it late at night is hardly an excuse as I did work on it for a week after; my true excuse is that this is more of a muse, of a simple story-telling than the heart-wrenching tale of two lovers or one creature wrestling with the question of what his role is in life; this is the kind of story that, if you lived in the Pokémon world, you would be most likely to hear on the news at 6:00.

And pfft, if the Spearow had dropped the bomb on him it'd have been much too optimistic and would have meant that Shaun had won in some small way...which wasn't the point of the story...or something.


Plus it's apparently good luck for a bird to poop in your hair. o_O



Thanks for the reviews!

~Psychic
 
Having read this one-shot last week, but being unable to review because of teh stupid spazzing forums, I have now had a chance to construct my thoughts.

When I heard that you were going to base this 'jerk' trainer on Nigel, teh Bug Catcher, I was surprised when I actually read teh one-shot because I had automatically assumed that teh trainer would be a Bug Catcher, but I was wrong. All in all, it was a good read. Teh only real problem I had with it was a Grass type like Bulbasaur can, and should be able to, easily defeat a Water type like Shellder.
 

Skysthelimit

Hoenn's Superstar
I enjoyed this. I'm usually considered a closet reader, but I guess you deserve to know how your story brought me five minutes of pure joy. [/nerdy rant]

I share my name with the main character, So it even made the story better. =D
 

katiekitten

The Compromise
XD Lovely. I got a nice giggle out of it, which was great. Ebil waiting trainers for the world! :)

To tell the truth, I didn't think this was odd at all. It's always fun just to write off the top of your head. =D
 

Psychic

Really and truly
Saphira: Well, Corey’s not based off of Nigel per say. I had just been reading the part with Nigel and I thought to myself- I wonder why there are so many Trainers at the beginning of the game. Wouldn’t they all move on to the next city a few hours after getting their starter? Then from there I got thinking and I just came up with the whole main idea behind Pouncer, so I wrote and this is what I got.

Teh only real problem I had with it was a Grass type like Bulbasaur can, and should be able to, easily defeat a Water type like Shellder.
In response to that, I feel as if I am pointing out the obvious to say that because Corey is noticeably older than Shaun, he has been a Trainer for much longer. Therefore, he is much more skilled at battling, has much more experience and has a Pokémon who is stronger and more experienced than the level 5 starters given out to newbies. A POKÉMON’S TYPE IS NOT THE ONLY THING THAT DECIDES A BATTLE. If one Trainer has a better strategy or stronger Pokémon, they are at the advantage.
Some Grade 5 kid who just starting learning advanced math isn’t going to be better at math than a Grade 10 teenager in an advanced math group. The kid in Grade 5 doesn’t know HALF the stuff the teenager does, you know. -_-

In any case, thanks for the review, but you lost this week’s game of “Millionaire.” Please try again next time.


Skysthelimit: Awww, why, thank you for coming out of the…well, if I say ‘closet’ it’ll make you sound like you’re gay, so…your shell of shyness. :D

I’m glad you liked it, and it’s cool that you guys share the name- I actually named him off a guy in my grade. ^^


katiekitten: XD Nice to hear that. And XD ebil- some day, they just might take over the world…or create Team Pouncer! YES! :D

I’ve actually never written off the top of my head like that before, but I’m glad I did- if I did it more often I wouldn’t have ten Word documents with rotting ideas sitting on my computer.
Thanks for the review!



Fwee- comments! =)

~Psychic
 
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