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(Urgh, posted a long comment about Negrek's review, but then lag ate it up. >.>)
Okay, going to keep things short as I am quite busy at the moment:
Negrek: Haha, you are not the only person that commented on my overuse of "later" and "soon". Duncan did that also for one of the chapters of my current fic. XD And about me using simple words...yeah, I was afraid to misuse a word and didn't really want to use a word the readers have to look up! XD
Okay, from what I can assume, I think I need most help with:
-Not use "later", "sooner", and the other qualifiers.
-More description and powerful words.
Again, thanks a lot for the review. Will try my best to heed your advice when I get the chance to do a rewrite.
And to Sike and Brian, thanks for your guys' review also!
Yeah, will read some of the entries...if Serebii doesn't lag! XD
What is so weird, it is lagging during Black Friday, and I thought everyone will be gone shopping!
Okay, going to keep things short as I am quite busy at the moment:
Negrek: Haha, you are not the only person that commented on my overuse of "later" and "soon". Duncan did that also for one of the chapters of my current fic. XD And about me using simple words...yeah, I was afraid to misuse a word and didn't really want to use a word the readers have to look up! XD
Okay, from what I can assume, I think I need most help with:
-Not use "later", "sooner", and the other qualifiers.
-More description and powerful words.
Again, thanks a lot for the review. Will try my best to heed your advice when I get the chance to do a rewrite.
And to Sike and Brian, thanks for your guys' review also!
Yeah, will read some of the entries...if Serebii doesn't lag! XD
What is so weird, it is lagging during Black Friday, and I thought everyone will be gone shopping!