*phew* Finally, I got some time to do this, so, here are my comments for y'all! =D
flygonrulz:
Like what has been said before me, the adventure RP might be a little overdone… BUT I like the idea of a romantic drama RP. I think that a relationship-based RP could be very fun to play and would offer a lot of opportunity for suspense. Still, I would highly encourage you to not go the adventure RP route and instead think of another storyline to compliment your idea better. Another suggestion would be to work on your descriptions and spelling. Your brief idea had quite a few typos and if you want to encourage great RPers to join your RP, you need to present your story with the same quality.
katiekitten:
Cute concept. ^_^ Let me think of anything to critique… hmm, yeah the concept is a little difficult for everybody to grasp, as I read the other posts. “Chaos” in this instance sounds more like “Yang.” If so, this may help your readers a bit.
There are two forces which always exist in everyone and everything. There is that part of us which remains constant and unmoving; it’s the stable things which everything gets meaning and substance. There is another part which is temporary and in constant motion; it’s the quality of life which allows change. Without one, the other cannot exist. How can there be change if there is nothing physical to change? And if everything was to cease changing then how can life exist? For a real example of the unmoving force, if you could picture a moment in time where everything stood as it was like it was frozen in time; the water stopped flowing, the birds stopped flapping, trees stopped growing, everything like a three-dimensional picture. For the moving force, if you can imagine if you could only see the movement of the world but remove the things causing that movement like you were seeing everything in super-fast forward: the ripples of water, the after-image of a hand as it disappears to its new location, lightning, fire, the movement of wind, everything temporary, lasting for an instant and disappearing forever. “Chaos” sounds like the “moving force.” ^_^
Other then that, it sounds really fun. You might have some challenges getting people used to that “chaos” (use good examples to help out =D) but I’m sure people will get it. ^_^
Urahara:
Interesting… but I don’t think that I’ll be joining. Mecha never was my thing. The big challenge that bothers me is the vastness of emptiness the universe is. This limits the imagination of the RPers to the worlds and creations you create for them. I’d worry that you may be setting yourself for a very reaction-based RP, not that there is anything wrong with that but you are putting a lot of pressure on yourself.
The second thing I suggest would be to offer some recommendations for the equipment. There are a lot of technical terminology being thrown around and its enough to make a casual player’s head go boom. ^_^;
Besides that, the story has good descriptions on the Gundams and situation that has brought the world to this point. I know you are capable of allowing more description to make more people feel comfortable in this world. ^_^
porygon2lover
The potential exists, but I do think you need to do a little more then “a little work.” The story contains problems which need to be kinked out. A land famous for its trainers and with a lot of Pokemon elects a king that wants to remove the Pokemon trainers? If the land is famous for them, why would the king want to remove the Pokemon trainers especially with so many Pokemon around? What is his motivation? And can you even elect a king? That being said, there is a fair bit of intrigue in the all-out persecution of trainers, but you need to work on it.
How about this to start, the land is poor, and a man leading a group of people promises wealth for all and is elected emperor. But when he came into power, he had the military seize more control over everybody, giving them more power and giving the people less. That may give you a better place to start. ^_^
cdra1617
Another good RP idea, I especially like the full-body tattoo covering the chosen ones, gives them a physical mark to being different. One of the suggestions I have, though, is to go into a bit more detail what the Nexus looks like, what creatures exist there and what could be potential examples of binding creatures. I’m having trouble perceiving an image of what these creatures would look like.
I would also think that easing in the story and allowing time to allow the characters to create themselves in reality and how their lives have been affected by their “scar” might a good place to start in this type of RP. Though risky, it would allow for some opportunity for creativity. Perhaps having all the scarred people attend the same school may help this.
Tifa Lockheart
Uh… story, plot, description… they are all lacking (actually, they weren’t mentioned). So, work on everything? ^_^;;
The Mighty Medicham
…you want us to search for Sally’s body parts?
;; Eww… I would highly suggest you find another, more story-driven reason for visiting the other worlds than finding the limbs of another character’s girlfriend. Especially considering the mentality of people in Halloweentown, they would probably care less if something bad happened to somebody else.
Again, there is potential here, but it needs some work. Maybe instead of being a group of nightmares trying to find a girl’s limbs (SO wrong ._.) you could instead be a gang of nightmares trying to rule other lands in order to dethrone Jack? Something else, as the idea is very gross and seems very linear (go to world one, find body-piece, go to world two, find body piece and so on).
MalionX
Mmhmm, work on the plotline, and repost here when you get something a bit more concrete. Good concept though, I would like to see what you come up with. ^_^
Princess Sapphire
From the sounds of things, you wish to create a new Pokemon game. That’s well and good, but this is a Pokemon RPG forum. We specialize in making storylines and act them out with the characters we create. I hate to tell you this, as it is clear that you put a lot of effort into this idea, but the sounds of your RP is what is dubbed a “Journey Adventure.” You have a group of people go out and go and play as characters to become “the greatest trainer” and they fight with NPCs you create as well as the three other people that are participating. The problem with these type of storylines, while greatly successful in video games, tend not to do as well in forum RPs. One of the biggest reasons is to get a battle going you’d need to post an attack or two, then the other person post an attack or two, and so on. In the end, it gets pretty difficult to maintain many multiple battles and keep people interesting. Simply put, there have been too many of them.
That’s not to say you can’t create the world you want to play in, or you shouldn’t go ahead with this idea. I would suggest, though, that you should try making an RP which emphasizes on story, and perhaps try playing in an RP before trying to start one. ^_^