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Sample paragrath of my first fic

eevee-me

Mayness Yayness!
Hey heres a preview of my new fic whichas of yet has no title i'd greatly appreciated any suggestion and look out for the first full chap soon.


Agent X-07 lent up against a tree sighing in a bored way “first day on the hoen job and im sent to plain town population two” he grunted stareing at the town he had been sent to, it appeared to be a fairly simple town with wooden houses and a small pond which reflected the morning sun createing the illusian of amber coloured water. Further on was a large building which broke the theme of the small town it was a large metal building with large glass tubes comeing out of the roof , there was a small group of people wearing lab coats out side stareing at the sky “um I wonder what there looking at” X-07 thought stareing up half heartedly “what the...” He shouted not careing who heard for he had seen two coloured streaks in the sky one blue the other red. When he looked up again they were gone “what kind of creatures where they” he thought “i've never seen such a beast” his mind drifted back to when he was a small child amazed by all pokemon seeing all there beuty and strengh back when his life was perfect...“back when I was weak” he fiercly reminded himself disgusted he had let his mind slip back to his past. Turning to the cage near him he smiled despite himself at the content of the cage, a Mightyena its blood red eyes darted from side to side searching for an outlet for its rage its tounge darting across its razor sharp teeth as it spyed a tailow in a tree “patience my beuty” X-07 smiled “patience”. X-07's thoughts where cut short when a moveing truck came tumbling past the tree he was proped up against forceing him to dive for cover, standing up he saw his target comeing up the hill “see him my beast soon he will fall to your migh”.
 

Dragonfree

Just me
Okay, that is a huge block of text. You really need to paragraph it. Make a new paragraph when somebody is about to speak and whenever you change the subject to something else. It's really hard to read like this. Also try to punctuate better, and use a spell checker. Let's just take for example the first sentence.

Agent X-07 lent up against a tree sighing in a bored way “first day on the hoen job and im sent to plain town population two” he grunted stareing at the town he had been sent to, it appeared to be a fairly simple town with wooden houses and a small pond which reflected the morning sun createing the illusian of amber coloured water.

That should be like this:

Agent X-07 leant up against a tree, sighing in a bored way.First day on the Hoenn job and I'm sent to a plain town, population two,” he grunted, staring at the town he had been sent to. It appeared to be a fairly simple town with wooden houses and a small pond which reflected the morning sun, createing the illusian of amber-coloured water.

Bolding means I added or changed something, an italicized word means I removed something from it. You should maybe get a beta-reader or something.

The plot does look like it could be good, at least as far as one can judge from one paragraph. Just be warned that nobody is going to take your fic seriously if your spelling and grammar aren't good.
 
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