Psychic Umbreon said:
Psychic and Renegade: I'm not asking for characters, so get that through your heads. I've got characters of my own already, I'm simply asking for opinions.
omfg, no mattr wat u post, ur alwayz asking 4 chracterz! wat is rong wiv u?!?!?! ST0P POSTED TREADS ASKING 4 CHRACTERS! ST0P IT, oR U WIL GET A BAN!
Congratulations, you're coming up with your own characters like every other author out there.
So, remind me again...what's the point of this thread?
All I see is a writer who keeps scraping a fic that is domed to fail, wanting to repost it and make it better by doing minor things like changing the teams, not even editing the Prologue. But then decided she was too lazy and completely ignored all her reviews, and instead reopened the fic so she could continue, knowing herself that the entire story, characters and all, was one bad cliché.
So you're back to trying to restart it. Again and again you get back to the beginning- you have a truck load of fresh cement at your fingertips, but a road is already paved. What you have to do, dear little Umbreon of Psychic, is pretend the road isn't there and start it from scratch. Don't go back and continue paving the road you started before, because the surface is craggy and uneven and there are huge, gaping potholes, and they're not only from erosion.
Make your road go in a different direction. You can follow the way that old path zigged and zagged, but don't make it wind too much, lest we get dizzy while driving on it. Don't copy the clumps and holes in the pavement, and find out how to make it run smoothly so the ride is enjoyable and nice to look at.
So, now you seem, to want to start paving the roads. You have the tools at your feet, the experience from last time and advice given to you multiple times. Now you have to start using these tools and start with your road, as you want just boldly told us with the title of this thread.
But what good is just telling us? I mean, this is a public service announcement…directed at two people. Well, two reviewers and a bunch of readers.
First of all, most people have never heard of, never mind read your fic. They knew nothing to begin with, and still know nothing.
Those who have read your fic know you’re editing it, but don’t know how.
Psychic Umbreon said:
The teams
Alexandra
Blastoise
Pidgeot
Victreebel
Onix/Steelix
Ninetales
Dragonite
Jules
Venusaur
Pikachu
Sandslash
Gengar
Arcanine
Seadra/Kingdra
Micheal
Charizard
Nidoking
Primeape
Gyarados
Alakazam
Electabuzz
This honestly tells us nothing. Other than the fact that these three names have Pokémon that are all fully-evolved, powerful and all rather popular.
As Yami said, you could have at least given brief character bios. For all me know, Alexandra Jules and Michael might be alien owls who intend to drain the world of intelligence so Earth is full of idiots who will serve the owls coconut milk using their empty heads as bowls.
But nope; we know nothing of these character’s histories, personalities, appearances, even ages and genders.
You already posted a thread like this. If I remember correctly, you just posted the ‘original’ teams, and then the ‘revamped’ teams, saying you were rewriting a story and asking us if this was good. Telling us nothing about the characters. Telling us nothing about the plot.
You’re just going over the same mistakes here.
Do you want our help? Are you asking for our help and advice?
Tell me now.
Because if you are not interested in our help, then that’s fine. But if you don’t want our help, don’t post.
If you DO want our help, we don’t mind. We really don’t.
But you have to give us something to help you
with.
That means giving us the details. The plot, the background, the idea of the fic. That way, you can get help and advice, find where some of your mistakes are, as well as hook some potential readers.
Because, let’s face it; nobody is easily impressed by a fic that simply follows the Fire Red/Leaf Green story line.
Sound fair to you?
~Psychic
