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Rose Love Bonds (contestshipping) PG-13

Xiang

Well-Known Member
It has made its return. Yeah. I felt the need to save this fanfiction for the sake of my sanity.

It doesn't have much description, really, but that's how its supposed to be. Too much description had always drove me away from reading and writing my own fanfiction even. Its not very different, except some more stuff inserted. Every chapter is neccessary.

Chapter One
Fateful Meeting! Green Lonely Savior!

Prince Drew gazed out over the edge of the balcony, recovering from his horrifying encounter from meeting Princess Grace. His green eyes sighed again in exasperation. Why did he have to go through all of this?

His father wanted him to get married, but he had to find the suitable princess.

Grace was awful! She was too tall and too recklessly physical. One slap had sent him flying across the room! Everything after that was just pain, pain, pain. She was loud and too rough, and she didn't seem to think of him before she moved. Drew felt beaten and tired after even trying to eat lunch with her.

He had been meeting princesses from all across the world. They came in many varieties. Some were short, tall, fat, skinny, loud, shy, cold, friendly- there were all sorts. Only one seemed to catch his attention: Princess Kasumi from Kanto. He liked her tomboyish attitude. She was the only one with orange hair. But she had one problem: she didn’t like him. She thought of him as conceited and plain, though did say that he was cute and polite, but not the one for her.

Drew leaned on the rail, and a tear slid down his face and fell into the rose garden.

He felt like a prisoner in his father’s castle. At least it was his free time today, but there was nothing to do, and so much time.

He peered over the castle wall, envying the villagers, who were bustling about with so much to do. Why couldn't he have a more exciting life?

~ ~ ~

May and her brother Max hid behind a wall. They felt empty from hunger and peeked around stealthily.

Max shuddered. “Sis, are you sure we won’t get caught stealing food again?”

She laughed at him. “Scardey-cat! Fine, I’ll do it! You’ll be eating in no time!”

Max didn’t bother to make a comeback. He bit his lip, still doubting that they could make it again.

May watched as the salesman turned around to speak with a costumer and took off, aiming for an apple.

The salesman quickly turned around and caught her by the arm. “You again!” He yelled menacingly.

May struggled to be freed of his grasp, but she was too weak. Guards in silver armor and weapons gathered around her and took her to the palace. "Max!"

"Sis!" her brother cried back helplessly.

~ ~ ~

A guard walked into the room and bowed to the king. “Your Majesty, we have a visitor. She has just attempted thievery.”

The king frowned and pointed at one of his servants. “You, go fetch the prince.” He's got to see how to deal with these terrible people, the king thought with a sigh.

The maid nodded and hurried up the stairs.

~ ~ ~

Drew sat on his bed, bored. He flopped onto the green pillow and stared up at his ceiling, which was painted a ground view of the top of the trees. He also had a sunroof, but it was cloudy today, deeming the glass useless. Then he turned his attention to the glass vase with roses. No, the maid had already changed them today. He took one out and sniffed it. It soothed his spirit.

There was a rushed knock at the door, but whoever knocked didn’t wait for permission to come in. The hired girl rushed in.

“Karla, what is it?”

“Your father needs you,” she said, panting. “In the throne room, we have a visitor.”

~ ~ ~

Drew stood next to his father’s throne. It was ruby red velvet, edged with gold swirls. It stood taller than the King himself, so there was a stairway up to the seat.

The guards pushed a girl in.

She looked up and gazed around her surroundings. amazed by the size of the enormous room and the beautiful and complicated decorations. She had chestnut brown hair, and sapphire blue eyes that sparkled fearfully.

The king stared down at her. “Identify yourself, commoner.”

The girl obviously did not like being called such a degrading name and scowled. “May.”

Drew looked at her, amazed by her voice. It sounded somehow precious. It sounded like pearls dropping into water, rounded and sweet.

The king ignored her pleasant voice and boomed at her. “What did you do?”

May shuddered under his booming voice. “I tried to steal from the market,” she admitted shamefully.

Several of the servants gasped. The king ignored them and shouted at her. "Why?"

The girl looked away. "We can't afford food, so-"

"That's rather too bad, isn't it?" the king replied impatiently. Drew glared at his father. Why did he have to be so... mean?

May stomped her foot in exasperation. "You wouldn't understand how hard life is for-"

"I hardly care. Now, you can spend the rest of your life working for me, or just be sentenced to death because I have no use for you and you cause enough trouble," the king told her glumly.

Drew gaped at his father, shocked. His father was kind to him, but so cruel to others. That's not the kind of ruler I want to be. He looked back at May, unable to take his eyes off of her.

"I'd rather die than work for someone like you," she shouted at him.

"This impertinence! Seize her, guards, and prepare the sword," he ordered.

The guards grabbed her arms like they were sticks of gold. She didn't resist. Drew didn't like the feeling that rose in him. Something about her wanted him to keep her alive. He didn't understand what it was.

"Stop!" he yelled, and everyone in the room turned their attention to him. He grew nervous. "Don't... kill her. She'll be a servant, whether she'd like it or not."

May glared at him and he shrugged back, a stream of blush appearing on his face.

"You'll trim the rose bushes," the king said. "Do a good job of it."

Drew smiled. The rose bushes were just outside his bedroom! He could see her and talk to her everyday! It was a very pleasant thought. We could become good friends!

May, on the other hand, scowled. What the heck is he thinking?!
 

DanK84

Manyula Trainer
Really good so far. I don't believe I've taken a glance at the older version of this fic, so this is the first time I've heard of a plot like this. Yeah, I don't have any crit for this chapter. Sorry. But anyway, good luck on the next chapter.
 

Haruka Kinomiya

Well-Known Member
Cool, I've read the older version of this fic before I joined serebii, and I really enjoyed it! Good work and I can't wait for the next chapter.
 

Stephy

candies!!!11
I saw the older version, but didn't reply to it because I hadn't joined yet. xP

I loved how you put them as prince and princess, I've never seen anyone do that before, and this is Original. xD

I can't wait for the next chapter, and hope Shuu gets his...um, wife soon! xD
 

Xiang

Well-Known Member
Thank you for the replies, and just so you know, Drew isn't more than thirteen in this fic, and neither is May.

Rated PG

Chapter 2
First Love to the Rose! Deceiving Eyes?

Drew woke up the next morning and found that he had fallen asleep in his clothes again. The sun was barely up, but his eyes would not stay closed again.

His maid, Becky, rushed into his room and hurried him up. She gasped when she saw his wrinkled clothes threw at him a change of clothes.

She scolded him. “Today is not laundry day, dear, and if you sleep in your clothes, what will Princess Abby think of you? This is all I have today, I’m sorry.” The plump redhead shoved the clothes into his face. He fell back onto his pillow lazily and said nothing.

Becky was the one who hated giving bad first impressions, especially in front of royalty. If something went wrong, she rushed and made Drew rush too.

“Princess Abby is a graceful and beautiful coordinator, and you are not going to meet her in your so-called pajamas! Up, up, no time to waste!” She flew out of the room and left Drew to change.

But Drew wasn’t the rushed type. He pulled on his outfit for the day: an indigo shirt with a purple jacket with a high collar and aquamarine jeans, in other words, casual clothes. Then he put on his golden crown, which was engraved with the print of a rose. He stepped outside onto his balcony and breathed in the morning fresh air, mixed with the scent of the roses.

Becky burst through his door again. “Dear, Princess Abby is here. You’d better get down while I clean your room! Go, go, go!” She pushed him out.

Drew chuckled at her hurriedness and walked down the stairs with the scarlet, velvety rug lined with a strip of gold. The guards let him through the door leading to the lobby, which had his father’s throne.

The front doors opened to reveal a girl older than Drew in a red, Chinese dress. She had blue hair in pigtails. Her posture had a superior look to it and her attire gave her a proper and noble look.

“Your Majesty,” she said as she curtsied. “I am Princess Abby. Where is Drew?” She looked around the big room and admired the marble floor and golden chandelier.

Drew thought she was OK so far, and ran down his mental princess checklist.

Ok, she was beautiful, she dressed nice, had a really nice voice (but nothing compared to who was it? May's), and had good manners. He had to talk to her to find out the rest. Her smile was warm and Drew relaxed.

~ ~ ~

Drew checked off “easy to please” as Abby admired his room. She loved the ceiling, it made her feel calm, she said. The entire room had a nature theme, and she oohed and aahed over the plushies he had collected as a young prince. But she especially loved his balcony. She ran over and sniffed and sighed happily as she looked at the rose bush garden.

“You have a beautiful view of a beautiful garden!” She exclaimed.

Drew stood next to her and they both spotted May trimming the bushes.

Abby stared at May and turned to Drew with a funny expression on her face. “Who’s that?”

“That’s May, she trims the bushes once a week,” he said, again not able to take his eyes off of her.

Abby huffed. “Why are you looking at her like that? She’s just a servant!”

May heard this and turned an angry red at this comment. Drew's eyes shined with concern- she had cut herself with the tools in her sugar coated fury.

~ ~ ~

Abby walked out the door and kissed good-bye to Drew. “I hope to hear a ‘yes’ from you! Write soon!”

The king sighed. “That’s the last audition this week, what do you think of her, Drew? She may be older, but she’s nice, don’t you think?”

Drew broke out of his trance and faced his father. “Er, I guess she’s OK...”

The king was delighted at his answer and grinned. “Free time until dinner, OK, son?”

Drew nodded glad to be able to do whatever he wanted. He took the right exit to the rose bushes.

~ ~ ~

“Hey,” he said to May.

May smiled as he walked by. “Hello, Your Highness.”

Drew grimaced. “Just call me Drew.” He watched her trim the bush and she dropped the scissors.

“I’m sorry, just got cut here today…” May said picking the scissors up and blushing in embarrassment.

Drew put a concerned face on, stuffed his hand into his pocket, and took out a band-aid. “For you.”

May took the band-aid reluctantly. “Thank you, Your- I mean, Drew.” She opened the wrapper thing around it and placed it on the cut, which was bleeding still very slightly.

She picked up her scissors cut a rose off. Drew picked it up and took a good look at it. It still had a fresh drop of dew among its red petals.

Karla, one of the youngest hired girls grabbed Drew by the arm. “Your father has an announcement to make, and he needs you.”

Drew turned to May. “May?”

May turned around. “Yes?”

Drew tossed her the rose. “Yours to keep.”

May turned crimson as she caught the flower. The maid then dragged him away.

~ ~ ~

"Prince Satoshi to the North has been acting strange lately. I am going to discuss matters with him, but the trip will take a couple of days.

Drew stood next to his father’s empty throne. His father was climbing down the steps. “While I’m gone, everything should go as normal. If anything happens to me, Chris will take over.”

Drew grimaced. Chris was his older brother, and he was on a trip through the Chimney Mountains. Chris had fallen in love with a former coordinator named Julie.

But Chris was mean to him and would not rule the kingdom fairly, Drew thought for sure.

The king sadly waved goodbye to his son and Drew waved back, hoping to see that plump face again. The horse then rode off, and many other hooves followed it.

Drew sighed as he returned to his room. But first, he had a visit to pay.

~ ~ ~

May was sitting in her cupboard under the stairs, writing in a diary she had used for half a year. She wrote by the dim candlelight, but her eyes were used to it.

For me in the future,

Today I was out working when the prince, Drew, as he wants me to call him, gave me a band-aid for my cut and allowed me to keep a rose I trimmed. That was very nice of him.

He's nicer than I thought he would be. I heard from Mama that many princes care only for themselves, but there are some who are kind. She also said that in many stories, people have shown their romantic feelings towards each other in the form of roses. I stared at mine today, and it was beautiful.

I wonder how Max is doing.

May


A tear slid down her cheek and plopped on the shaky letters that read "Mama."
“Mother, I came so close to joining you,” she sobbed. “But Drew saved my life, and I’m making the best of it, still I wish you and Father were next to me.”

She closed and locked the diary and held it to her. She lied down on her mattress and sheets and patched quilt she had spent hours making. And there she lay for a while, crying to herself. Then she got up and pulled out her hidden mother’s jewelry box. She opened it and inside was a smaller jewelry box with her mother’s name printed on it. “Caroline,” she read. She opened it and inside was her mother’s sapphire necklace. She took it out and put it on.

There was a knock at the door. May wiped her nose and opened the door.

It was Karla.

“May, we need your help. That clumsy hired girl, Anna, let the chickens out again, you won’t mind helping us catch them?”

~ ~ ~

Drew tiptoed down the steps and was about to knock on May’s door when he realized it was open. “May?”

He peered inside and was surprised at how small and plain the room was. His curiosity took over and he examined things closer. It was dusty and dark. The candle had just been blown out. Her bed looked just as cozy as his was, but her journal and jewelry box were hidden. A small bag of coins held her first earnings, but they were meager.

He turned around to leave, but hit something. The impact blinded him as he fell to the floor. May stood in the doorway and gasped.

"Uh, uh, I'm really sorry! But what are you doing in my room?"

Drew groaned and got up slowly, rubbing his head. "I... don't know."

May's face seemed to darken a little bit. "I don't mean to be disrespectful, but did you read my...?" she trailed off and waited.

"No! N-no! Of course not!" Drew stuttered as he got up. She sighed in relief, setting Drew's curiosity on fire again. "Are you done with work for today?"

"Yeah... the king assigned me to clean your room while I'm done because Becky hurt her back- but I don't know where it is..."

Drew fumbled with his words. She was going to be in his room at night?! "I can show you to it..." He started walking, and May obediently followed him.

~ ~ ~

"Uh, this is it," Drew said.

May gasped, amazed. She jumped around in her moccasins and examined the bed, the shelves full of dolls, the desk, the closet, the ceiling, and most of all, the balcony.

"It's so beautiful," May said, her face shining. Drew froze and noticed how much more beautiful the room was when she was in it. Damn it, why couldn't she be a princess? She'd be the first I'd choose, Drew thought.

"I'll enjoy this part of my job," she said and grinned. Drew smiled back.

~ ~ ~

His large doors creaked slightly, and she glared at them. May didn't want to wake Drew up while cleaning, though she was too sleepy to really do anything requiring too much energy. She closed the doors gently behind her and blinked a couple of times. Drew's face in the moonlight shone to her, and she woke herself up a bit more. She started to neaten up his stuffed Pokemon shelf. There were Beautifly, Absol, Roselia, and many others. They were all adorable.

Drew tossed around in his bed, still asleep. May put the covers back on him. She looked at his silk pajamas with slight envy and laid the covers over him. She continued to work.

Something is... glowing. What? Drew's voice echoed in his head. He opened his eyes a little bit, whether in his dream or for real he didn't not know. He opened his eyes wider and was amazed.

May, glowing like the sun, hovered in front of him. On her back were two giant, white-feathered wings. Her blue eyes sparkled, taking his away from her glowing, bare skin. She looked like an angel, and despite appearing wearing only thin ribbons, she was the most beautiful thing he had ever seen.

Drew blinked, and everything was gone. Was that a dream, or for real...?
 

Xiang

Well-Known Member
Chapter 3
Gray Day of a Thousand Tears

“Your Highness, wake up!” shouted a slow, old voice.

Drew opened his eyes and rubbed them, yawning. “Yes, Teacher Merlin?”

Merlin shook his head disapprovingly. “You fell asleep in the middle of a lecture again.”

Drew laughed to himself. Who would listen to Merlin’s “interesting” lessons? Why wouldn’t somebody fall asleep in the middle of somebody droning on about candle wax and its history? All his other topics were boring enough. Drew stared out the window, longing to be outside and free instead of a small, stuffy room with an old man who was your teacher.

Merlin was the must dull of all his tutors. All he lulled about were strange and little and very unimportant topics that bored you to the death.

At least after Merlin, he was free to go until dinner again. Drew rested his head on his elbow and his eyelids drooped as Merlin remarked how long the candle-making process was and how he had watched his mother do it step-by-step in the winter.

Merlin, annoyed that Drew was dozing off again, rapped his ruler on the tiny desk, jerking the prince awake from his second-long nap. He sighed and checked the sun to tell what time it was. A reddish orb was low in the sky. “You’re free to go now.”

Drew jerked awake again and sprang out the door. He headed for the rose garden, when Karla, who was dressed in black, stopped him. “Your Highness,” she said with a low voice. “We need you in the throne room.”

Drew feared the worst as he followed the girl into the grand lobby. Everyone was dressed in black. Some were holding handkerchiefs. All the color drained from Drew as his father’s good friend, Luke, adjusted his glasses and blew his nose.

“I have- have horrible news,” he started shakily. He turned to Drew. “Especially for you. Your father has been killed in his meeting with the Prince Satoshi.”

Drew broke down in tears and fell to his knees. Something was ripping his heart out from him in all directions, but it was painful. He would never see his father again. Not ever. Not ever hear his voice again. Not ever hear how he brought home some crystal frog, but it turned out it was a piece of his chandelier.

Hatred for Satoshi crept up Drew’s veins. Not only had Satoshi killed his beloved father, but also he was the one who Kasumi had willingly married.

Under his breath, he swore to seek revenge. Two arms wrapped around him and took them to May gently. May hugged him and said, "I know how you feel." Drew just cried in her shoulder.

~ ~ ~

Drew sat on his bed, rocking himself while hugging his knees. He ignored everything except himself.

“Father,” he said to himself in a depressed way. “Why does this have to happen?”

He looked at the ceiling and sighed shakily. A tear slid his cheek. Yesterday’s news replayed in his mind and tore at his broken heart. It was painful, thinking over it.

Nothing would be the same, not with his father there.

Karla, frustrated, slammed the tray with Drew’s breakfast on his bed. “Your Highness, DO YOU WANT YOUR TOAST AND OATMEAL WITH EGGS AND WITH MILK?”

Drew turned to her. “I’m not hungry, Karla leave me alone.”

Karla muttered angrily. “You’re not going to get anything done by moping on your bed!”

Drew froze and gritted his teeth. “Karla, I’m not hungry. LEAVE ME ALONE.”

Karla stuttered, ashamed. “So sorry, got carried away...”

She ran on those two little feet out of the room. May walked in and blushed a little bit. His tear stains were still on her shirt.

He managed to find words to say. “That was... really nice of you.” He finally smiled at her. It wasn’t a big smile, but a smile nonetheless. "You lost your father too...?"

May's heart jumped. "He died when I was two. My mother died a couple of months ago."

"Oh." He felt ashamed. Compared to May, his emotional pain was very little. He never could remember his mother, since she died when he was born, so losing her didn't feel as much like someone was shoving a dagger down your throat as losing a mother you truly loved and needed. Well, that was one reason why Chris, who would rule now, hated him.

"Do you have a brother?" Drew asked quietly.

May gulped. "Yeah, but I wonder if he's doing alright on the streets..." Then she sighed as she looked at the sky, which was a calming blue with fluffy little playful clouds dancing and floating about. “At least today is my day off.”

The breeze blew her brown hair, making it wave back and forth. “Want to go for a walk?” she asked him.

Drew sighed. “Ok, but no one can see us.”

May tilted her head. “Why not?”

“Because I’m a prince, and well, you’re…”

“I’m just a servant,” she stated grumpily.

~ ~ ~

They walked along the banks of the nearby lake, enjoying the clear water with the sun’s reflection upon it, and the wind pushing soft ripples through the water, and some Chimecho floated in the wind, singing with their soothing voices.

May skipped in the grass, not minding how tall it was and how itchy it was.

Drew smiled as he watched her frolic about. His smile quickly turned to a frown when he heard a rumbling in the distance. He looked around for any signs of a thunderstorm, but the skies were innocent, the sun was still the friendly golden orb it was today…

May tripped as she stopped a cloud of sand in the far distance. What could it be? It was coming closer and closer…

She stepped back and managed to point out a man on his Tauros. He was tan, and had wild, messy black hair. She could also point out a faint “z” on both of his cheeks.

Drew glared at the incoming crowd. It was-

“Satoshi’s coming!” Drew shouted to May.

May quickly turned around and ran towards him. “I’m scared. Who are they?”

Drew looked at them menacingly. “He’s the one who killed my father.”

May held onto him as they both ran for their lives. An arrow barely missed the top of her head and landed in front of her, halting her.

Satoshi laughed and they quickly turned around to face them.

“What have we here?” he remarked as he jumped off his Tauros. He was a few feet taller than them both. Drew guessed that he was in his late teens. “Ha, it’s the king’s boy! And his little hired girl!”

Drew murmured under his breath, but he made it loud enough for Satoshi to hear. “Leave us alone.”

“You know our kingdom’s have been rivals for years, haven’t you?” he remarked.

Drew sighed angrily. “It’s not my kingdom. It’s my brother’s.”

Satoshi pulled his bow out and prepared an arrow at them. “Tell me the secret of your kingdom, and the girl is free to go, as well as you.”

Drew stammered. He didn’t know of any secret. What was Satoshi talking about? “I do not know of any secret,” he said firmly.

Satoshi grimaced. “As future ruler you should know, or at least heard of it. Puh-lease.”

Drew shook his head.

Satoshi looked frustrated. “You’ve made two strikes so far. Care to strike again?”

Drew pulled May behind him protectively.

Satoshi laughed at his pathetic attempt and some of his guards seized him and pulled May away from him. She wriggled and protested, but they did not let their grip get any looser. The guards were holding him so tight, he practically couldn’t breath, and his usually clear vision turned blurry from his increasing pain. In less than five seconds, he was knocked out and May was pulled away.
 

Stephy

candies!!!11
“Princess Abby is a graceful and beautiful coordinator, and you are not going to meet her in your so-called pajamas! Up, up, no time to waste!” She flew out of the room and left Drew to change.
xDDD

Drew checked off “easy to please” as Abby admired his room.
xDDD He has a list to check? xDDD

Drew turned to May. “May?”

May turned around. “Yes?”

Drew tossed her the rose. “Yours to keep.”

May turned crimson as she caught the flower.
Awww! ^^

“May, we need your help. That clumsy hired girl, Anna, let the chickens out again, you won’t mind helping us catch them?”
xDDD

Damn it, why couldn't she be a princess? She'd be the first I'd choose, Drew thought.
So True! xP

Under his breath, he swore to seek revenge. Two arms wrapped around him and took them to May gently. May hugged him and said, "I know how you feel." Drew just cried in her shoulder.
Aww! Cute! ^_^

Satoshi laughed at his pathetic attempt and some of his guards seized him and pulled May away from him. She wriggled and protested, but they did not let their grip get any looser. The guards were holding him so tight, he practically couldn’t breath, and his usually clear vision turned blurry from his increasing pain. In less than five seconds, he was knocked out and May was pulled away.
=O *hits Satoshi* >:O Gr...Must...Resist...Killing...Him! >:O I wonder what he is going to do?

The past two chapters were great so far, and I can't wait for the next chapter! ^_^
 

Xiang

Well-Known Member
YEEEEEE! Thanks for the awesome review! Thank you for using a lot of quotes- its a lot easier to tell what you liked that way! *is always too lazy to use quotes*

*turns Satoshi into summer homework and burns it*
 

DanK84

Manyula Trainer
Hyuuga Hinata said:
May heard this and turned an angry red at this comment. Drew's eyes shined with concern- she had cut herself with the tools in her sugar coated fury.
xD

Nice chapters, I like this orginal plot. I never noticed that a plot like this would represent Contestshipping so well. Can't wait for the next chapter.
 

Xiang

Well-Known Member
Okay, I will, but I'm not going to be posting another chapter today, gotta get a break. ^_^ Thanks for the reviews, but Crystal Metamorphic, do try to elaborate your review a bit more next time. At least quote certain parts of the chapter if you don't have much to say. Even one quote and a comment can tell me more.
 

SheWhoLovesPineapples

Well-Known Member
Hmm... it's a very, very sweet fic. But...

I can't imagine Satoshi as an evil guy... he seems more like he'd be the one to make peace between the two kingdoms. I can see how Satoshi thinks that DREW is the bad guy... but then he wouldn't be cruel. He'd probably just treat Drew how he treats Team Rocket... Maybe you should've used Sakaki/Giovanni or someone instead...

May doesn't seem like one to befriend her captor... at least not right away... so, if this were to happen, she'd probably be avoiding Drew at first. She'd probably just open up to him gradually... Though she is a very social person, so I do agree that she'd learn to like Drew eventually... furthermore, she also seems like one to fear death, whether or not her parents died. So, she may have said that she'd rather die than work for the king, but that wouldn't mean she wouldn't struggle. That's just natural.

Wouldn't she spend her day off looking for Max instead of taking a walk with Drew?

Hmm... I'm not sure if this is a culture you invented youself, or if it's supposed to be medeival...ish, but I'm assuming it's medeival. If not, you can ignore the next three paragraphs.

Ermm... Band-Aides didn't exactly exist back then. They might use cloth if the wound was bad enough, but if it was just a small cut, it would probably go ignored...

Wouldn't it be unusual for a girl, especially a poor one, to know how to read and write?

How could a diary last for half of a person's life? Mine usually only last for a few months. Also, they didn't have much paper, did they? Though I'm not sure about that...

(End part you could possibly ignore)

The whole KasumixDrew thing was cool-ish... I could see it being like that.

Aww... poor Drew, his dad died... ;_; Although he wanted to kill May, so he deserved it!! >8( Fwahaha!!

Just a suggestion - it would be interesting to see how the other servants treat May. They would probably be curious as to why she'd choose death... probably judge her, too... though it seems like the story is now past that point, so...
Exciting ending! Hurry up and make the next chapter!!

All in all... 7/10. So far. ^.^
 
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DanK84

Manyula Trainer
CuteDrew667 said:
that fic is soo cool. Can I be on the PM list please?

update soon! Great job!
I'm not sure if Hyuuga Hinata is still working on this, (As it's not in her sig anymore, but if she is still working on this, please forgive me Hinata. xD) Anyway, she usually likes her reviews to have quotes/reasons you liked the story. You know, so she's sure you actually read it. (Not that I don't believe you) Gah, hate to sound like her guard dog. >.<
 

Xiang

Well-Known Member
Yay a guard dog! :3

Mmm *unhappy* I was in a good mood today. Visited my friend at the hospital, practiced soccer for the evening, and got to play cards with the family. Then I come on here, find a nice guard dog, am even happier, and I see a spammy reply.

I am still going to work on it, but you must realize that I am an excellent procrastinator, especially when it comes to homework. The summer slowly coming to end, and I haven't even started homework ^_^;;

The point is, DON'T FRICKIN SHOW THAT YOU DON'T CARE FOR MY THREAD.

Thank you.
 

Ayra

~Master Coordinator~
Very nice. The chapters could be a little longer, other than that, I don't see anything wrong. PM me when the next chapter comes out please.

~Ayra~;267;
 
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