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Ragnarok Fanart... Again.

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Clockworkz

SURPRISE BUTTSECKS
A few of my personalities on TwilightRO...

Elindira, my Gunslinger in Payon Dungeon.
Notes: No, her roght pant leg isn't off. It was a bad attempt at shading the floor, but I said "F*ck it" and left it unfinished. Whatever. Her trenchcoat is massive. Gotta carry a lot of ammo, as well as a shotgun and pistol.

Soon to be Hunter, Goken.
Notes: The bow is too small, and the quiver seems a bit off. The arrows need to be laying in the quiver, not just hanging there, and the pocket on his sleeve is misplaced. His ear is also too high. I'll probably remove it altogether, since he has pretty floppy hair >_>

Critique, please. I wanna make these as best as I can.
 
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Seraphinu

Divine Beauty
I would first like to congradulate you. These pictures are wonderful. I love the expressions, the poses, the proportions are also excellent. Now, I have only a few crits. On elindora, the gun pokes off from her back a little too much. You may want to push it farther back. In reality, it wouldn't stick out that much and would likely fall off.

goken: Similar problem with the arrows. You should put them fartehr into the quiver, because they do look about ready to fall out. Otehrwise, excelllent work.

~Seraphi-kun
 
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Raunchy_fad

Ooh, maaaan!
Aw, man, you're totally great. What you have here shows true drawing talent, and makes me very, very happy. Now.. I WOULD give you critique, but I have terrible critiq..ing experience, so sorry I can't be of any help. :(

And ya know, since you can't download Ragnarok for iMacs, I've always wondered what those cute little blobby things are. Are they enemies, or what? Fill me in, man.
 
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Clockworkz

SURPRISE BUTTSECKS
Yeah. They're called Porings. The pink ones, at least. The orange ones are Drops, the purple ones are Marins, and the green ones are Poporings. Porings are generally the easiest monsters in the game, but other members of the poring family (Devilings, Angelings, Ghostrings) are not too simple to defeat.

I appreciate the comments, and I hope to see more of them ^_^
 
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EmberGryphon

Meowth Fanatic <3
First off- I do adore the new style, Clockworkz. :3 You seem to have gotten better with it, and it makes for a nice effect.

Elindora: I like her jacket (hey, an anime chick that's not in a bikini. =o Go figure.) and her face is pretty much perfect. ^~ There should be a little bit more... round, on the left side of her head (her right; our left). Does that make any sense? Like, her head above her face is the right size if she was bald, but it doesn't look like the left side is as big as the right, or like it has any bouncy anime-girl hair on it. Her arms look like they're bent at the elbows; if that's the case they are way too long and the elbow is too high, and if its not there's a random bend there. ^^() Her hands are a tiny bit too small. That is the most adorable bat ever. <3

Goken: I love the expression. (I also love anime men with facial scars. <3 But that's an Ember thing. >_>) Again, I have nothing to complain about with the face; the hair looks good, too. The lines are cleaner in this one and the proportions look great. Only two things: the arm on his far side is supposed to be bent towards the viewer, or so I assume because the hand is over the waist. The elbow looks cut off. If it's supposed to be foreshortened, it still shouldn't be that thin at the elbow, because the elbow shouldn't be that much skinnier than the wrist. (And on that topic, that wrist should be narrower anyway. ^_^) The other nitpick is more advice than critisism, but the chainmail idea can be better conveyed with crosshatching rather than scribbles.

All in all, though, I think they're great- I just enjoy critisising things completely without having to worry about hurting anyone's feelings. x3 Anticipating more art from you~
 
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Clockworkz

SURPRISE BUTTSECKS
Wow. Thank you so much. I'll get to work and try to patch these issues up right away. Expect a rescan with the next 24 hours. Really, you helped a lot, EmberGryphon ^^;;;

However, I have an explanation for the elbows issue on Elindira. It's a trench coat, so it comes down farhter than her hips. I guess I should just make the hips a bit more defined, as they are up higher than what you are preceiving. Also, I just realized that the trenchcoat is tough leather... I shouldn't accentuate her boobs as much as I did.... *runs off with his mechanical pencil, cackling like a madman*
 
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EmberGryphon

Meowth Fanatic <3
Hee, no problem. ^_^ Glad I could help.

Looking back, I can see what you're talking about with the trenchcoat. ^_^ Still, can't wait to see the rescans! :3
 
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Clockworkz

SURPRISE BUTTSECKS
Elindira... Again
I tried to fix a few things you guys, as well as my other artist friend pointed out. I think she looks a great deal better, but I wanna know what you all think. The lines going through her arms were by sketch lines for elbow placement and arm length, in case you're curious.
Goken is still being worked on a bit.
 
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EmberGryphon

Meowth Fanatic <3
When I can tell where the elbows are, Elindira look a lot better. ^_^ The smaller top does help to show where her torso ends and waist begin, and the thick-leather-hides-cleavage thing was a good move; the coat seems more solid. I still hold that the arms seem a little too long (even though they don't look as bad now that I can see they aren't bent. :3) and the hands are still a smidgen too small, if you ask me. ^^()

Goken still looks awesome. More defined chainmail. :3 And I didn't notice the poring before! <3!
 
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