Wow! I don't think it looks rushed. There's abviously alot work in it. It doesn't realy need more detail. Compared to most of the crap fan art posted on this site it's genius.
It's a lovely image, the whole design of it is rather gorgeous. I like the whole whispyness of it all.
I don't really know what else I can say.
I want to see this as a coloured or at least inked piece, I think it could really benefit from that, to make it stand out more and all.
Anyways, like I said, it's quite lovely and you should be very proud of what you've done.
Interesting. A simple pencil drawing generated more comments than 2 fully colored pics. Last thread went dead with only one response. But then again, it DID have that pesky rating warning on the title. D: The idea of this image came from the series "Yu-Gi-Oh" (the part in some of the Shadow Games where parts of a person would disappear as they incurred damage). Once I'm done with other stuff, I'll give my new set of colored pencils a good workout on this. And thanks for the comments. <3