Preview for 'System'. What do you think? (warning - mild nudity)
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Warning: Mild nudity.
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Not long, mainly because it's not designed to be. Purely for atmosphere. Tell me if I've succeeded in expressing this.
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This prologue will not represent the nature of the story, but gives an opening to what is to come. Corruption by the Johto authorities, using pokemon as tools. Conspiracies fighting against the "Elementals" (perhaps a better name is an order? I'm aware of this, but sadly failed to have come up with anything better), humans that retained their ancestor's abilities that are closely linked with those of pokemon. The main character will steadily become aware of this and try to do something about it. Don't want to reveal too much, though.
Team Rocket will feature as scape goats.
NOTE: This fic is almost a kind of satire of real life (except it doesn't follow any kind of real life events). I do think the real governments are overlorded and conspiracies are the norm. Keep your eyes open. Keep your mind open. Don't trust ANYTHING. The governments are taking us for mugs.
What do you think? Due to lack of interest in my last fic by both me and readers, I've decided not to continue. It wasn't as well planned as I'd hoped. This one seems a little more promising to me.
### SPOILERS AFTER PROLOGUE ###
Warning: Mild nudity.
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Prologue
A rush of cold crept around my body like a million little spiders hijacking every inch of my freezing flesh. A wave of sickening realisation came over me… Right away I knew something was terribly wrong. I froze with fear, not knowing what I was going to see when I opened my eyes. I should have woken up at home… in my own bed. Where was my comfy duvet and pillow? I ran my fingers across the goose bumps all over my skin… why was I naked?
The floor was cold, linoleum that smelled of bleach. All I could do was just lay there, terrified. My breath quickened as thoughts ran through my mind: Was I in hospital? Was I a prisoner? Had I contracted some doomsday virus and had to be kept in isolation? After I had failed to come to any conclusion I began to think about my parents. I didn’t even know if they knew where I was. I opened my eyes to pitch darkness.
That’s when it came out of me. I screamed. I guess the shock of the situation was too much for me to handle, I wanted out of it any way possible. I felt my ears and face burn up as tears streamed down my face onto the cold floor. I screamed for my mum, my dad, anyone that could awaken me from this nightmare. Terror erupted from me as the black void of darkness seemed to close in on me, charging towards me from all directions. And my only response was my own echo mocking me.
It was a while before I stopped. The screams dwindled until they were nothing more than shaky sobs. No matter how badly I wanted to, I couldn’t stop myself from crying. It was something I tended to do a lot, I had a low tolerance to shock. But laying there, in the dark, I knew that crying wasn’t going to solve anything. Kind of half sobbing, I unsteadily rose to my feet, only to stumble backwards from the rush of blood from my head. My long hair hung over my breasts, and quite aware of my nudity, I feebly tried to use my arms to cover myself, despite there being no one around to see me. But what was bothering me more was the biting cold. I could only stand and shiver. There was nothing for me to see… Appart from what I wouldn’t remember.
A rush of cold crept around my body like a million little spiders hijacking every inch of my freezing flesh. A wave of sickening realisation came over me… Right away I knew something was terribly wrong. I froze with fear, not knowing what I was going to see when I opened my eyes. I should have woken up at home… in my own bed. Where was my comfy duvet and pillow? I ran my fingers across the goose bumps all over my skin… why was I naked?
The floor was cold, linoleum that smelled of bleach. All I could do was just lay there, terrified. My breath quickened as thoughts ran through my mind: Was I in hospital? Was I a prisoner? Had I contracted some doomsday virus and had to be kept in isolation? After I had failed to come to any conclusion I began to think about my parents. I didn’t even know if they knew where I was. I opened my eyes to pitch darkness.
That’s when it came out of me. I screamed. I guess the shock of the situation was too much for me to handle, I wanted out of it any way possible. I felt my ears and face burn up as tears streamed down my face onto the cold floor. I screamed for my mum, my dad, anyone that could awaken me from this nightmare. Terror erupted from me as the black void of darkness seemed to close in on me, charging towards me from all directions. And my only response was my own echo mocking me.
It was a while before I stopped. The screams dwindled until they were nothing more than shaky sobs. No matter how badly I wanted to, I couldn’t stop myself from crying. It was something I tended to do a lot, I had a low tolerance to shock. But laying there, in the dark, I knew that crying wasn’t going to solve anything. Kind of half sobbing, I unsteadily rose to my feet, only to stumble backwards from the rush of blood from my head. My long hair hung over my breasts, and quite aware of my nudity, I feebly tried to use my arms to cover myself, despite there being no one around to see me. But what was bothering me more was the biting cold. I could only stand and shiver. There was nothing for me to see… Appart from what I wouldn’t remember.
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Not long, mainly because it's not designed to be. Purely for atmosphere. Tell me if I've succeeded in expressing this.
### SPOILER BELOW ###
This prologue will not represent the nature of the story, but gives an opening to what is to come. Corruption by the Johto authorities, using pokemon as tools. Conspiracies fighting against the "Elementals" (perhaps a better name is an order? I'm aware of this, but sadly failed to have come up with anything better), humans that retained their ancestor's abilities that are closely linked with those of pokemon. The main character will steadily become aware of this and try to do something about it. Don't want to reveal too much, though.
Team Rocket will feature as scape goats.
NOTE: This fic is almost a kind of satire of real life (except it doesn't follow any kind of real life events). I do think the real governments are overlorded and conspiracies are the norm. Keep your eyes open. Keep your mind open. Don't trust ANYTHING. The governments are taking us for mugs.
What do you think? Due to lack of interest in my last fic by both me and readers, I've decided not to continue. It wasn't as well planned as I'd hoped. This one seems a little more promising to me.
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