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Landonn
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Postponed For Remake
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I rated this thread as 1 before I even read it because I knew I'd be in for a mediocre read. Let's just say that "Red And Green comics" did not disappoint in that respect. This "comic" is horrible. Let's go over why...
Graphically it's really quite ugly. The battle scenes are DREADFUL. Click here to learn how to make them properly. It may take more work on your part, but if you'd like to make a quality comic that's what you have to do. Like most of the newbies that post their journey comics, you didn't read ANY of the tutorials or FAQs, did you? That's a BIG mistake, because if you had you would know what and why TUP is bad and why journey comics that do nothing original like this are garbage. Not only did you use TUP, but you colored it all in green. Even the worst of comic authors who use TUP color code. You didn't even do that. Real comics don't use TUP. In the future use speech bubbles. There are various places where parts from sprites have been chopped off and are lying around. The placement of the text in the battle scenes lacks any intelligence at all.
Sorry, I thought I'd correct you: his sprite IS Gary's. -_-
In Pokémon, the names of certain things like attacks ("Night Shade" for example) are always capitalized. The same goes for the names of Pokémon. It's written as "Haunter", not "haunter". "Pokémon" too is capitalized, and an accent is used on the 'e'. Numbers below 100 are always spelled, so '1' should actually be written as 'one'. There are NUMEROUS grammatical errors. Too much to list. When we refer to ourselves, as in "I went to the store" we always capitalize "I". You wrote "i" quite a few times. Either you are blind and incapable of proofreading, completely lazy or you truly aren't aware of this simple rule that a Grade 2 would probably understand. When we use contractions we utilize an apostrophe. Therefore, "don't" is spelled as such, not "dont" and "let's" is spelled as such, not "lets". Various times you don't capitalize the names of locations. These names, like those of people are capitalized. "New York City" is written as such, not "new york city". The same with Pokémon names. "Viridian Forest" is written as such, not "Viridian forest" or "viridian forest". "Pewter City" is written as such, not "pewter".
Like most of the comics I've had give a reality check lately, your comic HAS no "plot" to review. Similar to a nonexistent storyline, I predict that your comic has a nonexistent future.
The blueguymeter™ says...
Graphics 2/10
Most of it is done absolutely wrong.
Wording, Grammar and Spelling 2/10
Quite a bit of errors. QUITE.
Storyline 0/10
You don't have one, and there's nothing interesting or funny to make up for it.
Effort 3/10
You obviously didn't do a very good job, and I don't think you really tried very hard, or as hard as you could have.
Potential 0/10
I don't think it has one.
You score a 14/100 on the blueguymeter™!
I rated this thread as 1 before I even read it because I knew I'd be in for a mediocre read. Let's just say that "Red And Green comics" did not disappoint in that respect. This "comic" is horrible. Let's go over why...
Graphically it's really quite ugly. The battle scenes are DREADFUL. Click here to learn how to make them properly. It may take more work on your part, but if you'd like to make a quality comic that's what you have to do. Like most of the newbies that post their journey comics, you didn't read ANY of the tutorials or FAQs, did you? That's a BIG mistake, because if you had you would know what and why TUP is bad and why journey comics that do nothing original like this are garbage. Not only did you use TUP, but you colored it all in green. Even the worst of comic authors who use TUP color code. You didn't even do that. Real comics don't use TUP. In the future use speech bubbles. There are various places where parts from sprites have been chopped off and are lying around. The placement of the text in the battle scenes lacks any intelligence at all.
Landonn said:His sprite looks like gary and personality is almost like it ,too.
Sorry, I thought I'd correct you: his sprite IS Gary's. -_-
In Pokémon, the names of certain things like attacks ("Night Shade" for example) are always capitalized. The same goes for the names of Pokémon. It's written as "Haunter", not "haunter". "Pokémon" too is capitalized, and an accent is used on the 'e'. Numbers below 100 are always spelled, so '1' should actually be written as 'one'. There are NUMEROUS grammatical errors. Too much to list. When we refer to ourselves, as in "I went to the store" we always capitalize "I". You wrote "i" quite a few times. Either you are blind and incapable of proofreading, completely lazy or you truly aren't aware of this simple rule that a Grade 2 would probably understand. When we use contractions we utilize an apostrophe. Therefore, "don't" is spelled as such, not "dont" and "let's" is spelled as such, not "lets". Various times you don't capitalize the names of locations. These names, like those of people are capitalized. "New York City" is written as such, not "new york city". The same with Pokémon names. "Viridian Forest" is written as such, not "Viridian forest" or "viridian forest". "Pewter City" is written as such, not "pewter".
Like most of the comics I've had give a reality check lately, your comic HAS no "plot" to review. Similar to a nonexistent storyline, I predict that your comic has a nonexistent future.
The blueguymeter™ says...
Graphics 2/10
Most of it is done absolutely wrong.
Wording, Grammar and Spelling 2/10
Quite a bit of errors. QUITE.
Storyline 0/10
You don't have one, and there's nothing interesting or funny to make up for it.
Effort 3/10
You obviously didn't do a very good job, and I don't think you really tried very hard, or as hard as you could have.
Potential 0/10
I don't think it has one.
You score a 14/100 on the blueguymeter™!
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Landonn
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Well i am new to this thing so thanks for the tips.
To not completly have to redo the sprites, I might have an event that like changes them, if that doesnt work then i will redo them.And the text thing i will fix it all, i was just new to comic making and was eager to get them posted, sorry, and the plot thing i was getting at in 3rd comic.Thanks for the harsh comment, it got me thinking straight. off to redo! Kudos and Thanks again
To not completly have to redo the sprites, I might have an event that like changes them, if that doesnt work then i will redo them.And the text thing i will fix it all, i was just new to comic making and was eager to get them posted, sorry, and the plot thing i was getting at in 3rd comic.Thanks for the harsh comment, it got me thinking straight. off to redo! Kudos and Thanks again
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I like the comics =P