Preview: Times in the Region of Bunure

[Nevermore916]

It's a continuation of the Anime, but it's darker and has new characters, pokemon and such. Here is a basic synopsis...

After dominating in the battle frontier, Ash is looking for a new challenge to go alone as Brock is called back to the gym at the death of his father, Max is sent to trainer's school in Rustboro and May is on a vacation in Lilycove. Just as Ash feels he is alone, he gets a call from Misty, who tells him that the gyms in Kanto are being shut down for a few months for the Gym Leader ranking in Bunure. The Gym leader ranking is where professionals from the International Pokemon League or IPL rank gym leaders across the globe to make sure they are up to standard. Misty invites Ash to this event and they are off. Arriving in Bunure they meet up with Norman and May. May joins them along with a psychic trainer named Glen. The four soon find out about the Bunure Global Tournament where trainers can participate in battles across the region in order to be enrolled in the Bunure Masters Tournament. The four set out for battles, contests, pokemon and many other surprises.

What do you think? I'm new here and I really want to make a good fic. This fic will be in episode form and will consist of 36 episodes. It will be up in a week to two weeks.

-Nevermore916

 

[Tale]

First off, hi! Welcome to the world of fanfics in SPPF, the best place on the forums in my opinion, too many arguments and disruption in most of the other sections. Anyway, if you manage to plod along in this area, taking in the advice and improving whenever and wherever you can, it doesn't take long to get a few friends around here. Most of us are friendly folk, although you do get the odd grouch who doesn't seem to regard the feelings of others in certain situations. Ignore those people and you'll get along just fine ^^.

Anyway, we all want to make good fics, we all want to impress others and match the standards of fanfic legends, and considering your organisation of the fic so far (you know how many chapters there are, whcih is a good sign), it shouldn't take long for you to become more well-known around here.

As for this 'preview', I must point out that this isn't regarded a preview here on the AC, although I can understand why you think it is. It would be a preview if it was a part of the actual story, a snippet, a bit that you want to share before posting the real thing. Its usually the prologue, but it can be taken from anywhere in the story, depending on the amount you've written, of course.

But anyway, you're new, so I'll give an opinion anyway.

Although I dislike the anime, partly because I've seen only a few episodes in earlier times (meaning the indigo league stuff), and partly because I just...dont like it...your story seems very well set out, you have a good idea of where this is going, and you seem very determined to make it a good one. I hope this means you'll graciously accept offered critisism wherever it may occur.

Although we dont really get to see your writing skill and style from this brief overview, I think this could turn out to be a pretty decent fic, if you stick to it. You'll find that most people (including myself) often abandon their fics before completion, or re-write it over and over again due to their personal dislike for the stuff they've already written. Try to avoid this, I know it will help. Just improve as you go and go at your own pace.

Alright, thats my long-winded advice over and done with. Good luck with the fic, and welcome to the forums. ^.^.