Rate it. My new poke. (No color)

[Raito Clouds]

(Yea, I hate coloring).

So. . . I was drawing random things and drew this. At of all the crap I drew, I liked this one best. It's all pencil. (Don't make fun of the scratch lines. That's just how I draw). You can see the outline of it's (maybe) evolution (which I put on the back of the sheet and scanner got that, too. <__<).

Bio:
>__>, It's called Dophitine (Daw-fih-tine). Pure water poke. Only found rarely underwater. :|

**Sorry it's soo huge. @__@

 

[Raito Clouds]

>__>, A bit smaller now.

Edit: Thanks.

 

[whiteabsol]

You based this off a swordfish, yes? Good job on it ^_^

 

[Raito Clouds]

Swordfish/Dolphin, Yea.

Thanks.

 

[Raito Clouds]

Poor kid didn't read the rules. ;_;

Does anyone have any critism or long comments to help out on my next "project"?

 

[Kinginsoar]

If you can draw THIS, you'd make a really good sprite of it. I know so.

 

[Who Said Pikachu?]

You're not really gonna get long comments on simple pictures, especially those in pencil without colour.
Anyways.
It's a very cute design, nice little fishy thing. Bout the only things I'd comment is pinch it in a little more at the tail base,might look a little better.
Also clean up your work a bit more, rub out those lil line bits you don't need and once you've scanned it play with the contrast and such so you've got nice solid dark lines on a plain background.
Other than that, like I said, nice little fishy thing.

 

[[Kingdra]]

Ehhh It's not great but not bad

 

[Flygonzilla]

Hah, that's pretty cool. Whenever I draw stuff in pencil, I always have fuzzy edges too, and I often regret it when I make them more sharply-defined. I reckon, its belly could use a little more bulge, and like what who said pikachu said, the base of the tail could be thinner. Puurdy! And I can't wait to see the evo.

That nose will be a *nightmare* to sprite though

 

[Raito Clouds]

Ok, ok. Thanks alot guys! Your comments and advice have helped alot!! At the moment I need to go to school so when I get back I'll start fixing it up. (And maybe upload the evo).

 

[Tip The Waitress]

nice, yet kind of plain to me.

 

[JulieArticuno]

It looks like a narwhal to me, whgich is a whale with a long tusk.

~JulieArticuno~;144;

 

[Raito Clouds]

Loosely based on that. >__>, Sorry I couldn't get the updated pictured. I had so much homework! I'll try tomorrow!!

 

[.Bambi.]

If you're not going to color it, could you at least say what colors it would be?

I personally think it's okay. Things I love about it is the dorsal fin, barbed nose, and lazy eyes. Love the lazy eyes. Other than that, there's not much to grasp onto here. It's like trying to hug Lindsay Lohan D:

 

[Avegaille]

Hmm, seems to be a fusion of a swordfish and a dolphin? ._.

But anywas, it looks good for a start... =P Maybe if you don't like coloring, trying doing some grayscale shading...