~Raindrops on Roses~

[ShadowCloud62]

Since my other fic, ~+*Time's Sweetest Illusion*+~, is almost over, I decided to begin my next pokemon work.
Since TSI had a very harsh storyline, I decided to make this one a regular, slapstick kind of thing. Completely random.

So, my friends, the prologue...

Prologue

Bruteroot was not the type of pokemon who let others get to him. He was puny and a runt, many others called him that. He would shrug it off. So what? He could still beat the living daylights out of the largest Paras in the pack.

For a puny guy, he was pretty tough. Sure, he may have had the tiniest body of a red bug-like pokemon. Sure, he may have the smallest red mushrooms on either side of it's back. Sure, it's claws may not seem sharp. But they were. Bruteroot didn't give a hoot who claimed to be powerful, he knew he could beat anybody as long as they fought him. Often no one did these days. Meh, whatever. He could do whatever he wanted so long as he put his mind to it.

Mt. Moon was getting annoying. It was time for Bruteroot to go.

He was sick of having every Clefairy, Zubat, and Oddish fight him.

As a Paras, he knew it was time to go to bigger and better things....

....and so the misadventures of a Paras begin.





It seems like the stupidest story ever, but don't worry, just give it time...

 

[Literate]

When I saw Butteroot in the summary box, I thought, whoa a new city. But that doesn't seem the case. *coughs*

Cute! ^_^ A small.... runty... Paras. *ending enthusiam* I'm so out of it today. -_-

Well, just one place where there was a mistake:

Bruteroot didn't give a hoot who claimed to be powerful, he knew he could beat anybody as long as they fought him.

I only just realized it was Bruteroot, not Butteroot. Anyway. It could be "Bruteroot didn't give a hoot who claimed to be powerful as long as he knew he could beat anybody as long...." Or something. -_- It just doesn't seem right.

Anyway, I hope to see a new chapter soon. ^_^

~PEACE~

 

[PDL]

it's an okay start... but it could be longer... much longer... work on that.

keep it up.

 

[ShadowCloud62]

Thanks for the reviews. Now that I have finally completed my previous work, I can write full time for this story.

Chapter One

"C'mon, stand up and fight!"

Bruteroot rolled his eyes. This wasn't unusual on Mt. Moon's summit, yesterday it was a rather large Oddish, now it was a stupid young Zubat named Nook. He was one of the newborns in the annoying Zubat colony.

Nook was the same as Bruteroot, the runt of his colony. A tiny blue body with little legs as tiny as pins. The purple-colored wings were so tiny they were as wide as a Caterpie's nose, and in Nook's mouth were only two baby fangs, the other two had not grown in yet.

So why was Nook picking a fight with another runty Paras?

"Dude," Bruteroot's voice was casual and lazy as he stood in front of the pack of pokemon that surrounded him and Nook. The cries of the pokemon fell silent as everyone listened to what Bruteroot had to say.

"Dude," the Paras said again, the tiny mushrooms on his back seemed to twitch, "I'm old enough to be your freaking older brother."

"Ya don't look it, Runty!" yelled a Clefairy, and laughter erupted from the crowd like a volcano eruption.

Bruteroot dug his front claws into the dirt firmly and he yelled in a demanding voice, "Shaddup! I'm not done talkin' to this guy!"

The crowd once again fell silent as Bruteroot continued,

"Now, listen, kid. I'm pretty tough for a runt of a Paras. Ya sure ya wanna fight?"

"Heck yeah!" Nook demanded as he bared his two baby fangs, "C'mon, ya chicken or somethin'?!"

Bruteroot chuckled a little as he stepped forward, raising one claw, "Eh, you have guts, kid. I like you. But don't go crying to Mommy Zubat if you lose!"

Before Nook could even blink, he was sent backwards when Bruteroot slammed his claw down on him with a brutal Cut attack.

The crowd roared. It was like this everyday. Everyone thought Bruteroot was a weakling since he was such a runt, but when they got him into a fight, he was always victorious.

Nook spat out dirt as he flew up high, "Ya think ya so powerful, beat this!" he opened his mouth wide and large blue rings erupted from his mouth as he let out a powerful shriek.

The crowd roared in anger and covered their ears. Bruteroot smirked and leapt to the side right on time, dodging the Supersonic attack, "C'mon, ya think that harms me? I ain't that stupid, kid!"

With blinding speed, Bruteroot scurried up a tree and onto it's highest branch. He leapt off and onto the back of the runty Zubat.

"AHHHH! GET OFF!" Nook yelled, trying desperately to attack. Soon he was on the ground, defeated as Bruteroot finished using his Fury Swipes.

"Owww...." Nook said desperately as the crowd began leaving.

"Hey, Nook." Bruteroot called out.

The baby Zubat looked up, and with his echo vision he could clearly hear the Paras in front of him.

"That's your name, right?"

Nook nodded, "Yep," he flew up, but not too far, only about a few feet off the ground, "and you're Bruteroot. Everyone talks about ya. My mom says you're a runt."

"Yep, sure am. I hear you're the runt of the colony."

With a grimace, Nook nodded his small head, "Yeah. Everybody teases me. That's why I wanted to fight you and beat you. To gain respect."

Bruteroot laughed, "I fought everyone too. But hey, Mt. Moon's getting old for me. I'm planning to leave, travel the globe, tonight."

If Nook had proper eyes, he would've widened them, "Why?"

"Because, I'm getting sick of Mt. Moon. It's time to move on. Kinda wanna see what's out there." Bruteroot said, "Maybe I'll gain more respect if I battle all kinds of pokemon instead of just pokemon here in Mt. Moon."

Nook nodded, his whole body moving, "I understand. I wanna come too!"

Bruteroot raised an eyebrow, "You? Your mother wouldn't possibly let you."

"She wouldn't care. No one likes me in my colony anyway. Let me come with you!"

"Listen, Nooky, I don't have time to care for a little, bratty Zubat--!"

"I'm not a bratty Zubat! And my name's Nook!" Nook bared his two fangs angrily, "I promise I won't get in your way! Let me come with you!"

Bruteroot hesitated. Meh, it wouldn't be so bad to have some company. Then again, he wanted to be by himself, so he can think things through on his own.

He finally sighed and spoke his answer, "Fine. We're leaving tonight, midnight. You're gonna be up, right?"

"Yep! After all, us Zubat stay up at night! The sun's setting now, I'm gonna get some sleep!!"

"Okay, then, Nook. See ya tonight."

 

[Literate]

You know, you write so fast. I can't seem to keep up with the chapters. Anyway no problems, since I heard you're using Word Perfect or something like that. It was nice and they used slang. ^_^

My favorite line in this chapter is:

"Dude," the Paras said again, the tiny mushrooms on his back seemed to twitch, "I'm old enough to be your freaking older brother."

Yes, I can see it now. *floats off to day dream land* I use 'dude' a lot too.

~PEACE~

 

[Kutie Pie]

When I saw the name Bruteroot, I thought you were doing the Venasaur from the first movie.

;025; - You're so obessed with it, you just can't stop squealing at the names everytime they're on the screen.

*whacks* Whatever. A little baby Zubat named Noot... a Paras named Bruteroot...

;025; - Correction: A Venasaur named Bruteroot.

*whacks repeatedly with fan* AAARRRGGHHH! I sense a story plot between these two. But I don't know what. Raindrops on roses... Eh?

;025; - You'll see. MUAH HA HA HA HA!

-_-; Whatever Cheeky. Well, I'm going to keep my eye on this. See you soon!

~~~~~~~~~
*Kutie Pie* Please be kind to midgets!

 

[ShadowCloud62]

Wow....reviews for a very weird story...^_^ thanks, everyone! Don't worry, the title will make sense since it is explained next chapter.

Chapter Two

Bruteroot didn't expect Nook to be waiting for him at the entrance of Mt. Moon that night. He recognized the runty Zubat a mile away.

"Hello, Bruteroot!" Nook whispered a greeting, "Are we going?"

"Sure." Bruteroot personally didn't want this runt of a Zubat traveling with him. Number one, Nook was incredibly young and naive, and Bruteroot didn't have time to be raising kids like a parent. He wasn't good with it, since he was a loner all the time. Two, Nook was very weak in battle, what if they got into trouble and Bruteroot couldn't do anything? He just didn't have time for having a bratty little kid around.

But hey, there was also the lonely side of him, the sympathetic side. Nook was just like him, a runt, so why not have him come alongside him?

Nook flew out of the damp, mossy cave and into the calm, cool night.

Bruteroot followed, his eyes seeing clearly in the dark. Looking up at the flying Zubat, he asked, "How can ya see?"

"Huh?" Nook said, flapping his wings uncontrollably, struggling to stay airborne.

"How can you see if ya don't have eyes?" Bruteroot asked again, "I mean, I can see in the dark, but what about you?"

"Us Zubat have echo vision, y'see?" Nook said, his squeaky child's voice piercing the quiet, "We don't got eyes, we just use our ears, see? We can hear, but with our echo vision, we can also see images in our head. Our ears give us that. Zubat, Golbat, and Crobat have the sharpest ears."

"Golbat and Crobat?" Bruteroot never heard of such pokemon.

"Us Zubat's evolutions. Mommy always told us that the elders were Crobat, the final evolutionary forms to Zubat. Golbat was our second evolutionary form. Personally, the evolution stuff creeped me out, I mean what's wrong with being just a Zubat?"

Bruteroot had to agree, "Meh, you actually got a point there. Us Paras are supposed to turn into these Parasect thinga-ma-jigs. Personally, I've seen Parasect, and they're UUUUUUGLY!!!!"

Nook giggled a little as they proceeded further into the forest, "How do they look?"

"Bigger than us. They got one single huge mushroom on their back. I mean, how can they stand on their legs? And they got these HUGE pincers, larger than mine. Larger than a Kingler's, even."

"No way..." Nook was amazed.

"Plus, Parasect got those weird bug eyes. Paras don't got those, just normal, emerald eyes." the Paras finished his explanation.

Nook nodded his head, "No offense, but your evolutionary form sounds ugly."

"They are. There's no way I'm evolving, even if I am bigger than this."

Bruteroot noticed Nook sweating from flapping his wings so much. Come to think of it, Nook was small enough to be on Bruteroot's back...

"Hey, Nook. You look tired, get on my back," Bruteroot said as he stopped walking.

Nook sighed gratefully and perched on the Paras' back, "Thanks."

"Don't mention it. Just don't eat my mushrooms, they're poison. We Paras have them to stop our enemies. Don't even touch 'em either, they got an Effect Spore."

"What's an Effect Spore?" Nook asked.

"Well, us Paras and Parasect have these mushrooms. Once enemies make contact with 'em, they either get paralyzed, poisoned, or put to sleep. That gives us a huge advantage."

"Oh," Nook said, "no wonder you're so invincible in battle."

"Meh, I'm not 'invincible', I just cream anyone who stands in my way." Bruteroot replied simply, as if he was merely talking about the weather.

Nook was amazed at this information, "Wow, that's awesome, Brute--brute--um...."

"Bruteroot."

"Oh, yeah...." Nook replied sheepishly, "....sorry, it's a little difficult pronouncing your name..."

"Then call me a nickname, Grassy, Parry, I don't care."

Nook instantly spoke, "The first part of your name, Brute. That's easy to say for me, instead of one whole tongue twister."

"All right, then. Guess I'm officially knighted to Brute, then."

"Yeah, Brute! And me, Nook!" Nook said proudly.

"Yep....Brute and Nook..." Bruteroot said. Actually, that combination didn't sound all too bad.




I know, I know, it's boring so far...don't worry, next chapter Bruteroot and Nook meet a pokemon that isn't supposed to be here in Kanto...

 

[Literate]

Nice. ^_^ Nook is very cute and all. Acting so innocent. ^_^

Parasect so big and ugly. I actually liked that comment.

Well, there was one little mistake:

Personally, the evolution stuff creeped me out, I mean what's wrong with being just a Zubat?"

The second comma's supposed to be a period. There's too much commas already.

I hope to see another chapter soon.

~PEACE~

 

[HB5squared]

Excellent job, I really like the story so far, so mainly this post is just a thumbs up not a review.

I know, I know, it's boring so far...don't worry, next chapter Bruteroot and Nook meet a pokemon that isn't supposed to be here in Kanto...

Could it be [SPOIL]Roselia[/SPOIL] considering the title and all.

It's a good title and excellent story, with plots like this it's best to have little description like you have.But If I could say a constructive thing on that it would be "Mt. Moon" Even with little description you could help, I assume that they were inside like a cave area, but some depict "Mt. Moon" as an actuall mountain so I was a little bit lost there.

Chapter 2 was nice I can just see Nook on BruteRoots back walking outside of the cave and into the grass.

OVerall- Excellent!