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reds new adventure in hoenn

what do you think of this comic?

  • dude,this so suck's

    Votes: 2 20.0%
  • never make other comic like this again!

    Votes: 2 20.0%
  • good,need improving tho

    Votes: 3 30.0%
  • good

    Votes: 1 10.0%
  • this comic rocks, make more!

    Votes: 2 20.0%
  • i hate this comic!

    Votes: 0 0.0%

  • Total voters
    10
  • Poll closed .

metal gear solid

Dont mess with snake
This time i'm back for good.

Take the who are you test!

[Volume 1][001][002][003][004][005][006][007][008][008][009][010]

[Volume two!] [011] [012] [013] [014]-------------------------------------------
Newest episode: Episode [014]
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Credit:
Ty for the spriters resource for making all the background and pokemon.
Ty for serebii forums for letting me post this comic.


Special
Little timmy no tell

banners
reds adventures in shinou (makeing it in about 3weeks or so)
 
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nashie1

Well-Known Member
Sprites and stuff are fine but due to lack of custom content thats not suprising.

Grammar and spelling could use some work (in the comic and in general) for instance: Board not bord. Also you wouldn't say 20 min's in real life most probably, you would more than likely say minutes instead.

This is quite a cliched plot too.
 

metal gear solid

Dont mess with snake
Sprites and stuff are fine but due to lack of custom content thats not suprising.

Grammar and spelling could use some work (in the comic and in general) for instance: Board not bord. Also you wouldn't say 20 min's in real life most probably, you would more than likely say minutes instead.

This is quite a cliched plot too.
ok i will work on an updata
 

Sailor Merury

Butterflys rock!
I like it. It's funny. Hope it gets updated soon!
 

Poke_fan

Yeah! Kiss her Now!
It is not bad but you need to space a litle between words. Also speech bubles for each caracters would be good.
 

Drei

Rockman Fanatic
The people gather to say good bye. That was done in the ANIME! He doesn't have his new clothes on. That just screams lazy. So does the text because you need bubbles, not All in one box. Daisie's sprite is over Blue's sprite in the 7th panel. When in his room, Red doesn't say anything and there are no clothes on the bed. These are nickpicky but some have been said already. If you improve on all of these you can have a very good comic.
 

Drei

Rockman Fanatic
Booyar? I saw a bug catcher recolor, which is bad. The evolution screen sucks. Effects bad but a little good. The panels are uneven and oen of them is broken. I suggest stop making comcis until you can get better at making sure they look good. Remeber, quality over quantity.
 
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metal gear solid

Dont mess with snake
Now, i dont want this comic to die out.
Anywayz new episode is up.
(edit) ~ the lastest episode now is 012, just to let you pplz know.
 
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munchlaxboy

Catching up on XY
It's good. Two things you should really improve on:

1. Grammar.
2. Make the person who is talking first have their speech bubble on top. It's much easier to understand.
 

Cursed

Heroic Sociopath
It's a decent idea to continue the story of the Fr/Lg hero, but there are some very dire problems:

1)Why go to Hoenn? He just arbitrarily goes to the Hoenn region? No motivation? Just a whim?
2)Typos. Be careful with those as they ruin the comic very easily. I recommend typing any text in Microsoft word to check whether you've made any.

And some good points:
1)Hooray! You've avoided a cliche badge quest! Several people make this dire mistake, and you were wise enough to avoid it.
2)You were obviously planning to change Red's appearance(I hope). Try to do that as soon as possible.
 
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